#what if i write it and it's bad- thats even better

[inlovewithladies]

Camera ready

A/n: probably a bit too soon to make another one buuut the idea struck so i had to start writing before i forget hehe OF!Abby anderson x Reader yall are roomates in college btw content warning: scent kink, subby abby, cunnilingus (abby receiving)

Your first sign should've been the ringlight, you found it in her room tucked neatly behind tubs of protein powder, weights and resistance bands in the corner. Of course, you brushed it off, thinking she was some tiktoker who you hadn't seen yet.

'But she's so chronically offline?' your brain tried to reason. You pushed it to the back of your mind before you could ponder on it for too long.

Then there were the noises, the little creak of her mattress next door, quiet grunting. Okay, weird but maybe she just likes to work out at weird hours! You dont get a killer figure like that just sitting on your ass all day. Even if she was watching porn or whatever, it was none of your business right? Though never in your wildest dreams did you think that Abby anderson, your sweet, introverted roomate was making porn. The discovery was an accident. You had forgotten your hoodie in Abby's bedroom so naturally you wanted to get it back. It was around eight pm at this point, Abby hadn't come out of her room in around thirty minutes. Only indication of her presence was the light coming from under her door.

Knocking three times, you slowly opened the door. The room was warm and well lit by the ring light, the gentle scent of the pine soap she always uses hung in the air, along with something muskier, sweatier.

Abby was spread out on her bed, legs spread, back arched. She was naked besides the grey sports bra but even that was pushed up to reveal her small tits, pink nipples erect from the air

One hand was between her legs, two fingers pumping in and out of her cunt while her other hand pressed something to her face.... your hoodie.. "fuck.. you always smell so fuckin' good- want you to bend me over so bad..." at this point you werent sure if she was talking about you or to the audience watching from her phone.

You should have backed off, closed the door and pretend you hadn't seen what you did, but you stayed, watching as her flushed face contorted in pleasure, her nose straining to take in bigger whiffs of you from the hoodie.

She was about to cum, you could tell, her face flushed red and her mouth was making a perfect 'o'. Thats when you decided to reveal yourself. "Putting on a show, Abs?" you ask nonchalantly, as if you hadnt caught your friend fucking herself to you. she shot up and tried to pull her bra back over herself, only managing to cover one boob. "shit!- I thought you weren't coming back till later," she stammered. Her body curled into itself like she wanted the earth to swallow her whole. "I-i was gonna wash it, i swear. i just.. i missed you, and-" you silenced her with a deep kiss to her lips. when you pulled away both of you were breathless, looking into eachother's eyes. you looked back at the phone still posted up on the table. "that thing still rolling?" you ask huskily. Abby swallows and nods. "good." You trail your hand up her thigh, stopping at her slightly sweaty abs. you tapped her abdomen twice as a way to tell her to lay back. she obliges of course, shuddering under your touch, eyes wide, lips parted. "You were thinking about me while you fucked yourself, baby?" "Y-yes.. yeah i- fuck, im sorry" you didnt respond, instead kissing a path down her neck while she completely took her bra off. Leaving a wet trail from her collarbone, taking the time to suck on her nipple for a moment before finally stopping at your main course. wet, pink, pulsating perfection lay in front of you, her hole clenching around nothing at all, as if she was aching for stimulation, her blonde bush the icing on an already delicious cake. You grabbed the phone from it's stand to give it a better view.

'finally' you thought. you'd wanted abby for months, since she moved in actually. how could you not? her pretty face, solid muscles and kind demeanor were far too much to resist. but you didnt focus on that for now. for now, your only priority was getting her off on your tongue. so you dived in, pressing hot, wet kisses to the skin surrounding her entrance. when your pressed your tongue flat to the general area of her cunt, you heard her breath hitch. you drag your tongue slowly up, focusing on her clit, peppering kisses to it with a gently suck. "Fuck..!" she gasps, trying to cover her mouth with her hand, you slapped it away. "dont. let them hear you baby" the phone was nearly forgotten, little pings could be heard as donations poured in as you readily lapped up her juices. your tongue flattened to grind against her, the gentle ridges stimulating her much better than her fingers could. abbys hand flew to your hair. your left hand comes up to rub her clit while you move your mouth to focus on her pussy.

you tongue prodded inside of her, licking wherever it could. Abby got louder, she swore she could never get off by herself again. "ohmygodohmygodohmygod, i cant, your so fucking good" you chuckled into her cunt, the vibrations only stimulating her further. abbys legs are shaking on your shoulders, muscles twitching like shes about to collapse, though you dont let up, not when her grip in your hair tightened, not when she started sobbing broken pleas of "Dont fuckin' stop- please dont stop, please!" you look up for a moment and you lock eyes. her eyes, green and glassy meet your own triumphant ones. shes looking down at you like youve ruined her for anyone else, like if you kept licking her like your life depended on it she'd give you anything. while you could only focus on her beauty, her dark blonde locks clinging to her sweaty skin, muscles rippling as she felt her orgasm approaching. "let go, baby" with one more hard suck to her clit, abby screams. she cums so hard its almost funny, her thighs clench around your head and shes babbling something about how good you are and how long shes wanted you. you keep licking at her until her orgasm is over. only when she finally relaxes fully do you come up for hair, soaked from the nose down. you reach for the phone, turning off the livestream before crawling up to her on the bed. "i think your fans liked it" you tease, abby whines and covers her face. you chuckle and kiss her cheek. "we can talk about it in the morning, abs" was the last thing you said before leaving the room. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------ i tried to make it longer coz my last one was pretty short and honestly i wrote this for myself i js thought the idea was hot and yes i did infact nut to this im not afraid to admit it :P

[vonbabbitt]

I admire you for being so strong considering how much criticism I’ve seen directed towards Tetro in certain places online. I can’t deal with criticism even if it’s constructive so if my writing was being criticized I’d cry and never go online again.

im very similar anon!! taking criticism is honestly more of a learned skill than it is a natural skill. ive gotten a lot better with it over the course of tetro so here are some of my learned tips!

dont automatically take all criticism as fact! people can be wrong! someone can say you're doing something badly and just be incorrect. try too look at the criticism a little harder and consider whether or not its something thats even true. if its not true, you dont need to waste energy stressing about it.

not all criticism is hate! sometimes people have genuine critique about what youre doing and its worth considering.

dont seek out criticism! i used to have a bad habit of sticking my nose in places where i knew i would see upsetting things and then getting upset about them. dont do this to yourself!

know yourself and your writing and you'll know what's true. when people were telling me that so many of the victims in pink were women because i was a misogynist, it used to stress me out a lot, and then i realized that thats stupid because no i am not a misogynist so why would i care that random people i dont know are calling me one based off of a danganronpa fanfiction i wrote?? they dont know me. nobody online really knows you so dont stress over their opinions to the point where youre genuinely harming your mental health

im sure theres more but these are off the top of my head - hope any of it might be helpful!

[sesamestreep]

it’s wild to me that like every modern adaptation of Sherlock Holmes (and by modern I mean “made recently” not “set in modern times”) is like Hell Bent on coming up with a Reason™️ that Watson stays with Holmes and trots around with him on adventures all the time despite the inconvenience and the danger and all, and so it’s like “oh, Watson’s a gambling addict, he loves uncertainty and mystery” or “oh, Watson’s an adrenaline junkie, he gets off on being constantly in danger from criminals” or even like “Watson’s atoning for sins of the past of BEING IN THE WAR by solving crimes with Holmes now” or WHATEVER. And it’s like, girl, maybe he’s just in love! Did you think of that?? Maybe he’s got a crush and it’s making him do stupid things. Maybe he’s just got bad taste and his type is guys who don’t know how to refold newspapers properly but can identify different types of cigar ash by sight, smell, and taste. And wrote a monograph on the subject. Maybe he’s down bad is all. I mean, Keep is simple, stupid!!!

[geraskierfanficprompts]

Prompt 38

Jaskier has kept a secret for years. The ring with dandelions carved into it that he wears every second of every day is the only thing keeping him from turning into ash. He sleeps with a lovely woman one night, desperately trying to move on from Geralt (it doesn't work, he is still very much in love with his best friend) only to awake in the morning and find- FUCK She stole his ring! That conniving little-! Fuck! Fuck! Fuck! What does he do!? He races to the mirror and it confirms his worst fear. The glamour the ring gives him is gone. He can't see his reflection. He reaches a hand up to his mouth and feels his fangs. No- Nonono! Then his worst fucking nightmare ON TOP of his worst nightmare happens. He hears the stomping footsteps of a witcher approaching their room. Godsdamn it all. He hears the doorknob jiggle and.. Alright, he'll be the first to admit it, he panics. "DON'T COME IN, GERALT" The doorknob jiggling pauses. "Jaskier? Are you alright?" "Y- YES! Perfectly peachy! Don't come in!" Jaskier rushes around the room, pacing in panicked circles like a caged beast. He was a caged beast. He reaches to close the curtains of the only window in the room and like an idiot, he fumbles in place and ends up with his hand in the direct sunlight. He shrieks in pain and holds his hand to his chest. Geralt, scenting agony and hearing Jaskier yell, barges in without another moment of thought. Only to see Jaskier scrambling away from him in fear. In all his years of knowing Jaskier, he has NEVER been afraid of him. It physically pains Geralt to see it now. He doesn't understand why he wasn't allowed in. There's no lover of Jaskier's hiding in a corner embarrassed at being caught, Jaskier isn't indecent or anything, so why-? Then he looks at Jaskier, truly looks at him, and sees his blue eyes are glowing, and his mouth - Parted open as he pants - reveals fangs. Geralt's eyes dart to Jaskier's neck and it's confirmed. The worst part of it all, is the way Jaskier's eyes keep glancing between the door out of the room, and Geralt's silver sword. Geralt is infuriated. Not only did the woman Jaskier take to bed last night turn Jaskier into a vampire, but she also made Jaskier fear Geralt because of it. When Geralt says he isn't going to harm (let alone KILL like Jaskier had feared) Jaskier for the twentieth time, Jaskier finally believes him, and begs him to help him track the woman down. Geralt is intent on killing the vampire that ruined poor young human Jaskier's life. Jaskier is intent on getting his human-glamour, sunlight-immunity-enchantment ring back from this human he slept with, so he can go back to pretending he's human, like he has been doing for the past hundred or so years.

[love-fireflysong]

I'm just saying you guys, if you're a fanfic author and you're going through a rough period where you keep feeling like your writing is shit and awful and just absolute garbage, just reread your own work.

You don't even have to look at the comments if you're going through a particularly nasty patch where you're convinced everyone is just lying and was only saying nice things to spare your feelings. Just reread the fic itself. It'll change your mind so quick I promise.

There's seriously nothing quite like clicking on what is *your* most popular fic and going 'Oh. I get it now. I think I understand why other people actually like this one so much holy shit'.

[burning-sol]

You know what? I realise why the Sinsmas episode is pissing me off so much, it's because it's juggling so many different ideas that it doesn't spend enough time committed to a single one. Let me just break it down the way I see it...

The first idea we're introduced to is one about Stolas' depression but then when he sits down with Blitz we're introduced to the idea of Stolas' poverty.

The previous ideas are what you think that the episode might focus on until you get hit with the Octavia B-Plot. Okay! A-Plot is about depression and poverty, B-Plot is about Stolas not being able to contact Octavia... (I might be using those terms incorrectly, but you get the idea,)

But THEN you get Sinsmas introduced which is about the idea of indulging in your sins, which is shown to be important to the audience because it's expressed in dialogue, right? Wait, no, it's about Stolas's depression/poverty, okay then....

But THEN you cut to the office and we get a Millie and Moxxie bonding scene, so you think, "wait, is there going to be another DIFFERENT plotline introduced into this episode about their relationship??" AND YOU GET MORE ABOUT SINSMAS, multiple shots about the holiday and the idea of indulging in your sins!! So wait, the idea of Sinsmas IS an individual idea from the depression/poverty point? Or isn't it??

Stolas sobs on the phone, there's a very obvious depression/poverty breakdown, but then we get MORE NEW SHIT introduced because it's about Stolas' cheating. And I understand that that's meant to tie into Octavia's B-plot, but there's a subtle difference between that and THIS that adds another layer of shit on top (elaborated on later).

Which, BTW, I just wanna point out how this idea is contradictory to the Sinsmas idea since CHEATING is about INDULGING in LUST - as is established in your PREVIOUS. IMPORTANT. SEASON ONE FINALE... So WHY would you make a character shame a sin that's meant to be in the process of being celebrated which confuses the Sinsmas idea and was also the CORE of the Stolitz will-they-won't-they before now?? If it was to trigger Stolas' breakdown you already HAD the poverty story beat, this is just needless and confusing redundancy??

So then we actually get to Octavia and we get a scene about the idea of Stolas and Octavia not being able to get in contact with each other - the B-Plot - and followed by her introspective song and the discovery of Stolas' pills. And now we suddenly feel like we're back to where we were MEANT to be, with the Octavia B-Plot taking a pause to cut back to the Depression A-Plot. This builds up tension as we naturally feel the two characters drawn together.

And theeeen it cuts to the I.M.Ps and I'm banging my head against the wall because you're like, "Oh! The Millie and Moxxie relationship idea! This is going to be about them!"

But then OH MY GOD a NEW idea is introduced about Blitz wanting a FAMILY WITH STOLAS. I want to shoot someone because the cheating was a set up for Blitz to fantasise about wanting a family??? Is this meant to be a parallel to episode 1??? Am I meant to feel like Blitz has developed as a character?? In an episode that has been about every character OTHER than Blitz???

And then it's meant to be likeee like about Millie's pregnancy because she wants to kill the family instead of leaving them be, but it's also about Moxxie's relationship with her, but it's ALSO about being "demon enough" (WHATEVER THAT IS, IT'S NEVER ELABORATED ON), but it's also ALSO about Sinsmas.

Okay! Okay, back to the REAL plot except- Wait, Octavia walked in??? Wait, so this plot is now about Blitz wanting a family and he's going to bond with Octavia?? No! NO because they don't have any emotional connection and so there is no reason for this scene to exist if either way Blitz was going to know where Stolas went and Octavia was going to end up there as well anyways.

And can you tell I'm tired of writing at this point? Cus I'm losing my mind. FINALLY the A-plot and B-plot that should have been the center of the episode all along gets a fuck ton of screentime and it's beautiful and it's the peak of the episode.

And theeen it's back to Millie and you think, "Okay, so a big part of the pregnancy plot is clearly meant to be about Millie and Moxxie's relationship based on all the scenes we've gotten between them! That means that Millie and Moxxie are going to have some sort of important dialogue-" And then she WALKS OUT on him and she has her emotional moment with her sister! Which isn't a bad thing but need I remind you she isn't even in the center a FULL LENGTH episode, she's from a SHORT... WHY would you NOT integrate Sallie into a proper episode if she's going to be key to a future INCREDIBLY important plotline??

The episode ends with Blitz and Stolas and the credits roll blah blah blah...

This post is basically expands on some of the points of my post about my first impressions, because I just wanted to give a run down of the structure properly so you can understand why this episode is making me feel like I'm losing it. And I get it, if you put in the effort you can get an idea of how all the ideas were meant to tie together... But it doesn't! It's badly written! It makes me want to rip my hair out!

Ideas are established and then sit there uncomfortably without resolutions to them! Like even the shit. That was meant to be the main shit. The poverty and depression stuff? NO conclusion. Stolas says, "you don't have to refer to me as your highness" I guess?? But like, nothing to show him settling in with everyone else in the celebration to show he's like. Poor? And okay with it? By partaking in the holiday of those that are meant to be "beneath" him? No mention of his medication???

Just!! Okay. To understand the way shit in the writing could have been better, let me list some ways you could change the episode to be more coherent or cut down on redundancy if my points have so far not landed.

Establish Sallie towards the BEGINNING of the episode and her dynamic with Millie, and show how that compares to her relationship with Moxxie, and show WHY she would call Sally instead of talking with Moxxie first. If you're going to make the episode about family btw, this would be the point where Millie could bring up HER family and how much she values them or something in order to establish that as being important. Also, use this to explore what Millie and Moxxie's feelings on having a baby WOULD be, so that if there's conflict there then you have more understanding of why Millie made the decision she did.

Use the actual environment in the background of the montage to show the passage of time instead of it suddenly being Sinsmas. Have demons setting up holiday decorations, in the stores put up discount signs about a "Sinsmas sale!" This makes the story flow more naturally, as well as adds characterisation and makes Stolas' depression more real as he's shown to be so absorbed in his own world he doesn't even realise it's the holiday until Blitz brings it up.

Octavia's phone and the device she listens to music on is the same (I checked S1E2 to confirm it), which causes a sloppy writing issue. Like. If the episode is meant to show Stella is controlling and it's not Octavia's choice not to get in contact with Stolas, then you need to explain why she hasn't called him despite having access to her phone when Stella isn't around. If it were me, I would have had Stella lock it in a drawer that Octavia picks the lock on so she can listen to her music. THEN you can keep the original scene, OR (this is what I would have done) have her check her phone logs so you can see not only how many times Stolas has called but how much time has passed. Maybe this could also be used as another reason to drive her towards the closet as she hides from Stella and Andrealphus. Maybe this could be used as an interesting metaphor about her desire to leave but she doesn't know what she's going to do once she picks the lock on the door... Like how she could call her Dad now that she has her phone but she doesn't know what she'll do when she does... Something like that.

DON'T have Blitz and Via meet up if they're not going to interact. That entire scene is fucking pointless as is and I hate it. Either dedicate a PROPER amount of time and dialogue into making Blitz want to and try to connect with Via, or have them not talk at all. Cut out the whole thing about Blitz wanting a family with Stolas honestly, it's just not well explored enough.

Again with the sloppy writing, the gang did NOT need to stumble into a room of weapons to have weapons. That's pointless. They're assassins, they've been established to bring a stash of weapons with them to fights before. I can think of something much funnier where Moxxie is surprised by Loona's transformation and there's a joke made about her being a noble steed and Moxxie pulls out a sword only for Millie to be like, "Why did you bring that?" And Moxxie says something about how it's a posh weapon cus that's his thing. OR you could have some badass impromptu weapons the gang makes from the ice or they use Sinsmas decorations scattered around. IDK.

Already made my point about Stolas and the poverty idea. Show him settling in with the others during the celebration and him opening up to the idea that he's no longer rich or well respected. The "you don't have to refer to me as your highness" would work if the text bothered to show his mental state properly, instead of him just looking depressed and like he kind of hates everyone there.

Have Blitz PLEASE react to Stolas' depression. Like. Acknowledge it. And share his feelings about it. AND GIVE STOLAS HIS MEDICATION FFS he clearly has clinical depression!! Blitz is sooo head empty in this episode, PLEASE give him more internal thoughts other than :) I'm holding my head in my hands.

And I'm so tired of writing at this point I'm going to stop it there but I hope that was thorough enough to get across my points. And if not then I guess that speaks to how loopy this episode made me that I can't even articulate myself 100% because dear god.

[opens-up-4-nobody]

Charlie Kelly from Always Sunny is my favorite representation of dyslexia in anything ever. Specifically because everyone's frustration when his dyslexia gets in their way feels very true to my frustration when my dyslexia gets in my way. I like watching people get mad at dyslexia lol

[hammill-goes-fogwalking]

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[asgardian--angels]

....idk in a fandom this gigantic how are people already coalescing onto a handful of popular headcanons and scenarios that just become the baseline now, when the source material gives us literally limitless possibilities to work with

[artificer-real]

anxiety anxiety, go away, come again never

[depresseddepot]

anxiety has me asking myself questions like "am I irredeemable for participating in an interview for a job I will likely turn down"

[puhpandas]

you know that moment of realization before you get sick where you can feel the back of your throat starting to get sore? that's me with my writing right now

[dracolizardlars]

Sorry this is completely random but Fates could've gone a long way towards fixing the fuckedupedness of Corrin x Hoshidan Royals S-Supports by making the very simple, tiny change of having the revelation (ha) that they don't actually have the same father moved to their respective A-Supports... Like I would have still not really agreed with the concept but honestly that would make so much difference lmao... Like ok you find out you're not biological siblings and then you potentially HAVE A SIGNIFICANT AMOUNT TIME between unlocking the next support for your relationship to change with this person and to start seeing them in a different way... It's not a lot better, but obviously devs were determined not to break the rule of the player character being able to marry ANYONE (so long as you're being heterosexual of course, incest is fine but god FORBID you be gay with anyone except our few pre selected Queer Characters™)

[gobstoppr]

and btw im in my hater arc rn. as time goes on the more i find a lot of 'fandom' stuff insufferable (i like art n stuff. just the way that fandom refits every media to fit a single mold and set of boring archetypes is exhausting.)

i just get really easily annoyed lately. and have been unfollowing people on a whim a lot. its not personal i promise

[orcelito]

Also I got my essay exam back today. Full points!!! Which was a surprise bc my 4th essay was definitely lower quality than the other three (bc I rushed it), but still good enough to get full points!!!!

Makes me wonder what that other one I spied being a 1 was like 🤔🤔🤔 bro was NOT good at writing I guess.

[l0rd-0f-c0ws]

I frequently feel completely isolated no matter how much I talk to people. So that's fun