#dusk lyrics

[dkniade]

I’m looking at old English translyrics I wrote to Neru’s “Life Prolonging Treatment” (MV has flashing and violent imagery) and—oh my god? What is this rhyme scheme in the first chorus??

The prosody is a little rough (I think I missed a few syllables) but the rhyme scheme kind of works with the melody though…?

Content Warning: Medical trauma. The rest is kind of vague/heavily implied but, unethical experimentation (?), terminal illness (?), self-harm (?), suicide ideation

My English Translyrics:

Stuck between machine and pride, the patient, day by day, worsens

Tubes in veins, artificial limbs with no restraints have hurt each other again

The treatment’s dim, hidden in a sea of trees

Head in, or from within, won’t you leave me be?!

You see? It's all just a dream...

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Original Japanese lyrics by Neru:

機械とプライドの間で暗む病状

僕ら管だらけの手足で傷を付け合いました

治療法は樹海の中で　朦朧

どうか　ここから　連れ出してよ

「ほら、眠くなる。」

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I think I took some creative liberties with writing “Head in, or from within, won’t you leave me be?!” because the original lyrics of “どうかここから連れ出してよ” is more so “I beg of you, take me away from here!” (according to Rippukun’s translation on Vocaloid Lyrics). But in fact, an older version of these translyrics I wrote it as a more straightforward “So please, take me away. Let me leave this place.” That might work better, because the “here” this line refers to the speaker’s traumatic situation (in the hospital, presumably) and not—(content warning: discussion of suicide in the linked article)—the sea of trees alluded in the previous line…

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Still, I suppose you wouldn’t write English lyrics like this if it was originally an English song. That is, the melody fits the Japanese lyrics more… because… (checks) the original lyrics have a lot of plosives, phonetically…? It’s strange though. The Japanese lyrics have internal rhymes but my English lyrics have a different set of rhymes which is… hm…

Japanese Lyrics in Romaji:

Kikai to, puraido no aida de, kuramu byoujou

Bokura, kuda darake no teashi de, kizu o tsuke aimashita

Chiryouhou wa jukai no naka de, mourou

Douka, koko kara, tsuredashite yo

“Hora, nemuku naru.”

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Here are some old fanart I did of the song

[mournfulroses]

Chelsea Wolfe, from "Dusk" released in 2023

[jorgyjuice]

keep singing the praises [id in alt!]

[derangedrhythms]

The coldest season's perfume is all around

The Frozen Autumn, Dusk Is Like a Dagger

[expatiating]

call the cops, call your lifeline

there’s no way you were ever in your right mind

[mayuurx]

The consequence of thinking he's too good for sunscreen.

[xgeminixmoonx]

You’ve left all the flowers I sent you

Withering outside your door

But I’ll follow you far past the sky or the grave

Cause my life’s a waste if I'm living without you

[leofaulknerarchive]

Limbo Project Name: Dusk Upload date: Jan 28, 2012

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Lyrics:So it’s time to believe in a miracle If you’ve got the time left to kill This has to be, the one hundred and twenty first Time that I’ve driven past your house today

I’ve got pictures of places you’ve been to I’ve got plans for the places you’ll go I’m uncharismatic enough to presume that you’re Not interested in me anymore

Someone in limbo wont let me forget you Someone in heaven wont open the gate Something is telling me I should go home And admit to myself that for once I’m too late

You can tell from the clothes that I’m wearing That I’ve been here for days, I’m not sure I hide from the rain in the library reading up How to attain what will never be yours

You’ve left all the flowers I sent you Withering outside your door But I’ll follow you far past the sky or the grave Cause my life’s a waste if I spend it without you

I’ve rung on your doorbell enough times To call down an angel to earth I’m sorry for everything I’ve ever done only Please let me in Please let me in Please let me in Cause I’m stuck in Limbo”

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[kulakligimdakihayat]

I’d give you my heart if you needed it

[ffxivtribehydrae]

🎵 — Dusk!

Seven - Sleeping At Last

I feel hope Deep in my bones Tomorrow will be beautiful And I'm ready God, I'm ready Oh, I'm ready Restless and hungry! I'm ready for whatever comes next

~ Playlist and Lyrics🎵 ~

[the-alternate-realities]

[dkniade]

When writing English translyrics, I sometimes look at the original lyrics’ rhythm and rhyme schemes for inspiration instead of solely focusing on the syllable count. (Meter in spoken poetry is kind of different from a vocal melody isn’t it…?)

Disclaimer: I’m not fluent in French at a native level so please take my interpretation with a grain of salt. Feel free to correct me if I’m wrong

So for example, the extended verse of HOYO-MiX’s “La vaguelette” in its original French lyrics:

Non, le grand amour ne suffit pas

Seul un adieu fleurira

C'est notre histoire de vie, douce et amère

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The English translation by Lolaska on LyricsTranslate that I partially referenced (since the in-game English version is highly stylized):

No, true love is not enough

An only farewell will blossom

It's our life story, so bittersweet

Although, I understood the second and third lines as “Only an adieu will bloom forth / It’s the story of our life, bitter and sweet”?

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And what I ended up with (for now) as English translyrics:

No, the greatest love will not suffice

Only adieux can survive

So goes our history: bitter and sweet

…“Survive” is such a harsh word though, compared to “fleurir” (blossom/bloom/flourish?) I’ll have to rework the rhyme scene some more to fit in a softer “blossom” image��

[mournfulroses]

Chelsea Wolfe, from "Dusk" released in 2023

[hauxicrook]

Khuwaab to khuwaab hain

Unka poora hona koi zaroori to nahi hai

[chandtarasblog]

Mujhy gham dy, sog dy leja yeh dil byshak isy tor dy

-TA

[expatiating]

the song in my head, it was all that I had