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with you in a distorted fairy tale ༻¨*:·.
'dark if ' chapter 1 - elbert greetia
This is a fan translation and may not be 100% accurate. I do not own anything. Cybird reserves the right of ownership for all in-game content.
author's note: Throughout this story, Kate refers to Elbert with feminine pronouns 彼女, and Elbert's title is the Queen 女王. Therefore, in sentences where Elbert is the main subject, sometimes you will see Elbert's pronouns listed as she/her. (i.e, "Elbert removed her hands"). This may be a bit confusing to read through, but I wanted to keep the translation as accurate and close to the original material as possible.
Victor: Miss Kate, your hands have the power to create the ultimate happy ending.
Victor: Now, come, and enjoy your time in this distorted fairy tale world.
Somebody's fingertips lightly grazed the back of my neck.
Kate: ..mnnn
I squirm from ticklish stimulation as someone whispers into my ear.
???: --Ah...It's definitely- ....-not
(What... what is this..)
Before I could make sense of those whispered words, I groggily began to wake up.
When I awakened fully, I found myself in a soft bed.
(Where am I..?)
Blonde, blue eyed beauty: Ah, you're awake.
A "woman" [1] with moonlight hair and sea-blue eyes peered into my face.
[1] When Kate awakens, she perceives Elbert as a woman. The pronoun is placed in quotations to indicate that he is not really a woman, just seems like one thanks to Al's ability.
(Wah... I've never seen such a beautiful person before..)
Kate: Could.. could this be heaven?
Man with raven colored hair: Unfortunately no, this is your reality.
The man standing next to the beautiful woman replied with a chuckle.
The dark-haired man is just as bewitching.. charming, even, to look at, making the two before me a truly eye-catching duo.
Man with raven colored hair: You've just woken up, is there anything you feel is wrong with your body?
Man with raven colored hair: You were found collapsed in the forest by a hunter who brought you here.
Kate: Oh, I see.... my body feels fine! Thank you very much for saving me.
I got up from the bed and bowed to both of them.
Kate: In any case.... exactly where am I?
Blonde, blue eyed beauty: ....this is my castle.
Queen Elbert: I run this this country..... as the "Queen of Greed" - Elbert.
Mirror Alfons: I am Alfons the Mirror, the Queen's servant. I hope we will continue to get to know each other [2].
[2] In Japanese, Alfons uses 「以後お見知りおきを」 which is similar to saying "I hope you will remember me in the future." Here, it is meant to be a surface level greeting for someone you know you'll see again, though more commonly you'd say 「よろしくお願いします」 or "It's nice to meet you". But I think the meaning behind the first phrase really plays into Al's curse and fated end.
(The Hunter, the Greedy Queen, and the Mirror...)
(Then this must be... the fairy tale world of "Snow White"?)
If this is the case, then the other remaining important characters are the Prince and Snow White.
(I wonder of one of these people are what's missing in this story.)
Queen Elbert: As you've just woken up...... are you hungry, Snow White?
Queen Elbert: I was thinking of preparing a meal for you.
Kate: Sn-... Snow White? That's.... me?
Mirror Alfons: The Hunter gave you that name.
Mirror Alfons: A beautiful girl laying in pure, white snow-- Snow White.
Mirror Alfons: And so, you were taken in by the Queen, who is looking for the most beautiful thing in the world.
Mirror Alfons: Thus, I had you brought to the castle-- such is your story.
(I'm Snow White in this world...)
(...then, wouldn't it be dangerous for me to be near Queen Elbert?)
In the traditional story, the Queen is jealous of Snow White's beauty, and attempts to poison her.
There hasn't been any hostility toward me here yet, but..... it's definitely better safe than sorry.
Kate: Aaaaah, well! Thank you for your help, then.
Kate: However, I don't think I need a meal right now. Well, if you'll excuse me.......
Realizing the situation I was in, I quickly tried to get out of the bed.
--However, at that moment, Elbert grabbed my hand.
Queen Elbert: Where are you going?
Kate: ...Ah uhmm.. I'm going back home to my family.
Mirror Alfons: Oh? Dear, do not lie to us.
Mirror Alfons: While you were asleep, we confirmed that you are not a resident of this country.
Mirror Alfons: Coming here alone, a foreigner from abroad.... what home do you have to go back to?
(What should I do... I can't escape this...)
(No one would believe that I actually came from another world...)
Queen Elbert: ......Snow White.
Kate: Y- yes!
Queen Elbert: .....I personally do not care who you are, or where you came from.
Kate: Eh...?
Queen Elbert: As Queen, I should punish you for coming here on unlawful terms, but...
Queen Elbert: More importantly, I want to obtain the most beautiful thing in the world.
Queen Elbert: And you might be what I've been looking for..... so please, stay in this castle for a while.
Kate: Ah, that....
Queen Elbert: Of course, we will provide food, clothing, and shelter for you.
Queen Elbert: And if you require money, I'll give it to you, whatever sum you ask for.
Queen Elbert: For my own sake...... please, stay in this castle.
As Elbert wished this, her eyes looked extremely lonely, almost desperate.
There was no way I could brush her off and refuse her offer.
Kate: If you say it that way.... then okay, I understand. I'm not sure what I'll be able to do but...
Kate: Oh, and I don't intend to ask for money. I'd be grateful just to have food, clothing, and shelter.
(If you think about it.... it's easier to find the missing part of the story if I'm near the main character.)
Queen Elbert: Thank you, Snow White.
As Elbert expressed her gratitude with a gracious expression, she did not look like the type of cruel person who would poison Snow White.
--time skip--
We were shown to a dining room where a wide variety of dishes were lined up on the table.
Queen Elbert: I didn't know what you liked, so I let the chef make whatever he could think of.
Queen Elbert: ........Please, eat as much as you want of whatever you'd like.
Kate: Oh... thank you very much.
The freshly cooked food was steaming, and the delicious aroma wafting through the air stimulated my appetite.
(....But, if I were Snow White, I'd have to be careful about what I eat.)
(Apples, in particular, should be avoided.)
Although I still don't sense any hostility from Elbert, due to the background story of this world, I couldn't help but be wary.
Kate: Um... are there any dishes that contain apples..?
Queen Elbert: ...........Why do you ask?
The moment I asked, the air around Elbert became tense, and her blue eyes became cold.
Kate: Well... I can't eat apples because of my allergy to them. They make my mouth itchy....
Without even understanding the reason for her icy stare, I lied about the reason.
Queen Elbert: ...I see.
Queen Elbert: If that's the case, there's no need to worry. In this castle, we do not eat apples.
Kate: Is that so...
I was curious and wanted to ask why apples weren't used here, but I was too hesitant, and refrained from asking in the end.
Meanwhile, Queen Elbert picked up a piece of bread and tore it in two.
Queen Elbert: ...Which would you prefer, left or right?
Kate: Uhhhh.. right.
Elbert then took a bite out of the left bread, and handed the right to me.
Queen Elbert: ...Mm, it's delicious. Please go ahead and eat, too.
(Maybe he knew I was on guard this entire time and he's trying to tell me the food is safe this way.,?)
Kate: Thank you very much...
The bread slice I got from Elbert had a gentle sweetness and was delicious all around.
Queen Elbert: I also recommend trying this salad, which uses vegetables from a nearby village.
After seeing that I finished the bread, Elbert took her portion of the salad and started eating it.
Seeing that, I went ahead and ate my salad.
Elbert eats some, and then I eat some more.... this strange back and forth of meal tasting continued for some time...
Kate: Thank you for the meal! Everything was delicious!!
Queen Elbert: .............
Kate: Elbert?..
Queen Elbert: My stomach........hurts......
Kate: Wha!?
Mirror Alfons: I came to check on y- Elbert?
After coming to the dining hall, Alfons quickly donned a shocked expression and went to support Elbert by the shoulders.
Kate: Umm.... is Elbert okay?
Mirror Alfons: She simply ate too much... She is usually a small eater, so she pushed himself too hard.
(Could it be... she was forcing herself to eat a lot to put me at ease and help me eat as well...)
Seeing Elbert's kindness, I began to feel ashamed of myself for being scared of eating poisoned food under his watch.
Kate: Ah well.... I'll help out too!
I stood on the opposite side of Alfons to help support Elbert.
(..Oh?.. The Queen has a surprisingly sturdy build...)
(Wait! No, no!! Now's not the time to be thinking these things.... let me just help out with a pure mind..)
With the help of Alfons, we put Elbert to bed in her room.
Mirror Alfons: It's not an illness, so if she rests, she'll feel better soon.
Kate: Elbert... I'm sorry for making you eat too much..
Queen Elbert: I chose this myself.. so no need to apologize with such a sad look on your face.
Elbert's hand gently brushed across my face.
Queen Elbert: You're more adorable when you smile than when you're sad.
Queen Elbert: So please... do not worry about my health.
Kate: Mm! Then, thank you for the delicious meal!
Elbert took her hand off my cheek and gave me a soft smile.
She was supposed to be the Queen who poisoned Snow White, and yet her smile made my heart race.
Queen Elbert: By the way, I still have not gotten your name. Snow White.... what is your real name?
Kate: It's Kate.
Queen Elbert: I see... Then, Kate, it is lovely to meet you.
--time skip--
That night in my bed chamber, I decided to plan my course of action.
(The Queen has been friendly to me so far, so I'll have to get serious about finding the missing piece of the story starting tomorrow.)
(The only things that are from the story that I have not tracked down yet are the poisoned apple and the Prince.)
(However, searching for the poisoned apple is quite risky.... it may be better to search for the Prince first.)
On the second day in this world, I decided to cooperate with Queen Elbert.
Queen Elbert: A Prince.....?
Kate: Yes! I want to find the one and only Prince who will love me.
Kate: Please, Your Highness...will you help me?
Queen Elbert: ...........
Queen Elbert seemed to think very carefully about my request.
Queen Elbert: Why exactly do you want to find the Prince?
Queen Elbert: You said yesterday that you did not need money, and you simply brushed Al off when he tried to flirt with you.
Queen Elbert: If you are not swayed by money or the opposite sex, why would you want to seek out the Prince?..... I don't quite understand.
Kate: That's... erm.... finding him is necessary to make my wish come true.
(I am searching for what is missing in this world to correct the distortions, and then return to my reality.... That is what I should do...)
(The Queen seemed to be troubled by my statement........ I can try one last time to do something...)
Ah, that's it!
Kate: People become more beautiful when they are in love....
Kate: If a Prince whom I love and loves me appeared before me.... perhaps we can find the most beautiful thing you are searching for.
Queen Elbert: ...Really?
As soon as Elbert heard it was a beautiful thing, her eyes widened and she came over to me.
Her large hands gripped my shoulders so hard it hurt.
Kate: Y-yes.... that is... most likely so...
(They say falling in love makes people more beautiful-- that isn't wrong per se...y'know?)
Queen Elbert: If there's potential, then so be it. Thank you for trying to make my wish come true, Kate.
Queen Elbert: Let us gather all the people in this nation to search for a Prince... the one and only Prince who will make you beautiful.
Thus began the search for the Prince, led by Queen Elbert.
Chapter 2 -> coming soon
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I actually have thoughts about this! I think Ford is a specific type of character.
First of all: Let's talk about fanon!
Something I think that a lot of us forget when we're doing fan analysis is just how caricaturized all blorbos are in canon. This is true of any work of media: the characters aren't real people, they're figments who only exist as we see them on-screen.
Fanon is kind of like those AI image sharpeners that take a blurred photo and make it look like a person's face: yeah, technically that is an accurate way you can interpret the blur, but there are hundreds of faces that would be just as accurate, and not only are they all very different from each other, they don't even agree on the most basic and obvious traits. The same blurry headshot could be a scowling white woman with a square jaw or a smiling black man with sharp features. In a similar way, when we see a character become stressed because they just saw a mouse in a cage, we could say they're scared of mice, or morally opposed to pets, or that they have cage-based trauma - any option that works is plausible.
I think that there are characters who are good characters, characters who are uniquely good subjects for fanon, and a ven diagram between the two. For example, a lot of kids' shows from the nineties are bad, but they managed to produce a really fun and rich fandom. Meanwhile, some really beautiful and culturally important stories don't leave a lot of room for fan works because they've already said what they need to say. I think the absolute best works for fandom are the ones that are objectively good stories, but have really simplified characters: Undertale might be the best example of this, because every single character suggests a rich and beautiful personality while only being on screen for a relatively short time.
So that leads me to part two: Ford!
I think Ford fills a particular fandom niche that was empty for a lot of us.
He's extremely traumatized, and the more we learn about him, the more traumatized he is. He's kind of pushing the limits of what's acceptable from a kids' show, to be honest.
He canonically has a lot of difficulty making friends; this is partly because he's quirky and seemingly neurodivergent, but partly because he has poor social skills. He's not a cartoony, Eeyore-style "has trouble making friends but we love him anyway" character, either; there are tangible, in-story examples of him failing to make friends.
He behaves badly sometimes. This is actually my favorite trait of his - anyone who reads my fanfiction knows how much I love giving people with real flaws a chance to find love and be treated with respect. Most characters have a flaw to overcome, but in his worst moments, Ford actually lashes out and hurts others in a tangible way and not just a child-friendly way. Showrunners don't always like to show that sort of thing.
It is very, very easy to read some severe mental health symptoms into his behavior. Bill is a literal character, but he's also a pretty good metaphor: you can use him to explain hallucinations, dissociative fugues, sudden mood swings, manic episodes, severe depression, paranoia - the list goes on and on.
(That last one is really important. There's a pretty damn big difference between a good metaphor for mental illness and a thoughtful portrayal of that mental illness in a story. It's kind of like how many of us were so starved for queer representation growing up that we read queer metaphors into everything. Well, there still isn't good mental illness representation in most media, so we'll take the metaphors we can get. Ford is a really good metaphor even as he's presented, and there are a lot of holes in his narrative where personality disorder symptoms, manic episodes, delusions, etc. can slot in easily.)
None of those traits make a good Disney character. They only really work because he spends so little time on-screen; the books were only possible because of Gravity Falls's massive commercial success. So, he's a very rare example of a character who's from a light-hearted, positive, optimistic show aimed at children, but who has all of the template features necessary for us to read him as deeply broken in some ways that aren't sanitized or socially acceptable.
So, there are dozens and dozens of Ford AUs in which we project very specific experiences, traumas, and symptom sets into this one man.
How many Ford AUs out there are reflections of our own insecurities, traumas, and just general unresolved issues? Is that, like, his whole purpose in the wider multiverse of alternate Gravity Falls characters? 'Cause I KNOW it isn't just me
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Until Dawn vs Until Dawn Remake
From one of my old Reddit posts— what do you make of the changes to the hour glass lineup? Original on top, remake on bottom.
#This is more accurate to the story importance of the characters#Matt being the focal character before was interesting#His one time in the spotlight#I like that there’s color now#they’re facing the other direction#Ashley lost her flashlight but they gave her her outdoor coat#people were excited to see Emily and Jess beside each other#maybe they have a little more content#but we can only guess#my boy Chris has a proper amount of emphasis this time#I will always hype him up#until dawn#until dawn remake#josh washington#chris hartley#sam giddings#mike munroe#jessica riley#matt taylor#ashley brown#emily davis
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"I want Annabeth to be blonde :(" then pick up a PJO book and read it you dumb fuck
#pjo fans stop being weird about black annabeth challenge IMPOSSIBLE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!#first off annabeths race isnt important to her story. annabeth could be any race. her skin colour doesnt actually impact her. her hair does#now im not blonde but im a white girl so let me explain why some pjo fans need to stfu. i have grade 9s. im called stupid for my appearance#im not insulted bc im white or bc i have blue eyes or brown hair. im insulted bc women are judged on their appearance because SEXISM!!#annabeth isnt called dumb for being blonde. shes called dumb bc shes female. and ppl are more likely to stereotype women than men#this is especially true for black women! whatever sexism white women get is always horrifically multiplied for women of colour#black hair frequently gets called unprofessional untidy unhygienic etc. its VERY likely that show annabeth received prejudice for her hair#does this make the casting “accurate”? no. but castings don't have to be accurate. they have to ADD to the character.#annabeth being black ADDS to her character because it showcases how women (esp black women) are devalued for their appearance#movie annabeth wasnt bad for having brown hair or white skin or whatever she was a bad adaptation bc she was out of character#i just think its ironic that a core aspect of annabeth was being judged for her looks. and now show annabeth is getting judged for her look#like. you guys really missed the point here.#anyways disagree all you want but book annabeth is still blonde. no one is erasing her. Theres a new PJO book w blonde annabeth SEPTEMBER 2#GO READ CHALICE OF THE GODS IF U WANT BLONDE ANNABETH OMG! adaptions and source material can be separate and coexist!#rant over sorry#pjo#percy jackson#annabeth chase#pjo show#percy jackson and the olympians#the lightning thief#discourse#shitpost#percy jackson show#pjo discourse#riordanverse
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20/10 stars little guy
#me (scrounging undetected autist whose ideal fashion sense is ''if i have to be seen at all: shrouded'') seeing encanto the other month.....#and on top of it all i LOVE slice of life. encanto being so focused on What It's About that there's so much of that + character / dynamic#also part of what i loved abt pixar luca. ppl like ''simple story but not a problem :)'' like YEAH thank god it's Also so slice of lifey#2021 what a year lol. though again i only Just saw encanto....tfw Studio Creative Control backs off a bit more than usual: Joy & Wonders#anyway i knew going in bruno wasn't an antagonist (fine if he was though b/c slay & b/c scapegoats can do whatever they want)#knew i'd love him b/c again Scapegoat shows up & i'm the Amazing Showstopping Totally Unique Never The Same gif on loop#but what a delight even beyond those expectations lol. love again how Focused the movie is on What It's About & Thee Points it makes#the Characters / Dynamics & the Metaphor & the plot stays right with all of that. the focus & importance re: thee scapegoats....#& bruno being disabled like whole layer of Yay Yay Yay spamming. that even when He's Back we're reminded he's not ''normal now'' or w/e#(i.e. presenting that as The Good Ending for the disabled outcast. vs just being embraced as part of the group again & accepted As He Is)#meanwhile was like hmm chat is there queercoding do we think? like is he queer: Yes. but is there coding? hmm#sure isn't cishet coded though. but i was also having the thought like fellas is it gay to [higher tenor tessitura or w/e] lol#made me go ''do i know this voice? ok do i know this name / face / actor? (i have never seen anything ever / bad w/names/faces/voices)''#indeed was like yeah haven't seen this; heard of this; seen it once ages ago no way i remember more than like 0.6 details#then from ''ohh haha I'm A Mammal That Cares....yeah i hear that'' to ''omg CHI-CHI RODRIGUEZ???? ;;0;;'' waaah fantastic revelation lmao#also the way Literal Future Seer ability was externalized to make it more wrangleable for plot is so impressive & fun & excellent#got a lot of [i like this thing i saw a lot] i got to say....guess i can do that w/the sideblog i made for one drawing i made last night#encanto 2021#bruno madrigal#also the way bruno is so Nervous + Hiding / Bold + Big Personality like yes ha ha ha Yes....tamped down as ''too much'' experience#also the [stuttering stumbling muttering mumbling] line: i fr nigh wept upon going back over a moment like what am i hearing here?#& realizing the answer was: it's bruno quietly stuttering a moment during this one line (& then (& then (& then)) i saw you) ;;;mm;;;#hang onnn....the first scapegoat who's driven off being Disabled is so real so ;m; that again they're like so he got Weirder; Okay ;;m;;#that we get jorge thumbs up nobody having an Aside to be like [ugh; this guy] or Anything. augh always have too much to say for 30 tags#fabric drape there sure not accurate but i was like okay if i try to really reference that i'm not getting this done tonight
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Do you conlang? I was wondering if you had naming languages (or possibly even more developed ones) for pulling the words you use. I tried to search your blog but didn't find anything, wouldn't be surprised if the feature is just busted tho. Your worldbuilding is wonderful and I particularly enjoy the anthropological and linguistic elements.
Ok the thing is I had kind of decided I was not going to do any conlanging because I don't feel like I'm equipped to do a good job of it, like was fully like "I'm just going to do JUST enough that it doesn't fail an immediate sniff test and is more thoughtful than just keysmashing and putting in vowels". And then have kinda been conlanging anyway (though not to a very deep and serious extent. I maybe have like....an above average comprehension of how language construction works via willingness to research, but that's not saying much, also I can never remember the meanings of most linguistic terms like 'frictives' or etc off the top of my head. I'm just kinda raw dogging it with a vague conceptualization of what these things mean)
I do at least have a naming language for Wardi (and more basic rules for other established languages) but the rudimentary forms of it were devised with methods much shakier and less linguistically viable than even the most basic naming language schemes, and I only went back over it LONG after I had already made a bunch of words so there's some inconsistencies with consonant presence and usage. (This can at least be justified because it IS a language that would have a lot of loanwords and would be heavily influenced by other language groups- Burri being by far the most significant, Highland-Finnic and Yuroma-Lowlands also being large contributors)
The 'method' I used was:
-Skip basic construction elements and fully move into devising necessary name words, with at least a Vibe of what consonants are going to be common and how pronunciation works -Identify some roots out of the established words and their meanings. Establish an ongoing glossary of known roots/words. -Construct new words based in root words, or as obvious extensions/variants of established words. -Get really involved in how the literal meanings of some words might not translate properly to english, mostly use this to produce a glossary of in-universe slang. -Realize that I probably should have at least some very basic internal consistency at this point. -Google search tutorials on writing a naming language. -Reverse engineer a naming language out of established words, and ascribe all remaining inconsistencies to being loanwords or just the mysteries of life or whatever.
I do at least have some strongly established pronunciation rules and a sense of broad regional dialect/accents.
-'ai' words are almost always pronounced with a long 'aye' sound.
-There is no 'Z' or 'X' sound, a Wardi speaker pronouncing 'zebra' would go for 'tsee-brah', and would attempt 'xylophone' as 'ssye-lohp-hon'
-'V' sounds are nearly absent and occur only in loanwords, and tend to be pronounced with a 'W' sound. 'Virsum' is a Highland word (pronounced 'veer-soom') denoting ancestry, a Wardi speaker would go 'weer-sum'.
-'Ch' spellings almost always imply a soft 'chuh' sound when appearing after an E, I, or O (pelatoche= pel-ah-toh-chey), but a hard 'kh' sound after an A or U (odomache= oh-doh-mah-khe). When at the start of a word, it's usually a soft 'ch' unless followed by an 'i' sound (chin (dog) is pronounced with a hard K 'khiin', cholem (salt) is pronounced with a soft Ch 'cho-lehm')
-Western Wardin has strong Burri cultural and linguistic influence, and a distinct accent- one of the most pronounced differences is use of the ñ sound in 'nn' words. The western city of Ephennos is pronounced 'ey-fey-nyos' by most residents, the southeastern city of Erubinnos is pronounced 'eh-roo-been-nos' by most residents. Palo's surname 'Apolynnon' is pronounced 'A-puh-lee-nyon' in the Burri and western Wardi dialects (which is the 'proper' pronunciation, given that it's a Kos name), but will generally be spoken as 'Ah-poh-leen-non' in the south and east.
-R's are rolled in Highland-Finnic words. Rolling R's is common in far northern rural Wardi dialects but no others. Most urban Wardi speakers consider rolling R's sort of a hick thing, and often think it sounds stupid or at least uneducated. (Brakul's name should be pronounced with a brief rolled 'r', short 'ah' and long 'uul', but is generally being pronounced by his south-southeastern compatriots with a long unrolled 'Brah' sound).
Anyway not really a sturdy construction that will hold up to the scrutiny of someone well equipped for linguistics but not pure bullshit either.
#I actually did just make a post about this on my sideblog LOL I think in spite of my deciding not to conlang this is going to go full#full conlanging at some point#The main issue is that the narrative/dialogue is being written as an english 'translation' (IE the characters are speaking in their actual#tongues and it's being translated to english with accurate meaning but non-literal treatment)#Which you might say like 'Uh Yeah No Shit' but I think approaching it with that mindset at the forefront does have a different effect than#just fully writing in english. Like there's some mindfulness to what they actually might be saying and what literal meanings should be#retained to form a better understanding of the culture and what should be 'translated' non-literally but with accurate meaning#(And what should be not translated at all)#But yeah there's very little motivation for conlanging besides Pure Fun because VERY few Wardi words beyond animal/people/place names#will make it into the actual text. Like the only things I leave 'untranslated' are very key or untranslatable concepts that will be#better understood through implication than attempts to convey the meaning in english#Like the epithet 'ganmachen' is used to compliment positive traits associated with the ox zodiac sign or affectionately tease#negative ones. This idea can be established pretty naturally without exposition dumps because the zodiac signs are of cultural#importance and will come up frequently. The meaning can get across to the reader pretty well if properly set up.#So like leaving it as 'ganmachen' you can get 'oh this is an affectionate reference to an auspicious zodiac sign' but translating#it as the actual meaning of 'ox-faced' is inevitably going to come across as 'you look like a cow' regardless of any zodiac angle#^(pretty much retyped tags from other post)#Another aspect is there's a few characters that have Wardi as a second language and some of whom don't have a solid grasp on it#And I want to convey this in dialogue (which is being written in english) but I don't want it to just be like. Random '''broken''' english#like I want there to be an internal consistency to what parts of the language they have difficulties with (which then has implications for#how each language's grammar/conjugation/etc works). Like Brakul is fairly fluent in Wardi at the time of the story but still struggles#with some of the conjugation (which is inflectional in Wardi) especially future/preterite tense. So he'll sometimes just use the#verb unconjugated or inappropriately in present tense. Though this doesn't come across as starkly in text because it's#written in english. Like his future tense Wardi is depicted as like 'I am to talk with him later' instead of 'I'll talk with him later'#Which sounds unnatural but not like fully incorrect#But it would sound much more Off in Wardi. Spanish might be a better example like it would be like him approaching it with#'Voy a hablar con él más tarde' or maybe 'Hablo con él más tarde' instead of 'Hablaré con él más tarde'#(I THINK. I'm not a fluent spanish speaker sorry if the latter has anything wrong with it too)
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we need to discuss how erik in the yeston/kopit phantom is probably the most socially isolated version of erik in that he has presumably only ever had a conversation with one other human being his whole life (gerard) until he meets christine. she is the first person he has ever held a conversation with aside from the man who is basically an extension of himself (and whom he has known since birth) and we are expected to believe he would pull off a convo with his new crush smoothly? where are the fics that rewrite their first meeting and erik is an absolute loserboy cringey mess??? hm????
#time to go write one#ive been wanting to rewrite y/k for awhile bc i loveee the story but the script is so meh#might start w a oneshot of their first meeting and go from there#anyway this is such an important element of his character imo and it needs to be shown more!!!#erik is not mr suave sexy he is a homeschooled basement boy and should be portrayed with accurate levels of cringe behavior#phantom of the opera#poto#erik#erik the phantom
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who up seeing their disorder in a fictional character but feel like its not their place to put a name on it
#id have to be waterboarded before i can talk abt how i see a lot of my adhd and personality in mitsumi iwakura let alone post it#idk how to talk abt this without feeling like im talking over or invalidating ppls experiences relating with a character#someone was talking abt how ppl tie laios' autism to special interest and social difficulties but not much else which kinda flattens it#and then went into a respectful in depth analysis of other autistic behaviour that laios exhibits and it wasnt phrased meanly#its fascinating and important to me to hear someone explain a little bit abt traits that they recognized and often go overlooked#because it does help me learn more about it. but i think thats also where hesitancy kicks in when it comes to depicting it accurately#like i have adhd and some of my adhd symptoms overlap with autism (time blindness and pattern seeking behaviour) but that only means#it feels familiar to me even without having autism. on top of that traits arent always cleanly determined as being /caused/ by#a disorder. to understand my environment i compare it to something unrelated but similar to make it more familiar and for the longest time#i thought that was a personality thing and not an information processing thing since i loved playing pretend in my head as a kid#so if you make a character who experiences that hoping to reach people that also experience that and tell them its not weird or#smth youre making up like. thats the goal. ppl who dont get it arent expected to it just means it doesnt cater to them but it helps them#become familiar to it yk? since i dont have autism myself i dont feel confident i can depict it properly or explain it in my own words#but that doesnt mean im trying to dismiss it or try and cut it out completely.. ill just leave the floor open to someone who /can/#a lot of issues around fanon depictions are when smth is baselessly popularized or a characters personality and behavior is flattened#especially to fit them into a trending meme. its harmless and its supposed to be for fun but it gets tricky when you drag things that#need to be carefully explained beforehand or else it gets lost in translation. like that tweet abt 'hyperfixating' on cooking pasta#once it becomes popular language usually the original meaning is left out for the sake of simplifying it for everyone that when it#circles back theres a sort of hesitancy like. am i using it the way it was intended or am i unknowingly using the popularized version of it#actually thats probably why i felt wrongfooted during diagnosis bc it felt like i was misusing the words i heard to describe what i felt#i /know/ i see a lot of myself in mitsumi because our minds are always somewhere else and we tend to put good faith first and for me#that personal connection is enough. but idk it feels like its always gonna have to be 'palatable' first before i can talk abt it openly#mad respect to writers and creators who stick to their story even if theres the looming fear of ppl misinterpreting it and letting them#have it.. its been almost 2 weeks and i am so close to deleting that m3 dunmeshi drawing bc ppl keep saying chilchuck wouldnt have 200 HP#IT LITERALLY SAYS I MADE IT WHILE WATCHING EP 1. I USED EARTHBOUND LOGIC AND I WASNT EVEN TAKING IT SERIOUSLY CHILL#yapping
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Forgot to post this earlier but I did in fact comb the entire Vesperia script to determine how many times he uses ま/まあ throughout the game, along with a few other phrases he uses repeatedly. This counts all of main story, every single sidequest, and every single skit in the game.
Final counts were:
ま/まあ: 279
Ma/Maa; translates to "well". He uses this at the beginning of a sentence usually, but it's sometimes in the middle. "Ma" is usually more quick and snappy. "Maa" is more thoughtful and/or prolonged. Obviously it can vary based on context, but that's the general breakdown.
んじゃ and any variants: 133
Nja, along with variants such as "ja", "soreja", etc. Variants are counted when they're all used to express "let's get going", when they're about to head off ("ja" could be used in a sentence such as "ja/but then, why is xyz like this", etc). They encompass translations such as "well then" (let's get going implied. includes "so then", "then" "alright then", and so on), "we should be off", "let's get going", "let's go", etc. (not to be confused with 行こう(ikou), 行くぜ, (ikuze), and other similar versions of this phrase. That can also mean "let's go", but any instances of Yuri using that particular phrase was not counted because it wasn't a variant of, specifically, んじゃ, which is also his most common "let's go" ja variant).
おい / おいおい: 66
Oi/Oi oi; translates to "hey"/"hey, hey", though "oi" is more or less an accepted word in English nowadays.
おっと: 12
Otto (not to be confused with "oto", referring to sound); an expression of surprise that can translate roughly to "whoa there" (which is the most common translation I do see for it and what I'd use in most cases too, context of course varying). The reason I included this one despite it being so seemingly low in number is because it's not a particularly common expression, much less one used multiple times by a single character? It's so rare from anyone else, which is just a regular thing relative to Yuri and his dialogue/speech (i.e. most characters sparingly use phrases repeatedly, as compared to Yuri... as you can see lol. Other characters use these words/phrases, but nowhere near as regularly, if regularly at all).
Realized along the way I should've included やれやれ (yare yare, "good grief", "oh dear", "oh boy" etc), but by the time I realized I should have in case it was an interesting count, I was too far into the script to be able to handle going all the way back through it LOL.
No. No, I am not joking that Yuri used ま/まあ 279 times throughout the course of the game. That is to say, it could be more if I missed any, but on the assumption I didn't, that's where it stands.
Why do I love this so much? Because it's a very specific character quirk of a character I adore. I'm very fond of his repetition. Thank you.
#GTF Vesperia Things#GTF Yuri Things#so glad I gave him his own tag jpfjugDFJISHFG he fuckin' needs it#OH ALSO note that I may or may not have (I genuinely don't know I don't THIIIINK I did?) accidentally picked up#the “but then" etc variant of ja. at this point I don't remember and I'd have to go back through my doc of this#bc I was skim-combing the script juggling several phrases mainly for ma. if I ever do a recount I'll confirm lol#also shoutout to Rays for using ま/まあ 68 times for him which is 4 more times than he uses it in Vesp arc 1 main story#I'm both thankful and amazed that Rays' writers ACTUALLY kept it to the correct general extent at large (when you consider the size of#both games and Yuri's role) I've always expressed how dedicated they are to the source material of the legacy chars but#that CEMENTED it LOL. the way they retain speech quirks for legacy chars is amazing and I applaud them#he uses おい / おいおい 54 times throughout Rays#おっと was used 10 times throughout Rays which is hilariously almost identical to Vesp's usage#んじゃ they did keep but I didn't count the amount of times#now MIND YOU Rays is split into 4 arcs prior to Recollection (which he's not in) and has to contend with about 200ish legacy characters#Yuri is largely in arc 4 and has a large chunk of appearances in arc 2#he's mostly absent from arc 3 after the beginning of it and he's not in arc 1 much after the first chapter (which is his chapter)#he does show up in a lot of skits early into Rays tho since they only had so many chars to work with for arc 1 skits#and I also included count of those phrases in events (both skits and events throughout the game)#WHAT I'M SAYING is that Rays still managed to retain his word choice repetitiveness#and managed to get the count that high which is a very accurate reflection of it#while trying to put about 200 legacy chars through a revolving door#they were THAT on the nose with Yuri's quirks and further cements that this is a very Yuri thing#and a character quirk choice that was brought in from the game of origin#and they DID do this with other chars not just him... but the fact that they DID to me means#they thought it was important enough of a quirk to make sure they didn't lose it in his dialogue#WHICH. I AGREE. I AM VERY VERY DEEPLY PLEASED THEY KEPT IT#it just goes to show how dedicated they were in faithfully translating the characters into a gacha game#(not tl in the loc sense but tl in the ''writing a char outside their origin game for a non-origin game appearance'')#it also proved my theory that Yuri's vocal repetition was done intentionally bc they found it part of him enough to carry it over#anyway yeah i have yuri lowell brainrot and he pretty much owns 98 percent of the real estate in my brain these days
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#reading kim kitsuragi fics about his seolite heritage and. crying. (/positive)#wahhhh. wahhhhh. hes just like me for real.#anyway have been reading a bunch of#disco elly#fics recently and having a good time!! i need to write one immediately hffhh also i ADORE THE SKILLS!! SO MUCH!!#you may think my favorite character is kim. its true. BUT ALSO ITS ACTUALLY THE SKILLS. theyre funny silly :3#i loveee the skills so much and i need to play more of the game and memorize what each of them do so i can write them accurately#also people who rp as the skills on tumblr YOU ARE SO FUNNY AND I LOVE YOU. they are so interesting <33#i love them talking to each other!! i wish i could be a part of that but i think everyone is taken though. alas!#update: nevermind i solved it. i figured it out.#anyway topic at hand. kim brings me such joy. and as a seasian its;;; very poignant sometimes. important to me#born in america. but the asian heritage and all that comes with it stays. people will still assume. make comments.#asian american; a reconciliation with the self :'> stories where kim can have or navigate that are cathartic.#periodical life updates#I GUESS LMAO?#my favorite color is queue
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I thought I'd never see the day where I'd finally do a character reference sheet but here we are <3 (click for better quality)
#the bottom left is blank for me to eventually design his knife#it's just not thematically important like the gun is but i'm sure it has some kind of embellished handle#and i'd like to mess around with what the design could be some more before making it 'official'#celio tag#prodigal#my art#oc art#so much of it needs to be tweaked but i'm being sooo brave and non perfectionistic about it#also in case it wasn't clear#this story is not meant to be historically accurate in any sense 😭😭😭#i just enjoy dressing characters up in pretty gothic clothes like they're dolls
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We‘re all Disney haters here but with Dracula daily going on I desperately need tumblr to know the existence of this comic adaptation of Dracula that exists within a series of monthly published comic books and looks like this:
Please look at this effort - they really went all out on these, NONE of the other comics look anything close to these. It’s just this one randomly sitting between normal Mickey and Donald comics about going to space or smth
Aside from the lack of prominent character death and replacement by transformation into beetroots it seems surprisingly accurate so far
(Also Disney has like. Nothing to do with these books aside from owning the copyright to the characters, so it’s cool. Pretty sure they don’t even really know these exist lol.)
#Dracula#mickey mouse#joining the dracula daily ride this year#this comic is a lot more accurate than I thought when I read it#also they replaced minor characters and made the more important ones do their tasks instead#so you end up with Mina throwing away flowers instead#(which is Quite A Change when comparing to the og Dracula)#and comedic changes - because it’s still a Mickey Mouse comic obvs#but aside from that#this seems a rather nice adaptation#also with ^Disney isn’t in on these^ I mean it.#pretty sure I saw Mickey with a gun more than once in these#and don’t even get me STARTED on DONALD#my guy‘s got LORE in these books#and a comic series WITHIN these comics#that’s supposed to be a James Bond type parody thing#but goes way harder than it has any right to be#like. it’s an actual ongoing comic series#one big interconnected story released in parts between these books#and stuff that happens in one chapter actually STAYS RELEVANT for all others that come after it#anyways please someone ask me about the Donald Duck Agent comics#i need a reason to post about them properly XD
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I think the disconnect between canon Belos and (a certain genre of) fanon Belos is that in canon he is pathetic (in the dramatic sense) not sympathetic.
#ramblings of a lunatic#like that's the thing he's a tragic character in a sense but he's pitiable in the dramatic sense more than anything else#you pity his codependency and his hypocrisy and his refusal to ever change and his borderline stupidity#(like I get it he's good at machines and hes good at manipulating ppl! but his plans are also kinda stupid and that's on purpose)#(he is a conservative he is charismatic not machiavellian)#but you fully understand that his refusal to ever grow or learn (which is the crux of his. Everything) is his fault#i don't know man I'm just kinda over the fandom conversations around Belos after watching and dreaming#even if it wasn't my first choice or instinct I've made the effort to understand why the writers did his ending the way they did#and i see their pov and I've decided actually. yeah i can see how that works#bc fundamentally while a very important character philip has never been the crux of this story#it has always always been Luz King and Eda. and the amount of ppl who are. deeply pissy about that fact#idk man i don't consider myself like. knowledgeable and conscious enough to accurately identify white bias in fandom#and I'm fully aware that fandom is not praxis and it's generally shitty to insist ppl spend more or less time on certain aspects of media#as if fandom is about filling quotas for HR#but also i can't ignore the fuckin. itchy feeling that ppl really took this man at his word when his main character trait is being A Liar#all bc he's a white guy with long hair#he's cool! i like him! especially now that i remembered the vocabulary featured in this post! i have words to describe my feelings on him!#and also none of this matters bc He Is Not Real and the toh writers are not sniffling and sobbing rn bc some ppl think they did belos dirty#i just have ''opinionated on characters'' disease#and my opinion of philip is that he's a great villain#but ppl willfully ignore WHY he's a great villain (He Is An Interesting Depiction of a Religious Conservative)#in order to invent different and more traditionally sympathetic reasons why he's great (he's just afraid and alone and he feels bad and he)#(you get it)#okay. I'm done#Do Not Read The Fucking Tags
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Ever since the Kenobi show came out the entire SW fandom now seems to think Obi-Wan Kenobi is the main character of Star Wars. Not Anakin, not the Skywalkers. Obi-Wan. Just because Disney made a big-budget fanfic about him. 🤦🏽♀️
#don’t know if I should laugh or cry 😅😭#and no... I'm not saying other characters shouldn't receive attention#in fact...under different circumstances i would not mind at all#but within the context of Disney's terrible and destructive 'sequels'#(which had a decidedly 'anti-Skywalker' bias!!!)#i will always be inherently suspicious of the way Disney portray ANY other SW characters#because Disney NEVER truly acknowledged Anakin Skywalker as the CENTRAL FIGURE OF THE LUCAS SAGA#in fact they tried to pretend he wasn't 'that important'... tried to destroy the ENTIRE meaning of his story#and reduce him to nothing but 'Vader'#so why would I welcome yet another entry into this same madness??#i'm not even getting into detail about my views on Obi-Wan's character here#only to say that I love him dearly#but i love the tragically flawed Lucas CANON version of him#not the 'long suffering saint' idealised fanon version i'm seeing everywhere these days#and the fact is -- no matter how much people like him#he's NOT the central character of the story and never will be#there's a reason it's called the SKYWALKER saga... ffs#anti-disney#or perhaps more accurately#anti-disney sw fandom
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with the webtoon 2025 contest announced I am,, tempted to use it as an excuse to finally launch a webcomic i've been itching to start for literal YEARS now...
which means I might want to hire a sensitivity reader bc the main POV character (or, i should say, one of the two main POV characters, but the story starts off mainly from her pov) is a biracial queer black American girl and while obviously I'll do my best not to stereotype or write her in a racist way, there are also cultural things that I'm sure I'm just,, completely ignorant to as a white american.
Anyway, No, i can't "just ask a black friend" that's assuming i even HAVE irl friends lmao 🤣
So anyway, depending on how far I get in the process of developing this webcomic, I may be interested in hiring a sensitivity reader, particularly one with lived experience as a queer, (preferably biracial) black, American woman who knows what it was like to be a queer black teenager in the mid-late 2000s :D
#sensitivity reader#Still not sure if I'll get far enough to need a sensitivity reader#and it also depends on if i can afford a sensitivity reader 🤔 for the long run#But i might want one before i post. especially for feedback/advice on making the character more culturally authentic if that makes sense?#Now you may ask. why is that so important to you?? um.#I didnt' even know about hair bonnets until like less than half a decade ago lol#You may also be asking “why make this character black if you're white??”#um. I always imagined her as black?? It would feel super weird to make all the main characters white just because I'M white lol#Also the other POV character is white so#funky's personal tag#also i'm not really entering the contest to win OR to become a webtoon original lol#I doubt my writing/art is good enough to win or even place#THAT SAID! I'm mainly using it as a catalyst to get this story going!#I'm so excited :D#(ALSO for clarity this story is NOT *about* the black american experience OR racism OR racial social justice)#HOWEVER! I still want to be accurate and not downplay the fact that it kinda takes place in mid-late 2000s 🤷♀️#if that makes sense?#like. this is not an au of reality where racism doesn't exist#however. the story isn't centered around racism#hope that makes sense
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Let's talk about misdirection.
(Requested by @voiceless9000. Hope this is helpful!)
Misdirection in storytelling, through foreshadowing and other techniques, is a powerful tool that can enhance suspense, surprise, and engagement in your narrative and make plot twists more unexpected.
Remember to maintain coherence and avoid contrivances that may undermine the integrity of your storytelling.
Here are some techniques you can use to effectively misdirect readers:
Red Herrings: Introduce elements or clues that suggest a certain outcome or plot direction, only to later reveal that they were misleading. These false leads can divert readers' attention away from the true resolution.
Selective Detailing: Highlight certain details or events in a way that implies their significance, while downplaying or omitting others that might be more relevant to the actual outcome. By controlling what information readers focus on, you can steer their expectations.
Character Misdirection: Use characterisation to mislead readers about characters' true intentions, motivations, or identities. Create multi-dimensional characters who may behave ambiguously or inconsistently, leaving readers unsure of their true allegiances, motivations, or goals.
Foreshadowing: Employ foreshadowing to hint at future events or outcomes, but do so in a way that misleads interpretation. Provide clues that could be interpreted in multiple ways or that lead readers to expect one outcome while delivering another. (See my previous post about foreshadowing for more!)
Misleading Narration: Utilise an unreliable narrator or perspective to present events in a biased or distorted manner. Readers may trust the narrator's account implicitly, only to discover later that their perceptions were flawed or intentionally deceptive.
Subverting Tropes: Set up situations or scenarios that seem to follow familiar narrative tropes or conventions, only to subvert them in unexpected ways. This can keep readers guessing and prevent them from accurately predicting the story's trajectory.
Parallel Storylines: Introduce secondary storylines or subplots that appear unrelated to the main narrative but eventually intersect or influence the primary plot in unexpected ways. This can distract readers from anticipating the main storyline's developments.
Setting: Manipulate the setting or environment to create false impressions about the direction of the plot. For example, presenting a seemingly idyllic setting that harbors dark secrets or dangers.
Timing and Pacing: Control the pacing of your story to strategically reveal information or developments at opportune moments, leading readers to draw premature conclusions or overlook important details. (See my post on pacing for more tips!)
Twists and Reversals: Incorporate sudden plot twists or reversals that upend readers' expectations and challenge their assumptions about the story's direction. Ensure that these twists are logically consistent but sufficiently surprising to catch readers off guard.
Happy writing!
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