#writting tips

[hannshines]

I love how they are giving Spanglish tutorials for writing and making a more realistic Miguel O'hara in fics.

And it's funny because they're right in saying that it's not just saying random words in Spanish, it's literally putting certain sentences and almost repeating the same thing but in English or more than repeating it is saying something else that reaffirms what you said in Spanish, if you want the other person to understand you well if they don't speak any Spanish at all.

But apart from that, the truth is that not much happens, obviously what will stand out the most in Spanish words and actually in anny kind of language are the expressions

If you are an English speaker but you moved to Mexico and now you speak Spanish almost all the time, the typical expressions that you used to say in the United States or wherever you come from will not go away so easily.

A good tip is to think in that way, if you were that character with a nationality or your parents are from another country and you speak that other language constantly, how would you speak? And what are the expressions you would still use un your language?

They handle that in the film in a decent way, because for example all the expressions that Miguel says in a sarcastic, desperate way and whispers to himself he says them in Spanish (giving you to understand that he is very familiar with the language in the sense of speaking it, so much so that he continues to use some phrases).

That unlike Miles who has a mother who speaks Spanish, he has spoken English all his life and although he is used to his mother's Puerto Rican Spanish (he understands her when she speaks some things) in reality he doesn't speak it, because he never had the need to speak spanish or to express himself with phrases in another language other than with his mother (if that were the case).

And considering Miles' mother, she speaks more fluent Splanglish and her accent is still quite thick, has anyone seen Sofia Vergara in Mother Family? She's literally Gloria

And here comes in also knowing the different expressions for the different Spanish speaking countries which would be almost the same as with American English and British English.

It is not the same to use expressions in Puerto Rican Spanish (which is what Miles' mother should use) to mexican expressions (which is what Miguel should use) to expressions in Spanish spain or other Spanish-speaking countries (which, as strange as it sounds, is what Miguel uses in the film and Miles uses in the short conversation he has with Miguel, calling him "tío")

And honestly it's not a complaint, because I adore Oscar Issac and maybe I understand a little bit about the accent and the words because my man is from Guatemala.

But again is not the same to say "automóvil" here in Mexico, the word means the same thing but here in Mexico we don't use that word much to refer to a car, we call it "carro".

There are words that do become common i'm diferente countries, but back to the expressions.

"Ay coño" is not a Mexican expression.

Yes in Latin America because is it used in other countries and in Spain, but here un México that word is used but almost nothing and not for the same, there are more expressions that are used in Mexico, that somehow I understand that it will not be used, I consider that the common Mexican expressions, the real ones, are very rude and vulgar, but that in some way characterizes us.

I was waiting for Miguel O'hara to say something stupid like "Me está llevando la chingada" (which means he's fed up with every situation and can't take it anymore) because it seemed that at some point the man couldn't take any more with a "mocoso" (brat).

Someone made a post with some expressions and words in Spanish, it is very good sincerely, I hope you see it, but if you want to enjoy a good movie in the dubbing is full of Mexicanisms, see Shrek in Latin American Spanish.

In the Hangover movie the dubbing uses expressions that would be used here in Mexico, if you want more rude expressions with the Spanish dubbing.

But remember that if you want to base it on a movie, all the dubbing should be Latin American which is the closest to Mexican expressions.

In fact that's a problem with Latin American dubbing, as it's mostly done here in Mexico they try to make it global for Latin America but they tend to put in a lot of Mexicanisms that are not understood in other countries but that kill us in mexico.

[roserysttrpggarden]

Homebrew Class design For Dummies: Part 2: Getting Started

Hi there~! Welcome to the second edition of homebrew class design for dummies, in case you haven't seen the first part of this. Welcome! This is a series of blogs where I go over how to make-what else, a homebrew class for Dungeons and Dragons Fifth-Edition. The previous post discussed the "planning" phase, going over the classes role in and out-of combat, their area and other minutia. This entry will cover the level 1-3 foundation, along with some other design concepts to help your class get off the grounds into becoming something amazing.

But First!

Before we get into making our class, there are a few key ideas you should keep in mind when designing a character option for 5e, some of this ties back into advice given in part 1, but bear repeating here.

Very basics

These things don't require much of an explanation, but just things to well...Keep in mind

Strong and weak saves: Each class has a strong (Constitution, Dexterity and Wisdom) and weak saving throw (Charisma, Intelligence and Strength) make sure to give one of each to your class.

Ribbon features: Ribbon features are like seasoning, while not adding much to the fully course, they enhance the classes flavor, a bad example of a ribbon feature is "Druidic" simply put unless your DM actively gives you a use for it, it is a completely useless feature. So make sure you're ribbon features actually come into affect when roleplaying the class.

Amount of features: Typically classes gain 2 features at these early levels, the only exception in official 5e is paladin at 2nd level, where you're given a fighting style, spellcasting and your divine smite, which all play form core pillars of how the paladin, use with caution.

Dead levels: Dead levels are those levels where you get nothing, nada, bupkis. Spellcasters have the most dead levels due to them getting cantrip enhancements + higher level spells as they level up, use them where appropriate. These are typically seen at later levels of a classes progression.

Bounded Accuracy:

In laments terms, bounded accuracy is meant to keep DC's around a bounds the designer intends for (In 5e's case 0-30) this is why, not including magical items or feature such as the barbarians capstone, this applies to whether you're attempting to break down a door or stabbing a vampire. Bounded accuracy is also accompanied by 5e's horizontal progression system, meaning that rather than your numbers going up, you gain more features to make you better at certain tasks (Damage, healing, etc) rather than bonuses to hit, to damage, etc and such, there are some exceptions (Advantage, Bless) but

Keep an eye on these

Weather you're designing a spell, subclass or a new class in our case, there are a few things in game that you should keep in mind

Barbarian Rage

Bards Magical Secrets

Druids Wild Shape

Fighters Action Surge

Monks Stunning Strike

Paladins Divine Smite + Auras

Rogues Sneak attack

Sorccerers Metamagic (Quicken + Twinned spell)

Warlocks Eldritch Blast and Pact Magic

Wizards Spell Mastery

All of these features not only serve as foundations for their respective classes, but also grant the class a huge deal of power. And in a game where 5e's multiclassing system is a thing, keeping these features in mind is helpful, for an example, say your class allows you to easily get off weapon attacks as a reaction, which, while possibly mediocre on its lonesome can get out of hand when paired with a rouge multiclass, due to how sneak attack can trigger multiple times if using a reaction attack (Since it triggers once per turn, rather than once per round) it's fine if you want to have interesting synergies between classes, just make sure you don't break anything in doing so.

While not class features, some other character options also grant players with them a great deal of power by virtue of their existence.

Feats: Sharpshooter and Great Weapon Master

Spells: Aid, Booming/Green Flame Blade, Counterspell, Conjure animals/Woodland Beings, Pass without trace, Wish.

Laying the foundation

With all of that jargon out of the way, lets begin laying out the first three levels of a homebrew class.

Level 1:

Level 1 is effectively the rookie stage of your classes career, whether they trained at a mystical academy or bonded with sewer rats, the first level of your given class should lay the framework for your class going forward, to give some examples, barbarians at 1st-level are given rage as their core feature, alongside a complementary feature in unarmored movement, rogues get sneak attack and expertise, fleshing out their role as a sneaky skill-monkey archetype. spellcasters (Besides the paladin and ranger) also get their spellcasting at this level.

Level 2:

Level 2 is where your character is starting to get a grasp of their abilities, similar to level 1 many classes get some of their most defining features here at this level, such as Druids Wildshape, Rogues Cunning Action, Clerics Channel Divinity, the list goes on.

Level 3:

Level 3 is where your character has gotten the grasp of their abilities and now can truly be one of their own, this is where the fullcasters get their second levels spells and where the martials get their subclass of choice, speaking of subclasses:

Where do I put the subclass?

A likely question you'll have have when making your subclass is "Where do I put it" or "What level should they get it, while non of what i'll state is definitive, some general guidelines for 1-3rd level goes as follows:

A subclass at 1st-level is generally done because it is absolutely crucial to the classes fantasy, say for instance your class is about you harnessing the power of a curse (Ex: Ross leisers accursed) getting your subclass at first level would make the most sense, to use base game classes as an example sorccerers, warlocks and clerics get their subclass at 1st-level because said subclass defines the source of their magic. Warlocks for instance derive their magic from a pact, which grants them their magic, hence a subclass at first level.

A subclass at 2nd-level is (offically) only use for both druids and wizards, both representing you coming into your own, such as training in a specialized school of magic. But also on a mechanic level, its done because 3rd-level grants a massive power spike for full casters by granting them second level spells.

A subclass at 3rd-level is typical of many martial and half casters, narratively it has a similar beat to a subclass at 2nd-level, being your character coming into their own as that respective class. Though I assume martials get their subclass at third is to balance the power between martials and casters, due to the previously mentioned power spike.

Subclass Progression

Last thing in relation to subclass, while you can simply use the wizard, fighter or paladin subclass structure for your subclass, feel free to go out of the box (Within reason) with it, want your class to gain its final subclass feature at 20th level? Go ahead! Just keep in mind that subclasses only give you 4-5 features maximum. Though more can be done if you want to put more emphasis on the subclass as a part of their identity.

The Avatar

Now for the moment you've (Maybe) been waiting for, using the knowledge bestowed within this article I shall showcase the first three levels of the Avatar class.

Divine Spark is your avatars subclass, determining the source of your divinity, similar to a cleric divine domain. While I haven't written down any features of their subclasses quite yet, I have four planned for the class so far (With more likely on the horizon) You also gain the Legendary strike ability, which not only increases your weapons damage dice by one, you also give temp hp to your allies when you score a critical hit.

Godly Conduit acts similarly to ki on the monk, you gain a number of conduit dice equal to half of your avatar level + your charisma modifier, which you can use to either leap a number of feet equal to 5 times the number rolled, or gain an expanded hit range with your weapons for a number of rounds equal to the number rolled. My favorite feature so far is the epithets, which are described bellow:

I cannot wait to show off the epithets sometime in the future. I am super proud of how they're turning out as of now. My hope is that they not only allow for a customizable avatar, but also help redefine how you utilize weapons.

at 3rd-level you gain a ribbon feature, exceptional figure, which makes it so that you cannot suffer disadvantage on any strength-based ability checks you make. Alongside that, feasting now counts as light activity for you and your allies while resting, meant to emulate the giant appetite many heroes of myth have, and I love the idea of an avatar and their allies after a long fought battle just pigging out to their hearts content.

You also gain another subclass feature at 3rd-level to for one last power spike in the starting levels.

Summary

To summarize everything covered within this entry, when laying the 1-3rd level foundation for your subclass, you should

Keep the basic rules of design in mind.

Create features that lay out what you want your class to be doing.

Give them a cool roleplay feature to help with your classes theme.

Determine where your classes subclass should go.

Get to Writing.

That's about all I got for this entry, next time we will go over features after 3rd level, going from 5th to 20th level, make sure to follow me if you're interested in that but until then. Thank you for reading, stay cool and go make some homebrew

Homebrew Class design For Dummies: Part 1:

Indestructoboys Homebrew Design Masterclass

Where to put my subclass by Indestructoboy

Two videos on Bounded Accuracy: 1 2

[konigsblog]

Not a request but do you have any tips on those who want to start writing (COD FIC) ofc

I’ve always had ideas but never thought to write them until recently when a friend said I should give it try

I have background stories written already for some of my characters but what worries me is when I actually get to the writing part I’ll get stuck.

of course !!

- PRACTICE . practice in your notes app, write stuff out, just ideas and give them a go. make sure you proofread before posting, sometimes you might wanna replace or add more words into your post, making it better and longer for whoever is lucky enough to read it !!

- INSPIRATION . look at other writers who post stuff you like and try think of other concepts and ideas. if you're gonna use someone's AU or concept, make sure to tag them in your post or ask beforehand if you're allowed to add onto their idea.

- WORDING . don't use the same words repetitively, search stuff like, ‘other words for said ’, if you don't, it'll start to feel like; ‘they said, she said, then they said this’ and it starts to get boring (i don't know if that made sense :()

- CHARACTERS . think about the personality and time of the character. are they cocky, loud, quiet, bubbly, cold? what are they like, what would they do in certain situations? don't feel afraid to share your personal headcannons, even if others disagree, people would love to hear about your own personal opinions !

[doyoulikemynickname20]

Últimamente he visto en foros y grupos que mucha gente piensa que el Mpreg y el Omegaverse son lo mismo.

Les hice esta bella presentación para que les sirva de inspiración, conozcan más sobre el tema o aprendan algo nuevo 🫰

QIUBULE CON EL MPREG! Por Emilie Jackson

Parte 1 -----> Parte 2

English version

[menelron]

anyone know how to cure writers block. Want to work on my Wips but I physically can’t write more than 3 sentences.

[shannyh25]

Hello Anne family,

I’m writing another Anne Of Green Gables fan fiction and i would like your input on my story idea.

It’s about Dora Keith. I always felt like she got left out in the Anne books. It’s about from her mother passing away up until she arrives at Green Gables and her name chapter in life at Green Gables. I want her to spend time with Anne and even Gilbert.

My friend suggested I try and write a short maybe 5 chapter story of Dora Keith. One of the titles she suggested could be The Day I Met Anne. Another story title I came up with was Dora Of Green Gables.

What are your guys thoughts on that idea? I have the first chapter written up on my phone so already.

Thank you!

[kittiecat300]

I'm writing a book about superheroes. I you're interested in doing artwork for the characters, comment down below, please, and thank you.

[ben-talks-art]

Me: "I don't like character X."

Person that likes character X: "YoU jUsT Don'T gEt IT!

You don't like that character because they have flaws but the fact they have flaws make them realistic!! Makes them more human!! It gives them more layers than your usual generic Mr. or Ms. perfect!!

Also, there is a reason for them to have flaws! They have a really tragic backstory or personal circumstances that explain why they are the way they are, and their actions actually tie in with the themes of the story!!"

Me: "Neat! I still don't like them."

Sometimes people just don't like certain characters, and it isn't because they "didn't get it", it's just that we all have different tastes and specific things that work or don't work for us.

Also, not liking a character and thinking a character is badly written aren't the same thing, so no need to be so defensive about it.

If anything, any time I hear someone has different feelings towards a character than mine I get really curious to hear why they feel that way in case they might offer another perspective I never considered before.

[thee-battle-nexus-champion]

HELLO HI I NEED SOME WRITING HELP.

So I'm trying to write a book (very heavy emphasis on trying). And three of my characters are Chinese.

Li-Ming Lian, and her parents Chen Lian, and Yizé Lian.

But I have some questions so I know I'm not getting anything wrong or doing anything disrespectful/racist (I'm not Chinese nor is any of my family or current friends)

S o

1) Their names

Is Li-Ming/Chen/Yizé a last name? I've tried to look it up and research it but I've seen that they're first names, but I've also seen that they're last names too. Is there a way to find out for sure?

2) Their last names

I know that usually/traditionally the wives keep their last names when getting married. Does that mean the dad should have a different one?

3) daily traditions (?)

Does anyone have any tips for writing them? I'm not sure how to like write/look up how to write everyday things that are also part of their culture

Like, calling their parents "baba" and "mama", or the foods they'd eat? Or any kind of lingo they'd use?

4) lastly

I know to make them a person, and that their race isn't everything. I just know it can contribute to certain things, and I want to make sure I'm getting those parts correct pls

[narherkugel]

Some time ago, I found myself in a bit of a mess when it came to writing. I wanted to write fanfictions, I wanted to write about my OCs! But because English is not my first language, I always stalled. Because I will write when I'm more comfortable, I will write in my native then translate (but then I cannot come to write it cause one sentence in English makes me go to point 1.) or because I have this internal pressure to make my chapters at least 3k words, so when I cannot write that much in one sitting like I used to then why bother or, the worst offender, I need to sit to PC to write and my keyboard sucks as well as my chair.

Okay, but where I'm going with all of this?

Recently I found our about keitai shōsetsu(very short novels, that were distributed via SMS). Recently I fell back for "headcanons character x oc" or "headcanons how character would treat you". And it got me thinking (I was shocked myself, really)

Why not just take out this stick from my ass and just write cause I want to? Why not do it in my way? I'm gonna write headcanons like this. With my ocs. With ideas that maybe someday I will write full story. But for now - why not take those few moments that I have urge to write to use it even on a a phone?

[dungdalawritter-blog]

Let’e taste my haiku poem.

[i-am-a-fan]

Things I learned my first year in American College ™ that maybe would be helpful for others?

Don’t skip meals, if you have to then buy a starchy snack to keep you from feeling funky until meal time

Take out is a god send

Buy frozen Veggies

WD -40 is a good investment ( Squeaky door frames to Wasp Killer)

Bring rain boots. It won’t hurt.

Be okay with bugs. If you have a phobia, make sure there’s a designated bug killer.

Know how to communicate your wants and needs

DONT. LEAVE. OUT. DISHES. WITH. FOOD.

Keep sandals on at all times if you’re on the first floor. (I had scorpions :,>)

Eggs are a good and easy source of protein!

you will get tired of eggs.

Go out. do stuff. Even if it’s just sitting in the library for a bit.

You’ll need more paper towels than you realize.

Take a water bottle with you. A 16 oz is really enough.

Have a routine. It’ll help keep you sane

I know everyone says this, but start your stuff early. Especially if you work. The bad part is that most of your peers will not be able to help you if you start early.

MAKE. FLASH. CARDS. Write down the information your professors give you like 3 times in different places.

Your professors and peers are mostly there to help you.

Little treats will mostly keep you sane but will drain your bank account

There’s a million ways to cook instant ramen packets. Don’t just follow the instructions.

IN FACT HERES MY FAVORITE RECIPE I MADE

Take the ramen packet that’s cooked on the stove (I usually used spicy lime shrimp.

Separate the noodles and the flavor packet.

Fill a medium pot with about 3-4 cups of water. (I measured out the water to be the same amount as could be held in the bowl I used). Turn on to medium heat.

Add the flavor packet to a pot of water.

Add a slice of butter (for creaminess).

Add half a spoonful of chili garlic sauce

add a spoonful and a half of soy sauce

add minced garlic (half a spoonful)

Add ginger paste ( a dollop)

Add chicken flavored Bouillon (a spoonful)

Mix it all together and let it boil.

Once boiling crack an egg and there and MIX. MIX!! You want the egg to cook fully in the boiling water.

Once the egg is cooked add in the noodles and let the noodles cook for like 3 minutes?

Once the noodles are starting to separate, add in your hearts content of frozen minced spinach.

Wait until spinach is no longer frozen and serve.

[raiha-storm65557]

I need this

Words to use instead of ‘said’

**Using the word ‘said’ is absolutely not a bad choice, and in fact, you will want to use it for at least 40% of all your dialogue tags. Using other words can be great, especially for description and showing emotion, but used in excess can take away or distract from the story.

Neutral: acknowledged, added, affirmed, agreed, announced, answered, appealed, articulated, attested, began, boasted, called, chimed in, claimed, clarified, commented, conceded, confided, confirmed, contended, continued, corrected, decided, declared, deflected, demurred, disclosed, disputed, emphasized, explained, expressed, finished, gloated, greeted, hinted, imitated, imparted, implied, informed, interjected, insinuated, insisted, instructed, lectured, maintained, mouthed, mused, noted, observed, offered, put forth, reassured, recited, remarked, repeated, requested, replied, revealed, shared, spoke up, stated, suggested, uttered, voiced, volunteered, vowed, went on

Persuasive: advised, appealed, asserted, assured, begged, cajoled, claimed, convinced, directed, encouraged, implored, insisted, pleaded, pressed, probed, prodded, prompted, stressed, suggested, urged

Continuously: babbled, chattered, jabbered, rambled, rattled on

Quietly: admitted, breathed, confessed, croaked, crooned, grumbled, hissed, mumbled, murmured, muttered, purred, sighed, whispered

Loudly: bellowed, blurted, boomed, cried, hollered, howled, piped, roared, screamed, screeched, shouted, shrieked, squawked, thundered, wailed, yelled, yelped

Happily/Lovingly: admired, beamed, cackled, cheered, chirped, comforted, consoled, cooed, empathized, flirted, gushed, hummed, invited, praised, proclaimed, professed, reassured, soothed, squealed, whooped

Humour: bantered, chuckled, giggled, guffawed, jested, joked, joshed

Sad: bawled, begged, bemoaned, blubbered, cried, grieved, lamented, mewled, mourned, pleaded, sniffled, sniveled, sobbed, wailed, wept, whimpered

Frustrated: argued, bickered, chastised, complained, exasperated, groaned, huffed, protested, whinged

Anger: accused, bristled, criticized, condemned, cursed, demanded, denounced, erupted, fumed, growled, lied, nagged, ordered, provoked, raged, ranted remonstrated, retorted, scoffed, scolded, scowled, seethed, shot, snapped, snarled, sneered, spat, stormed, swore, taunted, threatened, warned

Disgust: cringed, gagged, groused, griped, grunted, mocked, rasped, sniffed, snorted

Fear: cautioned, faltered, fretted, gasped, quaked, quavered, shuddered, stammered, stuttered, trembled, warned, whimpered, whined

Excited: beamed, cheered, cried out, crowed, exclaimed, gushed, rejoiced, sang, trumpeted

Surprised: blurted, exclaimed, gasped, marveled, sputtered, yelped

Provoked: bragged, dared, gibed, goaded, insulted, jeered, lied, mimicked, nagged, pestered, provoked, quipped, ribbed, ridiculed, sassed, teased

Uncertainty/Questionned: asked, challenged, coaxed, concluded, countered, debated, doubted, entreated, guessed, hesitated, hinted, implored, inquired, objected, persuaded, petitioned, pleaded, pondered, pressed, proposed, queried, questioned, quizzed, reasoned, reiterated, reported, requested, speculated, supposed, surmised, testified, theorized, verified, wondered

This is by no means a full list, but should be more than enough to get you started!

Any more words you favor? Add then in the comments!

Happy Writing :)

[shannyh25]

Hi Anne Family,

I know I post questions a lot on here. But, I’m interested in writting an Anne Of Green Gables Fan Fiction story about Jem and Faith. I haven’t written about them before and I’m willing to try and give it a go. I’m hoping people would like it and maybe leave a review on it. In the Anne Fan Fiction world, people seem to review a lot on the Blythe kids when they write Fan Fiction about them.

I’m thinking of maybe them both being in medical school? Or they are getting ready to go to medical school and it can be about their journey through school and the up’s and downs of it. Or finished up medical school and they have kids? I read a story on fan fiction today one of my friends wrote and it was about Jem and Faith and I really liked it.

I’m terrible at coming up with summary ideas because I feel like all the good ones are taken. If you guys have any ideas for a summary idea, I would love to hear them. I would give you credit if I can use it. Or point me in the right direction for a good strong summary that will get readers attention on fan fiction.

Thank you!!

[kittiecat300]

I'm writing a book series (1st Book done)!!

I need help getting it published..

Please help me out, idk what I'm doing!

[a34trgv2]

Writing Tips: How To Show, Not Tell

Have you ever done show and tell in elementary school? Well, in the world of storytelling, showing is more often than not more effective at getting an audience invested than telling. Not everyone seems to understand how important the term "show, don't tell" is. So, for this edition of Writing Tips, I'll go into detail about what it means to show instead of tell, as well as giving tips on how to do it effectively.

When people say "show, don't tell" when it comes to the story, what they mean is to paint a clear picture of what the characters would normally say. Oftentimes, in stories, characters will go on and on about things such as their backstory, how they got so smart/skilled, why they're in the setting and etc.. These long-winded speeches feel empty and superfluous because either they don't add anything to the story or they're just so boring to listen to. Be it showing a character's backstory in a flashback or having the character interact with long-time friends. You do a much better job at establishing the history of the character as well as getting audiences invested. Showing in a story also saves time that would've been spent on a scene that's just filler, such as a pointless cutaway gag or a boring conversation with the antagonist and their minions.

So how does one effectively show in a story instead of tell? Well, let's start by using Hansel and Gretel as an example.

"To kids get lost in the woods and are kidnapped by a witch. They throw the witch in the oven and run all the way home."

Yikes, that was bad 😬. First of all that's a really rushed summary of the story. Second of all, there's no mention of who these kids are, how they got lost or why the witch kidnapped them. Third, and most importantly, how would they know where home is if they were lost im the woods. Let's try again, but this time actually show instead of tell.

"Hansel and his sister Gretel were playing hide and seek just outside their house in the woods. When it was Hansel's turn to hide, he wandered deep into the forest to find a good hiding spot. Suddenly, he came across a clearing, and at the center of it was a large house made of gingerbread. Hansel walked toward the house to see that it was made entirely of candy. His mouth drooled at the glistening peppermint windows, the sparkling gumdrops on the walls, and the rich dark chocolate door. Unable to control himself, Hansel took a bite out of the door and chewed with joy.

Gretel looked all round for her brother before seeing the clearing. She walked towards it before gasping in shock as she saw a pale, boney hand gesture Hansel to come into the house. She picked up a large stick and ran towards the house. Gretel rammed her shoulder against the door and burst it open, leading her directly into the kitchen.

Gretel's face went pale as she gazed at the tall, pale and boney witch in a faded lavender dress and wearing a torn and dusty hat. The witch hisses at Gretel, bearing her razor sharp teeth and untrimmed nails at her. Gretel pointed her stick at the witch, only for the old hag to swat it away. The witch then twiddled her fingers at Gretel and levitated her up in the air.

Gretel looked around and saw Hansel sitting at the table with swirls in his eyes and drool coming out his mouth. Gretel clenched her fists and swung her left foot at the witch's hand. The witch screeched as she clutched her hand and, in turn, releasing Gretel. Gretel ran to her brother and slapped him across the face, snapping him out of his trace. Hansel looked around as he rubbed his head. Gretel then hugged him and grabbed him by the hand.

As they were about to run, the witch slammed her fist on the table and shrieked at them. Hansel looked at the lit oven and then back at Gretel. They both nodded before Hansel grabbed the stick and swung it at the witch. Gretel raced around the table and opened the oven. The witch took the stick from Hansel and snapped it in two before hissing at him. Gretel ran back to her brother and held his hand as they shoved the witch into the oven. Gretel slanmed it shut and Hansel placed a chair under the handle. The witch screamed and banged on the door as Hansel and Gretel ran for their lives out of the gingerbread house.

Gretel led Hansel through the woods as they tried finding their way home. After dashing through the trees, they found their house with their father stepping outside. They ran toward him and gave him a big hug with tears in their eyes. He smiled and hugged them back.

The End"

As you can see, an actual story was being told, how they got into witch's house was clearly explained and how they beat the with was given ample amout of detail. I also took the liberty of not adding dialogue to the story and instead let the actions of the characters speak for themselves. As such, my little rendition of Hansel and Gretel, while short, was far more engaging than the undercooked summary above it.

The best way to show, not tell, in a story is 3 simple words:👏Take👏your👏time. Rushing a story is never a good idea because you have no time to actually tell it. All stories should take as long as the writer needs in order to complete it. To conclude, whenever you're told "show, don't tell," don't waste yours or the audiences time with boring speeches from the characters. Show the audience who these characters are and what your story is about. Thank you so much for reading, and I'll see you soon ;)