#rewriting pokemadhouse

[sillygoblinantics]

Working on Bonnie’s day out and found a thing that I need to make clear:

Pokémon’s age isn’t the same as exp

For the people in the back

Pokémon age is not experience points!

Why do I say this?

Because in Lily’s madhouse, Lily canonically pairs an underaged (and victim of grooming) character with her “celery friend”

Marah is written like a child

Don’t worry this will be fixed in Bonnie’s Day Out!

Also

So far I’ve gotten three pages done of the first chapter; I haven’t figured out how many pages total it’ll be but know it’s worth sticking around for ;3

[sillygoblinantics]

Oh she’s said things about my rewrite without even reading it

Noticing how quickly Lily tries to tear down anything her critics like, I wonder how fast she’d drop her ocs if Ant, crim or Sai said they liked them.

[bonnies-day-outofficial]

Ok I think it’s time I make a proper pinned post here; let’s get started!

Welcome to the official blog for:

Bonnie’s Day Out!!

What is Bonnie’s day out?

BDO!! Is essentially the remaster/reimagining of Lily Orchard’s original pokemon series and webcomic: “PokéMadhouse”

However with research and insight to the work I aim to not only retell the story but address/point out Lily as a “character”

What will you be sharing here?

Mostly the rendered pages and concept art/process work I’ve put into this world

But I will be answering any of your questions if you might have some at all!

How long can we expect this rewrite to take?

So far I’ve planned outwards of fifteen chapters but there’s still more that’ll be added

I have all the points and arcs mapped out but everything that leads us there is something you’ll have to stick around to see! ;3

Why put so much work into this?

It gives me a chance to practice comic making as well as story and concept practice

It’s also because I’m a long time fan of Pokémon but a lover of storytelling as a whole

Thoughts on Fan art?

OHMYGOD YES!

If you decide to make fanart by all means do so! Make sure to tag/@ me in it so it can be seen! (And if you are ok with it, reblogged)

I don’t wanna have to add the but please keep it sfw at this point while the story is only now getting started!

Thank you guys so much for the support thus far! It means so much to have seen the reception from yall at this point! This has also been a way to try and give some closure to folks now learning more about Lily or getting away from her. Any criticism you may have can go a long way into the growth and improvement of this series and is appreciated!

So far this has been a one person project and golly I’ve been spent so far ^^’ I will be trying to get some help with future pages however but until then this’ll take some time!

And to Lily and her fans… this isn’t slander, this isn’t anything that is out of thin air or a hoax, because most of how Lily appears here has been the real deal who’s been presenting herself this way for over a decade now

If you want to call my version of Lily anything call it a caricature because that’s what it loosely is.

[zr-art-world]

I found you through the lorch art and I wanted to tell you that you are a big inspiration to my silly rewrite of pokemadhouse called “Bonnie’s day out!”

I love your work!!!! Aaaaaa

Thank you!!!!!!

[critical-espurr]

Hey what are your thoughts on my rewriting of Lily orchard’s pokemadhouse?

I currently have no opinion of your rewrite specifically, but I do enjoy seeing rewrites of Madhouse in general! I think there's a lot of potential with the premise, I simply don't like what Lily did with it.

[sillygoblinantics]

*very far away and distant*

Thank youuuuuuuu!!!

(Also the gardevoir is my take on corazon!)

Hey weird question but do Big Mac, Cadance and Honey have Pokemon teams?

No question is unwelcome in this house! Well, some are but this is a nice one! And yeah! I had this laying around!

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Cadence (Main Type: Fairy / Other Types: Grass, Psychic, Ghost, Normal) - Owner of the Crystal Hearts Pokémon Sanctuary and Contest Champion:

- Gardevoir (Shiny) - Nickname: Corazon ♀ - Co-Manager of the Crystal Hearts Pokémon Sanctuary and Main Partner Pokemon

- Aromatisse - Nickname: Amoré ♀ - Head Nursery Pokemon at the Crystal Hearts Pokémon Sanctuary

- Sylveon - Nickname: Esperanza ♀ - Therapy Pokémon / Service Pokémon Advisor at the Crystal Hearts Pokémon Sanctuary

- Mismagius - Nickname: Dulcamara ♀ - Main Fighter for Cadence’s Team / Medicinal Pokémon at the Crystal Hearts Pokémon Sanctuary

- Lurantis - Nickname: Prismia ♀ - Gardener at the Crystal Hearts Pokémon Sanctuary / Farmer at Sweet Applin Acres.

- Audino - Nickname: Latido ♂- Co-Manager of the Crystal Hearts Pokémon Sanctuary

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Big Macintosh Pokémon (Main Type: Grass / Other Types: Fairy, Ground and Dragon) - Elite Four Member and Co-Farmer at Sweet Applin Acres:

- Torterra - Nickname: Crispin ♂

- Gogoat - Nickname: Concord ♂

- Mudsdale - Nickname: Sundance ♂- (Current) Main Partner Pokemon

- Flapple - Nickname: Lil’ Mac ♂

- Whimsicott - Nickname: Pippin ♀

- Trevanant - Nickname: Anjou ♀

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Honeycrisp Pokémon (Main Type: Grass/Fairy / Other Types: Bug, Flying, Psychic, Dark, Fire and Ghost) Lil’ Helper at the Crystal Hearts Pokémon Sanctuary and Sweet Applin Acres on her First Pokémon Journey:

- Bellossom - Nickname: Peaches ♀ - Main Partner Pokémon raised side-by-side with Honey as her first Pokémon when the baby Oddish climbed into her playpen and Honey was given a Sun Stone as a journey present which evolved Peaches into a Bellossom.

- Appletun - Nickname: Cider ♂- Formerly the Partner Pokemon of Big Mac now travels with Honey to keep her safe.

- Petilil - Nickname: Marigold ♀

- Combee - Nickname: ♀

- Houndoom - Nickname: Red Rover ♂- Found fully evolved and is very vicious to most and yet to the little girl who showed him kindness he is gentle and fiercely protective. Has learned to get along with her little team - Honey doesn’t use him for fights mostly cause she wants him to feel cozy and happy and also it would be unfair to use him in her age group but he will fight if she needs to defend herself against wild Pokémon above her level.

- Milcery - Nickname: Vanilla ♀

[brunossan]

Reading through what others are saying about Pokémadhouse stuff as someone who knows way too much about all aspects of the pokemon world is such a painful experience. The Syir stuff is especially frustrating because not only is C!Lily giving an abuse victim Back to Their Abuser, but I don't buy the fact that a Gardevoir would be too powerful to stop. I know it's her fav and all, but she glazes up their strength to an absurd degree. When I first read that, off the top of my head I thought of several ways to take down Syir. Like using Destiny Bond or a pokemon that would resist their moves like a Mawile or Metagross. Plus those two I listed could mega evolve so they could counter Syir if they somehow mega-evolved.

I don't know any specific excuse Lily said other than "Syir's too strong" but I guarantee that there's a counter. Her ability is Trace? Send in a slaking. She puts up barriers? Get a pokemon with Infiltrator. She somehow out speeds and instantly one-shots all pokemon regardless of stats? Focus stash. Also I know gen 9 wasn't out, but a full team involving a Tinkaton and Kingambit would absolutely crush Syir, unless you know Lily keeps giving her plot armor, all to justify giving an Abuse Victim Back To Her Abuser.

And you know that if any show she hated pulled this storyline off, the exact same way, just w/ different characters, she'd be slamming it about "coddling abusers" and similar language.

Sorry for ranting, it's just something that's bothered me for a while after reading that. And if anyone doesn't know anything about Pokemon this is probably incomprehensible😅. What was even the point of the Syir stuff anyway? Like why'd she make such an OP Super Strong Gardevoir that no one can defeat? I know it's to show "G if she gave in" but like, ok, but that doesn't explain why she's so OP?

Its fine to rant, i feel the same way

If i am not wrong, there's something about Syir not following the normal pokemon rules, like instead of focusing her attack on the pokemon she would straight up attack the trainer. There's also the fact that in Pokemadhouse Gardevoirs have these "Original Attacks that were stolen from Warcraft". For example, Syir attack is called Psycho Blast, which was also on the wiki of Pokemadhouse, that was literally a Nuke Attack full of Psych Power. And Lily dont know how to keep the history linear, because the abilities of Syir changed between Trace, Synchronize or Pixilate, wich would frustrate even more those who wanted to stop her.

Syir is one of the worst characters i have ever found on a webcomic lore, and im still grateful for Lily decanonizing her in a possible rewrite.

But i would still trust in both Scizor, Sableye, Hypno and Slaking taking her

A fight like that would be awesome ngl

[opinated-user]

Hey, in your opinon. If someone were to want to rewrite pokemadhouse. Where would be a good place to start? Cause up until the megastone are, it's just a self indulgent ask account for lily's self insert trainer. It dosnt have an actual story at all in the beginning

you could do that if you manage to tone down how abusive and possesive G has always been, but if that is the idea, imo i guess it would be easier to just make your own story about a trainer living with her pokemon and having slice of life adventures?

they can be the same pokemon if you want, LO doesn't own any of them anyway.

[locrit-returns]

Pokemadhouse is a kind of mundane concept and I see no good reason to try and rewrite that. Just make a comic with your selfinsert and your fav pokemon having a good time without attaching it to LO in any way.

I see what you mean. Personally the exploration of trauma and abuse has always been interesting to me. I think her execution was piss poor, and of course it's a thinly veild justification for thinking gardevior is hot, but it's not entirely uninteresting to me.

HOWEVER, you're absolutely right. I should put energy into a project that will actually make me happy and not something made from half-assed spite. Especially if it's tied to Lorch.

[bonnies-day-outofficial]

Casually scrolling and

I sent an ask a while back where Lily denies Bonnie being based off of the og amelia bedeliah books

But seeing this adds more

i only now noticed this double checking to see if lily’s ever mentioned autism with regard to bonnie before, and um.

is anyone else uncomfortable with this very small child character being drawn in this outfit? choker, see through fishnet shawl, spaghetti strap tube top and skirt?? with knee socks and boots? does lily not … understand the connotations of that kind of outfit? because it’s pretty unfortunate looking on a kid.

especially when it’s the girl of color in the couple, it’s a bit. hm. not loving it.

[sillygoblinantics]

Bonnie’s Day Out!!

1st Official open collab!

What’s it for?:

Bonnie needs some books for her persona library! She’s still learning to read so something that’s age appropriate and not complicated! Trust me: she’s had to be read Lily’s work for a long while so she needs a break from it!

There’s no competition, no top posts, this is just good wholesome silly fun and a bit of experimentation for anyone wanting to try something new with their art! As this is a collab there are some guidelines.

Rules:

1. Nothing graphic (smut, gore, if it can’t be found in the kids section of Barnes and noble than it isn’t good)

2. Age appropriate reading material: what are books you would read as a kid or were read to you before bed?

3. Can’t just drop names

the idea is to redraw or remake existing books that youd recommend to 4 year old Bonnie!

I strongly encourage you to try and mimic or recreate the covers and characters from these stories as…well… Pokémon! (Photobashing, traditional or digital art, have fun with it!)

4. You can make as many submissions as you want but don’t try to push yourself with cranking out

5. No deadline!

(Cause I know it’ll take me a while to get to the chapter)

6. Have fun!

To join the collab use the tags below:

#book suggestions for Bonnie

#Books for Bonnie!

#Bonnie Orchard’s Library Donation

Thank you guys for showing so much support for this silly project of mine it means so much and I want to share the fun and invite yall to join in with this lil collab!

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Bonnie’s Day Out!!

Chapter 1

Pg. 31–40

PREVIOUS

[sillygoblinantics]

Bonnie’s Day Out!

Ch. 1 — pg. 11 - 20

Tw: disturbing content

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Transcript:

Troubled breathing

Pokéball jerks about

“Touch my trainer…”

“… again you blithering moon…”

“… CALF AND I’LL—!”

“That’s enough G~”

Brid wheezes

“See Bonnie? You have to keep an eye out…”

“You never know when danger is around the corner. Now then, why don’t we help them downstairs?”

“Ugh what- what happen?-”

“YOU ALMOST STRANGLED MY FUCKING TRAINER!”

“I- what?! Are they ok?! I- I didn’t- wait!”

Hmph! “For now she’s ok.”

“Please believe me I have no memory of doing that I don’t… I… i-”

Shhhhhhhhheehehe

Oki I finished these before I head to bed so hope you enjoy!

[sillygoblinantics]

Bonnie’s Day Out!

Ch. 1 — pg. 1-10

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Transcript:

“And this is where everyone sleeps and blahblahBlahblahblahblah”

More narcissistic rambling and not subtle at all innuendos that really shouldn’t be made in the presence of children

Startled pidove cooing and fluttering

‘Huh? There’s that weird energy again…’

More rambles

“Say, you wouldn’t happen to have a ghastly or haunter would you?”

“Gassy and hot-wha?”

“Why would I own such a vile and annoying polter-pest?”

“Well, what about any other ghost type?”

“OH! I know!”

“Mommy has 2 spooky hokey-pokey-mans!”

“Oh? Which ones?”

“Mhm! There’s Maggie-Sus and Sassafras-Lass!”

“Ah! That explains the icy eyes I feel on me then?”

very bitter and peeved“No… that’s just my gardevoir, G.”

“G?”

“That’s mean mommy!”

“Mom?”

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We’re back! Just as promised the first ten pages! Let’s goooooo! Who’s excited?

[sillygoblinantics]

Results are in!

Hehehe

Been working on some art of her today

I can’t wait for the

˚⁎⁺˳✧༚ Grand Reveal!~˚⁎⁺˳✧༚

[sillygoblinantics]

Bonnie’s Day Out!!

Ch. 1 pg. 21 — 31

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Friendly reminder that I’m gonna return to these on a later date to ink and color but I want to still share the proof of concept and thought process going into the entire piece!

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Transcript:

“What? Is something wrong?”

G snaps out of her trance

“No! No! It’s nothing I-”

“Awwww come now, G. That’s no way to introduce me〜♡!”

“Didn’t Lily teach you proper etiquette?” Kekekeke

“A Mismagius!”

“Guilty〜♡!”

“I knew I smelled something rotten upstairs!”

“Oohoohoohoo! Such a spicy mouth you have!~”

“What do you want magi?”

“Whaaaat!! can’t I meet our new friends too?”

“No magi, you-”

“But you ALWAYS get ALL the ATTENTION!” A boohoohooo!~

“And We both know how Lily is with sharing time, right? Besides! You’ve already made your first impression today! It’s MY turn with the guests~”

“S-st-stop it magi”

“Stop what?”

“Just stop it! L-leave us al-”

“I’m not doing anything~”

“Yes you-”

“Careful G, you don’t want to get locked in your ball again do you?”

“Leave! G-go away magi… just go awa-”

“Oooh G so fra- a-AH! AAAHHHHHOOOOW!”

“What just?-”

Felicity growls

“YOU RETCHED MONGREL! I’LL-”

“MAGIIIII!” Mikayla calls from the other room

Angered by the interruption from a measly little pawn

“You’re lucky this time, but it Won’t Save you nex-”

“MAGGI!”

*grumbling*

“It was nice to meet you too MisRagius!”

*ghostly grumbling and mumbling cut off be phasing through material*

“Talk about perfect timing huh? Now then! What did you say your name was?”

“M-my name?”

“Wait weren’t you just snapping at me a couple of minutes ago?”

“Yes.”

“So why are you suddenly so…”

“Nice?”

“Y-yeah..”

“Well, it’s simple: my anger was directed at the wrong Pokémon.”

“But… how can you even trust me after I-”

“Magi hurt my trainer. You weren’t even there. Physically you were, but mentally and spiritually: you weren’t.”

“Not to mention your scent changed, so I trust you.”

“You… trust me?”

“Of course I do!”

… g waits a moment “and you asked my name yes?”

“Mhm!”

“Can I have yours first?”※

“No. But you may call me, Felicity.”

“Thank you, Felicity.”

“May I have you name so I know how to address you by?”

“Oh of course! I’m experiment G.”

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※ author’s note:

Fairy type Pokémon are the same as the Fey or Faeries from mythology, and like the Fey, if you give them your name, they will not just know it, but own you and your soul. (not destiny bond or whatever fetish crap Lily wrote for the original madhouse! This is cursed, hexes and plague type faerie magic!) even Pokémon know this and teach their offspring the dangers and how to protect yourself from their tricks.

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