#svtfoe rewrite

[darkmasterofcupcakes]

So for a SVTFOE rewrite, I was thinking of a few things.

For starters, I was thinking that Tom and Janna should be added to the main cast immediately in the first season. Turn the duo into a quartet that season four tried to portray.

Star is sent to Earth to safely practice her magic, and ends up staying with Marco's family like in canon because he's the most responsible student in Echo Creek so he'll keep her out of trouble.

Tom is still Star's ex-boyfriend, but the difference in this rewrite is he follows her to Earth to win her back and becomes an exchange student too. He requests being placed with someone in Marco's social circle so he can reasonably hang around Star, and gets placed with Janna.

The thing with the four of them is that they're all kind of friendless. Star and Tom are royalty in their own kingdoms, alienating them from making friends in addition to their own personality flaws like Star being way too energetic and Tom having a bad temper. Marco is too cautious and often spoils teenage fun as a result. Janna, being Janna, is too weird to hang out with.

So, as a result of the connection between Star and Tom, the four are forced to interact and eventually become friends. Instead of focusing on Star and Marco each episode, you have occasional team-ups of Star and Marco, Star and Janna, Marco and Janna, Marco and Tom, and Tom and Janna.

Tom keeps trying to win Star back, but eventually learns to be friends with her first. Tom also learns to see Marco and Janna as friends too instead of bystanders involved in his Star pursuit. Marco learns to set boundaries with Janna, and she learns to respect them.

That all sounds really interesting, especially the idea of Tom and Janna being major characters each episode and the idea of different episodes switching up which pair of characters are the focus.

I also feel like in this version of events, if Tom and Star did get back together, at least briefly, it would feel like it'd make a lot more sense than in canon, because they'd actually have developed a friendship first.

[sagesilentfire]

I've been drawing a lot lately, which also includes drawing shitposts. expect more. expect so many.

these are various toffees from across the multiverse... just toffees doing toffee things (like overthrowing the monarchy).

left to right: @dappercritter and @full-moon-phoenix 's toffee, a mix of @lil-oreo-cookie 's young and current toffee designs, my toffee (they're nonbinary), and @the-king-of-snakeskin/@ultra-creepy-fucker-things 's toffee

[aviaryartist1800]

Soo uh...

A ref for my version of Star Butterfly!

Its basically an AU/Rewrite

She honestly deserved to have better writing

(Also, she is still part of the Butterfly family, she didn't descend from a peasant girl)

[dappercritter]

(Never too late for a) SVTFOE Hot Take

I actually think you could have vastly improved the narrative if this guy was Eclipsa's monster husband instead of Globgor.

EDIT (23/08/23): I probably should have put this upfront but if Toffee was Eclipsa's monster-man instead, let me be absolutely clear that

I WOULD HAVE USED THIS AS AN EXCUSE TO GIVE TOFFEE A SYMPATHETIC BACKSTORY AND REDEMPTION ARC INSTEAD OF BEING JUST PLAIN EVIL LIKE A LAZY WRITER.

[noperopesaredope]

Currently getting back into my Rhombulus Rewrite a bit, and oh god has it spread beyond just rewriting Rhombulus. Yes, I did make an ending to his story that fits with canon, but I also wanted to make a version of the finale that brings a legitimately satisfying end to his story. Part of the point of the rewrite was making him a more fleshed out character and even a major one, but without replacing Star as the protagonist. And it's hard to write an interesting ending to the character when the rest of canon is still shit.

Then I thought of an interesting idea that would result in tying Mina and Rhombulus together in a way, as well as connecting to one of the major themes of the show (and the rewrite). This caused me to add some changes to Mina during my rewrite.

Then things got a bit out of hand and it lowkey became the Rhombulus (and Mina) Rewrite. Then I realized that I couldn't rewrite Mina without rewriting some of the main plot for Season 4. Then I finally decided "fuck it, let's just rewrite the majority of the finale and much of the plot of Season 4. We'll keep some of the stuff we already changed and the episodes we still kept, but the whole Mina subplot will need to be completely reconstructed from the ground up."

Next thing I know, I'm writing out multiple scenes that have nothing to do with Rhombulus and I'm crying over Mina's new death scene.

God I am so excited to release my next proper Rhombulus Rewrite post.

[fluffykitty149]

Okay need a little extra help figuring out what to do for my SVTFOE rewrite so another poll!

If anyone needs more info to decide let me know!

[dappercritter]

@full-moon-phoenix Brings back memories don't it?

[sagesilentfire]

corrupted!Star!

oh how the turntables

[technicallydelightfulpenguin]

Do you guys want me to rewrite Star vs The Forces of Evil?

[fluffykitty149]

Gonna keep this for reasons

ok in the spirit of halloween and me hating disney im gonna shit on the terrible mex rep that is marco diaz but because i love my followers im puttin it under a readmore BUT ALSO IM TALKIN ABOUT THIS OUTFIT HOW COULD U EXPECT ME TO NOT HATE THIS OUTFIT

ITS VERY GARBAGE and under the cut ill get into it

Keep reading

[dappercritter]

Hey about that SVTFOE Rewrite...

I know it's been a fairly long time since I finally threw in the towel on that old thing, but me and @full-moon-phoenix were discussing that whole thing where making Eclipsa and Toffee a thing would have solved a whole lot of problems with the story.

...and that actually gave us enough inspiration to start thinking about trying again with the rewrite.

It has everything.

A chance to give the two most lore important yet underwritten characters in the show an excuse to stay in the foreground that gives them both more to work with!

More opportunities for a stronger conflict that ties together the plot lines about Mewni, the monsters, the queens, and the magic!

Ship drama that actually matters to the narrative!

So just out of curiosity...

[noperopesaredope]

SvtFoE Rhombulus Rewrite (Pt. 6)

Hey, it’s been a while since you saw my face-

All jokes aside, sorry for being gone for so long. In my defense, I was in college, then I had seasonal depression which made it hard to do much of anything creative-wise. This is admittedly one of my favorite fan projects, so I always feel bad about not updating it. But I have managed to get back into it again (finally) and wanted to release one of the easier parts to do. (@bawfulio @sagesilentfire​ tagging you since you guys have been following this AU since the beginning and have been waiting the longest for an update)

Anyways, Monsters and Mewmans, Crystals and Chimeras, welcome back to my Rhombulus Rewrite! Check out this post if you have no clue what the heck I’m talking about or you want to read the previous parts. As I said in Part 4, this part will be one of the two possible ends I have to this AU. Ya’ll can choose which one you prefer. This one is called the “Closest to Canon Ending” and is also sad. It will not focus on the problems with the ending as a whole and shall instead be more about fixing Rhombulus’ part. I’ll admit, though I prefer the second ending as a finale, I’m pretty proud of this one as well, as it has some stuff I’m pretty proud of writing wise. I did make myself sad though, so there’s that.

Closest to Canon Ending (AKA Ending 1):

- This ending is kinda if I switched Rhombulus and Hekapoo’s parts, but Rhombulus had a more proper and fitting redemption. Also, it might make some character choices make more sense.

- So, the first big changes happen in “Ready, Aim, Fire”. We overhear Rhombulus arguing with Hekapoo and Omni about how to handle the Mina situation, saying that even though they may not like it, they need to protect Eclipsa and her family since it’s the right thing to do and they can’t let Mina take over. 

- This is when Hekapoo reveals that they have been backing Mina the whole time, which horrifies Rhombulus. He says that he is disappointed in them, and will go out to support Eclipsa and co, even if he has to fight Hekapoo and Omni. He then runs outside.

- We don’t see what happened to Rhombulus until “The Right Way,” where he jumps into the battle as things are looking dire. We get some pretty cool action stuff from him, which should be fun. 

- He even helps out various monsters, using his crystals to protect them. It brings his arc full circle, showing him go from someone who fights monsters to someone who protects them like he would protect any other innocent civilian. It’s a good moment for him. 

- But unfortunately, Rhombulus gets seriously hurt by the Solarian Blade multiple times, and since he and the rest of the MHC are basically monsters, the blades actually work on them. I think it’ll be the most shocking (and plot convenient) if Rhombulus loses his tails, as they are his main weapons and method of self defense. 

- He’ll manage to play it off like he is fine, but will need help soon. Maybe he’ll convince them that he probably won’t die. He might not even realize the blades work so well on him, especially since his magic is making him more asymptomatic. He’s good at hiding how bad he is doing, mainly because he is still able to walk and run and other stuff. But he can’t fight and needs to sit down a lot, so he won’t be able to do much during the Moon reveal.

- Instead of that horrible first kiss scene between Star and Marco, I have decided to give them a platonic love scene in a way, since I want the ending to not seem too random but still keep things platonic.

- Star is clearly upset and overwhelmed by everything, even though she might not be able to express it properly. She eventually tensely says that she’s going to do [insert helpful yet distracting task], and Marco offers to help her. She agrees, and while they’re working, Marco says that he knows something is bothering her, and she can talk about it if she wants.

- Star confesses that she’s been feeling extremely alone and scared lately. Multiple of her friends are severely hurt and could easily die, and she can’t do anything about it. She fought so hard and is trying to stay strong, and even despite all that, she feels like she’s failed at keeping people safe.

- Marco says that she is the reason less people have been hurt, and that everyone chose to fight and stand up against Mina, knowing the risk they would be in. It’s not her fault this happened. He then assures her that no matter what, they will always be best friends, and he’ll be there for her no matter what. 

- Pretend we’ve also had a lot more great friendship moments between them this season, so that the show clearly shows their dynamic as important to the plot.

- Anyways, back to everything else. This rewrite is called the Rhombulus Rewrite after all.

- “Pizza Party” will be renamed “Where the Blame Lies,” and instead of the MHC having a pizza party, we will see Hekapoo and Omni arguing over whether or not they made the right choice, and if they should go after Rhombulus. It’s a very short, tense scene, where Hekapoo believes that Rhombulus is wrong, but they should still go look for him to talk, and Omni believes that Rhombulus is “too far gone.” 

- They decide to split up, with Hekapoo choosing to go after Rhombulus, and Omni choosing to do his own thing.

- Meanwhile, Rhombulus ends up fleeing with Star and co, pretending that he is fine, until he ends up collapsing while they are running. Mina declares Rhombulus a traitor, and attacks him, causing yet another major blow to his body, where many of the other scars have already spread far. 

- As Eclipsa and Marco help him up and try to support him, Mina declares her plan to wipe out all monsters and monster-supporters. The group tries to escape, but are soon surrounded. Mina goes in for the kill, but a portal opens up under Star, Marco, Eclipsa, Moon, and Rhombulus, whisking them away. They find themselves in the middle of a forest, saved by Hekapoo.

- This is where “Tavern at the End of the Multiverse” starts. Hekapoo is horrified at Rhombulus’ condition, and after picking him up, she says that she knows a place where all of them can hide. And so she takes them to the Tavern at the End of the Multiverse. This space is also a bit of a safe zone for all different types of people, and has some private rooms if needed. 

- Hekapoo takes Rhombulus into one of them to see if she can help him somehow. Star argues with Moon, but they are interrupted by Hekapoo, who says that she needs them to come over to where Rhombulus is. He’s in terrible condition, with the wounds having fully spread all over him. 

- It’s a really sad scene, especially when he begins telling Hekapoo that he can see Lekmet, and they are going to be reunited soon. Hekapoo is extremely distraught and basically in denial, while Rhombulus is basically accepting what is happening. 

- He tells Hekapoo not to worry too much about it, and that their time is close to ending anyways, he just wishes he could have seen everyone win. He tells Star to do better than those who came before her, and that she will be able to fix the world. Then, my boy dies.

- While I still don’t like the whole “destroy all magic” plotline, I thought that something like this would be cool in helping explain the rationale for a few characters. In Star’s case, this is a bit of a breaking point for her. This is where she begins to have her “I hate magic” moment, because she just lost a close friend due to the damage magic can cause when in the wrong hands. 

- And Hekapoo being chill with Star destroying magic makes a lot more sense. She too just lost someone important to her, basically her favorite sibling, and is in a more apathetic state. Hekapoo is mad and sees that the MHC has fallen down a bad path that has slowly destroyed them. Her attitude is less chill and carefree and more angry and resentful.

For Ending 1, I don’t really have any other changes, because all I really wanted to do for this ending is the scene where Rhombulus dies, so that’s the end of that. I think Ending 2 will be a much better ending as a whole, but I thought of Ending 1 first, and kind of liked aspects of it. It’s very bittersweet, and I wanted to make a version that stays faithful to the OG. 

However, the OG is also terrible, so I decided to make another version anyways, especially since I wanted a version where Rhombulus can live. Stay tuned for Ending 2, which will hopefully be coming soon! Or at least, a special post before that giving extra context for Ending 2 (spoilers, I reworked Mina a bit).

Thanks for all your support, and I hope you like what I have in store, since I’ve been working on Ending 2 for a while now. Hopefully this will keep you company in the meantime.

[sagesilentfire]

AHAHAHA I CAST CURSE OF LONG POST!

It's Shinjai! Septarian, freedom fighter, and independent warrior peasant extraordinaire. She was Star's friend for a while, until she decided her life as the Monster Best Friend sucked and she should start biting people.

Alice! Shinjai's bff (or... something else ;)). Also a monster freedom fighter. She exists to be Cooler Than Star, but don't let her narrative role fool you. She's still a teenager, with all that that brings. She also hates Star, but pretending to be a Star superfan stopped her and her underground teenage militia from getting blasted in the face by a still-uncorrupted wand.

BUT WAIT!

Those two are not OCs! They're based on background characters in svtfoe!

Well, worry not. I have a lot of OCs who aren't background characters. How about a ton of ghosts (and Sílthéy):

There's the Toffee fam: Necahua, their sibling, Chia, their badass diplomat mother, Tecoloa, their kind schoolteacher mother, and finally Cayeto, their dad. When I designed Necahua, I didn't really think about their parents, so Necahua and Toffee look very similar, more like direct siblings instead of the technical half-siblings they are. So I made them both look more like Cayeto, while accentuating the few differences they have in creating the designs of Chia and Tecoloa. Tecoloa herself looks very scary, being very tall and possessing quite a few spikes, but she's very kind and gentle. The short, spikeless Chia is the one you want to watch out for, she will stab you and feel no remorse. Neither Toffee nor Necahua inherited Cayeto's saber-teeth, which is probably for the best.

Then there's Sílthéy, who isn't not a monster, but she's not *just* a monster. But she's been my OC since before svtfoe started airing, this is just her septarian form. (she can look like any monster, she just is part of Toffee's family too, even if she'll never admit it.)

Last of this batch is Mocel, Miquiz, and Tecolo. BUT WAIT! Miquiz is technically not an OC either! He's the septarian Eclipsa tested the darkest spell on! He's also a teenager. 14. Eesh. Fun fact: his name means Seabird. Mocel takes care of him, and acts as the Underworld's spy while she does it, since Mocel's ash remains are much better at sneaking around than Miquiz's corpse. Mocel didn't have to be a septarian, and honestly if I were to go back I'd make her a different species, but she's cool either way.

Tecolo's a friend of Ludo's, and also Toffee, which is a conflict of interest. But he is neat. The reason people keep saying his name is unfortunate/weird is because it sounds a lot like te'colo, which means "the hated" but is more often translated as "asshole (gender neutral)" His name is actually Teco'lo, or Owl. It's also bad because his parents were not very creative.

Tecoloa's name is not seen as unfortunate, just like in English "hit" is not a swear word despite being part of "shit".

Shout out to Shinjai's parents <3 they're not part of s5 because their combined coolness would explode the series.

also their potions. their potions would explode everything. they've become potion-makers while we weren't looking at them. Tiana is left, Kepler is right.

There's a lot more minor character monster OCs I've got, but I want to add one whose story we're about to reveal: Cíaxoch, Toffee's daughter. Here's a quick sketch:

Cíaxoch is... hmm. For now you can know that she's dead, she is not a ghost, and she was an architect. Both Toffee and Rasticore miss her deeply. She's kind of an everyman character, but a very Septarsis everyman, so very weird to us humans. I can't wait for you guys to meet her.

Star Vs. fans, reblog this with your monster OCs.

[fluffykitty149]

A Princess and a Squire.

[helenadurazzo]

I have done some HP rewrites in the past and want to expand a bit into some of my other interests that I believe could have been better

[loudlyhappycupcake]

Rewrite the stars @shironezuninja @magical-girl-techno-genius @kuskicanlove @cartoonfan21 @fatrnai @dumb-ass-biatch @adriennsposts @wordgirl-reboot-eva @torkmadox20 @wisefestivalloverpatrol @misterygem