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((@someflareoutwithlove continued from here doing a little time skip cause I wasn't sure what else to add to that!))
By the time he and Damien had made it back to the apartment, Jonas wanted a drink so bad he couldn't stand it. He knew it was his nerves grinding at him and even though he was so determined to get through what was probably going to be a deeply uncomfortable conversation...God he wished he wasn't doing this sober.
He gave Damien some time to get himself situated and then asked in a timid voice, " Damien you uhm....you mind me having one of your cigarettes? " He had to talk about things sober but he could indulge in at least one vice right?
" Also uh. Have you always smoked? " he asked. He absolutely couldn't fucking remember having seen Damien smoke before and quite frankly that made him feel all the worse. Because either Damien smoked all the time and his shit memory hadn't held onto it or he'd quit and started again because of stress that Jonas had caused him.
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nbc hannibal au where everything is the same except hannibal has a tumblr blog called i-cook-and-eat-rude-people and nobody questions or reports it because they think its just another gimmick blog
#he doesnt post pictures of him eating people or anything#people just send him ārpā asks about cannibalism#and he answers completely accurately#and then the account goes offline for 3 years right as hannibal is arrested#and that starts a bunch of wild speculation about āomg did the chesapeake ripper have a tumblr blog or is this part of the gimmick???ā#eventually hannibal makes one final post like āhey guys srry i was gone so long i got arrsted for eating all those people. i am currently#fleeing the country with my boyfriend. expect to never hear from me againā#and then it just becomes common knowledge that the chesapeake ripper was a tumblrina#its added to the pantheon of messed up crap that has gone on in this site#nbc hannibal#hannibal lecter#nbc hannigram#hannibal#termite talks
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In reference to the last ask you posted! Do you mind going over your tips on role-playing as that active-type character and/or digging up the thread of conversation it seems the original asker was referring to? I'm so interested in your experience role-playing for both prep in possibly joining a game someday and also bc it sounds like such good character creation and general writing advice!!!! I tried checking you blog but didnt turn up anything that touched pn it more (No worries if not though!)
Sorry for this late response!
My advice is make characters that create opportunities for story.
Reacting to a story is fun! Reacting to a character is fun! But if you're always reacting then you're creating opportunity for other characters to react, so sometimes you gotta Act to let the other characters and the story React.
To do this, characters should all want something. And not something vague (like "to be happy"), it should be something more tangible, more specific, and everything else can stem from there. It'll guide your character naturally. It's their Motivation.
More under the cut (or skip to the end for more standard advice)
For example, my dnd character Dandelion wanted more than anything to go home. "Going home" meant a lot of things, yeah it means being happy, it means he wants to be with his family, it means he wants to be loved, it means he wants to feel safe, it means he wants to belong somewhere, but the tangible idea is "go home."
Because I knew this is what he wanted most of all it guided all his actions, and his actions for better or for worse all made sense because of it (and I made it clear that was what he wanted "on-screen" on multiple occasions). So anything that involved the idea of getting home would activate him, and he'd also deeply empathize with anyone and anything else away from home/away from family. Giving him one strong, clear motivation instantly made him an active participant in the story. This made him active with other characters too, any mention of home, any mention of family, any idea of not belonging, it drew him toward them.
(as a DM now this is also what I need more than anything, what's your hook? how can I tempt you? how can I make your character move forward? how can I make your character react? also characters that create opportunity for story take a LOT of work off the DM's shoulders in my experience, it shows you're engaged and it feels less like dragging a cat around on a leash haha like "are you enjoying this? do you want this? i don't know! please give me something!")
my more standard advice?
Be a good listener
Be present (in the moment)
Be curious
Be the biggest fan of all the characters
Put your story on-screen frequently, give people the opportunity to react to it and join in on it (this can be as simple as "my character's body language changes at the mention of 'home')
Create opportunities for the other characters to have their story on-screen (ask them questions! if you know what the character's buttons are and it makes sense in the moment, press them! listen to what they're saying, pay attention to what they're doing, and react to it)
Interact with the world! Interact with each other! And make these things mean something to your character!
Your character should make mistakes. Mistakes create opportunity for everyone.
If there's a genre, or theme, play toward them earnestly.
The more you RP, the better you'll get at it! It's a process and that's okay!
my little tip for knowing whether your character is Active vs Reactive: if the story were a musical, do they have an I Want song? do they have multiple moments for songs within the narrative? have they shared a duet with another character? do their songs change, evolve? songs happen for important moments in a musical so if you're not contributing to important moments, it may mean you're reacting more than you're acting. which is fine if you're playing a game solo and are granted access to the narrative by virtue of being the designated main character, but because RPing is collaborative storytelling, everyone should be doing their part!
#ask biji#text post#long sorry but i like talking about rping#it takes lots of practice to play actively and feel OKAY playing actively most of all#also sometimes it takes adjusting in the moment#sometimes i make a character one way but i can sense a narrative gap within the cast that needs filling to āget conversation goingā#so if i can i will try to nudge my character in the direction that's needed#not sure if any of this makes sense but here we are#rp#real talk if i am running an rp i will lose all will if it doesn't feel like the characters are individually motivated#actually i will lose interest in rping with characters that have no motivation#it makes them interesting!#and both predictable AND unpredictable in a fun way#create momentum!
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also once this whole acid reflux thing calms down I will be going to my sisters house for reals this time to slenderposting will still slow. Hopefully I don't end up in the ER again š collect my hospital visits
#((slendermod talking))#((Sorry if this is weird oversharing for a slenderman rp blog but I feel bad when I go a long time out of character šš))
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Looking for Roleplayers įÆ āŗā ā± .į
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Hello hello, nameās Dead (19, she/her) and Iām looking to get back into roleplaying and find some new rp partners interested in building plots and creating character dynamics and development! Itās been some time since Iāve gotten in to doing some lengthy or rping with plots and I may be a little rusty so please bear with me :)) With this in mind hereās some other things you need to know about meā
Status: Closed
My writing switches between semi-literate to literate depending how motivated I am to write with or go along with the plotting, I usually try to write one thick chunk or maybe two paragraphs to avoid writing any one-liners. I will also try my best to mirror my writing to my partners.
I have a life outside of tumblr and discord, so please bear with me with my slow responses! With this in mind, Iām more active between Mondays and Fridays as well as weekends as I work Tuesdays to Thursdays. Not to mention timezones are also funky. You may @ me after 4-5 days if I happen to forget about the rp but please donāt spam me.
Iām all for platonic plotting between characters as well as adding romance, when it comes to pairings Iām more comfortable writing mlm as nearly all of my OCs are male, (I am open into trying nbxm though!) and writing female characters arenāt really my strong suit. I am a-okay in adding any dead-dove or NSFW in our rps just as long as theyāre not the only thing thatās driving the plot. I also rp in a few fandoms and can play a few canon characters. Iām on board for writing canon x canon ships, but I will NOT be doing any oc x canon pairings.
And speaking of fandoms, hereās a list of them that I write for:
Ö“ ą£Ŗš¤ Percy Jackson (Iām still getting back to reading the books so no spoilers please! I havenāt tried writing for canon characters either so Iām more open to rp with ocs)
Ö“ ą£Ŗš¤ Little Nightmares
Ö“ ą£Ŗš¤ Outlast
Ö“ ą£Ŗš¤ Pirates of the Caribbean
Ö“ ą£Ŗš¤ Miss Peregrineās Home for Peculiar Children
Besides fandoms I also have a handful of other ocs unrelated to them Iām more than open to use as well! I canāt remember nor do I have a lot of fandoms I used write for but Iām more than comfortable in using my ocs for rping and plotting things with them. If I happen to find other fandoms I enjoy I might add them to the list! On that note, plotting with ocs in fandomless rps is something Iām more interested with creating plots that are action/adventure, crime, or horror oriented roleplays. Iām MORE than open to plot any roleplays with AUs!
Another important thing to add, ageless or minor accs under 18 DNI, Iām not comfortable with interacting with younger people! If you are requesting for any creepy/weird tropes or youāre being an asshole in general, I will block you and end the discussion from there.
Lastly, if you disappear on me without a word for more than a month, I will assume youāre no longer interested in the roleplay and I will leave the DM from there.
If anyoneās interested in rping and building a plot with me feel free to drop your discord tag or interact with this post! :)
#dead talks#roleplay#oc rp#discord rp#roleplay search#rp partner search#oc x oc rp#cc x cc roleplay#fandom rp#fandomless rp#looking for rp#rp request#long term rp#plot driven rp#outlast rp#potc rp#little nightmares rp#pjo rp#mphfpc rp
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you have so much swag you should be called swagsea
DON'T KNOW WHAT THE HELL THAT WORD'S SUPPOSED TO MEAN, BUT I HEARD DAISUKE SAY IT ONCE AND I'M GONNA ASSUME IT'S A COMPLIMENT. SO SURE. WHATEVER YOU SAY KID
#AS LONG AS HE'S NOT TALKING ABOUT JIMMY I CAN ASSUME HE'S SAYING POSITIVE THINGS#IT'S A GOOD GENERAL INDICATOR#daisuke#anon#ask#rp blog
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i kinda wanna try roleplaying again cuz i loved it so much and it was the best way for me to work on my creative writing and i was rlly passionate and excited about it but idk how one even finds an rp partner nowadays. any of you guys rp? lol
#i had a long term partner in my teens and we wrote 100.000 plus words of our zombie apocalypse universe#and then even more for multiple AUs we made of that universe.#so like. thats the kinda rp im talking about.#can you fuck with me. can you ship ocs with me dude??????????
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The RĆŖverose train doesn't stop. i made some sort of mini-ref thing for her :] bonus:
(consider reblogging & donating to my Ko-fi, thank you!)
#honkai star rail oc#hsr oc#Knights of Beauty#Halovian#RĆŖverose#Vio's Art Tag#Vio's OC Tag#ok to reblog#hello everyone. giving you the classic flops day after day night after night#Reve is a LOT of fun to draw & write about i wish i could join an rp server or something#you KNOW the other knights (especially one redhead) would annoy the shit out of her everytime they cross paths#she talks as flowery as them but she's a complete SHUT-IN she can't handle her extroverted peers...#also she's scared *rgenti might kill her.... yeah#long story bout that hahahahhaha Bye
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*listening to auron's winter break audio and feeling bad for the poor driver having to witness that*
*me being the poor driver having to witness that*
like i can't listen to the video the same again š
#that was a dirty move#also yurriVoice content? from me? in this economy?#yeah just trying to expand on the audio rp posts bc it does get boring to talk about only 3 channels for so long#yurrivoice#yuurivoice#yuurivoice auron#yuurivoice charlie#yurriVoice casper
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STUDENTS OF NRC:
WHATEVER YOU DO, DO NOT LISTEN TO HER MELODY. SHE IS TRYING TO LURE YOU TO HER. DO NOT GIVE INTO TEMPTATION.
SHIELD YOUR EARS. GUARD YOUR MINDS. SHE IS NOT HERSELF.
AVOID ANY INDIVIDUALS WITH A HYPNOTIZED GAZE, AND ESPECIALLY AVOID AREAS WHERE HER SONG IS HIGH IN VOLUME.
DO NOT LET HER CATCH YOU, SHE HAS NOT BEEN MERCIFUL THUS FAR.
GOOD LUCK, AND BE SAFE, STUDENTS.
"E-eh..? What- what's happening..? Ah-! Okay okay- 'shielding' my ears..."
Kiyuu had been walking down the halls, but had paused to cover their ears as soon as the announcement was made, not leaving anything up to chance by hesitating. Looking left and right, there were many people around who'd failed to react in time, with glazed over eyes, moving in one direction as if on autopilot. Hypnotized, no doubt.
' I have to get out of here. Covering my ears isn't doing enough to filter out the beautiful melody. '
Turning in the opposite direction, they began to move. They didn't know where exactly the song was coming from, but no matter where they went, it didn't seem to get any quieter. They pushed harder down over their ears, refusing to fall to the hypnosis. Then, they heard a voice call out to them, laced with urgency.
"--yuu- Kiyuu! Kiki! Over here!"
They heard Crimson shout out faintly through their blocked ears. They practically ran towards him, heaving breaths through their lungs, both out of tiredness, and a hidden layer of anxiety.
"Crimson! Are you alright?! Do- do you know what all of this is about?"
Crimson grimaced, and Kiyuu's heart sunk in return.
' I have a really bad feeling about this... Something about what's happening is making me feel really uneasy... '
"Don't worry Kiki, I'm alright. It's... It's another overblot. From the shouts I've deciphered, the victim seems to be someone called Calypso, I believe."
' ...Oh. That's what it was. '
"C-Calypso?! Oh- oh god... s-seven's- i mean...!"
They managed to stutter out, barely able to hear themselves over their hammering heartbeat and short breaths. Hearing that the victim was Calypso out of everyone made their heart stop.
' Overblots are a rare phenomenon. They can cost lives. Most commonly, cost lives.
Calypso could die. There's a chance that I'll never see Calypso ever again. '
"Oh- Oh. Is- she a friend of yours, then..?"
"She- she's- oh god I can't- Crimson- I have to- I have to help her. I have to see her again-!"
"Shh, dear- calm down. Breathe with me, slowly now. The announcement says that the goal of the hypnosis is to lure people to her. To go willingly is... Well, without a plan, it's dangerous. Are you sure you want to..?"
Kiyuu took a few moments of silence to level out their breathing, in an attempt to calm down. They knew they could refuse, guarantee their own safety and peace by running away right now. But they couldn't do that. They were buzzing with nervous energy, a burning desire to chase after Calypso, to help her, to save her.
They ignored the voice in their head telling them how useless they were, telling them that there was no point even trying without magic.
' No. I will see Calypso again. Alive. '
"I- I know it's dangerous- but- I- I don't care. I don't. I- I have to see her. I- I have to at least try to help her- And I- I'll figure out a plan if- if I have to- I just- I- If- if she dies then- then- I-"
"...Hey- hey! You don't have to defend yourself, Kiki. It's okay. Everything will be okay, alright? I- I won't stop you. However- I- must request to accompany you. I'll be too worried about you otherwise. ...Please let me come with you."
Kiyuu's mouth snapped shut, and they took a breath, readjusting their hands over their ears as they hesitated, before nodding quickly.
"Okay. Alright. Thank you, Kiki. Just- follow my lead. Right, now... the source should be..."
Crimson trailed off, before beginning to wander in a certain direction, glancing back to make sure Kiyuu was following, then continuing down the hall.
' I refuse to let my lack of magic stop me from doing anything I can to help save Calypso. I've done this before. I- I can do it again.
I can. '
- Kiyuu & Crimson <3
[ @bubblin-trouble ud probably find this anyway but tagging just in case !!! hope u dont mindd :33 as u can tell im :33 very excited :33 for a lot of reasons :33 ]
#{ - ooc // i dont know wth posessed me to write this much but um. here it is! hopefully i can keep up the detail for future interactions :3#for now it's mainly in kiyuu's pov and might stay similarly due to her being friends with calypso#but i might surprise and change it to crimson's if the circumstances call for it :3 evil grin activated :3#um if ur wondering how they're fluently talking even though their ears are blocked... um... i guess they're lip reading?? that works right?#lso mb for being so late w this ive been tweaking things over and over and staring at it for way too long HELPPP#- }#aue's asteryn#asteryn kiyuu#asteryn crimson#{ current event ā the sirenās tempest }#twst oc#oc rp#oc rp blog#twst oc rp#twst ocs#twst rp#disney twisted wonderland#twst yuusona#yuusona#twst yuu oc#yuu oc#twst yuu#twst mc#twst#twisted wonderland
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Flop and Duncan talking about stuff. I loved this scene.
#nopixel 4.0#nopixel fanart#duncan fenwell#duncaning#gtarp#flop dugong#I donāt care what anyone says#long talks about conflict are s tier rp I will fight u#procreate
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BOJACK HORSEMAN STARTERS.
unassorted taken from several audios & clip compilations. TRIGGER WARNINGS for mental health issues, alcoholism, suicidality, depression, drug abuse, and various other heavy topics that the show covers.
you'd probably sleep a lot better at night if you just admitted to yourself that you're a selfish coward who just takes whatever he wants and doesn't give a sh*t about who he hurts.
things don't become traditions because they're good, bojack. they become good because they're traditions.
you were born broken; that is your birthright. and now, you can fill your life with projects, books, movies, and little girlfriends; but that won't make you whole.
i don't understand how people live. it's incredible to me that people wake up every morning and say: 'yeah, another day, let's do it.
in the grand scheme of things, we are just tiny specs that will one day be forgotten. so it doesn't matter what we did or how we'll be remembered. the only thing that matters is right now. this moment.
believe it or not, the time's arrow neither stands still nor reverses; it merely matches forward.
there's no such thing as good and bad people. we're all people who do good and lousy things sometimes. all we can do is try not to do bad stuff and more good stuff.
the world is unforgiving enough as it is. the least we can do is find a way to forgive each other and ourselves.
when i almost drowned, i decided i would never again be weaker than water.
there will be times when i will see someone in trouble. you'll want to rush in there and do whatever you can to save them.
but you must stop yourself because there are some people you can't save.
because those people will thrash and struggle and try to take you down with them.
life is just one long, hard kick in the urethra for many people.
sometimes i feel like my whole life is just a series of loosely-related wacky misadventures.
that's the problem with life, right? either you know what you want, and then you don't get what you want, or you get what you want, and then you don't know what you want.
my life is a mess right now, and i compulsively take care of other people when i don't know how to take care of myself.
always take every opportunity that comes your way because opportunities are like sneezes from god, and when god sneezes, you can't say god bless you to god. so instead, you have to take the opportunity.
sometimes life's a b*tch, and you keep living.
you can live your whole life like a puzzle, put together from the pieces of different sets.
but at some point, you start to think it's you. you're the piece that doesn't quite fit.
and you spend so long with that feeling that the feeling becomes your home.
and it can be jarring when you discover one day that you suddenly don't feel that way anymore. at first, you don't trust it, but then, gradually, you do.
it's not about being happy; that is the thing. i'm just trying to get through each day.
i can't keep asking myself, 'am i happy?' it just makes me more miserable.
i don't know if i believe in it, real, lasting happiness.
all those perky, well-adjusted people you see in movies and tv shows? i don't think they exist.
you know, sometimes i feel like i was born with a leak, and any goodness i started with just slowly spilt out of me, and now it's all gone. and i'll never get it back in me.
i've had a lot of what i thought were rock bottoms, only to discover another, rockier bottom underneath.
loss is a collaborative art between the people who leave us and those who remain. we dance with the shadows of their absence.
one day, you're going to look around, and you're going to realize that everybody loves you, but nobody likes you. and that is the loneliest feeling in the world.
when i was your age, i got sad a lot. i didn't come from such a great home, but one day, i started running, which seemed to make sense, so i just kept running.
when you get sad, you run straight ahead and keep running forward, no matter what. people in your life will try to hold you back and slow you down, but you don't let them.
don't you stop running, and don't you ever look behind you. there's nothing for you behind you. all that exists is what's ahead.
i'm this close to falling off the deep end. i know i'm smiling right now, but the light inside me is dying.
i need to go take a shower, so i can't tell if i'm crying or not.
loss is a collaborative art between the people who leave us and those who remain. we dance with the shadows of their absence.
settle. because otherwise you're just gonna get older and harder, and more alone.
you're going to do everything you can to fill that hole with friends, your career, and meaningless sex, but the hole doesn't get filled.
i know i'm not the perfect guy. i actually kind of hate myself a lot of the time. but when i'm with you, i don't hate myself.
i like being around you, and i don't know if i ever told you that in so many words, so i'm telling you.
same thing that always happens. you didn't know me, and then you fell in love with me. and now you know me.
everybody deserves to be loved.
one day you're going to look around and realize that everyone loves you, but no one likes you, which is the loneliest feeling in the world.
when you look at someone through rose-coloured glasses, all the red flags just look like flags.
it's so easy for you to love me when everything's good.
it's important that you know i cared. you think i didn't care because i put up walls.
but i cared so much about you. i wanted you to respect me.
i wanted you to love me. i was so afraid that you would know that.
the universe is a cruel, uncaring void. the key to being happy isn't a search for meaning.
it's to keep yourself busy with unimportant nonsense, and eventually, you'll die.
i don't know what to tell you. i'm happy for the first time in my life, and i'm not going to feel bad about it.
it takes a long time to realize how truly miserable you are and even longer to see it doesn't have to be that way.
only after you give up everything can you begin to find a way to be happy.
do you ever look up at the stars and feel like they're tiny holes in the sky, sucking out all the oxygen, and suddenly you can't breathe because you're thinking about how small you are and how meaningless it all is?
it is so cruel to let people love you. all you are doing is promising you'll one day break their hearts.
there is no shame in dying for nothing. that's why most people die.
not understanding that you're a horrible person doesn't make you less of a horrible person.
it gets easier. every day it gets a little easier. but you gotta do it every day ā that's the hard part. but it does get easier.
fool me once; shame on you. but teach a man to fool me, and i'll be fooled for the rest of my life.
i bought into this idea that i was this thing that couldn't be changed. the main thing i think about is how stupid i am that i didn't do this sooner.
i wasted so many years being miserable because i assumed that was the only way to be.
i don't want to do that anymore.
i understand that feeling of needing to bottle up your guilt and not burden other people with it.
you think you're protecting them from your toxicity. you convince yourself that you're being selfless, but it comes out in other ways and infects everything.
#long tw#bojack horseman rp meme#bojack rp meme#bojack horseman quotes#rp meme#angst rp meme#sentence starters#rp starters#ask meme#inbox meme#love me some reality checks through a show abt a washed up 90s star who is also a talking horse
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OOC:
Good morning!
As the long-term writer who has had this political muse for two full U.S p.residental cycles, I've decided this time I'm going to do something about it.
There's a good chance that people will find today stressful. I can't guarantee I'll be here the entire time because of time zones. However! Should you wish to have something to take your mind off things, the three blogs I write (this one, Wilf, and the "multi") are open! This also includes reaching out privately to chat (... d.iscord is a maybe, but it's fine to use if we already shared them).
Want to figure out dynamics? Talk about your muses? Just talk in general about the franchise (except E.dge of S.leep since that hasn't released here yet)? That's fine too!
Let's keep the overall dash space open today and keep the energy levels positive!
#(I feel like I shouldn't need to give the disclaimer but just in case: this only applies to rp blogs)#(I don't think I can call myself 'your local mayor mun' but imagine that sorta vibe)#(... also there will not be any political talk outside of this: VOTE. It's a great thing to be able to use your voice!)#(can you believe when I started this blog I was debating about having a plot where the mayor term ends?#he's been 2 years into a 4 year term for a very long time now...)#on the tablet#just the assistant (ooc post)
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I play DND with people I've been RPing with for over a decade and I still get the "X reacts this way and waits for you to notice" shit from a couple of my players, I go crazyyyyy
it's such a hard habit to break haha, I think a lot of people approach RP like they do making the default character in a game that is granted the access of the central role of The Story just by the gift of being the One PC of the rather than one of several PCs in a story! my philosophy is always "make the characters that default PC responds to" since they tend to be solid in their motivations rather than granted the gift of neutrality to allow players to keep as many options available as possible. I get it's a natural and easy habit for people but boy does it make the collaborative storytelling of RP difficult if too many people do it at the same time. but hey i'll take "notice me doing this" if the things they want me to notice are actually interesting, add to the character, and have momentum!
#ask biji#rp#this is an old ask but i do love talking about the philosophy of RP#i've been in the academy so long and have many opinions#god the trauma of so many I SEE IF YOU NOTICE rps#please.... please be more than clumsy and cute................... i beg of you..........................#please sell meth like walter white
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small things to stop doing in your fics
(or any kind of writing, but i live on ao3. we begin with flat-out crimes and then slowly start moving into things that just bug me personally but arenāt wrong)
epithets. if iāve said it once, iāve said it a thousand times. you should only be using epithets for characters whose names we do not know. they can also be used VERY rarely to break up the repetition of names/pronouns or to emphasize charactersā relationships/viewpoints, ie āhis boyfriendā or āthe asshole.ā
writing out accents. please stop. you can include a couple of small things, like āsomethināā or āyaā (for āyouā), but even keep that to a minimum. specific turns of phrase/references go way farther imo to establish a characterās culture/background/etc. a little goes a long way, and doing it repeatedly can make sentences hard to parse. this also! applies! to children and babytalk! have you ever listened to a child speak? toddlers can enunciate pretty well!
not enough commas. put commas before names and titles. itās not āHey Johnā or āIām on it captain,ā itās āHey, Johnā and āIām on it, captain.ā also, put them after discourse markers/interjections such as āwell,ā āso,ā and ānow.ā you should be writing āSo, how are the kids?ā not āSo how are the kids?ā even if your character is speaking quickly, you still want the commas because of grammar. it can occasionally be acceptable to omit them if you want to indicate extreme excitement/panic/anger/etc, but use it sparingly.
too many commas. iām a comma fiend like the rest of you so iām guilty here too, but we gotta at least stop with the comma splices. commas split and independent and dependent clause, meaning that one part of the sentence cannot grammatically stand alone. if all parts are complete sentences on their own, thatās a comma splice. try splitting it into two sentences, using a semicolon, or rewriting. this is usually fine in dialogue, though, thatās just how people talk.
also, using a lot of commas to denote panic is something i used to be HUGELY guilty of and now i hate it. instead of, āI, I, I donāt, I donāt know,ā you can try, āI-Iā¦I donātāI donāt know!ā probably not that much punctuation that close together, but for the sake of example. emdashes and ellipses, my beloveds š«¶
roleplay speak. i donāt know what else to succinctly call this? iām referring to the tendency to be redundant and over-explain, especially in dialogue. itās a phenomenon i see constantly in rp circles, usually because of post length requirements (and i have little issue with it there, itās just the culture). things like:
āSurprise!ā Adam shouted, popping out from behind the door.
āOh my god!ā Scott screamed, having been completely startled and not expecting Adam to be home yet.
yeah, we can guess that Scott is startled, right? because of the screaming? and clearly if Adam is surprising Scott it stands to reason his presence is unexpected? why are we stating this twice?
i believe this also comes from the mistaken idea that every line of dialogue needs a tag attached, which isā¦.horrible. you can let the dialogue exist on its own sometimes, friends. you can also include an action beat without a tag. like above, i could have just said āAdam popped out from behind the doorā and omitted the shouting altogether. we can assume he is being loud because thatās usually how people do surprises. anyway. moving on.
condescending to readers. this isnāt so much about writing as it is authorās notes and the like, and ācondescendingā may be a strong word, but iām trying to be succinct. at any rate, please stop telling your audience to not read your fic? ādo not read if sensitive to [blank]ā or āif you have [disorder] skip this fic!ā is a horrible way to trigger warn. people know their own boundaries. tell them what the work actually contains and let them self-select.
i also find ārest stop/check-inā type notes condescending, like āif you are reading this between the hours of 10pm-4am, go to sleepā and āSTOP! have you eaten/drank/walked around in the past few hours? go do that!ā again, we know ourselves. iām not your kid, donāt tell me what to do. i donāt mind a polite, casual little āthanks for reading, remember to drink water and take your meds, byeā note, though.
the others in this category? i will straight up not read the fic over that on some days. ESPECIALLY because, in my experience, the people who are most intense about warning for every little thing are the ones with the mildest fics, and thatās not what iām here for.
complaining about your own wrong tags. this is, admittedly, such a nitpick, and it definitely is more common in certain communities than others. but as longtime followers may know, iām a bit obsessed with ao3ās tagging system and it drives me BONKERS when people use the wrong tags and follow it with ānot actually but thereās no tag for xyz.ā hereās the thing: you can still look at all the works that have ANY tag, just the non-canonized ones canāt be filtered on. and the best way to get a tag canonized is, guess what, to USE it! imagine that. also, if youāre using the wrong tag, youāre just going to clog the filter results and get people who donāt actually want to read your fic. just stop.
#writing advice#fanfiction#wren writes#writeblr#this has been in my drafts for a while getting things added to it as i come across them#i think itās good now#feel free to add your own grievances as long as theyāre small#last addition was the commas bc i just dnfād a fic for having like no commas ever#why is every character talking at warp speed i cant focus#also yes iām a hypocrite bc you can probably find at least most of these in my fics. ik i have the rp speak one very recently. but thats bc#its a rp turned fic and iām lazy about editing#i dont mind it in that case i think rp fics are fun its when its clearly Not a rp fic that i get annoyed by it
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Sheesh! I hate long flights! Canāt do nothin but sleep or watch some lame movies!
Anyways, Iām back, babes! Sorta.
How are my fantastic fans doin?
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