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messy banitas drawing !!!!!!!! yapyapyap
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ngl one of the most useful things iâve internalized from doing art online is never tell people what to criticize. donât preemptively apologize for things or point out where you think you fumbled, itâs just priming people to notice minor issues that might not actually matter and hit you where youâre sensitive and throw you off your game. donât tell people your weak points. if itâs a genuine problem theyâll point it out
#especially not if theyâre the professor grading your assignment!!!!!!!!!! feel so bad for my friend#i cant tell him it now bc itâll come across as mean but i feel so bad :( he kept apologizing for things he didnât need to and it made him#seem unprepared. when he actually had 95% of what he needed and apologizing made it LOOK like he didnât#textâ¨#iâm making it sound very dramatic here but itâs straight up helped me so much with my anxiety#the above doesnât apply if youâre looking for constructive criticism kr any thing#iâm very specifically talking about stuff like posting art online or giving a presentation or whatever
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do you happen to have that page that talks about the beauty standards of each race?
Yeah sure. While scavenging pics for this I found this neat reddit compilation & chart & theory talk too. I had um, way more to say than I anticipated (I know you only wanted the one page. I have nothing to say for myself. Like most topics in Dunmeshi things snowball because theyâre so interconnected. MercyâŚ) so, many races and observations are only mentioned near the bottom.
Beauty standards and race in Dungeon Meshi
Not pictured thereâs also how elven society is harsh on visibly disabled people, and how the demon took away Mithrunâs silver eyes and ears to take away his pride. Thereâs also how Senshi might have fit in with the orcs more easily because of the dwarven wide body shape, and how they tend to have more body hair too I suppose. In the extra on orcs we see Senshi living with the orcs and he gets judged because of the hierarchy rather than his looks.
What is fashionable also differs from culture to culture, and thereâs how tattoos only seem common with elves, though dwarves and others do also sometimes have some. They seem to not raise much brows, which makes sense since for many essentially theyâre for professional (magical) purposes especially with elves. Gender roles also differ in type and importance, but generally they are similar to irl ones for the races we see. Elven society seems to be the least gendered, which would be an unsurprising logical outcome of having lesser sexual dimorphism aka they look more androgynous. Comparing fashions and gender roles and how they affect beauty standards would be a whole other compilation and conversation. Kui has great worldbuilding partially because sheâs got such a good grasp on sociopolitics and geopolitics. History affects cultures and beauty standards greatly. Kuiâs oneshot Distant Utopia was very eye opening on her way to worldbuild and the consideration she gives these things, I do really recommend reading it.
Out of the big 5, we know the least about gnomes, but their sheet does say both culture and region are similar to dwarvesâ and they end up being confused together often, so we can imagine the beauty standards are similar to dwarvesâ as well.
I wanted to touch on this in a post eventually, but how one daydream hour page said half-foots tended to be curvaceous like in the artwork below puzzled me for a long time, all the half-foot characters we see during canon are rather slender and lanky after all, Chilâs succubi also being more curvy than plump. Economics are for sure a factor in that I imagine, the half-foots characters we see are all implied to be some flavor of poor or malnourished, as are half-foots depicted as empoverished oppressed minorities in general. Even comparing the artwork with the half-foot sheetâs depicted average half-foot, the ones on the left seem bigger. Wouldnât it make sense though, if unlike dwarves half-foots donât have similar naturally wide bodies, yet due to idolizing dwarves they work towards having a similar body shape/type to emulate them?
Itâs said half-foots tend to stick to pretty ethnically homogeneous regions (aka half-foots-only communities) unless they move to the big city with ambition to try and make it big (like Chilchuck and his wife & kids did), and thatâs interesting imo because then that would mean that in a ton of half-foot communities, they rarely see or interact with dwarves whom they try to emulate. Of course, one thing about beauty standards is that when they get adopted, at one point it stops being "this is how dwarves look and so this is how half-foots should look" and just becomes "this is how half-foots should look", most people feel as though beauty standards arenât learned but innate, so I figure the half-foots wouldnât have any problem still seeking dwarvish traits when there are no dwarves around.
Thereâs also stuff you can glean here and there if you want to extrapolate more. Like how in the race swap artworks, Mickbell is only smiling in the dwarf portrait, and Rinâs elven portrait looks very close to her elven one- Rin who is stated to be beautiful in her profile blurb. Benichidoriâs extra does teach us tallmen can definitely have harsh beauty standards, but also since the text portrays her as very dysmorphic thatâs likely reflected in her thoughts to a much more intense degree than is common, not an accurate strict baseline to go off. Ah, Kabruâs blue eyes are also why he and his mother lived a rough life in Kabruâs hometown, but that seems to be regional. Good post here on the topic of Kabruâs blue eyes and ties to irl history. Thereâs a lot to be said about Kabru being a man that in many ways is close to elven beauty standards, and how that might have affected or been affected by his upbringing with elves + his persona as someone that can effortlessly charm most people. Marcilleâs section here in this essay also goes into Marcilleâs struggles to fit in with the ideal image of an elf.
Looking human
Also notable are beastkins and demihumans: Demihumans are all dehumanized which makes people treat them worse. So if you differ from the visual idea of "human" (an in-world subjective categorization just as much as demihuman is) most people do judge you negatively. Elves and dwarves get to fight about which type of human is considered the prettiest, but demihumans are below tallmen and half-foots, they are considered as simply below the beauty contest, incompatible with it.
Onis are perhaps the demihuman people we know of with the least cultural influence on the dunmeshi world, and with the least intensely different appearance than other demihumansâthey seem to be technically categorized as human to people not from the eastern archipelago?â but even them are treated as lesser than human, treated as beasts to slain for reputation points or useful strength to have around and command. Itâs said their "magnificient horns" and fangs are often shaven off when the oni lives in tallman towns, so you could easily make the argument that onis are denied the right to have their own beauty standards, having to conform to other peopleâs and going through mutilation to take away features they might otherwise have taken pride in. Inutade was bought by the Nakamotos from a dangerous sumo fighting ring that got one of Inutadeâs tooth broken on her first and only fight, and kept as a low ranking servant ever since. Remember when I said different fashions existed in dunmeshi and how those could also affect beauty standards? Like the elves, if you look at the portraits pages which include a lot of characters that arenât in the story you can see distinct cultures within the same races, for example one young elf is bald which is in sharp contrast with the usual elven long luscious hairstyles, and thatâs especially true for onis I think. Maybe not only from different regions but different eras as well⌠They have a bit of population in the very north of the western continent, so I like to think some of the ogres live in very cold, maybe even subarctic or arctic conditions. The point Iâm getting at here is that within a race, culture/ethnicity like with Kabru will also influence them it isnât just tallmen as a whole, different communities will have differing beauty standards. The oni history blurb and third row first collumn portrait remind me of Mongolia (which historically was a lot of different nomadic communities with different cultural identities as well. Something something, the oni empire experienced a decline and then tallmen overpowered them, and now theyâre governed and split apart by stronger social classes & slavers and the richness of culture was hurt for it especially if they have no real community left of their own), but obviously many of them are dressed and look rather japanese, makes sense considering living in/close to Wa, and first row second collumn portrait reminds me of ainus which again would be logical considering geographical placement, though Iâm far from an expert. Interestingly, ainus are indigenous people both in Japan and Russia- Perhaps the northern western continent ogres are meant to be closer to Russia than Canada like I imagined? Ok tangent over.
The kobold sheet says theyâre especially sought after as slaves because theyâre "adorable", but locally in the western continent theyâre repeatedly said to be seen more as ferocious and dangerous. The dehumanization is most apparent in the first comic below. The language barrier and conflicts no doubt worsen this by a lot, but I think itâd be hard to deny that their canine appearance makes the dehumanization worse. "Theyâre ferocious beasts, theyâre demihumans, they canât be communicated with". Most characters in Dungeon Meshiâs world are desensitized to slavery and most characters are prejudiced one way or another. Point being, kobolds are fully removed from human beauty standards, but no doubt for kobolds, other kobolds are more beautiful than humans are. Theyâre assumed to be an uncivilized bunch, but just like any other people they like to adorn themselves with nice clothes and jewelry and keep themselves clean and groomed; they too take care of their appearance and take pride in it.
And the orcs! This one we have the most contact with in canon, with not only there being foreigner characters from the ethnicity or hearsay of their homelands and culture but full on contact with a community. We get to see up close what theyâre like and what they think, and of course in turn theyâre our introduction to how demihumans are harshly looked down upon and seen as inferior, less human and thus less worth valuing and less dignified. Itâs text that orcs are ugly to most humans and humans are ugly to most orcs. Since I judged they didnât need accompanying explanation the pictures showing this are in the pictures dump at the top.
God forbid you sell vegetables to orcs my god- but then again they do basically mandate adventurers to kill any orcs they come across so yeah the world isnât above that even a little bit.
So yes, my main point here is simply that orcs are yet another evidence of the physical ideal of "human" being an important beauty standard for human societies globally.
Izutsumi is our glimpse at how beastkins are treated in the world, and in Wa at least thatâs ending up being caged and mistreated as part of a freak show. Izutsumi hates her appearance and wishes she could leave the feline part of herself behind to only be human. Interestingly, not that we have a lot of info on them so this is very much a take with a grain of salt situation, but there seems to be less stigma around artificial beastmen, those who can shapeshift at will. The main difference is of course appearance, that most of the time they simply look like average tattooed humans. Artificially creating humans is an illegal practice, and no doubt itâs not well regarded, but being able to hide that makes them less likely to be discriminated at any moment, or even just discriminated less intensely. Again, looking human is important, not only for belonging but for safetyâs sake. Beauty standards rule the world with harsh hands.
Mermaids and fishmen
Ok weâre done now right? Right-! But wait⌠WaitâŚ! Mermaids and fishmen are said to be demihumans too, special separate cases to the main three demihuman species however, which is also represented by how mermaids and fishmen both are in the Adventurerâs Bible chapter Monsters meanwhile ogres, kobolds and orcs are in the chapter World. Theyâre an interesting topic because they directly tackle this topic, not only in a meta way for the readers but also making characters themselves struggle to quantify their humanity with the goal of knowing wether they should be eaten or not, especially Chilchuck. Chilchuckâs "is it really just a matter of feelings?" mini arc.
The party asking themselves "Should we eat this?" is very common, and often they end up playing a little loose on morality, like eating the red dragonâs meat despite it having digested Falin. Not unsimilarly Marcille freaks out a little over the vegetables they harvested having been grown with fertilizer, aka largely human poo. Half of the motivation of "should we eat this perhaps sentient creature" is out of consideration and compassion, but more strongly and more often, the characters struggle with a sense of taboo at eating something too closely related to humans. Even, feel uncomfortable because of the deepseated impression that eating it would dirty them in some way. Cannibalism is an interesting and relevant topic in many ways, but what I want to mention is how thereâs the more or less universal belief that committing cannibalism inherently taints you as a person and turns you more monstrous, morally but also literally depending on some myths such as w*ndigos and onis in some cases, like in Touge Oni. Marcille and Izutsumi both express a fear of eating monsters turning them monstrous. Maybe this is part of what Laios was hoping for, honestly. There are two fears here, if eating a demihuman monster constitutes as cannibalism or not, and so, will eating it taint you because itâs a human, or will eating it taint you because itâs a monster? You are what you eat, until itâs a little too literal. You morally are the means by which you get your food, and you physically are the result of your nutrition. Dungeon meshi manages to mix an exploration of humanity with the theme of food because our relationship to food is very deep and complex, psychological as much as physiological.
In the end, the characters sort of shrug and accept that theyâll never quite understand the world of mermaids and fishmen and how they operate, and what that means about them. Laios is the one always challenging these notions other characters take for granted, itâs not obvious to Laios why people are softer on mammals than other animals and plants, itâs not obvious to Laios why people would be afraid of eating a monster just because itâs a monster, itâs not obvious to Laios why some food is gross to Marcille but not fish testicles, itâs not obvious to Laios why you should immediately regard orcs and kobolds badly.
"Cows are probably closer to humans [aka closer to being human] than fishmen, though theyâre clearly intelligent", dehumanization to lessen empathy towards them to be able to eat them. Meanwhile, mermaids seemingly have a less noticeable "civilization" or intelligence, they hunt in groups like fishmen, but they donât use tools and such, they feel more primal and similarly instinct driven, and yet⌠Do they attract sympathy more? Mammals, humans, is it because of their nature or because of their appearance?
Both the nature and appearance of fish are ones people donât typically sympathize with. "Fish donât feel pain", "goldfish only have 5 seconds of memory", "itâs okay to keep fish in completely empty bowls too small for them until they die from it", so many lies and misconceptions exist that make people less considerate of them. The average lifespan of a goldfish is 10-15 years, the record is 43, but theyâre not seen as lives that really matter, so a lot of goldfish die in a few weeks of bad aquarium conditions. Thereâs a lot of research on animals evolving to look cute and appealing to make some predators want to kill them less and parents want to care for them more, including humans. First good google research result gave me this credible short article on the topic. In Chilchuckâs weighing wether a fishman is far enough from being human or not to eat, "face is 100% fish" is his biggest argument for it being more acceptable. The face, the most important thing for empathy and recognition. The face, the decapitated fishman one that falls into his hands next chapter.
To quote @room-surprise: "Chilchuck can't explain why it's wrong to eat the merpeople, even though it's NOT complicated. But the problem is Chilchuck would have to accept and acknowledge that the merpeople might be people? And that's outside of the worldview he passively believes, so he can't just say that, because he doesn't think that's true. But that IS why he "feels" it's wrong. And it's all you'd need to say for Laios to understand! But it would require acknowledging that maybe the way they're treating and talking about the merpeople is wrong."
The idea of Chil not being able to grapple with how maybe some monsters are more humans than they seem, him who had been an advocate of half-foots rights, half-foots who get undermined and treated as inconsequential sacrifices⌠Grappling with how he could relate to the merpeopleâs situation almost, and pulling away because itâs so existentially horrifying. I do not want to see myself into an hostile fish-faced warrior I canât communicate with. In a way this also relates to Chilchuck being the only party member who doesnât see Izutsumi as a cat in the relationship chart, the only one to treat her with full human dignity. He knows the struggle to be taken seriously, he knows being infantilized and he knows what itâs like to be treated as less than human.
Below, you will see Chilchuck draws the line of where they become not okay to eat as when "they already look like mermaids". Above, thereâs speculation that the algae hair is partly to mimic "the mermaidsâ beautiful female form". Is it because mermaids are their enemies and the ambiguity might give them extra seconds to attack or flee? Is it to trick adventurers instead? Itâs striking to me that this is what works, with the adventurers. Sure the fishmen are intelligent, but explicitly here, what makes them no longer acceptable prey to Chilchuck is that they look close enough to a mermaid, close enough to human. Mermaids who of course themselves have this form to entice and seduce and charm the adventurers they prey on. Chilchuck considers the intelligence due to the tridents, but most of his internal debate centers around their appearance, and the image of a fishman skewered sickens him. The power of mimicry⌠Mimic being a beautiful human woman. Mimic being cute, babies being wired to make us feel protective and softened. Half-foots, sometimes pretending to be children for scams or help or avoiding trouble.
The mermaids are only concerned by their differences and not their similarities, and have no trouble treating the fishmen as food rather than peers. To an outside perspective like us, the audience, all these categorization of "more human" and "less human" between onis and orcs and elves and tallmen etc seem stupid and unfounded, but to the people living in Dungeon Meshiâs world, elves may as well be mermaids while onis are fishmen, not alike at all, unworthy of empathy and thus fine to eat.
Ultimately, Dungeon Meshi promotes unity. Itâs about seeking to understand the unknown and the misunderstood, the dehumanized and the inhuman. It shows the good that comes from seeking to understand what you do not, even when thatâs one another.
#Dungeon meshi#dunmeshi lore#Compilation#Ok⌠I think I didnât forget anything. Feel free to point things out or discuss in comments and tags though#Delicious in dungeon#Ik i strayed a bit from the central topic but who knew beauty standards and discrimination went hand in hand /s#Ask me about my dunmeshi kobold ocâŚâŚâŚ.. ask me about my dunmeshi ocsâŚâŚ..#Can we give body neutrality an amen#Tw racism#cw racism#The âwhat are you talking about Marcille. Senshi is handsomeâ gag has 2 layers then doesnât it#Like obvi Marcille is noticing the difference between shapeshifter and og senshi rather than making a judgement#But the elf being *the* one to notice and say âSenshi looks more handsome than usual thatâs weird??â may very well be an effect of living#with elven beauty standards yeah#Meta#I wanted to make a post on the half-foots body type thing and the oni mongolian coding and the chilchuck merman thing so#Three in one đľ why take the initiative when you can just wait for the tiniest opportunity#Chilchuck tims#Analysis#dunmeshi fishmen#Itâs very interesting to think of how there being so many people *that* physically different affects politics and beauty standards#MimicsâŚ. Pacing my room. Pondering. MimicsâŚâŚâŚ#The burnout is over yippee#Ok but for reals though race is largely a social construct. Critical race theory good. Go read Distant Utopia by Ryoko Kui#âYeah sure.â < person who thought sheâd just be grabbing like 3 pics and had no clue sheâd become hyperfocused for hours#The classic societal obsession for classifying and exaggerating physical traits into boxes of innate goodness vs evilâŚ
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Jack has no sense of personal space, especially with love interests close friends
#hes practically a sleep paralysis demon#i drew this so fast im sorry if it looks weird LMAO#also this is the first time ive drawn hair like jack's so if yall have any constructive criticism id like to hear it!#ticcijack#ticci toby#eyeless jack#toby rogers#toby rogers fanart#eyeless jack fanart#jack nyras#jack nyras fanart#creepypasta
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Hey fanfiction loving friend!
AO3 has the ability to turn off comments, moderate comments, restrict comments to logged in users only, or let anyone comment on your story. Most other fanfiction hosting websites do not allow comments to be turned off and in the case of some (wattpad) highly encourage comments even on individual paragraphs.
Over on reddit, someone said it is an unwritten rule of fanfiction that you should never leave a negative or critical comment on a story. This was countered most strongly by many arguments. Despite many people asserting that their stance was the one truth and that there was no debate on the topic - there was a lot of debate about what criticism even is and where the line should be for if giving concrit is alright.
So give this some thought:
If you have tea to spill, examples or an argument you want to make, please do. I have some that go both ways, but I'm going to wait for a few responses so I don't pre-empt the results. I'm not going to vote myself for a while, either, so I won't know which way the poll is leaning when I do pour my tea. I tried to cover all the flavors of debate I've seen in the many "definitive" posts I have read here and on reddit. Please reblog for a wider sample!
#fanfiction discourse#fan fiction#fanfiction#fan work#fan etiquette#commentary#fanfiction.net#ao3 author#ao3 reader#ao3feed#ao3#wattpad comments#comments on fanfic#looking for constructive criticism#constructive criticism#concrit welcome#concrit not welcome#concrit
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Obsessed with Lloyd never mentioning his grandfather is the First Spinjitsu Master, apparently to the point even Arin didn't seem to know, because "eh, it never came up". Cause like, yeah, sure, my grandfather is God, what of it? Normal day for me. Shit happens. My dad is also evil, you wanna talk about that? I sure don't.
It's also funny from a character arc perspective. Here's itty bitty baby first season Lloyd, loudly proclaiming he's the son of Garmadon, and probably also making sure everyone knows he's God part 3 electric boogaloo. And then one Tomorrow's Tea and a few more years later and he's doing everything physically possible to NOT care about his heritage. In fact he'd probably rather his parentage was literally anyone else. Dude could care so less he forgets about it most of the time. King behavior.
#ninjago#dragons rising#ninjago dragons rising#ninjago dr#lego ninjago#lloyd garmadon#first spinjitzu master#garmadon#text post#talk#ideas#lloyd that entire time interally was probably like 'did wu get a temple--? oh wait thats granddad. sorry granddad. i guess'#he took one look at that altar and went hm. should probably fix that. mostly cause it'll fix my problem but wu didnt raise no disrespect#(except for when the disrespect is funny) what who said that#do you think he was like 'oh thank granddad finally my godly heritage isnt screwing me over' when the ghost mentioned needing a descendant#or was he like 'well. its another day of me being grandfathers favorite i guess'#do you think sora and arin felt awkward realizing they were in the temple of lloyds granddad. meanwhile lloyd did not give a flying fck#as far as hes concerned granddad can stuff it cause hes 80% all the sht that happens to him is bc God really likes him & thinks starting#problems is an appropriate way to show his love. and he doesnt think god takes constructive criticism#he sure will try tho#also yknow his closest interactions with Gods are his dad & uncle. & Wu is. like that. & also he's so sick of garmadon's bs#'my dad is literally banging some news guy i could not respect him less if i tried. his taste has only ever been mediocre. sorry mom'
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It's very interesting that both Allura in this episode and Essek in 2.124 frame the Luxon as a pre-Founding entity that has been in Exandria since before the Primordials or the pantheon, because it really does complicate the idea of gods as a single unified classification. Discussions around, say, the Raven Queen's ascension and Artagan's godhood are interesting of course, but lend themselves to a hierarchy of being and powerâmortals and archfey must be elevated to a higher position to reach a place among the godsâbut the Luxon throws a wrench into the hierarchy itself.
Fandom discussions around the Luxon referring to it as an entity tend to feed into this hierarchy as well, even when framing the Luxon in a positive light, by placing the classification of god or deity as a literal higher power in a contemporary and very sociopolitical conceptualization of "power," positioning anything in that role as inherently oppressive, and I think this also does the conversation a disservice. A better metaphor, in my opinion, is to compare deities to the fundamental forces of physics.
The way that dunamis has been said to intertwine with reality on a minute level and the Luxon's extension of divine power without direct communication suggests to me that its power in relation to other deities is somewhat akin to gravity itselfâgravity is the weakest of the fundamental forces, but much farther reaching, and therefore it exerts a massive influence on the cosmos in spite of that lesser strength.* This echoes the complexities of trying to rely upon a hierarchy of being in this discussion, because such hierarchies are always constructed and imposed, not inherent. Sometimes they are constructed by those positioned at the top, and other times not, but from any angle, regardless of field, they tend to be used to justify some moral stance and standing.
This is utterly negated by the Luxon's existence. Whatever can be said about it as an entity, it seems to be an inherently amoral beingâit does not seem to concern itself with moral questions, and very possibly has no capacity to do so. At the same time, dunamis seems to be enmeshed within the reality of the Material Plane and the Weave itself, perhaps even the Skein of Fateâas described, dunamis may well be the very particulate matter comprising the choices of everything in the cosmos and how those choices intertwine.
The Raven Queen, as an ascended mortal, can look upon the individual heroes of the story and acknowledge them, validate them, but the Luxon has no inherent position from which to look, and as such evades any positionality within the constructed hierarchy upon which the questions of this campaign hinge.
*Complicating this metaphor is the fact that gravity's weakness means it doesn't exert significant influence on a micro scale, but I do not ever purport to suggest that dunamancy is a one-to-one mirror of the realities of quantum mechanics, not least because Matt is definitely no more a physicist than I am.
#the return of the meta footnote#very important honestly#anyway all systems of classification are constructed and discourse would markedly improve if people actually recognized that#also I'm not gonna lie. the brevity of this already long meta is a fucking miracle. I nearly went looking for crit theory to quote.#I could've gone on WAY longer about both the constructedness of hierarchies.#was about to open up my book on the theory of taxonomies.#cr meta#cr spoilers#luxon blogging#critical role
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Minho, who moved into Gally's childhood house
unknowingly also moving into an active War Zoneâ˘
it's Gally VS Thomas
they're both ghosts
they're fighting over who gets to haunt the place
both of them have attached themselves to the house already and are trying to convince the other to un-attach themselves
attaching oneself to a place is a simple procedure
In fact, it's so simple it can happen on accident for a lot of ghosts
like Thomas, who thought the house was cute and spent so long there that he just woke up attached one day
meanwhile, Gally grew up in the house as a living human and has haunted the place for three years
So he's not about to let some silly accidental ghost take it away from him
any number of ghosts can be attached to a property, but traditionally, only one ghost haunts it
the others just kind of... meander
most ghosts lose interest in staying connected to the physical world
and enjoy floating mindlessly in some forgotten corner of an establishment, wandering in their waking dreams
but Thomas and Gally aren't those kinds of ghosts
Minho isn't even aware of the fight between the two at first
Thomas and Gally don't really pay attention to Minho either
He's not really a "human being with feelings"
he's just another part of the house
that the haunting ghost gets the right to mess with
until Minho starts tearing down the old wallpaper, renovating the showers, replacing the mirrors, etc.
the two ghosts quickly set their rivalry aside to drive away the parasite that's demolishing their precious haunting place
they start off small
Minho can't find his keys, his TV remote is always missing, why is his toothbrush in the toilet, where did all the windows go, was this area of the house always this dark, why is it so cold, why are his blankets trying to strangle him
(okay Gally went too far with that one)
Step 2: ants start stealing his food, faces appear behind Minho in the mirror, rats drown themselves in his morning coffee, the doors open and close loudly at night, the basement stairs try to chew off Minho's feet
(okay Gally went too far again)
before they can get to Step 3, Minho catches on
he guessed that there was a ghost in the house at Step 1
Step 2 made him realize the ghost might be more malicious than he thought
he starts tossing food into the campfire as offerings for whatever spirit is messing with him
a ghost is kind of like a vampire. They need permission to do certain things
such as eating physical food
Thomas, who died last week and is unused to no longer being able to eat, eagerly accepts whatever Minho throws out of the flames
he stops messing with Minho
Minho notices the decline in ghostly antics and increases the food offerings
Gally is offended that Thomas is so easily swayed
"This is why you would've never made a good haunting ghost"
"Okay but you haven't tasted his pasta. He makes really good pasta."
as respectful and knowledgeable as Minho is, he's wrong on one thing: He thinks there's only one ghost
He buys a larger bed and another pillow, inviting the ghost (just one) to sleep. He puts out a second toothbrush (just one). He makes a second dinner (just one) and buys a second kitchen chair (just one)
for all his kindness, Minho only ever invites one ghost
so of course, Thomas and Gally fight over who gets to be Minho's ghost
(at some point you have to wonder if maybe they just like fighting)
"Just haunt the house. You love this house. You've haunted it for three years or something."
"You're just saying that because you want to haunt Minho"
"You want to haunt Minho too!"
"He's in my house! He's mine!"
"I literally died last week! I deserve some sympathy! I'm vulnerable and sad right now! You have no sympathy!!"
"You can get the pasta that he throws into the fire"
they draw hearts in the mirror (Thomas erases Gally's)
they helpfully write grocery lists for him (Gally tears up Thomas')
they drive away pests from his garden (both try to take credit for what's technically a team effort)
Thomas coaxes a stray cat into the house and is heartbroken when Minho tosses the cat back outside, not knowing it's a gift
Gally offers his old childhood toys (memories are the most precious thing a ghost can give) by putting them on Minho's bed and then sulks when Minho doesn't touch them
(he's afraid of angering whatever put them there by messing up the toys)
Thomas irons out Minho's clothes
Gally steals clothes from random passerby's and gifts them to Minho
(definitely Gally going too far again)
(Minho is frazzled by the increase of naked people outside his house)
they TOTALLY fall in love with him during the process
this is important and 100% normal
they start worrying when Minho takes too long to come home from work
Gally and Thomas even detach themselves from their beloved house to go looking for Minho
(who fell asleep at work 'cause his boss overworked him)
(picture that scene from Ratatouille)
Gally drapes a blanket over Minho's exhausted body while Thomas angrily goes to find his boss
he spends the rest of the night terrorizing him
(Gally is impressed by Thomas' ferocity. He doesn't tell him that, of course)
Minho is losing his mind
because he is the receiver (the victim, really) of a ghost's affection
unbeknownst to him, he is in fact the victim of TWO ghosts' affection
and how is he supposed to maintain his reputation as a normal person... if he's starting to feel affection for a ghost
it ends with all three of them kissing btw
#fun fact! after writing this and queuing it up - I thought it'd be nice to browse the ghost x human tag#because I got surprisingly attached to this pairing#the tag is full of smut!#I forgot sex is a thing. just completely forgot about that.#anyway please enjoy the tags I wrote before this harrowing experience:#kissing a ghost must feel so weird#...and look even weirder#just. y'know. tonguing open air#thominally#minally#thominho#thomally#the thomally part comes later#tmr minho#tmr thomas#tmr gally#ghost au#ghost x human#oh my god that's a real tag#hey fair enough. I've discovered that I really enjoy this pairing#very cute#the maze runner#headcanons#rambles#I'm bored let's talk#I don't take constructive criticism because I'm not wrong
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Why fix trash?
Just a lil comic, I gotta make more of those. Y'know, stop leaving AU ideas on one reference drawing and two keysmashes.
Can and should be interpreted as future TaGr. Or TaGf. TaGr+? Yeah fuck it I'm calling this TaGr+ idk. Will probably make a part 2. At least I hope I will x)
#invader zim#gaz membrane#tak#?#tak ship#tagr#tagr+#this ship name cracks me up and i will not take constructive criticism on it thank you x)#also yessss back with gaz that looks like bob the builder. i will not be taking constructive criticism on that either x)#my art#tak's ship
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âM- my fingers⌠my hands⌠why wonât they moveâŚ?â
âI- I canât read this⌠any of thisâŚâ
âIâŚâ
âWhatâs⌠happeningâŚ?â
(trying out a slightly different art style it will get better trust just bear with me)
#i take constructive criticism just please be nice :)#ik the keyboard stand thing is messed up and the papers on the floor are weird#i couldnât be bothered to fix it i lost motivation#also i gave up on the hands#and everything actually#donât look too closely at this#project sekai#pjsk#art#fanart#saki tenma#uhhh idk what else to tag#torturing saki <3
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My first attempt at writing that's vaguely like poetry: from a dragon
I am not what you think.
I walk around, awkward limbs and flighty mannerisms, and you think Iâm strange. You have no idea how strange you would think I am if you only saw what was underneath.
Underneath, I am a creature of the ocean. Something that could never pass as human, and no longer wants to. Saltwater rushes through my veins in secret, silent to everyone but me. To me, itâs a roaring sound of the waves that I have never seen except for within my soul. It yearns to dissolve into the ocean like it could long ago, but for now those days are over and I am hidden underneath skin and muscle.
Underneath, there are wings; fins; antlers. They ache to tear from my back, through my skull. Nonetheless, they stay hidden for me, safe in the silence. Protected like I protected my kin in a lifetime so close to the surface and yet unreachable. Wrapped in a form that no longer coils around them like a serpent, but keeps them hidden from predators well enough I suppose.
I suppose.
I accept my form reluctantly and do what I can to make it mine. I shape it to feel better when I discover my gender, and when I canât shape it to fit my true self I cover it in things that feel a little more like home. A little more draconic. A little more like the ocean that I never have seen, but feel homesick for anyway.
I do find joy in being in this body, at least. Out there, there are others. Angels working minimum wage, dragons sitting on a park bench, wolves buying groceries. We hide, but we do so to be free. We walk through crowds, and no one notices our scales and fur and feathers. But we do. We see each other, even if from miles away, and we see whatâs underneath.
And underneath, none of us are what you think.
(Tags for side commentary/context)
#not looking for even constructive criticism since this is literally my first ever writing that isn't fiction or just a vague ramble#at least the first that I finished#I'm not calling it poetry bc that feels too fancy#this is a ramble that's shaped like poetry#because I'm such an open book type of person to the point that some people have called me âso brave for being openâ about things#which I still genuinely don't understand bc bro I'm just talking about being autistic and queer and shit like if you had issues with that#I would tell you to fight me#but that aside#it's become an issue that I can't talk about my otherkinity irl to most people#like it'd be unsafe and all that jazz#so this was sort of about that#and sort of just a general exploration of my draconity for fun#and sort of a shoutout to the otherkin community for making me feel normal about it#bc otherwise I'd feel like a freak and be miserable right about now#otherkin#alterhuman#nonhuman#dragonkin#otherkin blog#otherkinity#therian#otherkin community#amphitere kin#it feels too dramatic or smth but that's just the tone I write this type of shit in so???? ehhhh fuck it#I'm not looking to make GOOD writing#I'm looking to write that's it#(also I'm not fishing for compliments in the slightest I'm legit writing that down so my ADHD ass remembers to not judge my writing later)#not sure if i should tag a tw but like#body horror tw#? I think?
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hi hello
shortly after i watched season 4 i doodled five and i recently stumbled upon it again
and uh
quite a mess we got goin on here
i actually drew it before i forced myself to overcome my tiny fear of drawing digitally + started studying anatomy and clothing structure so the poses are super awkward, the proportions are off, and it looks just kinda bleh
so i redrew it
and iâm trying to decide if i should color it or leave it as it is ..
#laur draws stuff#laur says stuff#also if anyone sees anything that could look better i would appreciate tips!! <3#iâm absolutley still learning and iâd appreciate any advice?#i think iâve improved..? i think i like the digital one#any feedback / constructive criticism would be appreciated !!#my art#artists on tumblr#the umbrella academy#tua#umbrella academy#five hargreeves#hargreeves siblings#tua s4#number five#tua season 4#tua five#tua s4 spoiler#tua s4 fanart#tua s4 trailer#tua s4 speculation#tua s4 spoilers#tua s4e6#maxâs deli#maxâs diner#maxâs delicassen#number five hargreeves#tua number five#five#number five fanart
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nuzi as corpse bride before exams week đŁď¸đŁď¸ (got lazy at the end sorry)
sketch ver cause i prefer it over my rendered one...
#can you guys tell i dont know how to render#had too much fun with the lasso tool even tho half of the time i didnt even know what i was doing#constructive criticisms are appreciated!!#yk uzi kinda looks like phos from hnk here#murder drones#uzi doorman#serial designation n#nuzi#biscuitbites#corpse bride#stbc art#AGHHH I HATE IT THE MORE I LOOK AT IT
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Looking at other people's minis like
#me @ me#i really have to work on the âdon't compareâ rule with myself#especially when im like#pshaww look at that mistake they made#uhhh bold words from someone with so many primed dudes just sitting around#warhammer 40k#mini painting#constructive criticism only
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Does anyone have any good art tips on how to get gudđ§ââď¸I ain't feeling awesome-sauce at all
#faceee rambles#mostly to fix anything that's weird looking bout my art style#heck it might not even be the art style just what parts are lacking in general#I want to sit down and explore new styles and such but I can't figure out what's wrong#also also this and the fact that I've been really busy is why i haven't been posting as much as before#Between constantly shredding my art and my designs except for some I'm not at my peak#This is just a plea to get constructive criticism so that I can go back to posting dilfs again- who said that#this was a true faceee rambles⢠again
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Let's go back home now.
Transcript:
NoemĂ, Erick, and Ăngel: Dulce!!
NoemĂ: Mija, you did wonderful.
Erick: You were amazing.
Erick: Look at our baby girl.
NoemĂ: You must be so tired after all that! Letâs go home.
Dulce: AmĂĄ, Dad, how can you guys be so happy right now? I didnât win.
NoemĂ: Dulce, that doesnât matter. Weâre glad you got to experience this wonderful opportunity. You came and gave it your all, so of course weâre beaming with pride.
Erick: [Gets down at Dulceâs eye-level] Sweetie, look at me. I know youâre upset, but itâs like what your mother said: This was an amazing opportunity. Not everyone got accepted, but you did. They saw something in you, and who wouldnât? My daughter is phenomenal.
Dulce: I guess so.. huh? Thank you, everyone.
...
?: Excuse me, I donât mean to interrupt.
Mia: Hello Mrs. and Mr. Alegria. Iâm Mia DâAngelo-Ramirez, the main judge of Diced Junior. Your daughter is quite remarkable. Can I please have a quick word with her?
NoemĂ: Oh! Yes, please, go ahead.
Dulce: Oh, are you here to give me more advice?
Mia: No, only words of encouragement. I donât want you to think we only said that nice stuff for the cameras. I snuck away from the table just now to let you know that I truly believe youâll make it big in this industry.
Mia: Iâll be watching your career closely. Donât let me down, alright? Be smart with your choices. I have to head back now.
Dulce: You got it.
#noemi alegria#erick wade#angel alegria#dulce alegria#mia d'angelo ramirez#matchalovertrait#alegria legacy#tjolc gen 1#tjolc#NOEMIIII I MISSED SEEING YOUR BEAUTIFUL FACE FOR 2 WEEKS đđđđđđđđđ#for you guys it was 1 week but for me it was 2#also sorry guys i'm always switching up my editing LMAOO#i'm tryna find something more permanent. these kind of posts with text @ the bottom won't be common tho. they'll be for more serious posts#i just wanted my slice of life posts to match my serious posts a lil more#and according to google the âleague gothicâ font pairs nicely with the âchewyâ font idk#these moodlets might stay actually. i like how @windslar's psds look so crisp and i wanted something like that :o#if these are too hard to read lmk. open to the constructive criticism :)#white and yellow will be the main colors for posts like these. it's just that there are so many ppl in this post lol
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