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#parkour civilization#evbo#mcyt#(i watched the first movie yesterday instead of doing story hw)#(legit the first two lines of the video hooked me i was like ‘wait wtf this is hilarious’)#(i did in fact finish my hw that day but was more rushed lmao)#digital art#(worth it)#art#fanart
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@candle-scm you did this to me
#adopting the boys for a bit#no but liKe-#they?#tHEM#me realizing I never had a proper atla phase when I first watched it but now that it’s making waves again got me hook line and sinker#ALSO I didn’t know Zukka was a thiNG until my good friend over here introduced it to me and I haven’t looked back#nah because boiling rock hits different nOw#ATLA#avatar the last air bender fanart#avatar the last airbender#atla fanart#zukka#zukka fanart#Zuko#sokka#my art
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Your Hook
Recently I shared my first 30 pages with my mentor, and now I’m sharing her advice to all of you. (This is part 3! Find part 2 here, and part 1 here). Her biggest advice was to change my very first line.
I already knew that the first line was one of the most important lines of the whole book. It had to be the big hook to the novel, the reason to read to the second sentence, and then the third, and then so on until (hopefully) I’ve hooked my reader all the way to the end.
However, I missed an important detail about it. The hook isn’t just about being interesting—it’s about conveying your main character right from moment one.
Let’s take a look at some first sentences from a few books I’ve enjoyed recently:
“Mom is dying, and we both know it.” – A Wilderness of Stars by Shea Ernshaw
“Blue Sargent had forgotten how many times she’d been told that she would kill her true love.” – The Raven Boys by Maggie Stiefvater
“They say you can spot a true Shennong-Shi by their hands—palms coloured by the stain of the earth, fingertips scarred from thorns, a permanent crust of soil and blood darkening the crescents of their nails. I used to look at my hands with pride. Now, all I can think is, These are the hands that buried my mother.”- A Magic Steeped in Poison by Judy I. Lin (The spelling on this one is a bit off, I don’t have the right characters on my keyboard. Apologies.)
“The night harrow found me, I was digging up a fox’s bones.” – These Fleeting Shadows by Kate Alice Marshall
What do they all have in common? They immediately introduce the main character’s conflict, be it internal, external, or both. They draw us in right away by saying, “this person’s life isn’t perfect—here’s why.”
You may remember when we talked about internal/external conflict in my Character is Plot post, except I called it Goal and Objective (respectively). These are the elements that make up your character’s journey, which is the main plot, so that’s what your first couple lines are for.
Once I rewrote my first line to match this lesson, it was immediately more compelling. That’s the whole point of a hook.
Good luck!
#writing#creative writing#writers#screenwriting#writing community#writing inspiration#filmmaking#books#film#writing advice#first line hook#story hook#your hook#your first line#mentor advice
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merfolk in general are just. horrible horrible polyglots. their brains are already hardwired for language and quick language acquisition that remains active all their lives, further helped by retaining a high neural plasticity for their long lives, and especially enjoy complex language and language-based play and problem solving. but they also tend to have a lot of their society arranged where there's often multiple different languages at play within the same area, and only really stops being so once you get into especially small villages that have below the merfolk norm for outside contact. every merfolk alive today knows at least two languages, but most of them know far more than that, especially because one of those two will be the common-technical language. its been standardized and wide-scale implemented across the merkingdom after their dominance, to help bridge the gap between these different languages, basically as a successful version of esperanto. but its a trade language, and is mostly used for information you might want to reach as many people as possible, such as laws or business dealings or public announcements or the like. most merfolk don't view it as and don't treat it as a language proper, and its not what they prefer to converse in if they have another choice, usually finding it pretty limiting and restrictive, which is why its called common-technical.
miranda, being a royal who is regularly in contact with many different people around the merkingdom and regularly expected to be fully able to converse with them to do her job, knows just. so many languages. i might be changing exactly how many soon, but last time i counted it was in the low teens. like its just a perfect storm of her brain being wired for swift language acquisition and having a job that requires it and a position that means shes constantly around people from all around the merkingdom. not to mention having to know english too, which isn't just not her first language, it's not even her fourth language.
meanwhile, aaravi knows english and a little bit of hindi, less because of her mother and moreso because of her nana... its not that her mother never used it with her, but she was. less focused on using it or teaching aaravi, let's say. nana mishra uses it a lot more and is more interested in teaching aaravi when she asks her, especially in the intermittent period after her mom died and nana mishra was able to come back into her life to help aaravi pick up the pieces (though not after aaravi kind of. got left on her own. for an unfortunate amount of time). its just also fallen by the wayside with aaravi's whole Everything Else and kind of having a hard time accepting her nana's help and kind of being terrified of her (of no fault of her nana's, aaravi's just. she's just really traumatized after Everything, alright. having someone try to offer her help afterwards, especially when aaravi's scared of getting singled out as half human and half monster, is just. it's not something she can bring herself to trust.)
#all the care guide says is 'biomass'#miravi.txt#aaravi doesn't trust people doesn't like people doesn't want to be around people#there's a reason she and miranda mutually trusted each other more in immediately having an antagonistic relationship#and its because she just can NOT trust any freely offered help#it HAS to come with a stipulation or a catch#and it was easier if she felt like miranda was presenting the catch upfront#like say what you will about miranda#but she IS someone who screams ''you CANNOT trust me'' on first brush#and exactly in the way you expect: the merkingdom#its not very hidden at all its just not clear which WAY itll fuck someone up#which is ironically also why miri gets frustrated if she feels like someone trusts her too immediately#because like#its right there#can you not figure it out. do you not realize shes got other stuff attached to her. that you shouldnt fall for the bait immediately.#can you not see the hook she'll catch you on. can you not even see her for that much that she is.#this isnt against her role as a royal its a part of it too tbh#the image she presents is very much intentionally both alluring and threatening#awe and fear you know#the royal family wants to be beautiful and great and impressive and far more than you will ever be#and they want you to know if you step a toe out of line they will destroy you utterly and parade your corpse through the streets#its not a paradox its very intentional to keep people on a leash#its just the landfolk who seem to forget that her position as princess is also an implicit threat#which is all distinct from when she wants to be silly and carefree and just maybe. free from that need to always behave properly.#which ironically aaravi also seems to hit far more accurately than anyone else#because she doesnt just want to discard the latter. she wants to discard the former too.#which is why aaravi often teases her at the same time and pokes and prods her#its a playful vulnerability you know. if shes not being threatening shes not being too impressive to touch either.#she wants to roll on the ground and for you to call her so pretty and a silly princess and to get lightly wrestled#you know. its two different things.
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My heart hurts so much hearing the stutter at the end and how he just… fades ;; ;;
#Lies of P#Romeo King of Puppets#Lies of P spoilers#I had to stop in that moment and just FEEL because damn. When games throw those close bestie friendships at me?#And then make them tragic???? I get so emotional. From the MOMENT I first discovered lore behind Romeo. I was leaning in HARD like#‘WHOMST?????? GIMME THE LORE GAME!!!’ ugh. I loved the game before. But this was just hook. Line. And sinker.
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they make me ILL and SICK IN THE HEAD
#they got that goaded into a terrible decision swag that corruption arc swag#that i'll help you unlock your full horrific glorious grotesque potential swag that i'll change you for the better/worst irrevocably swag#*shaking you by the shoulders* listen 2 me oh my god it's abt who's right abt hell and redemption#it's abt al being both mentor and ally and obstacle it's abt who truly is getting corrupted it's abt the power imbalance between#the overlord & the princess of hell it's abt how in trying to manipulate her she inadvertently becomes one of his soft spots#it's abt the inevitable heartache and betrayal when their respective deals blow up in their faces#it's abt falling hook line sinker into something you promised you were never going to do#and i will be honest. i love their voices and how touchy they are w each other. little things like that#the first shot ESPECIALLY#and ik he was fucking w lucifer. but she just looks SO unexpectedly fond#every time charlie brightens at him i get closer and closer to losing it#charlastor
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I fucking love unreliable narrators in stories. It's gotta be one of my favorite things.
I once had an idea for a story long ago that about a crumbling nation and the king's assassination, but told through the perspective of like, 13 or 14 different characters who were there that day. Each character would have a different view on the events and would even completely contradict other tellings, and through all their accounts, the reader would piece together what actually happened. Oh, and each pov would be in a different art style that fit each character's personality. Obviously this was WAY too big of an undertaking for me, and I ended up repurposing characters for other stories ahaha.
In my foggy recollection, I FEEL like there are already stories out there that have done this. I wouldn't call it unique (no idea is; everything has been done and will be done and it's all about your own personal flare). Still, would be so cool to see done in animation or comic form. Hell, even live action if they really push the bar on styles and genres. Which, again, has to have been done already. I feel like I've seen it before. And if so, I want more.
#nighttime musings#my brain says that it was having to read The Stranger back in highschool that got me hooked on this#i ahhhhhh don't remember anything from that book besides the first few lines LOL#i struggled so hard in english and hated those classes#but#ngl#they helped me understand stories#if only there was a better way for me to learn all that#idk#seeing it applied in a visual medium with movies and shows did wonders for my brain#welp can't change the past only the future
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~one minute later~
supernatural s1e13 route 666 (w. eugenie ross-leming, brad buckner)
swamp diving for a corpse laden racist truck, totally normal💁♂️
will he stay or will he go part 8 of ?
#supernatural#spn 1x13#spn gifs#supernatural gifs#sam and dean#mygifs#dean winchester#sam winchester#spngifs#willhestayorgo#i cut that first gif because i wanted to make sure i got enough of him playing with that rubber band to be identifiable#now that's a natural way to have him fidget! figure that's a jared one anyway. take it over ott hammy fidget spinner every day#funny little journey this conversation had. diff pacing-sam kind of jumps in quickly to complain again and puts dean on his back foot a bit#(shades of the worry over sam hating the life and just waiting to finish the job and get away?)#i'm not sure what they were going in last-i am of two minds about it: either it's like ugh swamp diving smiles or ridic conversation smiles#like they can share a laugh over it being ridiculous and that sam did the same thing he just complained about and dean can look v sweet#or ha ha it's cold and wet and we gotta get In The Swamp which sam is whining about and dean's smiling over - which is more what script had#(but thank goodness they didn't have to film it because it was snow/raining and clearly quite cold)#because ugh miserable. i think the draft script did have them wading in there to hook up the tow line to the truck
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it’d take a lot to pry sunkiller/jarty away from my hands. they both struggled similarly but dealt with it in such different ways. my friend juli wrote about them in a group therapy setting and i absolutely fixated on it for months for some reason??
imagine barty with bpd AND npd. he used people’s emotions like it was second nature. he didn’t even think twice. with that being said, he had an avoidant attachment style. if he was showing raw emotion, it was probably for show. he wasn’t “vulnerable” without the intention to be.
imagine james with bpd, who fixated on people so much that it was all he could thing about. he was obsessive to an almost concerning degree, but that’s what barty wanted.
he wanted to be on james’s mind like that, to consume his every thought. he got off on the idea of someone thinking about him like that. barty noticed the little details, all the things that james liked so that he could use it to make james think he actually cared. it got to a point where barty was trying so hard to get james obsessed with him, he didn’t realise that the only thing he could think about was james. his mood depended on how james reacted to him, how james acted and even the tone he spoke in.
#barty got the narcissism trait from his mother#barty had james hooked around his finger and he knew it#& 100% used it to his advantage#this isn’t particularly about bpd or npd btw i just like these headcanons#bpd#bpd barty crouch jr#bcj#npd#npd barty crouch jr#bpd james potter#james potter#jfp#barty crouch jr#the line between a bit of ‘harmless’ teasing and genuine obsession blurred fast#i still have a oneshot up on my ao3 profile… cant say id recommend it but its there!#possible moodboard coming soon?#this flopped ass the first time and only irene saw it (thanks irene) so its a repost#please dont flop…
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i'm like three pages into all systems red and have decided that murderbot is like if gideon nav was in ancillary justice
#this is high praise i was hooked from the first line#tlt#the locked tomb#the murderbot diaries#all systems red#ancillary justice
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If a Scholomance tv series gets made, I want the first scene to be El on the floor in her room, knife in gut, Jack on top of her with that lovely smear of blood on his mouth, as she’s desperately reaching for the mana crystal just out of reach.
Freeze frame.
“Yup, that’s me. You’re probably wondering how I ended up in this situation.”
#i love the first line of a deadly education as much as the next person#but this would set the tone so perfectly#i also think it would be a good hook/tension builder#because the first few chapters—bless el and her endless inner monologue—are pretty thin in terms of plot#so it would create enough immediate tension to then set up el’s character and the world#partially through copious voiceover and also plenty of flashbacks to el’s pre-scholomance life#so by the end of the episode when we get back to jack’s attack#we understand that el could eviscerate him#and we understand why she won’t#the scholomance#a deadly education
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how you feel about this 'bot?
BASTION!!!!!! I absolutely adore him!!!! I like to think we would be the bestest of friends ✨
He just wants to explore and learn more about life and living and nature!!! Bastion deserves everything that is good and pure in this world. I just want him to be happy. He deserves friends and hugs and only the best!!!! I love his little beep boops <3
#Clay Art#Clay Answers#Clay Posts#CL8-0N#askbox#clay replies#asks#robot art#my art#overwatch bastion#bastion overwatch#bastion#overwatch 2#overwatch#omnics#Bastion is adorable and i love him and he is also so so so gender#also fun bonus fact! Bastion was the sole reason for how i was convinced by my friends to get OW in the first place#“pspspsps you can play as a silly robottttt”#hook line and sinker ✨#claybot#BFFs 💛💙
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stop shaving and start using that razor the way it was meant to be used
#txt#parallel lines#based off the converse kf what someone told me once#he also happened to be my first kiss and hook up (did not enjoy it)
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The witch was keeping secrets, too. But were hers as dire as his?
#Manon Blackbeak#Dorian Havilliard#Kingdom of Ash#Sarah J. Maas#Manorian#SJM#Witchling#Princeling#Chapter 7#reading reacts#reactions while reading#first read#read with me#read along#no spoilers please#THE FINAL LINE HOOKS EVERY TIME#THIS BOOK#THE witch#Witch boy#secret secret are no fun all they do is make a fangirl go insane and lose sleep reading because every chapter ends in a way that I must know
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I've literally never understood parents who don't let their like... TODDLER age kids play with kids of the "opposite" gender. Like wtf do you think your 3 year old is gonna get up to????? News flash heteros people aren't literally born sexual beings and you don't need to protect your sweet baby girl from the boy from her preschool class.
Which also makes boy/girl friendships later on actually LESS TABOO meaning, if your kid grew up being friends with OTHER GENDERS, they will be less likely to see others solely as potential romantic/sexual objects and can actually have positive normal friendships with people of any sex or gender. Who fucking knew that if you don't treat something as FORBIDDEN then it stops being so appealing, especially if you have a rebellious streak
#its just fucking weird!!!!#like i know im a guy now but when i was little i was allowed to play with anyone of any gender. it wasnt a factor#my first ''friend'' (another baby about my age when i was like less than 1 year old) was a boy!!!#my parents are far from perfect vut at least they didnt treat gender as this all important thing that actually really matters#me and my siblings could do whatever we wanted with our hair and could dress how we wanted and i played with trucks and my brother played#with barbies!!! and guess what only one of us ended up trans and gay as far as i know !!!!!#also my dad took me fishing and taught me how to tie the line and bait the hooks and i sucked at it but he still taught me#he didnt assume i wouldnt want to just cus i was a 'girl' and if i ever showed any interest in mechanical stuff he would have taught me that#my mom taught my other brother how to sew just like she taught me and my sister. it wasnt cus of gender roles it was cus we were creative#our other brother might know too idk!! i havent asked. but my mom was basically a seamstress so she probably taught us all#tho i suck at it unfortunately#anyway point is stop making gender and inter-gender friendships such a big fucking deal and maybe your kid will actually grow up normal#''men and women cant be just friends'' only because you never let boys and girls be friends ☝️ 🤓
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how. how have you won. how is that anything but the worst, most unnatural dialogue in the history of man. die
#sorry I couldn’t stop thinking about this scene#genuinely so bad#there was zero precedent for this#from either of them#nor implication this would work or be convincing#im positive this is drawing on a common literary trend. which. does not work well here#I hate that one line of dialogue so so so so much#oh context: they just hooked up for the first time and she’s asking him to stay the night#they’ve demolished her room (fire. lightning. explosions. no for real)
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