#Twisted gold

[icaroif]

Chapter 2 is out!

Chapter two is out! Exactly a year after the first, which at the very least is an amusing consistency. This update adds over 40,000 words, doubling the length of the demo!

 I’ve stared for what feels like decades at the words on the screen so I could really use some help spotting inconsistencies (especially with characters!), issues with pacing, places of confusion. I am absolutely overwhelmed with this for a first project, but I am equally determined to continue. I’m a little desperate for feedback so please tell me what you think! If you liked it, tell me why. If you didn’t, tell me what. If you gave it a shot but it failed to grab you attention let me know where and why if you can!

 I hope things start to come together strongly for this chapter and you enjoy it as much as I did writing it.

I’ve a few more in-depth thoughts about a few things I could use suggestions and help with and I’ll post those in a little while.

 In the meantime I hope you have had a happy new year and enjoy the story!

-Icaro

DEMO

Things to expect in this chapter: Two (2) fights. Three (3) new ROs. A lot of walking. The calasso being cute. More worldbuilding! And more!

[ryllen]

"Don't u know what u're asking me with these?

'Abandon the sea, and stay on land'"

"Are you sure you know~ what u're getting into, Trey-san?"

[x] [x] [x]

[marrr444]

Some of you have never married a girl you thought you didn't love to protect her reputation then realized you were actually always madly in love with her but she had run off to Paris with your best friend who was also in love with her and your dad didn't let you go to Paris because your little sister had run off to bring back from the dead her ghost boyfriend with the help of a crazy-looking immortal purple-eyed man and it shows.

[skittikyu]

what a jax@$$

[rakiah]

Funny fic prompt: the teachers using Vil to lure Leona into good grades.

Essentially the teachers realize that Vil is the one person who can get Leona to do shit with minimal complaining and Trein, the guy who vowed not to retire until Leona's graduates, starts plotting.

Cue surprise third year class reorganization where Leona and Vil conveniently end up in the same class.

Leona is so smitten with Vil that he forgets to suppress the lion instinct of following his queen around and ends up in the classrooms where he needs to be. Vil also constantly nags Leona to do his work and, once again, Leona loves his queen too much to say no.

The pair catch on real quick curtesy of Trein's knowing smiles sent their way. Vil is absolutely for this plan while Leona is cursing his cat instincts. Though it comes at the cost of Vil being trapped as a pillow for hours on end constantly pampering Leona once class is over.

This is a wonderful and funny prompt that I’ll be glad to put in a full long comic! So, maybe the next one after my ongoing (о´∀`о)

[marzipanandminutiae]

giant bags of thread collected by old ladies over their lifetimes and never used, then donated to antique shops or sold on FB Marketplace, save me

image source

protect and preserve me, immense ziplock bags full of 50 years' "oh but I have to have the EXACT SHADE of this fabric even though I'll never use 300 yards of thread!"

("Marzi why not buy new thread?" 99% of it is plastic and finding more than a handful of colors in cotton thread is incredibly rare in brick-and-mortar stores. let alone thread in fibers besides polyester and cotton, or buttonhole twist)

("come on, now, Marzi- THREAD can't possibly make you sweat more or catch fire and stick to your skin while burning, and isn't that your reasoning for using only natural-fiber fabrics?" listen. Irrational Brain Like When Zero Plastic. don't @ me)

[oryou-condred]

robes

[suntails]

🐺⚔️

[mellosdrawings]

Ok, another self-indulgent coz I'm weak to some meme redraw and this one was fun.

[glitteringstardust]

👑 evil queen/pomefiore-inspired cookies by yuyu's sugar art

[bowtiesarecool11]

The Devil's Chord

S14 E02

[icaroif]

Found a bug when the caravan bandits show up. Choosing "protect your friends" keeps looping back to the same choice

Fixed! Thank you!

[dinoari]

Your left hand or your right?

[letitbehurt]

Love a Caretaker who is technically awful, and about to do something undeniably illegal or amoral, but comes across an injured Whumpee instead.

Maybe Whumpee’s just run from a fight they couldn’t win and they’re bleeding out, hardly able to stand up on their own, and Caretaker is a lot of things but they’re not a monster, they won’t just leave Whumpee there to die. But they will be complaining about how heavy Whumpee is all the way to the hospital.

[nocturnal-stims]

🦋 zarin.artist on IG

[rakiah]

Hot take: Vil is a clothing thief

Whenever they can't sleep in the same bed, Vil will use one of Leona's shirts as pjs for the comfort. Will he wear the stolen goods out in public? Absolutely not. Will he nuzzle his face into them when he misses his boyfriend? Yes.

Leona doesn't figure it out for quite a while but is very smug when he does. He also steals a few things from Vil, like his pillow. But most notably Leona will be the one to steal Vil's last name (Leona Schoenheit), which he will be 100 times more smug about.

Hello Hot Take anon!

My, I couldn’t be more agree with that take~ After all, they’re quite stubborn so, why not apply that characteristic trait of their personality to not wanting to get rid of the other’s scent by any means. Pretty charming!

And Vil will wear Leona’s shirt better that Leona himself. (when he’d be ok to wear it out in public) Can’t fight the oversized bf shirt style 😌