#03.06.20

[dianamoise17]

I feel like writing more this days... i don’t know why. I just feel like I should do it! My ”thinking problem„ is not over yet. I still think like every second I’m not on my phone or watching something. It is so hard!

I know it's hard to love yourself and I accept it. I hate myself! And I accepted it. But I am working in loving myself. I want to accept myself with al I think is wrong about me but in reality isn't.

-03.06.20

[liamnews]

liampayne: BLACK LIVES MATTER 

[mariojavisilva]

— Mientras camino a la puerta me doy cuenta de que no hay vuelta atrás

Sé que no me olvidarás y sé que no voy a olvidarte jamas.

La Banda Bastón

_mjavy_

[baul-de-frases]

— A veces suelo desaparecer... Pero siempre vuelvo.

M Javier

[actualhumansunshine]

In an exclusive chat, Niall talked me through the songs one by one.

1. Heartbreak Weather

Heartbreak Weather is where it all stems from. I had the title of that song for ages and then I wrote the song afterwards. The Heartbreak Weather thing helped me to write the album, I had the concept and I was able to correlate my feelings with different weather patterns. Heartbreak Weather is about the start of the relationship and the song's quite a personal song but I've dressed it up as a happy tune. I'm pretty decent at that.

There's a lot of sad songs that are dressed up as happier sounding ones. This has an eighties kind of feel to it, it makes you feel happy as soon as it starts and that's what I wanted. That's why I wanted to start the album with it because it really perks your ears up straight away. I absolutely love this song.

2. Black and White

Black and White was one of my favourite songs that I've ever had the pleasure of making. When we were in the studio I just had the best time. We were in the Bahamas and I think of this song as a wedding song. I had the title for a while and I was trying to think what I could do with it. I was getting a bit nostalgic with it and the song is basically about the first person you ever go out with, when you're like 15, you're like, that's it, me and you are getting married.

That's it, I've seen it in the movies it looks exactly like this. So I just thought black and white would be like the black suit and white dress and it would become a bit of a wedding song. It's got a very happy feel to it, like a stomping driving tune. I think it might be my favourite on the album.

3. Dear Patience

Dear Patience is basically at the start of the relationship, I was basically writing a letter to the feeling of patience and being like, 'Don't f*** it up. Take your time on this because you rush into stuff.' That's why it comes straight after Black and White because it's kind of contradicting itself. It's like, 'don't mess this one up, don't rush in too hard.' The verse is like, 'can we share a drink and let go of the pressure,' which is kind of like, 'me and you need to have a chat, patience.' That's where that came from.

4. Bend the Rules

Bend the Rules is not particularly personal. Slowly the album became a concept album and was less about me and more about different relationships and maybe that feeling that at the start of a relationship, you're not that trusting and this song kind of talks about, when I call you up, you might miss a name out when I ask you who's around and you're not breaking the rules but you're kind of bending them. In my head it was kind of like my Bruce Springsteen - Streets of Philadelphia moment.

5. Small Talk

Small Talk, I love this song. It's got a bit of a rasp to it, I always say it's a close neighbour of Slow Hands — a grungier version. It's got that chorus that when it kicks in it's very unexpected. The verse is kind of mysterious and then it's got this mad chorus that drops in and socks you. But I love this song — Small Talk and Nice To Meet Ya would be the egotistical part of the concept where you're out on the town and a bit of a joke, like, 'I'm going out tonight and it's going to be fun.'

6. Nice To Meet Ya

Same with this, it's the egotistical side, it's a bit of fun and it was the first single which felt like the only way I could announce myself back onto the scene in terms of what I had in front of me. I wanted to make a bit of noise and when it came out it did shock people and perked people's ears back up to me again so it did its job. I love that song. It's a great song to perform live.

7. Put A Little Love On Me

Put A Little Love On Me I wrote when it was raining and it's like, 'I'm sad, we're finished, put a little love on me'. It was one of those ones which was a tough write. It was very early and it was very raw when I was writing it but I think one of my favourite songs I've ever written.

8. Arms of a Stranger

Arms of a Stranger is more concept-based, it was written when I had the concept, and is that feeling of when you do finish up with someone, after Put A Little Love On Me, I tried to tell a story in the tracklisting. And yeah it's that feeling of, 'we're done and now I'm lying in the arms of a stranger, trying to get over you'. That's literally what the chorus is. It's very on the nose but with the concept I was aiming for it to be a bit more on the nose.

9. Everywhere

Everywhere is after that, when you're walking around and you feel like you absolutely see that person everywhere you go and in my case, I was seeing that a lot. You feel like you see them on the tube and feel like you see them everywhere you go. It was one of the first things I wrote down because that's one of the feelings that you get when you go through something like that, you feel like you see that person all the time. We wrote that on the beach in ten minutes in the Bahamas, it was one of the quicker writes.

10. Cross Your Mind

Cross Your mind started as a piano ballad actually, it was just a four-chord piano ballad that I was playing in the Bahamas. I came in one morning and the first thing I did was sit down, press the chord of F and just started singing. I sang the whole chorus, I had the chorus in a couple of minutes and all the words came out in one go and then I wrote from there. But the more I played it as a piano ballad, the more I started bouncing on my seat and then I was like, no, this can't be.

So then I was listening to a bit of Fleetwood Mac as per usual and Empire of the Sun and stuff like that and using that kind of stuff as a benchmark of what could be produced. That's where that came from. That will be up there as one of my favourites as well. It's about something really sad but it's got a really good feeling.

11. New Angel

New Angel is like, 'now I need to get over you! All of these sad songs have gone on for too long, I'm going to need something to distract me now'. It's based around that and New Angel is a title I had for a while.

12. No Judgement

No Judgement is based on a personal story of mine with someone I've known for a long time. I think the lyrics speak for themselves: 'When you're with me, no judgement.' It's like, you can do what you want, you can come and go as you please, I'll always be here for you. It's playing on the fact that I could be your love or your shoulder to cry on, I'm good.

13. San Francisco

San Francisco was a tough write too. It was based on the start of the relationship and wanting to go back to where it started. The song was called Take Me Back but I changed it to San Francisco because the song is basically about San Francisco and the area.

14. Still

Still was the quickest song I've ever written. I wrote it in about seven minutes. I was in the studio and then the people I was working with went for dinner and I was in the studio on my own and I picked up this guitar which was in a weird tuning and I started singing and didn't stop. I kept going and wrote that I'm still in love with you, after all of these songs I've written, the punchline is, 'I'm still in love with you'. You're apologising and you're doing a bit of self-deprecation and then at the end, 'I'm still in love with you'.

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[draqe]

[memoriafilmica]

Booksmart.

(2019) Olivia Wilde.

[swt-serendipity]

2019-20 Goals Game 68/82 (vs Detroit Red Wings)

Goal 1: Kane

[leeminholinoing]

03.06.20: recap

harry is MIA

louis is MIA

sm activity: IG

[lilolilyrae]

List 5 things that make you happy and then put this in the inbox of the past 10 people who reblogged something from you. Spread the positivity!

<3<3<3

Sitting in the sun

Finally having my natural sleep rhythm back as my internship is over

Doing crossword puzzles with my mum (online atm, but still)

[I had written this down the last time I got a 5things ask & had too many ideas, so it's a but old, but still] Watching the baby merls (all 3 birds survived!) in front of the window

Drinking moroccan mint black tea and remembering the summer I spent there

Thanks for the ask!!!

[liamnews]

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[mariojavisilva]

— La manipuladora sin atención ni amor en casa y el puberto sin agallas, fin. Bitches

Javi

[thebabayagaofediting]

Review of Love Me (Series)

Author: @unbelievableholland

Parts: Prologue | Part One | Part Two | Part Three | Part Four | Part Five 

Important Note: I am not a professional writer nor editor, the advice I give is from personal experience and classes I have taken. ALSO, ANY CRITICISM WILL NEVER REFLECT the author, I am only looking at the piece of work they’ve posted. Not everything I say will be right, I am only limited to my own experience with writing. 

My review is below. 

I went through this story as if I was an editor for this series. I know the author cannot go back and change past mistakes, but hopefully there is something you (the reader) can take away to improve your own writing.  

Prologue

- I like that you established his awkwardness/shyness, not just because he just met Tony’s daughter but because he’s normally shy with girls. 

- In future chapters, we can see that the shyness/awkwardness goes away because he’s more comfortable around the reader and her presence. 

- With the flashback I got a bit confused when the line,” it isn’t long until strange told everyone what is actually happening, and why they need to get the compound- or at least, what’s left of it. 

- Was the reader on Titan when everyone got snapped? You didn’t really establish where the reader was before the snap and after the snap you breezed by to Tony’s death. 

-If you ever don’t feel like writing a large action scene with many moving parts you could use a trick like, “ everything passed me like it was a blur.” 

- It's good that you used italics to establish a flashback and separate it from the normal-looking text. 

- From what I can remember the reader’s choice of numbing her pain (alcohol) doesn’t come up in chapters 1-5.  This seems to be a detail that didn’t make it into the actual story. 

- I can see the hints of Peter and the reader being in a relationship and see his change in attitude which is a future foreshadowing of their relationship falling out. 

Part One

-  Good starting line.

- Maybe I missed it, but I didn’t really see anything that established the time in which this story takes place. I can see that it takes place after Thanos and Tony’s death, but there isn’t anything else that indicates where we are time-wise. Is it 2 months? A week? A year? 

- I defiantly see the parallels between Tony and Y/N. 

Part Two 

- “Because before you went to sleep, you got a notification on your phone from E.V.I. that someone entered your lab. That someone is Peter.” Wasn’t she in a coma? How could she look at her phone? 

- The entire scene where Peter and Y/N are cuddling in the hospital bed, I completely forgot he was in the bed with her the entire time while she was having a conversation with Bruce. 

-“Y/N!! Make us think your dead one more time and I’m taking away your lab privileges!” This made me laugh. 

- “The room is for therapeutic purposes...” This paragraph reminded me of Cognitive Behavioural Therapy or Expose Therapy (You re-create a trauma to help get over it)

-”You don’t talk, because you recognize this voice.” How does the reader know its Zemo? Did her father warn her? Did Steve say something to her? Or did she discover old S.H.E.I.L.D files (aka Hydra) that said they transferred his consciousness into a computer?

- “Peter left the compound after the breakup.” They broke up? It didn’t really seem like they were in a relationship? Or maybe I just missed it. 

- “So life went on.” Like what is the usual now? Does Y/N never leave her lab? Does she constantly live in her room? What's Bruce, Falcon, Bucky, Happy, and whoever else doing?

Part Three 

-”When you woke up, you found yourself attached to multiple wires. You felt cold, hard metal on your back and a helmet-like thing on your head. There were thick cuffs attaching your hands, feet, and torso to the metal bed.” More description would have really help the reader in-vision themselves in this situation. 

-”Pulling away, May held her nephew’s hand,” There’s no need to add, ‘nephew's hand” its established in the lines before that May is his aunt. 

- “Everything felt very overwhelming and he didn’t know how to handle it. “ Once again, describe how it feels to be overwhelmed. Really try to drag the reader in and really take advantage of having access to his thoughts. 

-“Maybe it’s your spider powers evolving?” Ned asked. Lmao of course Ned.

- “Like that time I felt like I was being electrocuted, or that time where my stomach felt like it was being punched.” Okay good, good. 

Part Four 

” A soft buzzing could be heard around the room as the mystery man spoke. He asked you a question, but you failed to answer. You were paralyzed sure, but they had granted you the ability to move your mouth in order to speak; well, more like whisper slightly.” Okay, I see where you’re going with this, but you have to be more descriptive of the people in the scene. 

- “ A lab coat hanging over his body and black-rimmed glasses to complete the overall stereotypical scientist look.” Love the description, it gives me a good idea of what he looks like. 

- “Sweating didn’t help though. It only intensified the burning that surrounded your body. The temperature around you felt like it was increasing and every cell in your body felt like it was tearing itself apart. “ Love this description. 

- “It lasted long.”  Like how did it feel? Once again describe emotions. 

Part Five 

- illusions, nice touch. 

- Didn’t see the twist where the reader is actually underneath the compound. 

Overall Thoughts

-  I believe you have a good foundation for the story here. I did read all 24.3K (some parts twice).  

- Good job in separating your work so it isn’t in just one giant paragraph. 

- Also, good use of  “ --”  to indicate scene change. 

- The big take away for this would be to add a more descriptive language. As highlighted above, when I read through each part I found that there was a lack of a description of settings and emotions. 

- Regarding settings, you have to remember that you have to set the stage for the reader. In part two Peter mentions Y/N’s new lab looking like her new lab with new tech. Okay, so what does it look like? You have to give the reader important details and then they can fill in the small details.  You don’t have to describe every single thing in the room, just describe the few things that you feel matter the most to the story.

- Regarding emotions, you want to essentially put emotions into the minds of the people reading. What does it feel like to be overwhelmed? What is your heart doing? your mind? what does your body feel like.

- I think the five senses are key when trying to set up a scene. What do you hear?What do you smell? Do you taste anything? What does X feel like? What do you see? 

- Outlining is very important when you’re writing a series. Sometimes throughout your story, you would raise a question and never answer it. Ex. Y/N Stark doesn’t like hospitals, why? Or there was just a lack of consistency with ideas. Ex. In the prologue Y/N Stark is a heavy drinker and she uses it as an outlet to cope, but in parts 1-5 she doesn’t drink any alcohol.  These are just a few examples. 

- I noticed in very high emotional moments in the story (when the reader is in her coma) everyone reacted in the exact same way. In a situation like this, you would describe facial expressions and body movements to make people different. For example, yes Happy would be an emotional mess, but maybe not Sam. Sam seems to have a close relationship with the reader, but Sam’s a man who's seen war. He wouldn’t be so emotionally vulnerable on the outside. 

- I’m unfamiliar with your blog so I’m unsure if you’ve discussed publicly the struggles you go through with writing. My biggest tip I can give you when it comes to spelling, grammar, proper tense (past/present), is to give your writing time. Like after finishing the next chapter wait a day or two. The reason I suggest this is because we (as the writer) don’t see our mistakes because we are so used to seeing our writing. By giving yourself time, you can read through your work with fresh eyes and possibly catch common mistakes and edit much better. I believe you can download Grammarly for free on any computer if you don’t already use it. I just use the free version and I find it a helpful tool to have around.  

- When it comes to the next series you do, try to focus on one POV style. It can get confusing for readers if we are bouncing between all the POV styles in one chapter.  By also using one POV you can create tension because we don’t know what everyone is thinking and what they’re going to do next.  You probably know the different Point of View styles from reading books/fan-fictions in your spare time, but here’s a refresher if you need one. Click Here

- I think a first easy step (if you wish to take it) for the next part of your series would be to try and be more descriptive with your settings and emotional states. 

Well this is the end of my review, I hope I was able to give provide some good advice! :) 

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