#tnp rewrite

[mothdapple]

Hi! Just stopping by to say I'm so happy you are continuing Shaken Roots, Dawn has been excellent so far! I cannot tell you how pumped I was to get the ao3 update notification lol

I hope you continue to feel inspired. Shaken Roots has been some of my favorite Warriors content period :)

Ahh thank you so much!! ❤️😭

I’m so glad you’ve been enjoying it. I’ve been having a great time writing it!

[javatello]

Wc rewrite doodles, my rewrite ideas can be found here!

[shummthechumm]

assorted (rewrite) designs that i never posted here? das crazyyy

[northern-passage]

some of you may have seen over on my kithj blog but i'm currently in the process of editing/rewriting the current chapters of tnp (mainly the prologue & ch1) i'm only on the prologue right now but making steady progress. i'm getting to a lot of edits i've been putting off (like the wraith fight) and updating/revising some of the lore and worldbuilding. i'm hopeful this will improve what's already there and also motivate me to keep going and finally get back in the saddle completely.

i've made the decision to cut out certain choices, the biggest ones being that you can no longer turn Clementine away on the road (it was always a bit of an empty choice and just resulted in the player losing interactions with a main character who is ultimately unavoidable) as well as genderlocking the sibling. congrats, you now have a little sister!

otherwise the only other major changes i'm planning on at the moment is the aforementioned wraith fight, though i don't imagine the fight itself changing too much, mainly the structure and choices, and then i also plan to rewrite Noel's route in ch1. Noel's route has been something that has bothered me since the start, and i'm going to essentially swap xir path in ch1-- rather than going to the isolation district (which ultimately doesn't do much, since you go with him either way the following day in ch2) you'll be going along with him on his house calls. there are a lot of other minor things i'll be editing as well, but those are the only big content changes i'm looking at currently.

the wraith fight will probably take some time, and i want to update with both chapter overhauls completed, so don't expect that any time soon, but i figured i'd share what i'm up to at the moment :-) thank you as always for your patience and support!

[glittergoats]

dead men tell no tales

[blood-choke]

hey how are you doing? We haven’t heard anything from you in a while and I wanted to check up on you

hi i'm doing okay :-) i'm still working on the next chapter! it's just a complex chapter so it's taking me a while. lots of dialogue, which personally takes me a lot of time to perfect, plus the romance routes will lock in this chapter, which are quite complicated due to all of the possible poly variations.

i'm also currently working on my other project (northern passage) which kinda has priority at the moment since it's been over a year since i've updated it. still writing, just slow :3

[bonefall]

I was never able to really get a feel for Leafpool's personality in the books, especially since she's always contrasted with Squirrelflight who has a pretty consistent personality (at least for Warriors standards). She's kind of like Hollyleaf where they change her personality depending on what they want to happen in the plot I think. How do you approach writing her? I'm really fond of your Spottedleaf, so I was wonder if Leafpool has any fun quirks like her.

[ID: Leafpool from Warrior Cats. She is chunky, has a mane, and green eyes. Her stripes are horizontal.]

I approach Leafpool as being VERY tired. Her life is characterized as never really being in control of her own fate, being punished for any simple pleasures she takes tenfold, so I write her as becoming very defeatist. Poor girl.

Because Leafpool is never in REAL control, somehow, it gives her this air that she's in total control. You can't scare her. StarClan can tell her that her kids are cursed, Hollyleaf can tell her to kill herself, Bramblestar can jump in front of her and snarl, she's never more than briefly phased. "Yeah sure this may as well happen."

In a way, she's almost the total opposite of Jayfeather, who never met a rule he wasn't willing to punch. It is interesting that each one of the Three has a unique relationship to the fate that chains up Leafpool.

Allows herself to love Mothpaw... war breaks out and Moth has to return to RiverClan.

Tries to warn Squilf about Brambleclaw in spite of StarClan wanting them to be together, first fight with her sister ever.

Runs off with Crowfeather, returns home to find out her mentor died before she could say goodbye.

Gives birth, allows Squilf to take them, eventually gets threatened by Hollyleaf.

(side note: i am considering leafpool's name being an honor title, with her old name being Leafstripe, and Squirrelpaw failing two assessments just like Nightheart)

But a big change in my rewrite is that the dramatic scenes that aren't consistent with that resigned sorrow go to Crowfeather. He's a complete and utter ham. Leafpool isn't out here trying to name Hollykit 'Crowkit' or confessing her unwavering love for him in front of his wife and child, THAT is Crowfeather making an ass of HIMSELF in front of that wife and child lmao.

Leaf's feelings are more complicated and repressed. Hard life.

On the bright side though, there ARE changes from canon so that the Clan has more nuanced feelings about her instead of her whole life being a nonstop beatdown.

Most of ThunderClan, which heavily leans Fire Alone, agrees that Leafpool did the right thing by giving her kits to Squilf to invoke the Queen's Rights. Sure she lapsed, but Fire Alone cats are softer on the Cleric's Vow in general.

Bramblestar demoting her in Cruel Season has a VERY mixed reception. It's Leafpool!! Leafpool Moonpool!!!

Her death many years later in the Sister Raid actually tanks Bramblestar's reputation. It was seen as cruel, pointless, and avoidable, and they lost a very popular and experienced Cleric.

(side note again: still considering how the 'unclear sign' plot beat is going to go in my rewrite, because i cannot imagine jayfeather not just lying about that. "yeah yeah yeah they said yes bramblestar, im supposed to heal this cat obviously. move.")

Misc Design Stuff:

She's got a mane that you can see on Dovewing too, since Dove is Leaf's grandchild now.

Like Sandstorm, uncle Longtail, and grandpaw Runningwind, Leafpool's stripes are horizontal.

I'm still doing research into what she has specifically, but Bonefall Leafpool is intersex. Those are stud jowls.

Considering the cat version of PCOS because it explains a lot; weight gain, a receding hairline that could be shared with Lionblaze, the jowls as a facial hair parallel, difficult pregnancy, etc.

Still doing my research though.

And lastly, Mothpool is endgame in this Rewrite. They can never be together officially, but it's about the yearning. It's about finding freedom with your escapist fantasy partner or being in shackles with your true love. She chose the CHAINS.

[vaugarde]

speaking of tawnypelt its so funny when people go “mothpool is bad because people reduce mothwings character to just this fanon relationship! why not focus on her relationship with her thunderclan siblings!!!” 

like. girl WHAT relationship?

[haveyoureadthisfanfic]

Summary: Over stone and water, toward the setting sun; No Clan will survive unless all are one. A WindClan apprentice with high expectations, a RiverClan dreamer with a paw in two worlds, a ThunderClan warrior struggling to get out of his father's shadow, and a defector to ShadowClan who shares his ambitious streak. When StarClan chose these four cats to guide the four warrior Clans to their new home, they knew their journey would not be an easy one. Overcoming distance and danger is one thing; learning to work together with rivals from other Clans is another. But these cats must find a way to set aside the differences and borders between them, or the Clans will be lost forever.

Note from submitter: A Very good tnp rewrite that has been heartbreakingly abandoned. Some of the latest chapters still stick with me 5 years later. Recommend reading what's there

[the-owl-tree]

Thoughts on Graystripe?

i'm so glad he's dead. once bramblestar is dead, i want the line of cats who are unnecessarily favored by the authors to end once and for all.

like i enjoy graystripe, he's cute and funny and i get why people still really like him....but he doesn't get to really ever deal with the consequences of his actions.

He routinely ditches his apprentice and puts the work onto Firestar -> Brackenfur never holds resentment towards Graystripe and for whatever reason despite doing jack shit this is still enough to make him qualify for deputy.

He ditches his Clan -> he barely gets any resistance, the bit he does get is from Darkstripe who is portrayed to be in the wrong.

He ditches his kids in RiverClan who nearly face execution because they're half-clan -> they never resent him despite their only real kin abandoning them and not being there to defend them when they were rounded up to be k i l l e d

he never defends briarlight or his other children against millie -> the narrative never blames him, his kids never hold resentment towards him. his absence puts more onus on the mother, he's a garbage father and the narrative never wants to address that

He'd be more enjoyable if he did face consequences! If his relationship with his mates and children was strained, his Clan didn't respect him, and he wasn't a good deputy. it's okay if he suck, male characters getting consequences is good!!!!!!

[fatal-rewrites-warriors]

r u changing the warriors universe in ur rewrite to remove anti native content? i love warrior rewrites but i feel like this is always overlooked in them (i havent read ur stuff yet btw)

Yeah as much as I can! I'm not native myself and only really familiar with Ojibwa culture, but I've gone ahead and removed the Tribe entirely in favour of a completely original group(s) of cats, and switched medicine cat to healer. Me and my brainstorm buddy have also worked out how to change plot points away from the white savior stuff involving outside groups as well

Which! I think it's weird that the clan was depicted as "better" even from a narrative standpoint? Maybe this was never actually canon, but it was always my understanding that the roadtrip cats were sent away to find a new home AND to learn skills necessary to make that home livable. It felt to me that they should've been learning new skills not enforcing the ones they already have onto other populatio--

Oh wait. Maybe that's just what the Erins think moving to a new place involves, given...the colonialism. Huh. Suddenly a lot more shit about TNP makes sense.

[mothdapple]

Shaken Roots is back!! The first chapter of SR: Dawn is now posted :)

[troutfur]

But what if Firestar did end up dying to the fox trap for good?

[rewritedesigns]

Goldenflower

A blue classic torbie and white molly. (ll, RR, ReRe, lplp, whwh, LyLy|XOXo, BB, dd, dmdm, Aa, mcmc, spsp, tata, bmbm, ii, wbwb, EE, ShSh, CC, kk, Wswg|acac, sfsf, JbJb, mm, RtRt, mkmk, pdpd)

(More under the cut)

BIO

Name:

Goldenflower

Clanmew Name:

Rreenponma

Yellow: Golden, orange-yellow (Rreen) + Flower (Ponma)

Previous Name:

Goldenkit, Goldenpaw

Family:

Daughter of Speckletail and Smallear. Sister of Lionheart, Mistleclaw and Snowkit. Aunt of Cinderpelt, Brackenfur, Thornclaw and Brightheart. Mother of Swiftpaw, Star Brambleflower and Tawnypelt. Ex-mate of Star Tigerclaw. Grandmother of Flametail, Dawnpelt, Tigerheart, Alderheart and Sparkpelt.

Rank:

Senior Warrior (Queen)

Notes:

She has braids

She is generally less fluffier than her brother bc of this

She can be sweet but she also has a sharp tongue like her mother

Is an efficient cat

[cat-alyzing]

The Cats Cultures, Groups and Stories

The Archaic Lake Cats

Archaic Lake Cats Culture

Known Archaic Cats

The Tribe of Rushing Water

Tribe of Rushing Water Culture

Tribe Cats Allegiances (DOTC)

Tribes Cats Allegiances (PO3)

Curse of a Cougar

The Ancient Camps

Ancient Camp Cultures

Ancient Cats Allegiances (DOTC)

The Oldest Stories

The Vally Clans Coalition

Valley Clans Cultures

Laws of the Valley

Valley Cats (ASOF/TPB)

Valley Cats (TPP/TNP)

Stories in the Clans

Roles in the Valley Clans

Ceremonies of the Clans

Cuisines in the Clans

The Lakeland Alliance

Lake Clan Cultures

Laws of the Lake

Lake Clans Cats (TPP/TNP)

Lake Clan Cats (FCOF/PO3)

Lake Clan Cats (AOC/TBC)

Roles in the Lake Clans

New Cuisines of the Lake Clans

The Sisters

The Sister’s Culture

Sister’s Founders

Modern Sister’s Cats

The Shifting Spirits

The Autumn Annihilator

The Summer Warden

The Winter God

The Spring Creator

Songs of the Sister’s

Rituals

Mix of Groups

Bloodclan Culture

Bloodclan Cats (ASOF/TPB)

The Kin Backstory

The Kin Cats Allegiances

The Church Cats

The Church Cats Residents

The Arcs

A Spark of Fire

The Perilous Prophecy

Five Cats of Fate

Apocalypse of Change (WIP Name)

[violetparakeetdraweroffurries]

Thinking of renaming Leafpool -> Maplesplash and Squirrelflight -> Kestrelscorch. Their canon names are iconic but the urge to rename them to something that fits a theme and reflects their personalities is stronger

Also, Kestrel is the older sibling, and they have more siblings

Sandstorm -> Morningstorm. It's just pretty. Redtail and Runningwind wanted a pretty name for a pretty kitty

Dovewing -> Dovelight & Ivypool -> Ivyshadow. Really wanted an angel/devil motif w/ them since they were dragged into a war between the holy and the damned w/o having a choice in the matter, and them passing on their appearances to their healer children reflects how their trauma continues to haunt them and will repeat themselves for as long as they, and the Clans at large, continue to be overexposed to StarClan's will and the idea that destiny and dichotomous morality is all consuming. In this essay I will-

Also Frostpaw is an Ivy child and a charcoal marble torbie. Bristle, Flip, and Thrift will get a different mom

It'll be funny if Dove named her palest kit Shadowkit

Ivy should've been more heavily scarred. The Dark Forest is not a kind place, and her scars and broken jaw are a holdover from her time there. The jaw in particular is important; it's not a liability in combat and the sharp teeth can even stab opponents, but it makes her life outside of battle more difficult.

Twigbranch -> Morningkit & Violetkit -> Eveningkit. They were less than a day old when they are found, their mom nowhere to be found. It's obvious that the gray tabby is older, as she was dry and fluffy while the bicolor kit is wet and has a piece of caul on her head. Sparkpaw, still grieving her grandma's passing, names the tabby after Morningstorm. Needlepaw, seeing the time they found them, names her after the moment she fell in love with the baby. The party wonders about the circumstances of Morningstorm and Mistfeather's deaths, and wonder if the kits and the deaths are part of the prophecy