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nobodysdaydreams · 2 years ago

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Hello @sophieswundergarten my dear friend! I'm so sorry that it took a while, but I finally have my thoughts on your amazing review/analysis of my chapter! I always love getting your updates, and am especially excited to read your thoughts on the latest installment of this fic!

I apologize in advance, because this is a lot (and sorry for the spelling and grammar mistakes, I typed this up kinda late)...

I'm glad you liked the Isaac stuff! They have so many scenes of him standing in the background with Garrison, I figured, why not give them a little context?

"You write all of the characters with such an excellent element of sympathy and humanness, and I am hugely impressed by it."

^^ Thank you so much! My goal is to make you understand and empathize with every character (even if you don't support what they are doing or even like them as a person, you at least see and understand who they are and what they want and why they want it), and I'm glad to know that my writing is achieving that so far.

Also, you were right- the "yesterday was Tuesday, so-" line is very much a book SQ line.

"Oooh, the SQ narration is getting more and more rebellious. (Is this where we will finally see the punk rock version?)"

^I hope you know that this made me laugh out loud, because I just could not help imagining an alternative where I like... wrote this incredibly long angsty serious fic, and then gradually made it crack fic about SQ going to art college and falling in with an alternative punk rock crowd and slowly phased out all the other characters until the whole thing just becomes a full-on crack fic of punk rock SQ and his crew trashing Curtain in their songs in an effort to take down his cult.

And yep. Curtain has the same adoptive instincts as Nicholas. If only he wasn't so toxic.

"WHY DOES HE THINK NO ONE LIKES HIM??? HE FEELS LIKE NO ONE WANTS HIM THAT’S SUCH A WELL-WRITTEN PART BUT ALSO IT SHREDDED MY HEART"

^I'm sorry about your heart. I really felt for Sticky, especially since (as I know you've heard me rant), he doesn't have the parental figures the other children have AND he doesn't have the friends/social connections either. From his perspective, it really feels like his gift is the only thing he is valued for, and that's something I wanted to explore in my writing.

"Oh, and now we get to see Miss Perumal begin to put it all together! You do such a great job of writing her as proactive, but not impulsive or hasty. You phrased the messages as so neutral and passive, but it’s still uncanny. It makes it feel like it very well could just be someone’s stream of consciousness. And Miss Perumal is of course a responsible daughter. Although I’m sad that she feels guilty!! Everyone in this show/book/universe has issues with either taking too much responsibility on themselves, or not enough."

^I don't want to bullet-point your whole review back, but I'm glad you like how I'm writing Miss Perumal! I was worried her subplot wasn't going to hit as hard as the others, but I'm glad to see you're invested. And yeah, literally every character in my fic really just needs to be told that this is not their fault (while in Nathaniel/Curtain/Garrison's case there's a lot that IS their fault, Pedalian's death isn't one of those things, but they still blame themselves. Or at least Garrison did blame herself before she forgot he existed).

“SQ’s historical lack of friends wasn’t something Reynie knew about, but he did sense the disappointment in SQ’s voice when he said he wasn’t allowed to bring a friend. Maybe he could use that to convince SQ that it was okay to bend the rules sometimes” THERE IT IS. THE SAD PART. Because, I don’t think you know this, (I say, to the author of the fic as I climb on top of the podium) but those two lines are insane. [...] And the way that you captured all of that, all of how the characters are feeling and their history and intents and how the audience is going to feel, and how they know what’s going to come of this, in two sentences, is insane! It’s bizarre. It’s wildly talented and fantastic and I want to give you the biggest hug but also how dare you sum up a whole, deeply complex and emotionally painful tragedy in less than fifty words what on earth. AND REYNIE FEELS SO AWFUL. IT IS HURTING MY HEART. The payoff for your point with colleges!! Oh, you’re so genius. I’m infuriated but know that I love you."

^Didn't want to repost most of your whole rant, but it was amazing. I LOVE writing perspective switches, and Reynie and SQ's were ones I loved to write because they both have their own agendas but they very much as not trying to manipulate or use each other, SQ is just trying to figure life out, and Reynie just wants to help his friends. Again, I'm sorry for hurting your heart, and I understand why your infuriated, but thank you for loving me anyway. I'm glad my fics, frustrating as they are, are appreciated.🥰

"The unreliable narration is wild, because he’s not actually that confrontational a person. He’s got opinions and independent thoughts, and he can definitely disagree with people, but he’s over here thinking he’s getting to be all disagreeable and unlikable and prickly when it’s just the way Curtain’s raised him into being an accidental boundary-less chronic people pleaser."

^I agree. One of the ways Curtain really messes with SQ is that he expects SQ to have complete trust in him and give him complete loyalty and obedience (which SQ, being a naturally nice and well-behaved child was inclined to give anyway) but ALSO expects SQ to be distrusting and suspicious of literally everyone else, which SQ is not inclined to do (I think if Constance was Curtain's kid, she would be the opposite. She'd have the distrust of others part down, but wouldn't be inclined to be as obedient).

"And Curtain’s unreliable too!! He’s trying to help SQ, but he also is a terribly messed up person and immediately jumps to his weird conspiracy theories."

^One of the reasons I really love writing from Curtain/Nathaniel's perspective is that it is incredibly and uniquely unreliable. He and his trauma have gaslighted himself into believing his lies as much as everyone else.

"~~He doesn’t ever say he won’t do it, just that he’s not supposed to~~"

^True.

"HE ACTUALLY REFERENCED THE S.O.S. OH GOODNESS HE HASN’T DONE THAT FOR LIKE THREE WHOLE CHAPTERS. IT’S PROBABLY NOT THAT IMPORTANT I’M JUST LOSING MY MIND ABOUT IT. Oh. He wants him to be friends with Kate. I hadn’t considered that, but it makes sense. It’s been really neat to see how he’s started thinking about her more and more and how he’ll fit her into his plans since meeting her."

^I'm so glad you noticed that! Now that Kate is back, Curtain for the first time feels like he has a shot at getting his friends family back too. So even though he has tried to avoid the pain of the memory, the door is slowly opening itself up again.

"WHY IS HE SO MISGUIDED. HE WANTS TO PROTECT SQ WHICH IS GOOD BUT HE’S ALSO SUPER WRONG. At least you made it better than the show, in giving Curtain a reason instead of just sounding like he’s being horrid and manipulative."

^YES! YOU GET IT MY FRIEND! The tragic irony of Curtain's perspective and character! The fact that even though he is objectively awful, he does (from his POV) have good intentions.

"I’ve always wondered if Reynie actually enjoyed art, because there’s no way that, even if he spent all day on it, he could come up with art of the caliber he seems to have on the spot with no prior experience. I like to believe he actually does enjoy art, and that part is genuine. He just has a little hobby, and it’s not something he likes as much as SQ, but he can appreciate it."

^I think Reynie does like it to some extent and has decent ability (although he probably read some tutorials somewhere and stuck to an artform he had some familiarity with, which would be the best and most effective strategy). But I also think he does like art and would have loved to be friends with SQ.

"OOH. It is getting to be like Curtain’s relationship with Garrison. Interesting…"

^Yep. As SQ is getting older, Curtain feels the need to start shifting to more forceful manipulation tactics.

"Just once, it would have been neat to see Curtain pass out when talking to SQ. Obviously he would never do that in the series as far as we’ve seen, but I think it should happen at some point."

^I agree. And while the plot of this particular fic goes where it goes, BOY do I wish we could have seen that in season 3 or 4.

"AND HE’S STILL BLAMING NICHOLAS. HE’S USING HIS BROTHER AS AN EXCUSE FOR HURTING BOTH HIS OWN CHILD AND REYNIE. AHHH I JUST WANT TO SMACK HIM SOMETIMES. AJKSFHJDSGHGKJDJKHDGLHKJGDSKJH. I’M SORRY FOR THE EXCESS OF CAPS LOCK TODAY BUT MY WORD. That perspective switch is gorgeous, I’ve been heavily visualizing everything because that’s my brain but the way that that little detail is exactly like a cinematic shot where it’s focussed on one character and then switches in a smooth singular shot instead of a cut and I just— ajksdghadskjhjadsjhdshjgslgh"

^You NEVER need to apologize for the caps lock. Never. And yeah, I too wanted to smack Nathaniel as I was writing this, but I'm glad you enjoyed the perspective switching.

"More crying time! Yay!" ^ You're welcome my friend! 🥳

"He feels so strongly about Nathaniel, and I know I keep harping on this but you write it so well. Because their perspectives are so intensely reversed; Nicholas is always on the verge of tears from guilt and sorrow, but Nathaniel won’t admit to himself that he’s sad, so it just comes out in anger and seething bitterness that is as equally fragile."

^Ahhhhhh.... I'm so glad you like this part! I love writing Nicholas and Nathaniel's perspectives on what happened and how they are both still somewhat stuck in the past and need each other to get out and move on.

"WHY IS HE BUYING A BUNK BED???? Okay, I get it, and it’s very emotional and sad, but also??? It just came out of left field I was not expecting it somehow. Goodness."

^Actually, believe it or not, the bunk bed was not my idea. That's canon from the show. In episode 1x06, baby Nathaniel tells Nicholas about wanting a good quality bunk bed in a flashback, and then later there is a brief shot of Nicholas looking over bunk bed assembly instructions in the cabin surrounded by a pile of wood and screws before he goes in to tell Number Two and Rhonda the truth about Nathaniel. And for some reason, even though it was a super quick shot, it just never left my mind. Like...where did he get that? What was going through his head? I just really needed to write this.

"Aw, SQ feels so awful. I want to hug him. (And tell him that it’s actually a common trait in gifted children to struggle with making friends your own age!!)"

^Me too!

"Ahhhhhhh, the confliction!!! I want to give Reynie a hug, too. They both should get hugs. And a blanket and some hot chocolate. Please tell me that SQ’s plot line ends happy instead of him dropping off the face of the earth like what the show writers did :( "

^Sorry, I can't spoil anything... but just know that I have some plans in mind for our precious boy...

"And Reynie’s so aware and compassionate!! He knows what it feels like, and he’s trying to spare SQ, even though it’s causing him more trouble. Agh, and SQ thinks this is the more innocuous trespass. But he’s got it totally backwards!! Man, your writing is so full of suspense and I know what’s happening!!!!"

^I have nothing to add to this other than YOU GET IT! And I'm glad that my writing is keeping the suspense level up even though you know part of what's happening, because that was the goal!

"STOPPIT. STOP DESTROYING STICKY EVEN MORE THAN HE’S ALREADY BEEN HURT."

^Hey, look Sophie, I would love to help our dear friend Sticky, but sadly, the story goes where the story goes, I'm just the messenger.

"Oh. Oh! And that’s part of the thing!! The Whisperer just mimics back at people, but in conjunction with Curtain’s thoughts it makes them trust and mimic him!! SIDE NOTE: The Whisperer probably also makes the kids associate the feeling of calm security with Curtain!! More manipulation!! Oh, Curtain’s such a terrible person."

^I'm so glad you got that!!!!

"“It seemed that Nicholas’ little spy had Curtain’s son and his best messenger fooled” HOW ARE YOU SO CLOSE BUT ALSO SO VERY WRONG ALL OF THE TIME"

^My favorite part of writing the twins: Curtain coming so close to Nicholas' plan and yet missing the mark vs. Nicholas' grand plan being "buy Nathaniel a bunk bed as an I'm sorry present", yet he still manages to win (okay that's not exactly what happens, but still).

"It’s interesting how we can see Curtain start talking to Kate and Sticky the way he talks to SQ, but those tactics aren’t working on SQ as well anymore, so he’s switching to the way he works around Garrison."

^Teenage rebellion and being an adult does not jive well with Curtain's manipulations. Which is ironically probably why he likes working with kids.

"…Why would you give Curtain a “burden of greatness” line right in the middle of this scene that is pulling like a weight on my heartstrings. I nearly choked because I wasn’t expecting to want to laugh at him /j /lh"

^ I'm sorry you nearly choked, but reading this made ME laugh at Curtain rather unexpectedly. I did not think of that line as funny at all, because when I was writing it, I was imagining so hard what it was like to be in Curtain's shoes, and he takes that line so seriously that I did too for a second there, but you're 100% correct, it is so stupid oh my gosh...

"SQ’s comment about poison ivy reminds me of Milligan warning Mr. Benedict about the stinging nettle! Probably not an important observation in the slightest, but I thought it was neat :)"

^No. This is a VERY good observation. Because neither of those were mine, those lines were both from the show and are excellent friendship parallels.

"THE BIT ABOUT ORPHANAGES PICKING AND MARKETING CHILDREN BASED ON APPEARANCE STILL MAKES ME WANT TO RIP OUT THROATS AND I’VE READ IT SEVERAL TIMES NOW"

^And... again, another detail that I can't take credit for. This is based on reality. In the olden days, it was recommended that infant orphans be adopted into families that look liked them and never told they were adopted (to cover the "shame" of the child being an orphan and the adoptive parents being infertile). The result of this was that children who had a difficult time finding adoptive parents that could be passed off as their bio parents had difficulty getting adopted (one of the most historically famous examples is red headed children, due to a lack of matching red headed prospective adoptive parents. Hm. Maybe I could try working that into Garrison's backstory or something. Just thinking out loud here...always looking for ways to add to my character's angst).

"Oh, Reynie. I mean, I get it, but it’s a bit concerning that your first thought is jumping to “Curtain’s a murderer”. Reynie’s so sweet. He comes to the conclusion that it’s fifty/fifty if Curtain’s a murderer, and his next thought isn’t “Yeah, we should probably leave the island. Like, now, before Kate inevitably gets herself caught”, it’s him being worried about SQ. Reynie’s over here trying not to sound scandalized and blurt something insensitive out and SQ’s just like “Wow, I really needed to talk about this. This feels a lot better” akjsdghagdjk"

^Yeah... Reynie at this point figures that with the brain sweeping and stuff, Curtain doesn't need to kill people anymore, plus Reynie has no context for whether this was a planned murder or spur of the moment thing or if it even happened at all. So he's more worried about SQ, at least for now.

"Reynie. Oh my word, Bods, you’re going to kill me with this chapter I know you promised Ember that you’d include more Reynie angst, but goodness gracious. These boys are out here in the woods trying to out-compassion each other what even. Someone needs to show them a loving family dynamic."

^I'm sorry I'm killing you with the Reyine angst, but Ember (@lemondropletters) specifically requested it and enjoyed my last chapter of Reynie angst so much that when another opportunity presented itself to me, I couldn't just not take advantage of it, it was too easy(and I hope you and Ember enjoyed it, despite the pain).

"Nooooo. Because Garrison could have been his aunt, she should have been there."

^You're right. She should have. And that's something that makes me SO sad and I'm the one who wrote it. 😔

"You know when you’re reading a book with multiple points of view and sometimes it’ll switch in the middle of a chapter and you’re just dying to get that one character over with so they’ll shut up and you can go back to the one you actually care about? That never happens to me when I’m reading your fic. I’m always ready to go and follow you wherever the plot leads, because all of your writing for the characters is superb."

^I always say "oh my gosh this is the greatest compliment I've ever received" whenever I get another review of my fics, but... this was amazing. Honestly, I read the first part and was like "oh no. Which character isn't landing with you? I'm glad you like whoever you like, but please, give me some good feedback on what you don't like, and I'll fix that character, BUT THEN you hit me with the "that never happens with you, your writing is that good?" I love you so much, and I hope you know that I appreciate this compliment because there are a LOT of characters, and I'm glad you feel like I have a good grasp of all of them.

"Yeah, Miss Perumal! She’s ready to row herself to the island and punch Curtain in the face!! (Okay, probably not, but I love how you describe her passion and ferocity!)"

^I don't want to spoil anything...but I am looking forward to writing some season 2 content, since Curtain spends most of season 1 with the kids and most of season 2 with the adults.

"Mr. Benedict. You should be smarter than to let yourself be driven to attempt to construct a bunk bed in such an impaired state of mind that you’ll only end up injuring yourself all because it feels like it’ll fix your relationship with your brother. THIS MAN. I still cannot get over the fact that he immediately took the fate of the literal whole world onto himself and thought his family would abandon him for being an emotionally mistreated child. Gah.

^Once again, all from the show. I can't take credit for writing that part, but I can agree with all of your emotions. poor Nicholas :(

"GarrisonBackstoryGarrisonBackstoryGarrisonBackstoryGarrisonBackstoryGarrisonBackstoryGarrisonBackstoryGarrisonBackstoryGarrisonBackstoryGarrisonBackstoryGarrisonBackstory"

^Me (chanting with you): "GarrisonBackstoryGarrisonBackstoryGarrisonBackstoryGarrisonBackstoryGarrisonBackstoryGarrisonBackstoryGarrisonBackstoryGarrisonBackstoryGarrisonBackstoryGarrisonBackstory"

“For a brief moment, Curtain felt like he was looking at the old Garrison, the one who had been his friend, the one who had smiled at him, and shared her ideas with him. / As if they were suddenly no longer contentious coworkers, but two friends, eager and excited to share their knowledge with the world.” !!!! He just wants someone who understands him. (Because he’s still trying to replace his brother and he can’t let himself heal from all that happened with the S.O.S.) But why? Why do you want to cause me such pain????? Really, though, your pacing and little emotional callbacks and themes are fantastic. This is highly superior writing. HE WAS TRYING TO COMPROMISE AND MAKE HER COMFORTABLE. WHY IS THIS MAN ONLY ABLE TO BE CONSIDERATE WHEN IT’S IN TINY DETAILS EASILY OVERSHADOWED BY HIS NEUROTIC CONTROL ISSUES???????"

^I'm sorry, I had to copy in your whole reaction to this scene because again, YOU GET IT!!! The saddest part of Curtain's manipulations are the little flashes that show that on some level he still cares, but at the same time he's just the worst. I built a lot of that off hints from the show and I'm really glad that it's landing properly.

"Ajkahsdjhkd She poured it back into the bottle!!! I don’t know if that’s a thing you added (I suspect it is), but I love it!"

^It is. In writing, you can't just cut away like television (you can, but when you are writing stream of consciousness it's awkward) and I was struggling to find a way for Garrison to exit the scene. And then my brain was like. What if she just. Dumps the champagne back in the bottle and runs away before Curtain can say anything? And I was like...okay. That works.

"I am fully invested in Garrison’s emotional backstory with psychics, but it’s also kind of funny that she’s taking this so seriously. Like, “Ah, yes. The crafty psychic and their reinforcements”, when in reality it’s just. A trio of children and one considerably smaller child."

^I'm so glad you are on board with this, and I really hope you enjoy the payoff of this plotline.

"I hope you aren’t getting tired of my insanity because this is a full emotional investment for me and I will continue sharing my thoughts with reckless abandon for as long as you let me. As always, no pressure at all, but I am looking forward to what you do next, and I wish you good luck!"

^Okay listen Sophie. I will NEVER be tired of you or anyone else sharing your thoughts, because when you do, it gives me motivation to write more, and with each chapter, I get closer and closer to the twists and scenes that I REALLY wanted to talk to someone about because otherwise they just sort of play in my head, but I'm the only person who knows about them (because they aren't canon). So PLEASE keep up the insanity, I love it and can't thank you enough for it.

@nobody33333333, I am now officially caught up on S.O.S.!!! It's such a good story, guys, please go read it if you still haven't seen me sing its praises by now.

Chapter 12

Oh yeah! This chapter starts off with an Isaac cameo!! I love him so much, something that I’m entirely blaming you for, Bods.

“well, yesterday was Tuesday, so—” One of the best lines to come out of the show. It actually sounds like a Book SQ line, now that I think about it…

Aw, poor buddy. But Garrison is so kind to him! She’s struggling a lot, but she makes an effort. You write all of the characters with such an excellent element of sympathy and humanness, and I am hugely impressed by it.

Oooh, the SQ narration is getting more and more rebellious. (Is this where we will finally see the punk rock version?)

More on Curtain’s campaign to aggressively adopt/employ all of the children before his brother!!

He’s already totally convinced he’s going to be able to take in Kate, and he’s pushing Sticky so hard already! It’s obvious that he’s being super manipulative and tricky, but you can still feel how easy it would be to get sucked into it with where the kids are.

Sticky!! Oh boy, you can feel the tension as he’s trying to figure out what to do in this instance, he’s feeling pulled in both directions at once.

WHY DOES HE THINK NO ONE LIKES HIM??? HE FEELS LIKE NO ONE WANTS HIM THAT’S SUCH A WELL-WRITTEN PART BUT ALSO IT SHREDDED MY HEART

Oh, and now we get to see Miss Perumal begin to put it all together! You do such a great job of writing her as proactive, but not impulsive or hasty.

You phrased the messages as so neutral and passive, but it’s still uncanny. It makes it feel like it very well could just be someone’s stream of consciousness.

And Miss Perumal is of course a responsible daughter. Although I’m sad that she feels guilty!! Everyone in this show/book/universe has issues with either taking too much responsibility on themselves, or not enough.

Ah. No. It’s the very sad bit.

Reynie’s trying so hard not to be suspicious. Poor child :(

THERE IT IS. THE SAD PART. Because, I don’t think you know this, (I say, to the author of the fic as I climb on top of the podium) but those two lines are insane. They don’t know, neither character knows, what the other one has been through and why they are acting this way and what their intentions are. They’re both just two lost children who have never had real friends before, and are looking for someone to love them. But we know. We know that Reynie is trying his best, but ultimately he’s going to betray SQ’s trust, because, while there are certainly other ways he could have done it, he’s a child. He doesn’t know how to do this, he doesn’t even know how to make friends normally, and he shouldn’t be in this situation but he is. And SQ is just waiting for the other shoe to drop, and yet he still finds himself devastated by it. No matter how Curtain loves him, he’s not a stable father, and he taught SQ that it’s only a matter of time before everyone uses him, before he is betrayed and left behind and ignored. And the way that you captured all of that, all of how the characters are feeling and their history and intents and how the audience is going to feel, and how they know what’s going to come of this, in two sentences, is insane! It’s bizarre. It’s wildly talented and fantastic and I want to give you the biggest hug but also how dare you sum up a whole, deeply complex and emotionally painful tragedy in less than fifty words what on earth

AND REYNIE FEELS SO AWFUL. IT IS HURTING MY HEART.

The payoff for your point with colleges!! Oh, you’re so genius. I’m infuriated but know that I love you.

The unreliable narration is wild, because he’s not actually that confrontational a person. He’s got opinions and independent thoughts, and he can definitely disagree with people, but he’s over here thinking he’s getting to be all disagreeable and unlikable and prickly when it’s just the way Curtain’s raised him into being an accidental boundary-less chronic people pleaser.

WHY IS YOUR OFFICE YOUR ‘PERSONAL SPACE’ IF YOU CONSISTENTLY LEAVE HIM IN THERE. MAKE UP YOUR MIND

And Curtain’s unreliable too!! He’s trying to help SQ, but he also is a terribly messed up person and immediately jumps to his weird conspiracy theories.

~~He doesn’t ever say he won’t do it, just that he’s not supposed to~~

HE ACTUALLY REFERENCED THE S.O.S. OH GOODNESS HE HASN’T DONE THAT FOR LIKE THREE WHOLE CHAPTERS. IT’S PROBABLY NOT THAT IMPORTANT I’M JUST LOSING MY MIND ABOUT IT.

Oh. He wants him to be friends with Kate. I hadn’t considered that, but it makes sense. It’s been really neat to see how he’s started thinking about her more and more and how he’ll fit her into his plans since meeting her.

WHY IS HE SO MISGUIDED. HE WANTS TO PROTECT SQ WHICH IS GOOD BUT HE’S ALSO SUPER WRONG.

At least you made it better than the show, in giving Curtain a reason instead of just sounding like he’s being horrid and manipulative.

I’ve always wondered if Reynie actually enjoyed art, because there’s no way that, even if he spent all day on it, he could come up with art of the caliber he seems to have on the spot with no prior experience. I like to believe he actually does enjoy art, and that part is genuine. He just has a little hobby, and it’s not something he likes as much as SQ, but he can appreciate it.

OOH. It is getting to be like Curtrain’s relationship with Garrison. Interesting…

Just once, it would have been neat to see Curtain pass out when talking to SQ. Obviously he would never do that in the series as far as we’ve seen, but I think it should happen at some point.

AND HE’S STILL BLAMING NICHOLAS. HE’S USING HIS BROTHER AS AN EXCUSE FOR HURTING BOTH HIS OWN CHILD AND REYNIE. AHHH I JUST WANT TO SMACK HIM SOMETIMES.

AJKSFHJDSGHGKJDJKHDGLHKJGDSKJH

I’M SORRY FOR THE EXCESS OF CAPS LOCK TODAY BUT MY WORD

That perspective switch is gorgeous, I’ve been heavily visualizing everything because that’s my brain but the way that that little detail is exactly like a cinematic shot where it’s focussed on one character and then switches in a smooth singular shot instead of a cut and I just— ajksdghadskjhjadsjhdshjgslgh

More crying time! Yay!

He feels so strongly about Nathaniel, and I know I keep harping on this but you write it so well. Because their perspectives are so intensely reversed; Nicholas is always on the verge of tears from guilt and sorrow, but Nathaniel won’t admit to himself that he’s sad, so it just comes out in anger and seething bitterness that is as equally fragile.

WHY IS HE BUYING A BUNK BED????

Okay, I get it, and it’s very emotional and sad, but also??? It just came out of left field I was not expecting it somehow. Goodness.

Aw, SQ feels so awful. I want to hug him. (And tell him that it’s actually a common trait in gifted children to struggle with making friends your own age!!)

Ahhhhhhh, the confliction!!! I want to give Reynie a hug, too. They both should get hugs. And a blanket and some hot chocolate. Please tell me that SQ’s plot line ends happy instead of him dropping off the face of the earth like what the show writers did :(

And Reynie’s so aware and compassionate!! He knows what it feels like, and he’s trying to spare SQ, even though it’s causing him more trouble.

Agh, and SQ thinks this is the more innocuous trespass. But he’s got it totally backwards!! Man, your writing is so full of suspense and I know what’s happening!!!!

STOPPIT. STOP DESTROYING STICKY EVEN MORE THAN HE’S ALREADY BEEN HURT.

Oh. Oh! And that’s part of the thing!! The Whisperer just mimics back at people, but in conjunction with Curtain’s thoughts it makes them trust and mimic him!!

And Sticky jumps so quickly on board with Curtain’s information. But it doesn’t feel like he’s being a terrible person, which I think is yet another testament to your skill, as it genuinely just feels heartbreaking that poor Sticky, who, again, is a literal child that Curtain shouldn’t be using to hurt his brother, has been so lonely and wronged by people in his life that he can’t help but start falling for Curtain’s manipulation.

SIDE NOTE: The Whisperer probably also makes the kids associate the feeling of calm security with Curtain!! More manipulation!! Oh, Curtain’s such a terrible person.

“It seemed that Nicholas’ little spy had Curtain’s son and his best messenger fooled” HOW ARE YOU SO CLOSE BUT ALSO SO VERY WRONG ALL OF THE TIME

It’s interesting how we can see Curtain start talking to Kate and Sticky the way he talks to SQ, but those tactics aren’t working on SQ as well anymore, so he’s switching to the way he works around Garrison.

…Why would you give Curtain a “burden of greatness” line right in the middle of this scene that is pulling like a weight on my heartstrings. I nearly choked because I wasn’t expecting to want to laugh at him /j /lh

SQ’s comment about poison ivy reminds me of Milligan warning Mr. Benedict about the stinging nettle! Probably not an important observation in the slightest, but I thought it was neat :)

THE BIT ABOUT ORPHANAGES PICKING AND MARKETING CHILDREN BASED ON APPEARANCE STILL MAKES ME WANT TO RIP OUT THROATS AND I’VE READ IT SEVERAL TIMES NOW

Oh, Reynie. I mean, I get it, but it’s a bit concerning that your first thought is jumping to “Curtain’s a murderer”

Reynie’s so sweet. He comes to the conclusion that it’s fifty/fifty if Curtain’s a murderer, and his next thought isn’t “Yeah, we should probably leave the island. Like, now, before Kate inevitably gets herself caught”, it’s him being worried about SQ.

Reynie’s over here trying not to sound scandalized and blurt something insensitive out and SQ’s just like “Wow, I really needed to talk about this. This feels a lot better” akjsdghagdjk

Reynie. Oh my word, Bods, you’re going to kill me with this chapter I know you promised Ember that you’d include more Reynie angst, but goodness gracious

These boys are out here in the woods trying to out-compassion each other what even. Someone needs to show them a loving family dynamic

Nooooo. Because Garrison could have been his aunt, she should have been there

My brain hit the “tumors” thing like a split second before my eyes reached the next line, oh, Reynie, you’re making this a lot harder on yourself then you need to.

You know when you’re reading a book with multiple points of view and sometimes it’ll switch in the middle of a chapter and you’re just dying to get that one character over with so they’ll shut up and you can go back to the one you actually care about? That never happens to me when I’m reading your fic. I’m always ready to go and follow you wherever the plot leads, because all of your writing for the characters is superb.

“There were coincidences and then there was… this” Amazing line. Just wonderful.

Yeah, Miss Perumal! She’s ready to row herself to the island and punch Curtain in the face!! (Okay, probably not, but I love how you describe her passion and ferocity!)

Mr. Benedict. You should be smarter than to let yourself be driven to attempt to construct a bunk bed in such an impaired state of mind that you’ll only end up injuring yourself all because it feels like it’ll fix your relationship with your brother :(

I’m so glad he has both Rhonda and Number Two. Because Rhonda will be all sweet and kind and move slowly for the most part, whereas Number Two is the kind of person to look you in the face and be like “Your brain is being stupid. Tell it to shut up, because it’s not being helpful, and it’s only hurting you”

THIS MAN. I still cannot get over the fact that he immediately took the fate of the literal whole world onto himself and thought his family would abandon him for being an emotionally mistreated child. Gah.

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!!!! He just wants someone who understands him. (Because he’s still trying to replace his brother and he can’t let himself heal from all that happened with the S.O.S.)

But why? Why do you want to cause me such pain????? Really, though, your pacing and little emotional callbacks and themes are fantastic. This is highly superior writing.

HE WAS TRYING TO COMPROMISE AND MAKE HER COMFORTABLE. WHY IS THIS MAN ONLY ABLE TO BE CONSIDERATE WHEN IT’S IN TINY DETAILS EASILY OVERSHADOWED BY HIS NEUROTIC CONTROL ISSUES???????

Ajkahsdjhkd She poured it back into the bottle!!! I don’t know if that’s a thing you added (I suspect it is), but I love it!

I am fully invested in Garrison’s emotional backstory with psychics, but it’s also kind of funny that she’s taking this so seriously. Like, “Ah, yes. The crafty psychic and their reinforcements”, when in reality it’s just. A trio of children and one considerably smaller child.

MILLIGAN! Oh boy.

AND THERE IT IS AGAIN. THE OLD NOBODY LAST SCENE SPECIAL, WHERE EVERYTHING YOU WERE EXPECTING IS AGAIN BLOWN OUT OF THE WATER BY WHAT IT REALLY IS.

WHOO. That was a ride!!! I am still so incredibly excited about this fic. It’s gorgeous and fantastic and I hope you aren’t getting tired of my insanity because this is a full emotional investment for me and I will continue sharing my thoughts with reckless abandon for as long as you let me. As always, no pressure at all, but I am looking forward to what you do next, and I wish you good luck!

#long post as always #SOS #Sorry for making this so long #Thank you again for liking my fic so much it makes me feel so flattered #I'm sorry it ended up being so long but I really hope I have the time and stamina to see it through to the end...#...because I KNOW your reaction is gonna be so good...

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remakethestars · 4 years ago

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RAVENCLAW 💙🦅🤎

Headcanons.

❝Even in the blackness, light can be found. My enemy can be outsmarted.❞

— Alex Hirsch, Journal 3

This is my house, y'all; buckle up!

Gryffindor, Hufflepuff, & Slytherin. Headcanon masterlist.

The door'll let you in for witty responses.

We prop it open during exam season, when everyone's coming back from dinner, on party nights, & when no one can solve the riddle.

Questions become more difficult to answer after curfew.

Everyone waits outside & pretends not to know first night until the first-years figure it out.

Today's riddle & answer posted on the back of the door every morning; check before you leave just in case.

Sometimes you find the prefects debating over what the answer is; no one leaves the common room until someone's figured it out, so sometimes, the entirety of Ravenclaw is late to breakfast.

Again, if we absolutely can’t, we’ll prop it open.

If the door’s propped open and you remove the prop, we’ll use the guillotine on you.

Everyone has at least one hill to die on.

There's a podium by the fireplace with a record book on it of all the books in Ravenclaw's library that you can ask for help finding books from (pages flip in their own).

If you’re in a reading slump, describe what you're looking for; we've probably got it!

If you don't like writing & highlighting in the books, it'll disappear while you have it, but everyone's free to mark in them.

So good at reading their own messy notes and the notes their friends wrote they can read a doctor's handwriting.

And there are notes everywhere. As organized as some Raveclaws wish they could be, you can't make notebooks & journals as organized as Google Doc & Word documents. Unless, ya know … someone made a spell for that — hold on, I gotta write that down!

Professors find notes — ideas for spells & potions — on the back of homework & tests. More knowledgeable teachers will add their ideas or advice before handing it back.

Everyone leaves a copy of their favorite book with annotations before they leave seventh year.

There's a coffee/tea cart in the common room.

Hallways to the dorms are covered in graffiti from students long passed.

Dorms branch off based on your year.

Girls can walk into the boy's dorms & vice versa.

All rooms are extended for more space.

Beds are built into the wall like window seats & have bookshelves where the head and footboards should be.

Dark blue curtains can be drawn shut if you're feeling introverted.

Trunks go under the bed, so they're kinda high off the ground.

Cast an extension charm if you’re claustrophobic.

At the end of every year, everyone congregates in the common room, someone casts glisseo on the stairs to Ravenclaw tower, & everyone slides their trunks down (it's called "the trunk shoving").

No one gives a single sh¡t about house points.

Ravenclaw’s are always blowing something up & losing points.

Dramatic about stubbing their toe, but super casual about ending up in the hospital wing because they "wanted to test a hypothesis."

If you have a question or don't understand something, ask it loudly in the common room; someone will undoubtedly answer or direct you to another who can.

Just don't use bad grammar, or sixteen people will correct you in unison. 😅

Learn (a) new language(s) in the common room 20:00–21:00 Mon.–Fri.

Tutoring sessions are in the common room at 21:00–22:00 Mon.–Fri. Or ask for private lessons to work around your schedule.

If a particular teacher's sh¡t, we host a class in the common room after dinner.

Also, there're just classes for random stuff: art, budgeting, codes & code-breaking, cooking, dancing, darning, fencing, ice skating (in the winter months), knot tying, lock picking, makeup, Morse code, muggle martial arts, sewing…

First years are all offered a class on note taking.

A lot of us do our homework on Friday night so we don't have to worry about it all weekend, so there're no party activities tonight, but you can play a muggle board game if you want.

Karaoke on Saturday nights.

Dungeons & Dragons on Sunday nights.

D&D’s swapped out for a play once a month; screw the theater ban! (For an explanation of Hogwarts’s theater ban, see Albus Dumbledore’s notes on “The Fountain of Fair Fortune” in The Tales of Beedle the Bard.)

Morning yoga in the common room — feel free to join; we'll teach you some poses.

Ask around; whatever you're looking for — info, candy, contraband — someone probably hands it out, sells it, can get it for you, and/or can tell you where to find it.

Pass around a spell that allows them to clean themselves. Who has time for showering?

And a potion that gives them the same feeling & energy as if they slept. Who has time for sleeping?

Yes, we're building a guillotine in the common room.

Please don't utilize it in the decapitation of any living person or thing (unless it's the Snape or Umbridge)!

Our next project is a carousel. With working lights & everything.

Yes, we're building a house of cards in the common room; please don't blow on it.

Be quiet until noon on the weekends or get hexed.

Thank Merlin they teach sign language in the common room every year & everyone knows enough to get by.

Parties are highly regulated.

People volunteer to walk people back to their dorms & put up protection charms so you don't get assaulted. Those people are vetted with Veritaserum first to confirm the authenticity of their intentions.

People often get into academic debates, which can get a bit loud; just silencio them & move on.

The entrances to the dorms are hidden behind moving bookshelves.

The Ravenclaw copy of Hogwarts: A History will tell you more than you realized you needed to know; there're enough notes in the margins to make a second book, including how to enter the kitchens, how to sneak out if the castle, how to find the Room of Requirement…

They've located more secret passages & rooms in Hogwarts using spells they created than the Marauders were aware of.

First-years are told how to put extension charms on their backpacks so they're not heavy — that's a crap-ton of stairs.

There's an incredibly thick book by a armchair near the fireplace that's full of testaments of Ravenclaw's alumni. "What's one thing you wish you'd known when you started Hogwarts?" First-years are encouraged to flip through it.

And taught a low-concentration spell for levitating books while laying down so your arms don't get tired (flick wand to turn page).

Common room's extended to fit all kinds of activities (and the bookshelves).

Some third-years built an aquaponic system on top of one of the window seats; take a cucumber, if you want, or stop to look at the fish.

Again, explosions are not uncommon. (Please don’t drop any explosives in the fish tank. As water isn’t as compressible as air, this will kill the fish.)

Everyone just kinda glances over to make sure you’re okay before going back to what they were doing.

There's always a record playing.

They host a hike through the Forbidden Forest once a week, because what even are rules?

If you hear an intelligent conversation taking place, feel free to sit down & listen or jump in!

The wind whistles against the windows all year round, but they've been charmed to keep water out.

Played The Floor is Lava before it was a meme.

There's a two-way mirror on the wall above the fireplace. There's a muggle television on the other side. No one's sure whose T.V. it is, but a lady comes in in the mornings in hair curlers & watches the news.

She puts in V.H.S. tapes of Disney movies at the start of term. Hypothesis says it's for the first years & this person's a half-blood or a muggle-born.

Sometimes, people work together to solve the Friday crossword in The Daily Prophet. It's the hardest all week.

Look at each other like they're the camera in The Office when someone says something stupid.

Oh, boy, if someone's found a really good mystery book… That sh¡t’s getting magically copied & passed around. We discuss theories at meals, pass notes in class, & set up a murder board in the common room.

Actually, Ravenclaw house has solved a number of murders in its free time.

Visit my Ravenclaw YouTube playlist & Pinterest board.

DISCLAIMER ━━━ These headcanons are what I consider to be canon in my fanfictions. They may be others’s headcanons I’ve subconsciously filed away in my noggin. If one’s yours and you want it removed or credited, please send me your post and let me know.

#Ravenclaw #Ravenclaw Headcanons #Headcanons #Headcannons #remakethestars

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unbakedziti · 3 years ago

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A/N Helloooo this is the first time I’ve posted anything like this or written. So if anyone decided they want to read it, that’d be super cool. This kinda just was something I started writing and then decided to posts. Also my apologies for any grammar or spelling errors, and that it’s pretty short.

Summary: Peter Parker is dealing with some trauma after Civil War, and Tony finds him being reckless in trying to fix it.

Word Count: 2.8k words

Warnings: anxiety, trauma, mentions of su*c*de

Scott Lang did not mean to traumatize Peter Parker. In fact, they were in a fight with minimal rules of engagement, so there was no real reason for Peter to resent Scott at all. Peter knowing that Scott was not at fault was never helpful in stopping nightmares or panic attacks when he was mid-swing in Queens. He kept reliving how he was smacked out of the air, easier than vanquishing a fly with a swatter. Even worse, Peter understood why comic books and cartoon characters were said to SPLAT on surfaces, and he wish he didn’t. Peter could feel his flesh meeting concrete and stiffening over and over, every time he started to get confident as he was flying through the air.

He didn’t want to tell Tony, mainly because he was scared that he would think Peter couldn’t handle being Spider-Man anymore, and he simply could not have it. Peter ran through all the possibilities of what Mr. Stark would say had he opened up.

“Maybe an early retirement?” Peter’d imagine him joking. “You should sit on the bench for a while Pete, maybe even see someone.”

Peter had seen someone, after his parents disappeared and then had their death’s announced in the news before he even knew. His therapist’s name was Ryan and he helped, but only at the cost of Peter getting bullied by other kids until he decided to stop going. It wasn’t Uncle Ben’s fault, he let it slip to some other parents that Peter was doing so much better with the help of therapy, and when Flash got a hold of it ——- Peter’s reputation went right down the toilet.

Plus, Tony would feel the need to get him the best and brightest psychologist out there, when really all Peter needed was to get used to swinging again, and he could force himself to do that. He started with lower buildings, but Peter decided he was giving himself too much of an out, he was babying himself. So he ditched the shipyard for skyscrapers. He had stood on top of the tallest building he could find and looked downwards. Peter couldn’t tell if it was fog, or if there was a cloud up as high as he was. He looked around and closed his eyes, figuring that he senses would kick in, or that suit Tony gave him would pick up on it, as they had discussed many nights before. He had it all planned out, with all the fail safes. He just needed to stop his hands from shaking and jump, like he’d done so many times before.

Peter braced himself, shooting down a single string of web to see how far he was really going, if he would be able to pull himself back up on another building. As he was standing there calculating and looking around, he lifted his mask to get a different view.

“What on earth are you doing?” The almost robotic voice came from behind him, and he turned around, he nearly lost his footing. “Kid, kid, calm down.” Tony raised his hands to signal he didn’t mean to scare Peter, but it was way too late for that.

“Hey- hey Mr. Stark, what…what are you doing here?” Peter stumbled through his words as he watched the Iron Man suit unsheathe Tony’s face.

“Well I got a call that Spider-Man looked like he was about to try and join Ripley’s Book of World Records, and I thought you might need a witness.” Tony stepped out of his suit. “Now, I’ll ask again, what are you doing?”

Peter stepped down from the ledge, and he sighed and shrugged.

“You’ve gotta do better than that Pete, the police thought you were trying to do something and I hope you weren’t…” Tony’s voice was desperate, and he was running out of options the more Tony spoke. Peter looked down and saw three cop cars looking up, probably only seeing a red silhouette.

“I was trying to get myself to be Spider-Man again,” Peter cut him off, in a rushed jumble of words. The implication of what Tony and the police thought he might be doing sounded way worse than anything Peter could think of in that moment. Tony would have benched him forever if he was even close to thinking that was the truth.

“What?”

“Ever since Berlin, the airport, when Scott smacked me out of the sky.” Peter breathed. “I can’t get it out of my head Mr. Stark.” Tears started to stream down his face, his voice was breaking.

“FRIDAY, call the car to 7th and 12th, big building can’t miss it,” Tony spoke to his suit.

“Where are we going, I can’t, my Aunt May,” Peter tried to object, wiping the tears roughly off his face, but Tony shook his head.

“Avenger’s Compound, I’ll tell May I’m keeping you overnight with a note for school tomorrow. And FRIDAY, tell Ms. Potts Peter is coming please.”

“You got it, sir.” Peter could hear Friday’s muffled voice.

“How’d…how’d they know to call you?” Peter cleared the rest of the moisture from his face.

“I have a few friends on the force, who let me know if the friendly neighborhood Spider-Man is about to do something incredibly stupid.” He stated, plainly.

Peter nodded slightly and just stated the word ‘oh’ before Tony’s phone rung to alert them that the car had arrived.

“Shall we?” Tony pressed his chest, and his suit collapsed into a housing unit that looked large and clunky. “Don’t mind that, it’s just something I’m testing out a housing unit for nanoparticles. There’s still a few kinks I need to work out.”

“Nanoparticles?”

“Yeah, I’ll show you all of it at the compound.”

He ushered Peter into the elevator, where he slid back on his mask, and dropped his head. He wondered what his dad would have said if he were there. They had such limited time together, and so much advice had a time stamp on it. Peter couldn’t apply the “don’t worry unless I tell you to” anymore, because his dad couldn’t. Peter couldn’t help feeling drawn to Tony for advice, even though he hadn’t wanted to ask for it in the first place. He had actively tried avoiding looking at Tony as a father figure, and instead like a mentor. There were a lot of self willed rules that Peter was miserably failing at.

They were silent in the car, Peter sat there and put his head against the seat as Tony instructed him to call May. At first, Peter wanted to beg him to just let him go home, that they could talk tomorrow, but something told him that Tony wasn’t letting him out of his sight.

“Peter? What’s going on? I was about to text and ask if you wanted to do grilled cheese for dinner, I’d just need you to pick up tomato soup!” Her voice was normal, and steady.

“Hey, May, I actually can’t, Mr. Stark invited me up to the compound tonight…” Peter trailed off, hoping that Tony would cover for him, so that May couldn’t detect any kind of sadness from him.

He did, he snatched the phone out of Peter’s hand and made up some lie about how he’s never seen his work in action and figured that he should. Of course, Aunt May agreed easily, knowing that Peter was safe indefinitely with Tony. He handed the phone back to Peter.

“Are you on your way? Do you need to stop at home for pajamas or anything?”

“No, no it’s okay, it’s fine,” Peter said hurriedly into the phone. “I love you, I’ll text you when I head to bed. Bye.” He hung up after she responded, and put his head back again for a while, only to look up and see they were there.

Upon entering, Mr. Stark’s friend who he’d only ever known as Rhodey was standing there talking to a bunch of holograms in suits.

“I want you to tell Stark that if he has intel on where the rest of the Avengers are, he needs to fess up. My head’s on the chopping block and I won’t let him make a fool of me for much longer,” a salt and pepper haired man said.

“Secretary Ross, I’m starting to think you have a crush on me,” Tony faked a smile, earning a smirk from Rhodey.

“Stark, you haven’t returned any of my calls.”

“And I’m not continuing this one, c’mon kid,” he nodded to Rhodey and Ross and led Peter to a room.

“Clothes, shower, then ask Friday to guide you to the lab so we can talk,” he put his hand on Peter’s shoulder. “I’m not disappointed, I’m not mad, and we’re gonna just talk.”

Peter nodded and murmured a thank-you-Mr.-Stark as he left the plain and modern looking room. He showered, and noticed that it wiped any smell off of him, figuring the soap must be completely scentless. Then he found basic clothes in the drawers, an assortment of navy blues, blacks, blues, and whites. He opted for a white sweatshirt and a pair of navy blue joggers, and slid back on his worn sneakers.

“FRIDAY?” He asked.

“Right this way, Peter,” it replied, and a small light strip in the floor illuminated. When he finally reached the lab, Tony had on a paid of goggles and looked like he was welding something together. It reminded him of how when he was younger, and Tony Stark revealed that he was Iron Man, there was a huge classroom debate of whether or not Mr. Stark made his own suits or was paying people to. Peter confidently maintained that Tony made them himself, and figured it would not be such an incredible feat if someone was just paying other people to do it.

He recounted the small story to Tony, as a way to announce that he’d arrived. Tony waited and nodded.

“Doing this is what’s gotten me through a lot of times,” he lifted his goggles up. “When I can’t sleep, when the nightmares are too much, whenever I have a panic attack.”

“You- you get panic attacks?”

“After New York, all I could dream about, all I could see, was the beginning of space and- well- the end of me.” He slid a plate with a sandwich and a cup of fruit and salad over to Peter, making a motion for him to start eating with his I’m-not-taking-no-right-now eyes. “I had this, just terrible, anxiety attack. I was out to eat with Rhodey, and some kids wanted me to sign their coloring pages or whatever. The little boy, he asked me how I did it, how I got out of the wormhole.”

“What did you do?”

“Well, I thought I was dying, so I jumped into my suit like I was on fire and flew how after, it was JARVIS at that time, told me I just was freaking out,” he explained, stealing a pineapple from Peter’s plate. Peter stayed quiet, and waiting for Tony to keep talking. “So, what does a crime fighting spidering have to do to become Spider-Man again?”

“I- Mr. Stark I just need to get used to swinging, I won’t do that again I swear.” Peter rushed and babbled on as soon as he swallowed his food.

“Pete, Pete, you’re not in trouble.” He raised his hands. “Just tell me what’s been going on.”

So he did. Peter Parker told The Tony Stark that he woke up screaming, how Scott Lang was the face he saw even though that wasn’t fair. How he thought he was seriously hurt, and didn’t know if anyone would have noticed since he kept getting up, or trying to. He described how every time he would hit the peak of a swing, he’d start hyperventilating and looking around to see if something was going to hit it out of the air. Peter listed the ways he was dealing with it, by making himself do it again and again and again until he stopped seeing Scott.

“Okay,” Tony nodded. “It’s normal. I wouldn’t have let anything bad happen Pete, I brought you there.” Peter saw something flash across Tony’s face.

“And- and Mr. Stark, it’s not your fault, I wanted to be there-“

“I recall you saying that you had too much homework?”

“Yes, but once I was there, it was different.” He admitted.

“Different?”

“Yeah I thought that it would just be like, a conversation, I thought I was just back-up.” Peter shrugged, pushing in another helping of salad.

“No, no unfortunately I needed you web-slinging skills,” Tony sighed, taking his goggles off the top of his head. “I’ll tell you what, tonight we’re gonna talk. Then afterwards, we’re gonna get someone who definitely has better advice than me for you to talk to.” Peter started to protest. “No, no you will, and May doesn’t have to know because it’s covered in your- intern- health- insurance? Yeah, your intern health insurance. Don’t ask for anything else I won’t do dental.”

“I went to a therapist after my parents died, can’t I just-“

“Just what?” He waited, and Peter took in a deep inhale.

“Why can’t I get over it? Mr. Stark, I swing off of buildings and I have a secret vigilante life. A radioactive spider bit me when I was trying to see what my dad was working towards, and now I’ve got these abilities that no one else does.” He looked Tony in the eyes. “Why is this any different?”

They sat like that for a while, just still and silent, until Tony finally spoke up.

“Often times, you’ll see that it’s not different, but what’s different is the presence of all these different things,” he said. “So you got bit by a radioactive spider, had already grieved your parents, so it wore on you a little. Then you start navigating your abilities, and it’s scary so that wears down on you too. Then a playboy, millionaire, philanthropist, Iron Man, shows up in your Aunt May’s apartment and says he wants you to fight in something you don’t have any stake in. And now you’re tired, and traumatized because your a teen boy and don’t know how to pace yourself. That sound about right, yes or no?”

Peter looked at him and nodded.

“You are Spider-Man, no matter how it’s cut. But you won’t be for long if you don’t rest. Try to learn that lesson earlier than I did, yeah?” He stood up and clapped Peter’s shoulder again. Peter stood up, not even realizing that he had tears brimming his eyes and hugged Tony.

“I thought you were gonna be mad,” Peter said, his voice breaking. Tony hugged him back tightly, and shook his head before pulling away.

“I just want you to be okay, kid.”

“Thank you- thank you Mr. Stark,” he sniffed.

“Don’t mention it. I’ll have Happy pick you up to go see Dr. Nguyen once a week, just let me know what day works for you.”

“Okay, I will.” Peter nodded. “So what’s the deal with the nanoparticles?” Peter asked, taking a bite out of the ham and cheese sandwich. He kept eating as Tony showed Peter what he was working on, and hinted that there was a new suit in the Spider-Man’s future, if he was patient. Peter was amazed, and was even allowed to tinker with a few of the different projects Tony had going. His body felt tired, but he wanted to keep going, regardless of what they’d just discussed. Tony must have noticed because he set down his tools hastily.

“You finished with your food? Take it up, Ms. Potts is eating her dinner up in the kitchen, I think she wants us to try keto but I really don’t think I could give it up next to dairy.” He said, nonchalantly. “Oh and put your stuff in the dishwasher, if we get ants in here I’ll lose it.”

“So you haven’t tried Ben and Jerry’s Stark Raving Hazelnuts?” Peter asked, after agreeing that he would clean up all of his stuff.

“They did that? God I need to get out of this compound.” Tony shook his head.

“Yeah yeah yeah, that and a Hulk of Burning Fudge,” Peter continued, carrying his plate up the stairs.

Peter had said hello to Pepper, and she asked what he was doing there, if he was finally an Avenger, which both Peter and Tony had replied no. Peter was kind of hoping that he’d say maybe, but then again it had been a long evening.

He went to the bedroom Tony had showed him at first, and texted Aunt May before collapsing on the fresh sheets. Peter didn’t even climb under the covers before he fell asleep. And for the first time in weeks, Peter hadn’t dreamt of Scott. In fact, he hadn’t dreamt of him being Spider-Man at all that night. It was the best rest he’d gotten in weeks.

#peter parker #tony stark #comfort #fanfic #peter parker oneshot #tony stark fluff #peter parker fluff #angst #marvel mcu #marvel cinematic universe #captain america civil war #spiderman #iron man

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destieltrash420 · 2 years ago

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SPN Season 16 brainrot!!!

I saw a video on how j2 were talking about a season 16. Now, this isn’t confirmed or anything, but I was just overthinking the entire idea of a new season and many of the plot holes that would follow, and so now I’m simply writing some of them down, so yeah. (p.s sry about grammar)

1. Mentions of “one final case” and going back to earth, but then again - earth must be in year 2050-60 something, since Sam grew old. So, if the boys were to go back down to earth they would be in a completely different time, and how the hell would that look and work?? Are they gonna be hanging out with Dean Jr.? Are all of the people that they knew gonna be dead? Will the wayward sisters be in their 50/60′s?? the fuck??

2. Personally, i am a destiel kinda gal soooo, I would be very concerned as to how the husbands are gonna be around eachother. Like?? Are they gonna completely ignore it or just brush it off like it was no biggie, because that would call for a fucking jail sentence in my book. If they have the opportunity to do progressive and flourishing (and i bet they could have that opportunity), then I totally think that they should explore that deeper ;) COUGH COUGH (sry)

3. Also, what would the major consequence be to their hunt or case, whatever this case may be about, what is the urgency? What is the problem? they have THE GOD on their team. Hell, god is their fucking child. I bet that Jack could fix literally any issue by smiling, like come on dude. They seem like they are pretty overpowered.

+ They can’t really die from this hunt because they’re already dead, and if they do - they know where they are going, so what is the dramatic factor there??

I also have my own take on a possible route that the possible or not possible season could take, that might just make a little more sense? I think.

I’m thinking that maybe it would be more fitting for the show to focus on another realm, since they explored that for a while before the finale.

So, perhaps focusing on something that has to do with Hell, Purgatory, Heaven’s renovations, Apocalypse world, ENDVERSE??? or a different reality that was left to rot by Chuck. There must be thousands of those that they could help Jack rebuild or something.

But they could also shine a light on The Empty and how The Empty had to succumb to Jack’s control over everything, and how Cas was yanked from that hole no questions asked. They could bring up how Death is able to kill or rather reap God, so, Billie would possibly be strong enough to reap Jack if the opportunity came up. And now, what if Billie was still alive in the empty realm and hungry for revenge? Imagine if Billie and The Empty got together to form a plan to consume all of reality, and since the boys have been breaking a lot of the cosmic rules - how are they not to do so as well?

Imagine The Empty waking up all of the angel and demons, or maybe just certain ones that can help them in their plan - Lucifer, Michael, Crowley, Abbadon - all of the most powerfull of the archangels and knights of hell and demons. And then The Empty corrupts them to follow their orders or promises them freedom if they comply to their orders?

Now, I know that The Empty likes sleep and needs sleep, and that Billie doesn’t want to disrupt the cosmic balance but rather just have control over the entirety of it. And also execute all of the people that slipped past the hands of death.

Maybe I’m completely out of line here, and maybe I’m not.. Anyway, thanks for reading and feel free to add you own ideas or worries about the future of spn:))

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quagarl · 1 year ago

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Okay so I am absolutely not interested in this group. I feel the need to preface this, I like writing groups, just not interested in joining one myself, it is what it is. To be honest, I like most of these rules. For the thread it does the job at keeping things kinda organized, but for people who are going to be looking at this kinda stuff as a more general guide to their writing, I'm gonna add a rule.

Break any one of these rules sooner than write a shit story.

If you have a scene where the tense of the writing fits better as present tense, use it. For the most part you *should* stick to past tense, because it's important to note that a person who is reading your story is going to move around at times. It's just a weird etiquette thing.

But if you have a character going insane or if they are beginning to unravel, breaking rules such as this is a fantastic way to demonstrate that. A character who is talking about present events in a *future* tense is going to sound wildly unhinged. A character talking about something that happened in the past In present tense is going to make them sound like they're reliving the past. A character describing the future In past tense is gonna sound like they're lost in time, literally or figuratively.

Break your rules, eat your bananas vertically. Who cares? I certainly don't.

Also side note: when you are writing ***YOUR FIRST DRAFT*** don't go worrying about punctuation or spelling or grammar. Your first draft is meant for your eyes only, and the most important thing about it is having it done. It is going to be a framework of your ***story*** not your subtext and metaphor and all the refined junk that needs to be in a book.

Also, if you want a piece of advice for writing your first draft, write up a synopsis of every chapter in your book. It only needs to be a paragraph or so per, and mark out the important moments, your inciting action and midpoint and climax and the ends of your acts (hint: they should overlap). Write backwards, starting with those huge, jawdropping moments, and then figure it out.

WRITING/POSTING

1.) We are a mature writing group. We may have content not suitable for some people (sex, drug usage, and/or violence), however, those threads/posts will be marked with [MATURE] in the subject line of a thread.

2.) Always write in the third person, past tense. This means whatever you’re writing happened in the past, and you are seeing it from the outside. “She was,” “She walked,” instead of "She is” or “she walks”.

3.) Spelling, grammar, and punctuation do matter in this group. We understand the occasional typo, but constant poor spelling and inattention to grammar and punctuation will be addressed.

4.) Major threads need to be approved by the mod. This does not cover things such as interpersonal relationships, but things that would affect the entire list. It doesn’t matter which characters are together, but it does matter if the London burns.

5.) JP (joint post) are threads that are solely between your character and someone else’s character. They can be done through a form of messenger and recorded in a document, or JPs can be done by email as well. Many players prefer to JP on a shared Google doc. When a JP is done, it is posted on the list (group) as one large post.

6.) Formatting Threads: Along with the title of each thread, you must also include a tag. For example: TITLE OF THREAD (CHARACTER, CHARACTER) - if you already know who you want to write with TITLE OF THREAD (CHARACTER open tag) -if you’re just saying, “hey here’s my character, wanna write?” TITLE OF THREAD (CHARACTER, no tags) - if the thread doesn’t involved characters that aren’t yours Joint-posts and back-posts should be labeled as well. Just add a ’JP’ or a ’BP’ (whichever is appropriate) before the title of the thread. Back Posts are threads which take place in the previous time frame. Sometimes your characters will engage in sex, drug usage, and/or violence. This is allowed, but you must label the subject line, and again at the top of the post, with either EXPLICIT, ADULT, OR TRIGGER WARNING/TW, and preferably why you labeled it as such (EX: TRIGGER WARNING: GRAPHIC VIOLENCE). All posts should also include a ‘WHEN, WHERE, AND WHO’stamp at the top of the post. FOR EXAMPLE: Saturday Night, 9 PM (when) Downtown (where) Tomas and Nick (who)

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kyoupann · 4 years ago

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Please do more of the writing head canons. It’s really interesting to see other people’s ideas on the topic, so if you can be bothered, I would highly appreciate more, thanks bye <3

Y’all don’t know how happy I am to talk about these headcanons, they are my babies and I love them so much :’) thanks for asking g <3

Handwriting Headcanons

Same dynamic as before, try to guess whose handwriting it is before reading and tell me how many you got right! <3

You can find the first post here (no need to check it tho)

Quick disclaimer: halfway through making my initial notes, I remembered I had one (1) single lesson of graphology in my applied linguistics class, but that was a year ago and some information might be off. I just thought it was neat to include.

Another quick disclaimer: I don’t know much about Hylian, but I like to think it has a similar stroke system to Japanese, so the pressure and accuracy of your strokes play a major role in your handwriting (among other things, ofc.) so there are some parts where I focus more on that

(First Row, from left to right)

Sky

Our first boy is mother hen! Believe it or not, he has the prettiest handwriting out of all of them! Sky: probably has nice, even elegant handwriting because Sun forced him to practice when they were little. In the end, that paid off because his handwriting is the prettiest one. There’s no pressure, but he is confident in what he writes that his lines aren’t thin. Mistakes? what is that? this boy has impeccable grammar and spelling. No mechanic errors to be found in his letters! I’d like to think that many of Hyrule’s classic/staple poems were originally written by the firt king aka sky child. Like, imagine, after a retiring from being a Person of Power (as the first ruler), Sky finds comfort in the arts: revisits his old woodcarvings and starts writing poetry about the world he still doesn’t fully understand. wowie. tldr: sky writes poetry and you can pry it from my cold dead hands.

This is what one of his letters would look like:

Next one is the one and only, our Hero of Time

2. Time

I’ll die on the “Time didn’t know how to read and write” hill. His handwriting is simple, not pretty but not messy. It has some grammar and spelling mistakes here and there. Can become unreadable if writing in a hurry, he sorts of forgets spaces between words are a thing/letters have different sizes and lowercase letters end up the same size as capital letters. I’m not saying he sometimes forgets to write articles: he just doesn’t want to. Honestly, he just has this dad-neat handwriting. He is a gentle dad and writes like a dad, if he puts too much pressure onto the paper, his handwriting become too sharp/angle-ish and ends up looking ugly. And as much as he would like to not care about it, in the end he does (:

Malon taught him how to write and it was quite the experience. At first he didn’t want to because he was ‘too old’ to learn and it was torture at first, but now look at him devouring his cowboy novels.

A chunk of his handwriting:

*sniff* such a dad quote.

3. my mansss, your 4x1 deal at Target: Four

Look, my boy is patient! He could do some nice and fancy lettering if he wanted to. He was taught that handwriting and spelling said a whole lot about him as a person, you know, like a first impression kinda thing; so he always proof reads more than twice before sending a letter. Super rare grammar mistakes.

The faster he writes, the more slant his writing becomes. Under stress/ when not sure how to write things down, run-on sentences are everywhere and his handwriting is inconsistent in general (I don’t headcanon each part of him having completely different handwriting because handwriting becomes muscle memory over time. It’s just slightly different variations of the same, like idk Vio’s handwriting is neater than Green’s and Red writes hearts instead of any dot/circle and no, I do not take constructive criticism on that, jk i do.) Adding on to each of the colours’ handwriting, I’d think Red and Green write with words slanted to the right( inclined), Vio is a mix of the opposite, so reclined and straight, and my mans blue a true neutral writes straight (kinda like Time’s).

The logic behind this is that inclined writing supposedly means honesty and need for giving (and getting) affection; reclined means, as you can probably imagine, defensiveness and repression of true feelings, but also shows great concentration; straight handwriting means self-control, observation and reflection as well as distrust and indifference. But as complete being (tm), Four just writes as in the image example which is not too straight and not too inclined, and I believe that’s a good middle for him

HOWEVER, if I’m feeling in the mood for crack, I totally accept this boy to have the ugliest, chicken scratches-looking handwriting! :’D It’s just funny to think that someone like him, who has to be precise and careful in his work, can't write neatly to save his life.

One of his letters would look like this:

Also I just LOVE how his hero titles look in this font ksksks

and that’s

(Middle row, from left to right)

4.- Mister Bunny Boy - Legend

His uncle taught him how to write. I’d call his handwriting pretty and neat at a first glance, but he presses too hard on the paper, most of the time staining the back or the following page. Sometimes will retrace some words if he doesn’t like how it looks (which only makes it messier). According to my notes, a thick or strong handwriting represents determination/commitment.

As I also headcanon him to know many languages, mechanical errors are more present than grammar ones; that is, weird capitalisation of words. Punctuation is somewhere in between; uses too many commas when he should just cut the sentence. he mixes punctuation from two languages or more in writing when too distracted (or too focused, because, well, pressure.); when he writes for himself, he has almost no problem following said language’s punctuation rules. Also, this is just polyglot culture, and I’m projecting a bit, but when he forgets a word in the language he’s writing, he just replaces it with its equivalent in another language because we don’t care about fluency, but rather functionality. in this household (more on that in my language hc, ksksks).

An example of his writing:

so powerful

4.- Mr. Wolfman, howl me a song - Twilight

I don’t have much for him because 1) I don’t think he writes a lot and 2) he is a hands-on/visual learner, I’ll die by that. He only learnt how to write because Ulli insisted it was important and he was not about to disrespect his momma; he IS That Guy, but doesn’t really write enough to have neat handwriting.

Many people seem to overlook the fact that his house is filled with books and write him as completely illiterate (which if not explored properly, ends up feeling a bit disrespectful and full of prejudice, but go off I guess; and that’s on my core Headcanons for Twi); however, he sticks to simple sentences. Knowing how to read and understanding a text is different from knowing how to write them. Like, when we would see a semicolon and understand its position in the text, but didn’t understand the nature of it. Is this clear? idk i’m sorry. So yeah, boy reads a lot, writes very little.

As for his Actual Handwriting, as opposed to Legend, his handwriting is thiccc but not because he presses into the paper; he is just that messy, he has no sense of ink-flow-control, he does what he can with what he has. To the untrained eye, his handwriting illegible letters like v, n, u are very similar; when he makes notes for himself he does it in the form of doodles or small ‘icons’. But! He reads a lot, so he rarely makes spelling mistakes (: he is your go-to guy when you don’t know how to write a word.

An example of his writing:

He keeps a journal, sue me.

3. My first born- Warrior

Okay, first off... I accept this is completely biased. I saw the idea and said “That’s True”. If you haven’t, please read Effective Communication; or The Lack of Thereof by htruona, a fic where the boys reflect on the language barriers between them. It’s incredibly funny and probably what made me start making these silly notes. So, if you’ve read that fic, you know where I’m going.

My man, Warrior, can’t fucking write. I mean, he physically can, but it’s very bad. Here’s the reason for it, tho, and it’s not his fault: Technically, he knew how to write alright but he joined the military and whatever note he had to write had to be concise or in the worst case coded. He mixes capital and lowercase letters. If we consider that he joined the military at around 15, his handwriting and grammar had yet to continue developing. Just think about how after summer break, your handwriting was always slightly worse than before because you didn’t write for an entire month. Now think what 2 years can do to that. Hmm, not cool, dude. He makes quick notes, when writing he’s all gotta go fast. he is the lighting mcqueen of writing; good for emergency messages, not ideal for love letters. His punctuation also suffered a lot, he only know full stops and commas and hardly uses them. A sentence for him is either one word or fifty without a single comma, no inbetween.

His hero title and an example of his writing.

(Bottom row, or what I like to call “fuck cursive” row)

7.- Magic man - Hyrule

I’m basic and I do agree with the popular headcanon of he not knowing how to write because well, y’all know his Hyrule. He only knows how to write his name because that’s important, same with numbers. I don’t see why would he write/read except checking the roadsigns. (he can even use this as an excuse for getting lost frequently; he thought it said something different.) But I do think that because his habitual reading consists of roadsigns, his ‘punctuation’ is weird af and places full stops/points/periods at the same level of his words and his commas/question/exclamation marks below them. Yk, creative license. Sadly, I don’t have much about my magic hands man so here’s what his writing would look like if he actually wrote a paragraph:

Man, I love Hyrule.

8.- Man, I don’t understand this boy - Wild

Cursive? ain’t nobody have the time for that. He woke up and had to save the world in his underwear while not knowing how to read nor write. He learnt during his journey and was taught by multiple people from different regions, that explains his inconsistent spelling of things and names for them. So Wild knows language variations for many items and uses them interchangeably (even if they aren’t exactly the same). Another headcanon related to writing/language skills that I’ve been thinking about is that if the shrine was able to cause amnesia, I’m sure there were other areas in the brain affected which leads us to language disorders such as agraphia and aphasia. But that’s a story for another day ksksksk

An example of his writing (after relearning)

9.- The best of sons - Wind

I don’t have much for him and that makes me sad. Look, he’s a kid, doing kid things like stabbing dudes on the head. This boy was taught cursive by his grandma, but could never do it and no one needs it anyway. His handwriting is good enough for his pirate life, Tetra is the one to handle Official stuff, he just gotta sign. Spelling and grammar mistakes abound. He is still relatively young and can correct his handwriting if he desires. But same as Wild, with how many times he’s been thrown out and hit his head, I’m starting to consider some language disorder for him as well.

An example of his writing:

aaand that’s it.

Thanks, y’all for showing interest in this silly thing uwu it was fun to finally talk about this. If you ever want to discuss ideas/headcanons(especially if they are related to language and culture), I’m your person (: I’m always happy to hear new headcanons. Feel free to add anything to this post either in a reply or in a reblog, I’d love to hear from y’all <3<3

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waynes-multiverse · 3 years ago

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Hiiiiii !!! I wanted to send all numbers of the fanfic writer ask but I didn't. So 🙃

2, 6, 7, 12, 30, 32 😘

Okay, let's do this! 😁

2. What character(s) do you find the most difficult to write for? Why?

I honestly don't have that much trouble writing a specific character. If I know certain personality traits, it's really fun imagining "what if" scenarios and then I go from there. Even Sam, who I don't write for a lot, still comes fairly easy to me. A good tip otherwise is making a character spreadsheet with their most important info and then follow your gut. Does it sound right for a certain character to say/do that or wrong?

6. If you listen to music when writing, what were you listening to when writing [Fanfic Name]?

I have my own writing playlist, which mostly contains indie/altnernative/rock music. Something with a soothing melody and not too distracting. Bonus points if the lyrics are inspiring too. And Taylor Swift's Folklore and Evermore always get me in a inspiring mood too ☺️

7. What story/headcanons do you feel the proudest of?

Attempting to give Sam and Dean a family in DBM. Also, in my head, they have houses next door to each other and Dean always loots Sam's fridge and finds a reason for BBQing in the yard 🤷‍♀️

12. Who is your favorite author?

Hm, fanfic or published? I can't possibly choose a favorite fanfic author. There's two many and everyone is amazing and has their own unique style and ideas! I do love that fanfiction is so free and not constricted by rules. You can write anything you want. No one cares about "marketability" and "censorship." You can curse, you can write the most cliché tropes, you can fully delve into your own style... A few of my favorite published authors, though, include: Rainbow Rowell and John Green. Both write YA novels, but I really love their narrative style! And a go-to for inspiration is always Walt Whitman's Leaves of Grass. I also love reading plays and dystopian novels! Honestly, never ask a literature student about favorite authors/books. You might be here a while 😂😂😂

30. Do you write down all your ideas? What makes you decide to write one versus the other?

I write down everything. Even if it's just a fleeting idea or a one-liner. I might use it or I might not, but at least it's saved somewhere if I need it. Sometimes I might have a funny idea or a dialogue sequence in my head. If I'm already over my desired word count, I might not use it if it's not super important for the story and would just be a "detail" or "fun fact." I probably have tons of "deleted scenes" in my notes and even more in my head... 🙈

32. What story do you think showcases your signature style the most?

That would actually be my newest one, To Be Human 😊 It's more stream of consciousness, and thus, feels the most like me. I wanted all my characters' thoughts to be more "free flowing" and less restricted by grammar and writing conventions. But I usually adapt my style depending on the story I wanna tell. So tenses and perspectives depend on my main objective. Which is why TBH is written in present tense because I wanted my audience to feel a certain urgency and that everything is happening right now, whereas with DBM, I imagined the reader telling the story of how everything happened from some point in the future (Kinda like HIMYM – "Kids, this is how I ended up here...).

Thank you so much for asking, @eevvvaa! 🖤 That was a lot of fun, although I went a little overboard with my answers 😂

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writing-prompts-for-friends · 5 years ago

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Notes from Stephen King’s “On Writing” 07: The Revision Process

Next, King walks us through his revision process. He makes it clear that this method is not the only method. It is merely a method.

How Many Drafts?

“For me, the answer has always been two drafts and a polish (with the advent of word-processing technology, my polishes have become closer to a third draft).”

King admits that this number of drafts is not the golden rule. Kurt Vonnegut rewrote each page of his novels until he got them exactly the way he wanted them. This meant that when the manuscript was finished, the book was finished. (I certainly am not that big of a perfectionist, nor am I that patient lol.)

For beginner writers in particular, King offers the following advice:

“Let me urge that you take your story through at least two drafts; the one you do with the study door closed and the one you do with it open.

“This first draft--the All-Story Draft--should be written with no help (or interference) from anyone else. There may come a point when you want to show what you’re doing to a close friend because you’re proud of what you’re doing or because you’re doubtful about it. My best advice is to resist this impulse. Keep the pressure on; don’t lower it by exposing what you’ve written to the doubt, the praise, or even the well-meaning questions of someone from the Outside World. Let your hope of success (and your fear of failure) carry you on, difficult as that can be. There’ll be time to show off what you’ve done when you finish...but even after finishing I think you must be cautious and give yourself a chance to think while the story is still like a field of freshly fallen snow, absent of any tracks save your own.”

Basically, King just wants you to get it all out onto the paper, with no external forces influencing you (for better or for worse). Just get that first draft out, and then open it up for closer examination both to yourself and others.

Let It Breathe and Then Dig In!

Okay, so you finished writing the first draft! Celebrate! Rejoice! Maybe cry!

...And then throw that manuscript into a drawer, lock it up tight, and don’t look at it for a minimum of six weeks. And in the meantime, do something totally unrelated to what you wrote. Get into knitting. Write a short story that is nothing like what you just finished. It’s consumed you for months now--so give your mind and imagination some time to reset and chill.

King recommends a minimum of six weeks, but even longer is okay. Resist all temptation to peek at it. And once the six weeks have passed, do the following:

“Take your manuscript out of the drawer. If it looks like an alien relic bought at a junk-shop or a yard sale where you can hardly remember stopping, you’re ready. Sit down with your door shut, a pencil in your hand, and a legal pad by your side. Then read your manuscript over.

“Do it all in one sitting, if possible. Make all the notes you want, but concentrate on the mundane housekeeping jobs, like fixing misspellings and picking up inconsistencies. There’ll be plenty; only God gets it right the first time and only a slob says, ‘oh well, let it go, that’s what copyeditors are for.’

“If you’ve never done it before, you’ll find reading your book over after a six-week layover to be a strange, often exhilarating experience. It’s yours, you’ll recognize it as yours, even be able to remember what tune was on the stereo when you wrote certain lines, and yet it will also be like reading the work of someone else, a soul-twin, perhaps. This is the way it should be, the reason you waited. It’s always easier to kill someone else’s darlings than it is to kill your own.”

You’ll also be on the lookout for any glaring holes in the plot or character development. And if you spot any of these big holes, you are forbidden from feeling depressed about them. Don’t be hard on yourself. Everybody makes mistakes, and they can all be fixed.

Generally King goes through the first reading fixing all the superficial issues, like typos and unclear antecedents. But as he’s doing that, he’s also asking himself the Big Questions:

Is this story coherent?

If it is, what will turn coherence into a song?

What are the recurring elements?

Do they entwine and make a theme?

What’s it all about?

“Most of all, I’m looking for what I meant, because in the second draft I’ll want to add scenes and incidents that reinforce that meaning. I’ll also want to delete stuff that goes in other directions. There’s apt to be a lot of that stuff, especially near the beginning of a story, when I have a tendency to flail.”

I can understand what King is saying here about the flailing at the beginning. Because I do not plot when I write, I have ideas that crop up halfway through that would require being introduced earlier, for example. Or perhaps as my understanding of the characters evolved as I wrote more, I realize that they behaved out-of-character earlier on. This is certainly one downside to not plotting. But isn’t is also kinda liberating to be able to take detours and wind up at a different but equally interesting destination?

Okay. So go ahead and fix all of the issues you found, and your first revision is complete.

Second Opinions and the Second Revision

“Do all opinions weigh the same? Not for me.”

Now you’re done with the first draft. You’ve patched over any plot holes and smoothed out those typos and grammar mistakes. You’ve polished the symbols and themes until they shine.

Once this is done, King gives a copy of work to his wife and several close friends (4-8) to receive detailed feedback. In other words, he has several close friends beta for him.

“Many writing texts caution against asking friends to read your stuff, suggesting you’re not apt to get a very unbiased opinion from folks who’ve eaten dinner at your house and sent their kids over to play with your kids in your backyard.

“The idea has some validity, but I don’t think an unbiased opinion is exactly what I’m looking for. And I believe that most people smart enough to read a novel are also tactful enough to find a gentler mode of expression than ‘This sucks.’ Besides, if you really did write a stinker, wouldn’t you rather hear the news from a friend while the entire edition consists of a half-dozen Xerox copies?”

What he gets back is 4-8 very detailed and different analyses of what he wrote. What’s very important to remember is that every reader looks at a work through a different lens. If half of them say a character’s portrayal is far-fetched but the other half say the opposite, than their feedback regarding that point has balanced out. However, if the majority of them say that something doesn’t work, then King goes back and sees if he can improve it.

Also, different readers pick up on different details. This is the age of internet and now we are able to check facts whenever we like, but it is still nice to have something of a subject matter expert on hand, because they are liable to pick up on details that the writer may not.

For example, I often beta fanfiction for anime. I am fluent in Japanese, live in Japan, and have studied Japanese culture and history. While I would never claim to be a “subject matter expert” on Japan, I am able to make certain corrections regarding, say, the type of kimono a character should be wearing, that the writer would not have considered.

It’s very easy to accept feedback that deals with facts (i.e. a beta corrects you on the standard procedures for CPR). However, it’s much harder to handle subjective feedback (i.e. “The ending felt inconclusive.”). Having put as much work as you have into creating this, it can feel like a personal attack because this story is a very dear part of you. What do you do if your beta tells you something like this?

“Subjective evaluations are, as I say, a little harder to deal with, but listen: if everyone who reads your book says you have a problem, you’ve got a problem and you better do something about it.

“Plenty of writers resist this idea. They feel that revising a story according to the likes and dislikes of an audience is somehow akin to prostitution. ... But come on, we’re talking about half a dozen people you know and respect. If you ask the right ones, they can tell you a lot.

“Do all opinions weigh the same? Not for me. In the end I listen most closely to [my wife], because she’s the one I write for, the one i want to wow. If you’re writing primarily for one person besides yourself, I advise you pay very close attention to that person’s opinion. And if what you hear makes sense, then make the changes. You can’t let the whole world into your story, but you can let in the ones that matter the most. And you should.”

I think, especially in the age of prolific fanfiction in which the author usually updates as they write the story, the author feels a lot of pressure from their readers. Readers chomping at the bit for the main characters to have a naughty scene, or demanding to know about that one secret thing that you keep alluding to. A lot of fanfic writers struggle to tow the line of “writing a good story based on reader feedback” and “pandering.”

My advice to fanfic writers out there is to tell those thirsty readers to read a one-shot if they’re looking for a quick fix of smut, and to have some goddamn patience. You’re trying to tell a story, one that builds and progresses, and that takes time. Don’t give in to those “OMG MAKE THEM KISS ALREADY” reviews. But if a lot of readers say something like, “I feel like this character wouldn’t do that,” then perhaps you should re-evaluate that.

On Pace and Reducing Glut

“Formula: 2nd Draft = 1st Draft - 10%.”

So now you have your first draft done. You have your feedback from your trusted betas. And now you need to go and make the final changes.

King states that you should rely on your most trusted betas to gauge whether or not your story is paced correctly and if you’ve handled the back story in satisfactory fashion. “Pace” is the speed at which your narrative unfolds.

”There is a kind of unspoken (hence undefended and unexamined) belief in publishing circles that the most commercially successful stories are novels are fast-paced. I guess the underlying thought is that people have so many things to do today, and are so easily distracted from the printed word, that you’ll lose them unless you become a kind of short-order cook, serving up sizzling burgers, fries, and eggs over easy just as fast as you can.

“But you can overdo the speed thing. Move too fast and you risk leaving the reader behind, either by confusing or by wearing him/her out. ... I believe each story should be allowed to unfold at its own pace, and that pace is not always double time. Nevertheless, you need to beware--if you slow the pace down too much, even the most patient reader is apt to grow restive.”

So how can you strike a happy medium? Rely on your most trusted betas and their input. King says, “Every story and novel is collapsible to some degree. If you can’t get out ten percent of it while retaining the basic story and flavor, you’re not trying very hard. The effect of judicious cutting is immediate and often amazing. You’ll feel it and your betas will too.”

On backstory, King issues some opinions and advice:

It’s important to get the backstory in as quickly as possible, but it’s also important to do it with some grace.

A reader is more interested in what’s going to happen instead of what already did.

Even when you tell your story in a straightforward manner, you’ll discover you can’t escape at least some backstory.

“The most important things to remember about backstory are that (a) everyone has a history and (b) most of it isn’t very interesting. Stick to the parts that are, and don’t get carried away with the rest.”

Source: King, Stephen. On Writing: A Memoir of the Craft. Hodder, 2012.

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night-running-echo · 4 years ago

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Jaskier, a Bard or a Druid?

I've been reading again the Witcher lately, and thanks to @wherethewordsare I had the inspiration to finish a certain theory about a bard that I didn’t have time to write.

① Magical Imprint

The first thing we notice is the bond that Jaskier shares with mythological creatures: He interacts with Sirens about love, easily talk with elves, cuddles a baby dragon, jokes with a demon for the entire travel writing a song about him, befriends an untouchable Pegasus and even werewolves don’t try to harm him when he is singing.

“Right before the dawn, while it was still dark, a hungry, vicious werewolf crept up to their camp, but saw that it was Dandelion, so he listened for a moment and then went on his way.”

The Nymphs, or Dryads, call him “Ard Thaed” which translates to “The Bard”; Did you notice the particular use of words? Not a bard, The Bard, a mighty and a noble presence, as we know Nymphs rarely use this names, and more rarely on humans, a race that they despise so much. It can be a coincidence, you know, bards. They are cute, they sing pretty songs, and everyone can be easily mesmerized by them. But what if the truth is much more intriguing?

In the first book, Geralt and Jaskier are captured by a group of elves, and before they try to kill them it's at this point that Dana Meadbh, a goddess also known as the Eternal One, makes a quite spectacular entrance. The elves halt, lower their weapons, and kneel before her. This gives us the demonstration that the Deity is adressed with deep respect. So, she makes a sign to Jaskier and calls an elf that delivers him a new lute, and a rather wondrous one. Jaskier almost cries for the complexity of the runes, the wood and the strings that shine in golden light in the sun.

Only after, we find out why this Lute is so important. In the Fourth book of the saga, Jaskier go on a mission to find a dispersed Geralt, which temporally resided in Brokilon. It's a risky business, the Nymphs would shot him on the spot. But Jaskier sit on a rock and take out his magically crafted lute, gifted by the Goddess. Wait, you didn't notice, right? This is the perfection of Sapkowsky's writing. We are so worried for Jaskier that we not even notice the fact that:

Jaskier's lute is still there

It's magically crafted!

Why it's so important? Let's analyse the concept of a magically created object.

The rule of a magically crafted object, we'll call it artefact from now on, is that when a magical object is created, the magic sorta transfer to the object, leaving a sign and a trace of magic easily recognisable but not too much to track it down. This is influenced mostly by:

The object and therefore the material that's used

Who is the crafter!

So, an artefact is basically the result of a good, positive, magic (well, depends on the type of it and the use that the artefact will serve to), and the materials that can absorb the already nominated magic like a sponge. The quality of the work and the ability of the crafter is important too.

Since the artefact is a magical object, the magic serves as a mechanism that makes the artefact work, and I already said it leaves a trace of magic. But, since artefacts are so rare, why gifting Jaskier one?

Dana Meadbh is a Goddess, they can choose their protected ones, their patrons. This people and also other entities become untouchable and unharmed. In this way Jaskier becomes respected and without any chance to be harmed, in any way or means.

This is why Jaskier is listened to; He is respected, almost feared for the Wrath of the Goddess if Someone will dare to touch him. As Mythical creatures, they can feel and perceive the magic on Jaskier's lute and the imprint Dana Meadbh leaved on him. As that is also why Geralt can't feel the presence of magic within it! It's so little that his methods and objects can't trace and track down the magic on him, it simply hides in a vast world full of magic and creatures, it's too much information.

In conclusion, Jaskier is a Goddess's patron.

② Why he is still so young?

The books of the Witcher have a plot that gravitates in the period of 10 years and more, so from a book and the other pass at least one or two, even three years each.

And, we see Jaskier never getting older. Well, Geralt is a Witcher, he is made to live long and prosper. Yennefer is a witch, magic duh. But Jaskier, Sweet innocent Jaskier, how he is still so young?

[the next sketch is purely made to laugh. Crude words ahead, skip if necessary]

So me, the narrator, is gonna ask you politely: the why. WHy. WHY JASKIER DON'T GETS OLDERR!??

LIKE LOOK AT HIM, THIS FREAKING ADORABLE GREMLIN, WITH A FUCKIN MAGIC LUTE. WHO ARE YOU. WHO TF ARE U?

[Interrupting the theory for little technical problems]

Anyway, y'all got the point. Or Jaskier Is really really lucky, or there's something under. Could the magic on his artefact sustain him? We would never know.

③ The Role of a Druid

It was kinda strange for me, to discover that druids in the Witcher world are almost nonexistent. It's usual to read about them, being denigrated, or treated like inferior beings in comparison to powerful Witches, Wizards eccetera. The idea that it brings me, is that Druid magic is relatively easier than the others, that means so it's not hard to learn it alone. Just the fact that Druids are threatened so badly gives us proof.

Being a Druid, then, brings this type of knowledge (usually)

The ability to talk in different mystical languages (It could be the language of the Nymphs, other creatures like sirens, or even elves)

The ability to sense other sources of magic around (something every sorcerer and Witcher need to possess)

The ability, obviously, to understand animals and at least every form of living.

This is the basis of Druid magic, present literally everywhere (from DnD to Fantasy books and films), and The Witcher is not excluded from this category.

Why did I bring this up, then? Let's analize the list accurately.

Jaskier is able to understand animals, we see a close bond with mythical and not mythical identities (point one).

The next interesting thing is the ability to communicate with other identities. It's obvious that Elvish and Nymphic ecc language is not for everyone. Witches, Witchers practice it, and it's rare to encounter someone who is well acquainted with it.

But Jaskier? Jaskier, surprisingly is a marvelous learner. He communicates is Siren's language easily, and have s great grammar basis of Elvish language.

He even sings in Nymphic without a second thought, translating fastly enough massive amount of text that a normal person couldn't do in a year. Especially in the language of the Nymphs, that's so hard to even understand.

So, what about sensing magic? That could be impossible even for Jaskier... Or not?

First book, short after the encounter with Dana Meadbh. The leader of the Elves ask forgiveness to the Goddess, and ask her to come back to the mountains with them. Segues a short telepathic conversation that Geralt notices for the long eye contact that they have. And then Jaskier says something really suspect.

(a translation from the Russian books)

"She was talking telepathically" Dandelion said, making a face "I felt it, a bond. You know what I mean, Geralt, I'm not stupid."

We understand that he perceived the bond. He didn't know, but he felt it, even understanding what they said. This type of ability is only possible if the user have at least about of magic within, or have something who give him that magic.

I think you already understood what I'm talking about, do you?

The lute. The magic artefact that Jaskier will never leave from now on gifts him an amount of magic so little, but useful in multiple situations. It gives him an imprint of Dana Meadbh, The Eternal One, and he is protected by this magic from every mythical creature present on Earth.

He is not only a bard, he is something totally more powerful.

Conclusion, Jaskier is a Druid? Yes and no. He have Druid abilities, he can be called a druid, but he uses his magic almost unconsciously and without acknowledging that. We don't know if he'll find out someday, but the hypothesis is pretty much possible.

Post-Theory: Sooo, I hope you liked my ideas and mumblings! Don't be shy to give your opinions about a very cute Druid!Jaskier and if you approve this headcannon.

With love

Echo.

#the witcher #geralt of rivia #geralt of rivera #yenneferthewitcher #jaskier #bardcore #bard #headcannons #theory #geraskier #geralt x dandelion

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nordic-language-love · 4 years ago

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Language Learning Log 2021 - Week 10 (01.03 - 07.03)

Norwegian

Read 2x articles

Watched 2x Distriktsnyheter broadcasts (Nordnytt & Midnytt)

Watched 1x Nytt På Nytt episode

Listened to the radio (P2 Ekko)

Wrote 1x journal entry

Speaking practice: talked about my day

Mysteriet om Nils ch 37 reading, grammar + exercises & ch 38 reading (read aloud)

Italki lesson (60 mins)

Japanese

Duolingo: Position, Greetings

Kanji drills

Played Final Fantasy

Norwegian

It’s been a while since I watched Nytt På Nytt. I had subtitles on but I avoided using them as much as possible and found I understood quite well on the whole (I do have to pay close attention though - I definitely can’t just have it on in the background and tune in and out lol). I’ve been watching all other TV without subtitles though. I think it’s good sometimes to have them on because I inevitably run into a couple of new words, so it can be good for vocabulary, but for listening practice it’s definitely better to have them off.

I worked with Mysteriet om Nils again this week and managed to complete the whole of chapter 37. What I’m most proud of is one of the end-of-chapter exercises was a prepositions gap fill and I managed to get it all right! There were a few I wasn’t sure on but I went with my gut. So my instincts for using prepositions must be getting better. I’m really happy with this because prepositions are bastards and I usually mess them up.

Last week’s goals

Mysteriet om Nils ch 37 reading ✅

Watch 4x TV shows/news broadcasts [4/4] ✅

Practise speaking on 3 days [3/3] ✅

Write 2x journal entries [1/2]

Read 2x articles [2/2] ✅

This week’s goals

Mysteriet om Nils ch 38 grammar

Watch 4x TV shows/news broadcasts

Read 3x articles

Write 150+ words fiction

Japanese

I’ve not done much Japanese this week. I bought some bilingual short stories and I can’t wait to get started with them! But I feel like I need to sit down with them and study them properly as there’s a lot of new words/kanji in them, and sitting down to do things is something I’ve struggled with this week. I had a little peak at the first paragraph of the first story and I couldn’t understand a full sentence anywhere (although there were some sentences that were close! So that’s something!)

Last week’s goals

Review JFZ ch 8 (practice saying numbers/dates aloud and writing the hiragana as well as the kanji) ❌

Duolingo: bring Position skill up to level 2 + finish making notes [8/8] ✅

Learn 5 kanji from the Position skill [5/5] ✅

Continue playing Final Fantasy ✅

This week’s goals

Read 1 short story

Duolingo: start Hobby 1 skill

Kanji drills on at least 3 days

Continue playing Final Fantasy

Review JFZ ch 8

Other

I’ve been pretty bad at exercising this week. Actually, I’ve been kinda bad at doing anything. Executive dysfunction is a real problem for me at the moment :( I’ve made a detailed plan for today, so I’m hoping that’ll help me get in gear. I’ve also more-or-less planned my workouts for the entire week. Of course, I adapt my workout plans based on my feelings (if I’m really tired/sore then I don’t push myself as a rule), but I’m hoping I’ll be able to mostly stick to it.

I’ve been so bad at reading lately too. Idk why... I was enjoying the book I was reading? I’ve just not been able to sit down to do it. I guess I’m too busy being distracted by my own brain.

Last week’s goals

Stretch on at least 3 days [1/3] ❌

Train pole/hoop on at least 2 days [1/2] ❌

Do something creative on at least 2 days [1/2] ❌

Finish Time of Contempt [125/330] ❌

This week’s goals

Do a little reading on at least 2 days

Stretch on at least 3 days

Train pole/hoop on at least 2 days

Do something creative

#progress report #langblr #norwegian langblr #japanese langblr #learning languages #language blog

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slimy-vore-bog · 4 years ago

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Y ur writing so goooddd

First of all, thank you so much!

Second of all, since you didn’t ask for real advice... I’ve been writing since I was 12, so it’s just practice.

No, but more seriously, it’s a lot about knowing the most important rules of grammar. What I find ruins a lot of stories for me is the lack of the rule “new speaker, new line” It’s frustrating to look at and just... unnecessarily confusing. A lot of the time, it feels like the author is inauthentically lengthening their paragraphs.

Funny thing is that I learned a whole lot of my English grammar from the youtube series “Bad Creepypasta” Though, fair warning, they are really critical and use a lot of dirty language (swearing and dirty humor). And they have covered nearly ever mainstream creepypasta. (Exception: Ben Drowned, because they actually like the story) They are reading an awful youtuber’s book atm. The book is awful too.

I really like them. Another good youtuber would be HoodoHoodlumsRevenge! He has some videos with a bit more focus on actual criticism and is generally less vulgar. (But is also creepypasta themed) I actually learned about bad creepypasta through one of his videos!

Anyways, lost the thread. Point being that a lot of what I’ve learned of grammar and story telling comes from them. Don’t dwell on useless details and don’t time travel (tense swap)

You’d think it’d be from books, but it isn’t. Though I used to love to read when I was a child to teen. Up until I was... I think 15? Then I kinda stopped... I did read the first series of Percy Jackson last year though. And listened to The Hunger Games books

Fun fact: It’s my all time favorite book series. The way Suzanne Collins hurts you with words is so good and what I aspire to do... Not on here though! And without the child murder!

Oh and a piece of advice; don’t just do something for shock value, let there be reason and think about the consequences the scene would have. How would it impact the characters? What is the aftermath? When writing always remember to ask yourself questions. (This is also good for world and character building)

Oh gosh, this is getting a bit long...

Uh, but the most important writing advice I can give is; just write. See what works and find your style, but never be afraid to explore! There’re pit falls and traps, but the worst thing that can happen is realizing what you wrote makes no sense and/or is cringy.

(and trust me, I have so much old unpublished work... particularly from 2019-2020)

Another piece of advice is watch out for writing tics. I know mine are “just” and “definitely”, and I’m trying to fix them. (I usually edit a lot of them out, if I notice them) Another common writing tic can be the need to do “they said” or “said *blank*” But writing tics can pretty much be anything. It’s basically using something when it’s not needed and using it excessively.

Really hope you don’t mind my rambling or the random advice... I should be working on something, but... I might as well reply to this while I have the energy :D And talking about writing makes me happy! :3

Thanks a whole bunch again, I’m very happy that you like my writing! It’s nice to know that people really do like my writing! :D

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thehereticaldeserthermit · 4 years ago

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𝕆𝕦𝕥 𝕆𝕗 ℂ𝕙𝕒𝕣𝕒𝕔𝕥𝕖𝕣 ℚ𝕦𝕖𝕤𝕥𝕚𝕠𝕟𝕤

ROLE PLAYER GET TO KNOW YOU PROMPT

Alright TDC Community It’s time for a task,

and this time we’re all going to get to know each other a little better.

Under the cut, you’ll find forty out of character questions split into two parts: OOC about your muses, and OOC about yourself! Answer what you’d like, add more if you’d like.

When you’re done TAG some of your writing partners and keep FUN going.

-there is no pressure to participate

-IF You Are Reading This And You’d Like To Participate Consider Yourself Tagged My Friend!

Much Love,

TheJesseWhoLurks

I tag @lyr-taxidermist @theghostofharar @hurdygurdyskeksis @urskekyagvi @skekmal-the-hunter @skekso-the-emperor @gourdplayer @hedonistschambers @ulvanmaudra @littlebluezoologist @the-wandering-urru @queenofthetides @juliejewel24 @thecastleurru

OOC About Your Character(s)

1. What do you want to get out of playing this character(s)?

The reason I wanted to write for Gra was to meet fellow fans that loved the world of TDC as much as I do, I wanted to find fellow writers. I wanted to steep myself in the fandom. You can easily consider me skeKSis obsessed but I am growing a fondness for their counterparts -slowly ❤

2. Describe your character(s) with three words.

Passionate | Erratic | Trustworthy

3. What made you decide to write this muse?

Originally I was going to pick up The Ritual Master, he’d been my OG fav from the movie BUT Gra kept ... poking me with his scepter? Like; I live in the desert, you live in the desert, Ima recluse, you’re a recluse =we are simpatico. I think The Heretic picked me because he simply would not leave my mind when I considered him as a possibility.

4. If you could change one event in your muse’s life (in their main or canon verse), what would you change?

Canon. I mean they left us kinda hanging there. We really do not know what happened do we? They are simply, just not there anymore. I do not want them to perish, I want them to make it to the finish line and become urSkek. It breaks my heart to think they did not make it.

5. If you could tell your muse one thing, what would you tell them?

I would not say anything, just hug him REALLY tightly and probably not let go until he gives me a chitter-laugh.

6. If you could give your muse one gift, what would you give them?

I would like to give them...ME.

7. If you had to take one positive thing away from your muse, what would you take away?

I do not want to take a positive thing from the fibers that make up Gra. I feel they are very interwoven in his tale. Removing one would make another untether. If I could take away or diminish a bad trait Id have him not be so stubborn and or impatient but then again he would not be Gra now would he?

8. If you could “borrow” one aspect of your muse and apply it to yourself or your own life, what would you borrow?

His determination, passion. Damn son. You get things done.

9. Do you genuinely want your muse to be happy? What do you think would make them most happy in life?

Yes. He’s gotten his ass handed to him, I think he might be owed a slice of peace and happiness. What makes him most happy? He’s already showed me; his relationships whether its friendship, extended family or a lover those are treasures he holds near and dear to his heart.

10. Do you enjoy putting your muse through angst? What do you think would break their heart the most?

Usually I prefer to plot out angst rather then let it completely run a-muck because you never know what your partner is comfortable with, what might trigger them in a detrimental way and simply set fire to a plot unintentionally.

I already know; it literally is ... break his heart.

11. What do you love about your muse?

His dynamic energy, the wild fire, the mystical chaos, the creativity is off the charts. His sharp distinguished features, the way he looks shamanistically feral as compared to his brethren and their Garthic garb. His use of the color red. His scratchy rasp of a voice. His laugh.

12. What do you hate about your muse?

He is a high maintenance muse, he is demanding and screeches loudly for what he wants.

13. What about your muse amuses you?

The fact that he is a skeKSis. This brings a whole slew of challenges to the table for a writer. Case in point, I was writing a reply one day and I went to put something in along the lines of ‘he arched his brow and blah blah’ THEN he hit me! He has no eyebrows to arch, ahhh! I have to stop and think about how to write out expressive traits or reactions that are not of the usual human reaction tone.

14. What about your muse makes you sad?

How fragile his heart really is after all the shit he’s endeared.

15. How would you describe your muse to someone about to meet them, in person, for the first time?

Get Ready For A Wild SURPRISE!

16. Would you like your muse as a person if you met them in real life?

Yes, I like creative souls. I cherish them.

17. In what ways are you better than your muse? In what ways are they better than you?

I do not think I am or he is better than the other.

But I will say he is a handsome devil, for a skeKSis.

18. Why do you think you connect to your muse?

Creative. Outcast.

19. What aspect of your muse’s personality is most important to you? What aspect of your muse’s personality do you think is most important to them? Is it the same? Why or why not?

His passion and drive. I’d say its the same answer for us both. All of the accomplishments he tackled probably had their stacks of obstacles with each to-do. You’d have to have an unending supply of passion and drive to keep going, to complete all. He really is a work-a-holic and a busy body skek.

20. Has your character(s) changed over the time that you have been playing them? How have they changed?

Not yet but I am sure he will, creative liberties will be taken since I only have a a episode or two to work with -am I right?

About You!

1. What is your name?

Jesse.

2. What is your profession?

secret shit.

3. What do you do to relax?

I write. Play video games. Naps are divine. Hot coffee and watch YT videos. DOodle. Desert combing walks. Long hot baths. Organize things xD

4. What is your favorite treat (desert)?

All kinds, I’m not picky. I love me some chocolate lately.

5. Favorite movie

Too many to list. Its October right now. All I want is Hocus Pocus, some Harry Potter and Practical Magick at the moment. Tis the season.

6. Favorite book

I do not think I have a favorite. BUT I will admit that I have a copy of The Dark Crystal that I STOLE FROM A LIBRARY YEARS AGO! I have kept it all this time, its falling apart and its aged with beauty and I adore it ❤ I also have a Jim Henson book about puppetry and his works, there is a page from TDC and if my memory serves me right it has the concept art of skekGra in it sooo sooo I was looking at skekGra YEARS AGO AND HAD NO CLUE the conjunction that would line up in the future! I really neeed to go find this book but its in a storage shed that will be a fresh hell to get to =[ *

7. Favorite vacation spot

Anywhere where its either very green and or by some body of water. Ocean, river, lake. Yes, good. -not very many humans around save for present company reading thiiiis.

8. Favorite Disney movie

Are you kidding me? Too many to list, although I will say The Sword In The Stone did play a part in Gra’s Crystal Skimmer named Archimedes after the grouchy old owl.

9. How did you first get into role playing?

Years ago. I started writing on face book. I wrote for a pirate believe it or not, he was my first muse and he holds special place in my black heart and probably always will. But I am disinclined to acquiesce the gift of further details about this scurvy cursed muse, Ha!

10. What was your first platform? If it was something other than Tumblr, what made you get into Tumblr?

It was face book, before they got all crazy about accounts and security. I moved over to tumblr because writers were incredibly rude and rapid fire RP-ers. One liner sentences and I’m like NOPE I need a novel length.

11. What’s a grammar rule you find yourself breaking or ignoring a lot?

Sometimes I have a touch of dyslexia, sometimes I typo, sometimes I am too tired to proof read, sometimes I make blunders. But I tend to focus on my mistakes rather then other peoples. I just go with the flow, I just write no matter what their level of ‘proper grammar’ IS because I’d like to think that maybe they are just starting out, maybe they will fall in love with writing and maybe they will be the next author who creates a world we all fall in love with and want to immerse ourselves in.

12. Are there any languages besides English in which you think you could comfortably roleplay?

I do not RP in other languages. However I did have a muse at one time who was French, I would throw in little phrases but it was never entirely done in French and I do have a British muse at the moment, so again I will use slang and little sayings to make them well rounded as best as I can. Those are just little details I like to include that many others might skip on but I thrive for deets.

I do however have role play writing partners that are from ALL over the world which is amazing to me.

13. Do you listen to music while your write?

ALOT. I have tracks specifically for skekGra, that take me to his frame of mind. Even TDC soundtrack at times, the puppet show song and the blue flame part 2 are on replay a lot.

14. Are you a morning, day, evening, or night writer?

I am all over the place. My life is very hectic. I’d like to say its usually in the afternoon of evening for me, the house is settled down and things are silent but thats not always how it works out. Oftentimes I will sit down and write a reply or two, then dip to do mundane human things that adults do, then return back for a few more replies.

15. How does tiredness affect your writing?

Kills it. The weekends I work long hours therefor my brain is like WHAAAT.

16. What is your biggest obstacle to writing every day, if time doesn’t count?

It is always TIME. Sometimes stress levels can be an obstacle too, no lie. If something major is going on, I just throw my hands up like ‘I got nothin’’ and thats that.

17. How many drafts is a paralyzing amount?

Oh damn. Been there done that. I am much more picky about it nowadays. I try to limit skekGra to a certain number of replies because he also has to allow room for other muses.

Currently: Gra has ten replies on tumblr -no actually 11 &&& 4 on discord. I am two shakes away from cutting HIM OFF! lol.

18. Is there anything character-wise or writing style-wise that you can’t stand?

I’m open to different characters, I have written with a lot. I love a writer who has style, I appreciate the effort.

Etiquette, manners and consideration are oftentimes LACKING as of late.

19. What kind of anonymous questions are your favorite?

ANYTHING as long as it is not anon HATE.

20. What is your weakest point in writing? Angst, fluff, dialogue, etc.?

T I M E not having enough time to write the angst fluff and dialogue, smut too lets be real. It really is a bummer to me when I do not have the time, I work, I have a a lotta responsibilities, my life is like a hurricane a lot of the time so TIME is my weakness, oftentimes I am super J E L L O of people who are online all day, every day, always there I’m envious and I get writers FOMO which makes me laugh but its so damn true I could ugly laugh cry about it.

#OOC: Post Is Out Of Character #||| Just a lil get to know me thingy |||#the dark crystal #tdc age of resistance #skeksis #skekgra #skekgra the conqueror #skekgra the heretic

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lilquill · 4 years ago

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Are you doing okay what with all the VV stuff that happened? It seemed like you and Mina were close

Hey hey, thanks for the worries anon! Mina of mvcreates/Violet Vineyard and I were properly talking as friends for only a few months quite a long time ago. Emotionally I’m completely fine, but I do have stuff to say and I do want to help document things if any of it is useful in any way. A lot of it will be dry because it’s just documenting, but some of it will be “juicier” I guess, and I’d like to corroborate some of the things my friends are saying. I’ll put this under the cut for people who don’t want to scroll through all this and/or have no idea what I’m talking about and want to keep it that way!

You guys can check @nuwuhorizons‘s blog to see what exactly is going on and I believe they’re also reblogging some things others who were members are saying. The case of people dogpiling a 19-year-old trans person and making fun of their name is on the blog (post here, wayback machined here).

I can corroborate a bunch of what @rrrawrf-writes (post here, wayback machined here) and @gingerly-writing (post here, wayback machined here) have said. I backread through the interaction that Ginger talks about in her post (of course not the DMs, but the interaction itself).

I know some people may be confused about why Ginger only has that one screenshot of what she said and may not see that as full evidence, but Violet Vineyard had a super strict “don’t screenshot and post anything” with lots of scary looking legal stuff attached to it policy and, well, Ginger can’t be sharing stuff without anyone’s permission if it’s just the message she herself sent, but they’d have grounds to take god knows what action with what backing against her if she posted something else. But, well, for what it’s worth, as someone who read through that conversation a little after it happened, it was certainly a case of dogpiling and left a bad taste in my mouth, and it strikes me as really odd that the mods would try to shut someone down like that.

I haven’t really been doing stuff in writeblr lately as you can probably tell from my blog, but yeah, Mina herself and a lot of people in that particular friend group of hers, as Lisa mentions, have just disappeared off Tumblr. I can also attest to the dogpiling tendencies and this Mina Is Always Right tendency, and the fervor with which people would defend her.

I was honestly never close enough to Mina to be in that friend group. She and I were only really talking to each other for a few months over a year ago. I don’t think I was “writeblr-y” enough to fit in with them. I was also not super active in that server. I didn’t post much about my wips because I in general don’t think I really post a lot about them. Therefore I didn’t get like, massive benefits off of the whole “network” thing, but I’d reblog some stuff when I saw it. I was probably most known for posting pictures of my plants, lol. And I would occasionally hop in to talk briefly about kpop with like, one person? (They went by Kay and their url was like, lvcrezia? lvcrezias? Something like that.) In fact, probably the last thing I ever said in that server was a super quick conversation about Red Velvet’s “Monster” music video around the time it dropped.

In fact, for the sake of being super transparent/establishing credibility, and for documenting purposes, I’ll list all the non-plant-pictures and non-kpop conversations I can remember actually participating in. Some of these will lead off into bigger topics, and I’ll specify those. But first, a word.

TO ANY OF THE FORMER MODS WHO MIGHT COME AFTER ME FOR SAYING THINGS ABOUT THE SERVER, SINCE THIS HAS APPARENTLY HAPPENED TO OTHERS: The server is deleted, and so is the text of the whole “contract” (yes, really) that people had to agree to in order to join VV. I remember that the agreement made sure we didn’t post screenshots publicly, but other than that I genuinely do not remember the text and I have no way of referencing it to keep in line with it since the server is deleted. I do not remember if documenting things like this is against anything I have agreed to, I have no record of the agreement, and I have not been notified of any place to access a record of the agreement before the server was deleted. If my post is some sort of violation, you cannot hold me accountable for rules that I am unable to follow, and I would greatly appreciate not being targeted with empty threats shrouded in scary legal language. If you have any point of contention with what I have said, feel free to take it up either publicly or privately. Please do @ me if it’s specific to me; I’m not really the vagueposting kind. If any of you want me to delete this post, you will need to provide actual proof of the agreement that I made by joining Violet Vineyard, and you will also need to prove that the rules were not edited after I agreed to them. If any of them were follow-up rules not from the beginning of the server, it’s possible that I did not see them and therefore you need to provide proof that I agreed to those, too. In addition, since image editing is what set off this avalanche in the first place hence we’re all aware that there’s software that allows us to edit images and pass them off as an original thing, you’ll need to provide proof that any screenshots/images are undoctored. Furthermore, since the rules have been deleted with the server, as the method I used to agree to follow them, you must prove that my agreement is still valid, since it seems to me it’s been nullified since it’s, well, gone either through deletion or kicking me out alongside everyone else. Tl;dr you don’t scare me lol.

Anyways, back to a list of the non-kpop, non-plant-pics, non-my-wips-promo conversations I can actually remember:

On January 5, 2020, the server had a conversation about Roshani Chokshi’s book The Gilded Wolves. I can give the date because during/in the aftermath of the conversation, which I talked about the book in, Mina DMed me quickly. (This was also the last time Mina ever directly contacted me.) I’ll talk about this later.

In February 2020 I believe I quickly mentioned getting concert tickets.

Either early this year or late last year I think I posted some stuff about landscape photography, with some photos of the beach.

I believe I posted a couple fashion pics at some point?

Back in May 2019 I got some kinda weird asks about Violet Vineyard and I think people were talking about that, and I assume I participated since I was the one who received the asks. At that time VV was like a super new server and didn’t really have much as far as the issues we’ve been talking about go, so I defended it. (I’ll be talking about this later.)

Probably in June/July 2019 people in the server had a discussion about Black Muslim characters and representation, initiated by me for one of my WIPs.

I think we talked about South Asian sweets at some point???

I believe in April/May 2019, there was some stuff in that server reagarding “drama” with Castor who at that time went by the url pilipalea that I honestly don’t remember much of. Castor was never in VV, but I believe they were in a server with Mina at some other point. There was something about grammar and proofreading?? (I’ll be referencing this soon as well.)

I helped someone with their computer science homework at some point.

I asked for r&b music recs at some point either late 2019 or earlier 2020.

I’ve also talked about ethnic clothes I think.

We’ve talked about Hindu nationalism and how awful it is.

I think we’ve talked about tone policing and how woc are often portrayed as “aggressive.”

We’ve talked about health/fitness and exercise.

I recommended Jade City and some other books I’m a fan of in there.

Probably talked about Bollywood movies at some point.

The fact that I can remember probably most of my conversations that lasted more than like, one message in there is, I think, a pretty good testament to a) me having at least a kind of decent memory and b) I wasn’t participating in the server so regularly that the conversations kind of blend together. I know this is all kind of long and dry for anyone who’s here for drama purposes lol, but I did want to establish that I’ve been in that server for quite a while and that I wasn’t monitoring it heavily; in fact, I had it muted very soon after joining it.

I wasn’t super close to anyone that I’d met through VV. People who are friends that I still regularly contact who were in VV with me, I had met through other servers and other interactions on Tumblr. I’ll disclose right now that I have been longtime friends with Ginger, Lisa, and Eff (@time-to-write-and-suffer), who have all come out against VV, and that we are in our own servers with people from writeblr. Ginger and Lisa were both in VV, Eff has never been.

Okay, back to maybe “juicier” stuff.

Mina had always positioned herself almost as this “tumblr mom” type. She’d reference her age a lot, which would contrast a lot with how a significant portion of the members were much younger and, I think, set up the dynamic of people looking up a lot to her and always coming to her defense. After all, we’re talking a bunch of passionate kids who’d found a writeblr network. And the server definitely seemed “legit”; I myself was pretty impressed with just how tightly organized everything was, and like I mentioned, there was fancy legal language to ~protect their rights~ and whatnot. Mina herself seemed so accomplished with so many talents: she’d post her writing and artwork, I believe she’d made a couple pieces of music, she’d work out and keep in shape, she had a seemingly wonderful loving relationship with her husband, she was active in research fields professionally and as an outbreak responder, and she, of course, had a significant online presence as a “big writeblr.” I remember when she’d started blowing up, so soon after her blog had been created, because of her prolific content and friendly persona. People, especially younger ones who had no other writeblr support group, looked up to her and trusted her. And the nature of the server was to shower everyone in praise, so Mina found herself on the receiving end of quite a bit of it. Mina would also actively boost and review other writers’ content, genuinely engaging with it and providing feedback, support, and valuable resources.

Mina also had a tight-knit group of adult friends. Some of them I believe carried over from pre-VV times (incuding CJ of typewriter-jade if I’m remembering correctly, who made fun of the trans person’s name in the reblog chain in the link to nuwuhorizons’s blog), while some were made afterwards. They would act super friendly and familiar with each other, which I think contributed to a lot of people falling into this little “friendship” super fast. They were also authority figures and role models, and tended to agree with each other, so everyone just went along with that.

These factors, I think, heavily influenced the dogpiling tendencies. People were eager to defend their community, where they’d found so much love and support for their work. Minors would go along with adults in conversations. When someone said something, others would enthusiastically support them. And people were just so into each other that I really couldn’t keep up, which is probably why I didn’t participate too much. People became just super fast friends and the server was so large and so seemingly “professional” and structured in how it was made. I think people just kind of assumed everyone in there was great and their friend who could be trusted deeply, when in reality that’s just impossible if there are like, 100+ members. Meaning if something minorly negative happened (like on that literal eleven-year-old’s blog), everyone would come in to say something to demonstrate their emphatic loyalty, even when it became excessive for something as small as an ask game done wrong.

This happened with the Gilded Wolves discussion as well. Someone stepped in to say that the way Gilded Wolves coded its antagonists as this shady secret society of people was antisemitic, and everyone joined in to rip the book apart without having even read it. I joined in the conversation to state that I didn’t see it that way, since that shady antagonist group was very much coded as white Christians (their names are all French Christian names) and were colonizers (meaning making them this shadowy group of powerful and evil people was accurate) and one of the protagonists, who is Jewish, is opposing them and antisemitism is portrayed as horrible, and that the book had had (if I’m remembering correctly) Jewish sensitivity readers and multiple Jewish book reviewers really enjoyed and recommended it. Then Mina stepped in to say that multiple Jewish journals she followed rated the book highly and recommended it meaning the accusation of antisemitism clashed heavily with what a lot of other people thought, and that since me and the other person who was saying the book was antisemitic were the only ones who had read it or were familiar with it in any capacity, it wasn’t fair for everyone to be judging it like that. It was like she’d flipped a switch: people were suddenly much more “reasonable” and “fair” and willing to give the book a chance, just because she’d stepped in. (As a quick note, I don’t remember exactly whether Mina stepped in first or if I stated my opinion first. I also want to mention that Mina DMed me to state that the person who accused the book of antisemitism had expressed some Zionist sentiments in the past and to say that maybe their take on the book could have come from Islamophobia with them maybe assuming obviously ethnic name of the author was a Muslim name. The Zioinist stuff is something I can’t actually speak on since again, I have no access to the server anymore and I don’t remember that person’s url. This was the last time Mina DMed me or I her.)

I wrote all that out because I think it illustrates a few things. Firstly, a good example of the tendencies of people going with the flow of things even when it led to dogpiling/drastic conclusions. When I say they were really trashing that book, I mean it! Secondly, it demonstrates the willingness of everyone to go along with what Mina said. Third, it shows that Mina was capable of stepping in to prevent dogpiling (and, seemingly, she would, at least if her beliefs aligned with the opposite of whatever incited the dogpiling) and that people would listen to her and actually change their minds.

Whether or not Mina supported something was pretty important. Of course, it was her server, so she was definitely allowed to run it how she saw fit, but she would very swiftly pass judgement on things and everyone would just comply. One time, I think there were more than one different threads of conversation happening in the general channel of the server. Jess suggested making a second general channel to allow for other conversations, as is common in a lot of servers, including ones I’m in and moderate/own/have some power in. I don’t remember if I supported that suggestion or if I only backread that conversation, but I know at least one other person agreed. Mina said that as an older person (she’d very frequently bring up her age) she thought people could just wait for their turn in a conversation and didn’t even consider trying it out. Other mods, I believe, backed her up and said no to the second general conversation channel. I remember being a little confused as to why nobody even considered trying a member’s suggestion to make the server more easy to participate it and help provide additional structure/support how big it was, and why it was shut down because people could just wait for their turn, when clearly the general channel was getting overloaded before our eyes. But Mina didn’t see the need, so therefore nobody else wanted to do anything about it, and nobody ever mentioned it again, I think. I know this is a super minor instance lol, but I do think it illustrates something about the behavior in the server and how it was run. It’s not like other channels weren’t added based on need; one was created for the 2018 elections, one was created for talking about race in June during the height of BLM protests having news coverage, I’m pretty sure one was created for talking about the coronavirus. So, the mods were watching conversations and responding as they saw fit, they just wouldn’t field this request, for some reason. Obviously conversations getting muddled in a general channel isn’t as significant as major political events, antiblack racism, or a pandemic, but these channels were made to improve the server experience and likely to prevent these topics from completely overloading other channels, so, well.

Okay, the Castor/pilipalea stuff and dogpiling. I’ll say this stuff now because Castor has opened up about it (here [wayback machined] and here [archived in a google doc]), so I see that as permission for others to comment on it. If I’m remembering correctly and looking back at the right things, there was something about Mina giving advice on a grammatical error to one of her mutuals, or something asking if her mutuals wanted grammatical advice? Castor vagueblogged, presumably about that, and talked about classism in expecting good grammar from people, which is a valid issue, but seemed misapplied to this instance of someone consenting to receive advice on grammar/syntax/mechanics, if that’s what the vagueblogging was about. I reached out to Mina to let her know that I thought someone was vagueblogging about her, and she told me about past conflicts with Castor. I also reached out to Castor over DMs to ask what the vagueblogging was about, because you genuinely never know; classist prescriptivism is harmful and bad, and so many people on Tumblr are in so many different circles that similar topics may come up coincidentally. Castor wasn’t clear with me either about what the post was targeting and skirted around naming names.

At this point, looking back, it still seems to be that it was about Mina, especially considering that Castor had previous history with her and others in her circle. Mina was irritated by the vagueblogging (who likes being vagueblogged about?) and also informed me, all the way back in April 2019, about this past server drama that Castor mentioned. It seems to me that it stemmed from a misunderstanding: Mina and I believe other mods noticed another person using Castor’s PSDs without credit. Mina checked with Castor about whether people should be crediting them for PSDs and Castor said that, yes, they wanted credit; you can see this interaction in the screenshot Castor linked on their post.

This is where the accounts of what happened diverge: Mina expressed to me that she and the other mods weren’t very harsh since they’d seen that Castor’s friend had credited Castor in the past, so they just wanted to remind Castor’s friend to give credit, without knowing that Castor’s friend had permission to use the PSDs without crediting. I was told that Mina and the team of mods were professional in their handling of this; Castor has stated in their post that the group was extremely harsh. Since I don’t have any screenshots or exact records of what they said before I was in contact with Mina, I can’t comment, so I’ll withhold judgement on that. According to Mina, she and the other mods had not been very vocal about this crediting/PSD stuff, and very few people knew about it, so it did seem like Castor had attacked Mina out of nowhere.

What I can say is that the VV members were certainly quick to respond to the grammar vagueblog, and that if I’m remembering correctly, readily jumped to Mina’s defense. I distinctly remember that one VV member specifically asked whether it was about Mina in a reblog. This happened pretty early on in VV’s existence and I believe was the first major “drama” that VV got embroiled in. Looking back, I do think it was fair to be critical of Castor’s post. But this was also the first look at the tendencies people had of getting embroiled in the fervor of any perceived slight against a member (in particular Mina).

I noticed this again when I received anons that were sort of bitter about VV’s existence in May 2019, way before VV had gained the reputation that it has now. People were very quick to respond with hostility and slightly amplify the anger expressed by other members, and little by little things got really out of hand. I can totally understand being upset and irritated, since the asks were kind of unwarranted and the sender did apologize if I remember correctly. But there was a huge outpouring of vicious language from a lot of the members, and this was, I think, the first instance of proper dogpiling in VV, especially since it was an easy antagonist; the sender was out of line, and they were totally anonymous.

These were the only two instances of going to bat for VV that I ever participated in. For the other things, I either only backread or missed them completely. While they don’t really paint VV in a super bad light, not like the dogpiling of an eleven-year-old that Jess mentions in her post, it did give me a pretty good idea of how VV handled controversies.

I’ve mentioned some of my theories of why this dogpiling/toxicity happened. I’d also like to add that Mina would often send concise, decisively-worded statements about things. I think this may have come across as final-word judgments to a lot of people, so they would take that as the last say on a certain matter and escalate in severity of their response from there. And like, you should trust your friends and take what they say in good faith. But you still need to be thinking critically and considering your response, especially when you haven’t known someone for very long. And this, I think, was a big source of toxicity in the server. There were just so many people responding to the same issues and aligning their beliefs, and they’d build off each other and create an environment where these kinds of responses were okay. Plus, VV was always portrayed as a tight-knit family when not everyone knew each other and not everyone was active (as is totally normal for a massive server), so this also contributed to people wanting to defend each other all the time. And I don’t think the mod team did an adequate job of shutting it down, despite the veneer of a structured, sort of more “professional” space.

Okay, now onto the art stuff.

Disclaimer, I don’t draw digital or physical art. I was always aware that Mina was certainly at least using references for her work. In some cases I could even pinpoint which pictures were used, like one where the faceclaim was Ranveer Singh. I also received fanart of one of my characters that, of course, looked very similar to the faceclaim. It certainly was clear some tracing had happened in that picture because of the level of detail in the chikankari embroidery, but like…..it’s free fanart, chikankari isn’t copyrighted, and that embroidery is super difficult to draw anyways. What I was not aware of was Mina apparently tracing images and using them to advertise for commissions, which is something I do not condone. I also know my photography and photo editing tools, so I was aware that there was some filtering/editing going on. I’m not sure if Mina traced and didn’t disclose it for commissioned art.

Okay, now the server shutting down stuff!

I was completely unaware of the dogpiling/transphobia stuff happening in the server because I had it on mute. I only found out about all this two days ago. I received the message where everyone was @’ed about VV’s “migration” off Tumblr and that the server would be shut down. I can confirm that the concern was about mirror sites and that the server did discuss these mirror sites as a big intellectual property issue. I didn’t know people wanted the server shutting down to be kept so secret, and I honestly cannot think of a reason why; I feel like if those mirror site concerns were serious, people would be trying to spread the word on writeblr? So I think that people are right to be a little suspicious of the exact reason for the server’s closing.

I think I should mention also that people were pretty much always friendly with me on VV. I met a bunch of cool people, and Mina was always kind and supportive with me. @radley-writes has echoed similar sentiments here (wayback machined here) and here (wayback machined here) while being critical of the environment in VV.

I know this post is like, wildly long and probably quite dry and rambly at points, but I hope it does provide some specific examples to back up some of the criticisms of VV and document it a bit better.

Thank you for reading! I’ll make sure to edit this to add stuff if I remember things/see the need.

I also want to state that my post is more a critique of the environment than anything. I’m not trying to attack anyone at all, I’m just giving an account of stuff that has happened, my level of involvement, and my own thoughts on all this.

I also want to say that I am completely open to hearing what any of you have to say. Feel free to critique/discuss anything I’ve said in this post with me. If you want to vent about your experiences in/with Violet Vineyard, my inbox and DMs are totally open. If you want to keep things confidential, I won’t break your trust or reveal your identity (unless you start idk, spouting racist stuff at me or something). If you want to anonymously tell people about an experience, feel free to shoot me an anon.

I hope you’re all having a wonderful day! I’m sending you lots of love. Take care! <3

#writeblr drama #mvcreates #violetvineyard #violet vineyard #man i haven't been involved in writeblr drama for so long #feels wild to be back!#answered #ask #anon #anonymous #sakshi speaks

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They should make a law where if the police don’t read you your Miranda rights you get out of jail free, like if you don’t get your receipt at fast food restaurants you get a mail free

The shaggy law - There should be a law that if you continuously and shamelessly deny doing something, no matter how indisputably obvious it is that you did it, you should get off free for pure savegery.

Confederates as “rebels for tradition” is laughable

Ram rainbow spiral horns profile.

People think grammar rules are etched into the universe — they’re not. When people say AAve is incorrect and ignorant, they say that their conception of how one should speak is inherently correct despite no evidence/truth. Grammar is agreed upon not mandated

Hippie sauce infusion pizza joint

Plain nude balconette with little purple and pink flowers at wiring

How could anyone predict anything happening but how could any be surpised either

Hierarchies - nahhhh

Humans aren’t inherently higher than any other creature or thing, but as humans i don’t think it’s wrong to prioritize other humans. There no better or worse but there is optimal for certain environments and lifestyles.

What differentiates a piece of art from a slightly different replica - when is it an entirely different piece altogether? Moving a figure slightly? Adding a splash of paint ? Changing a color to the point where no one could tell? Is the persons perception the deciding factor or what’s actually on the canvas. If abstract art is about the perception, and the waning behind it - does it change with these things?

An exhibit where people are invited to paint over and destroy or change the art

The differences between us and other. Are feeble - not illusory but

Periwinkle sky blue black and white each of a half circle . Faded out

Uni should be about exploring ideas — new and old famillar and foreign - honeing writing reading reasoning debating listening etc skills.

Umm, Karen were your parents married when you were born?

Ummmm no, umm i mean , uh ,yes —what??

Then why are you policing what other people do?

Dark blue light blue orange lemon circles layer on top of each other, several difffent sizes

Job apps tip!! For every job you apply to , Change your last name on your resume to the last name of the hiring manager and they will think you are related to them and hire you with nepotism. ( then, or coarse, legally when you get the job)

Unpopular opinion: i don’t really mind diarrhea

I for one think it’s incredibly brave of the brats girls to reclaim such a derogatory term

Starting every Describtion of every British show with “its kind of like skins but..”

Beanie baskin took that treat she snatched it - she ain’t even askin

The squad bod - a group of ghost friends share one body in which they have to live their lives -

My playlists are a matter of fact, not opinion. They reveal truths about the human experience

A cats gorilla imeritive of aesthetics.

I don’t chose them, they are not for joy but for truth. They are not intelligible but feel able

📝 narrative - longing

👼 chaotic

🌾 childlike wonder

Things that seem homo and phobic ATST

- Woodstock

- Brown eyed girl

Life has a funny way of sneaking up on ya when you think everything BG a gone wrong and everything bows up in your face

If women can’t do drag because they have an advantage then what is drag? Is it having good looking tits and a waist ? Looking like woman? or is it about having charisma uniqueness nerve and talent?

Examining Tik toks through different philosophical lenses

What makes it so they put parenthesis around lyrics in a song? What intonations and such make it parenthesis worthy

What’s an article of clothing from your childhood that you viscerally remember for seemingly no reason

I feel like the problem with the property brothers is they had too good of a childhood

Do you ever wonder if personality traits would be diffferntnin different cultures? Would a quiet person be even quieter if they were brought up in North Korea? Or the same amount of talkativity? Do we have the traits no matter what, or are we inclined to be more of one way than the others around us. Are personality traits created by comparison to those around?

Maybe the anxiety comes from knowing your not “supposed” to be as quiet as you are. You don’t really want to talk, that’s okay , but it’s expected that you do. So you are anxiety that your not living up

I find happiness every single day

This feeling has made me so appreciative of my mental state usually. How many people feel like this on the regular? How many people have this as their default? I am so lucky. My default is happy. I have my issues, but i need to appreciate the gift i was given. I was given elation. Childlike wonder. Curiosity. Adventurousness. Self completion and fullness. The rest will come.

If you see a celebrity you want to talk to in public but don’t want to bother them, make sure they don’t see that you saw them and start a fake conversation telling a friend that they should buy a product they are a sponsor for, and that they should use their coupon code. When they approach you to thank you for being such a loyal fan, obviously pretend to be shocked that they just so happened to be there

Christianity excuses selfish politics and beliefs

Things i never would’ve noticed if they weren’t pointed out to me:

-Left and right handed ness

Rating sports teams by uniform colors

Balloon animals but make it clothing!

Logics doesn’t care about your feelings, but it certainly cares about your biasees.

He who findeth keepith, whilst he who loosith weepith.

Religious thought often starts at the conclusion they want and attempts to make arguments justifying it.

Jewish debate starts with an agreement that we are going to follow the book, but argues about what the book truly says. Not good enough when you are still just following the book

Why did Jesus need to die for our sins

Dream - swimming in a lake and bump into something you think is a human tying to save to but is it! Oct 29 9:03

Candle company logo etc

I’m sorry for your loss

It’s not oka

If people can accept that stupid bad jokes can be

Is there a reason for each thing existing? Sufficient reason

Understanding if an area is a matter of perspective or fact? Is it Emperical ?

If you assume you have free will you limit your critical thinking ability and therefor stour actual free will - you need to navigate technology such as algorithms that show you why at you want to see or you completely loose free will - you cannot chose when you don’t even know a choice. there is Somthing controlling you

Revelation is within it doesn’t involve others - can happen in a moment

Revolution- requires work and years and years of convincing others m

What counts as a second chance? What counts as a first chance? What does giving someone the benefit of the doubt entail ? Letting them out of jail , or letting them have a 2nd term as president.

**Picture of coke or Pepsi book**

Trump supporters be like: THIS is the BALLOt sleepy crooked joe SEND to MY neighbor. So much FOR democracy

One flew over the coup coups nest

Ashge-nazi = Jewish trump supporter

The heathers of the USA are Cali, New York and Texas. Florida, too

Shape shifting would solve all of this. I could go to Washington DC, pretend to be trump, concede then leave. It would be hilarious, however if me and trump looked identical and had to so the most idiotic crazy shit to prove to America that we indeed are the true DJ.

Coup busting outfit - light cute short sleeve camo shirts , army green super utalitarian cargo pants , double sash belts in leather with grommets studs or spikes (to be decided by team (with democracy) or left up to the individual) leather (vegan available) lace up knee high boots (maybe with spikes if not too 2012) and the pies de resistance two army green denim shoulder high gloves that fold down as far as needed for the comfort of the fighter. Will be adorned with patches decided by the wearer. Edges will be frayed to honor to the coup busting aesthetic and spirit of the endeavor. We can decide on a signature lip color, but spf is required for all fighters. Of coarse we will have those football stripes below the eyes, don’t be stupid.

How far away can something be from a face and still have humans think it’s a face

Senator Portman - i hope you are well, and want to thank you for the hard work you have put in to this election. However, it has become abundantly clear that joe Biden and Kamala Harris have secured more than enough electoral and popular votes to warrant recognition as president and vice elect. Upon reading the transcripts of he hopeless court cases, there is absolutely no evidence of vote measurable fraud. is time you stand up for democracy and face reality by congratulating he pair on their success. Americans and scared and they need a powerful republican voice to demounce the unsubstantiated conspircy theories that attempt to thwart democracy in this beautiful county. Please do the right thing , and stand with sanity, freedom and democracy. History books and citizens will thank you. May god bless you, your staff and loved ones

Could mermaids exist through evolution in the future

Me learning about real us history - all the nations destroyed by the USA—- I’m the baaad Guy

The rest of the world - duh dodododosodo

Print that looks like a page of writing that has been sourced in water so it’s bleeding and darker in speckles

Zamps= examples

Clothes with green screen cut outs

Robots don’t need to be sentient to destroy us.

Navy mock neck long sleeves big orange and little white stripe on tube cage sides

A veritcal line stretch waistband

Cross cross and straps back

Square high neck

Scarlet polka dots around can light blue text and beach image as front

Blue stroke red inside square, blue triangle rainbow with eye and funky font

Y either know a particular topic or not , but it’s hard to pin down intelligence on one category

Cream background , ice cream pink script name kinda bev hills hotel script looking ish

Move your mouth in a differ way

Supersonic vibrating butt cleaner

Half magenta half red violet a blue teacup in the center with white floral frills thick serif font

Pink background am orange flower in a vase white present ribbon n red as a table

An app that familiarizes people with science - through experimental learning ― hands on experiences that make it seem less top down and authoritarian , and more like a set of steps that we take, things that anyone can do to get closer with nature and the world

A social media philosophy app - teaches what others said and gives people a chance to express their views , postulate, argue, etc gadfly? How would be avoid a shit show, how can we make social media more humanitarian. how can we care about people while also expressing deeply held ideas , how can we encourage users to examine their deeply held ideas without alienating them. How can we discourage hatred and abuse and groupthink with design? How do we slow people down and encourage them to recognize the human behind the screen. Street epistemology? Socratic dialogue?

Socrates - asking questions. Breaking it down to bits. Deeply understanding their argument. Asking about different possibilities and circumstances. Take vast assumptions and show scenarios that make go against them.

Build fact checking into apps

Narrative self vs experiential

Walks you through steps of the sciefitifc method and encourages you to explain how you feel each step actually helped you- then walks you through a scientist doing the same for their reasarch

Republicans only want to be free in the specific ways that benefit corporations

Are Christians more willing to support the death pen early because they already believe in the cruel and overstepping punishment of hell?

Where did the idea come from that you need to remain impartial when trying to persuade

The idea that there is someone in a similar but different dwelling, hearing similar but different sounds and feeling similar but different feelings is wild

We synthesize sets of traits, and particular actions in a super biased culturally constructed way

With the way we see things as humans- we categorize things into groups that aren’t really reaaal ― paratheletic groups

I just want the people and jobs that benefit society

Connection to nietzsches Dionysian art and eckheart tolle/Taoism

No matter your personality, there is probably a part of the world that you would fit in with naturally.

An ordinary girl is selected as one of the representatives of earth in the first meeting of various alien species after one advanced planet discovered and United 10. Confused as to why she was chosen, she goes on her journey meeting

Wha ba Bada da da da da dada he’s a wha ba ba dadada as a matter of fact it’s not my fault if you came up here thinking that you would win

Wanting to break boundaries and rules for the sake those who are hurt by the rules

You are imagining the best case scenario of the life you want to have and experience Ming the reality of the life you so have.

Yes her drips cosmetics line to students i. Class

Chez it people can goldfish people

Your personality flows where a system needs it to go to maintain balance

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