#coco writes

[queer-cosette]

Me: *writing an emotionally intense scene where I deal with some of my worst personal trauma by giving it to a character* Also me: hey why am I crying

[valsyngur]

Hannibal sent Randall to Will as a gift

So I've been rewatching Hannibal AGAIN and yesterday was the first time that I realised something.

S2E9 "Shiizakana"

The Episode focuses heavily on Will's murder fantasies. It starts with Will dreaming about killing Hannibal. He openly states in the therapy session that he regrets letting Hannibal stop him from killing Clark Ingram.

WILL GRAHAM: I regret what I did in the stables.

HANNIBAL: Then you were lucky I was there.

WILL GRAHAM: Being lucky isn't the same as making a mistake. Allowing you to stop me was a mistake.

HANNIBAL: Then it's not your actions that you

regret. It's the lack thereof.

WILL GRAHAM: That would be more accurate.

Hannibal then proceeds to ask Will to imagine what he would've liked to do instead - his perfect outcome of this missed opportunity. Will fantasises pulling the trigger.

The important part about that is the feeling Will gets when he kills someone. He craves this feeling of power and Hannibal actively encourages this, almost orders Will to hold onto that feeling of power, to remember it.

WILL GRAHAM: A missed opportunity. To feel like I felt when I killed Garret Jacob Hobbs. To feel like I felt when I thought I killed you.

HANNIBAL: And what does that feel like, Will? Excitement bumping in your chest like a cold medallion?

WILL GRAHAM: I felt a quiet sense of power.

HANNIBAL: Good. Remember that feeling.

This is exactly what Hannibal wants from Will. He wants to see this side of him, knowing that Will feels the most alive, feels the most like himself. He feels powerful and just.

And what does Hannibal do after Will confesses that not killing Clark was a missed opportunity?

He creates a new opportunity for Will! He sends Randall Tier after Will to give Will the opportunity to kill, to feel this incredible again.

During my first few times I always thought that Hannibal just sends Randall after Will as an "act of reciprocity" to quote him directly.

But I don't think that alone is the case. I think that Hannibal wanted to give Will the gift to feel this powerful again.

"OFF Hannibal surprised by Will Graham a second time --

-- and pleased."

In the next Episode it gets even more clear when Hannibal says "one positive action begets another" when they talk about it. Hannibal sees it as a positive thing that they both basically sent a serial killer to the other. And what makes this even more beautiful is the way Hannibal carefully and gently cleans Will's hands afterwards.

Hannibal didn't do this because he wanted a little sort of revenge, he did this to give Will what he craves most. It was a gift.

[waterthecoconut]

They’re watching me write fics about them 😳

[cocopineo]

The Girl and the Goddess

A girl speaks to the true goddess of discord and strife.

*˚✧｡ Characters: Seraphina, Eris

*˚✧｡ Rating: Everyone

*˚✧｡Word Count: 501

*˚✧｡ Author Note: Hi this is a one shot! I'm slowly getting back into the desire to write and I mean slowly. A bit short but testing the waters. Formatting a bit wonky gonna try and change up the style later. College has been a thing for sure ;-). Enjoy!

"Frankly cutie I don't see where any of this gets you..." Eris plucked another gold string, the once glimmering pieces faded to black. She takes another strand bored inspecting it, before raking a nail snapping it in two.

The smaller person, Seraphina, moves another rock to her left, rolling it.

"Well I mean you're like in my mind for some reason, trapped deep within another realm...."

Eris rolls her eyes, hair fluring out in frustration before it stills back to soft hovering. Then taking another string, plucking.

"Yes, begrudgingly."

"Is it really that bad?" Seraphina responds more as a statement than a question, going back to tidying up Eris's area...prison or whatever she thought it was. Eris lands her eyes on her a bit annoyed, she lays her head on the Earth.

"I have no recollection or thought of what you're saying."

The goddess huffs still bored. She dips a finger into the Earth feeling the coolness of the water. The water begins to swirl, forming a whirlpool. She watches as the girl below her takes gold and stones attempting to decorate. It felt odd knowing the true knowledge of this girl. Things she didn't know about herself. Sure it was only a hunch, a massive one at that but she wondered.

"You know they're all weak right?"

Seraphina snaps out of her focus ears perk at the goddesses words. She turns slowly looking up at her.

"Who?"

Eris huffs a bit more amused to the fact this girl was smarter than smart but so dense to the true history. However, no one or an esteemed scholar knew, not to mention it's rumored all the historic findings are destroyed. Yet again she had to keep herself saying it was just a hunch the gods, titans and others murmured. Even those ingrates didn't know shit.

"The gods, titans, those all so powerful beings you people worship, work for, hell apparently some of you even become. They're just like you mortals, humans to water folk. All the same.”

Seraphina looked confused, glancing around her trying to relish if she was talking to someone else. Or maybe isolation got to her.

"Isn't that nearly impossible some of these are immortal beings, here for eons? History says otherwise.” She quipped

"Your books lie sweetheart. Even those "immortal " figures have their demise. It's just...harder to find or know. I'm not just here for pestering and meddling Sera. Even for the wars I caused they truly didn't bat an eye. Yet I think my ordeals we're rather fun, it's for other reasons." Eris swirls the water again looking down. This time her expression looked more sad. Her brain wandering to those saccharine memories...nice memories.

Seraphina looks at her confused, a twinge of worry seeping through. The goddess notices her face furrowed, she motions for the girl to continue her redecoration

She does so, but now her mind is a bit puzzled by Eris's tales of myths.

She wondered what other reasons could there be....

[little-curiosities]

it's ironic how I absolutely loathe how teachers play favourites with their students but still yearn to be a teacher's favourite student.

[coco-chip]

It's the month of silly but there's no April fools here! Only two new fics to enjoy on my patreon! Both #gyjo jjba fanfics and both over 1k! Enjoy some previews and feel free to check out my patreon below

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[maryqos]

coco mellors, cleopatra and frankenstein.

[chaosandmarigolds]

Reader, after getting the tiniest amount of constructive criticism: right so I’m gonna go scream into the void

ghost, confused as they walk over to him, bury their face into his chest and then scream:

reader, turning back to Price: okay continue.

[apricatt-art]

them!!!

[queer-cosette]

On the other hand, I recently got a few comments from one person who I didn't know on a completed fic I'd finished posting about three years ago where they only offered concerns and criticism with nothing about what they enjoyed.

I particularly remember them leaving a comment simply to tell me that because the characters are french and the story is set in France, they wouldn't have English class unless it was the language rather then literature. (Yes, I meant the language, not the literature.) Nothing that they liked. Nothing that they hoped would happen in later chapters. Nothing positive whatsoever. Just 'you might have got an incidental fact that has no actual bearing on the plot wrong'.

It was a fandom I don't really write for anymore, and that fic was my most popular fic of all time. I'd wanted to move forward and focus on other fics, put that one behind me, and that comment was the clincher for me to actually turn off all comments on that fic.

So I'd add one final criterion for offering criticism:

is the story at a point where the correction would even matter? Because if the story is completed, or even if it isn't, if it has several more chapters already posted after the one you're commenting on, all you might be doing at that point is making the author really really annoyed.

Hello!

How do you leave a good comment on a work when you notice a large error? Or a small error,m I get so nervous to leave a comment nowadays because not many people have clear statements regarding criticism. So, I'm hesitant to point out anything out/ leave a comment that's anything but positive.

I remember a few months ago, on a BNHA work, I corrected the timeline of canon events that author got wrong (because the WIP seemed to be going down that route of "canon adjacent" work that spawn from a canonical event). The author had a message beneath the chapters that "all comments were welcomed," so I thought it was okay to leave the type of comment I did. But I dealt with several aggressive messages from the author and the author's friends about needless critique and how rude I came off as afterwards (I apologized,but I still got messages for a while).

The whole thing freaked me out a bit because I hate any semblance of confrontation ,so now I'm nervous about commenting any work- even those with explicit statements on criticism (welcome ,not welcomed,etc). I leave kudos and such ,but sometimes I debate over whether or not the author needs my comment about their typos. I try to sandwich a critique between two compliments like everyone says,but then I end up with a paragraph-length comment, and I worry about coming off too strongly.

I'm rambling,sorry.

Is there a guide to good comments for criticism in fanworks? Besides not giving criticism when criticism would not be welcomed??

Thank you for your time.

First of all, I'm sorry that you had such a bad experience. I'm sure that was awful for you, and I totally understand why it would freak you out.

When it comes to correcting things in fanfic, there are a lot of things to take into account.

Why does correcting the error matter to you?

How well do you know the author?

How long would it take to make the correction?

There are others, but these are the bigger "buckets" I see most of them fitting into.

If the error matters to you because you get annoyed when you see typos, for example, then that's more of a "you" problem. You can download the fic and edit out the typos and then when you reread it, you won't have to worry about them.

If the error matters to you because you'd be embarrassed if you had posted a fic and there were typos in it, that's also kind of a "you" problem. If the author feels the same way, they'll likely have an author's note indicating that they want to be notified. Otherwise, they're likely resigned to the idea that typos will happen, and if they reread their work themselves, they'll edit them out if and when they catch them.

If the error matters to you because it's non-canonical, this one is more of a wait and see. Maybe the author made the error by accident, but it very well could be on purpose. Perhaps that small change is relevant to the overall plot they're developing. Maybe it's just a thing that they personally hate in canon and have decided that they don't want to include for that reason. Maybe it's a genuine error that they'd be horrified to notice later. There's no way to know.

And that last one is where we come to the second item above. If you know the author well, you can message them and have a chat and bring it up there. I'd recommend just starting out by talking about the story as a whole and what their plan is for it. As I said, maybe what you see as an error is actually a conscious choice that they've made for the story that they want to tell. During that conversation, you'll be able to figure out whether it's actually an error and whether they'd want it pointed out or not.

If you don't know the author well, you could point an error like that out in a comment but then you need to think about the third factor.

Typos take seconds to change. Plot points take hours, days, weeks, or longer. Asking someone to put in a lot of time to make a change to something they've already been working hard on can be really demotivating - even crushing.

For a lot of authors (possibly even most?) they put a lot of work into their fics before they ever get to the point of posting them. They've read, revised, planned, and plotted. They might even have additional chapters already written that are in the revision process and just haven't been posted yet.

Especially in long works, authors look to the comments as a cheering section to urge them on towards completion, so posting corrections or pointing out errors can feel like someone standing up and booing. I think that's what happened in that BNHA situation you referenced in your ask.

That's why the general suggestion when it comes to commenting with corrections is just to not do so. If you want, you can comment about all of the things you like in the fic and then ask if the author wants a beta. That would allow you to have those conversations about their vision for the fic, and it would also allow you to offer feedback before the work is posted and while it's still being edited and worked on.

Otherwise, if it really does bother you, I'm afraid you might just need to dip out and find a different fic.

[queer-cosette]

any time

“Thank you for coming” you message me

The night after your birthday party

“It meant a lot to me”

And I wish I could tell you

“I’d rearrange the earth to make time for you

I’d do everything in my power to make you happy

I’d buy you a mountain if that’s what you wanted”

But that’s far too intense for what you expect from me

So all I say is “of course, any time”

And when you open your gift

And frown until you realise what it is

And then gasp like a little kid on christmas morning

And try to remove the cellophane

So enthusiastically your fingers slip

- those skilled, gentle fingers losing their elegance

In your moment of delighted glee -

And you have to hand it to me to open it

Because my nails are sharper than yours

And you vibrate excitedly next to me

Like a bee that’s found a good source of nectar

And then you take it and meet my eyes and say

“I can’t believe you remembered”

I wish I could tell you the truth

That I’ve remembered everything you’ve ever told me

That I carry it in my heart like a vault

That information about who you are

Is so so precious to me

That I couldn’t bear to forget -

But that’s too intense, so instead

I just smile and say

“Happy Birthday.”

Ao3

[valsyngur]

tryna write Hannibal's pov for a fanfiction is legit the hardest thing I have ever attempted to write

[waterthecoconut]

hi, i just finished reading your fics!!! they were so much joy, are you planning on writing more for this fandom? is it gonna be llorumi? or will you write something else too? what are your favorite ships in the show?

Hello ☺️🩷 !!!

I definitely do plan on writing more for this fandom! I am specifically Llorumi-centric and plan to write more about them because I am very much passionate and in love with their strange, strange, weird, complex relationship that I must thoroughly dissect it again and again… and again. It just takes me forever because I’m a seriously slow writer… because I get easily distracted from my laptop all the time 😅

I do have a sneak peak of a llorumi wip i’ve been working on for many weeks now, completely out of context:

I do ship Jaya and Kailor and Pixane! And… this is a hot take… but I was sensing something between Faith and Wu 😳🙈

I doubt I’ll write much about those ships though because while I do enjoy them, I’m not as passionately motivated to spend weeks writing about them. But who knows for sure! I may randomly be in the mood to write something out of nowhere for those ships in the future.

Thank you for asking! 🥰

[quotefeeling]

Beauty begins the moment you decide to be yourself.

Coco Chanel

[little-curiosities]

"you're so pretty"

It's a small phrase. A phrase I've heard my whole life, from when I was a small kid all the way to my teenage years. And for all the way people love to hear this directed at them, I've come to have a love-hate relationship with it.

"You're pretty" is a glow of happiness when a classmate you're not close with whispers it to you after you help them with their makeup.

"You're pretty" is a small smile of happiness when a little girl at the grocery shop stage whispers it to you while you're paying for your things.

"You're pretty" is love when you text your online best friend of three years now a new poem you wrote and she says your handwriting is as pretty as your eyes.

"You're pretty" is love when your other online best friend texts it to you randomly at 4am in your area because she lives halfway across the world and you have a twelve-and-a-half-hour time difference and she saw cherry blossoms and thought of how your cheeks looked in your latest photos.

"You're pretty" is guilt when it's your best friend of your entire life says it in such a tone that it feels worse than any rude things she could've called you.

"You're pretty" is guilt when it's your best friend whispering it to you while looking at herself with a slow resignation.

"You're pretty" is disgust when you realise that your friend gets compared to you and mocked just because she's not a carbon copy of you.

"You're pretty" is disgust when you realise it's the only reason why you haven't been treated the same way.

"You're pretty" is hate when someone who you considered a friend says it like it's the only thing that matters about you.

"You're pretty" is hate when this is your nth number of times hearing it as the reason for someone's confession, just that nothing else.

"You're pretty" is insecurity when it's 10pm on a Friday night and your brain won't shut up about you aren't smart or creative.

"You're pretty" is insecurity when that's the only thing you can hold onto during the darkest of hours because you don't know what else you have.

"You're pretty" is shame when you are asked about your abilities but all you have ever felt confident in was your looks.

"You're pretty" is shame when someone who's supposed to be interested in your writing tells you how you don't have to be smart because you're so pretty.

It's always "You're pretty" is the most physical of sense, I can count on my hands the times I've felt pretty when I've been called pretty. And all of them came from my online friends who have never met me in person.

And isn't that the most pathetic thing of it all? That the only people capable of calling my soul pretty are the ones who have never once met it in person?

[thoughtkick]

Beauty begins the moment you decide to be yourself.

Coco Chanel