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woodpengu · 6 months ago
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To the fans of ACoTaR...
I urge you to read The Black Jewels by Anne Bishop, the books Maas ripped names and ideas directly from. Not "took inspiration" from, definitely yoinked verbatim.
[unless content of an SA, pedo, or like behavior is triggering, then please don't subject yourself to reading the book; instead, seek out a synopsis or summary or video essay]
I read Black Jewels first (it came out first) but didn't give ACoTaR a try until too many people hounded me about not giving it a real try. So I did... and now - though it's not without flaws - I won't be swayed from deeming Black Jewels superior.
ACoTaR... ripped too much from too many places and left me a mighty disappointed bibliophile. Please stop recommending it to me.
[As a note: I read and enjoyed Throne of Glass, wishing it had been given more attention in the development stages, so it's not author bias; don't eat me]
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jebmungall · 2 years ago
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About Antiphon: Fire and Stone
Antiphon: Fire and Stone is a fantasy novel I recently published. I’m quickly learning that writing the story was the fun part. Promoting it has been much less fun. Nevertheless, it’s a work that I’m proud of. Recently updated cover art for Antiphon: Fire and Stone featuring Kord Maratha It is set in the world of Irden, a world in a state of transition. While medieval fantasy is still…
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iwillreadyourbook · 6 months ago
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YES, I WILL ACTUALLY READ YOUR BOOK.
I’m a self-published author who loves beta reading! And I’ve always loved giving feedback to my fellow authors.
For any up-and-coming authors looking for feedback, my DM’s are open!
SOME NOTES:
1. I work full time and write my own work under a pen name. So if you aren’t paying me, don’t expect any sort of concrete timeline.
2. You do get expedited service if you pay for it. You’ll have to ask me for my pricing.
3. No personal queries/DMs. I’m taken and I just like beta reading. Let’s keep it to that.
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filurig · 2 months ago
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so i might be making a picture book about my blorbos for uni...
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writingwithfolklore · 3 months ago
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Questions from Beta Readers are Rhetorical
You know when people leave you questions on your work during the feedback process like, “why is she doing this?” or “who is this again?” or “how does this relate to what was just said?” You’re not meant to reply back and answer those.
They aren’t asking because they want you to explain it to them—or at least, that’s not very helpful to the actual work. They’re asking because something in the manuscript is unclear. Most readers won’t have the benefit of having you next to them to answer questions as they go—the work has to hold up on its own. If something is unclear, it should be addressed in the text, it’s pretty useless if it’s addressed only in your answer back to your beta reader.
So actually, when people ask me questions about my manuscript, I don’t answer them at all. I go back into the work and try to clarify, and then I have them read it again. If they have the same question, it means I need to try again until the confusion is cleared up.
Sometimes the people I edit for reply back with paragraphs of explanation, and I tell them that it’s great that they understand it, but I don’t need or want them to explain it to me afterward. I was asking the question so they knew what exactly was unclear to me (a bit more helpful than saying “this is confusing”). I want the understanding to come from just reading the piece.
That being said, some beta readers might want you to chat about it further with them—it’s up to you guys! But if you don’t also address the question in the work, you’re not doing yourself or your piece any favours.
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heretoobsessstuff · 5 months ago
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“we’re all gonna miss major Cleven, sir”.
Major Cleven John thought bitterly. Gale. Sweet beautiful Gale. Gale who was there. In the cockpit. Fighting for his life while John was sleeping next to a random woman. Gale who was falling from the sky. Living his last moments. Losing blood. In pain. Scared and cold and alone. While John was here in London. Drinking and coaxing a random woman to spend more time in his bed. Where was Gale now? His Gale. Laying on the dirt and mud somewhere? Lost in some distant German field with no one to look for him? His ocean blue eyes forever closed? What had become of him? Of his Gale? Was anything even left of him?
John felt sick with anger. His thoughts ran wild with no one to tame them. I should’ve never left him alone. I should’ve been up there with him. Protecting him. Looking out for him. It was supposed to be me and him left up in the sky. Not me in London and him lost somewhere I can never reach. It’s all my fault. I failed him. I failed him. Grief clawing at his throat. Suffocating him. His eyes stinging with unshed tears and the lump he had swollen down a hundred times with the alcohol. He needed to go. Avenge Buck. Or find him. Or join him. Wherever he was.
“Don’t worry Kenny” he said. Jumping into the Jeep. Hands shaking. “I don’t even feel it”.
Read Another drabble from Gale’s POV here:
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mikiib · 2 months ago
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Pomni Possessed by Bill Cipher >:3c What do you like better? With or without the shading?
I, uh... Couldn't stop at just ONE outfit. First one was my original color pallet, then I tried to make a yellow suit - inspired by Playdough (the clay). I changed the eyes back to white because it was just- TOO MUCH YELLOW. Then lastly for all my fellow showtime shippers- "How do I look, Caine?"
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littlecrow4 · 1 month ago
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How we feeling about this??? Good? Bad?
Part of a fic I’m writing
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squoobest · 7 months ago
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this pleasant étoile shows up at your door
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raven-at-the-writing-desk · 10 days ago
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I read ur twst chars analises a lot,n I just wanna say I really love how u write em!!! I like ur nuanced interpretation, how they r very detailed,thoughtful, n objective, even tho its not about ur favs or even ones u dislike, also made me realize how good twst writing can be. So if I may ask, which of the cast do u think is the/one of the best written char(s) in the game?? N vice versa if u may, like ones u think need improvement :^]
[Analysis masterlist here! I believe it’s currently full so I’m working on putting together a second one :>]
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First of all, thank you very much for enjoying my analyses ^^ I try very hard to research and to put myself in the shoes of each character I’m writing about, and I’m glad that it seems to show in my writing.
If we’re talking about the main 22 NRC students + Grim… (I’m not counting blank slate Yuu, NRC staff, Halloween characters, RSA students, and NPCs because they have such limited lore + vignettes and I feel it wouldn’t be fair to compare.) Honestly, I feel like they’re all written pretty decently, with perhaps the caveat being that there’s more content weighted toward the OB boys due to their significance in the main story and irl marketing. Some other characters, like Jade and Rook, are purposefully more mysterious as part of their characters.
I guess if I had to point out some weaker characters, I’d say they’d be Jack and Epel? I feel like those two are pretty… one note… 😔 What do we know about Jack? He’s strong, loyal, likes to exercise, is disciplined, is a tsundere… What do we know about Epel? He wants to be cool and not cute, he YEEHAWS, he likes apples, he’s really close with his family… You can see this reflected in the core of Epel’s dream; he wants to be tall and muscular, which is very simple when put next to the other dreams.
Of the two, Epel is worse off because he actually had a character arc in book 5 where he begins to accept that beauty and femininity can be a strength and isn’t something to be ashamed of. However, almost ALL the vignettes and side content outside of the main story have Epel exclusively talking about how tough and cool he wants to be + rejecting cute/girly things, which sort of negates the main story development and feels like he has regressed so much. I get that maybe he wouldn’t change his mind right away or do a 180, but it still creates a strong whiplash. Jack is at least consistent. Sort of stale, but consistent.
Those two aren’t flat or anything, but it feels like they hinge on the same handful of traits in every appearance and whenever we learn anything new about them, it’s just the same thing we already knew before but said slightly differently. I’d like to know more about Jack and Epel outside of these areas.
P.S. SORRY TO THE JACK AND EPEL STANS IN My AUDIENCE OTL
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physalian · 5 months ago
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The Dos and Don’ts of Giving and Receiving Constructive Criticism
Some of these should be painfully obvious and yet. They come from experience.
Receiving feedback:
Do
Understand that a criticism of a character’s thoughts, actions, morality, and choices are likely not a criticism of you as an author, unless the character is an author insert
Understand that they are being paid to critique how successfully you told an entertaining story, not pander to your trauma dumping
Understand that critiquing a book’s success as an entertaining story means that how much you yourself connect with or love a character or scene or plotline is irrelevant if it doesn’t make a compelling narrative
You might have written your book for yourself. Your editor is a different person with their own human biases and perspectives. If you just want to pay someone to stoke your ego, make that 100% clear up front.
Stand up for yourself and clarify where necessary if some details were overlooked or if explaining outside the narrative can better contextualize anything confusing or lacking detail.
Stand up for yourself in what feedback you are expecting, and what degree of criticism you’re willing to endure. An editor can let more or less of their own views show depending on what you ask for.
Stand up for yourself if your editor delivers inadequate or useless feedback. You’re paying them for a job, and you deserve to have it done properly.
Try to separate dislike of a book from dislike of yourself. It’s not easy, but the goal is to fix your book that you’ve already spent a lot of time writing, and they’re only trying to help.
Remember that your author insert is subjected to the same level of criticism as any other character, and that you asked for this.
Keep an open mind and be prepared for feedback that you don’t like, because you can’t please everyone. Your editor should be able to tell you whether or not a scene or character, or plotline works separate from their own personal tastes.
Don’t
Argue with your editor over their religiosity or lack thereof and insist that adhering to genre expectations means they “worship the god of [genre]”. (really, argue with your editor over anything like this, e.g. their own sexuality, religiosity, gender, socioeconomic status).
Argue with your editor while still expecting more work from them as if your aggression will in any way positively impact their perception of your book.
Insult your editor’s intelligence for not understanding your jargon and attempts to sound smarter than you are.
Get mad when your editor sees right through your BS and calls it like they see it, specifically your self-insert Mary Sue protagonist.
Insist that the solution to better understanding your book is for that editor to do extensive homework on your niche topic. If it’s a niche book for niche audiences, hire an editor who’s already knowledgeable about that niche topic.
Equate a bad review and opinion of the book with unprofessionalism. These can overlap, but they are not interchangeable.
Forget that your book is probably meant for leisure and entertainment, and your audience is under no obligation to read “until it gets good,” when they can go do literally anything else. Your first job is to entertain, if you write fiction.
Giving Feedback:
Do
Pay attention to your client’s wants and needs and expectations. If they’re more sensitive to bad feedback, do your best and stay as objective as possible. You can’t please everyone, either.
Helpful feedback includes an explanation of why an element needs work and how it can be improved. Saying “I hate this” with nothing else helps no one and just makes the author feel bad with no direction of how to make it better.
Communicate beforehand how much of your own personality your author wants from you. Do they like personal opinions and your personal reactions to the text, or do they want it as impersonal as possible and solely focused on the structure of the narrative? This might avoid a mess.
Remember to leave notes of where things worked well to balance the criticism. Even a simple “this is good” highlighting a line or a paragraph or two helps keep authors motivated to keep writing. I firmly believe that no book is completely unsalvageable.
Make it painfully clear with no room for debate that criticism of a character is not criticism of the author, unless it's an author insert, in which case the author absolutely asked for it.
Make it clear that you are just one person and these are all suggestions, not laws.
Don’t
Let your own personal opinions cloud your judgment of whether or not someone with different tastes could enjoy the book.
Unless given permission, get too personal with the narrative and reach beyond what’s written on the page.
Do more than what you’re paid for. You’re an editor, not a therapist for the writer’s trauma dumping.
Forget to wrap up all your thoughts in a condensed format that the author can reference, as opposed to endlessly scrolling through the manuscript trying to summarize your points for you.
Walk away with absolutely nothing positive to say about the manuscript. Even if it’s awful on every front, the writer still tried and that deserves merit.
This is from my personal experience beta and sensitivity reading, and dealing with other beta and sensitivity readers. We are all human and these jobs are not one-size-fits-all and there aren’t really hardline rules as every author, editor, and manuscript is different with different needs.
Just some things to keep in mind.
But also, for the authors who do write self-insert Mary Sues: You are in for a very rude awakening if you expect anyone other than yourself to adore your book with zero criticism. If you really just want someone to proofread and look for typos, tell them.
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beepbooopbooop · 3 months ago
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Bill Cipher/GN! reader
I lowkey hate humanized Bill but for the sake of this he's going to be humanized but don't imagine him like all super conventionally attractive and skinny more like what he embodies like how he'd see himself ig?
Warnings: none really?? You just put him in his place lmao, based off a dream I had, reader is a being as powerful as him but not defined to be anything in particular. This is BEFORE the series takes place BUT after stanford!! Uhm basically Bill gets into another situationship??? He cares more than he wants to he's emotionally repressed uhhh au! Maybe??
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To say that he wasn't manipulative and evil would be unrealistic however that didn't mean he hadn't possessed emotions or faults....at least....not that he knew of...
The multidimensional dream demon couldn't admit many emotions beacuse to him it was at the cost of his own ego. He couldn't have that then he'd just be like one of those fleshy freaks all weak and stupid. He wasn't like that. The thrash of water hitting rocks was loud and hard, much like the inner workings of his mind when he spiraled. Bill stood up and dusted off his suit jacket, he looked similar to a scumy casino manger,stubble on his face and he smelled of cigarettes and alcohol.
This was a testament to his oh so sudden betrayal as he would put it. Although it had been more than that but it practically burned his insides reminiscing on it. The wind and rain is slapping the leaves around, the sound is dark and cold and he is uncomfortable feeling everything and nothing all at once. A figure stands out in all this they border between the realm of reality yet not really having too much of a physical form, much like himself. Bill snaps around as the sound of his hat hitting the grass alerts the figure. Someone with an umbrella and an ethereal glow, someone he'd known distantly
Your voice is thick and deep almost as if it overpowers the weather and hits him in the gut. "Well.Well.Well. what do we have here" it escapes your lips seeping into his very being. Bill looks up his eye striking your own as he grumbles incoherently a bit snapping at you. "Woah there, watch yourself" you say sternly folding your umbrella making him look up at you. Bill grits through his teeth as he speaks "what do YOU want? Leave me alone before I try and rip apart your being" you scoff at that quite honestly. You both were similar both two sides of the same coin...but without missing a beat you say "I don't think you really want that" and from there...the situation spiraled into something that wasn't quite hatred...
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pannathottafughoe · 2 months ago
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Right, so I don't know if this can be said for the Japanese version, but whenever I revisit the English translation of Purple Haze Feedback I always find myself pleasantly amused by the prose.
It is surprisingly well-written for a light novel based on an obscure character from the side-quest JoJo part.
The prose is dry and straightforward in an entertaining way that's fitting for Fugo’s POV. It's how I imagine he sees the world. It's lowkey but you can palpably feel just how done he is with everything and everyone. Fugo's annoyance is the undercurrent of the entire novel. I feel like after every interaction he's staring sarcastically into the camera like they do in The Office. God I love this book.
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dykedvonte · 4 months ago
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I dislike takes that Danse would be just as conservative in modernized aus when it's clearly shown his staunch views of things come from his time in the Brotherhood and his deep-rooted desire to belong to something with a greater purpose.
Not to mention lines that show much more open-mindedness that get overlooked for his harsher sentiments when you first meet him. Like the oppurtunity to be a part of something is why Danse fell so far into Brotherhood dogma and it doesn't negate the offense things he does but I feel like it's just lazy to be like "hmmm he'd def be racist" just so it aligns to his BoS beliefs.
#like i genuinely think he would like not fall into the military if he was in modern times because of all the other things he could do#he clearly has a passion for tech and mods and likely would find himself more useful as like a mechanic like at most hes one of those range#types or something but I feel like people equate his seriousness and him being a military man to closemindedness when its like having to ge#a new view point like we really dont know what he believed in before the BoS if he believed in anything at all outside of selling scrap to#survive before basically having an army recruiter have him join one of the scariest factions like why is the BoS so fucking violent???#like the BoS operates in such a way cause there is no civilian population like everyone is something or training to be so they arent really#fighting for anything but themselves at this point which is just a feedback loop of gaining more power and is not equatable to real#military people due to the fact most of the recruits are really born and bred to be soliders while say irl you have a family and country to#fight for and return to outside the military which is def grounding as Danse wouldn't be in the army 24/7 like in canon#idk its odd to me when a character that is has fantastic racism ergo the trope of bigotry to fake races people try to translate it to real#life especially when those races have not equivalent like tell me what is the irl equal to a fucking ghoul or super mutant like????#racism is not like a funny headcanon like making him a defrosting prude or by the book is whatever but he would not be a bigot just like a#narc or some shit hed tell on me for loitering but I know hed tear apart each voting party and likely the military for being self serving#and like knows all about it and it makes him sound like a politics nut but its more annoyance like I have such strong feelings about#characters who would be marginially better if they were not victums to the military like yes I believe we can fix Danse he just needs to#be around not war/the military for like a week and see people be happy existing like he doesnt know how to do that but this is a weird take#ive seen mostly from white fans that makes me super uncomfy like ur weird#anyway still fuck the brotherhood everyone is so rude like damn i know its the east coast but can we get a little hospitality fuck you#maccready was right brotherhood of squeal more like it dont worry porky we'll get you out (danse is porky btw)#fallout#fallout 4#fo4#paladin danse
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writingwithfolklore · 5 months ago
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You don’t need thick skin to be a writer
              One thing you’ll hear a lot is that to be a professional writer/artist/etc. is that you have to have thick skin. This isn’t true. Or at least, it’s not entirely true.
              You’re allowed to feel upset when you get negative feedback on your work. You’re allowed to cry, or scream into a pillow, or want to destroy your work and your laptop and give up on your dreams. You’re allowed to feel whatever you feel in the moment.
              What you actually need as a writer is not to numb these feelings out, but to make sure you don’t act on them. Cry, but don’t beg your editor or beta reader to take back their comments. Scream into a pillow, but don’t argue with the people who gave you feedback. Shut your laptop and think about getting rid of your work, but please please don’t actually delete anything.
              Because really, to be a writer isn’t to have thick skin but rather the determination and courage to keep going despite negative feedback. To critically reflect on feedback rather than just tossing it out because it upset you, and to keep your work even if you’re frustrated with it. If you can keep going, you can be a writer—no matter what your initial emotional reaction is.
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truly-sincerely · 21 days ago
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Alex Rider Season 1 Timeline be upon ye
(This is what I do. I do timelines. Get me hyperfixated on your show's Blorbos and I'll do a timeline for you too)
I have reasonable confidence that this timeline starts on the 19th of March, 2020 in an alternate universe where COVID didn't happen.
Friday - Nonsense w/ Tom's phone, Ian is yassassinated
Saturday - Condolences from "the Bank", Alex puts Jones onto Point Blanc, Alex follows Crawley back to the department
Sunday - Blunt threatens to deport Jack
Monday - Alex gets kidnapped on his way home from school
Tuesday - Alex gets briefed on his Alex Friend identity
Wednesday - Shopping/haircut day
Thursday - Invited to see Spider-man with Ayisha
Friday - Alex goes to stay with the Friend family
Saturday - Fiona Friend shows up unexpectedly, Tom comes over w/ pizza
Sunday - Alex has his interview with Eva Stellenbosch
Monday - Alex arrives at Point Blanc
Tuesday - Alex gets his physical assessment
Wednesday - Martin Wilby is yassassinated, Alex is drugged/scanned
Thursday - Yassen goes to Brookland and then to Point Blanc to threaten Greif and smile at Alex, Alex and Kyra sneak out after dark and explore the second floor
Friday - Kyra escapes, Alex explores the basement, Tom goes to Roscorp, Parker's handler is yassassinated, Alex escapes
Saturday - Blunt fakes a call from Parker to Greif, Alex and SAS team raids Point Blanc
Sunday - MI6 returns Alex to his house
Monday - Greif is yassassinated, school dance, clone!Alex is yassassinated, Yassen literally rolls over rather than shoot Alex
Fin.
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