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Song of the Day
10 Sep., ‘23
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the writing playlist is going great btw
#me: i'm going to uninvisable myself on discord so everyone can see what bops i'm listening to#my mutual: fleur how many times are you going to listen to uptown girl#me:#me: >:(#YOU DON'T DESERVE TO SEE WHAT BOPS I'M LISTENING TO ANYMORE#*❈ ‣ i’m a silly little ninnynoodle — ( ooc. )#tbd.#it's not my fault these two songs portray the two emotions: joy and throbbing heartache for a past you can never return to
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day 4 i think of daily tired doodles and tired posting (aka my post tf2 logs)
finally tried out that uncle dane server where 40 uncle danes with different names just build sentries at you. we found a way to cheese it but the guy who knew the cheese went to bed which made finishing the round really hard, cuz at that point it was only me and another dude who knew the cheese and so many people had joined in that time that we just gave up. the rest of the team wasnt very responsive and i was the only person pushing the cart, i was spy as part of the cheese but i realized you could still kinda cheese with spy even without the fulll setup by essentially suicide bombing by going invis, uninvising near the cart, and than running straight back when the sentries kill you. takes a while but we were able to finish in around an hour and 30 minutes i believe with that strat, i think it wouldve been quicker if the team was a bit more responsive though. felt great when i finally pushed the cart in and we won. id reccomend playing it, but id say that if you do than forget what you know about tf2 for a bit and go into it more like a puzzle game, thats what i did and it made it feel more fun and rewarding. to me it really was just a puzzle game that just happened to be in tf2
anyways yapping aside, this happened at the very end of the round. right before i made the final push a dane built a sentry RIGHT on the final point. didnt even know you could do that
this doodle is exceptionally lazy, i almost just gave up and went to sleep because i honestly felt like too tired to finish it? but i got it done and i hope you guys like it despite its quality. im going to sleep now im exhausted lol
#tf2#team fortress 2#tf2 spy#goodnight guys its sleepy time yayyybyayay yyaybyay y#sorry i kinda yapped in this one:(#hope you enjoyed it regardless#everyday draws
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Waaait wait so ik Parrot is planning to use the tipped arrows bc the mafia members can’t get rid of the effects without uninvising themselves but. Hear me out. What if you shot one of them right after they got uninvised with the slow falling arrow so they at least had a chance to react when they got voided and maybe save themselves
#save the invis mafia members pls they’re people too#uu liveblogging#parrotx2#unstable universe#uu#star rambles
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i got a reaaaaaaaly sillay idea for taco torture :3
when she go invisible, the length of time if slowly extended through stuff like making others test their abilities and being told that if they go uninvisible, people get very punished, and every noise is another experiment on their friends, so she muffles herself even as others hurt her unknowingly. (she be behind a chair or something so even if she messes up and goes uninvisible, the scientists have time to get the other subject out so they dont notice)
:3
-🪨💥 anon
(naming myself bc idk.. hi :3)
CreatorNotes: That's dark. But I love it!
Very interesting (too much to draw tho sorry)
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Chapter 3
The plan was set. Lloyd ordered the snakes to take all the candy in town while we walked/slithered out with a cart full of candy “this feels weird”i said to Lloyd “how come”he asked “well. I never met more of my kind but I still feel out of place. I’m more like you just with a few scales and a tail” I explained “well. Here this always makes me feel better” Lloyd said as he gives me a lollipop. I tried it and it wasn't that bad. Then the ninjas came right in front of us “Get them”Lloyd said as the hypnobrai came and occupied the ninja leading to there retreat “they’ll come back”i said as i went to my position “You be on your guard”i said as i gave him by cloak and turned invisible and when i saw one of the ninja doing this spin technique i slither past tripping him and when i saw some sherikans heading to lloyd’s way I swat them away with my tail. Then I grabbed my cloak and tossed it to the black ninja temporarily stunning him then I grabbed his arm and flipped him over “RETREAT” Lloyd yelled causing me to go uninvisible making the black ninja to get a good look at me. I grabbed my cloak and slither away to Lloyd. I caught a glimpse of scales hypnotising one of the ninja then getting kicked away. The ninja have the staff. “You got one i presume” i said as we walked “how do you know” he hissed “I was in the back.use him well he could be our downfall” I replied “I know what i’m doing half breed”he replied “I just wish for the best. I have no intentions to offend you”I replied as I slithered up to Lloyd out of scale’s view “One of the hypnobrai have one of the ninja under their control. We must tread lightly. I have a bad feeling about what’s to come”i whispered to Lloyd who nod and sighed “but we lost all of our candy during the retreat”he huffed “you have a stomach bug do you”i asked “no i don’t”he replied as he clutched his stomach “want me to carry you back”i asked “NO”he snapped a few minutes later on he tugged on my jacket “I’ll like that piggy back now” he mumbled. Next day we sought out again as Lloyd wanted a treefortress. So the snakes got to work and after a few days it was stable enough to start building the interior and trapping. Right now I acutely stole some money earlier to buy everyone lunch. “Lloyd. I think the snakes should rest for a few minutes. They have been working day and night and I also don’t remember that last time i've ate”I convinced “Fine. OK EVERYONE WERE ON LUNCH BREAK” Lloyd said as everyone came and got there lunch Including Lloyd. The next day I had that bad feeling again so I was on high alert. “Here you need to make sure to lay off that foot for a bit. This would help you more efficiently if you used the hammer this way” i suggested as i continued to help the serpents while Lloyd ordered them around. Then a shadow passed me “NINJA. NINJA”I alerted as one of the lines broke making me slip. I landed on the edge and I hanged onto the branch for dear life. The branch started to break when I moved “Angela over here”Lloyd called out. I saw him from below. I slipped and fell letting him catch me. We head on top of this monastery and scales burn it to the ground retrieving the staff in the process. I felt light headed as we headed into the hypnobrai’s tomb. The general demands his staff and his alegants which lead to a match off between the general and scales. The true leader was going to be determined by a match in the slither pit but behind us was a map which I retrieved for Lloyd. Scales won which ended up as Lloyd having to leave. I left with him. We passed a desert “so where to next.”Lloyd asked as he gave me the map “well we could go for the Fangpyer.tomorrow morning” I replied as the sun set
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Hi! Heres that fic i promised! I am not used to writing fics, So i hope its okay!
This is a Tickle fic, If your not comfortable with that, Please scroll <3.
I guess you could say it was an average day for the Mercs, Spy usually waits around until he finds his chance to sneak into reds base to see his beloved. Of course, They don't Understand Their relationship.
Spy checks his watch, Its About time that he leaves, so he went invisible and snuck in through the sewers, Carefully using the watches ability. He Waits for it to charge back up as he Disguises as one of the Enemies. Then he climbs up the stairs and sneaks around the Base.
And there. He spotted him. Sitting in his retractable Chair, Drinking beer by a Dispenser. He Looked around, Making sure nobody was there. It was clear, He Turned uninvisible and Snuck behind the Relaxed Engineer. He Undisguised and then plopped a kiss on the Engineer's Forehead.
"Ahh, Snake, You made it" Engie Smirked As the Spy Chuckled.
"I wouldn't Miss it, You know that." Still looking around Cautiously.
"Ahh its fine Spooks, They are on break. Wanna Take this somewhere else perhaps?" Spy Nodded.
He'd Prefer a Safer Alternative So that way he wouldn't get caught. Theres Never an easy way to explain why you have a relationship with an enemy, But it just depends what side they were forced on. Sometimes they would get lucky.
They Took it up in Engineers WorkShop, Which They Both relaxed on a couch.
"Engineer?"
"What's up, Pardner? Somethin botherin' ya?" He Questioned.
"Well.. Partially yes.. I- I don't really know how to put this." He said With a stutter, His Face had looked to be Blushing. Then He heard a Giggle From The Engineer Sittin beside him.
"Haha! I know what your talkin bout Spooks. Kinda funny that Ya Just Can't say it."
The Spy Blushed even harder.
"I-. It's Just Unprofessional! Thats All..." He murmured. Obviously Embarrassed.
"Not Unprofessional, Just Cute." But Before Spy could Protest On His remark, Two hands grasped on his sides, He Jumped before falling into a fit of Giggles. Trying his hardest not to squirm to much, But His legs couldn't help but kick slightly.
He Laughed and Snorted Whilst His Boyfriend sat there with a Grin on his face, Obviously loving watching His normally - Serious Partner laugh and smile.
A Loud snort Happened as Soon as Dells Hands Had moved to Spys Stomach.
"Waihihit! DELL!" He Exclaimed before breaking into a fit of laughter and snorts while feeling his hands spider on his stomach. He used one of his hands to cover his face, Obviously embarrassed of his Laugh.
"Nothin to hide, Your laugh is god darn beautiful." He Teased, But it was also the truth.
"nOHOHO IHIHTS NOT! Ihihts.. Awful!" He Bursted out through his fit of laughter.
Dell Gasped. "Hey! Did you just say its Awful? Why i'll show you awful ya lil snake!" He Grabbed spys suit, Lifted up the shirt and Blew a Raspberry on his stomach right around His Button, Meanwhile His hands dug into Spies sides aswell. He was Straddling Spy, So this was an easy task.
"NOHO!" He Protested Through Snorts and Loud Laughter, His legs kicked and his arms protested by pushing on dells hands. Allthough Spy would Never Admit it himself, Dell knows He Enjoys it, And He loves it aswell. Seeing Him in such an Endearing State.
He stopped Because Spies Laughter Sounded Wheezy and His Voice was Cracking Lightly. He Cuddled Spy as he was recovering.
"Do you still think your laugh is awful?" He Giggled.
Spy was still giggling some as he recovered, But he was Alright.
"I don't know if i should answer that question." He said with a small sarcastic tone. As He felt Dell lightly tickling his side with a finger.
"You sureee?" He felt his Mate Tense up and stiffen a few giggles.
"O-Okay my laugh isnt awful." He managed to spit out.
He stopped. "Thats what i thought" As he hugged him snuggly.
He Held him back. "I love you, Lil snake." Engineer said with a red but calm - loving face.
"I love you too, Mon Amour." He said, Gripping him more. As They Both slowly fell asleep on the couch.
thanks to @saturn-in-the-solar-system for the help on the idea <3 I wrote it a bit differently because this was written in a span of different days.
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DND Recap: Bread Heist
aka the Pets session where we play as our pets + Sue!
Cast includes: Rose: DM Templeton the Copperhopper: Me Zip Zap Zop the Figment of Buzzing: Me Long Boi the Emberheart Dragon: Me Paul the Pink Bison: Me (moo) Rick, Alfie II, Bob II: Brick Frost the Pseudo Dragon: Ender Beelzebub the Copy Cat: Rascal Radiance, Knight of the Broken Flame: Cream Clementine is not taking part in the session for my own sanity.
The party leaves the Nap Sack to head back to Rosepeak to finish their quest. Sue is left in charge.
Beezlebub ditches Sue. Sue is follows, and loses him and comes across Radiance. Lanwel’s pet. She offers him to come with.
Paul sticks his head out of a door and “MOOOOO-” and Sue gets jumpscared. Almost everyone is in the kitchen
The Jungle Chompers are fighting over a bone which goes flying away as they're wrestling. Long Boi stole the bone and put it on top of the fridge. The bone vanishes and iventually Frost uninvisibles herself.
Radiance uses a grappling hook to try to restrain one of the raptors. Succeeds with rollies. Radiance is riding Ricky.
Suddenly a door materializes.
Templeton slowly makes his way into the kitchen “WHAT FAH MAE- I senes so magic-” (5 foot walking speed) The door opens. We are told to roll a wisdom save. Everyone fails except for my pets and Sue. Templeton can't smell. Everyone smells the most delicious freshly baked bread.
Radiance goes “HYAH!” and takes off on Ricky.
It looks like Russia. But it’s different but it isn’t rebuilt. This is how it used to look. Before Betty White attacked
Sue does not notice this. Templeton recognized this. He is a very old construct. Sha'Carri is the one who got him up and running.
Templeton: *sad* It’s been a long time since I’ve seen this... Sue: How long? Templeton: About 24 years...
She calls them all back. “I need you all to stick by me. "
We are told to roll perception. The door is gone and there is a note: All you have to do is steal some bread.
Templeton: What's a bread? Frost: Is this bread? *holds up rock* Random kid: Are you a stranger? Sue: Oh hey kid.
"I’ve never seen anyone like you around here. Never mind gotta go!” And the kid books it. Frost is in pursuit. Predator instincts kick in.
We’ve traveled back in time to pre the Betty White attack in Russia.
Paul allows Sue to mount him and he’s got 35 miles per hour Zippy has hopped onto Templeton and uses electricity to make Templeton have a 30 foot movement speed.
The child is cornered. Paul drifts into the alley, bowling the guards over.
The child says his name is David.
“Why did you runs from the guards.’ “I stole a bunch of bread” *pours out 50 loaves of bread.* Sue eats a bit of bread. It is the best bread shes ever eaten. In her life. It’s like those kings hawaiian rolls with the crunch of sourdough. (that sounds so good) “Now you can see why I was trying to steal it.”
Sue: *returning some of the bread to the bakery* Paul: *steals an apple cobbler* Baker: *looking a templeton* I’m pretty sure I saw you blown up on the side of the road- WHAT IS YOUR BISON DOING- Paul: *nat 20 on deception with a face covered in apple cobbler* MOO? Baker: oh sorry- Paul: *moos in the indignity* *basically everyone is stealing bread*
And we’re off to steal from the royal bakery Paul stays outside as the getaway vehicle. *click click* moo
Bob’s pets are with Sue and David going through the sewer.
The rest are sneaking through the front door.
Sue has Templeton on her back to get him up the ladder.
And we see a big hallway.
Meanwhile with the others
The jungle chompers have to roll a wisdom save. 9. They all smell the same thing. They smell a much younger Truk. In his infancy.
Ricky looks at Alfie and Bob and goes “GO GO GO-”
Radiance rolls strength. The chompers roll strength. 3. -2. Radiance wins. Radiance uses the grappling hook to basically turn them into a pod racer.
Cassiandris is on a date with one of the royal bakers
Back to the others. Long Boi is using firebolt to evaporate any water so Templeton doesn’t rust. Long Boi sneezes to cast firebolt Long Boi is very tsundere.
The door to the bread is locked. It shouldn’t be locked. It has a small writing on it “Alfonse Redfeather” Alfie made this door. Zippy uses a shock of electricity to disrupt the magic. “THAT BIRD NEVER LET ME IN HERE!” “How do you know Alfie!” "No reason..." *sus check* “FINE. I work here in the castle. I work here to keep the place clean. My name’s thomas. How are you going to deal with the silent alarm?” “THE WHAT-” "The bird installed a magical alarm so people couldn't steal."
Alfie has no problem with people needing food. He was very poor growing up and understands living in poverty. His issue is people not asking for help and he thinks that the stigma against the poor an homeless is stupid. If you ask he let you have some bread.
Thomas lifts a panel and we land in the fighting colosseum And we don’t sense any humanoids around.
Meanwhile with candle and reptiles.
Radiance gets a 11 on strength and the chompers get a -2
Radiance does not let go. The 2 jungle chompers snape the rope and run to Truk’s childhood room. Ricky follows close behind. They smell Truk coming from a crib.
No wonder Truk was drawn to the jungle chompers. He remembers them from before.
Back to the colosseum. Surrounded by rats Beelzebub shape shifts into a rat
Rat: Can we eat them? Are they tasty? Beelzebub: No they aren’t Rat: I don’t care. I just need meat. YOUR MEAT. Beelzebub: I’m one of you guys *17 on deception*
Rat: Welcome to the family
*rolls a vibe check* “The vibes are off. They’re just a little weird.”
The rats pile into a big pile. Into a mega rat and push a panel. There is a spiral staircase leading up.
“Careful though. There’s no railing”
And they ascend.
The Junglechompers are protecting baby Truk. And Truk’s mom, Samantha, has come to check on baby Truk and sees all these tiny dinosaurs in her son’s bed. And she freezes. They’re all cuddled up to Truk. Frost sees that person and stares and telepathically says “Hi” and slowly approaches.
Ricky: Oh. So you’re his mother! Samantha: Oh you talk-
Baby truk is in a Goblin Shark onesie. Samantha unsheathes the rapier.
Samantha rushes over to try to grab Truk Radiance tries to grab the raptors. Ricky jumps out of the crib. Samantha has baby Truk in one arm.
Frost: Who you- Samantha: I am his mother. Who are you? Frost: Friend. Samantha’s passive insight is 30.
Radiance points at the clock and does a ticking forward motion. “Follow me. We’re going to take you to someone.”
Bragar and Zara see Sue. Bragar pulls out his warhammer. Bragar: Who are you! Sue: I’m a servant! Bragar: Bullshit.
Bragar stops in his track> Sue: I’m from the future- Bragar: I mean you talked about it.
Zara: I mean it’s possible. But not many can do it.
Meanwhile at the castle entrance: Alfie: *building new gates* hang on *sniffs air* I smell more time travel Bullshit. What happened in the future now? Back in Zara’s quarters: Sue: *anxiety spitballing* Zara: She’s telling the truth. *spots Templeton* HOW ARE YOU BACK TO NORMAL- I SAW YOU EXPLODED- Templeton: time travel bullshit.
Zara pulls out a Nokia trying to call the doctor from Doctor who. I roll a d12 David Tennanant’s Doctor shows up
9: Time travel is my favorite! Zara: Shut up. Paul: *pokes his head out of the Tardis* Moo
Paul was the doctor’s companion before being Miss Houdini’s friend
Zara: So how did you get in the castle. Sue: there was this boy. Zara: About this big and annoying? Sue: Yes. Zara: That was Thozall. He’s a dick.
Thomas is Thozall. Everyone freezes.
Then the tardis doors slam shut. Time stops. And there’s a woman. She apologizes for everything. The doctor has his sonic screwdriver shoved in Templeton’s mouth
The doctor gives Templeton some upgrade. He has a 30 foot movement speed and taste buds. He can eat food now!
Radiance: You guys are so fucked up.
We helped Thozall break into his own home. The fall of Russia is a fixed point in time but our pets had a hand in it.
The party has just returned from Rosepeak. End of session.
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My lbp OC :]
Yes I have an invisible sackboy that I could customize without making it uninvisible :3
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Hi
I’m hiding in your walls :)
Bonjour I'm beside you but you cannot see me
(Because the potion about 2 more weeks before he'll be uninvisibility)
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Hey hi um do you have the you-know-what ready?
Not yet I've been preoccupied with makeing myself uninvisible
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I PLEDGE ALLEGIANCE TO THE AUTISTIC FLAG OF THE UNITED ASPIES OF AMERICA, AND TO THE NEURODIVERSE FOR WHICH IT STANDS ONE ADHD, UNDERSTANDING, UNINVISIBLE, WITH ACCEPTANCE AND JUSTICE FOR ALL! -OCTONAUTS16
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Charmed and Once Upon a time crossover series part 1
Imagine
By me
Imagine: That you're the daughter of Paige Halliwell and while practicing making potions with your cousins Wyatt and Chris but a potian goes horribly wrong and takes you to a land of Neverland to meet a terrible person Peter Pan who you find out is a demon. -Part 1
Narrator’s pov:
You were at your aunt’s mansion when your mom was talking to Piper and Phoebe. They promised you they would tell you all about Prue and their adventures since now you were old enough. While you were waiting, you went into the attic to practice making potions but you were struggling and your cousins saw you and laughed at you.
‘’Be quiet!’’ You say, blushing.
‘’Your a witch and a whitelighter and you can’t make a potains?’’ Chris asked you.
You looked at Melinda while she just shrugged. You looked at Chris. ‘’Maybe because I grew up somewhere else.’’
Wyatt said, ‘’Right cause your mom only wanted two daughters.’’
‘’I grew up not knowing I was a witch.’’ I told Chris. ‘’Or a whitelighter until apparently Leo heard my cries when I was attacked by a demon.’’
‘’And then your mom asked you what your name was and you responded with Y/n.’’ Wyatt said.
‘’Yeah and she was shocked and in denial.’’ You say.
Wyatt crossed his arms, ‘’True to that. How about we teach you?’’
You looked at all three of them, ‘’Really?”’
Melinda said, ‘’Not really for me. I am gonna go for a walk for a while but I will help you with your whitelighter abilities.’’
‘’Thanks Melinda.” You say.
Melinda walked away.
Wyatt said, ‘’So ready?’’
‘’Yes!’’ You say, getting excited and you were the youngest out of them all.
Chris said, ‘’Okay hand me the book of shadows.’’
You handed it over to him.
Chris looked through the book, ‘’Let’s see let’s find a beginner demon to vanquish.’’
You widened your eyes and shook your head because you were not ready to face a demon.
Chris saw that and laughed. ‘’I was kidding. Y/n.’’
Chris opened the potian book next to him and found a beginner potian to allow you to go invisible and you were reading it over his shoulder.
Chris walked over to get the ingredients and he told you what to put but he forget to tell you to mix them and added the most important ingredient and Chris got the potion and gave it to Y/n.
‘’Test it out. Throw it on the ground.’’ He said.
You did exactly what you were told instead of going invisible, you disappeared from their eyesight.
Chris’s pov:
After the smoke cleared I didn’t see Y/n at first I thought it worked but she never came uninvisible.
‘’Um, Wyatt?’’ I said. ‘’What?’’ Wyat said.
‘’Y/n is gone.’’ I said.
‘’WHAT?! Paige is gonna kill us!’’ Wyatt said. ‘’But how did this happen?’’
I looked, ‘’It seems like I- uh… forgot a few things.’’
Wyatt stared at me for a moment. ‘’We have to tell Aunt Paige. And my mom. They’re all gonna freak.’’
We both runned to Paige, Phoebe and Piper. And we told them what happened.
‘’What?!’’ Paige said.
Y/n’s pov:
I looked around, it looked like I was on an island.
Where is everyone? And where am I? I thought.
I got up, and tried to orb but it didn’t work.
‘’Well, well, well, what do we have here?’’ I heard a taunting voice behind me and turned around.
He had green eyes, brown hair, and green leaf clothes or something. Along with other boys. He had a British accent.
‘’We never had a guest of a girl before.’’ Another boy said.
The boy with green eyes said, ‘’Wendy remember?’’
‘’She doesn’t count.’’ Said the same boy who said that they never had a guest of a girl before.
I opened my mouth to tell them that I was not staying but the boy with green eyes who I am gonna call Greenie now responded first.
‘’Who are you and why are you here?’’ Greenie said.
I said, ‘’What is this place and who are you?!’’
Greenie said, ‘’Now that’s not fair, I asked you first.’’ He said, stepping closer to me.
I said, ‘’Names give power over people. I will not tell you my-’’
He interrupted me, ‘’Now, now, now, Y/n be a good girl and just cooperate.’’
I stood there staring at him, ‘’How- How do you know my name?’’
‘’I have my ways.’’ Greenie said.
‘’Who are you?’’ I repeated.
‘’Oh, did I forget to introduce myself…’’ He chuckled. ‘’I’m Peter. Peter Pan.’’
You grabbed a sword closer to you and pinned him to the tree. He just stared at you with a smile.
‘’Why am I here?’’ I asked him.
Pan chuckled, ‘’You’ve got fire. I like fire.’’
I said, ‘’Well get used to it. And you didn’t answer my question.’’
‘’I’m not planning on ending your life and… you tell me.’’ He teleported.
What the? He has magic. Duh fuck. I stared at him.
You felt him behind you.
‘’However, if you make me pissed. I won’t show you mercy.’’ He said, in a warning voice.
I laughed. ‘’Oh, you really don’t know me.’’
He raised an eyebrow. ‘’Is that so?’’
‘’The ‘’if you make me pissed, I won’t show you mercy’’ part. Seriously, you really think you’re gonna scare me with a what? A threat?’’ I asked.
The lost boys I assume widened their eyes. I saw that Pan was also shocked but he replaced it with a sly smirk.
A guy with a hook as his hand came up to Pan.
Hook? I assumed.
‘’Killian.’’ Pan said.
I said, ‘’What? No, that is Captain Hook.’’
‘’A lost girl?’’ The guy Pan calls Captain Hook ‘’Killian’’ asked.
‘’No- I just got here. All I really want is to go home.’’ I said.
The lost boys widened their eyes again. ‘’What? Did I say something wrong?” I asked.
‘’She doesn’t understand the rules. I see that you haven’t told her yet.’’ Kilian said.
‘’Told me what?’’ I asked.
Kilain said, ‘’You might have heard that Peter Pan is the hero. But he’s not. He may look like a boy, but he’s a demon. A bloody one that is. And he keeps people prisoner here and if you want to go home. He locks you in the cage.’’
‘’Wait… did you just say he’s a demon?’’ I asked.
Oh no, not again.. I thought.
Pan looked at me like he read my mind. He looked pretty shocked. I looked away.
I crossed my arms. I bit my lip and smiled, hiding how I felt about being around a demon. Since her whole life was about her mother and her aunts vanquishing warlocks and demons. He must know who my mother is then. Or he’s doomed.
‘’Kidnapping me was not a good idea.’’ I said, crossing my arms.
‘’And I didn’t bring you here.’’ Pan said.
‘’That’s not what my mom will think.’’ I said to myself.
‘’Really?’’ He said.
‘’Yes.’’ I said.
Killain was looking at me trying to figure out what her mother is. ‘’Regina, right?’’
‘’What? Who’s Regina? I don’t know a Regina.’’ I said.
‘’Liar.’’ He said.
‘’What?’’ I said.
‘’I got this.’’ Pan said, trying to wave his hand in my face but I knew what he was doing and orbed behind him.
‘’You are not knocking me out!’’ I said when he looked behind him and turned.
He looked at me with a bit of worry but then it faded. ‘’I’m not knocking you out I promise.’’
‘’I don’t believe that.’’ I said.
‘’Who are you?’’ He said.
‘’I’m a witch and a whitelighter.’’ I said.
He searched for lies but then nodded. ‘’Where are you from?’’
‘’As if I would tell you. You probably already know.’’ I said.
He waved his hand over my face and went through my memories. I bit my tongue because now I knew what he was trying to do before. And after a few minutes, he was done.
‘’San francisco, the charmed ones. They vanquish demons and apparently one of them is your mother.’’ He said.
I stood there silent just staring at him. ‘’Fottiti.’’
Pan knew what she said but no one else knew what she said.
‘’What did she say?’’ Felix asked.
‘’She said screw me.’’ Pan said.
‘’Merda.’’ I said.
He stared at me. ‘’Your speaking italian now I assume.’’
‘’Si, perché ti importerebbe?" I said.
‘’Speak in english.’’ He said.
‘’No.’’ I said. ‘’Tu sei Peter Pan o Pan, vero?’’
‘’Yeah?’’ He responded.
‘’Grazie.’’ I said.
‘’Now can you speak in english?’’ He said.
‘’Why?’’ I asked.
‘’Cause I like talking to you in your regular language.’’ He said.
Chris’s pov:
‘’Have any ideas where she would have gone?’’ Paige asked.
‘’It won’t be that easy to find her if she’s an another dimension.’’ Leo pointed out.
‘’We have to find her, Leo. She is a troublemaker. We don’t know what kind of trouble she’s getting herself into?’’ Phoebe said.
‘’A lot.’’ Wyatt said.
‘’Wait, maybe there’s some sort of spell in the book of shadows that can help us find-’’ Piper got cut off.
Cole shimmered in. ‘’Hi Phoebe.’’
‘’Cole.’’ Phoebe said.
Paige glared at Cole.
Piper continued after too glared at Cole. ‘’Anyways Y/n is missing and maybe there is some sort of spell that can help us find her or information at least.’’
‘’No need. I know where she’s at.’’ Cole piped in.
‘’Where is she? If you touched her I swear-’’ Paige said.
‘’I didn’t kidnap her. Don’t worry but there is a place called Neverland.’’ Cole said. ‘’Pan is the villain and he kidnapped her. I can get her if you want before it’s too late.’’
‘’Yes.’’ Paige said.
Cole shimmered to neverland.
y/n’s pov:
I saw Cole shimmer. I held on to the sword and pointed it at Cole.
‘’Stay away from me.’’ I warned Cole.
‘’I’m not here to hurt you,’’ said Cole.
‘’And why would I believe that?’’
‘’Do you really believe I would be that dumb?’’ He asked.
I saw Pan and the lost boys watched Cole and I.
‘’Why not?! I saw what you did to my mother!’’ I said.
‘’I didn’t want too.’’ Cole said.
‘’Save it, your a demon and you would never get a second chance with Phoebe.’’ I said.
‘’Y/n, i’m not the real demon here. Pan is.’’ He said.
‘’Oh, so now your gonna play hero?’’ I asked.
Cole looked at me shocked. ‘’What do you mean?’’
‘’Oh you should know. The ‘’trying to make Paige’’ forget that she saw you use your demonic powers! And making Phoebe your underworld queen! I would vanquish you right now if I knew how! So, stay the frick away from me!’’ I said.
‘’Okay you’re right! But I swear I mean good this time.’’ Cole said.
‘’You would always be a demon.’’ I said.
‘’You leave me no choice then.’’ Cole said.
Then did what Cole did to Paige.
You widen your eyes. ‘’What are you trying to do? Vanquish me?’’
The lost boys were about to interfere but Pan put his hand up.
I shook my head and a fireball appeared. I threw it at Cole and it hit him and he turned into ashes. I took a breath, but he came back. Cole shimmered behind me and covered his hand over my mouth and shimmered me into his home.
Cole thrusted a knife into me and I screamed but it sounded muffled. Cole threw the knife into the fire.
Pan’s pov:
Oh no!
I teleported to the charmed ones.
‘’Who are you?’’ Paige asked.
‘’Pan, from neverland.’’ Pan said.
I looked around. ‘’Where’s Y/n?’’
Piper’s pov:
I was about to blow up Pan but then he asked the ‘’Where’s Y/n?’’ part.‘’So Cole found her?’’ I asked.
‘’I wouldn’t try to blow me up, it wouldn’t work anyway. And the answer to your question is; yes.’’ Pan said.
‘’Why do you want my daughter so bad?’’ Paige asked.
‘’Well, I believe my shadow wants me to fall in love with her.’’ Pan said.
‘’Then find another girl.’’ Paige said.
‘’Paige.’’ I said.
‘’Where is Cole?’’ Phoebe said.
‘’I think he kidnapped her and lied to you.’’ Pan said.
y/n’s pov:
‘’You really think that Phoebe will like you after this?’’ I asked.
Cole glared at me and bent down. ‘’Not if I frame Pan.’’
‘’And then they will ask why you’re not healing me?’’’ I asked.
‘’Then I will say I didn’t have enough and that I took you here to heal you but it didn’t work.’’ Cole said.
Cole grabbed me and shimmered me to Paige pressing on my wound. I couldn’t breathe suddenly.
Pan runned over to me and pressed on my wound. ‘’What the hell happened?’’
‘’What do you mean happened? You stabbed her!” Cole lied.
I shook my head and screamed again because Cole was pressing it on it but purposely making the blood gush out.
Pan saw it and Cole switched his hand anyway. Pan’s eyes went pure black and blasted Cole away from me. I whimpered.
‘’Leo, help her!’’ Paige said.
Leo rushed to Pan’s side and couldn't heal me.
‘’The whitelighters won’t let you heal her.’’ Cole said getting up.
Pan looked at him. ‘’You did this!’’
The wound healed itself and it turned out I healed myself. Pan, Leo and the others saw that. Pan helped me up.
I looked at Cole and slapped him hard. ‘’Don’t ever stab me again!’’
Pan smirked at Cole being slapped. Phoebe and Paige were mad that Cole would stab their niece so Piper vanquished Cole for him to come back. Paige stepped in front of me with my aunts and Pan also stood next to them against Cole. It was basically the battle of four well maybe five if Prue can somehow use her powers to protect us all. I glared at Cole and Cole shimmered. I was still in pain. I bent down.
Paige looked at me and helped me up. ‘’Are you okay?’’
‘’Yeah.’’ I said. ‘’Just tired.’’ I walked away into the guest room.
The next morning I was caught making potions again but this time by both my mother and Chris. I looked up at them.
‘’If you think that Pan was a threat to me then you’re wrong. Pan says he is a demon but I don’t sense it. All I sense is care.’’ I said.
‘’But let’s be sure, and vanquish him.’’ Chris said.
‘’No.’’ I said. ‘’If he is a demon and then he is mine not yours.’’
‘’This is insanity.’’ Chris said.
‘’I don’t care. This is mine fight. Not yours.’’ I said.
‘’As much as I hate to say this, Y/N is right. If he is a demon, he would have already attacked us.’’ Chris said.
Leo came in hearing Chris say that. ‘’I don’t know about that Chris. He could just want all of us to trust him so he can hurt Y/N.’’
‘’Really, guys, I'm not worried about Pan. Nor scared of him.’’ I said. ‘’But although I appreciate the concern, I can handle myself.’’’
‘’Spoken like a real charmed one.’’ Leo said.
I smiled, shaking my head. I continued looking through the book when I came across the valkyries. I reminded myself of them. When I read the description, I felt the same way.
‘’I’ll be back.’’ I closed the book and orbed away from them.
Pan was there in Neverland and I walked up to him. ‘’Are you really a demon?’’
Pan looked at me. ‘’I don’t know who I am anymore, I'm afraid. I feel like I don’t know myself.’’
‘’I feel the same.’’ I said.
Pan stared at me for a while, not saying anything.
I continued, ‘’You may think I'm blessed because I'm a charmed one’s daughter but the truth is I don’t fit in with the charmed ones. I want to lead my own life.’’
‘’The truth is, you’re right I am a demon, but for some reason I don’t feel like to hurt you as I normally would. I don’t know if it’s because you’re a charmed one’s daughter or if- I don’t know.’’ He said.
‘’I don’t know if I want to vanquish you or not.’’ I said.
‘’Your cousin looks fun.’’ Pan said.
‘’He doesn’t like demons.’’ I said. ‘’I don’t blame him.’’
Pan bit his lip, ‘’So you don’t?’’
‘’I mean- I don’t know. I was attacked by one but that doesn’t mean I hate demons.’’
‘’You’re stammering quite a bit there.’’ He smirked.
I blushed. ‘’I guess what I'm saying is that is there a way to be here and not be concerned with demons and killings here.’’
‘’Si, c'è un incantesimo per vincolare i tuoi poteri se non ti dispiace.’’ He said. (Yes, of course, there is a spell to to bind your powers, if you don’t mind)
‘’Bind?’’ I said.
‘’Yes, you would be safer that way.’’ Pan said.
‘’I made a spell, it’s in italian, maybe it would work.’’ I said, taking out the paper. ‘’Togliere il mio potere le mie carissime matriache non mi ridanno il mio potere posso vivere senza di loro.’’
(Take away my power my dearest matriarchs, don’t give me back my power I can live without them.)
‘’Did it work?’’ Pan asked.
‘’One way to find out.’’ I tried to orb.
‘’It worked.’’ I said. ‘’No more demon blood and helping Chris and Wyatt. I want my own destiny.’’
‘’Right. How was your life as an half whitelighter as they said you were?’’ Pan said.
‘’I was half witch and half whitelighter and both were terrible.’’ I said. ‘’And soon I was gonna be stripped off my whitelighter status anyway.’’
‘’What did you do?’’ Pan said.
‘’I killed someone when some of the elders told me not to. I mean I was young and well- I basically told them I don’t want them. I was born this way and I never asked for it.’’ I said. ‘’I never asked to be a witch either. Or be a charmed one’s child. It makes me wanted by demons and warlocks in the magic world.’’
‘’So, I freed you’re life?’’ Pan said.
‘’I am grateful,’’ I said. ‘’I am gonna go find somewhere to sleep.’’
I walked away.
Pan’s pov:
While she was walking away, I smirked. I looked behind me and Felix was walking up. I turned around and walked up to him.
‘’I see, you managed to get her here?’’ Felix asked.
Pan said, ‘’Yes, Y/N does not want to be a whitelighter and witch it would make our plans easier?’’
Felix looked up at him. ‘’And what of the charmed ones?’’
‘’I made a deal with some ‘’friends’’ to go kill them and after i’ll kill them.’’ Pan said. ‘’There is only one room for powerful and that’s me.’’
Part 2 coming soon: tell me if you want one or what edits I should make
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I'm having a weird day so i think I'm going to work on cross stitching for a bit. it's church's turn to get uninvisibled
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if the character is anything like me, they forget how to speak english when they get tired so they tend to not make sense and not notice until its pointed out (i cant even remember an example because i just go on autopilot, i think a possible mess up i would do is "run into the uninvisible wall")
im going to have a stroke
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Trans Day of Uninvisibility
im just gonna post this here honestly because there's no use in it just sitting unread on my hard drive. i hope folks enjoy it, and i especially hope there are plenty of paragraphs in here for people to pull out and throw in my face next time i put the boot into Rick Riordan's writing on Unwise Girls.
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On Saturday, March 30th, 2086, aboard the most secure ship in the Epsilon Eridani system, the soft footfalls of the assassin went unnoticed. Pax Morgan padded invisibly along the steel- grey bulkhead floors, the soft rumble of the Doorkicker’s engines drowning out her footsteps. Cameras at both ends of the corridor whirred, passing over Morgan. The autoturrets slung beneath them remained silent. No alarms sounded. It wasn’t just the security systems that failed to detect Morgan; two guards, burly women in grey tactical gear, with ballistic rifles slung over their shoulders, were walking straight towards her, obliviously chatting.
“… not sure what that space junk was,” said the one on the left, a little taller with greying hair (Morgan decided to call her Grandma).
“Yeah, a container drifting directly into our trajectory seems suspicious,” replied the younger one, who Morgan dubbed ‘Friendly Fire’, since she was fidgeting with her rifle, flicking the safety on and off.
“But… Boss Indigo had us file ten different flight plans with Ground Control, and he picked one at random just before we launched. There’s no way someone could have gotten here ahead of us,” Grandma insisted. Morgan crouched, hugged the wall as they approached… and sighed, relieved, as they took no notice of her. The Stiuir Industries ‘Invisibility Drive’ was the latest in a long line of gadgets that Morgan had installed on her spacesuit, giving the once-slim profile of the black garment almost as much bulk as the armoured models Grandma and Friendly Fire were rocking. Between the wrist-mounted grappling line, wrist-mounted computer, shoulder-mounted lifeform scanner, the helmet slung on her belt, the thigh holster for her Efferington 29-B heavy laser pistol, and the (there was no nice way to put this) tactical fanny pack of the Invisibility Drive, Morgan was quietly impressed that the suit’s power supply hadn’t given out.
But the Invisibility Drive was, shockingly, as efficient as advertised. Morgan had been expecting some teething issues, but so far, nothing. The harsh white lights in the corridor didn’t even cast Morgan’s shadow. It wasn’t flawless; if the guards had been that worried someone had intercepted the Doorkicker, they might have been watching closely enough to notice the faint shimmer that Morgan’s breaths left in the air, lightly rustling the loose plastic hood she had to pull over her face to complete the Drive’s Transparency Field. As it stood, though, it was hard for Morgan not to feel smug. Her plan was going perfectly.
Friendly Fire’s suspicions about the space junk were spot-on. Morgan had been holed up in the battered shipping container, hopping across to the Doorkicker when it passed by. As for how Morgan had gotten their flight plan? She hadn’t. The Doorkicker was only thirty metres from prow to stern, small enough that it had been launched into space by a groundside mass driver on Epsilon Eridani B. Morgan had bribed one of the mass driver’s operators to fire a test shot along the Doorkicker’s trajectory just before it set off. That test had launched Morgan and her ‘space junk’ to lurk in wait along Boss Indigo’s flight path. Morgan allowed herself a smile. Boss Indigo was notoriously paranoid. It came with the territory of being one of the most notorious gangsters in the system. And yet, Morgan had neatly slipped past his defences, which was for the best, since her paycheque relied on blowing the guy’s head off.
All he had left was the guards he’d hired, who, while numerous, didn’t seem to be particularly on-task.
“I’m on break in five minutes. You want a coffee from the break room?” Grandma asked, as the pair passed right by Morgan.
“God, no, I hate that coffee machine. Last time I tried it was on St Patrick’s Day. Stupid thing put a shot of whiskey in my drink,” Friendly Fire complained, a click indicating that her gun’s safety was on again.
“I mean, that doesn’t seem so bad. Kinda fancy,” Grandma mused, as the pair rounded a corner.
“You think the whiskey our crappy coffee machine stocks for special occasions is the good shit?”
“… point taken. But it’s not as if it’s St Patrick’s Day today…”
Morgan waited for their footsteps to recede, before carefully reaching up, and pulling the antenna on her suit’s shoulder out between her finger and thumb, careful not to extend it beyond the boundary of the Transparency Field. She tapped the keypad on her wrist, booting the life-form scanner, and set it to scan passively for Boss Indigo’s biosignature.
There you are.
Indigo’s extravagant private cabin was right at the end of the corridor. He had half a dozen dinner guests for an Easter Sunday meal in there, and it was unlikely they’d be armed.
Morgan checked her suit’s clock. Her Invisibility Drive would run out of juice at around 1:00 AM. That worked for Morgan, since it wasn’t even midnight. It was maybe an odd time for Indigo’s guests to be eating dinner for a holiday that didn’t technically start until twelve, but time zones were weird. The Doorkicker’s passengers probably hadn’t adjusted to Galactic Standard Time in the few hours they’d been in space.
Morgan retracted the suit’s antenna, straightened up, and crept along to the cabin door. Carefully, she leaned against the bulkhead, glancing up and down the length of the dreary grey corridor. No guards, but it was only a matter of time. Counterintuitively, the Doorkicker’s diminutive size was one of its best security features; it had the capacity of a corvette, but Boss Indigo had hired enough security to lock down a heavy cruiser. Even if Morgan remained invisible, it was only a matter of time before a guard bumped into her in these narrow hallways.
Another moment passed. Morgan could feel the Invisibility Drive’s plastic hood sticking to her sweaty forehead. She fought the urge to drum her fingers impatiently against the bulkhead. Morgan was stuck out here until an opportunity to get into Boss Indigo’s cabin presented itself, and there was no way of knowing when that might happen, she might not get lucky like she had with the Doorkicker’s airlock, and fuck, she wasn’t sure if that noise was something in the engine, or approaching footsteps-
“You guys are - hic- the greatest! I’m gonna take a… a whizz!”
The door slid open. A balding man stumbled out, red-faced and drunk… and Morgan slipped into the cabin before the door shut, careful not to bump the drunk as she passed him in the narrow doorway, and breathing a silent sigh of relief.
Indigo’s cabin was a stark contrast to the mechanical utilitarianism of the rest of the Doorkicker. A huge window stretched across one wall, showing the glittering expanse of stars. Morgan’s mouth watered as Indigo’s guests tore into terrestrially grown beef and pork from huge platters on the room’s mahogany table, sipping expensive wine under soft yellow lighting that was a welcome relief from the corridor’s the harsh LEDs. A plush red rug silenced Morgan’s footsteps as she paced over to one end of the table… and stared down the man at the other end, presiding over the meal with a smile on his sharp features.
Boss Indigo reclined in his chair in one of his trademark tailored indigo suits. He looked comfortable at first glance, but Morgan’s invisibility allowed her to study his face closely, unperturbed by social niceties. The way his mouth twitched. The strain in his eyes. He was antsy.
Morgan tried not to laugh. If Boss Indigo was this paranoid in a location this secure, surrounded by good friends and good food, maybe he’d appreciate getting assassinated. Sure, dying would suck, but at least he’d get a split second of his confirmation bias being satisfied before his grey matter laminated the bulkhead behind him. Morgan pulled her Efferington 29-B laser pistol from the holster on her thigh, and levelled it at Boss Indigo’s face. Thumbed back the hammer. The whine of a shot charging was drowned out by the table’s raucous chatter. Morgan rested her finger on the trigger-
And the clock struck midnight, ticking over to March 31 st.
“Greetings, valued customer! To celebrate Transgender Day of Visibility 2086, we at Stiuir Industries will be temporarily disabling all Invisibility Drives operated by transgender customers! Get out there, and show the world who you are!” There was a soft rustle as Morgan’s suit retracted the plastic hood, breaking the Transparency Field. Morgan blinked. The room went quiet. All of the confused old men gawked at her, except for Indigo, who was staring, boggle-eyed, down the barrel of Morgan’s gun.
“Uh,” Morgan started, “I can explain-”
“Intruder!”
The shriek came from the doorway, where Friendly Fire was helping the drunken old man back into the cabin.
“No, wait-!” Indigo cried, as Friendly Fire fumbled for her rifle, unloading at Morgan, missing as the assassin dived under the table… and instead, shooting the cabin window.
“Fuck,” breathed Morgan, before there was an almighty crash, and the window shattered, venting the cabin into space. In one movement, Morgan detached her helmet from her belt, pulled it over her head, and pressed the seals into place. Unfortunately, that took two hands; her gun was gone.
Heart pounding, Morgan twisted back to the Doorkicker, which was already an alarming distance away. Morgan squeezed her left hand, firing the grapnel line on her wrist. The thunk as it impacted the ship’s hull travelled up the cable, piercing the claustrophobic auditory shell of Morgan’s own shallow breaths. She reeled herself in, passing the corpses of Indigo’s dinner guests (and Friendly Fire, who had fumbled with her helmet a second too long), before clicking the magnetic soles of her boots against the Doorkicker’s hull… and coming face to face with Boss Indigo.
He smirked, body shimmering and suit unruffled as he climbed out of the shattered window, pointing Morgan’s own laser pistol at her. He tapped his ear. Morgan understood, switching to an open communication channel, before putting her hands up.
“Wow. They sent the Pax Morgan, huh?” he chuckled. “Not bad. You almost had me,”
“Yeah… actually, shouldn’t I still have you?” Morgan asked. “How are your eyeballs not boiling in their sockets right now?”
“This,” Indigo tapped a device on his belt, his body shimmering again. “I’ve had too many ships blow up on me not to carry an emergency energy spacesuit.”
Morgan cursed. Energy spacesuits were eye-wateringly expensive, even to a man like Boss Indigo. He was even more paranoid than she had thought.
“Yep, it sucks for anyone who tries to space me”, he continued, airily. “Especially if they’re stupid enough to drop their gun.” Indigo thumbed back the hammer. “Any last words, Pax Morgan?”
“You… uh…” Morgan stammered.
“Hurry it up, Morgan. My spacesuit doesn’t have enough power for me to hang around out here.”
“Um, the thing is, well-” Morgan wracked her brain. She had to stall long enough to come up with a plan, and she had to ensure he didn’t realise that was what she was doing.
“There’s no use trying to stall long enough to come up with a plan. Just die with dignity. What more could you have up your sleeve? None of your gadgets are any good. The faulty Invisibility Drive certainly won’t be able to save you.”
Wait, that was it!
“Aha! You wouldn’t kill me on Transgender Day of Visibility, right? That would be… really transphobic!” Morgan cried desperately, pointing at Indigo. Indigo paused. For a second, he actually looked troubled, the gun wavering.
“… you know, weird as it is to say to an assassin who just tried to kill me, that does actually feel a little fucked up.” “Right?” Morgan agreed enthusiastically. If she could just get him talking-
“I mean,” Indigo shrugged, readjusting his aim, “I’ll still do it, but I’ll lose sleep over it. Might have to donate some cash to a trans charity to clear my conscience.”
“Oh, great,” Morgan muttered, slumping. “That makes it all better.”
Indigo chuckled again. “Goodbye, Pax Morgan.”
He pulled the trigger. Morgan squeezed her eyes shut…
And nothing happened.
Boss Indigo frowned, then pulled the trigger again. Still nothing.
Morgan cracked open an eye, as he squeezed the trigger a third time- “Warning; due to registered user [Pax Morgan] ‘liking’ a social media post stating, ‘TDOV is cool but it’d be harder for corps to co-opt if we changed it to Trans Day of Incredible Violence’ on 27/3/84, her firearm privileges have been suspended until 3/4/84. Please file an appeal with customer service if you require use of your Efferington 29-B before then,” the gun’s tinny, text-to-speech voice explained.
For a moment, Indigo stared at the gun in disbelief. Morgan did not. She leaped, slamming her boot into Indigo’s chest… sending him spinning away from his ship, screaming and cursing at Morgan over the radio. Thirty seconds later, his suit’s battery died, and he got real quiet real quick.
Morgan sighed. That wasn’t the first time her gun had locked her out, so she didn’t much feel like retrieving the stupid thing. Instead, she hauled herself back into the airless cabin. Friendly Fire’s rifle had jammed the door open, so Morgan was able to squeeze through, before pulling the gun free and sealing the door behind her. She collapsed against the bulkhead, popping the seals on her helmet as the Doorkicker pumped atmosphere into the now-sealed corridor, carrying the wailing of the ship’s alarms.
After taking a moment to rest, Morgan hauled herself back to her feet, and hefted the rifle. Stealth was out. If she wanted to live, she would have to hijack the ship.
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it occurs to me that this is actually the first time i've publicly shared any fiction writing on my socials despite having "writer" in my twitter bio for ages. oops. anyway, this one is kind of silly and honestly rereading it now, not really my best work. the action sci-fi, Heat Signature-inspired setting clashes pretty badly with the attempts at cynical corporate satire imo, those bits feel a little tacked-on. i do think i at least did a decent job of writing something relatively punchy and fun to read, but it could probably do with redrafting. but, like i say, the cultural moment of this sort of story has sort of passed now, so while there wasn't much point in it sitting on my hard drive, there's also not much point tinkering with it either.
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