#Security in-depth

[gameofthrones2020]

Why Ukraine May Be Russia Last War

The war in Ukraine may very well be Russia’s last war or, at the very least last major war they will be able to fight effectively in this century; this is Russia’s last opportunity to conquer The Carpathian Mountains, having a range of 1,500km-long range

The war in Ukraine may very well be Russia’s last war or, at the very least last major war they will be able to fight effectively in this century; this is Russia’s last opportunity to conquer The Carpathian Mountains, having a range of 1,500km-long range in Central and Eastern Europe. They stretch west to east in an arc from the Czech Republic to Romania. The Tatra range between Slovakia and…

[sketchy-tour]

I need him to bury me in affection right now

[peanutbutter-pumpernickel]

I did a little quick drawing of @naffeclipse 's crush depth Sun

he has such a sweet little smile :)

[firestorm09890]

can we talk about Xemnas's edgy optical disc. who made this

[crescenthistory]

it’s strange how incredibly much i want children as a person who doesn’t want children, and it’s all because my wife works with them full-time now

[erenevune]

Chapter 6 is out!! The amazing artwork of my (not so) lil guys in this chapter is by @icy-gendango! Cannot thank him enough for the amazing art!!! I love it so very much

[curtsies-from-princess-ashlyn]

Super personal post incoming, and ima be vulnerable...

It actually makes me really disheartened when people don't understand Gina as a character. It makes me terrified all over again that if I were to share the parts of myself that I often keep hidden, that I would be rejected or misunderstood myself. Right now I'm watching the show with my mom (it's her first time watching it), and her misunderstanding of Gina is making me more emotional than I anticipated and resurfacing some of my insecurities. Like, strangers on the internet not getting her is one thing, but someone I have a personal relationship with not getting her is another.

It might seem silly (and it is tbh) to project people's opinions of a fictional character onto myself, but it is revealing to me just how deeply I feel connected to Gina. Good fiction often speaks deeper truths than we can articulate ourselves, and Gina's story is certainly an example of this. By extension, I think the audience can reveal the truth of their own heart in how they interact with her story, which is maybe why those opinions can feel so personal to me. To give grace to the audience who maybe don't see the deeper parts of her, I think many casual viewers do see this show as simply a fun but shallow show, where the characterization is only right on the surface.

However, seeing Ricky Bowen be someone who knows and understands the depths of Gina's heart - and still loves and celebrates her - is the human truth that brings a more profound peace and healing to my heart. To everyone reading this (especially those who see themselves in Gina): you are seen, known, and loved... fully.

[namibozsu]

A new quick little umi doodle

[currentlyreadingawesomefanfics]

Random person: Hey Chaos! What do you do when you’re bored?

Me: Make silly videos of my characters talking about their world…

Random Person: What-

Me: Shhhh it’s starting.

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[rachymarie]

Keiko brought me a choccy treat last week what a sweetie <3

• Keiko Shiba Inu •

Keiko is an alert pup on guard to protect her companion's stories, secrets, and heart. With ears perked up ready to listen to any tale or vent session, Keiko won't hesistate to let you know you are being heard.

"I actively listen to the stories and concerns of my friends, but I always keep one ear perked up for the sound of adventure!"

[miyokomadness]

Ok here is my review of Feathers of the Fallen Chapters 1-4. From what I’ve seen thus far your story has me interested and I’ll be sticking around for chapter 5. There is plenty room for improvement if you decide to come back and revise it but we’ll get to that later. Before getting to the feedback I’ll tell you what I liked about it. The setting of the story reminded me of the United States we see in the Wolfenstein series (in the sense of a highly controlled and militarized civilization) and being a fan of the video games this immediately got me invested. The concept of a wing virus is an idea I’ve never heard before. There’s a mysterious aura around it as we don’t yet know how it spreads or how it emerged in the first place and I would encourage you to continue to build on this mystery throughout the story. Secondly it doubles as irony to a Christian nation as the infected refer to themselves as angels and yet they are hunted. As a Christian I’d love to see you build upon this idea. A first person narrator is an interesting choice for telling this story. Taking into account the initial brutal setting and receiving her wings I’m wondering how and when the mc is sitting down to write this story. The foreshadowing you give in the beginning of chapter 1 offers possibilities to such a thought but no certainties and I applaud you for that! Finally, I can see that you potentially sprinkled aspects of yourself and personal life onto Seraphine. Not much more for me to add on it, I just like when writers do that.

Feedback

A quick disclaimer before reading my feedback. I would encourage you to continue writing the story and its entirety before acting upon any of this. It’s good to get it all on paper. The advice and recommendations I’m sharing is, as stated, improvements for the editing and revision phase. Also I’m no published author, I’m just someone who’s been writing for a long time and knows a thing or two. Everything I’m giving you is my personal thoughts, do what you will with them.

The overarching gripe I had while reading your story is that it moves far too fast. In the 1st chapter we are given an exposition about the current state of the world, we are introduced to Seraphine, her family, the wing virus, and that they’re infected. In the 2nd chapter Seraphine gets her wings, we are introduced to an entirely new cast of characters and the idea of leaving already pops up. In chapter 3 Seraphine does leave her home, we get a lengthy backstory exposition from her and the group finds the angel hideout. Finally, chapter 4 is actually very well paced, good job here.

I feel what happened (PLEASE CORRECT ME IM WRONG) in chapters 1 through 3 is a classic case of excitement. You were excited to write a certain section so you speed your way to that section. Absolutely nothing wrong with that, I’m guilty of doing the same thing. However, this story telling, speaking from the perspective of one of your readers does come across as rushed and half baked. Again you may be fully aware of this but another option never hurts. Solutions to fix this are as follows, I’ll be going chapter by chapter…

The main piece of advice I present to you in chapter 1 is SHOW don’t TELL. For example the exposition you give on how the untied states got to where it is now…“8 and a half months ago, the US. government had fallen so low into debts, military shortages, and apparently “things us children shouldn’t be concerned with.” During that time, a government rose, claiming the entire United States in a matter of weeks. Nobody was there to stop them. We didn’t have the resources or anything to battle them with”…all of this is tell and you want to avoid it as much as possible because it kills imagination. Put simply you did all the thinking for me leaving me with nothing to speculate or question because you gave me all the answers…boring. I want you to try this instead and you’re gonna have to put on your acting hat. Put yourself in the mc’s shoes and live out the first day of chapter 1 moment by moment, action by action, and emotion by emotion. Then describe what the mc sees on paper. The journey she has from her house to school is potential world building. What kind of cars are there? Are there military grade vehicles patrolling the street? Are there billboards anywhere? If there are what do they say? These small details mean everything over the course of an entire story. You can also use the classroom for world building. Instead of telling us what the world is like via narration have the teacher TEACH the reader what the world is like. Another thought to ponder is, if the narrator is writing this story within their world. Wouldn’t it be fair for her to assume that the reader already knows some of the history? Additionally I encourage that you don’t share everything. You could just have the teacher teach us a one sided history lesson. Leaving out details such as how this new government treats different ethnicities and identity. Branding it as the perfect nation, where Seraphine’s everyday life begs otherwise (all of this is just an example). In a nutshell, not everything has to make sense in the first few chapters. That’s what the rest of the book is for. You leave the reader with questions so they have a reason to turn the page.

The things that happen in chapter 2 I personally think should not happen in the second chapter. I would recommend at least 1 maybe 2 more chapters dedicated to developing the mc and her parents as well as other people in her life before the wings emerge from her back. By doing this you would make the decision of leaving more difficult for the mc and more impactful on the reader. Essentially I don’t care about any of these people because I’m not given enough time to connect with them. Here are some things you could possible include in an extra chapter…

- running errands with Papa and Dad (further seeing how they interact with one another)

- Flat bike tire (slashed as an act of bullying?) how will dad or papa react?

- Another school day (more time to spend with Gregory and Mae maybe?)

Continuing on the discussion of chapter 2 the image of the wings bursting out of her back is gnarly, credit where it is due. I would have liked to see scenes dedicated towards what Seraphine’s life was like hiding the wings at home. Secondly I’d like to call out a continuity error mentioned in chapter 2. Maddie says and I quote “There’s been chatter of a complex in northern Maine for Angelicals to reside safely.” Is the government hunting these things or not? If this chatter traveled from northern Maine to Portland, Oregon (I’m assuming) I highly doubt it’s safe now so why travel? I’m not saying get rid of it but have Sera ask this question because it’s a plot hole. The solution could simply be Maddie responding with something along the lines of “we still have better odds if we leave”

Apologies if I seem like I’m skimming through this now, my brain is starting to shut down but I promised myself I’d get this to you tonight lol. Secondly I also apologize if my words from this point on are more harsh…I’m just tired. I know you said chapter 3 was your favorite so forgive me when I say that it was my least favorite of the 4. My first reason for this is that everything was far too easy. For a nation actively hunting for Angels and trying to prevent the spread of the infection, just getting onto that train should have been a living nightmare. I refuse to believe that 4 kids with baggy oversized sweaters got onto a train, and successfully rode it from Portland, Oregon ALL the way to northern Maine without anyone battling an eye. Forgive my language, it’s bullshit. There is no tension in a scene that has the perfect circumstance to put me on the edge of my seat. I strongly recommend that you make this journey the most terrifying and tense thing these characters have ever experienced. The second reason for my opinion is the fnaf section. I have no issue with the mere inclusion of it…I fucking love fnaf. By all means write whatever you want, that’s the beauty of writing. I will warn you though that the downside is you won’t be able to publish this as book because it contains copyrighted characters. Unless…you as the legend himself for permission (fazbearhelp@yahoo.com) good luck. The main gripe I had with this section is that it too was incredibly rushed and just all over the place. There was so much information in such a short amount of time that I can’t really form a confident opinion on Seraphine’s backstory because I have no idea what is happening. I’ll likely re-read it and send you a follow up message.

Alright, I’d like to close out with saying once again that I did genuinely enjoy reading your story and I am invested. Despite all the negative Nancie’s, I’m giving you my unfiltered opinion because I care about this story…if my 3-4 paragraphs of text didn’t make it obvious. If there is any confusion within this review or any extra questions you have or if you ever want a secondary opinion please don’t be afraid to ask. Happy writing and thank you for the story! I’m going to bed.

Ahhhh thank you so much for this feedback! I will admit, I do have trouble with pacing things, and I always feel like I move things a bit too fast. This was the absolute best feedback I could have ever gotten! Thank you so much!

I do plan on someday trying to publish this story, and what I will do to fix the issues is that I will change up characters names, appearences, a bit of their personalities, and the setting where Seraphine and Mae grew up to better fit the trackline.

Also, I do thank you for the chapter 3 feedback! I feel it was my favorite because of the backstory sequence, and I feel I can strengthen it by loosening it. I do heavily appreciate your opinion though, it's very needed! I do think that chapter 5 will have to be reworked with this feedback in mind, which will delay it a bit, and I thank you so much because this will make my story stronger and will make everything so much easier to read for people!

I am going into the wilderness for about two weeks, so this will give me lots of time to edit and add a few more chapters and put your advice into play.

Again, thank you SO MUCH this is the absolute best feedback and most in depth reading of the story I have ever gotten. I feel nothing bad towards you feedback, just places you have targeted as my weak points and that if I improve on them, it will make my stories easier to read for people.

I'm going to bed as well, goodnight!

[melted-mercury]

why did I have a dream last night I made a DCA oc called Apple Juice. and in the dream I was playing 4 team dodgeball in a soft play centre or some shit and she was also there playing. when she did that thing that Sun and Moon do when the lights change (except it seemed to just kinda Happen randomly) the other guy was called Blackcurrant and he was just this sopping wet pathetic thing who was terrified of all the kids

I don't go here so I don't know jack shit about FNAF besides what @mrsunnysposts tells me I blame him for this

[easypeasylindyvesey]

why the rangers > the islanders?

bc they didn’t blow a 5-3 lead in the stadium series with under 5 minutes left in the third🤭

[erenevune]

Hey, I just came here from your Celestial Depths fic, which I love by the way, and as I was looking at the art in the note of the last chap I noticed that Sun's tail seems to have crevices along it, rather than being flat and solid. Basically what I'm getting at is: is Sun's tail actually a single limb, or is he too rocking stealth tentacles like Moon and Reader just didn't notice since he didn't separate them during their interactions? You don't have to answer, I was just curious and thought I'd ask! Thank you for writing such a nice fic!

Hi!! Thank you for reading my fic! :D so happy you like it!!

I'm happy to answer this! Yes! Sun does indeed also have secret tentacles! Sun and Moon have the same tails!

Even if Sun did untwist his tail in front of reader, reader wouldn't have noticed because almost all their interactions being very swift due to Sun nyooming off or had Sun hiding most of his body (like the peekaboo bit)/being too close for reader to get the chance to look down and catch him or realise his tail was odd. That's for them to be exasperated about another time! These alien fish and their damn secrets! >:3

In the art, you're seeing essentially what both "modes" are. Moon is in "stealth mode" aka he's got his many grabbers out, and Sun is in "speed mode" where the limbs are all twisted/pressed together to create the tail. In the fic, when I mention Moons tentacles all pressing together to create one limb? That's what's happening. Just imagine Suns tail on Moon instead!

Moon prefers creeping around and grabbing up stuff, so he'll more often be in stealth mode. He prefers ambush hunting, so will creep up on his prey and either grab them unawares or will burst out at them (usually at this point he would switch to speed mode if he needs a bit of distance, but that generally also depends on how large what hes hunting is. The bigger it is, he may decide grip/restraining ability is needed).

Sun like swimming around fast and prefers chase hunting, thus hes usually in speed mode. He gets bored (as evidenced by the poor guys constant search and failure in finding something else to play with so he's not constantly bothering Moon lol) and the thrill of chase entertains him and gets his energy out. He very much plays with his food haha. Sometimes he'll speed at his prey then unfurl his tentacles and essentially crash tackle whatever unfortunate creature he's decided to play with/hunt lol ^^"

Apologies if the tail switching wasn't entirely clear- I did intend to expand more on it later once the boys and reader has a chance to get a good look at them. I hope this help clarify!

Thank you so much for the ask! :D

[riinzler]

can’t stop thinking abt the concept of rinzler relearning how to operate as a security monitor outside of a dictatorship

[rawliverandgoronspice]

I just: finished my translation work 😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭