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@gerrysherry

The Fagans made them into perfect victims.

X-Manson Annotations Chapter 2 - Part 2 - SCOTT SUMMERS

in the X-Manson AU Scott and Alex were not raised in the orphanage by Mister Sinister and their parents did not get abducted by the Shi'ar. They died when a plane fell on their car. However, other aliens like the Kree do exist in this au. I don't know who Francis and Francine Fagan are, so if any die-hard comics fans know, please reach out to me.

Notice how similar their dialogue is to Jean's parents. Short, simple answers. But this time, without the aid of the interviewer. Strange.

Alex Summers is paralleling Sarah here. The timeline shows a brief stint at a psychiatric hospital. Then there's the boy's farm. Nathaniel Essex does exist in this story, but she's completely unconnected to the Summers brothers.

I don't know if I'm misreading this, but does that strike anyone as an odd thing to say about a child?

This is interesting. Scott didn't like Xavier's until he met Jean. Does this mean that Xavier wasn't mind-controlling anyone until later? If this is true, how complicit is Scott in the cult?

Alex seeing a picture of Jean will be important later when we get into the Maddie of it all.

This is inconsequential, but I find Scientologist Havok to be the funniest thing and don't know why.

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okay good, we've got Bobby, Sean, and Rogue accounted for.

X-Manson Annotated Chapter 2 - Part 4 - BOBBY DRAKE

This story was written in 2000 before Iceman was revealed to be gay. The story does have a slight bit of odd historical significance. In the comic's Bobby's father is a homophobic tradcath. Here, he is a crossdressing gay man. Ironic.

Carmen initially made me think about Carmen Pryde, Kitty Pryde's dad. But that isn't the case. Carmen is either the drag persona or the preferred name of a character named Gilbert Weinstein by Bobby's mother. I'm not sure if the character is meant to be trans or a crossdresser or if Doctor Benway is mixing the two together. Because it seems that William is a gay man, but it's also possible that in this au the narrator is not really sure what the difference is between Pride flags.

Note that I said, narrator. Because Kitty Pryde (and some other aspects) is a narrator and this is how the story is framed.

Here, Madeline Drake breaks with the previous trend. She's the parent who knows an equal amount about the situation as the person she's meant to push up against. So her speech patterns are equally long or short depending on the section. She's still a piece of shit, don't get me wrong.

I don't know if Laszlo is a reference to anything. But I think the very obvious implication of Madeline talking about "all those lies about Laszlo" implies that perhaps Bobby was being sexually abused by the man. As we later learn, this wouldn't be totally out of character for the man.

It's also very telling that she didn't even need to be manipulated by Xavier into sending away Bobby.

See.

Okay, William's line here, "He sounded happy, just like he'd sound when his mother was listening in, before the divorce."

This implies that Bobby wasn't being puppeted by Xavier. Perhaps physically or mentally coerced in the usual sense into keeping up the happy-go-lucky facade of the school. But why? Xavier later uses mental control to make his students stay in line.

Okay, here's another thing. Bobby's body was in the lake for ten years at least. There's five others.

Bobby

The Lady of the Lake (Rogue)

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I'm not sure who Dwight Hammer is, if he's a deep-cut reference, please let me know.

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@gerrysherry

I see, so kind of testing out the boundaries of what he could do to other people using his power.

X-Manson Annotated Chapter One

Hello, I've tried these other places. And I've tried it on here. I'm trying to find anyone who has any thoughts on this. X-Manson was a fanfiction written for the X-Men fandom in 2000 by Doctor Benway. I'm trying to uncover all of its secrets so if you can, please help me. This will be the shortest annotation page because this chapter is the shortest, i'll probably break up the next into multiple chunks. If you have any thoughts please message me, comment on, or reblog with your thoughts and I will reblog it in turn.

The she of this is Kitty Pryde. I don't know how old she's meant to be here. As of this moment, this little slice of the present. She has been on the run for ten years (probably).

The Balding Emaciated Man is #ScottSummers, one of the "Oriental" women is Betsy Braddock and the other, I cannot identify, but I speculate one is probably Jubilee or Karma. One of the other women is confirmed to be Jean Grey.

(The story Vanderbylt was sold by Xavier is true to comics Xavier. Xavier is directly descended from the Graymalkin family who are dutch in origin. Though, here Xavier's history is a mystery. That's a rhyme, so you know it's fun.

The Roster Stands at seven by Miss Grundy's count:

Charles Xavier

Logan

Bobby Drake

Hank McCoy

Scott Summers

Warren WorthingtonIII

Jean Grey

I think she is exaggerating about the nature of her being manipulated psychically by Xavier. Pay attention to the Pate Line.

Another reference to Tangiers.

(Erich, the more correct spelling of Erik. He has this name because it was written in 2000 before Magneto was given the name Max Eisenhardt. We see Tangiers again. Why was holocaust survivor Gabrielle Haller in Morocco? Cain Marko is referenced here, which is odd. Any thoughts on that?)

(Warning if you haven't read it yet, there is a description of S.A. This presents a darker version of the conception of David Haller.)

(I have no idea who Georg is, i googled his name and I was presented with Jörg Haider, former leader of the Freedom Party of Austria.)

Anti-Zionist Magneto

Worldbuilding shows how Erich Lehnsherr has changed the world by existing within it.

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just some telepathic things going on

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Shadow over Westchester Annotated Chapter 1 - Part 1

We're looking at a 2001 fanfiction by Kerrie Smith that fuses the worlds of the X-Men and H.P Lovecraft's Cthulhu mythos folks. I know I said that I would be covering a more lighthearted series, but it's been months and I've recovered from the annotations of X-Manson.

We start off with a flashback and we have Charles and Erik as professors at Lovecraft's Miskatonic University. This is written in the usual prose style of fanfiction rather than the documentary style of X-Manson.

Pi, a 1998 psychological horror movie about an unemployed number theorist. the quote here is from the beginning of the movie where the protagonist describes suffering from eye damage as a child and the resulting headaches he suffers from in adulthood.

The ugly pendant that bobby is wearing is some version of the Elder Sign, which can be used as a deterrent against different types of eldritch horrors.

Even in a world where he created the X-Men using eldritch superscience, Xavier still likes branding and superhero names.

*Bobby, you're gay and neither you nor the writer realize that yet.

*Gay.

*Bobby Drake was deeply closeted

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@gerrysherry you make a very good point, that would be enough to trigger anyone, especially a holocaust survivor's ptsd and render them catatonic again.

X-Manson Annotated Chapter Three - Part 7 -  THE RAID

So, Ariel's arrival, Betsy's kidnapping, and The Raid all happened very close together.

Did Gabrielle mean to say the "Korean conflict" here? It's not listed among his accomplishments earlier in the story. But his resolution to the Vietnam War is mentioned.

*God Loves, Man Kills Reference. There's something real ironic about cult leader Charles fighting with a fundie with murderous intent.

**I'm not sure what Warren's thing in L.A is.

God Loves, Man Kills was released in 1982. So, we may be two years into the future, or here the events are still happening in 1980. I like to imagine most of God Loves, Man Kills still happens but nobody learns anything from it.

Vance needs to just shut the fuck up about The Avengers.

*another instance where the interviewer thinks Emma manipulated the students.

**Pricey trip in a cab, Doug.

Tarot is still a mutant in this AU. But there's no mention of her power. Does this mean that maybe instead of bringing to life figures from Tarot cards, she's a mild precog?

*What was left of the helicopter? Did someone destroy the helicopter?

**The Rolls pulls up with Xavier, Logan, Summers, and Grey

Everyone left at the house:

Piotr and Sean.

I have no doubt that either one could take out a helicopter on their own. But there is one factor that nobody has considered. Another person who could down a helicopter that isn't potentially being mind-controlled is Ororo. And nobody knew she was there.

*see there's a lingering after-effects of a storm blowing around, maybe Ororo's powers are less precise than in the comics.

*The armory is real and Xavier does have a room full of guns in the comics. My man's unhinged.

**The way that he's talking here with the door that opens onto a balcony reminds me of The Runaways where the group watches their parents in The Pride doing the human sacrifice. This predates that by several years, so they're probably both drawing on something from somewhere else.

I think this is the first mention of Cable.

Now our Nathan count stands at a possible 2.

This feels very comedic, definitely an "Oh Shit" moment.

Tear gas grenades. People crawling out of windows everywhere makes it feel like there are more people not identified by Doug or the documentary crew.

Marie-Ange Interruption Count: 1.

It's possible he was also forced to remember The Holocaust by either Xavier or Cable. Just like in the popular meme.

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Rogue/Cyclops' X-Men teams

We don't really have a naming convention for them other than Alaskan/Homeless so I'm thinking Rogue's team can be the straight team and Cyclops' is the queer one.

On the left, starting from the top...

Juggernaut - Gay AF. Has been an unstoppable bottom and true love of Black Tom Cassidy since the 60s.

Magik - Pan, even through Marvel's cowardly behaviour.

Beast - Bi, but really not interested in sex or romance rn. OTP Wonder Man - the other half of comics' first M/M kiss. Clones are queer, it is known.

Magneto - is Magneto.

Thot Summers - Definitely a wife guy, but it's not his fault Brevoort broke up the lunar polycule. Says acab and is a twink again.

Idie/Temper - Grey Ace.

Psylocke - Not sure tbh but IMO queer until proven otherwise. Trans-coded.

Kid Omega - An egg waiting to crack.

On the Right

Look, they're either children or being portrayed as aggressively hetero and monog (or as a fucking priest for some reason.) Even if there's queerness it's all vibes anyway.

I rest my case.

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Get your house back, Juggy

throwing him tuesday

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You have no idea what lies ahead.

Best of luck to you, hope you don't like the new mutant too much.

X-Manson Annotated Master Post Master Post

Chapter One

Chapter Two

Chapter Three

Chapter Four + Supplimental

Chapter Five

It's all over, the X-Manson annotations are over, and now I can relax and maybe read and analyze a pleasant fanfiction that doesn't make my head spin. I hope that this ends with me getting all of my thoughts out.

Thank you @darkfiremaster and @rei-ismyname for your contributions to the discussion.

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Please do, even if it will change you for the worse. I have read it countless times and I'm still obsessed with it.

X-Manson Annotated Master Post Master Post

Chapter One

Chapter Two

Chapter Three

Chapter Four + Supplimental

Chapter Five

It's all over, the X-Manson annotations are over, and now I can relax and maybe read and analyze a pleasant fanfiction that doesn't make my head spin. I hope that this ends with me getting all of my thoughts out.

Thank you @darkfiremaster and @rei-ismyname for your contributions to the discussion.

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X-Manson Annotated Master Post Master Post

Chapter One

Chapter Two

Chapter Three

Chapter Four + Supplimental

Chapter Five

It's all over, the X-Manson annotations are over, and now I can relax and maybe read and analyze a pleasant fanfiction that doesn't make my head spin. I hope that this ends with me getting all of my thoughts out.

Thank you @darkfiremaster and @rei-ismyname for your contributions to the discussion.

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X-Manson Annotated Chapter Five Masterpost.

Part One: Infiltrators

Part Two: The Assassination of John Kelly

Part Three: The Raid

Part Four: Adrenochrome

Part Five: Scott Summers...

Part Six: Apocalypse and Autistic Psychic Protection

Part Seven: Clownshoes

Part Eight: Goodbyes

This is it, following this there will be a master post master post

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X-Manson Annotated Chapter 5 - Part Eight: "Goodbyes"

This is it goddamn it, this is the final section of the final chapter.

Fair warning, Xavier will use a racial slur during this section.

*Pietro?

**I love this description because it accurately summarizes everything in a nice genre fiction package.

***That feels a little fucking mean to The Hulk.

*She makes a good point, no matter how much society improves it will not stop the cult from potentially making a comeback.

**The cult is still around.

***The governments did jack shit to do anything until it fucked with them directly.

*No Lorna Dane.

how long?

It's here where we get confirmation that the viewer is Kitty Pryde. She's serving the same role that she played when she was first introduced. She is our audience surrogate. For better or for worse.

For worse, it seems. The cult has taken a toll on her mind and body. Her uterus was mutilated by them and now she's developed bulimia.

At first it seems that there isn't much more here besides exposition about her day to day life. But it's that last paragraph where something new unfolds.

The writer now uses "I" rather than taking on the third person perspective.

Xavier lives in Kitty's mind. In one of the "Holes he created" during his training. But Kitty is Psi resistant. So he is able to be within her with that as a state?

But he can't read her thoughts?

*I have no idea if something like this has precedence in the comic.

*** There's that line again "She gets paid less than that drunken whore downstairs who collects disability". That was the descriptor the narrator uses in the first chapter. So, how much of the story is Kitty's thoughts on the documentary and how much of it is Xavier's?

***He wants to make a jump from her to a new Psi. Why didn't he before? Did he know Cable was going to die? Was he too old?

*How doesn't he know? It clearly had something to do with those weird thrones.

**Danielle also has a copy of Xavier in her brain. That's probably why she developed a crack addiction. The trauma coupled with that is a version of Charles trying to wear down her consciousness so he can get in the driver's seat.

***see.

****Blah, blah, blah. He's an awfully cynical bastard for someone who got everything he wanted.

****Petty bitch.

Here's where Charles uses the slur. But it's here where I first began to spin my theory about him being the shadow king. Sowing the seeds of conflict is The Shadow King's entire deal. So what exactly is his purpose if he isn't? Just a power-crazed narcissist?

There will be no end to this. A definitive statement about the cycles of violence? Or a sequel hook to a story that was never written.

Thank you to everyone who commented upon these and provided me with your thoughts. Especially you, @darkfiremaster, my most frequent commentator.

I hope that this was enlightening and interesting. I will be moving on to a more lighthearted X-Men story after this, but I will reblog any new thoughts that come my way from this.

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@darkfiremaster, ignore the reblog of this, i accidentally reblogged it to my Fallout Rp Blog.

X-Manson Annotated Chapter 5 - Part Seven: "CLOWNSHOES"

How do you publicly execute a man who cannot be killed?

*As far as I can tell, I think Angela Baez might be a mix of Angela Davis and Joan Baez. Who are known for their anti-death penalty activism.

**FART-P isn't a real act. Any search for it will result in the Patriot Act.

*** They don't have to reveal any charges that reveal informers or compromise national security...So, what weird dirt did the cult have on the government? SHIELD stuff?

*also not a real law as far as I can tell.

**No kidding.

*I don't think Scott was ever psychically controlled. I think from everything that we've seen his brain and body were bent to the will of the cult the old-fashioned way, by completely depriving him of anything outside of it and actively punishing him for seeking it out.

*could someone from the cult have found her and messed with her head to make her go crazy?

**Or so you thought? What made you think it?

**She wasn't pursued at all. These mental breakdowns were normal ones from the stress of the situation.

*Scott killed Sean?

**Also, she wasn't fucking joking about it being a lynch law, jesus christ.

*i don't know why that is the description Benway chose to use here. This is meant to be Kitty's semi-internal monologue and it's supposed to reflect some of her thoughts on things, so why is she thinking of George Washington Gein is an Irishman's impression of a Texan?

*George Washington Gein is nobody, i think his name is a reference to Ed Gein.

*They paid to watch a public execution. Like when people used to pay to watch someone getting fucking hanged.

**The bold blue text indicates their method of executing logan. This is why I've entitled this post "CLOWNSHOES".

*Circus Music Plays*

*CIRCUS MUSIC GETS LOUDER!*

So, to recap:

Scott gets shot. That's done.

Then they try to shoot logan with hollow point bullets while he's attached to an adamantium frame that's held up in the air by a crane.

They try again, bullet bounces off and hits a civilian.

I forgot to highlight it, but then they decided to drop the frame logan is in several times in the parking lot of the courthouse.

Drove a truck over logan.

People are screaming and puking looking at his torn up, but not dead body.

a doctor tries to test and see if he's dead and gets hurt

to "finish it quickly" they decide to roll him over with a steam roller.

God. Fucking damn.

It probably would have just been easier to throw his ass in a cell forever than to do all this shit. Everyone seems incompetent from the neck up.

Also, how did they get their hands on an Adamantium Frame and why use it for this? Just because Logan can't cut his way out of it?

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X-Manson Annotated Chapter 5 - Part Seven: "CLOWNSHOES"

How do you publicly execute a man who cannot be killed?

*As far as I can tell, I think Angela Baez might be a mix of Angela Davis and Joan Baez. Who are known for their anti-death penalty activism.

**FART-P isn't a real act. Any search for it will result in the Patriot Act.

*** They don't have to reveal any charges that reveal informers or compromise national security...So, what weird dirt did the cult have on the government? SHIELD stuff?

*also not a real law as far as I can tell.

**No kidding.

*I don't think Scott was ever psychically controlled. I think from everything that we've seen his brain and body were bent to the will of the cult the old-fashioned way, by completely depriving him of anything outside of it and actively punishing him for seeking it out.

*could someone from the cult have found her and messed with her head to make her go crazy?

**Or so you thought? What made you think it?

**She wasn't pursued at all. These mental breakdowns were normal ones from the stress of the situation.

*Scott killed Sean?

**Also, she wasn't fucking joking about it being a lynch law, jesus christ.

*i don't know why that is the description Benway chose to use here. This is meant to be Kitty's semi-internal monologue and it's supposed to reflect some of her thoughts on things, so why is she thinking of George Washington Gein is an Irishman's impression of a Texan?

*George Washington Gein is nobody, i think his name is a reference to Ed Gein.

*They paid to watch a public execution. Like when people used to pay to watch someone getting fucking hanged.

**The bold blue text indicates their method of executing logan. This is why I've entitled this post "CLOWNSHOES".

*Circus Music Plays*

*CIRCUS MUSIC GETS LOUDER!*

So, to recap:

Scott gets shot. That's done.

Then they try to shoot logan with hollow point bullets while he's attached to an adamantium frame that's held up in the air by a crane.

They try again, bullet bounces off and hits a civilian.

I forgot to highlight it, but then they decided to drop the frame logan is in several times in the parking lot of the courthouse.

Drove a truck over logan.

People are screaming and puking looking at his torn up, but not dead body.

a doctor tries to test and see if he's dead and gets hurt

to "finish it quickly" they decide to roll him over with a steam roller.

God. Fucking damn.

It probably would have just been easier to throw his ass in a cell forever than to do all this shit. Everyone seems incompetent from the neck up.

Also, how did they get their hands on an Adamantium Frame and why use it for this? Just because Logan can't cut his way out of it?