#revision hell

[goldfishlover73]

Another unsolicited revision thing

Their feelings are stupid. Get rid of them all.

Sakura felt Kakashi's hand on top of hers.

No

Kakashi's hand was on top of Sakura's.

or

Kakashi moved his hand on top of Sakura's.

Sakura suddenly felt very cold.

no

Sakura was suddenly cold.

Fuck your feelings.

That is all.

[rosesutherlandwrites]

This revision is some slow going. I’m not sure it’s ACTUALLY going slower than Salty did but right now it sure freaking feels that way

this is my own fault for being Ambitious ™️ and later once I beat all the kinks out of this

[so-many-ocs]

i'll be writing something thinking it's pretty good and then later when i'm revising i’ll be like why did i do this to myself. why is it so many pages. why is it so bad. why couldn't i be a math person instead

[lilithsaintcrow]

Unicorns and Thinky-Thoughts

There’s seven chapters of Chained Knight left to revise; I made marvellous progress on Saturday and thus had to restrain myself all Sunday from going back to it. It’s been a long, long while since I’ve actively wanted to do revisions on the one day per week I reserve for house chores and maybe stealing a few hours on the couch with a book. The Muse, baffled and angry at my intransigence, decided…

[lucylyricism]

I suddenly realized right this instant that I've gotten used to writing furiously, so now that I'm revising, I can feel the itch to write clawing at me. I'm literally restless because I'm not writing paragraphs and chapters, instead I'm tiredly searching through my draft for more places to cut and feeling like there's nothing, but SOMETHING MUST GO, HOW ELSE AM I GOING TO TURN 102K INTO 100K I JUST NEED 2 THOUSAND LESS WORDS AHHHHHHHH I'VE ALREADY CHOPPED OFF FIVE THOUSAND WHERE WILL I FIND TWO THOUSAND MORE

[poorly-drawn-mdzs]

Flower Empowered.

[First] Prev <–-> Next

[omegalomania]

fellas im fresh out of original thought. take this

[silna-pdf]

Didn’t like how the majority of the mini comic turned out so here are 3 pieces of it. Wesker, guy who never gets ill, catches the flu and suffers pathetically. Obviously I make Birkin be doctor because clearly this is an individual who is adept and capable of the sensitivity it requires to aid an ailing patient. They cuddle. The end

[gg-ladybug]

An Adam version for @mearyvet because all of Heaven is a potential GOLDMINE. There’s no holding me back.

Alastor: (Part 1)

Lucifer: (Part 2)

Random Groups / Duos / Ships: (Part 3) (Part 7)

Charlie: (Part 4)

Adam: (Part 5 - Here)

Angel Dust: (Part 6)

[huh-j]

“I can’t, I have to study~”

~Rory Gilmore

- Probably my most used excuse this year..

[prettybbychim]

[this became much longer than i intended whoops]

u know i think it would’ve been much better if the ode of resurrection was not shown to us immediately, and wasn’t a main part of their culture. have people die throughout the archon quest, make us believe that there’s no saving them. kill off kachina at the start and convince us that she’s the first playable character in genshin thats not alive.

build up these bonds, forge these friendships, make us care.

just to take it all away

that’s war.

but there’s a tiny flame, that glimmer of hope. maybe it’s something the pyro archons have been working on, passing it down to their successors. something mavuika has been working on. yeah u heard that right she’s actually doing something wow get citlali in there to help out. get the whole goddamn tribe involved idc

there’s a scramble to find the last of the heroes. they don’t want to force it or fuck something up but they’re running out of time. the abyss is coming. it will consume the nation. they need to fucking buckle up and get down to it.

they could probably still go into the night kingdom to search for kachina, so that mualani can get her ancient name. or it can occur under entirely different circumstances. haven’t given that much thought yet. do they find her?

do they find her and can’t actually bring her back to the surface?

for the next part, we’re gonna have to shake things up because we need the captain on our team sooner rather than later. how that happens is up in the air but regardless, we put aside our differences to save natlan.

so, we help the captain find old dragon tech. maybe we enlist the help of kinich and ajaw, maybe we go into ochkanatlan, tie some of that shit in. we can take iansan along too, who is super duper strong and can carry all our fancy dragon tech or smth idk the three of them need more involvement !!! ajaw would drive me up the wall but it’s a necessary evil

in ochkanatlan, we see how the abyss can mimic lifeforms. the twin is in irminsul right? maybe it’s steals the twin’s image, but the traveler knows it’s not them because their twin would never say things like this. we learn that they abyss manifestations are (always?) twisted and mutilated.

we see the dragon. we don’t defeat it, that’s for the world quest lol but we get the image of the dragon in our minds so that when it shows up later down the line, we know what the fuck is happening lol

on our trip, we learn bits and pieces about the captain. it’s all disconnected, nothing makes sense. and since we’re nosey little fuckers, we find correspondence with the tsaritsa in his belongings.

capitano is gentle with his body. maybe a little too gentle. it catches the traveler’s eye but they don’t know what it means, they have no grounds for suspicion. it’s blown off as recovering from his duel with mavuika. (little do we know that he was hit directly in the heart and he’s worried, goddamnit)

ororon lets it slip that something feels off with the captain’s soul. (could the captain be using ororon’s sensitivities to monitor the souls housed inside him? would he eventually tell ororon what’s going on? or would that be too risky?)

ororon receives ancient name same as before, nothing really needs to change there i suppose. more suspicion is thrown on the captain because of the identity of the soul trying to possess ororon. maybe the captain didn’t share his plan in its entirety, he has a lot riding on this, he can’t afford to fuck it up, and keeps his cards close to his chest. he and mavuika can still argue in front of ororon like mom and dad lol

chuychu dies. she doesn’t get to give a long goodbye. she bleeds out in her sister’s arms. (they actually try to stop the bleeding and give her medical care) chasca goes berserk hell yeah, there’s a struggle. she manages to rein herself in, the love between sisters reigns supreme. chasca gets her ancient name

boom u got all ur heroes. they supercharge mavuika to beat back the abyss core thing. what was its name? gilgamesh? i don’t fucking know

the losses are extreme

fast forward a bit bc i’m losing steam and attention span here

we dive back into the night kingdom to track down the “brain” of the abyss corruption. the people we’ve met and lost in natlan help us out. kachina can be added to the mix. the gay lovers, chuychu and her pokémon team, boba and coconut — the whole gang’s here yooo i actually loved this part. favorite section by far

and after our trip in ochkanatlan, we know that the dragon we’re fighting is an abyssal manifestation. the voices of the previous pyro archons are their own but the words are all wrong, designed to discourage and distress us.

we defeat it using the power of friendship (i’m gonna kms)

also mavuika’s kit is completely different. i’m giving her a redesign fuck it. but that’s a post for another time.

traveler seems pretty good ngl i just wish the cons aren’t limited to fighting the dragon. i really liked what i was seeing and then they pooped all over my party (what’s the point!!!)

instead of a big parade, we gather around together at the stadium to finally try the thing all the pyro archons have been cooking. the heroes are a necessary component.

the incandescent ode of resurrection

among the many, kachina comes out of the flames. mualani sobs her heart out and vows to never let her out of her sight ever again

chuychu perhaps? 👀 pls pls she’s the only one besides cap and ororon that i give a shit about pllssssss playable chuychu when? her design is fantastic as is u dont need to touch it PLEASE—

now we can have a party!! after everything is all said and done, we can have One party instead of the five or so we’ve had since we came to natlan. (nation of war? more like nation of fiestas)

ororon, though, feels uneasy, and not because of the atmosphere. he says he’s going to find the captain, but he can’t explain why. concerned, the traveler and paimon try to follow him but are intercepted by citlali, who is for once not freaking out about ororon’s whereabouts, instead…

oh but wait. where’s mavuika gone? oh nooo

plays out relatively the same i suppose. could use some tweaking but not anything significant enough to mention right now.

except now we have somewhat of an understanding of the captain already, all the little bits and pieces we noticed, and the clues we (so rudely) discovered, it’s all starting to make sense now. we’ve also spent more time w him, the emotional attachment runs deeper, and it’s much more painful to experience.

bittersweet

mavuika is confused, especially in the days coming after. she had planned to die then. she said her goodbyes in a roundabout way. she finished the painting of her family, so they’ll never be forgotten. she saved her nation from the oppression of the abyss, resurrected so, so many. there was only one thing left to do… she was supposed to be the one to do it.

what does she do now?

what does she do with herself now, when she hadn’t planned for her own future? it was supposed to end, she was supposed to die. could she have reunited with her family? could she have seen them once again? she’s sad over what could have been, she’s confused because how did it end up like this, she’s mad because the captain stole it from her, she’s guilty because he was ultimately the better choice

what do you do when you’ve spent hundreds of years waiting for your destined day? when you’re only ambition has been this.

it’s time to learn how to live.

the end~

[goldfishlover73]

y'all be happy to know I took out the time Sasuke smiled.

He is not a smiley boy.

[rosesutherlandwrites]

Today has big "go for a long walk first before you start writing" energy, so I'm gonna roll with it. I'm really hoping I might wrangle my current chapter into line by the end of the day today, as unhinged a task as that's likely to be. These complex ones are generally taking two to three days to sort out completely, but I'm only six chapters from the end, the climax is in sight...and I have five free days before I'm back to work full time, so I'm eager to get as far as I can with this. Sigh—also pondering if maybe, maybe, I want to change the location of a single chapter in this half of the novel. Because if I shift it, then I get an extra surprise reveal, and it might aid in the ramping up of some things.... hmmmmmmm.

[dayurno]

this is somewhat of a vent post & something i said i would not do again but has been plaguing me enough that i think getting it out might feel better. so. has anydoggy else been. Baffled and upset by nora sakavic’s refusal to speak on how terribly aftg has treated its characters of color? with the author of the series coming back with a new book and starting up on her online activity again, and questions of what she’d change about aftg bubbling up, it’s particularly glaring to me that we are all playing this very long game of pretend where we ignore how badly the non-white cast has been treated & her lack of thoughts on it

and i understand not wanting to bring up nicky and thea because people pick on her for it. i’m not trying to discredit nora sakavic’s terrible history of getting harrassed online by aftg fans. but i think it is very cynical, and it is very juvenile, and most of all very cruel, that she gets to ignore the very real ways the books have set up these characters to be hated. i think it’s obvious why the characters who get the most hate are the only canonical characters of color, and i think we do not get to treat this like a deliberate decision on the fandom’s part when the books have put these same characters in degrading and embarrassing and terrible positions in the first place. aftg is not a story about nice characters with clean pasts, but there is a very specific nastiness to the only characters of color being a brown man who sexually harasses and later assaults the main character, a black woman whose only scene is her lashing out at her love interest after being ignored for the first two books, and the japanese villain who gets maybe two lines of complexity before he goes back to being a terrible person. the white cast, in comparison, while not at all free from flaws, are never shown to commit mindless evil; all of their actions are ultimately justified. the book goes out of its way to give them concession after concession. we know exactly who to side with, because aftg tells us who these people are. does nicky’s assault ever get addressed in the books? does riko’s reasoning to be the way that he is ever gets more than briefly aluded to? is thea reserved even a shred of humanity or grace in her one scene?

anyway. it’s been years of talking about this and the fandom has been constantly hostile to criticism in this regard, and more recently any criticism at all, and it’s Grating to be on the other side of this discussion. it’s exhausting to know that in ten years we do not get even an acknowledgment besides the author saying she will not answer questions about nicky and thea anymore. it’s upsetting and it’s ugly and i wish no one had to talk about this again, but we do because what i thought was common sense has been washed away by a sudden influx of no-nuance adoration for the trilogy. basically i hope we all explode

[lilithsaintcrow]

Books, Pixie-Led

Read an article on Oppenheimer and the Bhagavad Gita yesterday, which led to me roaming the house trying to find my copy of the Upanishads. The database said it was in the Poetry section, but I knew that wasn’t right since it belongs in Reference. My cataloguing is just as idiosyncratic as my shelving, apparently. After wandering about a bit and even checking downstairs (though I knew it…

[orbital-inclination]

I am definitely more of a writer than a comic artists because enviably I’ll reach a point in my comics where something doesn’t feel right. And what doesn’t feel right usually isn’t the direction but the execution. The juggle between the vision and my skill level and trying to find an executable solution between the two is hard. I rly need to figure out how to plan out my comics better so I can avoid running in to this kind of roadblock.

All that is to say that I’m going to TRY to get the rest of this posted by the end of the day. Because it’s almost there. I just hated how I ended it and I’m in the process of fixing it.