#intertwined bitches gahhh

[betaphannie]

phil being the one to get dan out of social situations and dan being the one to try things out for phil to see if phil would like it first hold on im hold on im wait no im

[izakiisdead]

Festive Love.

ii Reader isnt actually mute but prefers to not speak but reader has very expressive face expressions.

ii He only speaks when needed, if not then he’ll be quiet.

a/n : HELP I TRIED WRITING A MAKE OUT SESSION AND ITS SO TRASH (MIGHT UPDATE ON IT)

Cw: not proofread :’3, semi nsfw at the end,

im so insecure abt this oneshot man HELP…

Requested by : Nobody

Genre : Short make out sesh in the end (NSFW maybe ?)

Naruto Uzumaki x Silent!Male Reader

(Part 1)Wake Up M/n !!

*RINGGGG*

You groaned at the sound of your alarm while trying to stop it from ringing like a bitch but end up falling off the bed.

“Tch… ouch” You got up and rubbed your head. You looked at the clock and it’s 6:30 am. You stared at the intimate object as you put it back at it’s original place and got back into bed. “Just 5 more minutes….” You groggily said before dozing off.

Timeskip “5 minutes later” (9 hours later)

*KNOCK* *KNOCK* *KNOCK*

“(M/N) SANNNNN OPEN THE DOORR !!!!” Naruto yell as loud as he can, hoping you would hear him. “Maybe we’ll just wait for him?” Sakura suggested. “It’s no use !! its been 9 hours !! He’s such a heavy sleeper.” Naruto replied. Sai was standing beside Sakura while nodding at him. “Its already almost 4 pm !” Naruto added as he puffed his cheeks in annoyance.

“Is (M/n) always this late ?” Sai calmly asked. “Well.. not really but today he seem to be taking a while to get up, I wonder what’s going on.” Sakura responded. Naruto was starting to grow impatient of the silent male and thought of an idea. “Let’s pick on the locks !!” He said with a mischievous smile.

*PAK*

“NO NARUTO.” Sakura smacked his head. “Agh ! That hurts Sakura chan !” Naruto winced. “Serves you right. We are ninjas not an intruder !” Sakura responded.

You were up in your room watching the whole show go down outside, sneaking in some silent chuckles. You actually woke up 3 hours ago but decided to skip practice because you were mentally exhausted.

You finished getting dressed and decided to go out by using the window instead of the door because why not ? You opened the window and jumped out of it; while doing so you tried to close the windows as fast as you could. You sneak up behind the three and acted as if you were there the whole time.

You tapped on Naruto’s shoulders to get his attention. “GAHHH A MONSTER !!!” You frowned at his words. “S-sorry (M/n) I thought it was a mons— HOW DID YOU GET HERE ?!?!” You let out a silent chuckle.

“Since we’re all here now we should get going—-”

“You missed practice today (M/n)” Sai cuts Naruto off. “He was wondering where you are, so am I. I’m glad you’re not hurt (M/n).” He added, chuckling a little then smile at you. You chuckled back at him while nodding at his statement.

“[Im sorry I wont let that happen again]” You signed with a smile. Sai was a little confused but Sakura helped him understand what you’re trying to say.

Naruto saw how your face lits up a little when you and Sai we’re talking. ‘W-what’s this feeling inside me..’ He thought to himself.

Naruto, without thinking held your hand; startling you. Your eye’s widen at the blonde boy’s action but you allowed his hand to intertwine with yours.

You turned to look at the pouting blondie.

“Ah ! Lets get going shall we ? Time wont wait for us will it ?” Sai said as he was staring into the abyss while you and Sakura nodded. Naruto, is still pouting. You smiled at him then tapped his shoulders.

He noticed you tapped his shoulders then lends you his ear. “Lets get going Naruto kun” you whispered into his ears; causing him to fluster up. Yes, he has heard your voice multiple times yet it still flusters him because you rarely use it and your voice sounds like whispers from an angel, enough to make a guy like him melt over it.

The both of you noticed how Sai and Sakura are already ahead of you two. Naruto held your hand a little tighter then sprints towards them, dragging you as well. It took you a while to catch up with Naruto’s pace.

The four of you are supposed to be heading to a festival after practice but of course you weren’t at practice but you still went with them. You’re going because you’re not going to miss out on good snacks they have at the festival.

(Part 2 Festival time !)

The four of you arrived right on time, the walk took the four of you around 2 hours.

You are on Naruto’s back because you were getting a little tired.

You got off Naruto’s back and gave him a bow as a ‘thank you’. “[thanks for letting me ride your back ! You’re extremely strong Naruto !]” You signed as you gave him a closed eye smile, he blushed seeing your adorable smile.

“N-no problem ! Anything for my boyfriend!! Or m-maybe future husband?” Your face reddens when you heard the last few sentences. You held his hands while trying to hide your embarrassed face.

“Awh ! Look at you two !! Now hurry up or we’ll leave you two.” Your body stiffness when you heard Sakura’s voice change. Sai nodded as he crosses his arms with a smile.

“We’re fine here !! We can just move at our pace ! You two go without us !” Naruto yelled with a wide smile. Sakura smiled at you two before leaving you two be.

[Sakura and Sai arent in a relationship, they’re just friends. Sakura is just helping him out incase things gets awkward for him]

As the two of you are now alone, Naruto picked you up bridal style and went to a more hidden place.

He gently places you down, not wanting to hurt you. “N-naruto..” he can feel his pants tent up from the sound of your voice. He ignored it. His face reddens and without thinking he kissed you.

The two of you were slowly adjusting into it. He slid his tongue into your mouth and explored the wet caverns of your mouth. He then pulled away to let you breathe since you were getting a little breathless. “(M/n)… may I continue?” He asked as he pulled you closer to which you nodded. He continued kissing your lovely lips while holding your hands and caressing it at the same time.

Despite his energetic personality, he’s very slow and gentle when it comes to this kind of stuff. He made sure you were comfortable during the whole make out session.

He took a break from kissing your lips so he can appreciate the other kissable spots of your body such as you neck, your cheeks, your forehead, your hands and etc (wink wonk *JOKING*)

“(M/n). I. love. you.” He said in a playful yet low voice in between kisses. You nuzzled at his neck while hugging him. “I love you too.” You said in a whisper like tone. Your breath hits his neck as you speak, making him fluster up.

“(M/n) sweetie, let’s continue this make out session behind closed doors shall we” You blushed at the male’s statement. You shyly nodded. Naruto was swooned by how cute you are then proceeded to pick you up then planted little kisses on your skin.

“Cmon honey, we got a festival to go to!” He said in his usual happy tone. You laughed at the male’s antics as you planted a small kiss on his cheeks. “Hey ! Sneaking a kiss on me huh ?” He kissed you as he was chuckling. “I love your kisses (M/n)” he holds you closer.

You guys took so long, the fireworks have already fired up.

The two of you watched the fireworks while enjoying eachother’s company. Naruto held you closer as your were focused on the fireworks.

-FIN

[infinitehobi]

Hi hello it’s 🐝 anon here with some feedback for you about this amazing chapter

All right, so hopefully this will all make sense! It’s mostly just my live thoughts as I read through 🥰 not all comments have context, but they should all be in chronological order!! (Quotes should be in italics and my comments are just regular text— but lmk if anything is weird because tumblr mobile formatting is truly evil for no reason)

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Love the way yoongi speaks of the reader in his POV every time she’s mentioned 😂 he is SMITTEN

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The convo about the recording felt so real— lol my dad is a musician and I swear I’ve heard him and his bandmates talk like this when they record.

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“Call went fine. They’re almost done. But! That’s not important. I saw her.” 

Jungkook NO—(the leftovers!! Gahhh so smart, how could you do this to me so early) but now I feel kinda bad for Jungkook wtf…

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Don’t say your name.

Not with that face. 

Not with all the stars you saw that one night in his eyes.

Hi excuse me the way you write is literal poetry and this made my heart go right up into my throat. A gorgeous callback to an amazing memory in the midst of him feeling like the bottom is falling out of all of it.

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The way you described the devastation from yoongi when he heard reader’s name??? Like I want to cry and put him in my pocket.

I really love how you’ve written this moment becuase you’re taking me on a journey right with yoongi— the waves of realization hitting as you reveal more and more info that he’s remembering, I feel like I’m drowning right with him. The pacing is done so well.

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heart lifeless next to his shoes.

Incredible line. Just had to say that.

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Being with you didn’t exist beyond his dreams.

Okay I am taking yoongi out of my pocket and SHAKING HIM BECAUSE IS HE SERIOUS

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She was right. 

Everyone will eventually leave him. 

And he’ll end up alone.

BRB gonna fight this bitch

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But the dumplings…

Shit, something that trivial shouldn’t be able to affect him so much. But it does.

I’M AFFECTED TOO YOONGI!! SHIT!!

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It affects how he feels sick that he’s gonna end things.

*rereads three times* 😐😑 … he’s gonna what now

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The phone call before she comes over, the little asides from yoongi— “more than anything.” “Please say his name a lot tonight” I. Am. Heartbroken.

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One thing’s for sure: their whole life would transform simply because they tried. They’d enter a phase of their life that they’re always going to remember, intertwining with a man they’re never gonna forget.

I’m literally already tearing up, I’m not joking. Also love the wordplay with “always remember” to “never forget”

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“I brought you tangerines.” 

Rude to not also bring tissues for ME

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Shoes seem to scold you

love the way you give emotions to inanimate objects to set the tone. Love love love.

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I am actively dying at the dichotomy of reader being so happy to be there and Yoongi getting ready to break every single heart in this room. The way you set this up with yoongi earlier to bring in the reader like this— I’m in pain in the best way.

ahhhh I feel like a deflated balloon!!!

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“Told him I’m seeing someone.”

[brain temporarily unavailable. Thoughts replaced with high-pitched whistle]

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Not a specific place, but I wanted take this moment to note how much I appreciate the placement of line breaks in your writing. You’re so aware of the rhythm of your words, it truly reads like poetry.

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Realizing that the last conversation you’ll have here mirrors the very first.

MY HEART IS ALREADY BROKEN AND NOW WE’RE PEELING TANGERINES?!!

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“Crying over tangerines.” You feel a burn in your throat. “Who does that.” 

Me. I do that. I am currently doing that.

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Not like anyone’s counting, but ten and a half steps later, your feet appear next to your shoes.

You start scrubbing. Washing. Doing your damned best to wipe every piece of porcelain and cutlery clean.

Beautiful ways to slow this moment down while also showing a level of disconnect—just focusing on all these minute details that you’d obviously not typically mention.

Idk if you’ve ever read interviews from people who’ve been through a natural disaster or some other traumatic event, but so often their memories are full of the most inconsequential details like this.

Overall you just have a really lovely feel for the tempo and gravity of different moments.

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But it’s getting real fucking hard to tell how good of a job you’re doing with your vision this blurry.

Also getting real fucking hard to READ with my vision this blurry, RYEN.

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The crescendo of emotions from the reader with the devastatingly calm demeanor from Yoongi, the reveal of what Jungkook told Yoongi earlier, Yoongi telling the reader she can end things, making it clear that he needs a new eyeglasses prescription because he cannot read this room… THIS is how you write such a pivotal moment

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“He broke up with me out of nowhere. Right before I left.” 

Okay please strike from the record that I ever said I feel bad for Jungkook.

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“I want all of it.”

Thank GOD I need to go scream into a pillow for a bit, brb

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Love the flip of who’s being openly insecure and how the other person responds to it. They’re both so good for each other and it’s so clear here (to everyone but these two).

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“I wanna be happy.” 

Something moves in his hoodie.

“And I want you to be happy, too.”

Pleeeeease I love the way this was said (I wish I had more coherent thoughts I just really love the way they speak to each other)

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Something solid pushes into your nose before he stops, tearing his glasses off to kiss you straight into another plane of existence.

I am currently also on another plane of existence oh my GOD— like I was just crying full tears and now I’m short-circuiting.

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You kiss him as if it’s your last. You kiss him as if this is the first of many.

You. Do. This. So. Well. The way you play with opposites in your writing is just *chef’s kiss*

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He doesn’t say anything, still clicking around until he brings up a file, then exiting out before clicking another one.

It was at this point I legitimately placed my phone face down and said to my cat Toulouse, “oh my god he’s showing her his music. Oh my godddddd he’s showing her his MUSIC.”

This was literally the sexiest, most beautiful, devastatingly romantic moment. (BRB googling “can you sue an author for making you cry a LOT”)

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I’m so serious, this update had me crying a full variety pack of tears, including laughter because WHAT:

“Your dick is big and I wanna suck it.” 

😂😂 the BARK I let out, I swear I’m getting a noise complaint from my neighbors

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And then when she goes back and listens to it again, with yoongi watching her listen… ahhhh you wrote this scene so beautifully and tenderly— like please make my bed out of this moment because it’s so soft.

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Looking at videos of Holly on his phone HELP it’s so domestic and adorable— again with your perfect timing and tempo with the slower, cute bits mixed in with faster, more desperate points.

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“I really like you, Yoongi. And I’m gonna love every second you give me.” 

Just punch me in the face already!!!

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“But I’m really fucking into you, doll.” 

Your breath halts, and you’re pretty sure your heart fails and thinks the only way to go is through your eyes.

What a perfect, beautiful way to describe how I feel when I’m reading this, because I’m crying again.

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“You make me feel safe… I meant from myself.”

I feel like a dartboard at a bar in a midwestern college town. Like how many more lines like this are you going to throw at me?? 😭😭

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“Ask me,” you whisper. “What I want.” 

The fact that she sees how fragile he is in all of this, how he’s the one who’s been helping her become more self-confident while he’s been so unkind to himself, and how she—because of HIM— takes a leap and confesses everything and ends it with “I wanna watch fireworks with you again.” Like PLEASE this confession is one of the most incredible confessions I’ve ever read, I’m not exaggerating. Reader’s crying, yoongi’s crying, I’m crying— the whole room is crying.

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And as a man that speaks through actions, Yoongi responds with a kiss reminiscent of moonlight. 

Soft in the way it makes you protective. Bright in the way it makes you glow.

This is BEAUTIFULLY written, please never stop writing. What an lovely description.

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I adore the way you’ve revealed this mutual vulnerability and fear in the development of their relationship, and how they’re actively trying to protect each other while still being terrified. Like if that isn’t love, truly what is???

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“… a chokehold.”

How dare you do this to me now, in my time of weakness

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When you’re stripped bare, you feel no different. Because you already felt that way. Layers and layers already torn in scraps on his kitchen floor.

A+

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All I’m gonna say here is that the 35+34 was a 100/10. No notes.

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Even if you both lay just like this, you would be content. Present. Fully in the moment. 

“You said my dick was pretty.”

Nope moment over time to go.

Lmao okay your comedic timing is also perfect

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“I’m not seeing anyone else.” 

Your eyes flicker. 

“Like I said. I wouldn’t do that to you.”

You don’t know why that’s the first thing he decides to say. But you don’t know what you would’ve said in the moment either, content on simply watching the meteor showers in his eyes. “Okay,” you finally whisper, thoroughly spent, physically and mentally. “I can’t stop you if you do wanna see anyone—”

“I’ve been yours.” 

You blink.

“That’s it.” 

Love the galaxies woven into all of these important moments. I love watching them find their courage in each other.

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“Gonna warn you now: you might get tired of me, doll.” 

“I’m already tired of you, the fuck.” 

I love them so much

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And he gives you a grin that will burn into your memory forever, searing into multiple pages that it will take you years to turn over and forget.

Allow me to take this opportunity to point out another one of my favorite things about your writing: Specific, concrete details. That’s how you take something that’s been written about millions of times and make the reader feel like they’ve never read anything like it. The difference of a beautiful smile vs the poetry I’ve quoted above.

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“Where’s my hi?”

Yoongi I swear to GOD

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You’ve written the chaos of the party so well— the subject changes, interjections, shouts, etc. I definitely feel like I’m at this party and also avoiding jungkook lol

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Yoongi [10:08pm]: Wait why?

You [10:08pm]: u look hot when i said not to ☹️

I love themmmmmm!!!

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Wanting nothing more than to rest in the comfort only Yoongi’s arms can give.

Yes, actually?? Field trip! Let’s all go there I’m ready.

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So yeah!! That’s my feedback for this chapter. I hope it all makes sense!!

I’ll end this by saying that I’ve been following for a while, I’ve read everything from your masterlist, and it’s been a privilege to see you grow as an author and an artist. (Like your earliest stuff is already gorgeous and with every new piece you’ve managed to somehow set the bar even higher.)

Every word that you write feels important and intentional— nothing is filler, there’s a perfect balance of description and emotion and dialogue in the right places at the right times. You make it so easy to fall in love with the characters and fully immerse ourselves into these stories.

I don’t know what you have planned for the rest of your life, but I truly mean it when I say that I hope you never stop writing. You have an incredible gift and you’ve obviously worked so hard— I hope that this type of creative work surrounds you with the same joy that you’ve brought so many others.

Thanks for sharing this gift with us. I hope your time off is everything you need, because you absolutely deserve it. 💓💓

PS hopefully I’ll be able to do similar feedback on your other stuff while you’re on break!! 😇

forfeit (3tan) (m) | myg

title: forfeit (m) pairing: 3tan!yoongi x reader(f) series: masterlist | three tangerines | fireworks | house party | basketball | stay | sidewalk talk | friends | dalo | like that | anytime | sundress season | yoongi’s interlude rating/genre: m (18+) ; angst , fluff , smut ; brother’s best friend au, implied age gap au summary: something is up with yoongi. note: alright, y’all. i won’t say much here, other than thank you. thank you all endlessly for the support that you’ve shown me and this series thus far. it’s been one heck of a ride, and a huge part of that is bc of all of you. i will leave the rest of my mushy thoughts for the end bc the wait for this has been long enough!  note 2: if you haven’t read the three tangerines series yet, read the other parts first! it will all make more sense. lastly, this chapter wasn’t beta’d bc i wanted it to be a surprise for everyone!  warnings: pov switch (just one), cursing, house party, yoongi in glasses<33, angst, choking, crying, pen*tration, studio talk, jk is here and he is blond lmao, BRO REVEAL FINALLYYY, hair/head pulling, hitting from the back, protected s*x, uhhhhhhh 34+35 l o l, oral (f/m rec), rough s*x, kissing (yes, this is a warning and i’m warning u that it’s a warning), a struggle, spanking, assss play, yoongi is rude, overthinking, did i say angst?, alcohol, weed mention, spitting, manhandling, cowgirl, the chains!! stay!! on!!, body worship, obligatory ‘yoongi on the phone’ warning :)) drop date: october 25th, 2022, 7:17pm est word count: 22.6k holy hell

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