#( this a deleted scene hm? )

[theprinceandthewitch]

TOH really does drive me crazy because I have never seen a piece of media that has almost everything I'm looking for in a fantasy story with romance elements. BUT it doesn't do anything with them...

... Seriously, how am I not supposed to go insane over the implication that every single Grimwalker died because they "betrayed" Philip after they found their Evelyn. Or that there's a Lunter kiss in a spoiler episode featuring Luz's self insert character. Or that they wrote the story to have Luz, a witch from another world, be the one who introduces Flapjack to Hunter and show him Belos' true intentions in HM (AND be the one who offers him a sanctuary after both of them nearly receive a fate worse than death). Or how HM directly parallels Hunter leaving Belos behind with a witch from another world like Caleb did.

Or the entirety of TTT which is an episode that specifically focuses on Luz's and Hunters relationship, directly parallels them with Caleb and Evelyn and then ends with Hunter asking Luz to help him avenge Flapjack. Flapjack, who is the symbol of Caleb and Evelyn's love, was the only thing that saved Hunter from meeting the same fate as the other Grimwalkers...

[deus-ex-mona]

the best part of the kawaikute gomen manga was when she said “IT’S KAWAIKUTE GOMEN TIME” and kawaikute gomen-ed all those guys

[maulfucker]

having a rejects doc is great because I can delete and redo whole scenes without losing anything. and also because I can keep pet paragraphs like this one until I find a scene willing to adopt them

[luciality]

insane brain telling me to turn one of my oldest wip fics into an ask blog instead vs i dont wanna draw

[ajcrawly]

hohohooooooo that third gin and tonic. hooHOO, even

[skyward-floored]

I feel like I should be posting a fic... whumptober brain is still in effect

[truthundressing]

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[kaylinalexanderbooks]

[image ID: screenshot of a Tweet by rax 'leads with her crotch' king @ RaxKingIsDead posted 9/14/23. It reads "when i have writer's block i think of annie dillard describing it as the writer being aware that some load-bearing section of the piece is too wrong for the rest of it to proceed. and then i diagnose which giant chunk i need to delete. and then the writer's block goes away" /end ID]

Saw this advice on Twitter today, and I think it's going to end up being useful for me. 🥹 Thought I'd share it with y'all, too.

[skrunksthatwunk]

ARMY OF THE DOOMSTAR KAIJU BATTLE?????????????

[maulfucker]

Anyone want a Satine & Maul scene that I removed from this draft

[brewed-pangolin]

Tumblr deleted the ask because it's stupid, but to the sweet anon who requested Gym Rat Soap on the first night, this is for you.

MDNI 18+ just some unedited possessive Gym Rat Soap mumbo jumbo

cw: mentions of alcohol

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Poor overly possessive Gym Rat Soap Johnny, who stakes his claim to you the first time you let him let him come inside you.

It all started with an innocent night out with the boys. Hitting up the local pub to rid the worries of the week away with a few strong brews down the gullet.

And those countless pints proved to be your downfall in the end. Latching onto him, losing yourself in the melodic brogue of his voice as he whispered the most tumultuous poetry into your ear.

Elegantly sinful promises laden with whisky fueled intent, the gentle brushing of his stubble against your cheek making your legs quiver as you imagined his mouth entangled with your most intimate lips.

It didn't take long to pull him away into the back seat of an unsuspecting Uber. His hands greedily clawed at your hips as you apologized profusely to the driver for the improper scene playing out in the backseat.

Still, the indecent show in public was nothing compared to the ravishing he bestowed upon you behind closed doors. Barely making it through the front door as he began to frantically tear off your risqué yet fruitless choice of apparel.

"Where ya wanna start, hen? The kitchen, or the living room?"

You barely had time to breathe before he swung your naked form over his shoulder. A thunderous laugh echoing from his chest as he planted a firm smack on your ass. Stomping up the steps towards the bedroom as you mentally prepared yourself for the vigorous workout he was about to put you through.

He shamelessly tossed you onto the bed, a wicked smile curling into the corners of his lips as your breasrts bounced from the force of the impact.

"Tell me bonnie, ya been workin' on your yoga? Jus' like I told ya to?"

The mischievous glint in his eyes matched the dark tone of possessive desire in his voice. Forcing you to comply with his demand, nodding your head as the capacity for speech all but abandoned you.

"Aye. Good lass. Gonnae need ya ta center yerslef as I wreck this pretty little cunt a'yers."

You didn't protest as he proceeded to break you in the most beautiful way possible. Losing count at how many times he brought you to oblivion only to push your further as he neared his own blissful undoing.

-

You came home a few days later with a duffle bag and worn boots meeting you at the door. A half-naked mohawk crested man rummaging around the kitchen as he deftly put together a delectable feast upon the stove.

"Um, Johnny? What are you doing?" A perplexed expression formed into the contours of your face as he turned to meet your questioning gaze.

"Wha'? Cannae make my bonnie some dinner?"

Your eyes narrowed at him, trying to piece together the scheme he was shamelessly putting together.

"Dinner's fine, Soap. But what's with the bag?"

"Hm. Aye. There is that."

Soap turned around, coursing his arms over his broad chest with a crooked smile. His cerulean eyes roaming you up and down like a predator stalking it prey, poised to leap at any moment.

"Already signed the lease, lass. Might as well start moving in."

"What do you mean, signed the lease?"

It took you no more than five minutes to piece together his housewarming innuendo. Aided only by a swift encore as he threw you down and bent you over the kitchen table, implementing his down-payment as he thrusted another load deep into the welcoming walls of your cunt.

Gym Rat Soap Masterlist

[lacesoflove]

NOW SHOWING: NEEDY LITTLE THING (request)

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Rating: nsfw

Warning: AFAB!reader. not proofread lmfao

A/N: ngl I do not know the layout of Hamzah’s apartment. First time writing proper pure smut <33 be kind, im sensitive. This was a request but i somehow deleted the request??

“FUCK YOU’RE NEEDY!”

The words still rang through your head despite being spoken a couple hours ago. You had woken up trying to get into your boyfriend’s pants, or at least capture even a bit of his attention. for the better half of the morning, only to be met with rejection. The rejection was understandable, and it wasn’t as if it was the first time he had turned down a sexual advance - and after all he was busy and had been high strung the past couple days. What you didn’t expect was the sudden and unusual outburst of him calling you needy, followed by a “whore who couldn’t take a hint when he’s busy”.

After that you had told yourself you would not cry or make a scene in front of him and resigned yourself to the shared bedroom for hours, taking off your shorts, rendering you pantless, and buried yourself and your misery in the comforters.

Hours of bed rotting went by and by some point you had accepted sexual unfulfillment and degredation - but refused to succumb to the hunger that was now starting to settle in your body. You had picked yourself up from the floor and made your way to the kitchen, making a mental note to avoid him at any cost. And you were doing good, really good until he called for you. “Y/N baby,” you could feel his arms snaked around you as his nose found a home in the crook of your neck. “I’m sorry.” You shrugged his body off of you, trying to stay focused on the pathetically sad sandwich you were preparing in front of you. ”Y/N, listen to me please - I was just busy and I took it out on you and I really shouldn’t have. I’m sorry.” You turned around and took a good look at him and what conquered your anger was his eyes. His sweet, brown, puppy dog eyes. You sighed.

“I’m sorry I should’ve understood you were busy.” You apologised, gently as you walked over to him and pushed loose curls out of his face. “I’m sorry for being mean.” “Hm, you’ve been meaner.” You hummed. “I have?” He asked, voice tinged with slight worry. You nodded. “I like it though.” You said with a sultry chuckle.

“Like it when I get a bit mean?” He asked you, his eyes bloomed with a newfound lust. ”Yeah.” You responded breathily. “I like it when you’re needy. My needy girl.” He said, pulling your chin up to face him. He slipped his tongue in your mouth as his arm, in a swift movement, cupped you from under you ass, hoisting you up. “Wanna see how much you want and need me.”

He took you both over to the couch, before he threw you onto it. You landed with a giggle. He straddled you, making his way down to in between your legs, peppering kisses along his journey. “Hamzah wait-“ you choked out. He had barely even done anything, yet it felt like everything. “I want to ride-“ you whispered through choked breaths. “C’mon I need you to be louder f’me.” He told you, lifting his head up from suckling on your inner thigh. “I want to ride you.” You blurted as coherently as you could. He made haste to get up away from and to sit upright on the couch. You got up from the couch and stood between his parted legs, below you you could see the desire tented in his pants. Fuck.

He rolled his shorts upwards towards him to expose more of his bare thigh; an invitation for you to hike both your legs over his thighs. His flesh dug into you right where it felt good. He took a handful of your ass, before slapping it - a silent indicator that he wanted you to move. And when he called, you came; so you began to rut into his thigh. Your head fell against his collarbone. You could feel your wetness pool underneath. “You like - fuck - this don’t you?” He whined out. “Like being this desperate for me huh even when I’m busy?”

You were fucked speechless so you just nodded as you let out moans. “I want to make you feel good too.” You choked out, clumsily grabbing for his shorts and tugging at the waistband. He looked at you. “You sure?” He asked, his voice gentler. You nodded. He discarded his shorts and boxers. Still continuing to ride him till near oblivion, you took your right hand and wrapped it around his length - the action eliciting a mouthful of curses and your name from Hamzah. He snaked his hand under your t-shirt (which was his, really) and toyed with your tits before ultimately deciding it would be better to take your shirt off altogether. His tongue gently swirled around your hard nipple which was the beginning of the end for you. “You’re all I need.” You moaned, his cock flexing in your palm as you continued stroking him. “You’re all I need. Fuck. My girl, my girl…” he mumbled out, his mouth half full with your breast. His words were all you needed to reach your climax. Your wetness spilled from under you onto his leg and following you, his cock let out it’s final pulses before he relaxed under you. You rested against his body. The room was filled with the scent of sex, sweat and flesh with a tiny tinge of your perfume as well as both of you heaving for a breath.

“I’m sorry by the way.” He whispered, looking into your eyes. “I’ve just been really stressed and I couldn’t even think about shit like sex or anyth-“ you gently placed your manicured finger to his mouth. “Baby it’s okay.” “It’s not, I shouldn’t have called you a whore though,” he said, sadly. “That wasn’t okay.” You gave him a small kiss to his temple. “It’s okay, it kinda turned me on a bit.”

“Of course it did.”

[vashtijoy]

inaccessible scenes: after the engine room

Many sequences in P5R are not deleted exactly—they're inaccessible. They're in game, theoretically, but game mechanics make it impossible for you ever to see them.

For instance, there are a bunch of TV shows that exist, that are presumably in game, but you can't ever get to the TV to watch them—usually because Morgana makes it impossible for you to go downstairs.

A couple of these scenes happen around the end of Shido's Palace, around the Akechi fight. Once you go into the engine room, you cannot leave until you defeat Akechi. You can't use a Goho-M, you can't take the route out. You are well and truly stuck.

Plus, once you have defeated him, the game funnels you to the Treasure, and any attempt to (say) go to a safe room will again be cockblocked by Morgana.

This means that the last two safe room meetings in Shido's Palace are never accessible. And one of them is important. Let's have a look.

We all know about the meetings—you go to the table in the safe room, you talk to the team, you ask how your progress is. They say some shit. It's usually worth a regular check-in:

The first inaccessible script appears to be triggered by entering the engine room. You get it after going in, but before fighting the Cleaner—so presumably after fighting his mooks, while you chase him about:

Morgana: We found the engine room, so all we need to do now is get our hands on the letter of introduction. Haru: It would be nice if we could avoid a fight in the process... Yusuke: Hm, given his attitude up to this point, that is highly unlikely...

The second one appears to kick in after the Akechi fight. After Akechi has given his life to save you:

Yusuke: Goro Akechi... I believe he may have been the greatest casualty of Shido's actions... Makoto: Was there no other way? Ann: We'll avenge him when we take Shido down. Come on, we have the letters now—let's do this!

"the greatest casualty of Shido's actions", huh? And it's inaccessible, of course. Leaving the engine room will warp you to the locked treasure room door. If you run to a safe room, Morgana won't let you go in. If you try afterwards, you've been updated to the "we need to send the calling card" script. You never see this.

But I'd bet money it's there. Just out of reach. Just another instance of the PTs understanding Akechi, and mourning him, rather than (say) hating him and being glad he's gone.

one more thing

Most people probably know that you can lurk mournfully by the shutters in the engine room. Nonetheless, here it is:

[anton-luvr]

Hi! 👋🏽 👋🏽👋🏽👋🏽👋🏽 I would like to request an Riize imagine where they walk in the room to see y/n is crying while watching an emotional k-drama.

# WHEN THEY SEE YOU CRYING OVER A K-DRAMA ; 7riize.

⚝ bf!riize x gn!reader | fluff | bf au ⚝ note ; here u go anon! thanks for requesting :) + reqs are CLOSED !

# SHOTARO. - mom mode: activated. instantly drops whatever he's holding to rush to your side, asking what's wrong. you felt a bit embarrassed to tell him it was just because of the k-drama you were watching, but shotaro has zero judgment. he holds you close to him, letting you cry into his arms as he gently rubs your back.

# EUNSEOK. - coming home to see you in tears certainly wasn't something he was expecting, so he gets so worried. he thought something bad had happened to you, and it takes some time for you to calm down from the crying to explain it was just the k-drama you were watching. he's so relieved that it wasn't anything bad, patting your head gently and kissing you on the cheek.

# SUNGCHAN. - like the good boyfriend he is, he comforts you immediately. wraps his arms around you as he asks you what's wrong, brushing your hair out of your damp face. he continues to comfort you even after you told him you were just touched from the k-drama you were watching, and he watches along with you - because how good could the acting be to make you cry? he found out soon enough when he starts crying too.

# WONBIN. - his heart hurts to see you cry, and he knows it's because of how personal the k-drama's final scenes were with your own past. he treats you like you're made of glass for the rest of the day, ordering your favorite foods for you and keeping you warm in the comfort of his embrace, soft kisses and whispers of "it's okay" and "i love you" mumbled.

# SEUNGHAN. - you scared the living daylights out of him when he comes home to see you in tears, but he understands when you tell him your favorite character died in the k-drama you were watching. he wraps an arm comfortingly around your waist as you rest your head on his chest, sniffling as you continued watching while he played with your hair and rubbed your back gently.

# SOHEE. - don't get him wrong, he loves you to bits. but seeing you cry over a k-drama is just too funny for him. he can't help but burst out into laughter at your snot-covered nose, cooing at you and calling you his precious crybaby as he gently wipes your tears (and snot) away. he'll whisper a "it's just a k-drama, hm? don't let it get to you too much." as he presses a quick kiss to your cheek, followed by him ruffling your hair.

# ANTON. - this could go two ways: he laughs like sohee, or he feels sad like wonbin. unfortunately for you, he follows sohee's footsteps this time round. "don't cry, it's just a k-drama!" he chuckles, wiping your tears away. your attempt to justify about how it isn't just a k-drama is cut short when he slips his phone out and takes a 0.5x photo of you - because why not? you have to whack him (affectionately) with pillows to get him to delete it.

© anton-luvr, 2023.

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[writingquestionsanswered]

What's "Filler" vs What's Relevant

Anonymous asked: How do you know when something is “filler” that needs to be deleted, or if it can be kept? I often see advice saying "your characters should talk about nothing but the plot... no frivolous banter or silly arguments, because it's useless, self-indulgent, filler-fluff." But then I watch or see things and it's like, hm... there sure are a lot of things happening here that aren't plot relevant, yet the audience adores it. For example, in a popular episode of Avatar: The Last Airbender, called "The Tales of Ba Sing Se," nothing relevant to the main plot (stopping Fire Lord Ozai) happens. Instead, characters shop and go to a spa, rebuild a zoo, and go on a date. Part of the episode is even dedicated to one character's running off after having a nightmare. Nothing that we learn or that happens in the episode is ever relevant again as far as I recall, yet 19 years later, people still talk about how much they love that episode. So, I’m really confused as to what counts as useless filler/fluff vs what's important information. How do you tell the difference?

[Ask edited for length...]

First, it's important to note that a Nickelodeon cartoon from twenty years ago is not a great measuring stick for how to write fiction in 2024. ATLA, from what I've heard, is an amazing TV show, full of heart and top-notch character development. But it was also a cartoon created for and written to be enjoyed by children as young as age seven (the low end of Nickelodeon's demographic at the time), so it was following different guidelines from what you'd be following if you're trying to write a short story, novella, or book.

Case in point, the ATLA episode "The Tales of Ba Sing Se" is what's known in television as a "vignette," which uses short, self-contained stories unified by concept and theme to explore character relationships, growth, world-building, and to expand on themes that are important to the overall story. So, while the episode may not have contained plot-relevant elements, as get a glimpse into the minutiae of the characters' daily lives in Ba Sing Se, the characters and their relationships are still pushed forward, even if in only the tiniest ways.

And, again, this is a TV show with 61 episodes, not a short story, novel, or book, all of which are structured differently than a TV show.

On the Subject of "Fluff"

I want to be clear about the fact that if you're writing fan-fiction, fluff is just fine. And even if you're writing original fiction, you can get away with a little bit of fluff... you just need to be clever about it...

Filler, Fluff, or Relevant?

If something is absolutely necessary to move the story forward or understand it, it's plot relevant.

If something doesn't move the story forward and isn't critical to the reader's understanding of the story, but it helps them understand the characters or world in a way they didn't before, it's probably fluff that's been dressed up in a plot relevant costume. (That's the "you need to be clever about it" bit from above, which we'll get to in a second...)

If something isn't necessary to move the story forward or understand it, and it doesn't add anything to the reader's understanding of the characters or world, it's filler. It's just words on a page that serve no purpose, and it should be cut.

On the Subject of "Moving the Story Forward"

To clarify, in case anyone is wondering, "moving the story forward" means advancing the plot from one scene to the next scene. In other words, to use The Hunger Games as an example, Prim's name being drawn in the Reaping moves the story forward, because it forces Katniss to volunteer in her place. It moves the story from Katniss being a bystander at the Reaping to being a tribute. Another example, using Twilight, when Tyler's van skids into the parking lot and almost smashed into Bella, it forces Edward to use his otherworldly vampire strength to save her, which confirms in her mind that he's not human. It moves the story from Bella being curious about this weird boy at school to realizing he is something else and wanting to know more.

Dressing Up Fluff to Make it Relevant

Let's say you're writing a story about a young woman who stayed in her small town and went to community college while her high school besties went off to a college she couldn't afford, and now they've returned and she's trying to maintain these important friendships while struggling with feelings of resentment, jealousy, and feeling left behind.

Now, let's also say you have an idea for a really cute scene where your protagonist and one of these friends goes to a museum together for an afternoon. And as it stands, nothing plot relevant happens in this scene and it doesn't add anything to the reader's understanding of the characters or world. It's just something silly and fun you think would be cute in your story. How can you turn it from fluff to relevant?

To start with, look at your character's internal conflict... wanting to maintain the friendship while struggling with jealousy and feeling left behind. What could happen in the museum that could play on that? Maybe they stop in front of a reproduction of the Venus de Milo and the friend starts talking about the semester abroad she and the other friends did in Paris. This is a perfect place to explore the protagonist's feelings of jealousy and being left behind. If the character talks about her thoughts and feelings in that moment, either inside her head or with the friend, it gives you a chance to expand upon these feelings, explore why they're happening, and even to add further conflict. Maybe she confronts the friend and it doesn't go over well. Or, maybe she lies about something to feel better about herself, and that creates problems later.

Another option would be to look at the next plot point that needs to happen. Is there some way this scene can be used as a stepping stone between two existing scenes? Could something be added to this scene that raises the stakes or or makes the next scene more interesting?

While I'm sure there are some scenes you just can't make relevant no matter how hard you try, usually you can find a way if you just take the time to brainstorm and try out different ideas.

One Last Note...

On the rare occasion you end up with a fluff scene that has no relevance and can't be made to have relevance no matter how hard you try, write it anyway. Then, take it out, save it someplace safe, and hang onto it. These kinds of stories make GREAT incentives for things like newsletter sign-ups, subscription perks, web site bonuses, etc.

I hope that helps! ♥

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[aithusarosekiller]

Deleted scene from ootp

Harry: hey, Sirius, apparently my mum had a girlfriend before she got with my dad, is that true?

Sirius: hm? Oh yeah, Pandora...she was nice. Do you have any questions about that?

Harry: oh I'm not homophobic or anything. Actually, out of curiosity, was anyone else in your year queer?

Sirius: Quite a few actually. Me, Lily, Remus, Pandora, Peter...then our friends Marlene, Mary, Dorcas, Neville's parents. There was also my brother, that weirdo who tried to kill you last year-

Harry: Woah, looks like my dad was the only one who wasn't gay, haha

Sirius, eye twitching: ...yeah! Hahahahahaha....

Remus: ......hahaha

Regulus' ghost in the doorway: JAMES? STRAIGHT? THAT IS THE FUNNIEST SHIT I HAVE EVER HEARD!

Sirius: eye twitching even harder