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GhostF*ckers and Why I fell out of interest for Helluva Boss - End of Helluva Boss Rewrites

Lately I have fell out of interest with the show for a long while but watching 'GhostF*ckers' just further confirms that I do not care for this story anymore. The Stolitz plotline was loathsome, the execution of the conflict between Millie and Blitzo felt too hollow and tbh, felt more like something from a kid show than an adult show to me. Millie, while it's nice that they attempted to give her more character, it's still a bit disappointing that she's still serves to support Blitzo throughout the episode and the most damaging of the writing is: Time. This episode was just bad at managing it's time that despite being 30 minutes, the conflict felt rushed and too fast-paced. Instead of letting itself breathe in order for the audience to immerse themselves in it before the final payoff, helluva instead rushes straight to finishing it. Thus, resulting how this show lost me. And I'm getting the feeling that the show will continue to lose me further and further that it will become unwatchable (and this episode was already unwatchable to an extent.) so because of that, this would be the end of Helluva Boss Rewrites. I'm glad people like my rewrites and I'm sorry that it won't be around anymore. I cannot force myself to rewrite scenes that I do not care about, scenes from a show and story that strays me away from it further. It wouldn't just affect me, but also my writing because how can your rewrites not fall on a decline eventually like this show's writing if you can't be interested in it any longer? I figure that I should inform all of you now rather than do it later.

I wouldn't do any rewrites for this show anymore although I would like to post about my own writing and stories exclusive to helluva if anyone is interested (maybe even stories inspired by helluva to an extent) idk from here or another account though.

To send off this end of rewrites, I would like to reccommend shows that are either adult shows, indie shows or resemble helluva boss to an extent. While I haven't kept up with much media with my forgetfulness and education, I still have a list that I hope you'd be interested:

Black Lagoon - A businessman got kidnapped by a gang of pirates and now after being written off dead by his boss, he joins the gang and their escapades. If you like action especially with guns, this show is definitely for you. It has an interesting premise, great action scenes and has interesting conflicts so far. I haven't completed the series yet but so far, it's pretty good.

Arcane - I know it's a popular recommendation for adult animated media but it is REALLY good in how it's written with fantastic animation plus s2 just came out this month. Give it a watch. Plus caitlyn x vi are a well-written version of social class that stolitz failed to acknowledged or try to do.

Michiko and Hatchin - A woman attempts to find her lover with a young girl, Hatchin, she took from her adopted home as she's the daughter of her lover. If you had issues with how helluva writes women, this show would be great for you as it not only aims at adult women but the women characters themselves are developed rawly throughout the show. It's a very underated anime, I recommend giving it a watch.

TADC (The amazing digital circus) - Another popular recommendation but it's a dark comedy that manages to balance it's comedic and emotional moments well alongside having a clear identity that works for itself.

Smiling friends - If you want an office animated adult comedy, this one would be great for you too. While it's not a dark comedy, it's absurdist comedy is still hilarious to watch and both seasons are relatively short for you to complete.

I wanna eat your guts/Shockwave animation - IWEYG is an animated show of 18 year old high schoolers who tried to explore their lives as teens and legal adults at the same time during the 2000s. It's not out yet but the premise and artstyle resembles 90s cartoons which could be appealing if your interested (like me). Even if it's not, Shockwave animation is an upcoming indie animated studio that's already got a couple of projects under their belt. Please go visit their website and support them whenever you can. There might be projects you would be interested in.

I also apologise for not answering anons or asks. It's partially due to forgetfullness and school life. If you like to send me any complaints regarding helluva or rewrite ideas, I would try to answer back when I can but keep in mind that I'm currently busy with my education so it would take a lot more longer.

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Apology Tour Rewrite - The Confrontation Part 2

This is after Verosika confronts Blitzo in how his actions hurt her. She doesn't forgive him per say (especially when there's no apology) but their finally able to come to mutual terms with each other due to Blitzo now giving her a sense of closure.

Part 1 is here

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Apology Tour Rewrite - The Confrontation Part 1

Apology Tour could've been good if stolas wasn't apart of it. So this rewrite doesn't include him. Instead it's only blitzo apologizing to the people he's hurt in order make his optics look good for work since he now doesn't have access to stolas's book to rely on anymore and is of need for someone to trade him the Asmodeus crystals. However, he doesn't gain any and instead, gains genuine accountability for his own actions.

Part 2 will be out soon.

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When will you be doing a rewrite of Apology Tour?

Yes! I'm just too busy with assessments at the moment. Though, I will make one tommorow cuz i got the free time to.

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Link to my user page so you can check out my work "Helluva Boss: Chaos Reborn"

Thank you anon!

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You're rewrite of HB seems interesting, personally have you ever considered/had any issues with the way Blitz's burn scars are portrayed because I ended up rewriting them to this:

His skin is a deep red-amaranth shade marked by a network of burn scars. These scars range from pale pink to darker hues of pink/purple, red, and brown, covering most of his left shoulder, a small part of his right shoulder, and extending down his left arm. The burns on his left arm transition into darker patterns that continue onto his tail, where they blend with the natural maroon or burgundy color of the rest of his tail as well as his left hand. His facial features also display burn scars, with a large section appearing very pale-grayish pink. One eye always seems half-lidded, while the other is fully open, and his skin looks slightly shrunken. The lower half of his right arm, past the elbow, shows a darker maroon, wine-red hue with some dark spots as well. The right side of Blitzo's face seems a bit shrunken, with crooked lips, and teeth that have healed better compared to fifteen years ago. Some patches of those burns appear on his legs as well. The tip of his tail has an added black heart tip. His burn scars have a non-uniform and jagged star-shaped edge rather than perfectly round shapes and are third-degree burns but not as bad as Fizzarolli's burns, although the latter had been under Mammon's care. Because of the fire, he also has a slight vision impairment which was fixed eventually.

What do you think, I always like people having their own takes on HB, I like the show but it has many many flaws...

That's a very interesting and insightful portrayal of bltzo's scars anon! Personally, i never really paid attention to how his scars was portrayed though I do understand if you find issues with it (especially when it seems more like part of his natural skin than scars itself) I also agree that the show definitely has many flaws, especially with how they write relationships. The latest episode's ending is a great example of how their endgoal of shipping blitzo and stolas negatively affect the writing to contrived drama between the two. I'd be interested in more of your rewrite ideas!

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Full Moon Rewrite - The End

A conflicting moment of freedom.

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Happy pride month

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TW: Mentions of Leaks & Serious and Sensitive Topics (ex. abuse, suicide, trauma, ptsd, etc) (apologizes for not putting this in my first ask to you; I didn't notice this mistake until after I read your reply; my bad 😅)

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Hey. Thank you so much for your response on my first ask to you. I really appreciate both that and your feedback on my idea on how I'd rewrite the leaked "Ghostfuckers" episode and the character of Ronaldo. Plus, I also like your idea on how his "reverse therapist ghost" shtick could've worked with him being a sinner who gained these powers after entering hell (which I like since the idea that sinners could develop powers after they enter hell is very interesting) and one that Blitz might've killed and never forgot about. And all without breaking the lore of the show. Not to mention I also agree that his design is smoky and ugly, plus his name for a supposedly intimidating villain is dumb and super lame (like, it sounds like the name that'd be of a gangster, mobster, someone from the 1980s, or a goofy/joke villain; not a villain that's supposed to be intimidating).

Aside from all that, I also loved the part where you mentioned that you allow people to share their ideas & stories with you and that you're a big writing dork. I say this because 1, I'm also a big writing dork myself, and 2, I love sharing my ideas and stories with other people.

I have a Helluva Boss rewrite that I have in development called Helluva Boss Reimagined (though I do plan on changing the project's name in the future; I just have yet to figure it out), where I reimagine the series (from rewriting episodes (be it a major, partial, or minor rewrite), creating new/fan episodes, redesign some of the characters (incl. the main cast, Stolas, Stella, Octavia, The Seven Deadly Sins (incl. Lucifer from Hazbin Hotel), Striker, Fizzarolli, Crimson, Sallie May, and many more), and integrate my HB OCs/Sonas into my HB reimagine as if they were canon characters in the show itself, as while I do like the show, I sadly have to agree that it's kind of a mess and it needs a lot of work (especially in the writing department), so that's where my reimagine comes in: to help the show reach the potential the canon is sadly falling short on.

I should note though that my reimagine is in no way shape or form an insult or disrespect towards Viv, Brandon, and the people working on Helluva Boss, nor am I claiming myself or my reimagine to be better and superior than them and the show itself. This is simply made not only for fun and entertainment purposes, but also to challenge my writing skills and me as an aspiring writer. Even with all the show's faults, I hold nothing but respect for Viv and everyone working on HB for being able to create something that people can not only watch for free, but also inspire them to potentially wanting to create a project of their own (be it a show, movie, comic, etc).

With all that said, IT'S REIMAGINE TIME!!! 🎨📔✍🏻🌈✨

-For starters, my reimagine of HB will the series be a mix of I.M.P. assassin missions and other plot lines. Like I don't mind there being other plot lines going on as I agree with some fans that just episodes of I.M.P. doing their job (despite that being the premise of the show) would get pretty boring after awhile and adding other plotlines to the series would spice things up (though, of course, that all comes down to the execution and how it's handled). But this idea definitely could've had much better execution, especially with where the series is at this point in time. So that's where my reimagine comes in with this idea. There will still be other plot points going on the side (ex. the Ars Goetia, Blitz being a victim to Stolas (making Stolitz toxic like the pilot originally intended and having both the show and characters actually acknowledge how toxic Stolitz is; though I'll also note that there will be no sexualizing or romanticizing SA & sex-trafficking, nor will there be any victim blaming either), backstories for the characters (incl. the main cast), the D.H.O.R.K.S. organization, C.H.E.R.U.B. & their rivalry with I.M.P., etc), but my reimagine will be a balance of I.M.P. doing their job and going on missions to earth + having other plot points occurring on the side without detaching itself from its original premise).

-The pilot will be canon to this series, as I have it planned to be the official start to the series instead of "Murder Family" (which in my reimagine, is the second episode of Season 1 instead of the first). However, I plan on largely rewriting it to both focus on the aspect of the I.M.P. business struggling and also be an introduction to the characters and their world.

-Seasons 1 & 2 will have 13 episodes each as a way to not only flesh out the characters, but also flesh out the world of Viv's version of hell as well, especially since it fits in with HB being a spinoff of HH and showcasing hell's other Rings besides Pride, since Hazbin itself takes place in the Pride Ring and that there's also the thing about sinners being stuck in the aforementioned ring and not being able to travel to other rings (though in my reimagine of Hazbin Hotel, I plan on removing that rule, changing it so that sinners can now travel to other rings and aren't stuck in Pride; plus, I feel like this idea could possibly explain all the hospitals, rehabs, money, and other earth stuff Viv's hell has thanks to the human sinners coming down and sharing their earthly stuff with the citizens of hell (though I should note that there will be no mafia or law enforcement system, as it's not only confusing, but also kinda dumb that it's there just for the sake of the plot of Season 2's "Exes and Oohs"); the yearly hell extermination would now be around all of Hell (incl. the other rings, not just pride); though it's possible this idea of mine might change in the future, as I feel like there's things that could be either done better or the idea itself is removed entirely). I say Seasons 1 & 2 since Seasons 3 & 4 have yet to have confirmed episode counts at this point in time. For Season 1, I wish there were more than just 8 episodes so that things could have a moment to breathe, and as for Season 2, while I do like that they upped the episode count to 12 (not trying to sound ungrateful or anything), I kinda wished they added an additional 13th episode to have an even episode count. Idk if it's just me, but I personally prefer having a certain number episode count (ex. 13 episode count, 30 episode count, etc), especially when I do my own projects.

-The main cast will still consist of BlitzØ, Moxxie, Millie, and Loona. However, there's going to be a couple changes to the cast, as now there will be two new characters (AKA a couple of my HB OCs) added to the main cast: Alice Lola and an Unnamed Envy Ring Demon OC.

Here are the summaries for them (though side note: there's a chance that some things about them may or not change about them once the official reimagine comes out).

Alice Lola (Ally for short): A 24-year-old Pride/Wrath Imp who works as an assassin at I.M.P. and is an aspiring writer. She is Millie's childhood best friend who moved back to the Pride Ring (as she spent a small part of her childhood in pride before moving to the Wrath Ring for reasons I have yet to figure out (I'm thinking about the reason being her dad got a new job at Satan's gym, be it as a gym trainer or an assistant manager) where she spent most of her life before moving back to Pride) in hopes of becoming a famous writer, inspired by the likes of her mother, who is a famous author, and works at I.M.P. to help support herself. She has pride heritage from her mom and wrath heritage from her dad. She is known as (as Viv tried to describe Millie in her Millie defense thread she made in March 2023, but sadly fails due to it not being translated well within the show itself) the heart and soul of the team. Aside from her job at I.M.P., she's also working on a book series that she'd love to publish someday, but it's established my version of HB's Pilot that this book series of hers is in the concept stages of development. (Fun Fact: I named her after Alice Ackerman and her FreeGirlsLive camgirl name "Lola_Lola" from Netflix's Cam)

Envy Demon OC: I'm still foggy on the details regarding him (ex. name, history, relationships with the other characters, what sea creature he'd resemble (I'm thinking about possibly making him resemble a Blue Glaucus, but I'm still thinking about it at this point in time), etc), but I do know six things about him so far:

-He's I.M.P.'s new receptionist (as in my AU, Loona is now I.M.P.'s bodyguard, but that's a story for another day when I talk about my reimagines of the main cast; though I will say that another thing in my AU is that EDOC is the new keeper of the grimoire, as he is the only member of I.M.P. who has read the it and knows how to use it; additionally, since EDOC is the new receptionist, he would keep the grimoire with him at I.M.P. and open it whenever Blitz calls him to help him and the gang get back to hell).

-He has the power of reading mastery (which is basically the ability to speed read and also has the user absorb and remember the knowledge they've gained; I'm thinking maybe he was given this power by Leviathan (maybe even possibly having a second job of working for Levi himself or somewhere in hell's hierarchy aside from his job at I.M.P.), but idk if I'll go through with these ideas or not).

-He loves organizing & keeping track of things.

-He's a neat freak & a bookworm.

-Possibly has a British accent.

-Has high knowledge of hell's hierarchy and class system (though I won't have him be a character who's there just to deliver exposition to both the characters and the audience; trust me, I hate it when characters (especially ones I like) are treated like that, when I know they are so much more than that, but the writing does them a massive disservice and I feel like they deserve better than just following the 'Mr./Ms. Exposition' trope).

But I thought it'd be cool to not only see other demons from other ring (in this case Envy), but also add more diversity (species-wise) to the main cast outside of Loona, who is a hellhound.

As for their relationships with the main cast, like I mentioned, I'm still figuring out EDOC's side of his relationships, but I will share Ally's:

BlitzØ - Boss/Love Interest

Moxxie - Co-Worker/Brother Figure

Millie - Co-Worker/Childhood Best Friend

Loona - Co-Worker/Daughter Figure (sort of)

But yeah, aside from them, there's also other HB OCs integrated, such as Maggie Quinn (my Impsona/HB Self-Insert who is a close friend of Ally, a famous rockstar celebrity, has two pet hell corgis (who btw aren't hellhounds, just devil dogs that look like corgis, inspired by Brady and Graffiti the Corgis on YouTube) and is also Fizzarolli's girlfriend; yes, I know he & Asmodeus are in a relationship, but in my AU, Fizz, Maggie, and Ozzie are in a poly OT3 relationship, with Fizz fucking both Maggie and Ozzie, and whether or not Maggie & Ozzie are also fucking each other as well is something I have yet to figure out; also, just as a friendly fyi, Fizz & Maggie's relationship is public, while Fizz & Ozzie is a secret and both do a much better job at keeping it that way; plus, their OT3 is a healthy one bc I love poly relationships and definitely agree that they deserve better representation in media *looking at you Netflix's Fate: The Winx Saga*), Rainbow (my Cherub OC who is a member of C.H.E.R.U.B., a painter & poet, Collin's love interest, and Ally's heaven counterpart), and Agent Three (my Human OC who is a member of the D.H.O.R.K.S. organization and works alongside Agent One & Agent Two).

-The female characters are given more character and depth than just being accessories/side pieces/plot devices for the male characters (ex. Millie will be more than just Moxxie' wife, Loona will be more than just Blitz's adoptive daughter, Stella & Octavia will be more than just Stolas' wife & daughter, Verosika will be more than just Blitz's ex-girlfriend, Tilla & Moxxie's Unnamed Mother will be more than just the moms of Blitz & Moxxie, Sallie May will be more than just trans representation and merch bait, Barbie Wire will be more than just Blitz's twin sister, etc).

-Harmful stereotypes (including LGBTQ+ ones such as gays being hypersexual) are removed. The same thing applies to my reimagine of Hazbin Hotel as well.

-Characters will have consistent characterizations and development, with said development actually sticking with the characters from the episode they receive it from onward instead of restarting/reverting like nothing happened because of the stupid "status quo rule" a lot of shows tend to suffer from (ex. SpongeBob SquarePants, Winx Club (Seasons 5-8), etc).

-The plot/story, lore, and worldbuilding will be consistent and cohesive, though not in a way that I'm spoon-feeding info to the audience. More like in a natural way (i.e. passing comments and more). Oh, and there will be no breaking the lore or worldbuilding nor having it be inconsistent and/or irrelevant just because the episode and/or show demands it (such as people knowing of Fizz & Ozzie's relationship and Bee & Vortex's relationship; while I do think the writers could make Fizz & Ozzie hid their relationship better (and also make the audience finding out about their relationship less anticlimactic and more serious in Mammon's Musical Mid-Season Special), I (unpopular opinion) don't think Bee & Tex's relationship is public like some fans think it is; I personally think it's secret and that only Verosika, possibly her crew, and Loona know of this relationship between a sin and a hellhound (which I imagine they all agreed not to tell anyone else about), and that Bee & Vortex pass each other of to the citizens of hell (including those in the Gluttony Ring) as close friends; though I do feel like if that were the case, then the writers should've clarified that within the "Queen Bee" episode itself rather than leave it ambiguous as to whether or not people know about it).

-Do less 'Tell Don't Show' and more 'Show Don't Tell', which follows through with my previous note of having consistent & cohesive plot/storytelling, lore, and worldbuilding. And also have stuff Viv and the writers mention on social medias like Twitter & Patreon actually be seen in the show (ex. Moxxie's being a mercenary from wrath, Millie's "characterization", transportation to other rings besides the elevators shown in "Ozzie's", etc). Like I'm sorry, I don't wanna be mean or rude to Viv and the writers of HB (nor do I want to hurt anyone's feelings), but I have to agree with fans that we shouldn't need to go to other sources (in this case social medias like Twitter) to understand the show and it's plot & lore, as not only does it get lost in translation, but that's also bad writing & bad storytelling; not to mention I also agree that if you need to go to other sources to understand the story & writing of your media, then it not only shows your failure as a writer, but also that both your media's writing and your writing in general need a lot of work). One example of this is including the cutaways the pilot originally had but improving them by doing one cutaway at a time and not having another cutaway take place during an already playing cutaway. I did this because (unpopular opinion) I actually love cutaways, as I find them fun and entertaining (especially in Family Guy, most of the time), though I do have to agree that having a cutaway occur during a current cutaway is confusing and does make you question what's going on, hence why I plan on having the cutaways return from the pilot but improved upon to have one cutaway take place at a time.

-Characters actually face consequences for their actions and there will be no 'Karma Houdini' bs pulled on them at all (especially Blitz & Stolas); and I say Blitz & Stolas because a lot of fans complain about them not actually facing consequences for their actions and the show excusing it with them being "soft gay uwu baby boi's", so I thought I'd fix this mistake in my rewrite; and also, because I absolutely despise the 'karma houdini' trope)!

-Blitz, Moxxie, and Millie will have human disguises from the very beginning of the series. Loona will still have her human disguise as well, and even Ally & EDOC will have human disguises too. I'd have the team obtain them through the grimoire once Blitz gets his hands on it via a spell. In addition, I'm also considering on keeping the thing Loona & Verosika mentioned in "Spring Broken" about there being consequences to going to earth without human disguises (like for example, the reason being because Lucifer doesn't want people to know if demons truly exist or not), though idk if I'll go through with this idea or not. Not to mention I also wanna keep the silly disguises they use cuz I like them and think their fun. Hell, even Loona gets in on the costume fun as well.

-Stick to a consistent number of villains & antagonists. Not saying the characters can't face new enemies but have them use and flesh out the ones they already established (such as Stella, Striker, C.H.E.R.U.B., etc) and have the new ones they face either be one-offs or even enemies for other characters to face (ex. Mammon with Fizz & Ozzie). In regards to earth villains, they're usually one offs (with the exception of Ronaldo from the Ghostfuckers leaks, who I have be an enemy for Blitz to face, as I'm slowly considering on using the idea I proposed to you on making him Blitz's "target that got away" from HB's pitch bible for my rewrite), and as for the D.H.O.R.K.S. organization, I was thinking about having them show up later in the series (maybe in Season 3 or 4), with hints, foreshadowing, and buildup throughout Seasons 1 & 2 (and maybe Season 3 if I choose to have them appear in Season 4), ala The Diamonds from Steven Universe. Like have some enemies appear in the beginning of the series, and then introduce new ones later down the line.

-Remove the tonal whiplashes (especially with the increase of them in Season 2), and let serious scenes be serious, while comedic scenes stay comedic.

-Remove the jokes regarding serious & sensitive topics (ex. abuse, suicide, fatphobia, racism & discrimination, the neurodivergent "r word", trauma, ptsd, gaslighting, etc). I also plan on doing this with other reimagines of mine as well, because personally, I absolutely hate it (and I mean hate with a burning passion) when media treats serious & sensitive topics as jokes and/or gags for comedy, let alone handling them so poorly and distastefully, whether it's intentional by the writers or not. It's my #1 least favorite writing choice (tied with characters acting OOC just to make a plot and/or joke work). And no, idk that the characters are either demons from hell or awful human beings from earth, or that their assholes, and I certainly don't care about the "it's hell, what do you expect?" excuse the fandom likes to give. Those aren't excuses nor justifications to treat such topics as jokes for comedy, let alone for the sake of drama, shock value, or "spicy character development". It's not only disgusting, but incredibly distasteful and disrespectful to those who have been through such stuff irl. I also agree with @helluvabossrewrite45 (who btw I highly recommend checking out) in an ask that the show can't pick and choose which 'abuse' is good or bad because they all are bad in their own way. Not to mention I also agree that they should be treated like their bad, even if the characters are demons from hell.

-Integrate biblical lore in the show itself. I decided to do this after being inspired by LovesArt23's video on her reimagining of Leviathan (which btw I highly recommend checking out) and @campbell-rose's post about their Helluva Rewrite w/ Doodles of their version of imps (which I also highly recommend checking out), in which they talked about how important it is to do research. And, as much as I love Viv, I sadly have to agree with both of them, specially LovesArt in her Leviathan Reimagine video. While yes, Hazbin & Helluva are Viv's shows and she's free to do whatever she wants with them, the characters & setting are from pre-existing lore, and she should've at least done research on biblical lore and integrated said biblical lore (or at the very least some of it) into both shows and her version of hell.

-Have the power levels be consistent amongst the characters, including the main cast (specially Moxxie & Millie) and Stolas.

-Remove certain retcons (such as Blitz & Stolas being childhood friends who are "destined" to be together), fix any inconsistencies (such as reverted character development), and fill in plot holes (such as how Barbie Wire was able to obtain an Asmonean Crystal in the first place).

-And last, but certainly not least, plan the reimagine out from beginning to end. I got this idea from @helluvabossrewrite45 who in my first ask to them, recommended to me that I plan my reimagine out so that I don't make the same mistake Viv made on not planning the show out from the get-go, resulting in many of the show's issues such as plotlines being rushed, plot holes, inconsistencies, character development being reverted bc of the "status quo" rule, retcons, certain characters being neglected by the narrative (*cough* Loona *cough*), and many more. This not only helped me with my reimagine of Helluva Boss, but also with other reimagines I have in the pipeline that I'd love to do someday as well. And I owe them a huge thanks for the advice.

And those are my notes for my reimagine of Helluva Boss, with some Hazbin reimagine notes sprinkled into the mix. I know some of the ideas I noted here may not have (or had very little) depth to them, but hey, it was fun to write these ideas down, regardless of them being simple or complex. I hope you enjoyed reading my notes and my rambling. Thank you and have a wonderful day/afternoon/night. 🤗💕❤️🧡💛💚💙💜💖💕🤗

I’m so glad my tumblr is finally letting me answer this one. Thank you for including that adorable hug gif at the end. I miss thé found family we almost had.

Yes! Big writer dork and big fan of any ideas others fans and writers have cause i love to learn from you guys

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You can BOOP ppl!

Artificial BOOP because you don't have it turned on yet!

Thanks anon! Was too busy in school to boop people but thanks.

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Rewrite of ‘The Circus’

Hope y'all enjoy

A young Stolas’s eyes shoot open as he sits up in bed, “ My Birthday! It's my birthday!” The young owl squealed happily as he leaped out of bed before rushing into his dressing room, his imp butler following close behind.

Stolas continued to squeal as he sat as his butler began applying gel to his feathers, smoothing them down.

“Calm yourself, young prince, you wouldn't want me to mess up your feathers on your big day now, would you?” The butler said calmly.

“Oh! Right. Sorry,” The young owl responded, taking a breath to contain his excitement.

The Butler walked off momentarily before returning with Stolas' vest and cape.

“You know Father told me, today is the day, that I am old enough to know my purpose and responsibility!” Stolas said happily as the butler helped dress him.

“Of course I know,” The butler responded before placing Stolas’s crown on his head “I'm sure it will be wonderful.”

Stolas happily followed the butler out of the dressing room down a large hallway. The walls are lined with giant pictures of himself, from when he was an egg right up until now.

The butler pushed on the large double doors at the end of the hall, opening to reveal a throne room. There sat Paimon, Stolas' father and King of the Ars Goetia, in a monstrous black form. As he stood up, his form shifted to display something more bird-like. The butler quickened his pace to stand next to him as Stolas approached his father.

“Ahhhh! There is my little, ah… Stolas!” Paimon smiled, greeting his gleeful son. Paimon leaned downward toward Stolas, slightly surprising the boy. “Ahem,” Paimon coughed, clearing his throat. “Now then, my little fledgling,” Paimon said as he began to circle his son. “It is finally your day to become a true part of the Goetia family. Are you ready to know what you'll be meant to do to serve Hell?”

“Yes, Father!” Stolas responded confidently.

Paimon then opened a small portal to the cosmos as he spoke, giving Stolas a glimpse of the stars.

“You will be entrusted with the study of the Earth's skies, stars, and the prophecies they hold!” He continued as he pulled an enchanting book out of the portal.

“You will begin the studies of your grimoire, which will grant you access to the mortal realm to study and observe, you will grow to be a mighty Prince of Hell, with your own legions to lead and pass on your knowledge to!” Paimon exclaimed grabbing Stolas off the ground, holding the grimoire under his arm

“I will do my best, Father!” Stolas said bursting with excitement.

Paimon pulled him close into his arms and handed him his grimoire. “Wonderful! Oh, and one more thing; because you are destined to sire a precautionary addition to the Goetia family. You're now engaged!”

Stolas blinked in surprise. “Engaged? To who?” Stolas asked, cocking his head to the side.

Paimon bent down a bit as the imp butler handed him a yellow envelope. “To a lovely little peacock named Stella! Isn't she charming?” Paimon responded by pulling a picture out of the envelope.

Stolas’s eyes widened as he stared at the picture. Her feathers were in a wild mess as she angrily strangled a Quieve, fiery fury blazing in her eyes. In the background he could see the curtains were on fire, the flames oddly pink.

Stolas began to loudly wail, snapping his head away from the picture in fear.

Paimon stared at him with a look of surprised confusion painted on his face, before looking at the photo himself, that is. He let out a yelp himself before he began digging in the envelope.

“Oops! Haha, wrong photo! Here I'm sure you’ll think this one is nicer?!” Paimon said with a nervous laugh as he tried to show Stolas a nicer picture of Stella sitting with a cute smile, her feathers in a much better state, with not a Quieve in sight.

Stolas continued to cry, “ Ah, come on son calm down! We’re supposed to meet her today…” Paimon sighed as he wiped away his son's tears.

Stolas only gave a sniffle and a whimper in response. As tears silently rolled down his cheek.

—-----

Black horses raced down a path pulling an equally dark carriage, Stolas sat quietly next to his father staring down at his talons.

His father looked down at him before lightly rubbing the feathers atop his head. “Just… be nice to her okay?” The large owl said with a smile in the softest voice he could muster.

“.....Yes Father,” The small prince responded quietly, without lifting his head.

The two sat quietly, the clopping of hooves racing across the road being the only thing that dared cut through their silence.

Soon the noise began to slow as they reached their destination, the carriage door opening allowing the two to exit. A beautiful large white castle stood before them, Stolas marveled at the flowers that lined the entrances a mix of blue and red. The butler knocked and the door opened, and greeting them was an Imp maid.

“Ah, I was told to expect you! Please come inside!” She said with a curtsy as she led them into the palace. Soon enough they came to a hall where there sat two peacocks and another that looked a bit older than Stolas.

“Ah, Paimon, I was wondering when you would arrive.” The male peacock said with a bow. “Well, weather as nice as this I would have taken my time too!” The lady peacock next to him said with a giggle and a curtsy.

“Yes, it is a nice afternoon isn't it Isabelle?” Paimon responded with a bow of his own. As he stood up straight he looked over, noticing the small blue peacock next to them. “Ah, and you must be Andrephuleus, my future son-in-law, correct? Hmph you take after your mother don't you?” Paimon said with a hum, the only response the small peacock gave was an icy cold glare.

“He truly does, but at least I got some of my genes in Stella!” The male peacock said with a small laugh leading everyone else in the room to quietly chuckle along with him.

“Hmph yes I can tell, but speaking of Stella I can’t help but notice she isn’t here,” Paimon asked,

“Oh, well she wanted to make sure that she looked her very best for her fiance even if it meant risking a bit of tardiness, I do hope you don’t mind.” The man responded with a sigh.

“Oh, not at all Alexander, first impressions are quite important after all!” Paimon smiled as he took a seat at the table.

Stolas looked over to Andrealphus, “Um, hello my name's Stolas! It’s nice to meet you!” he said nervously.

“Ugh, I already know that! You're marrying my sister after all!” Andrealuphus said slyly.

“I-i uh,” Stolas shifted as Andrealuphus chuckled watching the smaller squirm.

“Ah, speaking of Stella, ooh~ there she is!” Isabella exclaimed as she stood, everyone's gaze turned towards the stairs as Stella walked down. Stolas stared at her, she was admittedly quite pretty, her feathers brushed down nicely in her light pink dress and silky white gloves, with a small simple gold crown sat atop her head, one the same as his. To be honest, Stolas thought she was quite cute, that is until the image of her strangling that Quieve flashed through his mind, he shivered.

“Ah, you must be Stella! Aren't you just a doll!” Paimon said as the girl came closer.

“Thank you Mr. Paimon!” She giggled as she curtsied.

“Oh, you look lovely dear!” Her mother marveled

“Come on now Stolas, say hi to your fiance!” Paimon said calling Stolas to his side, Stolas could feel a pit in his stomach but he went.

“Ah, I’m Stolas! It's nice to meet you Stella, I like your dress!” Stolas said, bowing as she greeted her, she giggled at his compliment.

“Alright, now that everyone's here, mind telling us where you planned to take the children?” Isabella said, clasping her hands.

Paimon blinked in confusion, “Um, I thought you had made the plans for them?” Paimon said, staring at her bewildered.

“Isabella, I thought you had everything ready?” Alexander said lightly gritting his teeth.

“What!? Since when has planning anything been up to me ?!” Isabella responded hotly.

“So you're telling me neither of you have anything planned for this afternoon?!” Paimon groaned

“Ugh, it seems so… I sincerely apologize for this inconvenience, but I’m sure we can come up with something!” Alexander said with a shaky sigh.

The three children stood quietly as their parents did their best to come up with something last minute. After a moment Stolas came up with a suggestion, “Uh, maybe we could go to the circus?” Stolas said

Everyone paused, “The circus? For a first date?” Alexander said doubtfully

“Well, I mean that’s not a terrible idea but, I don’t know if Stella would be interested in a place like that,” Isabella said skeptically,

“What kind of plebian goes to the circus? For a first date at that!” Andrealphus said quite enough for only Stolas to hear. Paimon made a ‘hmph’ sound with no further comment.

Stolas shifted under the pressure of their comments.”Um, well I’ve never actually been to a circus, but it sounds like it would be a lot of fun! Especially with someone like Stolas to lead the way for me!” Stella chimed in with an innocent look.

“Mph, I don't know…” Alexander said

“Come on love, I don’t see the harm in it! Plus it's like we’re coming up with any bright ideas!” Isabella said with a breathy laugh.

“Oh alright,” Alexander responded with a sigh

Paimon clasped his hands, “Well then if we’re all in agreement, then I guess the circus it is!”

“But I don’t want to go to the circus!” Andreluphus chimed in, Paimon furrowed his brow “I'm sorry, who said you were going with them?” Paimon said annoyance clear as glass in his tone.

“What- I obviously can’t let her go alone with him! She’s my sister after all!” Andrelphus pouted, puffing up his tail feathers.

“Calm down son, we’re not sending them alone obviously they’ll have imps with them. Plus you think we’d marry your sister to some ruffian?” Alexander asked

Andrealphus pouted, as Stolas sighed happily knowing they would be without him.

—-----

Stolas squealed as they arrived at the circus, “This is going to be so much fun!” He yelled

“Mmph, this place smells like candy even from here!” Stella said as she hopped out of the carriage, Stolas jumped at her voice but she seemingly paid no mind.

As they entered the two imps stopped them momentarily, “Alrighty, now listen here you two, I know this is a circus and I know y'all wanna have fun and you two probably outrun us a bit! But try not to get too far so you don’t get lost ok?” The imp maid that had greeted Stolas and his father, said softly.

“Yes ma’am, we will,” Stella said, rolling her eyes, she turned around making her way into the circus with Stolas following close by her.

“I swear, I ran off one time and now I doubt I’ll ever hear the end of it! It’s so annoying!” She huffed

“Uh yeah, that um sounds annoying…” Stolas responded quietly

“Hmph, glad we agree! Now come on, I've always wanted to try carnival games!” Stella cheered excitedly as she walked through the crowd.

The two ventured through the carnival, playing different games, going on different rides, and eating food with enough sugar to give a small imp diabetes, soon they stopped for ice cream.

“Alright chocolate for Stolas, and strawberry for Stella, give this to her will you?” The butler asked he handed Stolas both icecreams,

“Oh, uh here you go Stella,” Stolas said as he tried to hand her her ice cream, but his hand faltered instead dropping it on her dress before it fell to the ground.

Stolas froze as he looked up at her watching her eyes begin to well with tears, “Oh honey, it's alright we’ll get you another one, with two big scoops!” Her maid said, trying to comfort her.

She began to tremble as Stolas tried to apologize, “I-I’m so sorry Stella, here I’ll help clean your dress off!” Stolas said shakily as she grabbed a towel to try to wipe off the ice cream staining her dress.

Stella smacked his hand away as she burst into tears, “This is the worst date ever!” She cried as she ran off into the crowd, her maid called out to her as she ran to go get the girl herself.

“Oh Lucifer, Stolas stay here please while I go get them okay!” Stolas’s butler said running off after the two before Stolas could fully process what happened.

Stolas sat on a bench near the ice cream van for a moment not even noticing he had dropped his own ice cream in Stella’s fit.

“First day meeting her and I get ice cream all over her! Father is going to kill me, or worse he takes away my grimoire!” Stolas whined to himself, and then he had an idea, “Oh! maybe if I go find her myself I won’t be in trouble!” Stolas nodded to himself as hoped of the bench entering the crowd.

Stolas walked through the crowd, his small size making it easy to get through the many people. However, it also meant he couldn't really see where he was going, unfortunately, he only realized this as he came to the back part of the circus. He walked nervously, the area was fairly empty as the circus was in its prime hours so most of its actors were busy.

He sighed to himself as he came to a wooden fence at the very back of the carnival, “Great, not only am I lost, but I’m going to be in so much trouble when I get back!” Stolas whined, but before he could turn around he heard something, it sounded like crying.

Stolas’s eyes flicked back and forth between the fence and the path, he then sighed and went closer to the fence, he came all this way after all. He squeezed himself through the fence and walked through the bushes. Soon he found the source of the noise, Stella, hugging her knees on the ground sobbing to herself.

“Stella! There you are, people are looking for you y’know !” Stolas shouted as he ran toward her. Stella smacked his hand away, “Go away, you’ve already ruined today!” She yelled as Stolas fell on his bottom.

Stolas sat there for a moment unsure what to do, he decided that the best thing to do was apologize first and foremost.

He took a deep breath before scooting a bit closer to her, “Listen, Stella, I’m really sorry about your ice cream and your dress, it was an accident honestly!” He said

“Oh please Stolas, do you think I’m stupid?!” Stella shouted

“What no I don’t-”

“I mean seriously after everything else you’ve done you really think

I’d believe that you dropped ice cream on by accident, puh-lease!” Stella huffed, turning away from him.

Stolas tilted his head confused, “W-what other stuff?” He asked cautiously,

Stella grumbled “Ugh, it’s like you're being stupid on purpose! Seriously, how don't you remember bumping into me and then stealing my duck in that fishing game or letting that tent flap hit my face when we went to see that magician?! You don’t remember any of that?!” Stella huffed as she poked his chest with her gloved finger.

Stolas paused for a moment thinking about the adventure, sure he remembered winning the fishing game and seeing the magician, and he supposed he had bumped into once or twice but everything else was lost on him.

“Well?!” Stella huffed, snapping Stolas out of his thoughts, he looked her right in the eyes as she made the same angry face she had in her picture. But he knew he couldn't just stay frozen now so he swallowed down the lump in his throat

“Uh, well I guess I remember bumping into o-once or twice but, I don’t remember anything else, any of that other stuff… ” Stolas responded, his voice quivering.

Stella huffed again as she pulled her hand away from his chest, “Well even if you don’t remember it, it still happened and all of that isn't even mentioning how you've barely looked me in the eye! I mean this is the first time we’ve met and yet every time you look at me it’s like you've seen a ghost! So explain that why don’t you!” Stella said crossing her arm across her chest while pouting,

Stolas took a deep breath deciding to tell her the truth, he was already going to be in another world of trouble when they finally got back so why not, he looked down and sighed before saying “Well it’s because of that picture your parents sent with you strangled that Quive, it uh didn’t exactly give you the best first impression.” Stolas said, looking up at her while twiddling his fingers.

Stella stared gobsmacked at him, the anger all but robbed from her face. She blinked a couple of times before she began to speak, “W-what, how did you even see that? They told me they’d thrown it out, it shouldn't have even gotten developed! A-and I didn’t even mean to do it!” Stella said in a panicked frenzy, grabbing onto her feathers.

“Wait what? What do you mean you didn't mean to do it? How do you accidentally strangle something?” Stolas said still lightly cautious of his words

Stella took a deep breath to calm herself down, “Okay maybe accidentally isn't the best way to put it…” She started, “You see when I was taking those pictures to send to your daddy my mum brought in those quives, something about them looking good with my palette or whatever.” She continued rolling her eyes. “And then out of nowhere, one of them bit me right before the photographer snapped a photo! I even have this bite to prove it!” Stella huffed pulling off her glove revealing what looked to be a deep bite mark, and Stolas blinked in a bit of shock.

“Oh my, that looks terrible, it must've hurt…” Stolas said as look at the nasty gash on her hand.

“Pft, you're telling me!” Stella huffed pulling her hand away and tugging her glove back onto her hand.

The two sat there quietly; the only noise to be heard was the rustling of leaves blowing in the wind.

Stolas sighed again as he looked up at her, “Uh, again I’m sorry for being rude to you and stuff I guess I shouldn't have judged you,” Stolas said scooting a bit closer to her.

Stella sighed “It’s fine I guess, I suppose I wouldn't be the nicest to someone if I saw them do something like that…” Stella responded, Stolas could feel her hand brushing up against his he lightly jumped at her touch. But after a second he put his hand back letting her grab a hold of it.

The two sat there quietly letting the wind blow through their feathers, both enjoying the tranquility of the moment, well loud yelling of both their names came about.

They both jumped away from each other as their impish servant came through the greenery.

“Stolas, Stella! We’ve been looking for you for ages!” The maid screeched

“We were this close to calling the royal guard to come find you! We are leaving this carnival this instant!” The butler groaned his usual monotone tone tainted with annoyance

The two were quickly pulled out of the bushes and dragged out while their servants scolded them. Soon Stolas looked up and saw a large tent,

“Oh, Mister Butler, can we please just do one more thing?!” Stolas begged planting his talons in the ground and forcing the butler to pause,

Both Stella and her maid also stopped watching the two, “After the stress you put both of us through today you think either of you two deserve ‘one more thing’?” The butler asked, turning toward the young prince.

“I know I’m sorry, but please just let us do this one thing and I promise we’ll leave right after!” Stolas begged, the butler grumbled turning toward the maid, she sighed and rolled her eyes before nodding her head.

The butler pinched the bridge of his nose with a sigh, “Fine, one more thing”. Stolas as he went over to grab Stella’s hand pulling her toward the circus tent.

“Uh, why are we here, it looks like we’ve missed half the show by now,” Stella asked as Stolas sat them down at one of the seats in the crowded tent.

“Because we're just in time for my favorite part!” Stolas said excitedly, clapping his hands.

An imp with horns seemingly too big came into the spotlight as one of the performances finished, “Now, everyone's favorite thing about circus shit: the motherfuckin' clowns!”

Several frightening Imp clowns with glowing eyes leap out at the audience from behind curtains. The large horned imp laughs as they fly outward. The audience scream and pull away in terror, with Stella grabbing onto Stolas as he giggles knowing it’s just part of the show.

The spotlight flashes over to a small foot stepping on a pedestal board accompanied by the sound of a bell jingling.

“You ready, Blitzo?” A young voice says out of view

A young imp presumably Blitzo gives a rope a quick tug. “Born ready!” Responds

Blitzo as he and another, more clown-dressed imp leap off of their boards and begin a flying trapeze act. Blitzo passes by Stella and Stolas’s section of the bleachers, time appears to slow; they both stare up at the imp in awe.

Blitzoo then lands on a ball the other imp swings away, “ Haaaaa! Tada~!” The imp laughed “Heya, folks! Wanna see me make a horse?”

Blitzo takes out a green balloon, blows it up, and attempts to tie it into a horse shape. It appears as a knot, before immediately popping.

Blitzo’s eyes widened in surprise “ Crap.” he said quietly, he then began pulling out balloons and attempting to make a horse, with them popping all the same. His expression grows more worried with each popped balloon.

The audience stares dead silent, unimpressed as Blitzo keeps trying and failing to make the simple shape.

“ De-de-de-de-do-do-do-do- Ah, hehehe, Horse!” Blitzo exclaimed nervously

as he finally made a horse except it had no legs.

“Well, heh. It was a horse, but then it ate too much sugar and its legs stopped working so he had to amputate. Now, it's a gross worm horse.”

Stolas begins to laugh softly,

“See? He gets it. Because horses - they make no sense.” Blitzo said with a small laugh

“Uh, Stolas that wasn’t really funny,” Stella murmured

“Obviously not! It’s part of the act, Fizzarolli’s coming on next!” Stolas whispered back

Fizzarolli the clown-dressed imp jumped down, joining Blitzoo with a red balloon of his own.

“Okay, Blitzoo, that's enough horsing around! Hey, everybody! Look at this, it's Banana Pudding the clown horsey!” He smiles making horse noises, the crowd laughed as Blitzo stood to the side giving an awkward laugh.

—------------------------------------------25 years Later-------------------------------------

In the present day, an adult Stolas wakes and stretches in the morning, he stares dejected at the empty spot next to him in bed. He sighs before perking up a bit and grabbing his wine-red robe. He heads into his bathroom splashing his face with water before brushing his.

He leaves his room humming to himself as he goes to his library to check on his grimoire. He flips through the pages unaware of the imp in a tattered jacket looking at him through the window, staring at the magic flying off the pages. He tugged at the window trying to get inside, falling off it as Stolas closed the grimoire.

Stolas jumped at the thud going over to open the window, he stared down only seeing the bushes that lined his house. “Must've been a bird,” He shrugged as he closed and locked the window.

He heads down the hall, stopping at one of the doors, peeking inside giving a loving smile seeing his peacefully sleeping daughter Octavia. He softly closed the door and continued down the hall.

He makes his way to the kitchen pouring himself some coffee as he hears his wife, Stella come in. He turns to look at her on the phone being held up by an imp, she readjusts her pink fluffy robe, her feathers fluffier and uncombed as she hadn't done anything to them. Her white tail feathers flap as she speaks to someone on the phone.

He poured another cup before coming up behind her, “Morning love,” he said, giving her a soft kiss on the cheek, as she handed her her cup.

“Ah morning Stolas,” She responded flatly, rubbing the feathers atop his head before continuing her conversation on the phone.

“Ah, Stella, I know you want to plan for our anniversary and stuff, but don’t you think you could take a break and let the servants handle it? I mean they're called ‘help’ for a reason.” Stolas asked as they sat down at the table.

Stella rolled her eyes, “Oh please! The last time I let them plan things everything went to shit! They got Alizarin Crimson instead of-”

“Wine red…” Stolas sighed,

“Exactly!” She huffed while hanging up her phone.

“I’m pretty sure you're the only one who noticed but alright,” Stolas mumbled under his breath as another imp brought them their breakfast.

“Oh, and speaking of the party do you have any requests? Like food, or special guests and stuff?” Stella said, taking a bite of her pancakes.

“Um, well I'm sure you’ve already planned for any food either of us would want and I’ve never cared for special guests. But I do have one teeny-tiny little request about the guest list.” Stolas started shyly.

“I’m not uninviting my brother,” Stella deadpanned

“But Stellaaaa,” Stolas whined

“Don’t ‘Stellaaaa’ me! You know I can’t uninvite him, plus he’s not even that bad!” Stella snapped, rolling her eyes.

“Ugh maybe not you and Via, but he’s certainly ‘that bad’ to me! He’s just so, so ugh!” Stolas responded by dragging his fingers down his face.

Stella sighed “Either way, you know I can’t uninvite him! You remember the stink he made when he found he was invited last, how do you think he’ll react to not being invited at all?” Stella asked, taking a sip of her coffee.

“I know but still, I won’t enjoy it…” Stolas pouted

Stella paused and set her utensils down, “How about this if you do act right then I’ll add an extra surprise to your anniversary gift~.” Stella said in a sultry tone, as reached over the table.

Stolas's feather puffed up in an instant, “I uh, suppose a few hours with him wouldn’t be too bad,”

———

Stolas stood next to Stella as they laughed along with their friends, Ville and Evelynn. Admittedly they were more Stella’s friends than his but he still got along with them.

“Wow Stella you really outdid yourself, this party is great!” Ville said with his raspy voice, swishing his wine in the glass twice as small as his white feathered hand.

“Doesn't she always~?” Evelynn giggled.

“Oh stop you two are making me blush, uh but do continue!” She tacked on at the end giving the group a laugh.

“So, how's Octavia been doing?” Ville asked, taking a sip of his drink.

“Oh, she’s just fine, she has been doing quite well with her magic studies I must say!” Stolas responded pridefully.

“Oh trust me we’ve heard plenty about it from Christopher!” Ville laughed

“Y’know Stella if those two ever got married then we’d really be sisters!” Evelynn squealed

“Oh my goodness you're so right!” Stella squealed along with her.

Ville chuckled at their excitement, “Oh actually speaking of Octavia, where is she? I've barely seen her all night.” Ville asked, scratching his jaw.

“Oh, you know how she can be sometimes, she’s probably up in her room taking a break from the party.” Stolas responded without a thought

“Mm yes, as much as I love her I do wish she wasn’t so shy sometimes.” Stella said with a small sigh.

As their conversation continued, Stolas spotted something out of the corner of his eye. Blue glitter feathers peeked out from the crowd, he bit his cheeks.

“Uh, do pardon me, I ah need to head to the bathroom,” Stolas said, shoving his glass into Stella’s free hand as he excused himself from the group. Stella gave him a bit of a funny look but shrugged as he ran off.

Stolas closed the door of the ballroom and went a bit down the dark hall, “Just a few hours, and then you get that gift you've been waiting for!” He mumbled to himself still grimacing at the thought of having to interact with his Brother-in-law.

After there for a moment or two, he heard Stella’s voice as she came up behind him, “Stolas guess who just got here!” She said happily, grabbing his arm and ready to drag him back to the party.

Stolas panicked knowing who would soon follow and be by her side. He then heard a noise like someone struggling, they both looked forward to see two large white hellhounds holding an imp between them.

“Excuse us, sir we found this imp snooping around, we’ll take care of him.” The left one said ready to continue on their way, but just then Stolas had an idea.

“Ahem, as a Goetia I believe I should deal with this disrespectful imp myself!” Stolas straightened his posture as Stella gave him a funny look.

The two hellhounds unceremoniously dropped the imp, Stolas quickly grabbed him by his raggedy jacket pulling him off to somewhere. “I’ll be back in a bit, so don’t have too much fun without me~!” He yelled as walked deeper into the hall.

“There he goes running off again, like a coward,” A sly voice behind Stella said

“Are you saying you wouldn’t deal with an imp breaking into your house? Sounds pretty cowardly to me.” Stella responded with the same sly tone in her voice.

“Wha-”

———

“Dammit, Dammit, Dammit! Why isn't he responding?!” A male imp with white hair is at the top of Stolas’s mansion.

“You don't think he got caught right Moxxie?” A female black-haired imp asked,

“Why else wouldn’t he respond, Millie? Ugh, I told him this was a bad idea! He’s probably a stone statue by now! ” Moxxie responded, pulling his hair out.

———

Stolas entered a room with the imp, “Alright, little imp, usually, I would have already turned you to stone! But since you’ve helped me a bit tonight I’ll let it slide just this-” Stolas turned around after locking the door, he paused before bending down and getting close to the imp’s face. He grabbed the imp by the chin as he began to sweat, Stolas examined his face in silence.

“Do, do I know you?” Stolas asked still looking at him

“Wha- nooo, I’ve uh only ever seen ya’ on TV!” The imp responded nervously waving his hands as he scooted back from the curious owl.

Stolas’s eyes widened as it hit him, “Wait, I do know you! You're that circus performer!” Stolas exclaimed “Oh what was your name? Buz, Bucko, Bing?” Stolas inquired, tapping his chin.

“Blitzo, it was Blitzo.” The imp responded quietly

Stolas cocked his head, “Was Blitzo?” he asked innocently

“Yeah, the ‘o’ is silent…” He responded avoiding the owl's eyes

“Huh, why silent the ‘o’?” Stolas once again inquired innocently.

“Reasons… a lot of reasons. But listen you're gonna kill me can you not turn me stone and just, like, shoot me or something?” Blitzo laughed

“Mm, no I don’t think I’ll do that,” Stolas laughed, waving his hand. “But I’m curious now, since you're here, what ever happened to you and your circus troupe? I assumed you would rebuild after that fire but it was like you all disappeared!” Stolas said crouching down to be on eye level with Blitzo.

“Uh, a lot of things were happening behind the scenes, b-before after the fire, i-it was better we split.” Blitzo responded as he crossed his arms close to his chest, still avoiding the owl's red eyes.

“How unfortunate,” Stolas responded, Blitzo could barely tell if he was being sincere or not. “Well let me ask you another thing, why exactly did you break into my house, on my anniversary no less?” Stolas asked his tone a bit more annoyed.

Blitzo paused, “I uh was trying to find a way to the human realm, and since there was this big party I thought everyone would be too distracted to notice me! Plus you're like royalty so I doubt you’d notice if I nabbed an asmodeus crystal or two, aha ha…” Blitzo responded, twiddling his finds as Stolas stared back at him.

“And what pray tell, would an imp need asmodeus crystals for?” Stolas inquired

“My uh business…” Blitzo responded

Stolas gave a surprised hum, “An imp with a business, now that’s certainly new! What does it have to do with the mortal realm?” Stolas asked his curiosity, growing with the imps nervous replies.

“Uh, well uh me and my team are assassins and get revenge for ya’ if someone killed you or anything similar! Ah, here's my business card if you're interested!” Blitzo said, perking up as he handed Stolas a crudely made business card.

Stolas stared at it, it looked like a colored piece of cardboard, he smiled “Well then, tell me little imp how would you feel if I were to hire you then?” Stolas smiled

Blitzo stared back at him, his eyes widening in shock, “A-are you serious? This isn't some prank to try to embarrass me in front of your friends or something??” he asked cautiously

“Why of course not! You’ve helped me a bit tonight, and plus I really did enjoy the shows! So it's only fair if I help to repay you! So little imp do we have a deal?” Stolas asked, giving his hand to Blitzo.

Blitzo stared at the hand before grabbing it with his own, “Yes, yes we do!” He laughed happily, shaking the owl's hand. “Well, uh I guess I should go and call back later?” Blitzo laughed as he went to the door.

But as he grabbed the knob Stolas grabbed the collar of his coat, “Ah, I kind of did tell them that I was going to deal with you. And by deal, I mean you were supposed to be a statue long before now…” Stolas said with a bit of a sigh.

“Then how am I supposed to leave?” Blitzo asked, Stolas looked over to a window as a devilish grin appeared on his face, “I have an idea.”

Moxxie and Millie stood on the roof panicking as they tried to get in contact with there, until the sound of someone talking could be heard

“Uh, Moxxie do you hear that?” Millie asked, they ran over to the edge of the roof, only to see Blitzo flying out and landing far across the yard.

Suddenly Moxxie felt his phone buzz in his pants,”Hello, sir is was that you?!” Moxie yelled over the phone.

Blitzo sat on the ground quietly not answering for a moment, “You guys are never who might've just hired us,”

—--------------A little while after that—---------------

Stella sat at a table with her, a large cake in front of them. However just as they were about to indulge an imp came crashing down onto it, “Sorry I fucked your husband!” Blitzo laughed as he quickly scurried off the table.

Stolas came rushing toward the balcony only to see the mess Blitzo had left, “STOLAS, WHAT THE FUCK WAS THAT!?” Stella yelled at the top of her lungs

Stolas only stared back down at her with a cowardly expression.

—------------------------------------------------Now…----------------------------------------------------

Stolas blinks awake, groaning in pain, lying next to a bottle of absinthe. He's still wearing his outfit from Ozzie's, his mascara he took an hour to perfect now running down his cheeks.. He pulls himself up, grabbing his phone out of his pocket, and scrolling through his recent photos, a series of pictures of Blitzo or things related to Blitzo.

As he stared at them he couldn't help but sing,

♫ Owl in a cage ♫

♫ You show your age ♫

♫ Your sweetness has run foul ♫

♫ Without a change you're lost, exhausted ♫

♫ By your time on stage ♫

♫ Then you walked in my room ♫

♫ And like sparks in the dark ♫

♫ Life was suddenly thrilling and new ♫

♫ What between you and I ♫

♫ Just a comfortable lie ♫

♫ I'm the fool who believes when you look in my eyes ♫

♫ Prince, all alone, upon your throne ♫

♫ Your power is so frail ♫

♫ You raise your voice ♫

♫ You have no choice ♫

♫ Inside your gilded jail ♫

Stolas stood, his hands on the balcony as he stared into the stars he usually studied. So entranced by them he didn't notice the clicking of heels coming towards him.

“Stolas…” A calm but angry but angry voice said.

He turned quickly to see Stella, he was a bit surprised to see her still dressed up at this hour.

“Ah, S-stella darling I didn't expect to see you up this late!” He stammered.

She stared back at him with clenched fists, “Don’t you Stella darling me! You were with that imp again werent you!” She yelled coming toward him.

Stolas gave her a panicked look knowing that he couldn't argue. His silence only seemed to enrage her further, “Oh, I can’t believe you, do you even know what you've done!” Stella yelled.

“Stella please, I-i know I hurt you but-”

“But nothing! Not only have you completely disgraced our marriage, but you've also completely embarrassed us! Do you have any idea how difficult it was to track down all the newspapers of your little speech in the Wrath ring?! Have you thought about any of that!?” Stella screeched, coming closer to his face.

She raised her hands seemingly ready to crash down hard onto Stolas’s chest. However her fists came down onto him rather softly, she held them there lightly hitting on his chest as tears began to fall from her eyes.

“Stella…” Stolas said softly as they both sank to the ground.

They both sat there as Stella shivered while quietly sobbing, after a moment Stolas went to grab one her hands now in her lap. However, the second he placed his hand on hers she quickly pulled them away.

“No, no,no I-i’m done with you! I can’t do this, I hate you!” Stella yelled as she rose up.

“What, no Stella please can w-we can talk about this!” Stolas said standing up with her.

“After all you've done you think you deserve that!?” She yelled back.

“I-i don’t but please, j-just give me a chance. I’ll agree to whatever you want to do just-” Stolas begged, returning to his knees.

“Fine..” Stella said, Stolas gave a sigh of relief, before Stella continued. “I’m calling my brother..” She said, crossing her arms.

“W-what, but Stella he has nothing to do with this a-and-” Stolas stammered

“Ah ah! You said you’d agree to anything, this is anything!” She replied snlyly, Stolas sat there on the ground as Stella walked back into the house.

Stella clutched her chest as she closed the balcony door, sighing as wiped the mascara off her face.

“M-mom, are you okay?” Stella snapped her head up to see Octavia, from the looks of it she seemed groggy as if she had just woken up.

Stella sighed seeing that she probably hadent heard their conversation, “Y-yes, I’m just fine dear! Come on you should be getting back to bed!” Stella responded grabbing her daughter shoulders to lead her back to her room.

“A-are you sure, I heard you two arguing, again…” Octavia said planting her talons in the ground to keep her mother from moving her.

Stella paused, “I- yes dear, its just-” Stella paused again deciding to bite her tongue, “I-it’s nothing, we’re fine! Now come on lets get to bed..” She responded softly.

“Mh, alright…” Octavia responded, but even then she couldnt help but turn back to the balcony door.

And on the other side sat Stolas wallowing in his own mistakes and misery.

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And I’m done, this took so much longer than I anticipated!

Now if you have any criticism’s please share, I had a bit of trouble with certain parts. For example Stella and Stolas a muppet babies, I was trying to make there conversation realistic for there age without just making them drool. Same with Stolas and Blitzo’s talk, it looked a bit funny but I tried so I guess thats what matters?

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from al jazeeras live reporting of the first ICJ hearing, 11 Jan 2024

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Hazbin Hotel Rewrite; Opening up at the Bar

From what I seen from hh with how it handles sa topics, it's very...questionable. Now the show hasn't still come out yet so I won't go into detail about it, but with how they use the song 'poison' and behind the scenes of it (viv making a sex joke as marketing the song and the lead storyboard shipping val x angel despite what it's meant to portray in canon) makes it understandable for people to critque the show's portrayal of it. So for here, I want to approach Angel's truama as respectfully as I can with Angel opening up to Husk as it seems to be the same episode where both of them improve their relationship. I hope I'm able to address sa well because I know it's a very delicate topic that shouldn't be written lightly (especially for truama responses like hypersexuality) so if you have any problems with how I written it and how I should change it, please let me know. I will rewrite it until I portray this topic properly and credit you for your critque/help (unless you don't want to)

Content Warning; SA and mention of drug/alcohol addiction

A bar full of bottles and boozes sitting there in windless silence, aching for their next customer. Its emptiness is numbing, the stranded desert of this hotel. Husk, tapping his fingers in rhythm, halts it as though the ticking of a clock stops and sighs in relief, grateful that his work is now done. He takes a bottle of booze, fulfilling its fate as he opens the lid to drain it all down, until he hears the door creaking. 

He groans “Oh it’s you,” as Angel Dust drags himself towards the bar, collapsing his face to the poseur table. “What do you want now? Bar’s gonna close soon. So hurry up.” 

Angel’s face tilts up. “A drink, please.” His voice is soft yet hoarse.

Husk rolls his eyes, wishing for that sweet graveness to enter this bar once again. He goes through his bottles. “Which one?” He asks with a hostile glare.

“Any.”

Angel Dust slowly lifts himself up from the table, staring in discomfort at Husk grabbing a random bottle from his shelf, a sense of dread lingers onto him. 

“Husk…” His voice grows quiet.

“What?”

“I’m…sorry.” His eyes not meeting Husk’s gaze. 

“For what?” He responds snappily, placing one hand to his hip.

“For earlier…” Angel answers, his eyes still refusing to see Husks. “For saying and doing all those weird things to you, I'm sorry.”

His grouchy face still remains. “Whatever,” firmly placing the bottle to the table and swishing it towards Angel. “Don’t do that again.”

“Yeah,” his body tenses, “I hope so…”

Husk brows raised. “Hope so? What do you mean?”

The question hangs on as Angel Dust fiddles their hands, looking down at the wooden dry floor. The room has been fogged in silence as Husk finds himself repeatedly tapping his fingers, wondering when the clock will finally end its grating tick. 

“Well…” His voice quivers, tracing his eyes back to Husks. “I don’t know…”

Husk’s face turned puzzled. “The hell you mean you don't know?!” 

“I-” Angel pauses himself for a moment, “I don't know. I just don’t know.” His face bangs on the table as his arms come to cover.

“Ah well, might just be a you problem then.” He cackles at his own joke, with hollow applause. 

Angel huffs, “That’s what you all think.” His voice became more irritated. 

Husk’s laughter abrupt into cold stillness, his voice freezes with the rest of his body. 

Angel continues, “All of you think i’m just some dirty sex pest, huh? A running sex joke?” Anger starts to rise through his voice, “Even Charlie thinks what I do is just who I am- like I chose this!” He cuts himself off, facing down to the lifeless floor again. “Like I chose this…”

Husk words vanished, his voice having trouble coming out of his mouth. All he could do is stand there, watching Angel Dust ponder through his thoughts. 

“You know I don’t actually like being sexual twenty-four seven? Crazy right?” He formed a smile, though not by sweetness, but by bitterness. “I don’t actually like making endless sex jokes or dirty talk, I don’t actually like to constantly fantasise or masturbate or sleep around with a bunch of nobodies,” bitterness starts to spread through his voice, “and I especially don’t like working in that place!” He holds his breath, exhaling to serene air. “But I do it anyway, no matter how hard I try.” His finger scratched the table harshly with a melancholic frown. “I don’t know what is wrong with me, I didn’t used to be like this, it was only after-” Angel cuts himself off as his body starts trembling. He places a heart on his hand, feeling the rapid sounds of his heartbeat. “After…” He slows himself, unable to muster anything else to speak of. 

His eyes lift to Husk, seeing the statue that he became, his widened pupils not even taking one blink. Angel’s face rose with worry, “Oh uh…sorry.” He murmurs. “Sorry, I’ll just take the booze or-”

“Go on.” Husk's voice comes back again.

“W-what?” He quivers, taken aback by what he heard.

“Go on…” Husk's voice trails off, still a statue of himself.

Angel Dust pursed his lips, facing down once more. “There was a time back then, when I sneaked into a bar for some alcohol, the thing that helped me most when I was alive. There was a really fancy bottle, porcelain white shimmering with bubbles, I couldn’t help myself. I had to have it. Then he caught me, I thought he would kill me. Instead, he made a deal; that if I work in his business, I won’t need to steal anything or even need a place to stay…” He breaks off, his fingers scraping themselves to a shell. “So I worked as one of his sex workers; a stripper for his bars, an actor for his films, anything to do with sex, really. It wasn’t what I was always interested in, but it felt…better? Being more open and honest about myself that I never got to do on earth. That is, until I came back to his home…He told me he wanted to show me something, my ‘reward’...” He holds back on his words, wrapping his arms around in a warm embrace. “After that, I…I don't know, I guess that’s where I started becoming more sexual. It’s like a switch where my mind now constantly thinks about sex, even if it’s not what I want. It’s my poison.” He holds onto his words again, reflecting his thoughts. “Maybe it’s a way of control, to take back what he did to me, not letting him hurt me…but is it any good if you can’t control it yourself?” He finds himself eyeing at the bottle of toxicated liquid. “That’s why I came here, I couldn’t find any drugs. So alcohol will just have to do.”

Husk exhales a quiet breath, with Angel’s words stalling through his mind. He saw Angel reaching for the bottle. “Wait!” He alerts, taking the bottle before Angel could have the chance. Angel looks at him, confound. “Why?” Husk fell silent, wavering on his memory like a lightning struck in a bottle. He places the bottle back to its fateless place and starts rummaging through the tea bags until one reads ‘Black Caravan Tea’. He places the tea bag in a muggy cup and clicks the kettle to brew. Minutes go by as the kettle finally makes its thump, breaking Husks trance as he pours the steamy water onto the cup and gently pushes it over to Angel. “Here” He says softly. “Careful, it’s hot.” Angel slowly directs his eyes to the hot tea, then back to Husk, his mouth making a quiet gasp. “I know it’s not much,” He adds. “But for you, I hope it can be enough.”

Angel dust calmly blows the steam off his tea and takes a sip, warm smoky sweetness filling his mouth in peaceful bliss. He continues sipping it at a slow pace, enjoying each moment with him and his magical tea, transforming his mind to ocean waves, hearing its soothing whooshes and the pleasant echoes of bird’s chirping. After taking one last sip, he notices Husk with his own muggy cup, cooling off the steam before slurping down the whole tea to an empty cup. His grouchy face disappeared, replacing it with a genial smile; friendly and relaxed. Like warming his face with radiant golden sunlight. 

“What’s this?” Angel asks as soon as Husk tastes his last drop.

“Black Caravan.” Husk replies, licking his lips. “My Babushka always makes this tea, saying ‘If you get upset, don’t waste your mouth with vodka, relish it with Caravan.’” He glimpses away from Angel dust, shining a little star in his eyes before glaring at the shelves of bottles and boozes. “Heh, no wonder I hadn’t remembered…” 

Angel snickers. “My Nonno says something similar. He said; ‘You don’t stuff your mouth with alcohol, you stuff it with Frittelie!’” They both chuckle with each other, reminiscing of their old lives before the room went to silence. Both eyes looking away from each other as Angel proceeds to fiddle with his hands and Husk tapping his table, now only slow and with no rhythm. A clock’s final strikes till midnight. “You know,” He spoke solemnly. “After you're done with work and all, instead of finding drugs, you can come straight here to talk or have some tea. Either one or both to get off some steam.” 

Angel glances back to Husk’s sentimental gaze, his eyes lit up. “You’ll…You’ll do that?”

“Yeah.” He responds, keeping his gaze to Angel Dusts. “I’d do. For you…”

Their eyes locked in their gazes, their beating hearts twined to one another. Angel’s eyes turn away from the burning faint shades of pink of his face, looking steadily at the cup. “Yeah,” a small line shaped to a tender smile, “I’d like that.”

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I don't know if scene rewrite asks are allowed, but I have one regarding S1E8 where Beelzebub confronts Loona after the drinking contest:

In the episode, Beelzebub goes to Loona about Blitz managing to outdrink her in the drinking contest, saying that she can sense the energies of everyone at her party and wasn't getting an "okay vibe" from him. After seeing some opinions on the other side, I realized that didn't make a lot of sense. She's supposed to represent the prince/princess of gluttony/overindulgence.

I think that a possible alternate and slightly more accurate version would be that after the drinking scene, Tex goes to Loona and confronts her about her dad, maybe saying something about him managing to beat the embodiment of gluttony at a drinking contest. Loona can then say the "he's always a mess" line, leading to Tex urging her to at least check on him. Loona gets slightly upset that Tex isn't trusting her word and maybe lets something slip about him not being on her side (which might not make a lot of sense given that Bee doesn't confront her in this version, but I'm just spitballing), which might tie into some unresolved feelings of infatuation on her side that happened when she first saw him. She then realizes that she might've said too much and apologizes, which leads to the rest of the episode's ending. This would be better since it's more in line with what a demon of gluttony would do, which is not care.

If there's any tweaks I should make to this, let me know

I welcome rewrite asks for any rewrite ideas and yours sounds neat anon! I'm sure to make that rewrite when I can (It may takes some time due to eyestrain/my eye having a concerning problem rn). I think for the slip up though, it can be something like 'not getting what it's like' instead of not being on her side, which makes him more annoyed since he actually had an experience similar to blitzo which is why he's concerned for him at this moment. This would also fit loona's apology since she now knows what tex has been through and would make the episode flow smoothly. Appreciate your rewrite anon, it sounds great!

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the rewrite of stolas and blitzo being the victim of abuse by showing that how they process their trauma and how they are being affected by it great. This particular topic that could explore more about how horrible people can suffer from abuse they can also perpetuating the cycle of abuse

Exactly. Helluva's themes of abuse doesn't work when you pick and choose who is and who isn't an abuser.

Stella is an abuser, yes. But so is stolas. He coerced blitzo under his lower class and proceeds to infantilise and objectify him throughout their relationship. And while Blitzo is a victim of stolas, he is also an abuser to his employees, often bullying them (specifically moxxie) and disregarding his employees boundaries from his infatuation with them. If Helluva boss wants to presents themes of abuse, then they should be portraying them as abusers who also are affected from the abuse they gone through and give them the proper consequences for their abuse, without involving the abuse upon them (e.g, blitzo being held accountable for not reciprocating his 'love' for stolas, his abuser).

I have a og work inspired by helluva boss and this is one of the themes i would utilized in it, where abusive characters are also victims of abuse from others and how it affects them as well as breaking the cycle of abuse with either the abusive characters changing for the better or the victims of the abusive character in question strain away from them for themself and their mental health. This theme is interesting to explore and i want to be able to explore that concept well.

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Behind the scenes AU: Viv's demonsona is a bad director and runs this show into the ground

But imagine the demon actor for Mammon is actually just a big sweetheart (for a demon, he gives weapons to demon children to play with), he's just good at playing a stereotypically awful guy

Neat idea anon, I like the 'sweet actor playing an awful guy', the contrast can make have potential for comedy (and i really like that kind of trope in actor aus too)

I feel like Viv's demonsona engages in fandom culture and tries to put her fans ideas in her work which derails it lmao

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What program do you use to make your HB scene rewrites and what is your creative process behind making them? Any advice and tips you got on doing these scene rewrites?

I ask because I not only do I love your rewrites and the dialogue in them (specially since I can hear the characters voices in the scenes themselves), but also because the style of the words look very nice. In my eyes, they look like there's neon lights inside the words themselves lighting up around them. Not to mention I'd like to try a hand at doing scene rewrites myself, after seeing some Tumblr users (including you, which btw thank you so much for the inspiration) do scene rewrites themselves, especially of Helluva Boss.

Sorry it took long to answer anon, red eyes got to me a few weeks ago but now its much better (just gotta use the computer in smaller portions now).

I use canva for my rewrites since their free and you can easily create them there. It's a very simple process;

Screenshot an image

Upload them on Canva

Go back on 'Uploads' for Canva and press the 'Use in Design'

Select the Text section with 'GLOW'

Choose the size (mine would typically be somewhere between 20-30+) depending on what the size looks like

Select the colour of your choice

Write the scene

Once finished, download

My tips/advice would be if you want to keep a consistent colour for a character, you either can download your current one and go back to the one with that particular colour for the character. If that colour appears on a particular image (since canva suggest certain colours for the scene), you can go back to that image, select the colour and then insert the image your rewriting for it. Another way of keeping colour consistent is to duplicate canva and with that new tab, repeat step 3 and continue using a different character. It's how I did fizz and Blitzo for my last rewrite since it makes it much easier and I don't have to remember the specific colour 24/7.

Another tip/advice would be to give your rewrites headings in your canva so that it makes it less confusing for you. I typically title my canvas 'helluva rewrites' which makes them 'hb rewrites (1)' - 'hb rewrites (6)'. It creates a neat order for you to line up your rewrites well (also if your computer has 'hb rewrites' and 'hb rewrites (1)', hb rewrites is the first one while hb rewrites (1) is the second).

That's all the tips/advice i can provide. It's a really simple process, plus its free to use as long as you have an account. I'm really appreciative of your support and how my text is pleasing for your eyes since i use 'glow' to make it easily read while choosing colours that wouldn't cause people eye strain. I would really look foward into your rewrites and glad that I inspired you in some way like hb and the critical community has inspired me.