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why should you just use 'said'

stop using thesaurus for dialogue words

of course this is not new advice everyone and their essayist dog has been told this. but people don't really get into why.

writing "I don't know the man I've become" He said. is good because 'said' is invisible. the reader's eyes don't acknowledge the word, they move on to the next thing.

the reason that it's invisible is that it's completely neutral. the word doesn't engender any meaning onto the way the dialogue is said.

the reason why its so offputting to read something where 'said' is replaced by things like 'They uttered' 'They spoke' 'They stated' 'They told' 'They voiced' is because all of those words do imply a meaning.

'She uttered' sounds like the speaker has some degree of solitude.

'She spoke' sounds like she wasn't speaking before.

'She stated' sounds like the speaker is stating some fact, some definite thing

'She told' sounds like she's telling something to someone for some purpose

'She voiced' sounds like the speaker has some opinion that needs to be stated but feels like she's been silenced until now.

of course, this isnt the exact ways each of those words function in every situation. context matters, the reader matters, the writer matters.

the point is, these words are not actual synonyms. the reader does not look at 'said' and 'spoke' the same way. it makes your characters feel over-animated and cartoonish when they're meant to have the same tone throughout a piece of dialogue but the word used to describe it keeps changing.

consistent dialogue word = consistent tone

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overdescribing a scene gives it:

life

weight

time

life: it makes the reader feel that much more immersed in the scene. they can feel the feeling of being there, they can imagine what its like to live there, they can understand the characters and their actions

weight: literal visual weight on the page and metaphorical weight in the mind. the longer you spend describing something, the more visual importance you give it on the page, and the more space it takes up in the reader's mind because of that

time: it gives the scene a longer dedicated timeframe in the reader's perception of the story. longer description takes the reader longer to read which makes them perceive a longer passage of time.

being aware of these three elements is crucial. you have to match the elements you're construing to your reader to the elements of the character.

if the character is experiencing the life of the scene in its entirety, the description should be long and overcomplicated. make the reader revel in the description in the same way your character is.

if something is weighing on your characters mind, the description of how it feels should be long and overcomplicated. give it the same weight in your reader's mind that it takes up in your character's mind

if a character is taking a long time to analyze their surroundings or mull over a piece of dialogue or figure out what emotions they're feeling, the description should be long and overcomplicated. give it the same timeframe it takes your character

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the path of the timeline is forever shifted with the advent of the error sweep.

whether this is for good or evil... we may never know...

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ship dynamic i want to write

literally the most silent creature. makes zero ambient noise completely unconsciously. has to force themselves to make sound so as to not jumpscare everyone they meet.

X

literally the loudest creature ever. cannot be bothered to try stealth. they have an aura that causes pots to bang against each other and wind to blow glasses off of tables. makes everyone aware of their existence through sheer presence of sound.

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ship dynamic i want to write

mortal x deity where the deity treats the mortal as an equal

"your presence is more than enough, you need not lay offerings at my feet" X "but i love to"

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Day 18: Eyeshadow

Killer with eyeshadow and makeup >>>>

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THIS unpleasant triangle-posessed cat shows up at your door

we doin bill sonas yeah?

maven's design lends itself very well to being billed. very triangular, very demure.

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ship dynamic i want to write

she is my goddess, my muse, i would lay down my life if it meant she wore a slightly more comfortable dress

X

she is my ho, my sugar baby, i would buy her the world if it meant she let me hit that

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new side blog

i just made a side blog for my witchy little sigils!

@candlewicksigils

please go check it out if you're a witch, there are free to use sigils up there already!

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pulseshock!sans for the soul

this is what happens to pulse when he drinks too much monster energy without pissing

the main difference is that he's on fire, has a darker color scheme, his energy currents are solid blue and so are his arm accessories. his pulse rings are supposed to be jagged but i didn't care enough to draw that

the only canon appearance of pulse!sans

goober pulse!sans doodle

he doesnt have a buttondown on his undershirt thats a current of energy same goes for his belt

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napoleon x gaby x illya ❌

the man from polyuncule ✔️

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Alright while I work on asks (I'm starting late cause I got up late and tbh not feeling well, which for once wasn't because of my mental health lol) I wanna know what yall think Passion's voice would sound like

I've been trying to think of what he'd sound like, I don't think it'd be overly feminine (which is what I feel people would default to for him tbh)

The only one I've been able to think of is Peri from the new Fairly Odd parents show lmao

Maybe that but slightly higher pitched, like not as deep?

I wanna know what yall think he sounds like when you see him tho, I'm curious! :3c

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im ngl ive been practicing different voices for him myself and i've really loved the idea of passion having a deep theatrical voice leaning slightly feminine with long tones and such and his voice shifts into much higher tones when he gets excited

Alright while I work on asks (I'm starting late cause I got up late and tbh not feeling well, which for once wasn't because of my mental health lol) I wanna know what yall think Passion's voice would sound like

I've been trying to think of what he'd sound like, I don't think it'd be overly feminine (which is what I feel people would default to for him tbh)

The only one I've been able to think of is Peri from the new Fairly Odd parents show lmao

Maybe that but slightly higher pitched, like not as deep?

I wanna know what yall think he sounds like when you see him tho, I'm curious! :3c

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gay guys will say "ooh im a bear" when they dont even know how to grab salmon out of a river with their mouths

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(guy experiencing the consequences of his actions) yeah i don’t know why these things keep happening to me i must be cursed or something