#yueshuo.feedback

[yinyuedijun]

hi mao! ok so… i’m afraid i’m still too horny and in love with this fic. what if i just say that i don’t know what else i can say about your writing — speechless because i’m in awe. (in ave—)

i honestly have never read omegaverse fic before, knowing only the basics, mostly from memes lol so it was really interesting to get in detail into your take on their biology and how nicely you entwined it with existing hsr lore. morphing known issues to match the omegaverse world. i especially liked when you mentioned cutting the other scent gland from the necks, because wow, it’s so barbaric, but makes so much sense to describe it. i’m a big fan of how you organise the story around the main characters — like i’m reading news or just following canon events, because everything just fits so well that i’m not even questioning if you came up with all these names by yourself or if they were mentioned somewhere in the game. there are just things that must happen (arriving at the desert planet) no matter what, and we’re following the narrative, but oh! suddenly something unexpected happens (the heat) and what now?!

i’m also surprised because this fic wasn’t deranged at all? or i’m just clueless lol sure, the setting wasn’t cotton candy sweet at all, but the story itself was rather soft and slow, and loving. i love love love the reader there — they’re so respectful and understanding, and how they view aventurine is so special. they seem so pure despite all the awful things they have gone through. i just can’t wait to read how their relationship develops.

i feel like aventurine is slightly different here. but i enjoy it! i guess it’s because in this fic he’s forced into a vulnerability he cannot control — something that probably didn’t happen to his canon version. so he’s more… pathetic? it adds the edge because the risk seems even greater, and i completely understand the reader to worry about his luck and confidence when his heats are still the biggest threat. their dynamic is so interesting. that aventurine, despite being an omega, has the reader wrapped around his finger because they’re so down bad for him. their instinct turned into love :(

and i was supposed to say nothing yet i yapped. i thought i wouldn’t have the attention span or the strength to read through this entire fic in one sitting, but i got so invested!!! like i was watching a tv show, not reading!!! thank you for the amazing fic, mao 🙇

manu beloved I had a feeling that anon was u !!!! 🫶 thank you for reading this despite not having ever read an omegaverse fic before (???!? U REALLY TOOK A LEAP OF FAITH FOR ME LOLL this is not standard omegaverse whatsoever 😭😭😭). I'm so glad you enjoyed it and feel so strongly abt my writing!!! and I'm especially happy that you felt that I did a good job w integrating the omegaverse into the hsr universe... I do have an affection for world-building so I'm glad to hear that I did a good job with it here :')

I had to laugh when you said that it was surprising that the fic wasn't deranged at all 💀💀💀 I see I have a reputation built up for myself /j tho I do regret to inform you that it will probably get worse in ch2... perhaps not deranged but definitely some very sad backstory details coming up lol...

on a more serious note, I'm glad that the fic was tonally soft and slow and loving!! because yes there is extreme tragedy going on in terms of the actual events, but soft and slow and loving is more or less how the mc feels abt aventurine 🥺 so I'm glad that came thru in the narration!!!

and YESSS its funny that you mention aventurine feeling different because he's an omega 😭 I thought omegaverse was a good genre for him because it forces him to vulnerable in a way that he never would be in canon, but LOL it did make him feel. extremely ooc to me at some points. like where's my cunty emotionally repressed man, who is this soggy pathetic bastard who is too wretched to do anything but suffer alone in bed. it was rlly making me hate the fic for a while 💔 so I'm glad it's something that you actually liked about the story!!!

thank you SO SO MUCH again for reading my fic manu and sending me such kind words ♥️♥️♥️ I am sending u so much love !!!!! BIG KISS FOR U

[yinyuedijun]

hi i literally sat and refreshed your blog last night until the fic came out i was so excited and holy shit this fic.

THIS FIC.

it's absolutely visionary to me. it's genre defining. i think i may have never fucked with omegaverse harder in my life kdljfsfjdlsfjdsf

You know differently, of course. You've known it from the moment you met him, from the second you laid eyes on him and thought, I need to help you, and I need to protect you, and I need you to be safe, and you’d never once heard the word ‘love’ in your life—slaves are never loved by their masters, after all, and you'd always been nothing but a slave—but every atom of your being knew that you loved him, that you'd always love him.

listen i showed up last night to have a nice time and just eat up your writing and three paragraphs in I WAS TAKEN OUT. THE TENDERNESS. THE INTIMACY. i got here and like. i had to drop off vc, sit down, turn off my music, settle in to read this because i knew i was about to LOSE MY MIND

the way alpha malewife!mc reads aventurine so instinctively, so intrusively....the guilt they feel for what their very presence does to him, how even if alpha malewife!mc has never, could never bear to harm him, the ghosts of every cruel master aventurine has suffered will continue their work regardless....the way that despite everything that has been done alpha malewife!mc is the one thing aventurine allows himself to cling to in this world. i'm literally crying i love both of them so much. this dynamic is so peak i could have never imagined i swear you have killed me.

i thought translation/zero sum game would be THE mao fic universe to me. the one and only. i am tearing my hair out. you have managed to flay me open and pin my insides out for display yet again. it is the next day and my psyche is irrevocably altered by the violence this fic has inflicted on me last night. struggling to cope with being forced to face the fact that despite all my best efforts to gaslight girlboss manipulate my way through life i can never escape my roots as the biggest soggiest most pathetic service bitch to ever exist on this planet djkslfjsdlkfjkdsl

thank you for writing this you absolutely ate <33 if anything happened to you and i could never read another one of your fics again i would sue the government kill god and then myself o7777777

HRGKDSHSJ ANON UR SO FUNNY I laughed aloud at several parts of this comment 😭😭😭 "genre defining" is a crazy compliment to receive!!! I am an AVID omegaverse enjoyer and I'm so happy to hear that this is like. a standout omegaverse fic for you!!?! WAH! also that third paragraph is one of my faves but I was worried it was a lil too hammy as well LOL so I'm really glad you liked it 🥺💞💞 laughing that you had to turn off music and drop off vc... that's when you know it's SERIOUS...

I'm so glad that you enjoy the dynamic btwn alpha malewife and aventurine, I thoroughly enjoyed writing it but I know it's sooo bleak w all the gendered trauma and guilt 😭 it makes me so happy to know that's precisely what you find interesting/likeable abt it! also, I don't think most xreader audience members tend to relate to alpha characters (we are a demographic full of omegas), so it made me smile and laugh a ton when you called urself the "biggest soggiest most pathetic service bitch to ever exist on this planet" because SAME LMAOFLDJK and I wrote alpha malewife mc for us pathetic service bitches 😔✊

"sue the government kill god and then myself" made me CACKLE LMAOFKDHKSJ. thank you again soso much for reading and leaving the most thoughtful, funny comment ever - every single line had me kicking my feet and smiling. KISSING U!!!

[yinyuedijun]

Your Aventurine fic about his language made me so sad in the best way possible. I think it's because I’m in a pretty similar position with my own native language in having a painfully childish grasp on it while being painfully eloquent in contrast with English because I’ve worked to hone it from a young age to make assimilation a little easier. Carve the culture that wasn’t doing me any favours out of me, sliver by sliver. People often neglect the racial aspect of Aventurine’s character, but given that the Avgins are based on the Roma people, it gives such an intensely tragic lens on many common tropes with traumatic backstories. I don’t have much more to say than your fic was artful and it’s going to linger in my mind like thick taffy stuck to the back of teeth when you have too much of it at once.

hi anon!! thank you so much for this feedback, it means a lot to me as I too am in a similar position and I'm very glad that the fic felt authentic enough to resonate with you, as someone else experiencing language loss and cultural assimilation. I agree also - it is so interesting how people hesitate to explore the ethnic violence that is so integral to aventurine's character. it may of course be uncomfortable given the inspiration for the avgin people, but as you said the real world connection also makes it feel all the more significant. thank you so much for reading and for this thoughtful response - I've never had my work compared to taffy before and the analogy makes me very happy LOL

[yinyuedijun]

No thank YOU for writing it. I was really sleepy when i wrote my tags and didn’t get too deep into anything. I hope it’s not too much to say that i can already feel this becoming my favorite aven fic. There’s just something so tragic to it but i love two people who have been so broken trying to stitch themselves up before finally allowing someone else to help. Realizing that letting this other person touch them not only results in a cleaner seam but even a more beautiful one, embroidered by their care. And that’s what this fic already feels like it’s doing. Their intimacy at the end flayed my heart open.

I also just relate to the personality of the reader. What can i say i’m a bit soggy and soft but just want to look out for and take care of the people i care about.

Nothing about this was disappointing and i definitely don’t hate it. I love it in fact. This version of a relationship with aven has been stuck in my head ever since i read it. Shoving this interpretation of him and this dynamic into my ribcage.

ROSSIIIIII ILL KISS U (platonically) 🥺💞💞 I am honoured that u feel it will become one of ur fave aven fics altho now I feel pressure to DELIVERR LMAO I hope I don't disappoint 😔🤞 also I have to say. sometimes I get feedback on my fics that is so poetic I feel like I should be writing the commenter a review instead and this is one of those times HDKDHSKS "not only a cleaner seam but even more beautiful" okay CASUAL GORGEOUS PROSE IN MY INBOX I SEE

I'm so happy to hear that you enjoyed the reader 🥺!! and also that you like their dynamic - and even think about it after reading the chapter! it is every writer's dream to have their fic persist in their readers' minds so I am so giddy rn .... agpshslsdjw just THANK YOU SO MUCH !!!!

[yinyuedijun]

*lays on the floor sobbing inconsolably* usually I don’t read omegaverse stories at all because they kinda just make me borderline uncomfortable with how different the characters act in ways they wouldn’t but YOU—*HEAVY SOB* YOU DID IT RIGHT. ITS NOT JUSY ABOUT FERAL AND ANIMALISTIC MAKE OUT SESSIONS ITS ABOUT PROTECTION AND FEELING SAFE. (Although because I don’t read much about it I also don’t know much about it)

I’ve loved animals, and I always thought wolves were cool! An alpha leads and protects the pact with their life, and the way you wrote Aventurine’s trauma and MC trying to keep him safe and letting him be in control just made me sob because that wasn’t what I was expecting when I saw this was an omegaverse fic. You are an awesome writer and I just wanna squeeze you in a giant hug.

The writing is just immaculate on its own as well. It is 🤌❤️ chefs kiss. Perfect, perfect in every way. I can’t stop thinking about it. That’s when you know it’s good.

ahhh thank you for giving my omegaverse fic a chance despite the genre not being what you normally gravitate to! the strong protective instinct and hurt/comfort themes are actually quite common for the genre and is THE most delicious part of it for me :3ccc so I'm glad you felt that I portrayed that effectively in the fic ♥️♥️♥️ I really did want to make this a story where aventurine gets a partner who lets him feel safe and in control despite all his intimacy issues and trauma, so I'm happy that aspect of the fic moved you 🥺

AND THANK YOUU I'm glad you enjoyed the writing as well !! I appreciate your kind and thoughtful words so much 🫶 sending u love !!!!

[yinyuedijun]

miss mao!!! i usually cant muster up the courage to send asks to my fave fic writers (T ^ T) but i just had to let you know how gorgeous each and every piece you post is!! ive been in love with your writing since i first stumbled across art of the bedchamber and i swear every new story you write instantly becomes my new favorite 🥹 i love seeing your art it makes my day!! i hope youre having a wonderful weekend 🫶!

HI ANON thank you so much for reaching out... this made me so happy to read!! I always put my whole writerussy into every fic (esp hsr fics because I love dan heng and aventurine in a mentally ill way lol) so it makes me so happy to know that nothing has disappointed so far. thank you so so much for for reading my fics ♥️♥️♥️ and I hope you're having a great weekend too!!!

[yinyuedijun]

I was scrolling through your blog bcs I compulsively inhaled all of your writing on Aventurine at a horrible time when I should be sleeping. I do not know how to put into words. You’re amazing crazy shit had me crying rolling and feeling like I’ll never be able to read about Aventurine unless you write it. And the themes handled are done so, like care. And the other thing I was going on before is uh right like I was scrolling and it has been a good solid amount of time and then I check the date of the post and realize I barely scrolled through only 3 days worth of posting LOL. Good shit though I read every word no matter what it was about

NOT 3 DAYS 💀💀💀 I've been on vacay and so been shitposting even more than usual it's so bad LMAO I promise I'm only half this yappy normally. I'm glad you've been enjoying my aventurine stuff though!!! he has some very talented writers on this app so it's crazy to me that you like my aventurine so specifically LOL. esp happy to hear that you feel I handle the themes well, as the most challenging aspects of his characterization are very important to me to get right 🥺

TYSM FOR READING!!! and I hope u got some sleep!!!

[yinyuedijun]

°•-I just would like to say, that a few months ago, I was just scrolling through the smut tag of Aventurine, for the smut obviously, but damn did I stay for the plot. ( ꩜ ᯅ ꩜;)  AHHH, I have been contemplating on sending you an ask and I found the courage today (which I wish this won't be the last one), but I'm here to say I LOVEEEEE your plot with porn fics!!! (yes, not porn with plot atp) You're the best plot-with-porn writer I have ever encountered<3 I can't even count how many times I have reread your translation fic, and then you dropped the zsg which tab has been open on my phone for a while. I just want to give you everything you want (unfortunately I'm barely surviving with my penny) All in all, I just came here to (hopefully) convey how grateful I am, because I truly love the way you write, you characterize, you do that and this! I just can't describe it</3 I am so excited to see your latest fic (omega verse) because I have been trying to find hybrid fics for a while, and then BOOM! Suddenly one of my favorite writers was talking about it in their blog! Just take my heart atp! (˚ ˃̣̣̥⌓˂̣̣̥ )づ♡ As you can see this may be too long, possibly because I have literally been edging myself to send you an ask, but I wish you the best! Make sure to rest and stay hydrated, Miss Mao! (please correct me on what I can call you) Bye-bye and thank you! (ෆ˙ᵕ˙ෆ)♡ P.S. Your hairstyle suits you so much<3 P.P.S. I'm sorry if this came off as too friendly</3

AWWWW THANK U SO MUCH ANON this made me so happy and I appreciate it so much!! T_T thank you for taking the time (and finding the courage!!!) to reach out with such kind feedback!! I am sure this is very obvious but translation means a lot to me and aventurine is one of my favourite characters, so I'm so happy to hear that you enjoy my porn with plot fics for him and that you like the way I characterize him <333 (I also hope the omegaverse fic will be up your alley LOLL I'm not sure that it's anything like a sexy standard hybrid fic but here's hoping you will enjoy it 🙏🙏🙏)

thank u for the self-care reminders also, you take care too!! sending you lots of love 💞💞💞

[yinyuedijun]

I just found your blog and I just want to say I'm in love with and your work like OH MY GOOODDDD this ask is just gushing over the way you write, this blog is a gold mine and I've been binging almost everything the past few days. (Sending good vibes ✨)

WAHHH THANK YOUUU ANON I'm so happy you enjoy my writing so much💞💞 "gold mine" is such a kind way to describe my silly little blog LOl I hope you've been enjoying everything !!

THANK YOUU sending good vibes to you as well ✨✨

[yinyuedijun]

your writing is really good. unique. feels in-universe and snaps my heartstrings one by one. tastes like a french pastry with too many delicate layers dusted in cinnamon, still-warm. i re-read translation and some of your other works by the day: your writing, so soothing to take in and experience.

thank you so much anon!! 🥺💞💞 hearing that my writing tastes like a french pastry is such a huge compliment LOL glad I can put out such delicious food 🫶 I am so so happy you enjoyed translation enough to reread (as well as my other fics!!) . sending u so much love thank you for being so kind ♥️

[yinyuedijun]

(Hengfeng bleach anon) Mama mao the fucking better be extra nasty for that heartwrenching opening bc like legit i've always known that dh's backstory is fucked up but i hadn't thought too much about his life post-exile BUT pre-astral express, like just thinking about it makes me want to cry, because imagine you are dan heng and you are excited to start a new life!!! a bit anxious given hat you've been through but you're determined to make it work!!!

but then the ghost of the lover of the dead person who you have the face of comes back to kill you and no one is spared, not even the people you were slowly trying to build relationships with is soooo............ like, dh must have persistently jumped from crew to crew after the first few times he made a mistake of staying for too long in a ship only for everyone in there to die or something like..... my wife.... fuck you blade i hope your back breaks when you're being pegged or something

man now im wondering how himeko and welt managed to convince dh to stay in the express for as long as he has, we know how he first met them but not like the rest of it, like im so curious how dh began getting comfortable and deciding to stay, also did blade try to kill him in the express??? i have so many questions but i fear the answers given mihoyo fucked up the hcq lore so badly i do not wish to see how they butcher the rest of the wife lore

Anyways im so sorry this is so long, you hit me w the dh feels, excuse me while i read some porn of my wife in order to calm down and wait for the pt2 of bedchamber 🙏🙏🙏🙏(p.s. mama mao you better be taking care of ur wrist pls ily/p xoxoxo)

DONT WORRY MY BELOVED ANON I can promise you absolute degeneracy after that opening scene 😞 literally the pov switches to mc right after and suddenly the narration gets 1000% funnier and nastier gsdldakdlahsjskv

also YESSS u are I are on the same wavelength anon, that's exactly how I imagine his pre-Express life to have been like! I think that's why Dan Heng starts off in the game as such a closed off person - my personal hc is that he never really moved into his own room on the Express because he was convinced he'd need to leave eventually. I can only imagine that he hadn't run into Blade while on the Express because Himeko and Welt didn't seem to recognize him at all. but as for how Himeko got him to stay, I'm not sure... by the point of March 7th joining, he does seem to be very fond of the place.

(also I died @ the blade pegging comment HELLLPP can one of the blade fuckers on my dash please help us get justice for danheng 🙏🙏🙏 HES IMMORTAL HIS BACK WILL HEAL)