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onewomancitadel · 2 years ago
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Hiya, it's been awhile lol
Just wanted to pop in I suppose, my classes ended so I've finally got some spare time now.
I might not send as many messages here anymore but I am still around, during my classes I'd usually message if you updated Skimming Eye but I wanna be clear I do read your other posts, it's just you put a shit ton of effort into your chapters it feels like I should give at least some base impressions rather than reading it and going "Neat."
I don't just pop in here just for fic updates, not sure if you care about that kind of thing but I wanted to tell you just in case
Speaking of Fics though, I left a Review on Wet Fire....
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Horny jail is calling you home Onewomancitadel
🤣
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Hope you're doing well 😄
Hi, it's great to hear from you again.
No worries, I figure some people come for my fanfic and some people come for my blog and the two don't necessarily crossover. You're free to come and go, since it is fandom and supposed to be a fun hobby, after all. I'm still here though. (:
Thank you for leaving a comment on Wet Fire! I'm not checking my inbox/replying to comments on AO3 until I've posted the next chapter of The Distance Which Fools the Skimming Eye. It's very kind of you though, and I look forward to reading it as a treat once I'm done.
I know how much effort it is to write comments, especially line-by-line (I often use Word Document for that myself), so I really don't have expectations beyond just asking for people to move on if they don't like my work. I really appreciate hearing from people who enjoy my fic though, so don't feel pressured to write comments in a certain way. Thank you for recognising my effort though, I do try really hard.
It is rather damning to be subjected to such a line I wrote in Wet Fire since I have been recently accused of being improper for shipping Knightfall as R/WBY is a kid's show and Cinder is evil. So, not really helping my case there.
I have some bad news though, I don't believe in horny jail, so you can't condemn me to that. I do think there's a difference between appropriately tagged (M-rated) fanfic of a pairing about two people in love and someone, say, with a hentai icon on a public website. (:
Hope you have a nice break! Thanks again for leaving a comment on Wet Fire. (:
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onewomancitadel · 3 years ago
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So admittedly I don't have much to add here except.
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Nice.
I cannot resist a good shitpost 😆
Is this a fic prompt?
Hope you're having a good one. (:
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onewomancitadel · 3 years ago
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Is this a fic prompt?
I mean it is almost Valentines day so....
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Hope you're having a good one. (:
Likewise 👍
I need lots of love and attention to get Chapter 13 out and then I am allowed to write smut. I'm not allowed to until I post it :(
I also have that addition to The One Known By Many Names to post...
Thank you for your enthusiasm as always.
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onewomancitadel · 2 years ago
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HOLY FUCK.
A Triple update!?
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You've out done yourself.
You really have...
I'm gonna read these as soon as I get the chance
On a bit more of a personal note I hope the last week or so has been nice and stress free to you, I recall you telling me there was some rough spots and that was a while ago now but still hopefully that's gotten better.
You've certainly made my day over here (well it's night actually but you get my meaning), Hell you dropped this update a day before my Birthday, I'm calling that a win lol
You have a good one. I gotta go to bed lol
I wanted to find a .gif of Donna in this sequence with Ten, alas, the gifsearcher is of no help.
Lol I feel a bit embarrassed because really three is still sort of behind, like it's a bare minimum to make up for the protracted time between updates. I won't whinge, I don't think this is the ask for it. Nevertheless, I hope you enjoy the update, I do really appreciate the enthusiasm.
Thank you for thinking of me. My dad is already running around after his surgery and my mum came and visited so that was really nice. It's good to hear from you and hope you are doing well!
And happy birthday! Hope you have a wonderful day and I've replied in time.
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onewomancitadel · 3 years ago
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I have to improve my mood to work on my fic.. does anybody want to share things that make them happy or their favourite stuff about Cinder. Or talk to me about my fic...
This is going to be kind of a scatter shot post so bear with me if it gets kinda un organized.
Man there are soo many ways to write Jaune/Cinder that are utterly fascinating.
Ever since I've been reading your first my mind's just been buzzing with ideas they are so many set ups and ideas that can throw these two together.
I've always liked the idea of this ship but besides smut there's very very few fics that do a genuine attempt with these two
I'm also real sucker for Villans that find Redemption in ways that don't involve dying
Don't mind me here as I list off a crap ton of fic ideas lol hopefully this isn't cringe haha
One way I've been thinking is after losing to Raven, Cinder finds herself rescued by the Arc family (not exactly sure how she'd and up in their area but that can be worked out) she's nursed to health by them, one of the youngest is initially scared by her Grimm arm but is later ecstatic when she realizes she can stretch the arm to do a long distance high five.
she comes to truly care about all of them and confides in Mr and Mrs Arc about what she's done to Jaune and it would end with her going to find him and Ruby and finding her own way to make ammends,
Another idea I've been thinking (hope your not sick of this trope lol) is Cinder (again post Raven fight) yet again on her own and planning revenge on Ruby on her own but encounters a small child on her own in the wilderness Cinder later learns she was used as test subject in Atlas in a attempt to be a weapon for them (in what way I haven't exactly plotted out maybe artificial Maiden? But I guess that's like a redundant Penny? Ah whatever I don't know yet but the idea is there...)
Cinder sympathizes but thinks the only way she can help is if she tries to dump her off with Ruby and Co, she does actually want to help the girl but she's not sure she can actually do anything. The girl begs Cinder not to leave when she does this so Cinder has a sort of temporary truce and stays with the group until the situation is resolved.
Jaune being good with kids bonds with her as well...
Que parenting shenanigans between Jaune and Cinder.
Like damn dude even if this paring doesn't become Cannon they're so many ideas fanfic writers could go for.
I feel like I've said too much here so I'm gonna switch topics and talk about your fic lol
I love the sort of understanding Jaune & Cinder have with each other, they don't really wanna fight anymore and they're beginning to accept that they like each other.
I also like that Jaune isn't nearly as subtle as he thinks he is and everyone thinks he's sleeping with someone haha
Also I love how Salem sorta cuts off her evil speech just to be like "Hi Theodore" like I'm sure it's meant to be taunting in someway I think? (Don't have the chapter in front of me right now can't really check) but I like to imagine it as genuinely joyful like she's mid evil rant but she just bumped into a friend at the supermarket so she's happy now XD
I'm sure that's probably not the intended way to view that scene but, still it's kinda funny.
Also mighty inconvenient timing with Jaune essentially admiting to Nora he might love his mystery friend, only for that Mystery Friend to be Cinder Fall.
I mean Jaune probably knew that would've blown up in his face at some point at that point he was probably just excited to finally talk about her in someway to his friends
Also I didn't interpret that "Being inside Cinder" quote to be anything sexual I thought it was referring to thier souls intertwining or merging due to the bond but low and behold I pop in over here and well..
Dude you must reside in the Sahara Desert cause you seem a little thirsty my dude. XD
Oh and on a final note don't stress about delays seriously I know you have a personal deadline you wanna reach but your chapters are like 10,000 words a pop. The wait is long sure I'll take it if it means the quality doesn't suffer
Dude I've waited far longer for far less don't worry about it, and even if your personal deadline rolls around and you aren't finished the fic, you probably will be close by that time anyway.
I'll just put my reply under a cut. (: First I'll say... you gave me the good fanfic feelings with the Jaune/Cinder parenting shenanigans lol, way to pull at my heartstrings!!!!!!!!! I think iressent is actually working on a similar fic premise so be sure to keep an eye out for that one!
You have some really interesting ideas, and I agree, there is so much potential for the two of them... my hesitance just comes from a place of 'is the story going to make me feel stupid?' and I'll be embarrassed and take all my toys home.
And yeah I mean... if there's one of those prompts you want me to write, say so, but if you want to write them it would be cool to see.
Regarding the second half and my fic: hee hee (: lol no that's exactly what I was going for with Theodore, thank you. Salem gives zero fucks, she is all performance, and she LOVES fucking with people. It's the most fun she has all day. I really subscribe to that 'tired immortal' thread with her. Nobody has surprised her in a long time.
I also like that Jaune isn't nearly as subtle as he thinks he is and everyone thinks he's sleeping with someone haha
Yes this was... very intentional on my part, mostly because I find it unbelievable no one would GUESS, but also because the guessing is probably very right and also wildly incorrect. Yes there is someone in there, no he's not sleeping with her... yes it's Cinder. They didn't quite guess that part. No, no they didn't. His date still turned up for the dance, though. I also like to imagine Jaune being silently tortured thinking about all of the sex they could have had. Bad Jaune. Stop thinking that.
I mean Jaune probably knew that would've blown up in his face at some point at that point he was probably just excited to finally talk about her in someway to his friends
I agree with you here and I think it's a good point. It's partly cathartic for him, and I also wanted to portray why his friends were important (Nora and Ren in particular - with their respective conversations and level of emotional acuity), because they do actually care about him and for one moment he can actually talk about it lol, THEN you get a nice dose of dramatic irony. It's not exactly something he can (yet) talk to Cinder about.
Also I didn't interpret that "Being inside Cinder" quote to be anything sexual I thought it was referring to thier souls intertwining or merging due to the bond but low and behold I pop in over here and well..
It's both, honestly - not sure I would say 'merging' but certainly touching - in my opinion, and if you interpreted it that way to begin with it works and your interpretation is - to use that terrible word - valid. I just think that physical/spiritual intimacy is very intertwined in this story and the same for Cinder - nobody can touch her, but he can.
Dude you must reside in the Sahara Desert cause you seem a little thirsty my dude. XD
Well... yeah... but I also think that physical intimacy/smut in a story does stuff thematically XD and like all good action, it's character-driven... I want them to have intense sex lol. They connect on a fundamental level. And I like their particular sexual dynamic in my head lol.
And thank you so much for the reassurance re: deadlines, I appreciate that a lot. Feeling pretty good about tonight's update, it was very helpful to chat about my fic today! Very very helpful!
Hope you are having a good one and cheers. <3 <3
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onewomancitadel · 3 years ago
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Hey Happy (late) Holidays!
I can't really make reviews right now but I just wanted to say Hot Damn your on a roll!
You've posted so much in such a short time it's insane.
That Chrismas story was especially excellent
chapter 10 of Skimming Eye was just 👌
I'd have rather done a review of each new story/chapter first, I'm just having issues finding the time but I'll get to it I promise lol
Hope your having a good time!
Also the subreddit TwoBestFriendsPlay send thier regards lol
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Keep on keeping on dude.
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Hope you had a Merry Christmas if you celebrate! And if not happy holidays! And Happy New Year! It's lovely to hear from you. Hope you're still enjoying Halo lol.
No worries about leaving comments, you do it if/when you feel like it. <3 <3 Glad to hear you enjoyed my new fic and Chapter 10 as well. That's the most important part.
Also, wow, what??? That's so crazy to see someone mentioning me XD and in the TwoBestFriends subreddit, I sort of vaguely know them. Well, if that user sees this: um, hope you don't feel put on the spot or anything, but if you enjoyed my stories, thank you! Hope you have a fab day! I'm not sure whether to blur their username out or something... it's a public comment and this is only my small little blog, and I mean, it's a positive thing from the sounds of it, so I hope it's alright to post? Though that being said, me too, yes, redemption arcs 4lyfe, 4eva. Absolutely not a point I'll ever let be up for debate lol.
Hope you have a good one and take care! <3 <3
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onewomancitadel · 3 years ago
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I also have that addition to The One Known By Many Names to post...
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Pretty sure I've said this already but that's my favorite out of your smaller fics, I recall you saying you wanted to only do a new chapter(s) to that after Skimming Eye had reached a certain point.
Didn't realize that was so (relatively) soon.
I'm hyped.
I mean I'm hyped for both fics, but whatever comes first lol.
Aww, thank you. <3 <3 <3 But yeah it is sort of soon, but I have to get Chapter 13 done first. I've seen other authors receive asks from people demanding where the next chapter for xyz fic is and 'why are you on Tumblr not writing'-type messages, so I'm very fearful of getting in trubble lol. I can't imagine any of my readers are that mean though, I'm just a nervous wreck and I don't like being in trubble
That's very sweet you like that one though!! I had so much fun writing it. (: I think, not tooting my own horn, that the second chapter of Golden-faced is the thing I'm least embarrassed about, and I like the Wound of Love, but The One Known by Many Names has a very special essence for me. But I couldn't choose my favourite because they are all special, when I'm not being down on myself, because I love Jaune and Cinder!!!
Anyway, I've been too nice about myself so I need to say something mean to counteract it. I'm a dummy idiot who can't write for shit. Ok I feel better now
Lol!!
Thanks again for reading btw. (:
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onewomancitadel · 3 years ago
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Yooooo!
That looks good
That's a really different take on Cinder the hair style especially is a unique flair as well, all wild and free.
Really like that you kept the scars as well
Nice stuff 👌
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Oopsie it took me a bit to get to this, sorry. <3
Thank you (: yeah it is a bit different. I intended it to be redeemed!endgame!Cinder lol. I like the 'wild and free'!
I really like her scars and I think they're a meaningful part of her design. <3
Anyway, hope you are having a great day and the move went well. (:
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onewomancitadel · 3 years ago
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Heyo me again.
Reviews finally up sorry for the wait, it takes me a couple hours to write it out as I'm on my phone and there's so much to talk about...
Not to mention I wanted to do this yesterday but by God that was a day.
Anyway I said this in the review but I noticed a pattern in your stories and made a thing
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Have a good one. 😃
Lol no worries about the wait!!!! It's sort of good actually because it means I have something to look forward in the latter bit between chapters.
I hope Halo went well, and otherwise your day wasn't too hectic. I would play it with Dad if I were home but apparently there's no co-op yet? I wouldn't on my own.
Re: the meme, is everybody else cheering when I say cunt? Is this meme 1:1 with the experience? I think I have more familiarity with it in Australian English (mad cunt, sick cunt) but I generally prefer it over other referents to the vulva. I think pussy works when it's the other party saying it, but generally in all of the perspective mentioning it has been Cinder lol. It's just more straightforward.
I'm not a fan of euphemism in reference either. I am totally okay with metaphorical sex and being totally ham with that kind of thing, but when it comes to sex itself I sort of think it's like, referring to a sword in the middle of combat as the long swift pointy thing. We know it's a sword, call it a sword.
Manhood, flower, molten core (is it a nuclear fucking reactor?), all of those I really don't like. I've seen some very good smut in recent years which sheds all of that away, but that's in fanfic. With that being said I do want to emphasise I'm not the first to just go simply.
Thank you for your wonderful comment by the way, I'm typing out my reply now. (:
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onewomancitadel · 3 years ago
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I know I have been messaged before about Skimming Eye hitting x number of hits but I don’t want to sound entitled, like I am very very aware that doesn’t translate to actual readers (or people who like my fic), I’m very aware it’s not good.
C'mon dude your doing great, stop looking at the negatives, I get criticism is important but not when you drown yourself in it.
Oh and you've also got like
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That many comments. The attention is there for sure, also the number of people that read it but don't review is probably also a reasonably high number.
Pretty sure most wouldn't consider this mediocre. Especially not when each chapter a little over 10,000 words like wow Holy shit, upload schedule might not be to your liking, sure but you sure leave us with a lot of meat to chew on.
also slightly off topic I might've said this before but it's really hard to run a prompt idea by you cause it's like "if I wait a few weeks this may very well just happen in Skimming Eye anyway sooo it might be redundant to ask lol" so I make myself get creative as possible with the prompts I send your way haha 😄
(Psst btw don't know if you remember me talking about this but that one fic idea about Cinder being treated by the Arc family after being defeated by Raven is all yours, I realize prompts aren't a focus right now but regardless it is what one might refer to as Free Real-Estate )
Speaking of which have you considered doing prompts in between chapters of Skimming Eye?
Like I know you wanna go full speed into Skimming Eye cause of your deadline but a rare prompt in between might do a lot to ease burn out and help with any potential Writers block or if you're getting bored with any one idea...
Mind you the last thing you probably wanna do is rush right to the end cause your deadline is closer then you'd like it to be, soooo I dunno, it's an idea...
I can't see the positives, I'm sorry. I can only see my failure. It really hurts. It's really embarrassing, too. I'm terrified of people thinking I'm conceited, and equally terrified of people thinking I'm pathetic feeling so sorry for myself. It's really hard for me to run my blog/be in fandom sometimes, I love it as a hobby but I'm also just really socially poor - I do own that though. I've become socially reliant on the Internet a lot more than I used to be too, given... you know... everything. I would be at home with my parents this time of year (and I live fairly far away from my best mate now and travel makes me antsy), but my mum had surgery again (not bad news - first was good, second was just a necessary, separate procedure) and I really didn't want to risk getting her sick when she's recovering (even vaxxed).
"if I wait a few weeks this may very well just happen in Skimming Eye anyway sooo it might be redundant to ask lol" so I make myself get creative as possible with the prompts I send your way hah
Yes, but it is really amusing for me.
(Psst btw don't know if you remember me talking about this but that one fic idea about Cinder being treated by the Arc family after being defeated by Raven is all yours, I realize prompts aren't a focus right now but regardless it is what one might refer to as Free Real-Estate )
Thank you, I do appreciate that one but there is a reason I haven't filled it, and I really don't... want.. to say so yet. I may in the future, it's on my mind still.
Like I know you wanna go full speed into Skimming Eye cause of your deadline but a rare prompt in between might do a lot to ease burn out and help with any potential Writers block or if you're getting bored with any one idea...
No you're right, it's just I have another longfic in the background along with a ~30k fic, and writing those alongside Skimming Eye is eating up my spare time. I also have a third chapter planned for The One Known By Many Names, and a fourth. (Rule of four lol).
The other fics are AU enough that I can actually like... write them after V9 conceivably if it doesn't make me cry but Vacuo makes me a cry a little, but Skimming Eye will be done.
Thanks for your ask. Hope you're having a good one.
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onewomancitadel · 3 years ago
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The natural extension to that: Cinder and Yang as sisters. Hee hee!
Pretty fitting as they both have issues with being abandoned though in ways unique to both of them.
Yes quite.
As @branwyns said Cinder foils every member of team RWBY in one manner or another, which is suspicious, but the symbolic sisters thread >:)
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onewomancitadel · 3 years ago
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I keep saying to myself, 'I'll put it up tonight' as opposed to waiting for the forthcoming weekend again. I also keep getting nervous about it. I have issues
Uhhhh....
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Please? 😅
Ok I'll see what I can do
The reasons I wait for the weekends is that one time I had an anon tell me that was the only time they could read chapters and I figure that's when most people might be reading anyway.
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onewomancitadel · 3 years ago
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Screw it, I like easter egg hunts so I searched through Chapter 1 again and upon examination I think I noticed some...
You'll have to correct me though I might be seeing differences where they're aren't any...
It was fitting that she be here, the blackest of omens, tar-dark with her own wet blood. Swollen and as scattered as the moon. She was breathing in broken fits, curled over on the floor in a hidden alcove, a feral animal making its nest. The night grew long, and it had fallen with a foreboding bearing.
That seems to all be new.
There was a second where they stood facing each other unmoving where they were not enemies, and the fire simply danced lazily as if it were a bonfire and not trying to burn down Atlas for the laugh of it. She was just a woman in front of him, with bloodstained clothes. Then it righted itself and he saw who she was again. He thought she would be angry, but instead something shuttered itself secretly away in her. She gripped her Grimm arm.
This whole part is different and longer then I remember it being, I also recall some foreshadowing about her arm that isn't there anymore.
Then she grinned, madly or perhaps even excitedly, and in one swift motion took off, flame in hand. It was thunderous as she broke through the wall
I think that's new? I don't recall the "madly or perhaps excitedly" bit but maybe I'm crazy here
I probably missed more then that but that's what immediately stuck out to me...
Have a good one lol
O fuck I didn't think anybody would bite. XD your choose of what you'd like lol!
Yes that was the change I pegged as the that might be noticed. Well, the new first line was the third line originally, so section's not new, it's just swapped around and more tightly edited. It's the only line I like in the entire fic.
The second bit is longer yes. :D wow you have a good memory!!! and yeah I took one line out which felt really clunky ('vaguely prophetic'), I don't think it was necessary.
Now third here, yes. :D :D :D wow you got most of them! There are one or two bits I can think of that are refinements you missed (a few lines taken out, some dialogue edited, one line from Cinder thrown in) but you got the big one. How many times have you read it?
But yeah I won't go ahead and edit anything more, unless I pick up on errors. I just had this 'aha' moment when I realised what made more sense as the first line... overall I think it's better but I don't want people reading to feel betrayed I've changed it. XD
Well done! I hope you enjoyed the recent chapter btw, sorry I've pushed forward this week's again... hope you are having a good start to the week!
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onewomancitadel · 3 years ago
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I'm not even sure that Emerald would be particularly accepting. Totally confused and probably extremely suspicious. She got away from Cinder and most importantly Salem, so why the fuck is Cinder dating the guy on her new team?
Yeah in chapter 6 of Skimming Eye it seems Emerald is just really happy to have Mercury back but it's not like everyone's besties now.
Emerald tried to be there for Cinder time and time again and it didn't work but the boyfriend of Pyrrha Nikos is somehow buddy buddy with her and seemingly knows more about Cinder then she did?
She's only going to be more curious... not less.
In terms of the other cast "accepting Cinder"
I mean if Yang had an idea of Cinder's past she'd probably understand of her actions pre-Fall of Beacon anyway (Yang's fear of abandonment would probably make her sympathetic to her past)
Ruby could maybe roll around to being okay with it maybe Ren as well with some convincing
But Nora?
Oh man she'd be (pretty rightfully) fucking livid and I doubt it'd be Cinder she'd be tearing into here, it'd be Jaune for even trying to help her.
I'm not entirely sure how Weiss or Blake would react...
Like Blake's an ex terrorist sure but she got out and had guilt over their presence in Vale
Cinder doesn't really have that....
Ultimately though if Cinder doesn't want to make those connections she won't, she'll just work with Jaune.
But equally if that meant Jaune would slowly be outcast from his community I'm not certain Cinder would let that happen, she'd work with them for him if necessary, with the current state of thier relationship so far it's a safe guess that the last thing she wants is for her to be the cause of Jaune being all alone because he tried to help her.
I dunno your post just got me thinking is all lol
Yay, fun ask.
Well, Emerald also never picked up, not until she left, really, that their relationship was truly unequal and from Cinder's perspective essentially like a business transaction. There was no way she would have ever been accepting of Emerald's affection then. I think it must be confusing for Emerald especially once she's accepted Cinder as a person she had to get away from.
Those are some interesting points on characterisation. I do think broadly Cinder won't actually be a long-term problem, especially with Emerald and probably the sympathetic treatment of Salem down the line, but I do love a bit of conflict and angst.
And yeah I think the other characters and their reaction to the relationship depends a lot on how things are revealed... what canon decides to do is different from my fic obviously.
But equally if that meant Jaune would slowly be outcast from his community I'm not certain Cinder would let that happen, she'd work with them for him if necessary, with the current state of thier relationship so far it's a safe guess that the last thing she wants is for her to be the cause of Jaune being all alone because he tried to help her.
Well, I think Cinder has motivating factors independent of Jaune to help. There are actually two threads to tease out - her allegiance to 'good' and her separate personal relationship with Jaune. I do conceive of these as different metrics to gauge, even if they are in some ways interdependent. Canon-wise I think it's almost certain she'll going through moral/spiritual/psychological transformation, so that's a given. I'm not sure she would end up only helping them because of Jaune.
With that being said, obviously half the conversation here is about canon and the other half is about my longfic, and I think your interpretation is very interesting. I have a lot of thoughts about it for Skimming Eye and in the upcoming chapters I want to cover more of Cinder's perspective.
This is a lot of stuff I enjoy thinking about and am preventing myself from elaborating further to save for the fic. XDD But I would absolutely agree with that last line quoted. If anything I think that makes those two metrics I mentioned and how they interact more interesting and I am having fun expanding on that in the rest of the story. :D
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onewomancitadel · 3 years ago
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so if anybody wants to cheer me up with comments on my fic or asks about it.. *twiddles fingers together* <3 <3 it would be very appreciated.....
Ask and yee shall receive...
I mean, I wanted to do this anyway this is like 2 or 3 weeks short lol
I've finally left a review(well it's more like a series of reactions really)of your most recent chapter apologies if it's not as wordy as last time but I did really enjoy it.
Have a good one :D
Thank you! I just replied to it now. Don't worry about it being late or anything - there's never any expectation of comments I just love whingeing and whining and moaning for attention (:
I really like the reaction style of comment lol it's lot of fun to read. It's interesting and very useful to see what/how stuff resonates with readers.
Hope your week has been less busy and your laptop got fixed!
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onewomancitadel · 3 years ago
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Hey, just finished re reading the newest chapter.
Man that chapter was fucking aces.
I'll write much, much longer thoughts on this eventually, (I still need to put reviews on prior chapters 😅)
She whispered the truth of what she knew now into his scalp. She could accept it, now. She ran from it, and tried to call it anything but what it was, but she could see it, as clearly as she could see the pulse in his neck hasten.
She totally says "I love you" here right?
God that's a great bit, just the description alone sells it rather then have us outright see (for lack of a better word) her vocalization.
Also her ditching the arm and the mask?
And holding off on killing?
I love the smell of character development in the morning.
Also yeah I'm doing alright thanks! In the middle of moving to Toronto so I'm a bit hectic at the moment 😁
However it's been awhile since you posted and I figured you might want some raw reactions.
Hiiiiii (: <3 I'm so glad you enjoyed it, yay. I do very much like hearing from you now, yes, it's the highlight of my day, but no rush on the AO3 comments. Moving is so exhausting!!!
She totally says "I love you" here right?
God that's a great bit, just the description alone sells it rather then have us outright see (for lack of a better word) her vocalization.
I appreciate that commentary very much, because I am not one of those people who thinks 'I love you' is overblown in romance (in fact recognisable set-ups and payoffs is how readers relate to story structures...) but also I did have a few reasons for not directly writing it, which is as you've mentioned, and also other reasons, because payoff. (:
Sorry I am such an unmitigated sap. :(
But like Chapters 10-12 I had people sad (a very good thing, because it means I'm doing something right) that Jaune and Cinder weren't together and they were separated, but also I knew exactly what romantic direction I was going in and I had to bite my tongue so hard, and now I'm expecting the opposite reaction, which is that I'm going way too hard XD
Also her ditching the arm and the mask?
And holding off on killing?
I love the smell of character development in the morning.
Yay :D :D :D
I know Cinder's redemption arc is a hard sell for a lot of people and that's why I ended up going with the length of this fic (though I think in canon it's obviously going to look a little different, especially given the medium differences, and Skimming Eye is the Great Lovesong of Jaune and Cinder, not team R/WBY lol, as much as I want to balance it) so I'm very concerned about the landing of it. I obviously have a lot of opinions about Cinder in canon and her motivations compared to the other villains which you have probably seen me talk about before lol.
On the other hand, the part that death-by-redemption, and a lot of - let's say simplistically written redemption arcs - miss is post-redemption Acts of Good, and what that looks like, and whether that's a struggle, and what it looks like to reaffirm goodness. I also think that sometimes personality transplants happen. I'm drawing from my own fanon experience here, but there are a lot of Ben Solos I've seen where none of Kylo Ren is really recognisable, and a lot of what makes Ben Solo interesting is exactly who he is as Kylo Ren... idk, like I hate the Smuggler Ben Solo characterisation where he's a smarmy version of his dad, that type of thing. There's a lot I love about Cinder (high drama, ill-tempered, brooding) that I don't think would need to be aspects of her temperament erased in a redemption arc.
So hopefully I am successful in that aspect. (:
Also of course I have written about Masks and Monstrousness so the mask and arm had to go at the same time. :D
Although if you don't mind me talking myself up, I was very proud that I managed to line up the elements of the very chthonic Summer Maiden and revisit themes of mercy... and the first time Cinder tries to spare a Maiden is a death-themed Maiden, lol, and then also in the process has to get the would-be Maiden to help her. It's exactly my type of (and the show's to be honest) yummy yummy patterning and symmetry which caters only to me lol. :D :D
Thanks for your ask and again so happy you enjoyed the chapter!!! You take care!! Hope the move goes well! <3 <3 <3 <3
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