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aroaessidhe · 2 years ago

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2022 reads // twitter thread

The Fable of Wren

YA contemporary about a teen in a small southern town who lives with their uncle & spends their time with the birdwatching society looking for a rare local finch

until their uncle & then another birdwatcher dies, and they have to investigate to discover the truth

#The Fable of Wren #aroaessidhe 2022 reads #yeah this was....uh #the writing is pretty bad which is the cause of most of my problems i guess #idk if it’s trying to be atmospheric or magical realism vibes or what but that does not come across #its trying to have vibes and it has 0 vibes #there’s also like… it’s in first person but the writing style of the prose is very formal but their dialogue is written with a very souther #southern accent so that comes off weird. write the prose like that too coward #i fully kept thinking their dialogue was a different character #a lot of random deep lines that just feel odd #it also has that -character says something generic and reasonable -character blows up at them and an argument starts which feels very “plot #notes: and then they have an argument”#also what is this a birdwatching cult. i feel like if you just called this group birdwatchers that would make sense but Citizens? you sound #like a cult. i was trying to figure out what even it was about but they’re literally just a weird group of birdwatchers who have some brief #mythology about a rare-ish bird? why are you writing this in a way that makes it sound like a cult?#the friend dude is annoying in like. the way he's written is annoying #also i read this bc the mc is ace but it's literally like. in the last chapter they allude to the fact that they don't want to date #also are they hallucinating their uncles ghost like every 50 pages #what's that about

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