#onwards with the plot

[vigilskeep]

did it ever get explained why davrin didn’t die when he killed the first archdemon? seems like that’s a pretty big oversight right??

LMAO no i don’t think they did. which is funny because i was STRESSED. the whole time i was like okay well if a warden didn’t die then how do we have any evidence that the archdemon really died hmmmm???

[forgettable-au]

I'm curious... Are we gonna go back to the surface at some point? Would it be often like every other chapter? Absolutely adore Flowery and Papyrus' interactions they're wonderfully written

YES THEY WILL APPEAR AGAIN

Papyrus and Flowey are basically the B plot :D

They're gonna appear from time to time and they're doing their own separate thing ^^ (wich connects to the A plot)

[marcmarcmomarc]

Congrats to Inside Out 2 for not becoming the eighth Pixar movie in a row to feature a “Plot-Mandated Friendship Failure”.

[bvckbiter]

man i really think about how gory the deaths in tlo were. beckendorf gets blown up, michael yew (presumably) falls to death along with an an entire bridge and some monsters, several ares campers get swallowed by the lydian drakon, silena gets half her face melted off, ethan gets debris in his stomach and pitched FROM THE HEAVENS,, luke's hands are burned to a crisp before he stabs himself in the armpit

[uwudonoodle]

I saw Onward last night for the first time. It was fantastic! Why doesn't anybody talk about it? I feel like I should be seeing memes from this everywhere.

[mandg-readings]

DUN DUN DAAAAA... this is honestly as much of a surprise to me as it is to you, three hours ago I said I'd start making a dent in it and had enough in me to completely smash it. So the new mic makes editing a lot easier and I guess I'm still in the weird insomnia productivity hyper-focus stage? Enjoy it while it lasts😢

[podcastwizard]

i know that this is in no way an original thought and obviously there has to be some pairing down from concept to product but it seems like every disney movie since frozen has had an insanely cool story idea that got paired down and paired down until it was the most toothless version possible and it drives me nuts

[lineffability]

"Wait, what the He– what the fuck happened, Aziraphale?! What about the Book? The Metatron? Why did you come back? Did it work?! What happened?"

Aziraphale opened his mouth, then closed it again. He suddenly looked a little embarrassed. Finally, face down and mumbling into his collar, looking almost a little non-directionally annoyed, he said, simply: "Pushed him."

"What? You what?"

Crowley's eyebrows rose higher than a kite; his mouth dropped open in the telltale way that usually sparked mischievous delight in Aziraphale. Even now, a little rebellious joy jumped up for a moment in his chest, before it was dragged back down into a pit of despair that had taken up permanent residence in Aziraphale's stomach. But a little pride stayed behind, lurking sinfully in the corners of his mouth. 

“Pushed him. Into a bookshelf. And…” Aziraphale mimed a falling weight. “Buried him beneath it.”

Crowley, unlike Aziraphale, suddenly seemed not to have a single care in the world. Bastard that he was, he threw his head back and laughed, and the sound ripped so loudly through the silence of the bookshop that Aziraphale joined in nervously, just so he would have something to do. 

"You pushed the Metatron into a bookshelf?"

"I just said that, yes. No need to repeat it back to me." 

"Oh, you wonderful bastard."

[continue reading Meanwhile the World Goes On Chapter 19]

[read from the beginning]

[fixyourwritinghabits]

Hello! Thank you for every advice you give here!

This might sound like a weird ask, but I don't know how to write the second(or more) draft. I've heard some advice about rewriting and not editing, but every time I try to write the second draft, I just end up copying the first one, with very few differences.

So my question is, what is your way of writing the second draft and if you have any advice on that? I know some things that work for some don't work for others, but I just can't seem to find the right way.

Oh, second drafts. Only the most difficult writing step after drafting, followed by the most difficult step of writing the third draft.

The good news is that almost no one pulls together their story on the second draft. If your first draft is putting down the bones of the story, the second is figuring out where to lay the connective tissue. Maybe you've got too many bones, maybe you don't have enough. Maybe some of your bones are too short, or too misshapen to work. The second draft is getting that story skeleton together, knowing full well you're gonna need to fix some of those bones first.

Get yourself a plan to put that skeleton together - make an outline. I swear I'm not the sworn enemy of pantsers that i sometimes seem to be (it's professional jealousy, I swear), but if you don't have an outline, now is the time to get one. If you do, go back and revise that first. You'll want to know what you want the story to become from the pile of bones you're working from.

Not enough bones - identify what you're missing. If you're like me, sometimes while drafting you write 'figure this shit out later' and then forget to do so. Thanks for nothing, Past Me. But chances are your story needs some added scenes, more character development, etc. Identifying those missing pieces and fleshing out your outline can help you tackle a second draft.

Too many bones - figure out what needs to be cut. Not every scene is going to be worth keeping no matter how attached to them you are. If you're on the fence about a scene, consider if it serves to move the plot forward, develops the characters, or establishes important worldbuilding. If the scene meanders plotlessly, repeats character beats instead of expanding on them, or seems to suck the oxygen out of the story, you may have to rethink or remove them.

These bones don't fit - figure out what scenes are lacking. Another thing I tend to do in first drafts is sell my scenes short. I just don't think of the best outcome, the most dramatic climax, or a great setting when I'm trying to figure out what happens. In going through your novel, think about each scene carefully. Should this argument take place in a deserted library, or would it be more emotional and dramatic on a crowded train? If the villain's plot seems small, how can you make him a greater threat?

Uuuh bro that's not a human bone - revising scenes that went off the rails. If you're gearing up for NaNoWriMo yet again, you might know the feeling of writing pages of bullshit to make that wordcount. It could be good bullshit! It could be really fun! But if it sticks out like a sore thumb in the story, it may be best to set aside to figure out what to make out of it later.

You're not going to get everything right in the second draft either, so don't over-stress in trying to get your story whipped into shape. But you will be better off after giving those bones a little polish and assembling them into what could conceivably pass for a decent skeleton, one that you won't mind sharing with others to see what other work it might need. Good luck!

[ribesrubrum]

I need to find whoever said that gym leader certification was easy and put them six feet under! Immediately!

Not that I'm complaining, of course. I wouldn't even be attempting something like this if I didn't have all of the confidence in the world that I could pull it off, and if I didn't want to do this! But it really insults the level of work that these good people have had to put in, in order to become a good gym leader. But so far, I've been passing all of my aptitude tests with flying colors, especially with help in studying from my beloved and the others.

As a matter of fact, I'm going to be taking a brief trip to Aspertia City after the holidays in order to shadow the gym leader there for a bit! I'm...anxious, I admit, so I'm likely going to be even more scarce while I review all of the materials necessary. Cardigan's going to have her work cut out for her dealing with my nerves for this...

[jakeperalta]

watched we live in time and florence + andrew were of course wonderful but when andrew's character was like "at our age we have to consider whether we want kids soon" I was like AT OUR AGE?? 🤨🤨 and then when replied she was 34 I had to laugh... personally I think if I was looking for someone to play a character aged 34-44 I would simply not cast a 27 year old

[jeza-red]

That scene between Shuro and Laios hits hard.

Because I can understand perfectly where Laios is coming from...

And yet still, I, an autistic person myself, would punch him in the face just like Shuro did and told him to fuck off.

Which goes to show you that autistic people are not a monolith, and hanging onto a dichotomy of "Laios good-Shuro bad" stands on a false premise that one of them has to be a mean neurotypical and the other a pure neurodivergent baby.

[repurposedmeatlocker]

There is a super annoying review of Lady and the Tramp on here trying to say that the film isn't about classism. While half-baked yes, I think it is very clear, ESPECIALLY with the historical context of romance films that came out at the same time, that it can't be seemingly pushed to the side simply because it is used as "dressing" for a film otherwise about dogs falling in love.

[morningflew]

could i possibly interest some of y’all in post-dance things 👀

[atlantablack]

alright, I've written 200k this year, time to pack it up, goals accomplished etc no more writing for me, I'm out

[i-hate-harem-novels]

Do you ever, ever just read chapter one of a webtoon and feel "woah, it's so good! I wonder what happens next..." And then it turns out to be a harem novel.