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[lagaylife-france]

Le beau mec du jour par lagaylife.fr

[vcaart]

“…Her sweetened breath, and her tongue so mean… With her straw-blonde hair, her arms hard and lean… She’s the angel of small death and the codeine scene…”

(Angel of Small Death and the Codeine Scene, Hozier)

[gregoryfitoussihot]

[beauxmecnu]

[lagaylife-france]

Le beau mec du jour par lagaylife.fr

[vcaart]

“…Her sweetened breath, and her tongue so mean… With her straw-blonde hair, her arms hard and lean… She’s the angel of small death and the codeine scene…”

(Angel of Small Death and the Codeine Scene, Hozier)

[gregoryfitoussihot]

[cutvdo]

Shadowpeach Bio Parent AU - summary

When I read a long fanfic I like I do a little summary on what happens each chapter so I can easily reread the parts I want.

So I did one for @kyri45 Shadowpeach Bio Parent AU comic.

link to comic master post

THIS IS SPOILERS, GO READ THE COMIC BEFORE READING THIS!!!!

The way it goes is "summary (characters that show up) extra". The extra is like if someone is blushing or no-glamour, easier for compilations. and Sun = Sun Wukong.

P.1: First Arc 1) master post 2) we will co-mentor MK (MK Sun Mac) 3) MK has shadow powers, Mama!Macaque (MK Sun Mac) 4) MK has 4 ears, he is perfect (MK Sun Mac) 5) Don't you know powers are genetic (🔥Redson MK) 6) Pigsy phone call (Sun Mac 🐷Pigsy-phone📞) 7) too much noise (MK Sun Mac) 8) we are related talk (MK Sun Mac) 9) Pigsy shovel talk (Sun Mac 🐷Pigsy)

P.2: Week 1 and 2 1) MK corner (MK Sun Mac) 2) new clothes (MK) bonus) PIF finds out (🔥Red 🪭PIF Mac) 3) afraid to apologies (Sun Mac MK-sleeping) 4) train Kaiju form with Mac (MK Sun Mac) 5) Mac apologies to MK (MK Sun Mac) 6) MK planed this (MK Sun) reddit-ing 7) Redson and Mei find out (MK 🔥Red 🐉Mei 🪭PIF) 8) Redson gives MK support (MK 🔥Red)+(Sun 🐃DBK) 9) Bull gives advice to Sun (Sun 🐃DBK)

P.3: Training montage 1) Sun stepping down from an argument (MK Sun Mac) 2) never gives up (MK Sun Mac) Sun blush🔴 3) Grooming train (MK Sun Mac Monkeys) 4) more for MK (Sun Mac 👓Tang) bonus) Family dinner (MK Sun Mac) 5) soft ears (MK Sun Mac 🔥Red 🐉Mei) Mac blush🔴 6) MK's room (MK Sun Mac)

P:4: Un-divorce arc 1) APOLOGY (Sun Mac) glamour-less Sun 2) Mec nightmare (Sun Mac Monkeys) 3) Sun nightmare (Sun Mac Monkeys) 4) made bed bigger (Sun Mac Monkeys) 5) 🍼MK is baby now (MK Sun Mac) 6) Mama Mamacaque (MK Sun Mac) 7) Mamacaque shadow play (MK Mac Sun-watch) 8) Want parenthood talk (Sun Mac) 9) family cuddle (MK Sun Mac) 10) MK wakes-up to family cuddle (MK Sun-Mac-sleep) bonus) Spicynoodle (MK 🔥Red 🐉Mei)

P.5: More than a successor 1) 2am waiting for Mac (Sun Mac) 2) MK sees past (Sun Mac 🐷Pigsy-phone📞) 3) giving Pigsy and Tang advice (MK 🐷Pigsy 👓Tang Sun-Mac-phone📞) 4) Sun freakout (Sun Mac) 5) not a nightmare (MK Sun Mac) glamour-less Mac 6) it was the only way (MK Sun Mac) 7) family hug (MK Sun Mac) talk 8) Sandy therapy (MK 🐱Sandy) 9) not a successor anymore (MK Sun Mac 🐱Sandy) 10) continue part 9 (MK Sun Mac) 11) Xiaotian , new weapon (MK Sun Mac)

P.6: Training Arc 2, Electric Boogaloo 1) ask ⚔️Chiyou[god of war] (MK Sun Mac) 2) making weapon (MK Sun Mac) Mac blush🔴 3) weapon revile (MK Sun Mac) 4) human Sun and Mac (MK Sun Mac) 5) Lilo and stitch (🐷Pigsy MK Sun-phone📞) 6) Sun nightmare: cuddle prison (MK Sun Mac) 7) Sun nightmare: family cuddle (MK Sun Mac) 8) 3 monkies clinging (MK Sun Mac) 9) Red and MK sparring (MK 🔥Red 🐉Mei) MK-blush!🔴🔴🔴 10) puberty talk (MK Sun Mac) Mac-blush🔴🔴 11) puberty talk + tickle attack (MK Mac) Mac-MK-blush🔴 12) trans (MK Sun Mac)

P.7: Full Moon Eclipse 1) Mac's cold, Sun takes to hot springs (Sun Mac) Sun-blush🔴 2) why Mac was cold (Sun Mac) 3) MK goes to Red to clear misunderstanding (MK 🔥Red Bob) 4) MK and Red talking, demon etiquette, white hair (MK 🔥Red) 5) not a freak (MK 🔥Red 🐃DBK Sun) everyone-blush LMAO🔴🔴🔴🔴 6) Mac explaining to MK about white hair (MK Mac 🔥Red Sun) Sun-blush🔴 What cover text says: link 7) parents reactions (Sun 🐃DBK Mac 🪭PIF) 8) eclipse (MK Mac Sun 🐉Mei-phone📞) glamour-less Mac & MK + white fur 9) fully charged, MK makes a quick call (MK Mac Sun) glamour-less Mac & MK + white fur 10) MK calls Mei (MK 🐉Mei-phone📞) 11) Sun forgive Mac (Mac Sun) glamour-less Sun 12) Baba Mama (MK Mac Sun) Sun-cry 13) Sun's and Mac's reactions, Heaven! (Mac Sun MK-sleep) Mac-Sun-cry Sun-blush🔴

P.8: A Dark, Long Night 1) Nezha you are joking? (MK 🛞Nezha 👺li-jing) 2) Mac stops Wukong from being impulsive (Mac Sun) 3) MK gets a circlet and a contract (MK 🛞Nezha 👺li-jing 🌿Guanyin) HURT ANGST 4) Family meeting (Sun Mac 🐷Pigsy 👓Tang 🐉Mei 🐱Sandy 🔥Red) at FFM 5) bonding over daddy issues (MK 🛞Nezha) 6) tied name contract (MK 🛞Nezha 🌿Guanyin 🔥Red) 7) Nezha gives Red and MK space (MK 🛞Nezha 🔥Red) 8) Red is upset (MK 🔥Red) MK-Red-blush🔴 + color🎨 History from when the comic was posted: We got a challenge from kyri54 to make the comic tag trend, and this is the result LINK to kyri54 post. God the day of was wild, so many posts. 9) MK self sacrifice did damage to his loved ones part 2, electric bogaloo (MK 🔥Red) MK-Red-blush🔴 What cover text says: link 10) 🎉KISS!!!!!!!! (MK 🔥Red) MK-Red-blush🔴 color🎨 11) kissing for 20 panels (MK 🔥Red) MK-Red-blush🔴 12) Nezha walk in on them (MK 🔥Red 🛞Nezha) MK-Red-blush🔴 13) MK asks for Mac's help (🔥Red Mac Sun 🐷Pigsy MK) Red-blush🔴 14) a distraction and a challenge (🔥Red Mac Sun 🐉Mei 🐷Pigsy 👓Tang MK) Red-blush🔴 15) Wukong took the news about MK's circlet very well /j (Sun Mac 🐷Pigsy 👓Tang 🐉Mei 🐱Sandy 🔥Red) animation! Sun-kaiju 16) girl fight! (Mac Sun 🐉Mei) kaiju 17) see yourself the way I see you (Mac Sun) links to the flashbacks from the show: link link link 18) Show Them The Real Sun Wukong! (Sun Mac 🐷Pigsy 👓Tang 🐉Mei 🔥Red) Sun-kaiju Red-blush🔴 19) December 28th 1PM ET

Of course the comic didn't end yet (I will cry when it does) so I will edit the post from time to time.

[strawberrylabs]

I have FINALLY finished the raffle fic from ages ago!

the raffle winner was @stellas-starry-stories13

the 1k words was split into 3 seperate smaller fics about Lyney, Freminet and Cyno if their lover, who is cursed to be blunt and speak their mind, were to be kidnapped! I hope you enjoy!

TW: kidnapping, violence

Lyney(442):

Lyney was panicking.

He had run around your shared home 3 times now, calling your name near every nook and cranny he can think of– in the wardrobe, under the bed, heck even in the broom cupboard.

But he got no response, only a plume of dust kicked up by his hurried movements.

He sat on the end of the bed he had shared with you just a few hours prior, the warmth that was shared, sapped by the cold of night.

‘Where are you…’ 

The magician moved, forcing himself to continue searching– until something dropped from the sheets to his feet

A treasure hoarder insignia.

He knew where you were.

‘Bastards… I’ll find you. I promise.’

As Lyney made his way to the nearest treasure hoarder camp, his mind was bombarded with worries.

A particular thought swam higher than the rest; one regarding your curse. 

It wasn’t a secret– unfortunately– that you were cursed to always speak your mind. Literally.

You had done well to avoid giving out sensitive information.

If you were to be questioned about the Hearth’s whereabouts, you would instead say what else you were thinking about; in this situation, that would likely be how much you dislike your captors, or something else the hoarders would not like to hear.

Treasure Hoarders were not known for their patience, or their forgiveness. 

Whilst deep in thought, he had reached the nearest camp. 

Which luckily, was the right one.

Bow drawn, Lyney quietly approached…

He stopped when he heard voices.

‘For the last time, where do the Fatui keep their wealth in Fontaine?!’

‘Your breath really stinks. And you have something stuck in your teeth-’

A loud slap is heard. Lyney draws his bow tighter, string almost snapping.

‘For Archons’ sake! I thought you said it’d be easy to get information from her!’

Lyney finally peers around the corner to see the treasure hoarders arguing

He also sees you, covered in dirt and bruises.

Lyney lets his arrow fly.

It makes contact with the first man– the one who had questioned you.

The arrow explodes into fireworks, Rosseland appearing from the fire, effectively drawing the attention of the surrounding hoarders.

Lyney lets another arrow fly, feeling his health weaken with each charged attack.

By the 5th arrow, he calls back Rosseland-

Only to send him out in a flurry of fire.

Once the Treasure hoarders were dealt with, Lyney runs to you.

‘You took a while’

Despite your words, a tired, yet genuine smile met your lips.

‘I’m sorry- I’m here now.’

He picks you up.

‘Now, let’s get out of here and inform the Gardes of these heathens’ sad performance.’

Freminet(309):

‘Oh no..’

Freminet doesn’t know what to do.

Where were you? 

Had you finally left him?

No, you’d still be found at the Hearth, but you weren’t there either.

You weren’t anywhere.

No one knew where you were.

Freminet wasn’t panicked– not yet. But he was worried.

He didn’t want to assume the worst, but he was running out of options.

You’d been taken. Stolen from him.

Freminet had been good at finding things before, he would find you too.

He started searching known hilichurl camps– maybe there were too many, and you couldn’t take them?

He then searched areas with prominent amounts of rogue mechs. Perhaps you had been bested by a Recon Mec’s missiles?

Then, after not finding you previously, he started searching treasure hoarder camps.

He had searched 4 camps before he heard your familiar voice.

‘You look super ugly by the way. Not at all my type.’

‘That wasn't even what we asked!’

‘You don’t get to smart mouth us you bitch!’

Freminet’s world slows when he hears you cry out in pain.

Before he knew it, he was swinging his claymore at the perpetrators.

One by one, they fell to his cryo.

‘That was hot.’

Freminet is kicked out of his stupor by your comment, a blush settling over his face.

‘... Are you.. Alright?’ 

He kneels down to look at you better- slap marks and gashes littered your face and arms.

He sits back up and holds out his hand to you

‘Come on.. We need to get you patched up, then we can head back home and tell Father what happened.’

When you reach out to his hand, you can’t help but notice that he holds on just that little bit tighter.

‘Hey, Frem. I’m safe now. Thank you for saving me.’

His grip relaxes. 

‘..I’ll always protect you.’

‘I know.’

Cyno(380):

Cyno had been tracking a band of Treasure Hoarders that recently crossed into Sumeru from the Chasm.

There had been reports that their leader was more cunning than most other mindless groups.

This fact had been proven by the fact that they had managed to evade the Mahamatra all this time.

Every time an incident was reported, Cyno would arrive just too late.

Every attack was careful and calculated.

But this time, the Treasure Hoarders had made a mistake.

They tried to take you from your lover. 

Cyno has a feeling all day something was off. His instincts are never wrong.

He arrived at your home to see the door ajar, and the lock broken. After a quick, efficient search of the house, he concluded you had been taken.

It seemed that while Cyno was studying the Treasure Hoarders, they were studying him.

Cyno immediately set out tracking the group.

He wouldn’t let them get far.

While Treasure Hoarders would need to stop to rest, Cyno refused to stop.

He was after them. He was going to take you back.

It was late at night when Cyno spotted their camp.

As silent as the sand and as precise as the carvings in the ruins, Cyno snuck up on the Treasure Hoarders. He paused, however, as he heard a conversation.

‘You’re really stupid. Cyno will come for me, and he won’t let you live.’

‘Aha! You really think he’s going to catch up? We’re travelling at top speed and only taking minimum breaks. Not even the General Mahamatra can do that.’

‘Pfft you’re even more stupid than I thought.’

‘Shut it! You’re just a prisoner!’

Cyno’s spear had struck before the Treasure Hoarders hand could make contact with your skin.

Cyno’s fury could only be described as animalistic.

It wasn't long before all the enemies had been either knocked unconscious, or left to be covered by the moving dunes..

Cyno took a breath before untying you.

‘I am sorry. I should’ve known they would try to come for you.’

You hug him.

‘Don’t be sorry. I knew you’d come. Just like I told them.’

Cyno wraps an arm around your back and holds you tight.

‘My enemies had better think twice in future, before they even think about touching you.’

Hope you enjoyed, please point out any mistakes I may have made!

if you'd like to read more, check out my masterlist!

Strawberry<3

[txttletale]

youve mentioned offhand ur issues with thirsty sword lesbians, have u talked at length abt this somewhere before and if not do u want to? i want to hear ur thoughts hehe

now before i get into this i want to clarify: i like thirsty sword lesbians, overall! i think it takes some of the best stuff from monster hearts and refines it -- i think it does great and exciting things with pbta playbooks -- i think anyone making a pbta game should check it out because it's full of valuable ideas -- and i've had a lot of fun playing it!

however, i think it's just as flawed as it is brilliant. there's a few different flaws but the biggest one for me is a catastrophic clash between two things the game is trying to be. one on hand, it wants to be a catradora rpg. there's no shame in that, i love games that wear their influences on their sleeves--TSL¹ wants to be a game about kissing your rival after you've both been disarmed, about having a fraught and complicated relationship with your girl best friend who abandoned you to serve the dark lord, about having homoerotic sword duels where your blades lock and you stare into each other's eyes for just one second too long before one of you kicks the other in the chest. i think that's an admirable goal for an RPG and one that TSL hits a lot of the notes of--the fact that the move to "Figure Someone Out" has special questions you can only ask someone when you're duelling them is incredible design. the Strings system, adapted from Monsterhearts, the ability to fluster your enemies when you use the Entice move, the constant focus on what characters desire and how their actions conflict with those desires--so much of the game is working towards that!

unfortunately, the game also wants to be about queer resistance to homophobia and capitalist/imperialist hegemony. this is clear in its sample settings, with their eyerollingly on-the-nose conflicts like defending 'queertopia' and fighting the evil sorceress 'repressia'. but much more importantly, it's clear in the game. several of the playbooks are defined by their relationship to sexual hegemony--the beast is about someone who is othered and monsterised for expressing their existence and the seeker is about someone sheltered and prejudiced moving past that and discovering themselvs and others. like, it's not subtle--

and to be clear, there's nothing wrong with that, either. just as i like a lot of TSL's swashbuckling girl-romancing flirting-at-swordpoint mechanics, i really appreciated how (although the game's outlook on what these forces are is predicably liberal and its tonal approach to these things is one that i personally find teeth-grindingly insufferable) these things are actually integrated into its mechanics. playbooks like the beast and the seeker (and the rest!) imply something about the world the game is set in and its sexual politics. this game is meaningfully queer in the way something like dream askew is, in that its mechanics ask you to actually explore your character's queerness specifically. this is good, and it's something that elevates it above about 90% of ttrpg stuff that sells itself as queer.

so if both these things are good, what's the problem? well, it's that they're two great (or at least--interesting) tastes that go fucking horribly together. the fundamental problem that i have with TSL and one that i think takes a lot of work to get around in your own campaigns is that it simultaneously wants you to be fighting (on the individual level) a lot of antiheroic ultimately sympathetic hot girls you can flirt with and kiss--a lot of 'i can fix her's or 'she can make me worse's--and on the broader narrative wants you to be fighting institutional queerphobia (and often, although this is nowhere near as actually supported by mechanics, a more generalized 'imperialism' or 'capitalism' or 'bigotry'). so you end up fighting 'those stupid sexy homophobes'--people who are according to the text (not just 'lore', but the rules text, the mechanics you're playing with!) simultaneously the violent enforcers of cisheteropatriarchy and a bunch of fuckable lesbians with sympathetic backstories.

& i just think those things are fundamentally at odds. the result is a game that if you try and play it at face value works at cross purposes with itself, attempting to do two perfectly valid things without considering what happens when the streams cross.

it also has a few other flaws--like many other PBTA games, its balance falls apart if you play any long campaign (my group and i had to figure out special alternative level-up rewards!) but it comes with no inbuilt way to neatly conclude a campaign or character. its tone is something that, as i often mention, i absolutely cannot fucking stand--it has a certain sense of humour that feels profoundly dated to me and was never my cup of tea when it was in vogue. this is something i try not to hold against the game bc it is very much a personal taste-level 'cringe' reaction but the game lays it on pretty fucking thick.

more to its detriment, it is profoundly, gratingly liberal in the exact way people who deploy that tone usually are. its understanding of anything outside queerphobia specifically is just a purely aesthetic & thoughtless 'imperialism is bad!'. it manages a more nuanced understanding of homophobia, but it only manages it on the individual level--for a game about queerness and about fighting systems of cisheteronormativity, it has no systemic or material understanding of these systems and no interest in establishing one.

and finally--and this is just one paragraph but it's so fucking awful i feel the need to complain about it here because i think about it often as an example of something i never want to write:

this sucks! real bad! so deeply fucking silly to reassure people in your game that you called Thirsty Sword Lesbians that it's okay if you want to be cishet. like, it would be one thing to make a game where you can neatly extract the lesbianism and have the same game, a surface-level aesthetically queer game with no actual interest in queerness except as a marketing term. it would fucking suck but this paragraph would at least describe such a game. but TSL isn't that!!! . 'thirsty sword cishets' would be a very different and much worse game! awful and self-defeating paragraph. deeply silly concern to address and give airtime to. i didn't buy a game called 'thirsty sword lesbians' to be told 'its okay to be heterosexual i pwommy'

so yea just to reiterate: i like the game overall, i think there's a lot of good valuable stuff in there designwise despite all this. but i'm very ambivalent about it--ironically, i feel a love-hate relationship with this game about love-hate relationships. i admire it and yet i despise it! i long to put it at the tip of my sword and slowly tilt its cover up so that the pages look up at me coquettishly but with burning anger in their page numbers. if this book was a person id hatefuck it, is the joke, thats the joke im making, here, in this post. thanks

¹ i call it TSL whenever i can because the name 'Thirsty Sword Lesbians' makes me cringe out of my fucking skin. genuinely horrible name. i'm sure it's funny the first time you hear it, i got a mild chuckle the first time i heard it to, but it's such an obnoxious thing ot have to say repeatedly when seriously discussing it. should have stayed a placeholder name amiguitas

[topazadine]

Writing Advice: Spicy Mundanity

In writing, it is essential to provide just enough information to build a picture in a reader's mind, but not to bore them. Let's look at one specific area where some writers fall short: providing too much mechanical description.

Here, we'll look at three different examples of how you can set the same scene, then dissect why the fixed passages are better.

Adam the First silenced his alarm clock, got up out of bed, and walked to the door. He opened the door and walked down the hallway to the bathroom. He undressed and then reached out to turn the handle of the shower. The shower started, and he pulled the curtain aside. Then he realized he needed to pee, so he lifted the toilet seat and urinated. Then he got in the shower. Then he picked up a bar of soap.

Unless you are writing this for extraterrestrials, most people are going to know what it's like to get out of bed and go to the bathroom to turn on the shower, then realize your bladder is bursting and have to pee first.

This sounds so mechanical, almost robotic; it tells us nothing about how these actions made him feel.

Was he late? Was this done in a rush? Is this his day off so he's going slow, really luxuriating in the feeling?

So, let's fix this in two different ways and try them on for size.

Adam the Second rolled out of bed with a resounding smack as his alarm truncated his dream about his ex. Groaning, he swiped the screaming clock off the nightstand, shattering the screen into plasticine trash. Whatever. A problem for later. Rubbing his eyes, he stumbled into the bathroom and yanked the shower on, then felt the familiar tingle in his bladder. First things first, he supposed. The shower was fast and unsatisfying, barely enough time to lather his hair. If he was late for his job at Widget Technologies one more time, he'd be toast. And homeless too.

This version tells us a lot more about Adam: he's not a morning person, he's got a bit of an attitude, and he's chronically late for work, to the point where he might lose his job. Oh, and he's still got the hots for his ex. We didn't need to linger on every single part of his morning routine; we swapped out some more interesting actions for the pedestrian "opening the door and turning on the shower" etc.

Now let's try something different that takes Adam in a whole other direction entirely.

Adam the Third most felt his age in the morning. The crawl to the alarm clock felt agonizing; his rusty joints creaked while he reached for the tiny button at the center that would silence the buzzing bells. It'd be easier to relocate the alarm clock to his side of the bed, but that seemed too final. Besides, this routine reminded him, morning after morning, that his wife wasn't here. Just in case he forgot. Putting his medication in the bathroom had also been a trick recommended by his therapist: forcing him to attend to his hygiene rather than lying in bed all day. He groaned as he massaged his back and began the slow journey toward his diuretics, then the interminable wait until his bladder remembered its purpose. Hopefully his daughter had brought more shampoo as she promised to, though he had his doubts.

Here we have an entirely different Adam: a man missing his wife, suffering from multiple ailments (including a bit of depression). It appears he might be dealing with early-onset dementia as well. We can also assume that he lives alone but relies on his daughter to bring him things. It seems she might be a bit flakey.

Even the old-school alarm clock tells us that we are not dealing with a youthful character, but someone stuck in an old time, trying to reorient his routine to a new reality.

All these passages deal with the exact same actions: getting out of bed, going to the bathroom, and taking a shower. However, the last two provide us with far more character details while removing extraneous actions that the reader can assume.

So, let's look at some golden rules of how to turn boring, mechanical passages into something more vibrant and character-driven.

Assume your reader is intelligent

You might be wondering what this has to do with anything, but let me explain.

Writers often feel that they need to spell everything out for their reader because everyone but them is a total moron and can't determine the sequence of everyday actions.

Your readers are not dumb. It is not just boring to write like Adam the First - it's also insulting.

Please give your readers credit. Expect them to understand what you are trying to say when you discuss mundane activities.

When you write with the assumption that your readers are intelligent people, you are more willing to gloss over stupid details they don't need, and you can get to the meat of the action faster.

Remove implied action

If someone was sitting on the bed and then they are walking toward the dresser, we can assume that they got up. We only need to say they got up if there is a particular way they did so which could be assumed as important.

Adam 2 literally rolled out of bed onto the floor and then "stumbled" toward the bathroom. We can imagine a very inelegant rising but don't actually have to show that.

Adam 3 massaged his back and then "began the slow journey." We can assume that he got up very carefully, maybe groaning a bit as he did so, but we don't need to explain that in excruciating detail; it's implied.

We can also assume the peeing part in both passages. Adam 2 thought "first things first" about his bladder, and then was in the shower. We get the point.

Adam 3 was talking about how he's going to be straining on the toilet for a while until his diuretics kick in, and then about how he hopes his daughter brought shampoo, so we can tell that he's going to pee and then shower.

Use active verbs

Yes, sometimes someone just opens a door and there's nothing special about it. Why are you showing that to us? We don't get much from it.

Just have them reach the door and then pass through it without explaining. No one will assume they are teleporting.

Unless you're writing something that does have teleportation, but then I'd imagine you would take more time to explain why they'd teleport through a door, such as it being locked with a key they don't have.

Specific verbs are far more interesting - and more insightful - than simple, mechanical ones. Consider all the possible ways to open a door here:

Griselda flung the door open, screaming like a wildcat. "Give me my goddamn money!"

Jiggling the handle, Imogene heard dead silence on the other side. With shaking fingers, she inched the door open, closing her eyes for fear of what she would see.

A sprinting Paul slammed into the door, groaned, then fumbled for the handle before tripping inside.

Vera clutched the polished pewter handle, hands slick with nervous sweat, and twisted it in a hard but controlled motion. She threw her shoulders back to appear more confident and slid past the doorplate, which probably cost more than her whole house.

In the last two examples, there's something important about the way they held the door handle, so we show that. In the first two examples, we don't really need to see how they gripped the handle, so we don't show it.

Add interiority

The passages about Adam 2 and Adam 3 are more interesting because we are getting character development through these passages. Even though each one is a very boring scene of someone going about their morning routine, they feel like different people, because they are.

Adam 1 could be literally anyone on the planet named Adam, but Adam 2 and Adam 3 are clearly a specific person because they feel differently about the exact same routine, and they do it a little differently too.

Adam 2 comes out of the gate snarling; he's in a bad mood and worrying about his job. Adam 3 is grief-stricken; every single thing reminds him of his dead wife, even the alarm clock.

I write primarily in third person limited POV, which gives a lot of room for character development, but you can do these same things in first person and third person omniscient if you so choose.

To develop interiority, think about how your character feels and their overall life circumstances. Someone about to get married to the love of their life will spring out of bed, excitedly ticking through all the things they need to do before their wedding; we don't even need to show the actions because they're telling us what they will do.

Someone about to get married to a suitor they hate is going to slump out of bed, dreading every movement and dragging it out as long as possible. We will hear the resentment as their alarm clock goes off and their grumbled complaints about the shower being cold. This tells us a lot about their mood and their expectations for their day.

If you enjoyed this article, maybe you'll consider purchasing my own lovely book, 9 Years Yearning! This 33k novella examines the lives of two young men studying the art of war - but they find themselves studying something else entirely, too.

Namely, each other. Ooh la la!

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[20th-century-railroading]

TV-80 Day

Friday was "TV-80 Day" on Conrail's River Line, so from that we can infer that December 15, 1989 was a Friday. TV-80 ran on a once-per-week schedule, departing Chicago on Thursday morning with hot UPS intermodal traffic off the Santa Fe at Corwith Yard. After setting off blocks of cars at Syracuse and Selkirk, what remained was typically a short piggyback train destined for North Bergen Yard. TV-80 is seen here hustling through Teaneck, NJ behind a GP40/C36-7 duo. The lead unit would become MEC 315 after being sold to Guilford. It was still in service as of late 2023.

Conrail TV-80: CR 3208 GP40 CR 6644 C36-7

[0gingercat5]

There silly, no ships but if you want there to be then there are. Also, Lloyd being is his true self. Cole's arm is fully scared after whatever you wanna call that burst of energy. He likes to bake and often does it with Zane. He and Jay play video games very competitively. He and Kai are sparing partners and like to just throw each other. He and Lloyd like to go rock climbing or walk. He and Nya will play a fight. He and Pixal will just enjoy each other presence or chit-chat. He is not my fav but I hope I pleased the Cole fans. NO SPELLING WILL BE FIXED I DON'T CARE Nya has markings still left on her face and they really show when she goes in water. She likes to take hot showers and just sit getting a break from the world. She has the biggest temper out of everyone, and if near a water well everyone near her is in the splash zone. Pixal, Skyler, and her will have a girls' night out every now and again. She also paints Pixal's nails and will work with Skyler at her job when she has free time. She and Lloyd will take naps together. Zane and Jay will work on mecs together for the main gossip. She and Kai go star gazing every now and again. She and Cole will go on runs and stop at a coffee shop after.

[lagaylife-france]

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