#literally it ch2 is a comedy

[charmedojamajo]

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Chapter 3.

🩷🧡💙💜💛

I love how this chapter starts with @pippelulu and I complaining about how bad we are at writing weddings and musing over when they'll happen in the story. I don't think a single wedding happened over the course of 31 chapters.

This was... probably the most confusing opening scene ever written. And I can't remember which one of us is responsible for it. Why do Aiko and Hadzuki think they're doomed? Why does Onpu say "who would want to do that" after Doremi says she's getting married when 1. Onpu is already engaged and 2. It seems later on in the scene no one even heard Doremi anyway? And again WHY did we have to ruin Momoko for ✨comedy✨.

"bluenette" - yeah that was PippElulu and also very 2000s fanfiction coded.

Now at this point it's well established that this story could not care less about continuity and plot holes and everything that happened was just for the sake of "random xD" but WHY was this mentioned lmfao. The scene opened with everyone sitting around in the living room before the conga madness. So were they all just chilling watching porn together? Did the TV malfunction at that very moment? Also love the idea of Aiko beating the shit out of a conga line while some corny porn music plays in the background lmao

Spot the kids who knew nothing about currencies and the cost of jewellery lmao. Also wouldn't that be forbidden magic? Inflation bro...

MELON LORD MENTION 🍉🍉WHY DID WE INCLUDE THIS CONSTANTLY?

lmao sorry bestie but I love how PippElulu called Aiko getting excited over the engagement of one of her best friends being "childish and silly."

Momoko forgive me... you are so smart and intelligent and wise and not the melon lord. I beg you.

Again with the "random xD" lol why is there a whole scene of the FLATY5 fighting like kids in their own home before Aiko just appears out of nowhere.

Lmao pippelulu and I were laughing over this the other day. Homie really wrote a whole paragraph of Aiko turning into a pixie and it was just never brought up again. Where is the LORE.

Oh, and Leon transforms too (of course).

Leon took Aiko's chin and leaned in, pressing his lips to hers. They stayed like that for at LEAST 6 seconds.

This sentence reminds me of when my friend and I were flipping through 50 Shades of Grey looking for the worst lines and one was "we stayed like that for minutes. Many minutes."

I totally stole that first piece of dialogue from a Charmed episode and that's probably why I kept it in.

PippElulu and I would send each other our parts over ffn pms and there is in fact a conversation where we argue over this.

This was posted on PippElulu's account originally so she could have just taken it out instead of adding in her author's note... OR AT THE VERY LEAST CORRECTED MY YOU'RE

"The others are acting hormonal; they're acting like 12 year old boys"

Well, makes sense given it was written by 12 year old girls 😀👍

I don't have anything to say about this scene, I just need to make sure PippElulu reads it.

But the next line has Hadzuki summoning a bubble wand? Literally what were all the random ass abilities we were giving these girls. We fr went "magical girls? oh so any magic will do then, right?"

"THE MELON LORD COMMAND THAT YOU PEASANTS GIVE HER A PIE! GIVE THE MELON LORD PIE AND SHE WILL FORGIVE THE SELFISH DESIRES OF THE WATER BENDER!"

Momoko I am so sorry...

And Aiko has electrokinesis too????

I genuinely had no idea what "overrated" meant when this was written so I have to laugh every time I use that word to refer to the fic. Like bestie you have no clue what you're yapping about 😭

< ch2 | ch4 >

[whatthefuckisasweep]

This wip i have of eddie and the stupid paddle ball makes me fucking laugh . hes actually just a fucking menace. so annoying. God bless

[itbelillian]

deltarune ch2 spoilers

seriously I'm about to spoil the fuck out of the game and also the Alternative Route For Assholes

ok the 24 hour spoiler ban has passed but still: FINAL SPOILER WARNING. 

first: GOD this game is so. GOOD? holy sweet mother of meatball, I have been thinking about it nonstop for the past 2 days. it feels like a shitpost. I love queen dearly. the potassium gag. “what does bosom mean??” “tity.” every single interaction with her and berdly made me PISS myself laughing and especially The Statue. actually this whole game was really, really funny. the part where you and ralsei go on the swan boat, literally on acid, and battle it out with rouxls kaard. who is riding a duck. god where does toby come up with this material?? it is so weird but.... so good. his comedic chops have gotten a LOT better since undertale, and even chapter 1.

the art, music, and mechanics were SPOT ON. the recruitment thing, the implication that at some point you’re going to have to de-recruit someone for the betterment of your town, the town itself, just... good lord. toby has outdone himself. this adds so much complexity to the gameplay that was kind of lacking in undertale? I also love the way that the equipment has been done this time around, it adds an element of strategy to deciding who should get what items and when to equip different items. the team as a whole is so great, mechanics wise. fights with them are INFINITELY more entertaining than fighting alone as kris would be. and the art is WAY better than undertale. I've never been one to criticize Undertale’s graphics, and I still won’t, but it’s impossible to deny that deltarune is a step up in every way. the little animations of kris and susie entering the dark world, susie and lancer’s high-five, the attack/defend animations, just so good. the environments are super aesthetically pleasing, too. the music is great, of course. it’s Toby Fox what am I expecting?? to be honest nothing has really Hit Me the same way any tracks from undertale have, but maybe they will as I listen to them more. a big part of it is the familiarity.

also: I was never too attached to either susie or Ralsei in chapter one, but this really sold it for me. when I played Undertale I felt very invested in the characters, but not so much my friendship with them. it felt very much like we had just met each other. in deltarune I 100000 percent buy the friendship and I ADORE both of them so much? the fact that kris literally does not say anything but still has distinct dynamics with the two of them baffles me but I can’t complain because it is?? so?? amazing??? I was genuinely very upset when ralsei and susie left to do their own thing. I didn’t realize it as it was happening but I really loved having them around. I missed them. also it seems like EVERYONE except me was suspicious of ralsei, but now that it’s been pointed out... yeah. I love him to BITS so it pains me to say but something is Wrong With Him. why can he travel from dark world to dark world without turning into a statue? what are the titans, and why is he only mentioning them now? and actually, ALL of our information about the dark world is coming from him. how much is true? what else does he know that he’s not telling us? 

and what. WHAT. is up with kris? I don’t even have any theories I am just baffled. it seems like they’re the knight, right? have they been creating... all of the dark worlds, including the first one in the storage closet? does this make kris the villain? or is the creation of dark worlds a good thing... meaning ralsei is manipulating us into thinking the dark fountains are evil? Why would they slash Toriel’s tires? why are we possessing them? also I LOVE the puppet theme with the hidden bosses... and it really seems like something about that is not sitting right with kris, either. kris full on shouting that they’re not okay to ralsei after he asks... good god I am SO CURIOUS. the mystery element here is really on point. it’s so easy to settle into the comedy and fun little group dynamic, but something is always Wrong and when something reminds you it is deeply unsettling. the only group member who doesn’t seem to have something freaky and suspicious going on is susie... if she turns out to be evil too i stg im ejecting myself from the stratosphere 

also speaking of mysteries: not knowing how Undertale and deltarune connect is KILLING me. I fully buy into the theory that sans and papyrus are “from” the world of deltarune, originally. if the theory is true, then word search from icee’s pizzeria you find in UT is actually SO? brilliant. SANS GAVE YOU A WORD SEARCH FROM A RESTAURANT THAT ONLY EXISTS IN DELTARUNE. was toby thinking about this all the way back when Undertale was released??? but is deltarune an alternate... timeline? does undertale exist at ALL, if the sans and papyrus thing doesn’t turn out to be true? but if that were the case, why would sans’ grocery store be the same building as grillby’s, logo and all? does sans owning the grillby’s building indicate that sans went to the undertale world to take it?? what is going ON??? 

and just going to say it: snowgrave route in deltarune (is that what we’re calling it???) is a MILLION times freakier than the genocide route in Undertale. like ut is  depressing, it was Unfun to kill my friends, but the way you just... slowly corrupt pure, innocent Noelle and make her do your incredibly screwed up bidding is just disturbing. the way you just say “Proceed” at all the puzzles and like, gaslight her into thinking she didn’t TOTALLY MURK berdly and that ring seller guy... god it’s so messed up but also SO???? amazing??? murdering video game characters makes you feel like you’re... well, playing a video game. but forcing Noelle to do it for you??? something about that feels so much more twisted. god I feel like a sadistic bastard. 

deltarune is not undertale but it’s not trying to be. it definitely feels distinctly different, and maybe more sinister? expectations are through the roof for toby but he’s killing it. I remember being worried when deltarune ch1 was announced, because undertale doesn’t feel like the kind of game that can, or should, be followed up by anything. I think I was wrong though. I don’t know how its possible, but deltarune is the perfect thematic successor to undertale in every way I can think of. tl;dr PLAY DELTARUNE it was good 

[sevengraces]

The Heroes Journey (To Find A Home)

You, ch2, ch3, ch4, ch5, ch6, ch7, ch8, ch9, ch10, ch11, Title Card

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--------      “You’re right, Chat! He knows, there's no way he doesn’t. My voice was all wrong, and I kept speaking piglin instead of overworld! He walked in while I wasn’t wearing my mask!” The piglin hybrid paced anxiously as he ranted. “He didn’t say anything about that, but I just, why can’t I keep my mouth shut!”      The voices quieted themselves in an attempt to soothe the panicking boy.      You just wanted to be known      S’not so bad little pig      He didn’t see your face      He can’t mind himself, if he had figured you out he would’ve gloated      He would’ve told 

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Everything in quotes that is underlined is in piglin CW's Canon typical violence Mild disassociation Threats References to blood/wounds Swearing Chat Overuse of italics Miscommunication as a plot device

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Chapter 1- A Comedy In The Shakespearian Sense

    Tubbo Underscore was staring at him.

    He was only a little older than Techno and here he was: sitting in an unbreakable box on the platform he had decorated himself, staring down the barrel of a rocket launcher.

    Maybe it was the eyes, or the hesitation written in bold strokes and shaded in with fear that was splashed across his face, but Techno wasn’t sure he could fire.

    “Kill him Techno. Do what I called you up here for.” Schlatt interrupted the piglin’s thought process coldly.

    He swallowed and looked around for Tommy and Wilbur, waiting for a cue that they had a plan, an idea, anything that meant he didn’t have to do this. “Are you, uh, you sure? Cause he seems kinda, kinda stuck anyways.”

    The president glared coldly, “Do what you’re good for Blade.”

    Chat was getting louder the longer the standoff lasted and Techno fought back a wince as he looked at Tubbo once more.

    Do it!!

    Blood for the blood god

    Not Tubbo!

    Are they coming to help you?

    EEEEEEEEEEEEEEE

    The voices lost comprehension in their excitement and Technoblade looked towards the boy hesitantly.

    “Uh, I’m sorry Tubbo. I’m sorry, I’ll make it quick, yeah?” He watched as Tubbo let out a watery smile and nodded bravely.

         Tubbo went off with a bang.

         Jschlatt went off with a bang.

         Quackity went off with a bang.

    Chat roared at the violence and Technoblade released a noise that started out wet and devolved into barely sane laughter as he turned his fireworks on the crowd.

    “Techno what the fuck!? Tubbo you okay?” Tommy shouted as he and Wilbur suddenly rushed in from the trees.

    Technoblade barely heard a word, head echoing with the death messages and Chats’ calls for more bloodshed.

    The Red Festival ended about as bloody as the name would have suggested and the four of them, plus Niki, fled towards Pogtopia. Techno’s head continued to ring.

    The boy slipped back into awareness in the ravine with Tommy screaming up at him.

    “What the fuck was that? Why did you kill Tubbo?” the blond fumed.

    Techno blinked, “I-uhm, I was peer pressured Tommy.” he answered dazedly.

    Wilbur laughed from the level above the three of them. “You hear that Tommy! The great Technoblade was peer pressured into killing your good friend Tubbo Underscore.” The man laughed some more, “Ho- how do you feel Tubbo, hmm? He killed you, murdered you, just cause?”

    Tubbo shrunk back behind Tommy even further, “I mean I would’ve prolly done the, uh, the same thing? I mean it was scary.”

    Tommy snorted bitterly, “Tubbo of course it was scary, there was a rocket launcher pointed at your face. And for one, no you wouldn’t. You literally wouldn’t fucking kill someone for such a stupid reason. And two, Technoblade is the great bloody warrior, a pvp master, a fucking adult! So obviously you’d be scared, Tubs, but uh, Techno here doesn’t have the same excuse as you.”

    Technoblade was desperately glad for his mask at that moment, it covered his entire face leaving only the faintest impression of eyes. Too bad he couldn’t help the anxious twitching of his ears, still he tried staring as blankly as possible.

    Techno eventually began to float aimlessly among the loud bickering until he snapped back under the sharp clarity of the pit. Tommy had punched him.

    The voices jeered at his confusion before either taking pity on the boy or their craving for blood outgrew vague spite.

    Trial

    Combat

    Pit fight

    He angy lol

    He took a half step back and swung up on instinct, easily making contact, before dancing around the angry combatant on light feet. Tommy stumbled back into the wall of the pit before baring his bloodied teeth and charging once more.

    Chat laughed delightedly at the blood smeared across Techno’s knuckles and the loose stance of his enemy.

    The piglin sidestepped once more before swinging around and kicking Tommy’s legs out from under him.

    There was a distant cheering from the entrance to the pit as well as a loud gasp, Techno heard none of it. Nothing but the rush of blood in his ears, Chat’s calls for more, and the huffing of the boy in front of him.

    Said boy growled and kicked out at Technoblades’ feet from his spot on the ground, but missed by a wide margin. Techno took a few more steps back and caught his breath, watching warily.

    Tommy pulled himself up and spit on the ground, “Fucking hit me Techno, why not yeah?”

    Techno winced from behind his mask at the ache in the other's voice. He simply stood and waited a moment longer.

    The boy laughed bitterly and dove forward once more, swinging wildly for the piglin hybrids’ face.

    Techno ducked under the other’s arms, and bounced up immediately, knocking the top of his skull into Tommy’s jaw. Tommy cried out but Techno didn’t hesitate again.

    He took a short step back before swinging on the other hard , hitting him squarely on the side of his jaw once more. He kicked the boy’s feet out from under him again and landed a foot on his chest.

    Tommy scrambled blindly for a way out but Techno held the boy and his stance, panting over the other, knuckles dripping with blood that mixed into the dirt of the pit.

    Finally Techno looked down and with a scratchy, dull voice asked, “Satisfaction?”

    Tommy looked off to the side and nodded harshly so Techno took his foot off the boys’ chest and turned towards the entrance of the pit.

    Tubbo, Nikachu, and Wilbur were staring at him. Wilbur looked delighted, eyes sparkling as they danced from one splash of blood to another. Niki seemed horrified and baffled, pointedly looking away from Tommy’s busted lips and Techno’s bloody fist. Tubbo gawked silently except for the occasional cough that rattled his chest, the only thing recognizable on his face was the shock.

    Techno rubbed his fist across the underside of his jaw beneath his mask and gazed tiredly at the boy, “D’ya want t’ go Underscore?”

    Wilbur laughed brightly and Niki stared at the piglin in mild horror, Tommy swore sharply from behind him, but Tubbo just tilted his head in question. Techno hadn’t had a single ounce of sarcasm in his voice, not a touch of humor or his signature mocking drawl, just simple exhaustion and expectation that he’d have to fight his allies again.

    Tubbo went to answer but bit his own tongue, glancing past the hybrid to Tommy’s hardened face and the stone clenched in one fist.

    Tommy Innit shot up in a rage and dove for Techno, aiming to crush a rock against the masked boys’ skull.

    Techno didn’t really understand the danger, even as Chat screamed from within his head. But Tommy howled as he shot forward, allowing Techno to spin around and simply sidestep the clumsy assault, sticking a leg out to trip the boy a final time, leaving him eating dirt.

    Tommy spluttered on the taste of his own blood mixed to become mud, he rolled over to stare up at the piglin in sharp fear for the inevitable retaliation.

    Technoblade seethed under his mask, shaking in rage with his back to everyone but his invisible audience, a soldier without honor had never received mercy.

    There was heavy pause as even Wilbur held his breath, despite his hollering earlier. Tubbo moved to help Tommy, but Wilbur held both him and Niki back, watching in muted fascination.

    Technoblade, unarmed in soft leathers and mask of hoglin bone, slowly turned around until he was facing Tommy and the rest of the room. He took a few measured steps forward, stopping and tilting his head at Tommy’s violent flinch. The piglin crouched a foot away from the boy and leaned forward until they were mere inches apart.

    Tommy stared silently with his mouth hanging open and hands clenched behind him.

    After a long moment of tension thick in the air, Techno asked so quietly that only the boy could hear, “Are you done Tommy Innit? Or do you want to do this again?” he smiled cruelly beneath the mask and licked some of Tommy’s blood from his own knuckles, continuing louder than he had begun, “Usually when someone yields, they’re done Innit. Do you know what happens to little boys who surrender in a fair fight and then attack once the victor has turned?”

    Chat laughed mockingly,

    Are you not a little boy?

    Shut up! This is plot.

    Hiding behind his mask, do your eyes give you away little runt?

    Blood for dishonor

    The boy looked up cautiously and slowly shook his head.

    He stared for another heavy moment before he laughed bitterly and leaned backwards. “Of course you don’t know, why would you?” Techno stood from his crouch and seemed to slide out from under the gravitas that had dripped from his tone just moments prior, before finally looking towards the rest of the room and huffing petulantly, “Are we even?”

    For once Wilbur withheld his mocking laughter, face pale with soft horror as the warrior's words finally sunk in through his blood hungry haze. Niki bit back a sob as the tensions finally receded slightly. Tubbo glanced quickly between the two fighters before looking Techno square in the eyes.

    “We’re even, all’s forgiven Blade. No hard feelings, really.”

    The anarchist nodded sharply and climbed out of the pit, ignoring the hesitantly offered hand and walking through the split in the corporeal audience. He paused in his exit as the defeated finally scrambled up and began to holler angrily after him.

    Wilbur shot out a hand to stop the boy with a panicked whisper of; “No! Shut up!”

    Technoblade turned around with a bitter smirk “Tommy?”

    The boy in question stopped his dissent immediately as he glanced between the tilted head of the previously retreating figure and Wilbur’s sudden concerned attempt to shut him up. “What?”

    “Tommy, the thing is, you’re using words. But this world, Tommy? In this world the only universal language is violence. And we’ve had that conversation. We’ve spoken that language; in the pit. It’s over Tommy. Onto a new day. A new plot; to destroy Manburg.” The boy smiled cruelly, saluted the rebels, and left the ravine.

[vitalpen]

Deltarune ch2 thoughts (spoilers)

You didn’t ask for it, but you don’t need to, I’m just that considerate.

1) I love Noelle.  Everything about this child must be protected.  Her dual role as the perfect cinnamon bun and the straight-man (for lack of a better term) is perfect.  Her reactions to everything related to Susie are adorable and their talk on the ferris wheel is heartfelt and well written.  I love it all.

2) I love how much of a self-centered dumbass Berdly is.  He’s an egotistical moron who thinks he’s way smarter than he is and the game does not pretend otherwise for even a second.  His actual backstory does a lot for fleshing out his sense of superiority, but the way he also assumes that Noelle is in love with him definitely feels like the game tacking on an “he’s also just kind of an asshole” to the end of him.

3) Queen is also wonderful.  Her complete lack of regard for sense or real commitment to being evil is hilarious.  The fact that she learns her evil plan would actually doom her as well and is just like “OH WELL SCREW THAT THEN LMAO” is such a perfect turn because it make complete sense for the character.  It feels like being evil is just a comedy bit to her the entire time.

4) It’s really good of Toby to also keep Punch-Out alive while keeping Earthbound alive.

5) That music drop tho

6)Spamton is what I would call “existentially unnerving” and I really dig it.  I recorded myself playing and I can think of a bunch of stuff to do with his voice.\

7)The environment of the computer is wonderful and fleshed out.  Everything about the world’s aesthetic and the darkners that live there is amazing.

8) Ralsei in a butler outfit is a wonderful image.

9)Kris’s wiggle is a wonderful image.

10) The medical worker outfits for everyone are amazing.

11) I love literally everything about this game.

12) I want to cosplay the head butler and Toby knows it.

[ephemeralnerd]

CYRUS’ CHAPTERS

Chapter 3

Chapter 2

Chapter 4

Chapter 1

These are all very close, I thought all of his chapters were very enjoyable. I wasn’t a big fan of Therese turning up and saving Cyrus, but the trip to Yvon’s house, the boss and the general Stonegard vibe (I have a strong bias towards Stonegard, I love it) redeem that and make CH3 my favourite out of all of them.

It very slightly edges out CH2. I found that it was just a fun chapter, doing well to ramp up the comedy as well as the seriousness. I wish we saw more of Odette outside of CH2 and her side quest with Revello.

Lucia as the Big Bad was a little unfulfilling, but her fight was unique enough (all those shield points...). I kind of thought that Cyrus’ final boss was going to be more than one person, considering that he was being watched from CH1. I thought that the Obsidians as a group were going to go after him for being so meddlesome.

And who can forget DEATH DEATH DEATH DEATH DEATH DESTRUCTION DESTRUCTION DESTRUCTION DESTRUCTION DESTRUCTION? The ending of CH4 was more interesting that the fight for me because we learned a lot of lore.

Duskbarrow as a setting was not the most exciting, but appropriate all the same. The ancient glyphs and the hidden library were both visually appealing settings. By this point in the game I was getting a little tired of the generic ruins/cave setting so it was most appreciated. Any dungeon that plays Under the Surface is bumped up a little in my books anyway.

And then CH1. A very strong start that explores Cyrus’ personality excellently. Russell was a boss that exists, it was fine, though it was equal parts funny and sad to see him literally living in a cave with a bookcase and everything.