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[t1mk1ll3r4ll]

What are you vaping today? #starbucks #coldfoamcappuccino #coffee #vape #vapepen22 #lightedition #vapepen22lightedition #bumbayeliquids #gregoryhouse #tastyvape #coil (at Starbucks Mexico) https://www.instagram.com/p/Bu4bVcnFj-k/?utm_source=ig_tumblr_share&igshid=1vifb7gd828w5

[thorin-is-a-cuddler]

[happyheis]

"Yami Sukehiro. You are a worthy foe."

Yami VS Light

(Black Clover, 35ep.)

[editingforfuturewriters]

Light Edit: “Wayward Souls” by DriftingGlass

Original text:

Travelers, merchants, troupe members, servants of the castle, of the king, even, were often chosen to transport the most dangerous criminals from this very fortress embedded in the mountains, where guard dogs as large and menacing as dragons were stationed and guardsmen were armored to the brim with wits and intellect that outmatched any soldier.

Editing notes:

First, we have to deal with the length of this single sentence. A run-on sentence can bore or confuse the reader. Sentences longer than 20 words tend to create unease amongst the reader base. This sentence is 55 words long, and likely, you had to read it through two or three times to completely understand everything. This sentence can be fixed with some simple changes, and those will make it much easier to read.

First we should separate this sentence into two.

First:

Travelers, merchants, troupe members, servants of the castle, of the king, even, were often chosen to transport the most dangerous criminals from this very fortress embedded in the mountains;

Here you have options, you can either use a period (.) or a semi-colon (;) to separate the sentences. It is really up to author preference, however because the second sentence is continuing along the same vein of thought, I’ve added a semi-colon. This sentence also includes an interesting phrase that really catches the reader’s eye, and breaks up a monotonous list nicely, “servants of the castle, of the king, even.” I really appreciate this wording, as it allows the readers to take a break and think about the groups listed, and it is a nice transition to the second half of the sentence.

Second:

Here, guard dogs as large and menacing as dragons were stationed, and guardsmen were armored to the brim with wits and intellect that outmatched any soldier.

I changed ‘where’ to ‘here’ to adjust for the new sentence, and to allow for a more immediate view of the guards and guard dogs. They are ‘here’ and not just an unknown ‘where.’ The comma after ‘here’ is necessary because it is a clarifying word, and technically is not necessary. The sentence functions perfectly well without it. Lastly, the comma between the two dependent clauses eliminates a comma splice and allows the two subjects to have their own space.

Overall, this story is very well written, and is very engaging. I highly recommend it to anyone intereseted in the Killugon ship, or anyone who just wants a good read. You can find it here.

Thanks for reading, and I hope that these tips help you future writers out there. Feel free to message me about any questions you have regarding writing, or if you have a story that you would like me to take a look at!

[kannphotodesigns]

May you always have a shell in your pocket and sand in your shoes. #pinterestquotes #photography #nofilter #lightediting #ocean #rhodeisland #ri #riphotographer #freelance #footprints #beach #sunflare #dusk #summerevening #digitalphotography #kannphotodesigns #kannphotography #canon #dslr

[andytokenjones-blog]

Like one day bruh gon have to go but he just cant go out like that. . . Ya know #BlackLivesMatter #MyBiggestFear #canongang📷 #Cannon #CanonRebelXTi #ContrastEdits #LightEdit #AndyJonesPhotography

[darnishaofficiaphonetography]

Just a few pics since I've been away

[pilycoello92]

En el dilema de las raíces... como novata en esto del tinte químico... me aterra que con el proceso que lleva ya mi cabello al hacer un retoque se maltrate más, o quede de otro color... por otro lado me empieza a gustar el efecto 🤭 dilemas sin importancia #cosas de cabello #beauty #hair #roots #cosassinimportanciaquetodesvaloramos #selfie #lightedited #hairproblems #blogger #instaselfie #pilycoello https://www.instagram.com/p/B_8HZXdh27O/?igshid=1v9sv93a2vpsv

[oscardemure]

I have a million good pictures of @tevinlamont I had a wonderful time shooting with him follow me and him to see more #photography #photographer #dance #dancephotography #dancephotoshoot #dancephotographer #dancephoto #naturalphotographer #outdoorphotoshoot #outdoorphotography #locationshoot #lightedit #photoshop #nikkor #nikon #nikond750 #nikond750📸 #futurenikonambassador #nikonportrait @nikonusa @nikonportraits #nikonportraits #dancer #dancersofinstagram #dancers #dancerstyle #dancerslifestyle #dancemagazine https://www.instagram.com/p/B1hMH6dp3mJ/?igshid=e6nuvxaw4bb4

[remycastle]

A top a tree top . . . . . #not #a #blood #moon #bnw #blackandwhite #bnwdemand #bnwcaptures #instabnw #bnwmasters #bnwlandscape #landscape #bnwphotography #bnwmood #spicollective #bnwcommunity #noir #igphoto #lensculture #lighteditions #archive #remycastle https://www.instagram.com/p/Bs5nGagB-Ys/?utm_source=ig_tumblr_share&igshid=zb9axwnlusmn

[thedaisycrownwitch]

My edit for this #TricksterMonday 💛 Lyrics taken from "Lights" by Phantogram Hope you guys like it ♡

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#spn #spnfamily #supernatural #deanwinchester #samwinchester #teamfreewill #castiel #gabriel #angels #archangel #archangelgabriel #supernaturalgabriel #trickster #trickstergabriel #richardspeightjr #richardspeight #richardspeightjredit #edit #angeledit #lightedit #warmedit #lyrics #yellowedit #sun #sunedit #alwayskeepfighting #carryonmywaywardson https://www.instagram.com/p/ByQtxeuoDwX/?igshid=gf1ufw3bm1we

[bonefoxproductions]

Just another drawing #graphite #sketch #skull #antlers #trees #raw #edit #artistsoninstagram #producing #productivity #love #passionate #shading #lightmanipulation #photography #hybrid #hobbies #nativeamerican #smile #letmeknowwhatyouthink #lightediting #honing #mycraft #creativity #expression https://www.instagram.com/p/BsCDtj1BaZe/?utm_source=ig_tumblr_share&igshid=wrgx862kdjbf

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[kpoppertwt]

BAEKHYUN + HEEJIN

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[lightedits]

oi anjos que acompanham o lightedits eu queria me desculpar não ser muito ativa aqui, eu adoro fazer icons e headers e realmente tenho várias ideias mas como eu ainda não estou de férias e estudo à tarde não tenho muito tempo. VOCÊS PODEM FAZER PEDIDOS PARA MIM PORQUE VOU TENTAR ATENDER NA HORA, EU PROMETO!!!!!! queria dizer que vou ser mais ativa mas não posso então direi que vou tentar, muito obrigada e é isso. continuem sempre dando muito amor ao baekhyun nossa luz e ao exo nosso universo. we are one.

[steveswindells]

Yes, that IS Guy Pratt on bass!