#he's been infodumping me about these things non stop it's so cute I love him

[nipuni]

Yesterday's photos! and some from today 😊 Another day at the christmas markets, folk band at the pub, some walking around parks aaand then Nicolas baked some bread and I decorated the garden and veranda with more lights 🎄

[salty-croissants]

this is extremely unnecessarily long, but if it's okay, can I request separate hcs for Bullfrog and Rayman (+ Ramon if it's cool) with a touch-starved, easily flustered and insecure yet passionate fem!reader (who can also REALLY kick ass or speak up when others have messed with the ones she loves) as their friend / s/o (who might or might not be on the spectrum, likes to rant or infodump a LOT about medias that she likes such as games, shows or horror media, who also loves drawing herself with the ones she loves and giving them small things randomly in a way to make them feel better, like snacks, drawings of them, or even something they thought of getting beforehand) ?

Thank you for the request ! 

Don’t worry , the length was okay ! Since it was very detailed it was fun to work with it :D 

Hope it turned out okay !

Details : use of female reader ;

established relationships ; 

no warnings needed , other than a bit of a suggestive line in Ramon’s part

Bullfrog 💚

Bullfrog is a very loving boyfriend , so when you tell him you’re touch-starved he is going to make it his mission to shower you with affection all the time … 

And when I mean all the time , I’m being very serious :

as soon as you wake up , he’s going to cuddle you as long as he can ;

you’re both going somewhere , either a mission or just doing something outside ? He will be holding your hand the whole time ; 

you had a bad day or are feeling tired ? You better believe Bullfrog is going to be holding you in his arms the whole time to help you feel better …

Yeah , no force of nature is going to stop him from displaying his love for you , so … yep , better be ready ! 

If you ever feel insecure about yourself or your relationship , Bullfrog is quick to solve any of your doubts …

< I don’t know … what if you really would be better off with somebody else instead of - > 

< y/n , chérie , you’re the only one for me . 

Nobody else will ever able to make me feel this way , how could I possibly want to leave someone who is beautiful in every way ? > 

He is in love with all the drawings you make featuring the two of you together , and he holds onto each one of them very dearly … 

They have been made by his beloved just for him after all , so Bullfrog is going to cherish them forever .

He also carries some of them with him when he goes on very dangerous missions , keeping them carefully folded in his pocket : he really does think that having a symbol of your love for him by his side will bring him good luck .

As always , Bullfrog is always so happy to listen to you talking about all of your various interests , and it’s not rare for him to start getting into them thanks to you .

< Would it be okay to watch that series finale tonight ? It’s completely fine if you’re busy - > 

< Non , that would be wonderful mon amour ! We don’t have any more missions left , and besides I’m really curious to see what will happen after that cliffhanger ! > 

The way he supports your passion always brings a smile on your face … which is what Bullfrog strives for every day : to see you as happy as you can be ://) 

Rayman 🧡

Since he is often very busy with his shows , Rayman can’t always be around to give you affection … but you can be sure that as soon as he comes home to you he will not be letting you go for hours .

< Oh y/n … I missed you so much , I’ve been looking forward to this all day … >

Those sweet little moments he gets to spend with you are more valuable to him than anything else , and Rayman loves to demonstrate it by showering you with kisses , enjoying your adorable reactions to them .

< Aw , you look so cute when you’re blushing honey ~ > 

< Pfft - stooop ~ > 

Indeed … if you’re someone that gets flustered easily you better prepare yourself , because this man will be complimenting you and every little thing you do at all times .

Rayman really just wants you to know that you’re the most important person in his life , the one who saved him from a life of loneliness … he really wouldn’t know what to do with himself if you were gone .

However , there are also ways to fluster him instead : 

for example if you ever were to stand up for him when somebody is being a douchebag about his species , Rayman will be completely head over heels for you …

< y/n , thank you for what you said back there …

It really meant a lot . > 

< No need to thank me , Ray ! I couldn’t just stand there and let that random guy say all that stuff about you … what kind of girlfriend would let that slide ? >

< Heh … you’re amazing sweetie .

 I love you so much ~ > 

Similarly to Bullfrog , Rayman definitely keeps all the drawings you make for him , hanging them in his office : no matter what anyone’s opinion is , the art made by his sweetheart will all stay right there on the walls , and that’s final . 

He will also be gushing about it to anyone who asks …

< Oh , that ? My beautiful y/n made it for me … isn’t she just so talented ? > 

Rayman remembers all of your interests in full detail , and sometimes he likes to surprise you by buying you gifts related to them , or even more …

< *gasp* oh my god - is that a ticket for that movie I really wanted to watch ? >

< It sure is ! Looks like the Directors haven’t scheduled anything for tomorrow , so I was thinking we could go watch it today … does that sound good ? > 

< It sounds perfect ! Thank you my love , thank you so much ! ~ > 

< It’s the least I could do for you , darling … I just want to see you smile , that’s all that matters to me . >

Ramon 🖤

After everything that’s happened , Ramon has definitely become a lot more protective of you , which means he will be by your side pretty much all the time : 

holding you close to him and feeling your warmth calms him down , so if you’re touch starved it’s an absolute win .

… tough sometimes he might get a bit too attached .

< Ram , honey , I have to go to the bathroom … could you , you know … let me get up for a second ? > 

< Hmmpf … > 

< Pretty please ? ~ > 

< Okay okay … just … come back soon . > 

< I will , don’t worry . > 

Knowing how easy it is to make you flustered , Ramon is definitely going to have a fun time just sneaking behind you and start whispering sweet nothings in your ear , using that deep , raspy voice that he knows will make your whole face turn red …

< You look so pretty , y/n … sometimes I could just eat you up …

I might do just that , actually ~ >

The way you blush is just so cute … Ramon can’t help but want to see that lovely face of yours  every day .

Ramon likes to sit next to you while you draw , silently watching you and all the little expressions you make when you’re focused …

Every piece you make that features him will be kept somewhere safe , maybe something close to an album , so that he’ll be able to look at it whenever you’re away or if he’s not having the best day : seeing such a sincere display of your love for him never fails to bring him joy , and it makes him even more determined to keep you safe no matter what . 

While he likes to stay quiet when you discuss about your interest , Ramon is going to remember every little thing you tell him , and this gets demonstrated when the two of you are watching either a series or a movie you like .

< Hm , that’s the character we saw at the beginning , right ? The one that you mentioned we’d see yesterday ? > 

< Oh - you remember I told you that ? > 

< Mhm , I always remember everything say to me … I love listening to you . > 

< Hehe … thank you , Ramon … 

I love you ~ > 

< Love you too , y/n … and I’ll love you always ~ > 

[whatididtday]

SEPT 14 (THU) :

I woke up at around 8:00, had some coffee and payasam anf feel asleep.

It's my dad's birthday today, I didn't wish him irl, just messaged him.

I know he might have felt upset but I don't want to hurt myself even more than I am

I slept till afternoon, played pogo for a bit, listened non stop to the song Crossed by Brady

I cried a lot, the whole noon - uncontrollable crying anf self pity

Read a lot of things about autism and wondered in fear if I can ever get over the limitations

I told my bb about me crying and they've been very kind and sweet, supportive

They told me take proper rest for one week, no thinking about finding job, just rest and take care of my health and do things I enjoy as I've been burnt out and that's why I'm crying so much.

They've been a safe place and the warmest kindest thing to ever happen to me, I can't wait to marry them and spend the rest of my life with them.

In the evening I had tea and went out with my mother and she bought me an eyeshadow pallette and a beauty blender, the foundation I wanted wasn't in stock and she got herself a kohl kajal

It rained a lot today, I felt really awful for bugging such a pricey eyeshadow pallette, I hope I can give something beautiful to my mom once I start earning

Then I had some makhana after coming home, fed my cat.

I played pogo and texted my love few times, then they asked if we could videocall in some time

I finished up my dinner: fried rice and really good fish curry, I had some sweets too

I put on makeup to look cute cute our videocall anf set up my sunset lamp

We videocalled and laughed a lot, we transfered pogo pokémons, I sent them a porygon and they sent me an unown "L", we talked about our day, infodumped about wars interest,sun fish, anime, a bit of pokémon

We took a quiz about which type of pokémon are you, I got Normal type and they got water type

We then took a quiz of which eeveelution are you and laughed a lot at the option types in the quiz : it was obvious that all the options were really the characteristics of the eeveelutions

I got Eevee and they got Sylvieon. We laughed a lot about it and they comforted me by saying Eevee is the cutest of them all.

We did our cute loving things together, it was very warm and fun.

They then told me they caught up to one piece Manga and are v excited as it's the final arc anf it's v nice to listen to them being so cute and passionate.

I infodumped a bit more even thigh I could see them being v eepy but I still went on.. Then I finally controlled my urge to talk and I just let them go to sleep after giving lots of kisses and us telling I love yous.

My heart is full with love and gratefulness from my beloved bb, I miss them so much. I can't wait to be back in their arms and listen to them breathe and feel them laugh and kiss them warmly again.

I miss them so much, it hurts.

I want to get a job and for that I need to love what I am learning and then I'll get better at it and make routines and figure something out

Wish me luck

[asmolemmeeatyouout]

The boys with Autistic! MC! part two ! SFW

(Bc I’m self indulgent and like 5 ppl wanted it so yesyesyes)

(Had my first proper spoonie day in a while today so imma finish this after what 4 months? Whoopsie. Sorry if any of the points overlap I’ve not re read my last post, please shoot me an ask if you want anything clarified/expanded on !)

Lucifer:

Has to stop his brothers from constantly bothering you when you’re overwhelmed (they’re just worried)

You very quickly learn his office is the safest place to be when overwhelmed due to the dim lighting and the brother deterring curse on his doorway

He has a record player and SO much classical music for when you need background noise

This leads to impromptu slow dancing when you insist he needs a break and there’s music playing

If you have your own records, the *smoother ones will end up mixed in with his

*smoother as in less staccato /distracting because he is most likely working

Very much enjoys spending time in silence with you, he finds it comfortng to just exist with someone without having anything needed of him

Especially if you’re both doing your own thing, like you just being in the room with him (playing a game or reading or smthn) while he does his paperwork is so soothing to him

Mammon:

Have you seen his horns? They’re so smooth and shinyyy, a+++ stimming material

He loves head pats so he’ll willingly put his head in your lap when you watch movies

he’s very proud of his demon form but also kind of shy so it’ll take some coaxing to get him to let you touch his horns but when he sees how content it makes you? It’s his new favourite hobby letting you play with his hair and horns during movies

(That said they’re very sensitive (like him) so be gentle)

He WILL adopt your love language and mannerisms:

if you bump people he will start knocking into you constantly, (wrists, hips, shoulders, head, any and all on random repeat)

if you like to collect and give things to people he will a. Hoard them in a little shrine (that he Denys. having) and b. Start looking for things he can give you back

If you rub textures you like you’ll find him stroking your arms/face/jumper right back (sometimes with his face, but only ever in private because he feels vulnerable using such a soft form of affection)

Levithian:

You cannot tell me this man isn’t autistic

Communication is SO! EASY!

Then even If you don’t understand you can just ask. You can just ask and he’ll tell you. None of this ‘figure it out yourself’ nt bullshit

Our baby has anxiety anyway so he’s probably ‘over’ explained it before you can say anything

(Over explained in the sense of nt, personally I love it when ppl get really detailed)

In that case he gets embarrassed about how much he’s talking so it’s your turn to reassure him that he’s not boring you

The solace you get in realising you like all of his autistic traits soothes your own insecurities

That being said your anxiety (if you have it) is matchy matchy so don’t expect him to talk to the cashier for you

He’s very chill with you being non verbal because either he’s absorbed in his own game/anime/show or it means there’s more room for him to talk about his interests

That being said if your special interests/ hyperfixations don’t line up on any given day? The bickering over who’s turn it is to infodump gets intense (this is the one source of all your arguments)

All the other brothers are kind of terrified/jealous of your relationship, especially when they see you talking about a shared special interest because you talk rapid fire and very in-depth. to them it’s almost like you’re talking in code or another language because they know all the individual words but what the everloving fuck are you on about

Asmodeus:

Has specific outfits he wears when he wants you to hug him (which is always). They’re made out of the softest material, or any clothing of his you’ve expressed a texture interest in.

Finds it so amusing when you come rushing over to rub your face against his chest bc mmmmm softsoftsoft

Likes to text you in the morning to see how you’re feeling (and how sensory sensitive you are because god forbid his outfit with chains and jangles stops him from seeing you)

Understands better than Anyone that affection and love can be shown in a whole barrage of ways not just physically

Figures out how you show affection faster than any of the other brothers

Immediately starts reciprocating it (partly bc he’s selfishly trying to make you love him most)

Satan:

Will learn about your special interests so he can engage you on the topic

Is the ONLY person in the house you can talk about any special interest with, no matter how niche because he loves learning (although he does prefer the *academic* side of them rather than pop culture but he will listen to both)

*academic* as in something involving learning about something or crafting or *how* to do something, not just like, maths

You’re pretty much the only person who can keep up with him in terms of knowledge and enthusiasm (even if it’s only for very specific things) and thus you become the person he talks to about his interests

Originally kind of annoyed by how absentminded you are (because you forget several dates) but once you get settled into a routine he starts to find it cute how habitual you are, and then realises it could work to his advantage.

He then schedules a date into your weekly routine (or biweekly depending on your energy levels) so you start to get upset if it’s missed bc it’s part of your routine. (Satan is ridiculously smart and is very much willing to manipulate your routine to his (and yours) advantage, he is a demon after all)

Beelzebub:

Gives the best squishes. He’s just so big he can literally envelope you (in other news he is terrified of hurting you so he’s very nervous at first, he’s used to huggin ppl very gently bc he is a muscle mountain)

Maybe don’t use chew stims around him (unless he’s eating) because seeing you use them will either make him hungry, or he’ll ask to see it and oops it’s been swallowed hope you didn’t want that back (he’s very apologetic he really didn’t mean to but it was in his mouth and chewed before he could think)

Literally the kindest man in the universe, if you have issues with shame or *guilt* (especially if it creeps outta nowhere or it relates to not being able to do something) he will a. Reassure you and give you cuddles until you feel okay (or one on one bonding time if you’re too touch sensitive) then b. Go help with whatever task was too much so you don’t have to worry

Belphagor:

Have I mentioned the stuffies? This boy definitely has a stash of soft toys that all have names and personalities. This originally stemmed from the fact he was locked alone in an attic for a year, he needed some form of company or he was gonna go crazy, and sleeping alone is meh in his opinion. But then he became attached and after you showed him yours? And you weren’t ashamed of your teddy bears or how much you loved them he confided in you about his. (And you had a tea party)

Problems sleeping ? (Me too bud it’s 3.44 am lol) nonononno baby boy has got you, just snuggle up to him and you’ll be snoozing in no time (I HC that being around belphagor just makes you a little sleepy and the longer you’re there the stronger the urge to sleep gets)

You’re at rad (or out in public and can’t leave) and get overstimmed? Belphie has got you! He keeps sunglasses on him so he can secretly sleep when he’s not supposed to. Also (imo) he’s the king of hoodies, both his main outfits have a hood (and you can’t convince me he doesn’t wear one of them over his uniform as soon as lucifer dips), my boy will slip his hoodie on you and wrap you in a hug to get you away from the noise/sights

(I am now too tired to write anymore, hope yall enjoyed!)

[kaminawi]

HCs for adhd Kaminari Denki with an autistic s/o!!

Aight so I have a hc that Denki has ADHD cause well I mean look at that boy and tell me he doesn’t,,,,so like this is kinda based offa that hehe oops

He is. So excited when he learns you have ASD

Cause like

!!!!!!Brain buddies y’know

The moment he realizes he’s in love with you is when you got really deep into infodumping about your latest special interest to him one day

Your eyes lit up, you had a huge smile on your face, you sounded so passionate about whatever it was, you were happy stimming in a way he found so adorable, and he just sat there with a dumb smile on his face basking in your glow and that’s when he realized that he was deeply in love with you

He spends a lot of time flirting with you but you never seemed to get his hints which upset him at first but then he remembers people with ASD often have a hard time understanding some things when they aren’t said in a blunt, obvious way.

So this boy spends h o u r s thinking up good ways he can flirt with you so that you’ll be able to realize that he’s flirting without him being too straightforward and awkward

Eventually he just kinda accidentally blurts out that he loves you after you’ve finished infodumping one day. You stare at him for a couple long seconds processing what he said until your face lights up and you become a flustered, blushing, excited, stimming, mess.

When you confess your love back you both turn into excited balls of stim driven energy and it’s the cutest thing in the entire world.

When you guys start dating, you get shared special interests/hyperfixations so you two will sit down and talk about whatever that is for hours and when you aren’t talking about it you’ll be watching/playing/engaging in it and when you aren’t doing that you’ll be sending each other memes about it (if it’s really niche this angel will make memes about it to send you)

The bakusquad is low key annoyed about it because you guys have been talking about this one thing for weeks now and you both know so much about it that you could teach an entire class about it. But you guys don’t care

He will use cheesy pickup lines related to your special interest. Denki is and will always be a huge flirt and will adapt his technique to whatever gets you laughing or blushing the most

He will also use pet names related to your special interests which may not make sense to everyone else but you think it’s the sweetest thing ever

Denki will plan dates to go to places that involve your special interests but you’ll both have to make sure the other is not spending too much money on stuff that you might be over in a couple weeks.

Speaking of dates!! Denki understands the struggle of sensory processing disorder so he will always make sure to have two sets of ear plugs and two sets of sunglasses with him at all times when you guys are out on dates. You guys also often go on dates at really weird times of the day when he thinks places won’t be as busy because he wouldn’t want either of you to have to go through sensory overload and ruin the fun date

If you do go into sensory overload and/or have a meltdown he will throw some earphones and sunglasses on you and get you out of there so fast you would think he swapped quirks with Iida

He’ll take you back to his place and if you’re okay with touch he will cuddle you for as long as it takes to get you comfortable again

If you like pressure stims he will lay on you until you tell him to get off or until he gets scared that he’s crushing you or if you prefer he’ll hug you super tightly while gently rubbing your back

If you aren’t a big fan of touching he’ll lay you down in his bed and he’ll sit there with you until you’ve calmed down

Afterwards you guys will sit together and watch the movie/show you’ve seen enough times to know every single word while eating your favourite food

Oh!! Also!! Since Denki also stims, you guys pick up on each other stims a lot and share new stim toys you’ve found! They others definitely notice and tease you both about it but the girls all think it’s the cutest thing of all time

Speaking of stims,,,,,,,run! your! hand! through! his! hair! It feels amazing for him and it’s so fluffy and nice for you too! It’s a win win situation!!

He also likes to activate a small voltage of his quirk in his hands because it feels nice and tingley and when he finds out you like how it feels too, he’ll grab your hands and do it all the time (while being super careful not to accidentally electrocute you) so that he can see your cute, happy smile

You guys know all of each other’s harmful stims, what they mean, and how to stop them. If you’re hitting yourself in any way he’ll carefully grab your hands and lightly squeeze them in a pulsing sort of way until you calm down. If he’s hitting his wrists together you’ll grab them and play patty cake with him for a while until he calms down

If you ever go non-verbal/semi-verbal he will assist you throughout the day as much as you want him to when it comes to communicating with others. He knows you so well that he always just seems to know what you’re trying to say even if you’re having a difficult time charading it out. He secretly things it’s adorable to watch you point to things and make cute little frustrated faces but he’ll never tell you that

All in all, you guys are perfect together. This boy is so whipped for you. He loves you more than anything in the entire world and will do anything to see your beautiful smile and happy stims.

I could write so much more but I feel like this is already going on for a bit too long 😅

[nyarmand]

Hello!! A, T, and Y for the ask game?

Hello! :D 

Let’s see.

A - Ships that you currently like a lot. (They don’t have to be OTPs because not everyone has OTPs.) Friendships, pairings, threesomes, etc. are allowed.

Let’s see! I can think of three ships that I absolutely love, from two different fandoms. I mean, I have more ships that I love than that, but these are the ones I’ll scream intensely over at the slightest provocation…

First of all, we have Death Note’s Matt/Mello, which I’m a shameless fan of and will scream about night and day if given the chance. Start off with a character generally characterized as a bit of an emotional wreck and then give him someone who can pretty much get characterized however anyone wants due to his lack of official characterization… the fandom doesn’t often disappoint me. Generally it ends up as a lovely little relationship with plenty of fluff, angst, and humor to go around.

…a lot of people can’t resist adding some smut in there which does put me off of the works in question but there’s enough safe ones that I am still quite happy.

And then there’s the ones where people decide that it’s got to be dysfunctional and even downright abusive. I… don’t really like those. But to each their own I guess. 

But you’re here for the BSD ships, am I right? ;)

BSD has the honor of having two of my absolute favorite ships right now!

Full disclosure: I’m very basic. I ship popular ships. I don’t ship ALL popular ships but the ones that I do ship are generally popular. That said… Soukoku! I love them! That’s just how it is!

I love the fact that they trust each other with their lives even though they’re at each others’ throats half the time. I love their dynamic and the back-and-forth they can have. I love everything about them, really. Whether it’s snarky or sweet, Soukoku works give me life. (Do you know that one where Chuuya’s walking on the ceiling because he’s stressed out? A comic got made of it. It’s amazing. Or there’s this wonderful little story that I read by this one absolutely brilliant author where Dazai loses his eyes– /hit)

Secondly, Ranpoe! They’re so CUTE. The popular dynamic, as far as I can tell, is Ranpo being his brilliant yet almost entirely non-functional, egotistical little gremlin self and Poe as a shrinking violet who also can’t function but for entirely different reasons… And I love it. It makes me so absurdly happy. I love how much Poe admires Ranpo and is willing to put up with his quirks. (Well, the way I see it, it’s Poe accepting and accommodating Ranpo’s autism. I’ll never let go of that headcanon. Never.) 

And I’m also of the firm belief that it’s at least halfway canon… I haven’t caught up on the manga but from what I’ve seen so far, Poe has a very strange idea of what a rivalry is like… 

Or maybe I’ve just had the shipping goggles on for so long that they’ve melted straight onto my face. That’s also a likely possibility.

One bonus point in favor of the ship is… look how well their names fit together! It makes me so happy! I adore it.

T - Do you have any hard and fast headcanons that you will die defending?

As mentioned before… Edogawa Ranpo is autistic. Full stop. Is it projection? Yeah. Do I care? No. I don’t get enough canonically autistic characters and Ranpo just screams it at me. (Death Note’s L is another of my ‘this character is totally autistic and you can’t change my mind’ characters. The two of them have some similarities that I have fun with, but that’s neither here nor there.)

Dazai’s whole ‘happy fun silly mode’ is basically a giant coping mechanism. That’s also projection. I also don’t care.

In direct contrast to what some of the fandom seems to think, I don’t think that Odasaku could have ever had any sort of romantic feelings for Dazai. I think he would’ve been more likely to unofficially adopt him, if anything.

Evillious Chronicles’ Kiril Clockworker is not the cinnamon roll everyone seems to think. After all, he did have Hereditary Evil Raiser syndrome. At some point he must have done something.

I don’t think I have any others… not that come to mind anyway. 

Y - What are your secondhand fandoms (i.e., fandoms you aren’t in personally but are tangentially familiar with because your friends/people on your dash are in them)?

I’m becoming more and more familiar with Mo Dao Zu Shi, haha. One of these days I’ll actually get in on it.

BSD was a secondhand fandom but now it is a firsthand fandom. Oops, but not oops.

SAO, Fate, Symphogear, Fairy Tail, and JJBA are also some things I know a lot more about than I otherwise would due to having friends into them. I don’t plan on getting into them myself as they’re not really my style, but I like that my friends feel comfortable enough around me to infodump! ^-^ They let me infodump back at them as well. Friends like that are the best kinds.

I also have been learning some about Noragami! I think I’ll get into that eventually, or at the very least I’ll try. Though I’ll have to be careful as it seems it has some content in it that won’t mix well with the whole trauma thing. That just means I have to be super cautious! 

Finally, I have a couple of friends who like Mystic Messenger a lot and as a result I know lots about that, but I probably won’t ever actually play it myself as I’m not really that into dating sims in general and the cult stuff kind of scares me away. Plus I want to have a normal sleep schedule and I hear that game is very bad for such things. :P

Thank you for sending this! ^-^ I hope the answer is satisfactory!

[maryellencarter]

"A Matter of Time". Is this the one with the black hole? Who knows?

* Yup! I know that thumbnail.

* Dude, they're already running in slow motion. Not slow enough you'd notice if you didn't know what you were looking for, but enough to make it uncanny valley. I might not have much to say here, cause I seem to remember this being a pretty intense one; I might end up just watching.

* Damn. Yeah, the way they're making the time dilation more... *more* -- god. Somebody did some good work on this one. The filming, the editing...

* Exposition about wormholes, Sam being cute and full of science, Jack being infodumped at and making faces. This one needs a bunch of science background to make sense.

* Daniel's offworld on a dig for this one -- series TV always needs a few eps you can film overlapping, keeping Daniel out of the picture on one, Jack on another, or splitting the team in half, so that they don't get too far behind on broadcasting, since it generally takes about ten days to film an episode and you're broadcasting once a week. (Some crews can pull off seven-day or even six-day filming schedules, but they have to be *really* good both in front of and behind the camera.)

* Figuring out that it's a black hole dilating time. The SG team trapped on the other side is commanded by a guy Jack recommended and trained, so Jack is really antsy to go through and help them. It's good Sam and Hammond are more cautious, or SG-1 would be very dead... ^_^

* ...wait, it wasn't a black hole when they went there? The star just suddenly turned into one? They should be dead *already*. That's not... that's not how any of that works. A black hole forms after a supernova, doesn't it? At least, that's the hypothesis I seem to remember learning.

* SAM NO don't leave the fucking stargate open to observe the black hole... okay, not actually your fault, it probably wouldn't have shut down from the moment it connected. Still. Scientists, man. :-)

* And now we find out that the time dilation is already affecting the SGC, they're out of contact with the people up top, who think there's a foothold situation on. This is not quite the standard kind of foothold situation...

* Hi, Siler! :D

* Hammond's trying to get up to NORAD to call the President and report, since the red phone isn't working. So now it's Jack, Sam, and Teal'c trying to fix things.

* It's kind of hilarious to see Siler and Jack flipping electrical breakers in tandem, because Dan Shea is Rick Anderson's stunt double, has been since MacGyver, and not only are they similarly built, they're damn near drift-compatible at this point. :D

* Aaand Siler gets electrocuted and does a lovely "we all fall out of our chairs again". ^_^ I mean, not that he was in a chair, but you know what I mean.

* Ooh, Teal'c got asploded too.

* Sam uses her dogtags to demonstrate that gravity is doing the thing.

* Hi, Major Disaster! I mean, his name's Major Davis, but he only shows up when the world is ending. ^_^

* Hi, Janet! The nice thing about foothold / bottle episodes is we get all the Earthside bit players in.

* The special ops guys they sent down to check on the supposed foothold situation have decided Janet is a shapeshifter. They are in so much trouble. ^_^

* Hammond did make it topside, anyway; he's being sent on an airplane to talk to the President. Major Davis briefs him on the stuff Sam has been figuring out below decks, since due to the time dilation the scientists topside have had more time to figure out what's going on.

* And earthquakes. The gravity is coming through the wormhole. Jack is being unhappy about Sam's technobabble.

* Jack does not like special forces dude. Doesn't think he's competent, either. There is so much snark.

* There's noticeable time dilation just between the Gate and the control room. Sam requests permission to go topside and try to fix things. Oh, Hammond's back from D.C.! Time is getting more and more wonky.

* Hammond brings orders to try and blow up the Gate to close the wormhole. Sam thinks that won't work. I don't remember if it will or not.

* Jack and special forces guy, whose name is Colonel Cromwell, volunteer to stay behind and set off the bomb after the SGC is evacuated. Yeah, this guy's dead. ^_^

* Teal'c and Janet are moving Siler from the infirmary on a gurney -- Siler got burned pretty bad when the Gate shorted out the main circuit breaker.

* "Captain, relativity gives me a headache." Me too, Hammond, me too.

* Aww, Teal'c being Carter's sounding board. I love the team dynamics here.

* And we're starting to get little snippets of Jack's backstory with Cromwell. Sounds like Cromwell had to leave somebody behind. Possibly Jack. ^_^

* Sam decides that instead of blowing up the Stargate, they should boost the power to it, making the wormhole jump tracks to a non-black-hole world. So now they have to try and get to Jack in time to stop him from setting off the self-destruct.

* Yup, Cromwell left Jack behind in Iraq, thinking he was dead. Jack is really not happy about this. There is yelling.

* Hi, Siler! Good to see you on your feet again.

* Oh, they are using a bomb still. Just a shaped charge so that the power goes into the Stargate.

* Climbing back "up" these ropes away from the Gate into the control room is where Cromwell is gonna die, iirc. Man, the time variance shit in this ep gets really intense.

* Aw, poor Hammond's still topside waiting. "We'll know sometime tomorrow," he says.

* Aw, sithspit. I did NOT remember that the puddle, the event horizon, is fucking whirlpooling from the gravity. That's so fucking disturbing.

* Oh shit, so *that's* what happens. The rest of the bulletproof glass gives way, and a shard gets stuck in the climbing apparatus on Cromwell's rope.

* Hoshit, there goes the iris. Now anyone who falls in gets eaten by the wormhole. Eternal spaghettification, jesus.

* Jack was starting to fall into the wormhole, Cromwell went to grab him, Cromwell's harness broke, Jack managed to hold him for a second, now he's gone. Now it's all on Jack making horrible faces and saving the day. ^_^

(I'm not actually mocking, it just comes out like that because DAMN.)

* Oh, Jack, baby. And Teal'c trying to pull him up away from the bomb before it blows... damn, this is one hell of an episode. :D

* Awww. God, there are so many really good episodes in this season.

[lotrewrite]

Well, here’s my comments! Feel free to message me with any questions or for clarification of anything

Overall, this is really solid you guys. 

The biggest issue is just fleshing some of the episodes out a bit. Character arcs are nicely done and the character stuff is spread out surprisingly well. In general, I think there’s a little more focus on Mick and Len than the others, and Amaya could probably be given a slightly larger role, but overall I’m impressed. Writing a team and giving them all equal focus is really hard. I’m so excited this is already so good

(Also like three of these episodes are set in times/places related to special interests I’ve had over the years so if I start getting caught up in historical details that’s why)

I haven’t looked at other people’s feedback yet, cause I didn’t want to be influenced so sorry if I’m just repeating stuff

LOTREWRITE: Yay, more comments! Sorry about the delay in posting these, all!

Episode 1:

-          I love the opening sequence with Kendra A+

-          How has Nate’s pencil lasted so long? It has to be at least 20 years old, right? A pen might be more plausible but have the same basic narrative effect. If you’re keeping the dog tags bit from the original though it might be best to cut it the reference to it being from his grandfather entirely or have it be a replica or something. Best to focus on a single sentimental object.

-          The banter is flawless and in character. Nice!

-          Thawne’s explanation is a bit of an infodump. That’s gonna need to be reworked into more of a dialogue, at the very least. It would probably be better to show it somehow. Maybe show the Black Flash appearing a few seconds after Thawne leaves, then disappearing just as quickly? Darhk can research it on his own and then explain it to someone later, for those viewers who aren’t familiar with the concept from The Flash.

-          “Damien Darhk?” Stein asks. “As in –” “The man who murdered your sister,” Rip says. I assume we’re talking about Laurel, but this makes it sound like Darhk murdered Stein’s sister.

-          “I never did” Talk about OUCH. This is amazing.

Episode 2

-          Some clarification on when and where “the infirmary” is would be good, as well as what Jax and Stein’s history here is, but I figure that will be added as this is fleshed out

-          Same with “decision makers”

-          I vote yes on “not drinking and driving” quip that’s excellent

-          Bambi is adorable

-          Make sure when you’re researching the crusades to look at things from multiple perspectives. This seems like it could very easily fall into a very generic “Good Christians” vs “Evil non-Christians” crusade narrative and that’s… less than ideal. There was a lot of politics surrounding the crusades, even if you’re just focusing on the Christians. That might also help provide a motive for your dissenter? Someone who thinks these soldiers should be back at home looking after things there instead of invading a foreign nation to secure power and riches for the church? Someone who’s been convinced that the crusaders have no divine right to this land and that they should leave it to the people who actually live there? Could maybe be a place to start setting up some doing what’s “right” vs doing what’s supposed to happen conflict? This is obviously just an outline so maybe you’re already planning something like that but I figured I’d mention it

-          I’m a fan of Bambi not dying

-          I love Firestorm as an angel that’s an amazing idea in so many ways A++++

-          Mick roasting a T-Rex with his gun heck yeah

Episode 3:

-          I love Sara’s canary pendant

-          Continuity issue: in episode 1, Mick punches Rex and that’s about the extent of their interaction. Not much of a basis for the trust he seems to be showing in this ep.

LOTREWRITE: Possibly we could make it more explicit that Rex noticed that the bomb the JSA were tracking was discharged harmlessly after Mick said he went after it, thus the trust?

-          Yay for bi Sara!

-          The Sara and Amaya scene sounds like it’s gonna be so cute

-          Ray’s speech to Nate about heroism is really solid

-          I see now why it’s a pencil, but I’m still not loving the idea. Does it just magically never get not sharpened? Has Nate never noticed? Does he sharpen it and lose tiny fragments of the spear every time? Am I being too nitpicky?

-          Love the mention of non-fighting military personnel 

-          Mick is starting to feel like he’s taking over the story a little too much here maybe, especially considering that he’s been the most major character in the previous episodes as well, while Jax and Stein seem almost nonexistent. Nate could probably have a little more prominence given that this is his big reveal episode.

Episode 4

-          Might want to give a quick rundown of some basics about Chernobyl in the finished episode for audiences unfamiliar with the history. I had to look it up because I thought it happened years later and was very confused.

-          Give some reason for why Stein’s actions were changed from the original timeline. Is Darhk’s presence there already changing things?

-          What do you mean by Jax can “safely detonate” the bomb? Is there some reason he and Stein can’t Firestorm up and transfigure it? I don’t recall Jax being a particular expert in bombs previous to this.

-          The Stein and Clarissa storyline is very very good

-          Sara and Mick (not) talking about their shared grief Thank You

-          Sara seems rather quick to trust Eobard. She knows it’s a speedster who killed Rex, right? Nevermind. She still seems very quick to trust for a former assassin.

-          Maybe avoid Eobard villain monologuing? He has no reason to.

-          Doesn’t the Black Flash only come after the speedsters, not anyone whose death is changed by time travel? iirc, both Cisco and Barry’s mother were brought back to life by Barry changing the timeline at one time or another and neither were targeted. There may be extenuating circumstances I’m forgetting though…

-          Sara and Laurel’s storyline is really touching and sweet

-          LISA!!!!!!

Episode 5

-          I’m loving the mix of historically accurate costumes and especially Mick

-          Crew interacting with Vikings is great and in character

-          Jax and Gunlød’s relationship is really cute

-          The funeral for Len and the others they’ve lost is fantastic

Episode 6

-          Eobard and Darhk banter already sounds like it’s gonna be great

-          How’s Lisa getting in? nevermind, that’s answered

-          The image of Len doing anything “emphatically” is kinda cracking me up. A look or something would probably be more in character.

-          Vampiric octopuses omg please have a flashback here

-          Building of tension for the break-in is excellently done. A bit cliché, but in a good way.

-          Lisa’s fury is great.

Episode 7:

-          Oa?

-          Independence Day banter is really fun

-          Lisa/Cisco scene is YES

-          “justified” I see what you did there

Episode 8:

-          Remember to introduce Constantine etc to audiences who might not be familiar with them

-          Are you going to show Mick vanishing or just have him suddenly no longer be there? Related: does he leave and then get beaten up or get taken out while with the rest of them? Does the audience know he’s telling the truth or will there be some room for them to wonder?

-          HARLEY/IVY YESSSSS

-          I’m assuming Booster is Booster Gold, yes? Do we get him in this season?! Okay coming back, we don’t. It’s a nice shoutout for those who know, but the prominence it’s given implies it will be relevant.

-          Clarify who Resurrection Crusade are

Episode 9:

-          Sara’s disguise for the Christmas party isn’t specified

-          This might be an issue with the original version of the episode as well, but the colonies were in open rebellion against the British crown and GW probably wouldn’t expect honorable treatment or a prisoner exchange if captured. He was openly committing treason in the eyes of the British army.

-          Ray navigating with one boot is hilarious and wonderful

-          Would soldiers from the pre-telephone era be able to adjust well enough in one night to work with a comm? Guns they at least have experience with. Tiny devices that let them talk to each other through long distances might be a bit pushing it. Or I might be getting too nitpicky.

-          The whole massacre plot needs some work tbh. How does Jax and Amaya knocking out a total of three soldiers stop a full massacre? How many were there? How did the soldiers feel about it? Sneak attacks on innocent (white) civilians weren’t really a common part of warfare at the time. Some or all of the villagers would have supported the British or at least pretended to. Not to mention the British soldiers were probably occupying the nearest village. Village sounds really feudal I’m thinking town might be more appropriate okay I’m definitely getting too nitpicky

-          End scene is great

Episode 10:

-          Ray’s pirate persona is gold

-          Why do they ask Jax for his name first? (or do they?)

-          Foreshadowing Rip joining the other side? Neat

-          Looks like this just needs more details for the climactic battle then you’ll be good

Episode 11:

-          The opening is so good

-          Adorable engineering duo yes good

-          So does the Greenpeace member know about the explosion? How?

-          This episode feels a bit short? It’s focused on a single plot that gets resolved relatively straightforwardly. Maybe add subplot(s) and/or throw a wrench in things somewhere?

Episode 12:

-          A little hard to follow at first but I think it’s supposed to be

-          Does Mick say “who’s Grace?”? That seems to imply that he recognizes the other names.

-          This has the potential to be really creepy I like it

-          Can Rip be incorporated into this somehow? Or not necessarily be incorporated as the character, but at least mentioned? It feels relevant, since he had the closest relationship to Gideon

Episode 13:

-          Could Legion!Len’s reveal be moved? If he’s not heavily involved in the Legion’s main plot for this ep, the previous ep would probably work better with a single big reveal (that oculus!Len is not just a hallucination) rather than two back to back. There could be mentions of a new Legion member (Darhk and Eo discussing Legends in Argentina “We’ll let the new guy handle them,” following orders from him, etc), without Len being revealed until he’s revealed to the Legends, or the end of this episode.

-          Really good moral quandaries here.

-          You could probably do something with the fact that the team (presumably intentionally) imitates oppressive government agents to get away with kidnapping, even if it is for a good cause. That’s gotta make them uncomfortable. (Mick seems like he’d probably be the most chill with it, Jax seems like he’d be really uncomfortable, and I could see Stein going either way.)

-          Maybe include one or more OCs or historical figures in a major role to add a human element to the conflict

Episode 14:

-          How does Rip find out? Does he already know?

-          So is the thing on the throne not the spear piece?

-          Tudor jewelry would probably not involve wood. They were big on showy jewels and metals. Maybe it’s in a fancy locket and rumored to hold part of the cross or something? You could have Anne make some sort of joke about how it’s probably fake. Artifacts like that were very common and almost never what they claimed to be.

-          Henry’s feeling a little flat here, but that might just be the outline format

-          This is another one that could use a subplot or two

-          MICK BURNS DOWN THE GLOBE I LOVE IT

Episode 15:

-          I like the option of Hex reacting badly to Rip

-          Carter and Kendra cameo is really neat

-          Continuity error: Len leaves and then says something in scene 6

LOTREWRITE: Len probably shouldn't leave since he has a big leaving sequence in the next episode

-          Lots of good stuff here

-          Make sure Lily stuff lines up with the following episode

LOTREWRITE: Lily should probably show up and have the argument with Stein in this episode, since the next one is very crowded

Episode 16:

-          Make sure Lily stuff lines up with previous episode

-          Bart Allen is from around this time period too. Can he cameo somehow?

-          I love this entire concept

-          All the hostages taken are women. Is there specific reasoning behind this? If not, maybe reconsider hostage choices

-          So Lily is volunteering to be a hostage, not switch sides? That was a little unclear.

-          I love the Monty Python joke. But it might be a little too anvil-y? Maybe change the wording from “what is your favorite color?” to “pick a color”?

-          How are the trials being administered? Verbally with spoken answers? Touchscreen? Fancy buttons?

Episode 17:

-          Cameo suggestion: A young Selina Kyle. The joke is that the found family she’s talking about consists entirely of cats. This can either be revealed to Jax via innocuous comment that wouldn’t make sense if referring to a human (something about litter boxes?) or revealed to the audience later when she looks at a picture in her wallet or something.

-          I love Legion!Len being fed up this is a Good Scene

-          The Legends make him cake aww

-          That ending man

-          Another episode that could use a bit of fleshing out. A little focus on what the other Legends are doing specifically might be enough.

Episode 18:

-          Love the cold open

-          Kendra cameo!

-          Why would putting Ray in a toga convince the guard to let him pass?

-          I’d add a subplot or a lot more happening at the gladiator fight. Does Darhk attempt to cheat? How does Sara counter that? Is she tempted to kill him? Maybe she could have a scene before or after where she talks to someone about her past with the League of Assassins and how sometimes she still has to fight those instincts? Even though she saved Laurel, he still almost killed her and Laurel is still almost completely out of reach for Sara so there’s got to be some pent-up anger there.

Episode 19:

-          HI YES YOU’RE INCLUDING MORDRED LET ME LOVE YOU

-          I can tell that you know your Arthurian legend or at least did some research this makes me so happy the Camelot episode was disappointingly generic in the official season but this is so much better

-          MICK AND MORDRED TALKING ABOUT BEING TRUE TO YOURSELF I HAVE ASCENDED

-          Yeah sorry I should have more constructive criticism but my brain kinda just starts screaming in delight at any mention of Mordred so just know that you did a good and there aren’t any glaring plot inconsistencies

Episode 20:

-          Snart is totally dedicated to his theme enough to take Antarctica let’s be honest

-          I believe there was a reference in a much earlier episode to Harley and Ivy both not returning someone’s calls. Did Harley do something to get back into the Legion’s good graces or…?

-          Ted Kord :D

-          This just needs more detail, in non-Len-related scenes in particular, which will presumably come with the full thing

Episode 21:

-          How is Rip rescued?

-          How does Ray contact GL and SS? Also, being in space shouldn’t keep them from being influenced by timeline change, since they’d still be within the bounds of time

-          BATFAM!! (I was gonna say that it was surprising no one changed things to keep them from being vigilantes, but that could be because they have secret identities and none of the LoD knows who they are) (Also are you going to include Oracle? You might be able to tie her into Ray’s character arc, since she’s a superhero who not only doesn’t have powers, but is physically disabled.)

-          How are you showing the spear going “fuck this“?

-          Wait is the implication that pre-doomworld didn’t have Batman or was pre-Batman? Because the gameshow ep mentioned him in one of the trials

-          I’m not sure about Sara being the one to throw Mick out. She is a former assassin, and she gave spear pieces to Thawne to save her sister earlier in the season. Seems like she would be among the more lenient. There should at least be some clarification of why. Maybe she’s upset because she was forced back into being an assassin?

Episode 22:

-          “proper Time Master captain” ouch

-          Sara’s scene with Laurel is lovely

-          Why would Ray blow up if he touched the spear?

-          “He holds up Cisco’s communication device with the” Finish this sentence

-          LEN!!!

-          This is a good ending