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demadogs · 2 years ago

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Honestly I would have no byler doubt at all if it wasn’t for the damn monologue. I know it’s been analyzed to death on why it wasn’t completely genuine and it does make sense but then I start to think why the duffers would even do the monologue in the first place if they were going to breakup marijuana next season. I keep thinking of when they hyped it up before vol 2 came out and said it’s Finn’s best performance. It’s driving me crazy because the way it was set up with using Will’s feelings for Mike to even be able to tell El he loves her means they really fucked up if it isn’t actually a setup for byler to happen next season. If they really just used Will’s love for Mike as something to get McNugget back together I’ll be so upset. :(

i understand your thought process and i did completely agree with you at one point but i think ive grown to actually appreciate the purpose of this monologue. i do however still think el should have broken up with him this season for sure.

to answer what the point of it was if theyre just gonna break up anyway, i think it was entirely for el’s arc. for her to realize that she’s finally heard those words she needed to hear but it didnt change anything. she still wasnt happy. we see that based on the fact that they share zero dialogue and barely acknowledge each other after that scene. youd expect her to hug and kiss him and say she loves him too but she didnt. i dont think she believed it because the only other time he said he loved her was also a tense life or death situation. he cant say it just casually.

also just the ratio of byler to mlvn evidence just points so aggressively towards byler that even on july 1st i wasnt even thinking “we got queerbaited :(“ i was just astronomically confused because the way they set up volume 1 it completely looked like mlvn was bones ESPECIALLY considering it wasnt just “look!! byler!!” it was also “look at all of mlvns problems!!”. and that couldnt have been queerbait because THEY DIDNT KNOW ITD BE IN TWO PARTS!!!!!!!!! so its not like they were like “ok lets build up byler and gain an audience for a month and then redeem mlvn”. they didnt know they would be doing that when they were still in production.

in just volume one we got (and these are just the biggies not everything) a very shitty “im not gay” bro tap instead of a hug after not seeing his best friend for months, el lying to him about being so happy and having so many friends in lenora because shes insecure about their relationship, mike being so fake too by avoiding eye contact with her and not seeming that engaged in whats going on the way she is, ignoring will but then listing off all these things he noticed, INSISTING that theyre just friends even tho will didnt even imply that he meant anything romantic, a track called IN THE CLOSET playing when MIKE SPEAKS, mike and els fight and el crying because he never says he loves her and he kinda gaslights her and turns it back around to the bullies and mouth breathers, “its hawkins its not the same without you”, the tripple take. theres literally so much.

ALLLLL that doesnt get erased just from one scene. and again, it wasnt initially intended to be in two parts so no, their thought process could not have been queerbaiting for why there was so much byler in volume one and not two.

i understand why the duffers said this was finns best performance. this would probably be an incredibly difficult thing to act out. its not just a love confession, its a love confession that he doesnt mean. but the audience doesnt know that. it couldnt be so obvious that EVERYONE immediately picks up on it being fake buts its still gotta be a little suspicious. he needed to put just the right amount of emotion so people may like it but also start to question it.

also his micro expressions are really good. this is not the face of someone about to tell the love of his life his feelings. its someone whos about to do something he doesnt want to do.

i honestly really hope next week we get the script for this scene. even if it doesnt give insight to mikes feelings, seeing el’s pov would also be really interesting. plz vote for it if its an option.

#bro i was just looking through my drafts and found this entire thing already written and i just never posted it for some reason #this was asked like a week ago #byler #eden answers

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wavesmp3 · 4 years ago

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directors cut: oasis

[doing this entirely for myself, out of pure self indulgence lol] [this will be very messy/poorly organized and there will be spoilers]

okay so where to even begin omg..... we will start with the origins of oasis:

its actually, techinically a spin off of the world from this drabble with dino from svt. which the world in this drabble is what the world from oasis would look like very far in the future. but i changed a lot between writing that drabble and creating oasis. but there should be a scene in the drabble that is very similar to a part in oasis (hint: the first vision they got from saskila was not just a random vision with no meaning.......hehe)

but that drabble (its titled dreamscapes) was inspired by a mix of this post on tumblr about how nuclear waste warning signs sounded very cool and the book that i was reading called the children of blood and bone by tomi adeyemi

and then after i had made that drabble i saw dee’s (@/atbzkingdom’s) post about the time capsule collab, and i had a couple ideas of what i could do for it but i ultimately decided on what would eventually become oasis !! so i guess we really have dee and that collab to thank for this piece lol

now for the timeline of me writing:

so i started outlining this piece in the first couple days of january, and normally outlines take me a while to come up with just because i struggle in coming up with plot, but i knew that my spring semester of classes would be starting soon and that I didn’t have a lot of time so i just sort of grinded an outline out as well several paragraphs of pure worldbuilding.

and then i started writing

and wow i was Really writing!! at my peak productivity i was easily getting down like 2k a day which for me is insane (for reference, i wrote 1k a day for tsiytt and i struggled my way through that)

but then life happens classes had begun and my writing for oasis slowly become nothing...

i really only found the time to work on the piece every other weekend, so i was really nervous that i wouldn’t finish in time (which technically i didn’t cause it was supposed to come out march 1st) but luckily i did

and at some point in february, i had lost so much of my momentum and motivation for this piece that i almost gave up on it. (at this point i was writing the scenes after they find the seat of wisdom destroyed) but again luckily i did not, but i personally can definitely see a decline in the quality of my writing towards the end (i mean maybe its in my head, but its sort of like i can see the loss of love for the wip in my writing at the end of it)

but don’t misunderstand, i still love oasis!! and in all honesty, i’m already considering starting a second draft to it, which is way sooner than i thought i would lol

also when i started writing this piece, i began writing it in the order that it would be read, but then halfway i switched to writing chronologically

anyways, something i learned while writing this piece, is that writing is a marathon. whereas, even with my longer pieces, i always viewed writing as a sprint. so as i start venturing into original works and more lengthy pieces of writing, i think this was a very valuable lesson for me to have learned.

okay now to the good stuff lol: [the first word of the bullet about the next chapter (?) is bolded for some crumbs of an organized commentary]

so this is jumping to the first past bit... but when i first wrote farah i had a very different plan for her character than who she ended up being. i had imagined that she’d be a lot more cold and a tough love sort of person. so that’s who i was writing when she’s first introduced in the flashback, but she very quickly become a much kinder full of love sort of person. but anyways i mention this because whenever i read that first part and the introduction of her character, i’m always a bit taken aback by how like mean here character is to crown then lol

also zoar !!!! its a terrible place, but i love that underground city

i also wrote the first flashback after i had written the scene where crown and chanhee are talking at his place in andhor, so the whole “fearless” connection was done very purposefully here since i knew how it’d be referenced in the next scene. someone mentioned this small connection in their reblog but i cant remember who

also rashi is my favorite character xD

i personally think how crown and chanhee became friends (the running thing) is so cute

this first bit of conversation between crown and chanhee when it switches back to the present and chanhee is giving them a tour of andhor is actually quite important to me, in the sense that its the first glimpse of how their actual relationship works and how they act together and just like their dynamic despite the fact that they havent seen each other in so long

and yeah i think kyu mentioned this and a few others, but i love how awkward it is when chanhee and crown are in his home in andhor, cause one: they havent seen each other in years! but also: anyone else find going to someone’s place for the first time oddly intimate, like wow you’re opening up your home to me and now suddenly idk how to sit or stand or what to do with my arms... maybe just me LMAO

DUDE i struggled so hard with making it so that chanhee knew how impossible this whole mission was going to be without actually revealing that he knows about the mirror. it was so hard for me, hopefully it came out alright though. if anyone is reading this, did the twist(s) come as a shock to you? did you see it coming? or did it feel like it came out of absolutely no where and not in a good way?

yes i did name the desert after the department store kohls .....

i was so excited to explain all the mage types, i had so much fun writing this whole chapter

fun fact: there was originally another sub group of psyche mages called dream mages who had like powers with dreams and stuff, but it ended up being irrelevant and really underdeveloped so it took it out

if anyone else was raised catholic or is catholic then i’d hope you recognize the names of all the relics.... i stole them from a prayer in the rosary whoops

it took me very long time to figure out exactly how the whole soul for the relic business would work, and idk if im a 100% satisfied with what it is/how it works/how it plays into rashi giving chanhee the locket

the note new gives crown.... the first slice of their friendship blooming, bro i eat that shit up

this part where crown and rashi are talking after the lesson is actually one of my favorites. (like i said i love rashi, but i just really love her interreacting with crown, i think they have such an interesting dynamic and one that i’ve seen irl a lot between students and teachers, where the student adores the teacher... i’ll get more into this later) but moving on, i like it for a number of reasons. one: it’s the first time we as readers get to see rashi talk outside of her role as lesson master. two: i love crown getting this validation from rashi. it’s not really expanded on a lot, but crown’s magic is definitely a bit of an insecurity for them, in the way that they don’t feel like it belongs to them. but here rashi comes, this person that crown looks up to so much, and telling crown that they’re a bit similar when it comes to having magic. and surprising crown by comforting them. and... idk i just really love this moment for crown.

okay this line: “You call your mom Rashi?” is a lowkey reference to game plan,, if anyone knows what i’m talking about then please come clown me for nearly having the entire movie memorized

oh, i also find the capital really cool. in my head the capital was always one huge building that contains an entire city but i realized while editing that i never really explained that, so idk if i successfully described the capital as cool as it is to me

also the five friends part.....CUTE

when chanhee says “i know. i remember.” !!! girl i felt that line with my entire chest. idk why

okay wait this part: “But that knowledge seems to fall flat right now. Because despite everything, curiosity won the war.” i love it so much, its that tiny of sliver of hope that gets me personally

i think this part where crown’s pride is so hurt by no one telling them about chanhee’s healing magic is quite important because its a glimpse of how stubborn and prideful and headstrong of a character they can be

also this : “ ‘and do you believe everything rashi says’ / without hesitation, you answer, ‘yes, of course’ “ this is another example of how highly crown thinks of rashi while growing up, almost to a fault. to the point where crown thought rashi could do no wrong. which i think is so interesting to think about when contrasted with the fight crown and chanhee have in the jungle where crown is the one discussing how rashi was wrong. i just like how much growth crown has had between all these years. and their opinion / perspective on rashi is one of the largest indicators of that growth.

I also just really like that paragraph where shadow vs healing is explained... I think chanhee’s magic is so sick

oh also the names thing.... I can’t remember where I got the idea to do that from but im so glad I did. its one of my favorite aspects to this world, and it looks like a lot of other people enjoyed it as well. but apart from the intimacy of it, i love how the use of names affects one’s magic. and that paragraph where they go through all that a mage could do with a name. it gives me chills. just cause.... the possibilities

so many people have mentioned this line.... but I must too, so this part: “magic always comes with a price. this is new’s” ..... crazy

saskila scares me omg

again the first vision they see is not a random scene.... the easter eggs I planted with that mwahaha

yeah that scene where they’re outside the tent discussing who should give their name to saskila..... I love that scene chanhee’s “I don’t have anyone but you” and crown deflecting all that tension with the pinky promise and the saskila calling them lovers.... mwah

this random scene about the hot summer and laying with Farah and new in the gardens is another one of my favorite, it’s just so sweet

but this next scene makes me so sad

like I know what happens and I know that everything turns out okay but I get so scared for crown

yeah just that entire part after Rashi gets to them and when they’re going to the infirmary and before crown passes out... I love that whole part. i think i did an effective job of writing the gravity of that whole moment. cause it makes me a little stunned every time I read it. and I was pretty nervous about not being able to do that scene and that moment justice so I’m glad it turned out like it did

and again this line: magic always comes with a price, and in your case, it comes with several.

okay this part after they jump out of the ship and crown is talking to Chanhee but that other dude is talking too... I hope it’s not too confusing. I really wanted to show through the writing that this was all happening at the same time, but idk it came out well. like in my mind I have such a clear picture of this scene, but I have no clue if I did effective job of showing you guys what I’m seeing through the writing

oh yeah, crowns thing about dual wielding and engulfing the blades in flames.... I find that so cool. they’re so sick for that

yeah also the part where crowns hurt and they give Chanhee their name and they use it.... great moment, but I feel like my writing is a bit lacking here. i just know it could be better.

I think at this point of writing my classes had started, and again the disparity in writing quality is so obvious to me

but the line where chanhee is describing how it all feels, and it says “chanhee feels golden” was inspired by daylight by taylor swift, theres a line in that song that goes “i used to think love would be burning red, but its golden” and like hello the parallels between that and crown’s fire magic.... something to think about

so this next part where it’s back to the past and crown is getting in trouble (as crown does) but the part where crown is like asking but not directly asking for rashi’s name.... that part is so crazy to me cause it’s feels so out of place. but it was purposeful. i was trying to show that crown’s growing and that they’re at this weird age where they feel invincible. and also i wanted to put more emphasis on how being royal and the heir to the throne kind of effects the relationships crown has

and the last line of this part when rashi says “never abuse it” it gives me chills whew

the next part ... another part that i had high hopes for in the outlining stages of writing, but when it came to actually writing, this scene totally flopped, i’m gonna try not to dwell on this part too much cause i just know most of my comments will be about how much i don’t like it. but just overall, this scene could have been SO MUCH BETTER !

omg this little interaction: ““Look!” Chanhee deadpans, shooting you a glare. “The match is about to begin.” / “Wish me luck.” / “I hope you lose.”” i think its so funny and cute

“ Your eyes immediately got to Rashi “ another example of how highly crown regards rashi

“In Wurltan.” hmmmmmm sus.... *laughs in i love mentioning things that won’t make sense to reader until later*

okay this: “Yes, but not just any mage. I…” your voice trails off, pulling at your fingers and looking anywhere but at him. “I wanted you to know.” i cannot stand these two omg

okay this part: “Chanhee thinks and overthinks the words spoken between you both. His mind drifts off to last night as well, that moment in the tent where you shared your warmth. He doesn’t even realize he’s staring at you until you give him a funny look. He quickly looks away and wonders if you’re overthinking everything as relentlessly as he is.” this part makes me think about what ina said about how chanhee shows his love by keeping you in his thoughts and YEAH chanhee’s love language in this piece is thinking about you and staring LOL

i hate this next part, not cause i don’t like it or anything it just makes me sad

but this line: “Like if someone shoved you from behind right now, you wouldn’t push back; you’d let yourself fall straight to the ground.” i actually love that line

also this next entire bit i see SO clearly in mind, i hope i wrote it well enough so that you all saw it clearly too

when chanhee wipes the dirt.... girl i’m wiping my tears

this line : “We’ll lean on each other.” mini love declaration sighhhhhh

yeah that whole part i love so much

the seat of wisdom :(((( no!!!!!

so about this line: “He stares at his palms, at all the lies buried under each nail and at all the secrets shoved in every crack. He watches as they all blow up in front of his face.” >> i had like ten different versions of it before i settled on this one lol

okay so the first part of the last past flashback with crown realizing their true feelings... so soft

news gone, rashis’s dead, :((( it makes me so sad

gosh okay this paragraph..... “I’ve always wondered why the gods blessed me and you the way that they have. They entrusted you with such great power. The only person to be both a healing and shadow mage in centuries. And then,” a tear falls from her eye, “they entrusted you to me.” Chanhee thinks this might be the first time he’s seen Rashi cry. “But now I have reason to believe that this was no accident. I’m beginning to think that the gods have always known it would come to this. And I’m starting,” she falters there, “I’m starting to spite them for it.” it hurts so bad im sorry

the first confrontation with harlan took me so long to write, and i’m still not sure if i actually like it, so again i will refrain from commenting lol

but the part where crown screams : “YOU LOST THE MIRROR OF JUSTICE!” I think i told kyu this but this line makes me laugh because in my head its said the same way bella says: “you nicknamed my daughter after the lochness monster” whenever i see that line i smile lol

honestly this argument scene..... one of my absolute faves,,, everything lina said about it in that reblog just yes!yes!yes!! i can’t even comment about a particular part because all of it i love so much. its another part that leaves me slightly speechless.

but my favorite part of it might be how it ends hehe

these next couple parts were a bit diffucult to write because obviously the air between crown and chanhee is not very light right now so it was just hard to navigate their dynamic at these moments until they apologize but hopefully it turned out alright

i really like this line: “But this moment—with the scent of Harlan’s wine under his nose and the chill of Harlan’s blade against his neck—this moment feels nothing like those. It feels empty.”

“ Chanhee just stares at you.“ -- staring as a love language exhibit b

this whole part... chills bro

“Chanhee exhales because for the first time since this afternoon he looks at your face and sees you.” -- exhibit c ....

okay wait another one of my favorite parts here: the spilled glass metaphor!! again please reference lina’s rb on this because everything said there... could not have said better myself. inspired by this writing advice by ocean vuong and yeah i just think the metaphor speaks for itself, one of my favorite lines (well paragraph) from the entire piece, actually from ALL of my works

it was so hard to think up all of yumi’s different names, i was struggling

them talking about how farah will be happy to see chanhee...... how do i break it to you crown.....she’s dead...... awkward

red streak q! yesss. also i’m so sorry for killing off farah

also kyunyu bestiessss

tbh this whole paragraph: “I get this overwhelming burst of honesty. As if what you both speak of is more than just a simple truth, as if it’s a commandant you blindly follow. What’s even odder is that I only feel that burst when you speak of each other.” Q stops walking and turns so that he faces Chanhee directly. “You speak of Crown constantly. And last night, when I met Crown, your title never left from the tip of their tongue. Humans are so simple really. We mention what we love.” Q pauses for a moment, bringing a hand under his chin. “Do you love Crown?” --i wrote it for myself no regrets

oh wait this bit too : “Quietly, Chanhee says, “I know.” / “Have you been watching?” / “I’ve been waiting.” / “For what?” / He meets your eyes. “For you.”” -- sometimes i do things that live rent free in my own mind

okay im so sorry for just quoting myself but this too : “ He sits back slightly. Shocked. Not by his love for you, but rather by how easily love walked into his heart and settled between his lungs “

lol the part where they try fooling q... why are crown and chanhee like this

the running !!!

yeah also every part after that... tears okay

yumi’s magic !!! its so cool to me, i love it so much

i surprisingly don’t have much to say about the end... i mean i like it, but i just don’t have any comments. the last line tho... good one shawna

okay im done for you sake i hope no one read this lmao

#oasis #mine #not sure what else to tag this lol #oh #directors commentary #this got so long for no reason

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smokeybrandreviews · 3 years ago

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Tomorrow Should Have Died

So i was planning on reviewing The Tomorrow War because it’s a new film and i like new films i can watch without having to brave the plague. I saw a preview for this thing a while back and had real low expectations for it, figured it’d be dumb fun like Independence Day. Imagine my abject horror when it turned out to be so much worse. Okay, first things first, the good stuff. Chris Pratt is good and so is J.K. Simmons. Betty Gilpin and Yvonne Strahovski work miracles with what little they have. The sound design is exceptional, probably the best thing about this sh*t flick, and the actual effects are on point. The problem with the movie is the script. It’s f*cking terrible. Oh my god, so much dumb! Here’s a list of sh*t that made me irrationally angry, in order of plot progression.

Eleven minutes in and i hate it. How are you losing a war to anything if you have mastered the ability to traverse space-time? How the f*ck is your technology so advanced, that you have found a way to exceed the light speed limit and literally break physics, but lose to a bunch of rabid, interstellar, komodo dragons? This is the dumbest f*cking contradiction I have seen all year and i am offended that whoever decided to make this film, is asking this of their audience. Sh*t is patently absurd. These f*cking things don't even have written language, man, and you really expect me to believe they have pushed a human race that has harnessed the power of time, to the brink of extinction?

Eleven minutes, bro. Eleven f*cking minutes.

Seriously, you can create a time machine, you should conceivably have the ability to harness gravity or one of the other fundamental interactions. Why the f*ck haven't you designed a miniaturized rail gun that uses modern tech or materials to build? You have worked out the science in the future, go back to the past and build miniature or handheld doomsday devices for use in the field. Why isn’t everyone running around with f*cking Megatron fusion cannons on their arms? Why the f*ck am i fighting aliens with ARs and Glocks?? The fact that there is an active time machine built from tech on hand from thirty years into the future, means cats could have spent their time building actual weapons to kill these f*cking things instead of betting the literal human race on a time displaced draft. This movie is dumb as rocks.

The way they describe how their time travel works is dumb. I mean, it isn’t, but i can guarantee this sh*t is going to be a problem later. I can feel it in my bones. They are definitely going to contradict this sh*t because multiverse theory is the only way to make movie time travel work and they are trying their damnedest to not do that.

This f*cking thing is over two hours long and the first drags. I hate when cats attempt to develop characters and they just fail at it. I'm sitting here trying to figure out why I should care about any of these people and i still don't have an answer after half the goddamn movie is over. Like, why should i care about Chris Pratt? He’s the main character and the writing has done nothing to endear him to the audience in a whole ass hour.

Also, the reason he’s so mad at his dad is stupid. Dude did right by his kid by bailing because he would have been a terrible father. Pratt’s character would have known that as a father himself. He didn’t have to like it and, of course there’s animosity there, but you’re an adult. Your dad knew he was lousy. He did you a favor by walking out. It wasn’t like he didn’t help support you or make sure you went without. As far as i can tell, dude was there in every way by physically. Because he couldn’t. Because he was f*cking shell-shocked from fighting in Vietnam. Where they raped innocent women and set babies on fire. Holy sh*t, this cat is an unlikable protagonist after this one scene. Which brings me to my next thing...

Pratt f*cking abandons his family?? Word? After that entire scene with his dad and the very obvious trauma he has suffered, he turns around and abandons his own kid because he lost his job?? Word? Like, for real? You expect me to believe that the Chris Pratt who cussed out his pops, was willing to go on the run from his future conscription, abandoned his own family because he lost a teaching job?? What the f*ck, movie? Do you want me to like this asshole or not? More than that, how the f*ck you mess up your character so bad in what i imagine is just five pages of actual script? Nothing we know about this character would ever even hint at him doing this to his family, to his daughter, so why the f*ck would he? Why the f*ck would you, as a write, believe we, as the audience, would just accept that sh*t as a forgone conclusion?

You got ropes on a Queen and you don't kill it? How the f*ck you make it that deep into the hive to even do-si-do the b*tch to the surface? We just watched these things tear through Miami to the point that they needed a whole ass bombardment just to survive and you not only go into their hive, their home, with no heavy ammo, but you somehow lasso a queen and drag her to the surface. Alive. If you can do all of that why not just drop a nuke down there and blow them the f*ck up? Why do you need a live Queen for your science? Shoot the b*tch, take the juice of her corpse, and end this sh*t! Why is all of this stupid recklessness necessary??

Okay. Okay... F*ck everything i just said, right? Why the f*k did you bring this Queen b*tch back to your base? You don’t have a different offsite lab to do this sh*t? You gotta bring her to your stronghold? Isn’t this a military operation? Why aren't their security protocols and sh*t in place to stop this stupidity? You don’t bring the enemy home. You take them to black sites for sh*t like this, not to the goddamn Pentagon!

All of a sudden, the aliens understand science? We spent this entire movie establishing that they are mindless beasts with teeth, eating the human race into extinction but now, because the plot demands it, the Queen one understands what the people are doing? That the green sh*t they made is plague that can murder them all? How the f*ck she even know what science is? They don’t even have language, dude! How the hell she know they made a death plague for her people?! F*ck it, whatever, bro. Next you're going to tell me she let them capture her just to get inside the lab or some sh*t because these rabid f*cking animals, who have demonstrated no military command abilities or even the barest of higher cognitive functions, are tactical geniuses.

Okay, so the Queen b*tch is a tactical genius. So, in the initial future drop, the team was murdered by a bunch of these things because they were sent to a lab where they were trying to make the death plague. Now, hat i am about to say is all assumption on my part because none of this, and i men NONE of it, is ever confirmed by the movie. So, they get to the lab and everyone is dead but the green per-plague is still there. That mean they had a Queen there. It’s established after this that Queens can call for backup and the Males will lemming their way to her. I deduce that’s how this lab got overrun; Queen got loose, called for her boys, and they ate everyone. That happened. That was the first thing we see in the future. This b*tch does the same f*cking thing on the home base lab so now the males are overrunning The Pentagon. You motherf*ckers knew this was a thing because it literally already happens. Why the f*ck would you do it again? AND it gets worse... Home base, The Pentagon, is the f*cking rig where they house the goddamn time machine! You brought a hostile enemy leader, still alive and coherent, to the heart of your resistance operation, to the core of your time travel operation, knowing that at any time this b*tch can scream and have your whole ass base overrun with teeth and poison darts? Look, if the future is this stupid, they deserve to die, okay?

At least they commit to multiverse theory, even if it contradicts the entirety of their already established time travel rules.

Okay. Okay... So they create this toxin to kill all the monster things and send it back in time to be mass produced Put that sh*t in bullets and send it back to the future or whatever. But, because of the aforementioned stupid, that plan is bunk. Time machine go kablooey. And now we are at the "all is lost" moment at the end of the second act." Solution to the problem in hand, no way to save the future because the only way back to the future was a casualty of idiocy. Right. So... just wait. F*cking just wait. You know when these assholes show up, you know how to kill them all, you even have a plague ready to be mass produced right now. You have thirty f*cking years to refine that formula, to make it cheaper to mass produced and develop variants just in case immunities start to crop up or something. There are people from the future, stuck in the past, because of the egregious future error. They have all of that intel and they are just alive. The second this dude got back to the past with that antidote, the future was saved. The war is over. Like, even if you don’t know where the ship is, you have a sure thing that will murder these white f*cks and three decades to produce, weaponize, and store that sh*t. The war is won. The Prime timeline is absolutely safe at this point. Because that's how time travel works. You have the nuclear option, right now, to averting the end of the human race, ready to be mass produced. Yo have the knowledge from the future on where these things will first appear. You still have all the future tech brought over from the beta timeline ripe for reverse engineering in order to improve the weapons of the present. There is no scenarios where we lose this war, the second Chris Pratt plops back into the present with that plague. None.

Why is everyone so dejected?? Why are there f*cking riots all over the world?? None of this makes sense. How can you assume the world ends and the war is lost just because the communication with that version of the past is cut? Wouldn’t you expect that sh*t? You just altered the entire timeline by sending Pratt back with the antidote. That future is effectively gone. How can you communicate with a place in space-time that doesn’t exist anymore? Hell, even if it’s because the time machine broke and everyone over there is dead, you have the f*cking antidote now! Multiverse theory, bud. The fact that those time displaced assholes didn’t disappear, means multiverse theory is real and you have the opportunity to Future Trunks this sh*t so why panic? Why are there no leaders n television assuring their people that this is a thing? Why are there no scientists publishing papers about how sh*t is going to be fine? Bro, I'm just so tired...

How these cats just fly into Russia on a big ass cargo plane and not get shot down? This is 2022. Putin still hates us. This sh*t would cause a World War.

So you find this ship and you don’t tell anyone where it is? You decide to just kill them all yourself? Motherf*cker, what happens if you die? Did you back up the enzyme formula somewhere or did you bring all of it with you on this stupid f*cking mission? Did you leave notes or even text your location to anyone in authority, just in case haphazard attempt goes sideways so someone else can make a more organized attempt? Or just drop a nuke on the site from orbit? If one asshole denied you funding for your mission, why didn’t you ask someone else? Why didn’t you ask f*cking Putin? Because governments are bloated down with bureaucracy? My dude, people from the future came back and interrupted the world cup to tell you that aliens are going to exterminate the human race in three decades. If you tell anyone in a position of power that you know where these little sh*ts are, they’re going to listen. Especially since everyone decided to riot because the future changed/we lost the time war/ the timeline imploded.

Why would a terrestrial saw work on an intergalactic star ship? That doesn't make any sense. This f*cking thing survived a crash landing into earth intact and a goddamn circular saw cuts it open? Fine, whatever. On to the next stupid thing.

Bro. Bro, they just blow the f*cking thing up. Motherf*cker spent the entire movie, time jumping form the past to to the future and back to the past, just to get this plague to kill them all, and a bunch of C4 just blows them all up while they sleep. Why the f*ck was everything even f*cking necessary? At this point, when the dude comes back with that claw the first time, the future is saved. Analysis on that one claw gave up the location of the hidden spaceship where these things had been in stasis for millennia. Which was blown up with C4. No plague needed. No goddamn time draft needed. No casualties needed after that first wave. The second that dude brought back that claw, it should have been under a forensic microscope so actual f*cking scientists could figure out what a high school kid id in a matter of minutes. I hate this movie so goddamn much.

I hated this goddamn movie so much. It’s f*cking boring and the dumbest thing I've seen all year and i watched Army of the Dead. It’s pretty and the performances are decent, but there is absolutely no substance to any of this sh*t. It wants to be Independence Day and Edge of Tomorrow and The Great Wall. all in one, while infusing time travel family drama but it’s so f*cking confused trying to juggle all of that, it drops the ball on the most important part; The script. This thing must read like a fever dream induced by peyote because, in execution, it’s a wet fart. This f*cking thing is all over the place with no regard for any insular universe logic. It contradicts itself from one scene to the next and it’s goddamn offensive. I’m sure there is someone saying that i am overthinking this sh*t and that it’s just supposed to be dumb popcorn fun. I get that. However, i can’t just turn my f*cking brain off and mindlessly drool over sh*t that insults my intelligence the way this movie does. It’s dumb as f*cking rocks, man, and i want those two hours of my life back!

#The Tomorrow War #Some ol' bullsh*t

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smokeybrand · 3 years ago

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Tomorrow Should Have Died

Eleven minutes, bro. Eleven f*cking minutes.

At least they commit to multiverse theory, even if it contradicts the entirety of their already established time travel rules.

How these cats just fly into Russia on a big ass cargo plane and not get shot down? This is 2022. Putin still hates us. This sh*t would cause a World War.

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delicatefury · 7 years ago

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It’s been a semi productive day

Whoot.

Positives!

Litter box is cleaned out and I got to knit a little.

I did not spend the entire evening watching That 70s Show and I’m almost done with 1st Summer in Story of Seasons: Trio of Towns (I love those games, but when you get to the last week of the month, you just want it to change seasons already).

We have a plan to get our brother to stop sleeping in the living room and start sleeping in his own bedroom. We’ll probably have to sacrifice our couch to the basement (we were planning on getting a new one anyway, but that’s still a bit off), but we’ll now have a guest bed for when our parents visit if we can just clean up the spare storage room and the ability to use the living room pre-10 am! (Computer Science geeks. They keep even weirder hours than writers).

My office is starting to come together. I’ve got command hooks for some of my art supplies finally hung up (cutting board, rulers, drafting tools, etc.)

My desk is getting straightened up again and I’ve found some paperwork I’ve been looking for.

Most importantly, that box of papers and junk has been preliminarily gone through.

Upside: It’s empty

Downside... well, #1: I still have to sort most of the stuff. It’s in broad categories right now. “Utility Bills - paid”, “Sister’s stuff”, “Law school stuff”, “Keep but store away”, “Office supplies”, “Insurance”, “general importance”, “can probably toss but requires a closer look”. Stuff like that.

(Not so great stuff under the cut. Beware. It’s long and personal).

Downside #2: I came across some of the papers that tend to send me into a funk. Like my class ranking. I... did not end up at a high spot. Not even top 50% (of final students. Of the ones that started, I’d still be in the top 40%. That’s how many dropped/failed out.) A good chunk of that was me falling into my college freshman year trap of “less work means more productive Fury!” Which is a lie my high school self would have refuted on the spot. A so overworked she can barely think Fury is a productive Fury (not to be confused with a “busy” Fury. My day job keeps me busy. It eats at my time and energy. But it doesn’t require much mental effort. Busy = tired due to lack of mental stimulation. Overworked = I’m actually having to put effort into stuff).

Most of it, though, was your standard “Smart kids don’t need to be taught to study, they can figure it out themselves/your an adult, we assume you’ve already been taught how to do this.” (And the mild panic that filled quite a lot of my 3L year due to family stuff that happened that summer. yay barely warding off depressive spiral!) I still got As and Bs, but in law school... yeah. A 3.24 just ain’t good enough. Ugh. I know, once I get my first firm job, none of that will matter anymore, but still... ugh. Getting that first firm job. Still hoping my alma mater will help smooth those bumps. I mean, it is an impressive name.

What sucks is how this stuff undermines my confidence. I know I’m smart. Hell, I’m fucking brilliant. There’s no debate about that. I just lose confidence in my ability to prove that to other people. It’s like I’m afraid that on paper I only come across as “eh”. Doesn’t help that I’m shy as fuck in new situations.

Like, I apply for a job or get to the interview and everything up to that point probably says “Hey, I know I’m awkward and there’s people here who can bullshit total confidence from day 1. I’m a slow starter and I need to begin with at least the idea of a safety net before I can start taking risks on my own” and that’s all they’ll remembern about me and they’ll have made this decision about who I am before I get to say my actual sales pitch because it’s hard to prove this stuff about myself.

That no matter what, they won’t believe me when I say: I’ve got one of the fastest and steepest learning curves you’ll ever encounter, I’ve self-taught myself knitting, baking, cooking, minor electronic repair, etc, and I’ve made some complex stuff; I’m a natural problem solver who thoroughly enjoys digging through obscure, dense, and far-reaching research and history to find more efficient ways of doing things and proving the other side wrong and I’m fast at finding it; I look at things a little sideways, since I’ve always been more inclined towards things like physics, geometric and logical proofs, and computer programming; I’ve got literary skills like you won’t believe. I mean a professional, published legal writer of some note has called my writing style “lyrical”, “clear” and “easy to understand.” So not only is it everything you want in legal writing, it’s an actual enjoyable read, which most Legal writing is not; Better yet! I grew up on a farm and spent my summers working on road construction. I’m not afraid of dirty work and, along with my alma mater, I can relate to people across social spectrums and income ranks, and; YOU W OULD BE DAMN LUCKY TO HIRE ME!!!

BUT MY CLASS RANKING IS MID RANGE AND MY GPA ISN’T PERFECT SO FUCK ALL THE REST, RIGHT?! WHY RISK ANYTHING ON THIS UNCONNECTED OUTSIDER?!

Wow, that certainly escalated. I feel better now, actually, having written this all out.

I know she probably has other plans, but I hope my sister is free tomorrow. I need some retail therapy and someone to bitch about life with.

Tonight? I’ll probably meditate. But yeah, need to move little bro back into his room. I think I need to start doing Yoga again.

#Fury's life #UGH #Fury's a lawyer #but an underemployed one #How do you get any of this across?#all my cover letters sound so generic #which sucks because I know I'm a kickass candidate and any firm would be damn lucky to hire me

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Are you going to tell us now how you changed the story after you saw episode 10? You said you had to go back and re-outline the whole thing. I am interested in knowing how it differs.

i’m sorry if someone has already asked you this but can you share with us the original plan you had for umfb before episode 10? or can you not tell us until after the companion fic?

How Episode 10 Changed Everything (and other fun stories):

So as I’ve said a couple of times before, episode 10 was anabsolute game changer for Until My Feet Bleed and My Heart Aches and now thatthe fic is finally done I’ll try and explain how although this may get a bitlong and I wont go into too much detail about Viktor for companion fic reasons.

So the main three things that episode 10 changed in the ficwas Viktor’s entire character, Yuuri as an unreliable narrator and the programmusic.

The most significant by far was Viktor’s character. Becausepre episode 10 we really still didn’t know that much about Viktor and we had noidea about the banquet. So before episode 10 I assumed that Yuuri fell in lovefirst and Viktor came to coach Yuuri out of curiosity because he likessurprises and doing something different and eventually and unexpectedly foundhimself falling in love. In a draft for another fic I was tossing ideas aroundfor it actually centred on Viktor only realising he was in love with Yuuri justbefore the kiss in episode 7. Viktor was always very mysterious and I’m surepeople who were in the fandom pre ep10 will remember all the theories that hewas just using Yuuri and all that and while I didn’t believe that, I did assumethat Viktor’s character trope was the ‘workaholic slowly learns how to love bybeing loved’ one.

But then episode 10 comes and completely knocks that out ofthe water because we find that Viktor is actually this adorable sappy romanticwho calls Yuuri sleeping beauty and adores him and fell in love with him whenhe was wasted and dancing and brought life and love back into Viktor’s world.And that completely changed Viktor in the fic because after an episode from hispov I had a much better handle on his character and realised he absolutelywouldn’t act like he had been planned to act in the fic.

In the original plan he wasn’t ever a bad person or anythingbut he was actually a rival for Yuuri and he didn’t fall in love until muchmuch later. But with episode 10 we also found out that Chris and Viktor arebest buddies and Viktor likes skating with Chris and can’t imagine a seasonwithout him which means that in the fic there’s no way that Viktor would feelthreatened by Yuuri as a rival because in canon he’s besties with hiscompetitor and he’s way too much of a sweetheart for that. So in the fic itchanged from Viktor reciprocating the rivalry to Viktor actually enjoying thechallenge and excitement it brought into his life.

As for him falling in love, in chapter 10 the singing thingwas always planned but that was originally the first sign that Viktor was feeling deep affection for Yuuri and was just the very beginning of himfalling in love. It chapter 10! But after ep10 I realised that Viktor ‘love atfirst drunken dance’ Nikiforov would definitely not be having a solid two yearsof a ‘relationship’ and just be starting to fall because that would be seriouslyooc and we finally saw just how much he adores Yuuri through his own eyes. Andso in the fic I reworked the whole thing to fit with Viktor as a character as Inow understood him and that included him falling first, falling hard andfalling early.

Episode 10 also showed us just how much of an unreliable narratorYuuri is, with the banquet and also how different everything seemed from Viktor’seyes. And so that meant that I started to play with the idea of Yuuri being aseriously unreliable narrator and trying to tell a story where his version isvery different to the version the audience see, which is obviously now prettycrucial to umfb&mha.

I also went back and reworked all the program music for thefic once episode 10 came out. Before it was all important and did havesignificance but after I knew that Viktor was going to fall early, I decided toplay around with the idea of showing the audience how he was feeling throughhis music. So I went back and completely changed the program music to tell aproper story (funny story, originally Yuuri was going to be the one skating toSun and Moon. And then episode 10 happened and I looked at the new outline ofthe fic like ‘this is such a Viktor song oh my god).

Another thing that episode 10 changed was originally, Chriswasn’t involved in the fic at all until we found out about his and Viktor’sfriendship and that he’s actually such a good bro not just a weird guy who gropesYuuri and comes on the ice. As well as that, in episode 10 we also found outthat Yuuri was actually the unknowing playboy in the Eros story not Viktor,coming into Viktor’s life, stealing his heart and then leaving without a word, whichlead me adapting the fic to umfb!Yuuri becoming a perceived playboy by others, throughcertain things that will be explored fully in the companion fic, as a referenceto that. There were also some smaller changes like the inclusion of the drunkenOlympics and Yuuri knowing how to pole dance as a shout out to the episode.

Episode 12 also changed a lot. One of the things was Yurioand his role in the fic and how he feels about Yuuri which will be exploredmore in the companion fic. Also the original end of the fic was that Yuuri wasgoing to try and fail to do the quad flip which ruins an otherwise perfectskate and potentially loses him the gold but he was willing to sacrifice it totell Viktor. But in episode 12, we see that Yuuri can do a quad flip with hislove for Viktor as motivation so it changed to Yuuri still risking ruininghis perfect skate because he isn’t sure if he can land the jump but doing it anyway andactually succeeding because every time he tried and failed before it wasbecause he was doing it out of bitterness trying to beat Viktor and this timehe was doing it out of love.

The fic also changed a lot over the course of writing itjust because characters take on a life of their own and my first draft was veryrough and done before I’d written anything so I’ll try and do a chapter bychapter run down of the big changes from the rough plan I wrote before startingthe fic to the end result.

Chapter 4:

· There was originally going to be a discussionbetween Viktor and Yuuri that went badly and they both ended up annoyed andoffended which sparked Viktor’s side of the rivalry but there was no way to dothat without making them both dicks and ooc. After episode 10, it changed toViktor trying to be helpful but phrasing it badly and being a bit too blunt and unreliable narrator Yuuri taking it wrong andcutting the conversation short before things could be explained

Chapter 6:

· Yuuri was originally going to be watchinginterviews and stuff of Viktor and thinking how arrogant and self-assured hewas but this changed with Viktor’s character change because that’s just not him at all

· Viktor was going to make a comment about Yuuri’squads but this one was actually going to be an insult and again changed whenViktor’s character changed because Viktor wouldn’t insult a fellow competitor like that

· The idea for the dream sequence only came later

Chapter 7:

· Pole dancing only became a thing after episode10

· Viktor was going to only miss the GPS and comeback for Worlds but lose because he wasn’t fully recovered but I decided I didn’twant the first time Yuuri won against Viktor to be so unsatisfying

· The watching Yuuri skate at the rink didn’toriginally happen at this point in the fic until after I saw ep 10. It was actually planned for somewhere around chapter 10/11

Chapter 8:

· Yuuri never lost motivation originally but Idecided at that point it was important in his character to almost give up butthen come back with a vengeance

· The drunken Olympics never originally happened

Chapter 9:

· Yuuri was originally still going to be veryhostile before I realised it was ooc and a dick move after Viktor was beingnice to him so it changed to him congratulating Viktor after Viktor won. Thatthen changed the sex scene from the mutual hatefuck it was going to be pre ep10to Yuuri and the comments thing that sent him spiralling. The not-talking thingwas also added as a plot device because Viktor as he became acted verydifferently to him as he was originally planned to be, and it would have been tooeasy if he had been allowed to talk.

· Viktor was originally going to take Yuuri out todinner at the WC purely out of guilt

· There was originally going to be another sexscene after the WC and dinner where Yuuri was angry at Viktor for ruining hisskate but it would be ooc for both of them and got changed early on

Chapter 10:

· Number swap was supposed to be just for hookingup but changed after ep10

· Yuuri’s theme was originally going to besomething related to hatred but it changed as his character developed and Irealised how he was being affected by the events of the fic was different tothe plan and that would be doing him a disservice as a character. He had already let go of almost all his bitterness by this point and was falling for Viktor, not hating him.

· Conversation with Phichit was very short anddidn’t involve a lot of the stuff it did in the final chapter

· Viktor was going to be acting verydifferent in the second sex scene with none of the need or desperation thathappened, which all came about during his character change

· Conversation with Chris never happened until thethird of four re-writes of ep10 when I realised Viktor’s actions needed somemore context for people who were ignoring the music (A lot of people still hadn’t caught on that Viktor was head over heels in love yet and I felt it needed a more explicit hint)

Chapter 11:

· Lots of domestic sex was supposed to happen in thischapter in a very very early first concept but I changed it early on for plot reasons and also companion fic reasons

· Sex scene was supposed to be all about Yuuriacting like Eros Yuuri in the concept drafts before I started writing the fic, but those two idiots in love were very sappy andsentimental instead and it became a crucial relationship shift point instead

· All domesticness from that chapter was plannedout later in the fic as the details were not specified in the first plan,including the borscht scene

Chapter 12:

· Meal with the other skaters never happened, that idea came later

· In the rough draft of the chapter, the revel about Yuuri’s virginity happened at thesame time as the second reveal but I split them because it worked better thatway

· Yurio wasn’t originally involved at all andYuuri left after getting jealous. The love revelation never happened

Chapter 13:

· Yurio appeared in this chapter instead althoughthe conversation was very different in the rough plan because everything hetalks about in the final version came about after episode 10 changed everything

· Yuuri was originally going to be much more angryat the scandal and use his anger to win while Viktor still fucked up his skate. This changed very early when I realised it was ooc and Yuuri would actuallyreact very differently due to how in love he was, and that emotional devastation and heartbreak would ruinhis skate instead.

Chapter 14:

· None of the conversations with Yuuri’s familywere planned in detail in the first rough plan, I just knew he needed to goback to Hasetsu and have some revelations

· Yuuri was supposed to convince himself thatViktor never loved him and never could and only realised Viktor’s feelingsafter seeing stammi vicino. This changed because it was very important forYuuri to go and get some distance and time and then decided to come back anddecided to try again with Viktor before he saw stammi vicino. It also changedbecause with Viktor as he became after ep10 and how he reacted, there was no waythat Yuuri would convince himself that Viktor never cared for him. He’s a bit emotionallydense sometimes but not an idiot

· Yuuri was going to fall on the quad flip

So yeah, all this is from the very rough draft before Iwrote any of the actual fic (and while the show was still on about ep 7 or 8) and the story adapted and changed along the way as I got moreinto the characters and got a better handle on how they would act until it becamewhat you see today. It definitely became a much better story and I’m very happywith all the changes that I made! Having a plan is great for a framework butletting the characters grow and change naturally during the writing process ismuch more fun and I think makes for a better story

#until my feet bleed and my heart aches #rivals series #replies #sacchariwrites

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