#(and maybe nagi as konoha too)

[zymple]

got into enstars about a year ago right around this time, and for nearly as long, i've been wanting to show my vision... ii hiyori!

(hiyori on the left traced from the official art by sidu, shown on the right)

edit: now has a part 2!

[naruto-oc-reviews]

Naruto OC Review for TiaTam Chinatsu’s Bio

review under the cut

GENERAL

When we say “Time Frame,” we are referring to when exactly in canon their story is taking place. For example, your OC’s story (for this review) seems to be taking place Post-Boruto, while another OC might be focused in Kakashi’s era, or the Sannin’s, etc.

I enjoy her design quite a bit. Her colors work well together, though admittedly they do feel more Konoha-styled than Suna. I’ll give you leeway on that though only because of the time period and how designs modernized and have become less indicative of where the character comes from in Boruto.

PERSONALITY

Admittedly, I’m a little concerned about her mood swings and her being bipolar. Do you consider this to be related to any clinically defined bipolar disorder kind of condition? I know this can be a sensitive topic to many and I don’t want any trouble to come out of it. From the description you provided, it doesn’t seem like her mood swings all too much, but more that she has a tendency to act needlessly aggressive or jealous when the situation doesn’t necessarily call for it. I want to caution you against using the term “bipolar” unless you truly want to look into bipolar disorder and other related conditions, and even so it doesn’t seem to me like her mood swings all that much because it appears to be that she’s very focused and always in that state of frustration and stubbornness.

I definitely want to see how her personality changes over time. How does she learn to ask for help? Does she learn to stop comparing herself to the people around her? Things like that. I’m guessing some of these will be answered later as I read more about her, but where you have described her is great in the sense that there’s a lot of potential and room for her to grow.

RELATIONSHIPS

Like with her personality, I think there’s a lot more to know about her relationships with her family. I want to know how their relationship will change over the course of her story, and I want to know the other characters’ perspectives. How does Gaara feel about her acting like she doesn’t care about him? He’s not super perceptive of things like that, so that would be an interesting angle to explore. Do any of her family members see how she’s faking things and see through to the fact that she does in fact care about her family, and is only acting out of self-doubt or stubbornness? I think many of these relationships can be elaborated on as the story continues, but at the moment this is all I can say.

NINJA INFO

I don’t have any complaints here about her stats. They seem fairly balanced but there’s not much to discuss.

In the future, maybe you could throw out some ideas you were considering for her techniques? I understand the feeling of not really having any concrete concepts, but I’ll suggest a few things for you to consider:

You mentioned magnet release, so here’s a helpful post about Magnet Release, as well as one about the third Kazekage (thank you mod nagi). Keep in mind that Magnet Release isn’t necessarily exclusive to a single clan-- or even just to Suna-- so you have quite a bit of room to work with this.

As Gaara’s daughter, she’s also related to Temari and Kankuro. I think puppetry is a viable direction for her to go in, especially if you want the lightning chakra nature to come into play. As for Temari, you said you want her other nature to be wind, and that could definitely work with Temari’s tessenjutsu. I also think either of these could work in combination with magnet release, so maybe she uses the fans to spread the particles which she controls, or maybe the puppets she uses are composed of whatever substance she is using magnet release to control.

HISTORY

Unfortunately I can’t say much about her history since there’s nothing for me to look at. I do definitely want to know more about her and how her story plays out, though. I’ll give you some things I want to see or get answers to:

How, if at all, does she overcome her inferiority complex? How and when does she figure out that nobody was really ignoring her or against her? How does she react to this?

Tell me more about her obsessive cousin Sora, please. Who or what is she obsessed with and why?

Some context on Gaara and Akira would be nice to see, just to get an idea of where the story came from. How does their parenting affect the way Chinatsu’s personality turned out? Does any of it have to do with Gaara being Kazekage, similar to how Boruto resents Naruto?

What efforts have people made to get her to realize they aren’t ignoring her? Why is she so resistant to believing this? What exactly made her inferiority complex get so out of control?

There are a few exceptions to that anger and inferiority mindset, but that’s what makes it confusing to me. The way she wants to cuddle with her brother and how drastically different she acts when she’s around Natsumi. Why exactly is it so different for them? I’m definitely hesitant about this aspect of her personality, so any reasoning you can provide will help

How does she meet the Aburame sisters and Himawari, since they’re likely from different villages?

Who is her Sensei? What is their relationship like?