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In the end

These are all my writing pieces. All throughout the year, I have learned a lot, especially I have improved my vocabulary and grammar. Most of the pieces are not done in my regular English class, they are done when I was still in the Intensive English class, which provides bad qualities of works. The best piece that I considered is the persuasive writing, I spent a bunch of time for revising it and adding more additional details for it. Thanks for reading through my pieces! 

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In his poem I saw a great flow and language, he uses this verse to demonstrate how a person’s life from a young age till getting older. It is well-organized. I consider this as his best piece. The only thing he has to improve is his word choices, because all throughout the piece, he uses some words that cannot well-described the scene, he could improve them into some higher level words. But it seems really good when reading it.

Free Verse Poem

Today

Be happy today There’s work tomorrow Play while your young Work when you’re older

You have got time Your parents will pay You don’t pay a dime Just play for today

Soon you will grow Focus on school Study for your test Hope for the best

You move far away Barely getting by Workload increases Your playtime ceases

Finally done learning Time to move on Like getting a job And finding a home

You’ve married your spouse Have a little child Care for the infant Until he grows old

Tell him be happy today That work is tomorrow To play while he’s young and work when he’s older

Tell him he has got time His parents will pay He won’t pay a dime Just play for today

When writing this poem, I think I managed to keep a solid rhyme scheme and a fluent flow. It was a little choppy at parts but all in all I am very proud of the poem. I wrote it thinking about how growing up and even though I am only in middle school, drastic changes in my life have already happened and my free time is slowly decreasing.  

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In his piece, I have learned where did he go during his Winter Holiday, he went hiking to the top at Qi Feng Park with his family for seeing the sun rising up from the horizontal sky. He also went skiing with his friends, he was in a snowball fighting game with his friends, he wrote about his enjoyments in this matter. Last he went to a Chinese Museum and have learned some Chinese cultures by visiting it. I don't think this is his best piece. He has a well-organized mind in the piece with a clear mind, which is impressive. The major weaknesses in the piece are his grammar and sentence structures, there are some very obvious grammatical mistakes in his piece, which might cause reader’s confusions to his piece. His sentence structures aren't that organized, he should have separated different events into different paragraphs, in order to make us easier to understand. It is well-done as a whole!

Memorable Winter Holiday

I had a long break almost about 1month, I did many meaningful and exciting     things. On the first day of 2018, I went to see the sunrise at Qi Feng Mountain. My family got up early and walked to Qi Feng Mountain. When we started to climb, It was so dark that we can’t see anything, so we turned on a flashlight. I felt there were a infinite stairs, it was really hard to climb. Finally, we got to the top, we were waiting for the sun rose up. My mom wanted my father and me to took some photos and see the sunrise and she had to took my sister back because my sister didn’t feel well. We waited for almost 40 minutes and sun rose up, my father and me took some photos and made some wishes. It was like a scene in movie, the scene was magnificent. Seeing a sunrise was a nice experience on the first day of the new year.   In the middle of vacation, I went ice skating with my friends. When got onto the skating rink, there weren’t any people, because other schools hadn’t started the winter break yet.    “we need some new ways to play, not just skating.” One of my friend said,    “I have an idea” I said.    We scrub the ice and made a ball and fought each other.    “Let’s make a incredibly huge one!” some of my friends said. “for what?” I asked, ”revenge.” My friend said.     Once we added 3 guys’ ball together to make a huge one and we succeed revenge  the friend that always hit me and my friend, that was interesting. It was a nice day on the skating rink. I went to a historical museum called KE YUAN with my family. KE YUAN museum displays the culture of the Qing dynasty in China. Some statues and building of Qing dynasty were so beautiful. I also saw the statue of a man that I learnt in Chinese history. The lake water In KE YUAN was so clear that we could see some fishes through water. Visiting KEYUAN was a great experiences for me. I had some new experiences and memories in this vacation, I hope I can go to other places in next vacation.

I wrote “Winter holiday” for narrative writing unit. I chose it because the other one “Trip to Singapore” have too typical contents, so I chose my own special experience which I wrote in ‘Winter holiday”. The whole story is good but there are some run on sentences. I think the Introduction and closing sentences are too short, it just feel like someone must write something but he doesn’t have any idea, so I need to improve on it. First paragraph and third paragraph are okay, but I think I need to add some fun elements to make reader feel more interesting. I think the best part of it is second paragraph. I add some conversations to make reader to feel this paragraph is not just telling the story, it can make them feel more vivid. It’s one of my best piece because I fix my habit of writing run-on sentences by this piece, good grammar, and I add conversations to make this piece vivid.

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The purpose of the piece is to give an introduction of England to readers, tell readers the special things when you are visiting England, and also tell them why should they visit England. I do not consider this as her best piece. I think the strength of the piece is the sentence structures because she has tidy, nice looking paragraphs, they don't mess up with different contents, also coming up with some nice words, her word choices are great. Throughout the whole piece, I have learned the structure, history of the Big Ben, also the foods there. I think the weakness of the piece is that it doesn't show the persuasions, which makes people have a strong desire to visit there, but the whole piece has done really well.

England

You really should travel to England because there is lots of nice Architecture, like the Big Ben, the Stonehenge and etc. There are also famous artists that are from England like Banksy, Thomas Lawrence and etc. The food and drinks are also very tasty, like the Yorkshire pudding, almost anyone can make it. And now, I will tell you the facts of them.

The famous Architecture, the London Bridge took 8 years to build. It is around 42 meters above the river and the tower was painted Red, White and Blue in 1977, as a part of the queen’s celebration. In 1982, the bridge was open to public. Another Architecture is the Big Ben. It’s a huge famous big bell that is built over 150 years. There was then a crack in the bell but it will take great pain to replace a new one. And the last Architecture is the Stonehenge. It is built by nature, which lasted for 5,000 years. It was first called “Stanenge”, then to “Stanhenge”, “Stonhenge” and at last, “Stonehenge”.

Banksy was one of street art artist. He started creating freehand but he realized a quicker way to create graffiti. Banksy is a mystery; no one knows how he looks like. He doesn’t sell his work in art galleries. The second famous artist is Thomas Lawrence is the leading of the British portrait painters. In 1872, he became a pupil at the Royal Academy School. In 1794 he became a member of the academy painter-in-order to the king. William Hogarth is the most original painter of his age. He was most famous for his work, “Modern moral subjects”. In 1730s, he developed into an original painter and created the first historical grand manner.

Last but not least, the Food and drinks. First is the Yorkshire pudding, you can barely buy one outside because there are easy recipes you can find on the Internet and make one at home, these would be a good choice to make for your afternoon tea time. Another food would be the Cornish Pasties. The outside looks like a shape of a dumpling, but the inside has a warm, melting, pastry packed with meat and vegetable. The last food is the Crumpets. This is a warm, afternoon treat with lots of butter. It suits well with a cup of tea.

England is a nice place to travel to when you have free time, because the foods there are tasty and easy to make. The Architecture is famous around the world and there are also lots of famous art piece. In conclusion, you really should travel to England because it is very fun, and you can learn a lot of easy recipe to do easy afternoon tea treat.

Reflections:

The purpose of this essay is to tell people and tourist about England and why should you go and visit England. I don’t consider this as my best piece, but still, my best piece. I thought I did pretty well on introducing the famous architecture of England and the food and drinks. The strength was to emphasize the architecture and famous food. I have learned that there are lots of interesting facts and famous architectures like: the London bridge, the Big Ben and the Stonehenge. Banksy was a famous street art artist from England. Food and drinks that are popular in England are easy to make. The main problem that encountered throughout the year was my vocabularies. I’ve also learnt several new vocabularies this year.

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The Best After School Activity

The Best After-school Activity

 With almost eight hours of study at school, when the day is done students definitely are tired, they should have the chance to spend more time enjoying their own activities. Some of the students choose to play sport, or some of them just want to hang out. Playing basketball as it is a great after-school activity, it has many advantages, such as relieving the stress from studying all day long, it trains your body and muscles; also, can make more friends through playing basketball.

 When students are tired from school work and classes, a way to release stress is to play basketball. Playing basketball makes the body release the built up energy that it has consumed. When people are playing, they are putting all of their energy and force into shooting the ball or dribbling it around, and this helps the body to release all of the inner anger it has been keeping inside all day, out. For instance, once, I have got bad grades shown in my school report card, I felt really stressed out and depressed, I had nothing to do to release that stress and depression, later on, I realized that I could do this via playing basketball. I started playing and got those bad moods out successfully.

 When people’s body weight is increasing, you might have thought of some way helpful to reduce it. According to scientific research, playing basketball could be a great way of reducing extra body weights, muscle contract and move, it consumes calories by your body activating and moving all the time. By doing this, I got my belly fat decreased successfully, it was actually really helpful.

 Basketball is a team sport, you need to be able to cooperate with your teammates, which helps you in making friends when you are playing a basketball game or having a basketball practice, you had to talk to your teammates or discussing the “patterns”, it really helps you making more friends. When I first came to QSI, I didn't really have friends, but since I was playing basketball in the school gym, I got to make more friends through it, afterward, I made more and more friends.

 After school activities are fun, but whatever we do, we do them for the same purpose: to relax from a whole day’s study, to train your body, and to make more friends.  Hopefully, I can discover more fun things to do after school!

 The reflection

The purpose of this piece is to persuade the reader to believe playing basketball is a really great after school activity, I chose to do this piece was because I had plenty of knowledge about basketball, and I am experiencing it, I used facts for my persuading. In the piece, I talked about three advantages in playing basketball, which is really persuasive. I think the strengthening of the piece is the sentence structure, the whole story is divided into three parts, introduction, details and facts, and the conclusion. The author uses the great idea to persuade readers to believe that playing basketball has many advantages. I think the weakness of the piece is the word choices and grammar because when I was looking through it, it shows many obvious grammar mistakes, also, the word choice also looked old and childish, it should be more mature. The piece I was writing was about the advantages of playing basketball, I've already known the advantages of playing basketball, and I've actually experienced it for so many years, it is the best after school activity for me, it has facts, I think those ideas are undoubtedly by others, therefore this represents my best work.

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Eminem

Eminem, the legendary person who got all the rapper’s respect. Eminem is also a white rapper. Because of his race, he can’t really build friendships with black rappers. When he was in high school, his best friend, a black person, introduced him to hip-hop, from that time on, he fell in love with hip-hop and rap. He is a brave person, even when someone wants to kill him, he isn’t afraid then, he chose to fight. He also earns money by rapping.

 When he was in a club, he and his friend, that black person, they were drinking. There was a man with a gun, who wanted to kill his friend. Eminem wanted to protect his friend, but he couldn’t, because the guy had a gun! Eminem has no means to fight back against a gun! A couple of minutes later, his best friend, was killed by a guy who hated Eminem. This was very difficult for Eminem to lose a close friend. Friendships are very important to him. He determined to become a tapper in memory of his lost friend.

 A few years later, he graduated from high school. His mother divorced his father, and his father took all of their money. Eminem chose not to go to university, and he started rapping. He released some CDs (mix tapes mostly ) unfortunately, no one bought his CDs, so he started thinking. “ Detroit is so small and poor, should I go to a big city to develop myself?”. Afterward, he earned sufficient money, he bought a ticket to California. California is a big, rich city, many people with diverse lives lived in California.

 He tried to sell his rap CDs in California, but that was still not good. When he saw a poster for a freestyle battle, he thought it worth be a try. This competition was organized by Dr. Dre, who was the best rapper of that era. Most of the rappers are black people, people were confused, because why would a white guy appear in a  freestyle rap battle? But Eminem used his strong freestyle skills to beat other people That were legendary!

 Dr. Dre very appreciates him. he invited him into his recording studio and played a couple of versions of beats to let him freestyle. It surprised Dre. He thought it’s a chance to invite him into his company to develop him into the best rapper.

 Since 2001, he has sold out hundreds of concerts all over the world, and he also be in a film “8 miles” that was about how he became a rapper. That made him become even more popular. This made Eminem lots of money. he bought a new house for his family, and his life became better.

 Eminem is a person who really cherishes friendships and family. He puts a lot of effort in his career. His spirit is the reason why so many people like him; he always shows his real feelings and opinions. That’s Eminem!

Reflection

 I chose this piece because I was crazy about Eminem, I did so many research that was about his early life before his rapping career, and I also listen to his songs, therefore I know his styles of raps.  I can easily explain the whole Eminem, whether it’s his styles or his lives. So I'm using facts and opinion to make readers understand what I am saying. I think the strength of the piece is the word choices that it has, it used suitable words that were corresponding to the circumstance of the stories, it made the story looked nicer. I think the weakness of the piece is the sentence structures because when I was looking at this piece, it looked messy because first of all, there are too many paragraphs, made the whole story looked messy and chaotic. The piece I was writing was the biography of Eminem, I knew a lot about his rap songs and his styles of rap. I researched lots of extra information about him because I wasn't sure about the historical background knowledge for Eminem, therefore I did the research.

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The Game(Narrative)

It was a typical hot summer day in Hong Kong, students were circling on the basketball court. I was dribbling a basketball, waiting for the coach to call my name to defend a player. It was a basketball practice for the school game. One year ago, we found this team, the best basketball players were on the team, and we were practicing for a tournament. This game was really important to me, because if we won this game, then I could earn some important credits, and my parents would be happy. Basketball is really important to my life since I was 6 years old, I gradually fell in love with basketball.

 Two weeks later, on Friday, it was the last practice before the tournament, my friend Harry and I were the first who arrived on the school basketball court. We were practicing shooting. The sound of the basketball through the net was beautiful, I made almost 50 shots. Afterward, my teammates began arriving. We started practicing together. It was a four hours long practice, but we all tried our bests to cooperate together. “Ahh!” An unpleasant sound ran through the air, we all turned our heads to find the source of the sound, it was Harry. I could not calm down at the moment, Harry was the main player who contributed a lot to the team, if we lost him… I couldn't imagine what our team would be, or our games. We used our fastest paces to take him into the nurse’s office, his ankle was broken, not really severe, but the nurse was sure that Harry could not play basketball for at least one month.

 A couple days later, in the morning, we got on the bus, Harry also came with us to the tournament in Shenzhen. An hour later, we suddenly had arrived. We started warming up, Harry was sitting behind us with his crutches. Several minutes later, the game was about to begin. I was sitting on the bench, watching the game nervously, the rival team grabbed the ball, and we started defending, the opponents attacked our hoop aggressively, our teammates were struggling to defend. They suddenly scored 12 points, but we scored 5 points, we started a little hopeless. “Crack!” Another unpleasant sound had raised, it was Leo, he was injured but he was another main player on our team however, we didn't despair.

 Now, the coach threw me to Leo’s position on the court. I felt a bit nervous because we still had two quarters remaining which meant that we still had twenty-four minutes left. I dribbled the ball slightly, looking for someone I could pass the ball to. Michale waved his hand to me, I threw the ball at his hands, he jumped immediately, and made a shot, the basketball went through the net, the sound was clear. The rivals were dribbling the ball, but I was on their tail, I walked with light steps, trying to steal their ball. “Paw”! the ball was in my hand, I used my fastest running pace to try to run down to the basket—I made it! “Wow!”, the sound from the auditorium the score was now 12-7. The opponents tried to pull us out of defending, but it was too hard for them. we circled the guy dribbling the ball and made a strong barrier in front him. He was stuck in front of us, but he passed the ball higher to his teammate. He shot it and made a perfect basket. We started to get even more nervous, fearing that they might win, and we would make a turnover. I was right behind the three-point line, Michale passed me the ball, I jumped and I could feel my wrist and my arm making the ball fly in a perfect arc into the basket. “Yeah!” we screamed excitedly.

 It was the last minute of the game. We were still striving for points, now the rivals were in the lead, 12-13. I called for the ball, my teammate passed it to me but it was stolen by a rival; fortunately, I grabbed it back in my hand and threw it in the air. “ Oh no, we’re gonna lose!” I thought I couldn’t face it. But then I heard a sound, it was the sound of the ball bouncing off of the backboard and into the net. Buzzer! we won the game!!! I had never experienced this kind of excitement in my heart before. Afterward, because I made the buzzer beater I won MVP,  which is the “most valuable player.” I couldn’t believe it, all because of my efforts and hard work.

 By the end of the day, we took the championship cup and I realized that we all worked very hard, I worked very hard. We cannot lose anyone on our team, because we are an organization and when combining our efforts; we can go farther than any of us ever could alone.

Reflection

I chose this piece was because the story was really unforgettable to me, and it was really detailed. The purpose of the piece was to make readers understand the story that was happening. I narrated the story by detailed facts, in order to make the reader more easily to understand the story. When I was going through this narrative, I found out that the sentence structure is really good, because the whole story looks neat and clean, which means I could understand everything in the story easily, the author uses flashback and other writing techniques that can depict the story into a nice one. The weakness of the piece I think is the word choice, because when I was looking through it, I found out the word choices are poor because they looked very childish and immature. The piece that I was writing was about a basketball game I experienced. This game is really unforgettable, therefore I could represent it in words smoothly with a great sentence structure, I tried my best to chose suitable words for each scene, to show the actual feelings to the readers.

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Research

Badminton is a very old sport, it was first created in West Asia, in India. There have been a lot of changes in badminton over time. It’s popular and fun because the rules are easy and you can play it in casually way. It is fun to play, but I got hurt while playing badminton.

 When the Indians play this sport, they just stand across each from each other, and they use a long thin stick with a net on it, and they made a ball with some feathers, one people serve, and another player hit it back to the opposite side, until one player, can’t hit the ball. Then, the player who hit the ball got one point. These are the basic rules of the early badminton.

 Today, a lot of rules have been changed, for instance, now we have a badminton court, it tells you where is the foul line, and where are the boundaries. You can play single player or doubles in the team. And badminton has been a part of the Olympics and is also an association for badminton. In my opinion, Chinese and Malaysian’s player are the best in the world.

 There are also lots of benefits about badminton, you can practice your stance, and it can tone your muscles, also. The main thing is: badminton can help your hand-eye coordination, which helps your body to be balanced.

Playing badminton can reduce the risk of some disease, such as heart attack. When you play badminton, you can help your blood circulation. Also can avoid cancer happen if you keep playing badminton.

 I also like playing badminton. When I was six years old, my father introduced badminton to me. He taught me every afternoon, I became stronger by practicing this sport, now I can play it very well today. When I feel sad, I will play badminton and it can relieve my frustration when I hit the birdy. I also joined the school team when I entered in QSI. I’m great on the team. The first time I chose to play double, but I couldn’t cooperate with my teammate, so I played singles. Singles is hard but interesting, you have to play against the opponent by yourself, without any teammates to helping you. When you play single, you have to know the technique for playing singles and use certain skills, for example: to hit farther away when your rival is standing close to you. When he stands far from you, you might hit it closer, just over the net is the perfect move to put them off balance.

 Every sport has the possibility for injuring, of course, badminton is no expectation. Badminton players can get an injury to any part of their body. Most of the players injure their knee or ankle. I injured my ankle when I was 11 years old while I was playing a badminton game. I jumped up and hit the birdy, I fell to the ground on one foot, “crack!!!”, my ankle broke immediately I felt like it had been dislocated.

 It's so hard to hit the ball when your opponent hit the birdy in an unusual way, so try to make the best decision when they hit the birdy to you, and then following your decision because you only have a few seconds to think. And try to fix some mistakes that you made in the game. Badminton is a great sport, it can test your sensitivity to the ball or the things that come to you. It can help you to be stronger, enjoy it!

Reflection 

  I chose this piece because I have been playing badminton for seven years, therefore I know a lot about it, I know much about the history of badminton and how is the badminton court look like, so I can easily explain the details of badminton(rules, how to play). Therefore I chose this topic. I think the strength of the piece is, it has good words, good word choice, also, a great sentence structure. Because when I was going through it, I saw many academic vocabularies that fits the work, also, there is also a good sentence structure, because all the paragraph is in a order, it made me clearly to understand the work. The piece that I was writing was badminton because I've already known how badminton works, which means I have already acknowledged different things about badminton, the rules, skills, and the badminton celebrities. And I have already played badminton for seven years, I took this advantage into my piece, demonstrated a great piece of a research essay.

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Me myself and I

        Hi! My name is Kenny Cheung, I am thirteen years old. I’ve been lived in Dongguan for nine years before I came here, I lived in the United States for three years because of my parents' job. Later on, I went back to HongKong, but within a year, I had to go to Dongguan because of my parents' job again. I’m a sportive person, I love doing sports very much, I played basketball in my whole life, I also tried soccer, I gave up on it because the happened of injury. Two years ago, in my old school, there was a basketball tournament between classes in our grade, I was the best athlete in our team, so I carried the team by scoring all throughout the game, later, in the final game, in the last minute, I made a buzzer shot, we won the game. I got the most valuable player which is the MVP. I'm very proud of myself in sports. This is me, Kenny.