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@ghoulinfuschia spraying j with dirty brown water

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oh boy.

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Every family should include…

A bisexual (Khan)

Another bisexual (Nori)

a third bisexual but it’s the child of the first and second bisexuals (Uzi)

a straight white boy that will inevitably realize that he’s also bisexual (N)

A married couple were one of them is demisexual and doesn’t realize they were until their spouse and sister points it out (Yeva and Polaroid) (Yeva is the demisexual)

The married couple’s daughter who is a lesbian (Doll)

And a creature (CYN)

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canon: they died

fanfic: fUCK YOU

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canon: they died

fanfic: fUCK YOU

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yeah. mitsi posting

mitsi my beloved

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From Dance to Death

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From Dance to Death

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Making First Impressions

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Mitsi~

It's been a while since I last drew anything on my tablet AAA help my hand is weird

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before and after ava 11

don't think that I don't love Mitsi, she's wonderful, but my world has turned slightly upside down

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Loyal

Can you tell I have a lot of thoughts about Agent and his reaction to Mitsi's death and how he probably would've sacrificed himself for her in a heartbeat if he'd had a little more time to act.

And how he probably feels all that more indebted to victim for failing to save their partner, or to stop their spiral into paranoia and fear, or to do something, anything to help them.

And how he's also probably spiraling in his own way, putting up a stoic and unbothered front to avoid confronting the guilt that haunts him, ignoring how much it hurts to never get any comfort or closure, because he can't burden victim with his own issues when they've already got so much else to deal with.

...Also I think he should get to punch Chosen in the face 1 (one) more time. As a treat.

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glad to announce that one of my first animations on adobe animate is vicsi

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some of the best writing advice I’ve ever received: always put the punch line at the end of the sentence.

it doesn’t have to be a “punch line” as in the end of a joke. It could be the part that punches you in the gut. The most exciting, juicy, shocking info goes at the end of the sentence. Two different examples that show the difference it makes:

doing it wrong:

She saw her brother’s dead body when she caught the smell of something rotting, thought it was coming from the fridge, and followed it into the kitchen.

doing it right:

Catching the smell of something rotten wafting from the kitchen—probably from the fridge, she thought—she followed the smell into the kitchen, and saw her brother’s dead body.

Periods are where you stop to process the sentence. Put the dead body at the start of the sentence and by the time you reach the end of the sentence, you’ve piled a whole kitchen and a weird fridge smell on top of it, and THEN you have to process the body, and it’s buried so much it barely has an impact. Put the dead body at the end, and it’s like an emotional exclamation point. Everything’s normal and then BAM, her brother’s dead.

This rule doesn’t just apply to sentences: structuring lists or paragraphs like this, by putting the important info at the end, increases their punch too. It’s why in tropes like Arson, Murder, and Jaywalking or Bread, Eggs, Milk, Squick, the odd item out comes at the end of the list.

Subverting this rule can also be used to manipulate reader’s emotional reactions or tell them how shocking they SHOULD find a piece of information in the context of a story. For example, a more conventional sentence that follows this rule:

She opened the pantry door, looking for a jar of grape jelly, but the view of the shelves was blocked by a ghost.

Oh! There’s a ghost! That’s shocking! Probably the character in our sentence doesn’t even care about the jelly anymore because the spirit of a dead person has suddenly appeared inside her pantry, and that’s obviously a much higher priority. But, subvert the rule:

She opened the pantry door, found a ghost blocking her view of the shelves, and couldn’t see past it to where the grape jelly was supposed to be.

Because the ghost is in the middle of the sentence, it’s presented like it’s a mere shelf-blocking pest, and thus less important than the REAL goal of this sentence: the grape jelly. The ghost is diminished, and now you get the impression that the character is probably not too surprised by ghosts in her pantry. Maybe it lives there. Maybe she sees a dozen ghosts a day. In any case, it’s not a big deal. Even though both sentences convey the exact same information, they set up the reader to regard the presence of ghosts very differently in this story.

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“Copper 9 is.. quiet.”

(My Part for the After the Fight Fanzine :>)