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Reflection For School
Elijah Eden 9/19/19
Mr.Kauffman English
Throughout my time writing this essay i think there are obvious pros and cons because I'm obviously human and I do not make the more accurate and best essays in the world if that was the case I would be in harvard mastering in english language arts or whatever major that takes. The pros of the essay is that the audience or just the genre in general is just a life message not everyone is gonna have the same experience as me, Not everyone looks like me and goes to the gym but the way it happened is a surreal experience something you would see in a movie but won't think of it happening in real life. But, it's a very in depth deep story of how you can apply everything to one person or a simple weight in the gym I mostly picked this story out of many because i always thought about how much I was moved by the gym and the new coach/friend I made. There were some limitations to the essay the 650 words was a little bit of a struggle not to reach the goal but to stay capped at that goal. The reason for that is that there is so much to talk about in such a short amount of space you just let your mind explore and you just want to voice yourself to the world.
I did want to start out with some famous quotes that many people have heard including my well not a quote but basically a reality check or a wakeup call of insecure people who have nothing better to do in there lives. Then I wanted to go more into how much it really means to go to school because nowadays kids do not find it valuable anymore there is no rush to get that education that many thrive for. Now the cons might outweigh the pros but again I am just a normal kid writing what I felt was a true story for me. Some of the cons were that I felt as though it has a good story but it was too extended but not to the point it explained my work ethic but didn't give enough details as I wanted it to. Another con is that I didn't structure it to my best work like I could talk about one thing in one paragraph and then talk about what will happen next in the next paragraph.
Even though a word cap was given you always need to respect how far can you really go till you lose the reader in the story and then they will eventually not willing to read anymore. I also had a little better word structure but all around everything was good because everyone makes common grammatical error or run on sentences which I adore the most. Like i'm basically doing right now it's just so hard to extend your process of how you thought of writing an essay it's more mental work to do this then an actual free writing piece. I'm not even reflecting im talking to myself whoever sees this just know i was extremely bored writing this part i did it cause why not. Back to the topic at hand, what made me really write this essay well it can be only boiled down to courage. Most people that write personal experiences either lie and fabricate some stuff to make themselves look better or have nothing better to do or its just really personal and it can be let out in life at all circumstances. I basically took a risk in writing this because it was the best comeback story to me in my head yeah I sound insane it happens whatever. I always grew up trying to find the actual point of education and I legit found more of it going to a gym then actually becoming a bookworm . Also, I wrote this because well who says that they were given more education from a gym then a school it just doesn't seem like something to logical but it was honestly true. The gym was an escape from reality for most of my day it was something to get me in shape learn how to live life when i grow up and it was all around the best experience in the world pain is only for a minute then something else paves it way in your life.
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