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The Elf Wife is Pent Up | Kirome | 539957

If there is a single takeaway from this work, it’s that hypersexuality is a real impediment to many people's lives. While it may sound silly, if being excessively horny is impeding your day to day, you can and perhaps should reach out to a healthcare professional. There are both therapeutic and medicinal treatments, and if it's not something you want to deal with you don't have to.

That being said, this is a very middle of the road piece. The art is unnoteworthy, the plot is at once simple and poorly elaborated, the choreography is just kind of fine, and it fails to commit to the kinks it wants to explore.

The greatest success is the design of the main character. She is very attractive, through both a visual interest and an eroticism lens. Her motivation, while simple, does largely explain her questionable actions. The story feels more like someone making an oc and building a situation around her. This isn't a strictly bad thing, but the story as a whole is too hesitant to be self-indulgant for me to be able to approve.

She sleeps with four people in the story, which feels low for a story that is, at its core, about a promiscuous elf that is too horny to be faithful.

It wants to show a degradation in morals, from taking care of a traveler near death, to public sex with a rapist, to enchanting a kid to sleep with. The issue is that not enough time is given to show this fall, you could change the order of events and very little would tonally change. Not only this, but every character doesn't get a design. Even her husband, the second most important character in the story, isn't even given a face. Faceless protagonist syndrome really only works when it is the main character, because the point is the anonymity and the self-insertion.

The last major issue is the way it handles kinks. The previously mentioned rapist is only known as such in a side note after his arc is over. The public sex is explicit, but no time is afforded to explore this. The shouta is given as much apprehension as Mr. Krabs robbing a grave. It includes things that would turn off the average consumer of slutty, blond, elven milf stories while not bothering to include the parts that make those things enjoyable to those who like them.

I have a hard time deciding who this is supposed to be for. It has a rapist and a shouta, but no rape or csa, in a manner of speaking. It has an irreparably horny protagonist, but she only has four partners. It doesn't feel like the author was jacking off or trying to make art. I would advise finding a couple pictures of the titular elf wife and treating it more like an r34 post. 4.5/10. I wish the author made it longer and was more self serving.

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1-nichi Nyuugyuu Taiken ~Oishii Milk ga Dekiru made~ | Pokoten | 389788

This is, hands down, the hottest thing I have ever read. I am willing to admit, I am very biased. It hits my kinks to such a degree that I could have commissioned it in my sleep without my knowledge.

The writing is very fresh, and a lot of the time, even in written works, you come in with an expectation of the dialogue. Namely, that it will attempt to convey the feelings of the characters explicitly ("She's so big, I can't take it, she's filling me up, I'm so full, I'm hers forever now, etc.). In this, however, the dialogue is limited to the types of things I have directly heard during sex, and the thoughts limited to what you would realistically be thinking. What's more, the thoughts stop when they should. You occasionally find characters going into sub-space but their thought bubbles are still both frequent and coherent, but not here.

The choreography leaves me wanting more. Despite the work taking place over the better part of a day, we only see a few minutes at most. The progression makes sense, if you aquire a new dairy cow, you milk her, then when you see she's not fully cooperative yet, you inject more reasons for her to (in this case cum, of course). The cut after several hours is very effective in what it does, and makes the return trip in the post-scene more believable. I just would have liked to see more personal attention given to the cow.

The characters are definitely the weakest part. The farmer is impersonal, but not in a superior way. They're involved, but not in the way a farmer loves her animals. It feels like the author is trying to have it both ways, but it comes out weaker for it. The protagonist is not given much in the way of personality. They act as though they want their original body back, but are defensive about their breasts in a way that shows a personal attachment (both happening before any psychological shifts may have occured). Beyond that single, contradictory and quickly abandoned trait, they're pretty hollow. Admitly, the type of person who goes to a special farm to get turned into a girl and bred by a beautiful lady with a huge cock also happens to be pretty devoid of personality before estrogen, but that's not depicted so I can't give credit for it.

The art is nice to look at. I'm not particularly versed in critiquing art beyond if it makes the porn noticeably less sexy, but it doesn't do that. Not does it ever get so busy that it becomes muddied, which is a frequent issue. The expressions are particularly...expressive for lack of a better term.

All of the kinks it includes are given enough care to warrant their presence, and what would be a plot contrivance in the body-morphing sedative is revisited and recontectualized to explain the entire opposition, the importance of the farmer, and the important of the farmer cumming inside.

I personally can't bear to rate this less than 10/10, however, it isn't perfect. The return scene likely would have been better incorporated into the main story or the characters could have benefited from any personality. But on the other hand, it is really really really hot. Who knows