#thank u for the validation 🥺🌹💖✨💞⭐

[jeongjaebae]

ok long feedback time bc i like to talk. i haven’t done such a long in-depth feedback in months so i figured it was about time. it’s kinda all over the place but i’ll try to organize my thoughts.

here we go, time to disect this 12k monster masterpiece (also don’t mind the incoherent fangirling. it’s me. skrtskrt. you should be used to this)

my favorite parts:

the scene where the reader fakes shit to get younghoon to notice her. honestly? comedy GOLD. never kept it up but its something ive done in the past akajsk. needa start doing it again for attention though

secondly the part where the reader gains a different perspective from younghoon at the study session. i liked how you wrote out the dialogue, you could really sense how there was a bit of tension between the two characters with the insensitive reader. just the way you wrote the reader’s carefree personality overall in contrast wity younghoon’s slight coldness was my favorite. also you said i liked bad guys and wouldn’t like this fic (?) WRONG. i like all men LMAO.

my favorite lines:

“he seems so guarded all the time that making him open up to the idea of love might be a challenge in itself."

idk man something about that sentence hits me. i really like it too bc younghoon really does give off those kept to self vibes yk? he a real softie inside tho wbk

“Would it be so bad to just stay in his arms forever? You wanted to drown in him, to be so overwhelmed by his love that you forget everything except for the sound of your own name coming out of his mouth. But unfortunately, he couldn't be the solution to your problems if he was also the cause of them.”

ok i said this before but i truly mean it every single time. i love the way your words flow to express emotion. like you always focus on word building and all that stuff but i think everything about your writing is flawless. amazing writer things!!

"But you can't exactly break my heart if I never fell for you in the first place.”

ok that line just hurts but we love angst so it’s ok. Plus Y/N deserved that. i be bitter too. also the way you broke my heart man…

"Honestly, aren't we all trying to figure that out?" he says thoughtfully. "I don't think it can be defined in just one way; it's something that we learn a little more about each day. The stories we live to tell and the events that shape our lives—they may teach us to love the world a little more, and by extension, each other. So in a way, love can be anything you want it to be."

OK FIRST OF ALL. You know a fic is GOOD when the author manages to make you fall in love with the lead character. (in this case Younghoon) idk how but you manage to do it everytime jiejie… like i’m falling for him bad. SECOND OF ALL. honestly as someone who doesn’t really believe in love but finds the idea temporally fun (iykyk lmao) but like i loved that whole paragraph. you didn’t jump straight into the i love you but instead dived deeper beyond the surface of the topic. considering the circumstances they dealt with, the way you described love was perfect. but fr tho, as time goes on, we’re always learning so everything we do and the people we meet will end up shaping our views on things (in this case love).

ok wow this was so long. SORRY LMAO. i’ll keep it short next time but i like to ramble. also unrelated but i really want juyeon as my chem partner still. that fic is still my fav loll, no one ain’t ever topping that. also i’m curious was your major in college biology? you always seem so interested in science loll, ok bye i talk too much🔫

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this is coherent dw!! omg you even organized it by lines 🥺

yes i turn up the charm on purpose sometimes for attention too HAHAHA it's fun. and please, what is there to like about men 😔 maybe just men written by women. but anyway, i kind of treated this like a character study? recently i've noticed that sometimes the characters sound the same in people's fics so i've been kind of self conscious about that happening in mine (though i think i've been doing a decent job at making each character distinct)

first quote: i barely paid attention to this part but hmm interesting. ok at least his characterization was on point then phew

the second quote!! not one of my faves but now that you've pointed it out, i kind of like it. it flows nicely. but omg i don't think i focus on world building AT ALL 😅 "you look hideous on me" was a bit of an exception but even the world building in that was unintentional. guess i generally prefer my fics straight to the point so world building seems kind of unnecessary at times. might've been nice to have some in this fic though, would've given it more dimension for sure.

the angst line... well, hurt people hurt people so. just him lashing out nbd, we all know it was false hAHAHA

the last quote is definitely one of my faves!! from the mc's perspective i would've thought younghoon had it all figured out, but then hearing him say that was like... wow. it's a fresh perspective that lets us peer into his mind and it's also quite true. his mindset towards life was what allowed him to forgive our mc and be understanding about what the mc did. hmm i guess i snuck a lot of my own ideologies into this fic, and maybe that's why i love it (and this younghoon) so much. and of course, never jump straight into the ily or the BOOM KISS part!! 😂

no, omg not straight up biology. it was my least fave of the three sciences in college LMAO. i did a bit of everything tho: majored in neuroscience, doubled minored in math and biochemistry, and added a lil physics specialization on top of that, then went into biostatistics afterwards but we don't talk about that part. (NERD!!!! i hear you, don't worry) but i guess you probably already know from reading my old works since i used to sneak in a ton of science references (deffs cringing at them now tho). so yeah if you ever need help with courses... hmu i guess LOL

but anyways, i wrote 12.8k of pure ART and ur still goin on about chem lab partner juyeon??!?! 💀💀💀 ur in DEEP girl. i would consider writing something else from that world but i'm still brainstorming for your prompt atm. when ur album comes i hope u pull juyeon tho hehe 🤡