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Reimagining the Characters in Wish

(Part 4- The 7 teens)

Yup, you read that right, I’m rewriting AAAAALL these fellas, or rather, just giving more substance to them because as they were in the movie we barely got CHARACTERS, just a 7 dwarfs reference, heck, I doubt y’all remember their names.

If you’re new here, hi, I’m rewriting all the characters in Wish before I start sharing my rewrite, here’s part 1, part 2 and part 3.

Now you may wonder, why am I even keeping the concept of the 7 teens in my rewrite, when just scrapping them all together would make my life so much easier instead of writing lines of dialogue and character motives to all of them?

Well the answer is that I like to make myself suffer I think they actually have a lot of potential, and I really like their designs.

Sooo lets meet the gang.

Who are the 7 teens?

So in my rewrite, the 7 teens will be a little bit more than just Asha’s best friends. Because each one of them will be the sons and daughters of some members of the royal staff.

I’ll be specifying in this blog the following things about each one of them:

- Their personality.

- Who their parents are.

- How they met Asha.

- What purpose will they serve in the story.

So buckle up because this blog might get a lil bit long hahaha I regret this already.

Dahlia 🍪

- Dahlia is a 17 year old girl, she has mobility issues, so she has to use a crutch to walk.

- She’s very organized and proactive, always doing her best to get things done. She’s often the one who takes the lead when planning things for her friends such as surprise birthday parties or deciding where to hang out (or whatever teenagers did back then aside from dying from the plague).

- She has an habit of making lists with the step by step of everything she has planned, which her friends find pretty amusing. Her ideas always turn out to be a lot of fun, although she really needs to learn how to let go of this need of control and just let things play out naturally.

(She’s kinda like Twilight Sparkle… this will not be the last time I’ll mention a My Little Pony character in this blog)

- Sometimes when things don’t go according to plan or she gets anxious she starts stuttering and replacing words

(much like how Doc from Snow White did constantly, I’m shocked they didn’t reference that once in the movie, it’s such an awkward teenager thing to do)

“Asha! We shook— I mean LOOKED everywhere for you la-last night! Why would you fun- I MEAN RUN away from the hackle like that??”

“… I think you mean castle-“

“YOU KNOW WHAT I MEANT”

- But overall she’s a very kind and supportive friend to Asha, something they both have in common is that they enjoy working hard to achieve their goals, even though Dahlia still wants to give her wish for the king.

- I might’ve made her come off as a bit of a control freak but really she’s very easygoing and kind. Even when things don’t go according to plan she knows anything with her friends will be fun and work out in the end.

Even if what doesn’t go according to plan is a heist mission to infiltrate the castle?

She’s the daughter of the royal cooks

- Her mother is the royal baker and her father is the royal lead chef.

- They both work in the castle, and Dahlia sometimes goes with them to lend a hand when they’re short staffed or to learn the family business.

- Dahlia has witnessed first hand how the royal couple can be not so sweet when they’re away from the public eyes:

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King Magnifico: Diner yesterday was absolutely dreadful, what happened? Have I granted your wish to be the greatest chef in the land for nothing?

Dahlia’s father: m-my deepest apologies sire, you see, the queen took all the salt from our storage yesterday to make her potions so-

King Magnifico: Blaming my wife for your incompetence now, I see

Dahlia’s father: n-no! I’d neve-

King Magnifico: If you got no salt, find a work around, I’ll not be accepting any less than the finest meals from you, was I clear? Dismissed.

Dahlia: … Dad, that wasn’t your fault, you can’t let him talk to you like that.

Dahlia’s father: He’s the king, Dahlia, he’s always right. Besides, it’s thanks to him granting my wish that I know how to cook at all, the least I can do is not disappoint him.

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- Because she got to see this behavior, it’s easier for her to believe when Asha tells her the king and queen’s true colors.

- She’s expected to follow her parent’s foot steps, and become a great cook, but all she really knows how to bake is cookies.

- She sees cooking a lot more as a past time than something she’ll be doing for the rest of her life, but she doesn’t want to let her parents down, she keeps trying to develop some interest in cooking, so she can wish to be a great cook once she turns 18

(Just wishing for it without having truly the interest in cooking wouldn’t work, because a wish has to be something that you really want and comes from the bottom of your heart)

She was the first one that met Asha

- Dahlia was helping her mom sell her baking goods to the neighborhood, so she went all by herself with a little cart carrying a bunch of sweets (like a Girl Scout)

- She knocked on Asha’s house and was greeted by lil 6 year old Asha with her grandpa, they bought some sweets, but as she was walking away Asha noticed she was having some trouble carrying the cart while walking with her crutch.

- Asha looked at her grandfather who gave her a reassuring nod.

- Asha offered to help Dahlia carry the cart.

- They talked while they walked door to door for a while, and after there were no more sweets in the cart they went to play together, and that’s how they became best friends.

She will be the leader

- I mentioned briefly in my blog about reimagining Asha that after her grandfather passed away she started living with Dahlia, so they’re basically sisters, and as such, Dahlia is very protective of Asha and becomes increasingly worried when Asha starts acting weird after her meeting with the king and queen, like she’s hiding something… and why the heck she has a friend that dresses up like a prince now?

- There will be a point in the middle of the story where Asha and Aster run away from the kingdom

(for reasons that I really should explain soon because the whole middle chunk of this rewrite is yet to be shared on Tumblr, I’m so sorry, I’ll get to writing it here soon)

- And Asha is seen now as a traitor, so, the 7 teens are conflicted.

- Should they believe their king, who says that Star guy is dangerous and Asha was plotting to betray them? Or should they trust their best friend?

- Dahlia is the first one who rises up saying they should go after Asha and help her, pack their stuff, tell their parents they’re going to make a sleepover or something, and just go to the middle of the woods.

- Everyone is a little unsure at first (specially Gabo and Simon) but after she gives them a little speech and reminds everyone of all the things Asha did for them, they’re convinced to go.

- Once they do find Asha and Aster, she helps a lot when they have to make a plan on how to defeat the royal couple.

Simon 💤

- Simon is a 21 year old young man, the oldest of the group, and since the day he gave way his wish he hasn’t been the same.

- Simon used to be very energetic and hard working, now, he’s in a constant feel of exhaustion that doesn’t go away, no matter how much he sleeps, he doesn’t feel motivated to do anything.

- His friends are very understanding tho and every time they hang out they always bring a pillow in case he needs a nap (which he always does need).

- They assume Simon has been so exhausted since he turned 18 because after that his father has been more demanding of him and his training, we’ll talk more about that later.

- Even tho he’s overwhelmed with sleepiness, Simon is still very protective and caring with his friends, he always tries his best to stay awake when they’re having fun together, he doesn’t want to miss a moment with them.

- He was even more protective before he turned 18 of course, he was like the older brother of the group, but since now he’s way too sleepy to be the voice of reason, that role is now Asha’s, the second oldest.

He’s the son of the captain of the royal guard

- The training I mentioned before was sword fighting, horse walking, navigation, tactics and a bunch of other exhausting things.

- But for whaaaateveeer reason Simon has lost all interest in learning about them since the day he gave away his wish, gosh I wonder what that wish wa— It’s the same that it was in the movie.

- Simon wished to become the next captain of the royal guard, just like his dad, so he can make him proud and protect his friends.

(Omg Simon is Papyrus Undertale confirmed)

- Magnifico is waiting for Simon’s dad to pass away so he can grant Simon’s wish, can’t have 2 captains of the royal guard at the same time, now can he?

- The tragic irony of it all is that a wish that Simon made to make his family proud just made him become an embarrassment to his father, who now doesn’t even try to teach him anything, knowing his son is just gonna fall asleep during his lessons.

- Simon is very distressed by all this, deep down he knows that he might feel this way because, for whatever reason, the king hasn’t granted his wish yet

- Whenever he tries to explain that to his father tho, he just angrily cuts him off for even daring to question or blame the king for his own failures, saying he must always be loyal and thankful to the king… Always.

(His father is mean like that because he wished to be the king’s most trusted and loyal knight so he literally is incapable of questioning Magnifico, even if that means he hurts his son in the process)

- After getting these speeches from his father so many times Simon just accepted that the problem was him, and it definitely wasn’t the king’s fault

- However, Asha did suspect that Simon’s wish wasn’t granted, just like how her grandfather’s wish wasn’t either, she recognized how Simon shared a lot of behavior patterns with her grandfather.

“You know Simon… Maybe you should ask the king if your wish was granted at all, don’t you think? You haven't been acting like yourself for 3 years now”

“What? Oh no no no I… I shouldn’t bother him with something so silly, I mean, of course he granted my wish… And if he didn’t then he must have his reasons and I just gotta wait haha but it doesn’t matter either way, after all I’m totally fine… I’m fine…”

Simon is the only one in the group who has absolutely no criticism about the king.

He was the second one that met Asha

- Simon was 10 when he started training sword fighting on his backyard, he’d use some scare crows as his opponents, and he made some wood swords by himself.

- Asha and Dahlia were hanging out when they saw Simon training, Asha thought it seemed fun so she asked if she could play too.

- Simon really could use some more lively opponents so yeah, why not?

- They played sword fighting the whole afternoon while Dahlia cheered for Asha and joined in the fun too.

- Since then they were very close friends and Simon taught Asha how to properly sword fight during their preteen years… they haven’t done that in a while now.

He’ll be the traitor

- Yup, oh sweet sleepy lil Simon betrays them in my version too, but don’t worry, it’s not just because he wants to get his wish granted like it was in the movie

(because that was a jerk move that made Simon feel very unlikable, like I get it he’s constantly exhausted and depressed and wants it to go away but bruh couldn’t even look guilty when doing it)

- So, like I mentioned, they all go after Asha and Aster in the forest. Simon at first is very resistant and the others even say it’s okay if wants to stay.

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Dahlia: It’s okay Simon, you don’t have to go if you don’t want to.

Gabo: OH SURE! I’m a jerk for calling this a suicide mission, but the strongest and oldest of the group not wanting to go is completely understandable, I see how it is.

Simon: …hmm

Dahlia: Simon’s case is different Gabo, if his dad realizes he’s missing then we might have even more guards on our tail.

Safi: Besides, Simon might be a liability.

Simon:… what’s that supposed to mean?

Safi: Ah… shoot- eh you know like… it’s getting pretty late and you didn’t get a nap this afternoon so—

Gabo: He means we can’t carry you through the woods like a sleeping beauty waiting for a kiss, Simon.

Simon:…

Hal: Wow Gabo, very classy (sarcastic)

Gabo: Hey, just saying what we’re all thinking-

Simon: I’m going.

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- Simon decides he has to go because someone has to be there to protect his friends, not just from the woods, but most importantly from that star guy the king warned everyone about

- May seem contradictory that Simon believes both in the king and Asha, but truth is that he’s holding up hope that this is all some big misunderstanding and Asha just misunderstood something the king said, or she’s being brainwashed by that star, or anything else.

- He just can’t accept that the king is truly evil.

- So, when they’re packing up their things to go, Simon grabs a little something from his father’s room.

- A magic mirror, used only by the king’s most trusted knights, that gives direct contact to the king's study.

- He planed to just use it in case that they needed help if they found out the star was really harming Asha.

- However, once they did find Asha and Aster, it became undeniably clear that the star wasn’t harmful at all, which left Simon very confused.

“Maybe the book the king read about wishing stars was wrong, I should just explain to him that he made a mistake!”

(Oh poor naive boy)

- After planning how they’d defeat the king and save the wishes, Simon just lied saying he was gonna take a nap behind a tree, and thus, he entered in contact with the king and queen

- Magnifico at first dismisses Simon like he’s just messing with his father’s stuff until Simon mentions he knows where Asha and the star are, that peaks his interest, but he and Amaya disguise their enthusiasm perfectly by pretending to be worried for his safety.

“Oh my, are you alright? Has it done anything to you? Where are you? We can send help immediately”

- He says they’re fine, and tries to explain that maybe the king was wrong about star, and there has been some misunderstanding that lead to Asha thinking they were bad people, if they just talked things out everything would go back to normal.

- Like I mentioned in part 2, one of Magnifico’s abilities is hypnosis through eye contact, so he’s able to make Simon see things his way.

- He manipulates Simon into thinking that the star is tricking all of them to get to the wishes, and the only way for Simon to save them is doing EXACTLY what Magnifico says.

- He asks Simon to tell him what their plans are, so he can stop them from… doing anything they might regret.

- Simon, even under the influence of Magnifico’s power, is still conflicted and asks if his friends will be in trouble after this is all over.

“Trouble? Oh heaves no, dear boy, I wouldn’t dream on letting any harm come to them, trust me, your friends will be perfectly safe… If you do as I say.”

“… “if”?…”

“Enough chit chat, now, what are they plotting exactly? Don’t leave any details”

- Of course, Magnifico also offers to grant Simon's wish if everything goes according to plan, Simon is fully convinced.

- Simon agrees to lock his friends in a room during their invasion to the castle, the king convinced him that's the best way to keep them “safe” (Asha will be locked in a different room tho, for… reasons)

- But once he does lock them up, he hears his friends screaming and arguing with him through the door, eventually he has a change of heart and lets them go, so they can stop the king and queen together.

- Simon first betrayed his friends, but then he betrayed the king, and as he’ll find out in a very painful way… Magnifico really doesn’t like being betrayed.

(See what I did there? That’s a line Magnifico says in the Wish movie hehe… okay moving on)

Gabo 😡

- Gabo is a 17 year old teen, he’s also a little person.

- He’s a menace to society the brutally honest of the group, always with a sarcastic remark on the tip of his tongue, sometimes they’re funny, sometimes they’re way too harsh, but he often apologizes if he goes too far, he doesn’t mean to hurt people, being blunt is just how he expresses himself.

- You may wonder why his friends even hang out with him if he’s so… grumpy all the time, well, his friends understand that he has a lot of pent-up anger inside because of personal stuff, so they try to help him through it.

- He also has a more soft side to him, he can be very wise for his age when his friends need some advice, and he’s always loyal, even when they disagree, he’d go anywhere they go.

- He’s specially loyal and supportive to Asha and most of the time refrains from throwing shade at her, actually he’s mostly just blunt when talking to the guys, he’s a lot more respectful to the girls.

(Ironic considering Grumpy hated Snow White at first just because she was a girl lmao)

He’s the son of a soldier

- His father is just a random soldier, nothing special really.

- However, once when Gabo was a kid, he was visiting the castle with his father and he wanted to explore, so he sneakily grabbed his father’s keys to the dungeons and went to see how was it like, ya know, boys will be boys.

- He got in, and at first there wasn’t nothing out of the ordinary, just your average scary dark and gloomy dungeon… except that by the end of a hall, full of empty jail cells, there was a door.

- And he could hear someone screaming from behind that door, like they were pleading, and he saw light coming from the key hole… It looked like the king’s magic, except it was green instead of blue.

- He tried to use the keys to open it, but none of them worked.

“Ugh why don’t any of these keys work??”

“Because this area is forbidden, little one”

- He turned around quickly to see who was behind him, and there she was, the queen was smiling down at him, a sweet and tender smile, like she wasn’t hearing the sounds of desperate cries coming from behind the door.

“I- sorry your majesty but umm… it sounds like someone is in trouble in there, shouldn't we help?”

- Then he heard the distinct sound of something made of glass breaking, and suddenly… silence, no more crying, no more screaming, and no more light coming from the door.

“I don’t hear anything my sapling, poor thing, you must be imagining things. Now, why don’t you just hurry along back to your father? He’s looking for you… And remember, this is our little secret~”

- And Gabo never told this to anyone, he knows no one would believe him.

(If you’re wondering what was going on behind that door… let’s just say there’s STILL more evil stuff Magnifico does that I couldn’t fit in my blog about the villains, what’s that you ask? *maniacal laugh* I’ll let you guess)

- Gabo always had the feeling that there was something WRONG with Rosas, but he couldn't quite pin point what, and that experience in the dungeon made him start questioning if the smiles he saw plastered on the king and queen's faces everyday were real or fake.

- This feeling that there was something wrong but there was nothing he could do about it made him, for a lack of a better word, grumpy a lot of the time.

- Needles to say, when Asha explained that the king and queen were actually evil, Gabo believed in a heartbeat.

- Because he’s a little person, Gabo is not expected to follow his father’s foot steps, and that makes him furious, because he wishes he could be seen as strong like he sees himself, but he’s constantly underestimated and treated like a kid.

He was the third one to met Asha

- During a kite festival in the kingdom, Dahlia, Simon and Asha were flying their kite when they noticed a boy sitting down on the grass, next to a broken kite.

- The boy looked very grumpy, so Asha tried offering him a hug, Gabo quickly pushed her away, saying he wanted to be left alone.

- Simon and Dahlia suggested they should just leave him be, but Asha insisted they should just give him some time to calm down.

- They sat a little bit far away from Gabo and started to just talk. Gabo appreciated that even though Asha didn’t even know him she was willing to wait for him to get some alone time and try to reach out for him later, most people just walked away when he had his anger episodes.

- After a few minutes, he got up and asked if he could play with them.

He will be the comedy relief, and the straightforward voice of reason

- Comedy relief is also an important role in a story, to alleviate the the tension and just be that one character that gives more contradictory remarks, otherwise everyone just agrees with each other and really where’s the fun in that?

- Also, after they figure out Simon betrayed them, he’d be the one who snaps Simon out of the idea that the king is a good person, throwing some facts to his face and like, not sugarcoating it, just straight up calling Simon out for being a dirty traitor, an awful friend and an absolute idiot, which may seem harsh but was exactly what Simon needed to hear to realize he was making a mistake.

- Like, Simon just opens the door apologizing in the verge of tears while Gabo keeps kicking his leg to let out his anger while everyone else is staring at Simon very disappointedly, comedy gold.

Bazeema 🥰

- Bazeema is 17 years old, who’s very shy.

-In this rewrite she is pretty much the same except for a little design and background change, you see, I found this piece of concept art

- Do you see it? Bazeema seems to be wearing a hijab, I like that, we don’t get enough Muslim representation, so there, Bazeema is Muslim and she wears a hijab now, her religion won’t affect anything in the narrative tho but I just wish they kept this detail in her design.

- Also I’m keeping that gimmick that sometimes she appears out of no where and scared the hell out of Gabo, because yeah I think it has comedic potential.

- She’s a very sweet and gentle girl, very soft spoken and likes to have some alone time once in a while “us introverts need sanctuary” as she said.

(She’s kinda like Fluttershy, see? I told you I’d mention more my little pony characters)

She’s the daughter of the royal gardeners

- Nothing much to it, Bazeema just saw the queen being rude to her mother once because the flowers were red instead of white. So again, when Asha sas the royal couple is evil she believes her just fine.

- Also she knows about a secret passage inside the palace’s garden, in the center of a hedge maze, that leads to inside the castle.

- Specifically to an underground storage room where her parents keep some gardening tools, but, if they can get in there, they might find a way to get inside the castle through the underground.

- She doesn’t mind following her parents footsteps at all, in fact, she loves the idea of just talking to flowers all day.

She’s the fourth one who Asha meets

- When Asha was 10, she and her friends went to watch a kids play telling the story of Rosas, Bazeema was playing the queen.

- But Bazeema got stage fright, and ran to the back of the stage, embarrassed that she forgot her lines

- Asha followed the sound of her crying and reassured her that it was alright and she could take as long as she needed to feel ready, and complemented that she looked beautiful in her Queen’s dress.

- Bazeema really appreciated that, and she went back on stage, although, she tried keeping her eyes closed to not see the crowd.

She’ll give important info on how to get inside the castle

- Like I mentioned before, Bazeema has info on how to get inside the castle through the garden, so she’ll just assist on that part of their plan.

- Also comedic relief, with her gimmick of disappearing then showing up out of nowhere.

Dario 💎

- Dario is 17 years old, and in this rewrite, he’s mute, not deaf tho, just mute, so he communicates through sign language. That’s to reference how Dopey, the dwarf he pays homage to, was also mute.

- I wouldn’t say Dario is dumb in my rewrite, he’s just really easily distracted, sometimes when his friends are talking he’ll just doze off and look at some flowers he finds along the way or collect rocks, and they don’t really mind.

- Dario is very emotionally intelligent tho, and among all the 7 teens, he’s one of the quickest to believe that Asha is innocent (Right after Dahlia)

He’s the son of the royal announcers

- Ya know those people with the big trumpets that give announcements to the kingdom? Yeah that’s what his parents do.

- Due to his disability Dario can’t really become an announcer, at least not a verbal one, he doesn’t really mind tho.

He’s the fifth one that Asha meets

- Asha was 11 when she and her friends met Dario, he was new in their class because he and his parents just moved to Rosas.

- Since he was mute, he had a really hard time making friends, so, Asha and her friends went to the library and found a book teaching about sign language

(I’m not gonna pretend you can actually learn ALL about sign language with just a book, I should know, I had ASL class in college, with a deaf teacher, and even then I don’t know even half of what there is to know, but this is a fantasy, so let’s pretend these kids learned the whole language, because it’s wholesome)

- So they make this effort to communicate with him and that makes Dario really happy, and he quickly joins the group.

He’ll be the silent comedic relief and also help creating a distraction for the king

- Most scenes when everyone is talking and focusing on more serious things, Dario is easily distracted and can be on the background doing the most random things, it’s not that he doesn’t care tho, he’s listening, and sometimes he comes up with creative ideas of his own.

- Also, as the son of the royal announcers, he goes tell them he has seen the star on the north side of the forest, his parents obviously believe him, and announce to the guards and the king, thus they can get inside while Aster distracts Magnifico.

Safi 🤧

- Safi is the youngest in the group, he’s 16 years old, and he has a tendency to sometimes not thinking before he speaks, so he kinda blurts out things that might come off as indelicate, but he never means to be rude. Also he’s allergic to EVERYTHING under the sun, so, of course, he sneezes a lot.

- I gave him this characteristic of blurting out things that he’s not supposed to say because it kinda reminds me of a sneeze, uncontrollable and sometimes inconvenient, but this way it gives him more character.

- Also if it was only Gabo saying inconvenient stuff and everyone else were saints this would be no realistic group of teenagers, teens are relentless when it comes to saying dumb stuff with each other y’all, they just don’t care.

- Safi is also a germophobic, always avoiding situations that might get him sick, like flowers, animals, dust, humidity, flour, the rain-

- And even though he’s terrified of everything that might give him a sneezing fit, his friends are always there to help him get through it.

He’s the son of two members of the cleaning staff

- So, as you can imagine, Safi really doesn’t want to follow his parents career path, with a job that is all about cleaning dust.

- One day, he was asked to help them clean the castle so he could at least try to learn something.

- While he was helping, the king showed up and started complaining with his parents that his study wasn’t clean enough

- While he was busy talking with them, he left something very important lying around.

- Safi saw the king’s magic staff leaning on the wall.

- Safi wanted to get a closer look, so while the king was distracted he approached the staff, but then, he felt it, a sneeze was coming up.

- He tried to hold it in but it was too late, Safi sneeze was so strong the staff got out of balance, and when it was about to hit the ground Magnifico managed to grab it just in time.

- Safi looked relieved and even chuckled to himself thinking the king would do the same. But the expression the king had was something he never seen from him before… Safi saw pure rage.

“DO YOU HAVE ANY IDEA WHAT YOU ALMOST DID? YOU WRETCHED BRAT! YOU COULD’VE ENDED ALL THE MAGIC IN ROSAS! I COULD’VE BEEN RUINED”

- Safi was pressed against a wall apologizing frantically and so were his parents.

- The king took a few deep breaths, and as if nothing happened his expression went back to his usual charismatic smile

“Maybe cleaning duty just isn’t your calling, lad. You’re dismissed from assisting for today, or any other day for that matter.”

- So Safi is not allowed inside the castle anymore.

He was the sixth that Asha met

- Safi was terrified during the festivals celebrating the foundation of Rosas, because the kingdom was decorated completely with, well, roses.

- There were roses everywhere, and he couldn’t stop sneezing with all the pollen in the air.

- Asha and her friends noticed him distressed, and decided to help him by taking Safi away from the kingdom.

- Safi was sad he couldn’t join in the party, but Asha and her friends said they could bring the party to him, so they danced and played instruments all day long.

This boy whose only personality trait was SNEEZING is literally the one who provides the info they need to defeat the villains, no, I’m not joking

- Like I mentioned before, Safi had a interaction with the king where he heard the king say “You could’ve ended all magic in Rosas” but he never understood what Magnifico meant by that.

- It’s not like all the king’s magic is stored in that one staff right?… but what if it is.

- When they’re coming up with a plan to defeat the king, Safi brings up this information, and there you have it, now they know what’s his weakness.

Hal 😄

- Hal is 17 year old, and judging by her earrings that resemble the “Jaaro dibbei” earrings from the Fulani tribe, so with that in mind, in this rewrite she came from Africa but moved to Rosas with her family as a kid.

- Hal is a very extroverted and joyful person, it’s rare to not see her smile, unless the situation really gets serious.

- Shes contagiously optimistic.

- Is often practicing her jokes with her friends, or just throwing some quick witted quips to lighten the mood.

(She’s a lot like Pinkie Pie… All the girls are My Little Pony references)

She’s the daughter of the royal entertainers

- Hal used to practice a lot of juggling and try acrobatics when she was little, but she quickly realized that kind of act wasn’t her calling

- She much prefers telling jokes and funny stories to the king and queen wherever her parents bring her with them to perform

- Hal noticed how the laughs and smiles the king and queen made during her acts always felt kinda forced, like they didn’t mean it.

- However the king would often burst with laughter whenever a performance from her parents went wrong, that always rubbed her the wrong way.

She was the last to met Asha

- When Asha was 13, she and her friends saw Hal practicing juggling near the forest, and she was really struggling with it.

- She told them she was really nervous because she had to be ready to perform for the royal couple in a few days.

- Asha suggested she should try a different kind of act, so she and her friends helped Hal come up with stories to narrate to the king.

- Hal discovered a new passion for story telling, and that became her new act.

She's the one who encourages Aster to confess his feelings

- Our Star Boy wasn’t actually that confident with confessing how he really felt about Asha, after all Aster knew that after granting her wish they would never see each other again, so what was the point in confessing?

- Hal encourages him with her optimism and explains that if he doesn’t tell her he’ll just regret it forever.

- That leads to the “At All Cost” scene

- So thank Hal for playing cupid

- Oh and Bazeema will help encourage Aster too

Final Thoughts

Welp this was a doozy one, but I’m pretty satisfied with how they turned out, everyone now feels like they got something to do and some actual backstories.

The way I’m planning to actually introduce in the story how they all met Asha is through a musical flashback that we see Asha going from a little kid to a teenager, think of it like the UP intro or “Do You Want To Build a Snowman”.

Like the movie would have in the beginning Asha’s grandpa reading to her the story of Rosas and we get a sweet scene of them interacting, then it cuts to this musical sequence (probably with no lyrics like in UP) where we see how Asha met each one of her friends, and also show how as time went on her grandfather grew more and more senile and dependent on her.

The sequence would end with Asha’s grandfather’s passing, and her friends being there to support her. Just like that in a flashback sequence with no dialogue we understand who are Asha’s friends, who was her grandfather, how Asha cares about all of them dearly, and with all that established the story begins.

Like can you imagine that? Introducing why we should care about Asha’s friends by showing to us who they are instead of just telling us and throwing them in the story with no explanation? What a concept, I’m sure glad a certain multibillion company didn’t just waste them…

Anyway, I’ll start actually sharing the chapters of my rewrite here pretty soon, I’m already confident enough to do it!

I was gonna first share a blog about how I’d reimagine Valentino buuuuuut I think it’s gonna be a pretty short blog that I can write later, and I can tell some people really want me to just tell the story already, and I want to start doing it too so let’s gooo!

Thank you so much for reading!

[blkkizzat]

Hi you’re such an amazing writer and great smut writer!! I was wondering if u had any tips on writing smut cus I wanna start writing it too! Do u have tips on dialogue/action/pacing and being descriptive 😭 it’s harder than it looks!! Ps your suguru bumpy car ride is one of my fave fics!! And I’m excited for sadako!geto 😘😘

hey nonny, pookie tysm ur too sweet! im so glad you enjoy my perversions enough to ask me for advice kcjhdscjkhsdb 😩🩷🙏🏽✨

also sure idk if these will be helpful but these are things that help me:

smut:

i think the cardinal rule of smut writing is if it doesn't make you horny, re-write it until it does. lol.

i am a very visual person so i like to close my eyes and imagine the scene before i write it. not just going through the motions either. if this is me, reader, what am i thinking, feeling (both physically and emotionally).

5 senses (touch, taste, smell, sound, sight) should be covered. not every action needs all 5 but if you are describing something you should at least be hitting two of these. " tears falling, you cry out as he enters you slowly" is fine but "blinking away tears you hiss from the overwhelming stretch of his girth entering you, even slowly, proves to be too much" is better.

sometimes i need a boost and if you partake then a few puffs from a weed pen or a glass of wine (im partial to bubbly) will put you in the MOOD lmfao.

*note i dont think you need to have experienced something to write about it, sex included for any virgins however in lieu of that, with anything you don't have experience in, you need to do research to make it believable.

dialogue:

use dialogue to tell us/reiterate who the character is. you can tell us the character is nervous but then its highlighted by the stuttering, rambling, etc of their spoken words.

break up long dialogue with descriptions. this is also a pacing tip. also can insert memories, i will have readers have a whole dialogue and in the middle their will be a relevant memory to give context and insight to the character and their motivations.

using subtext to explain character feelings, you dont have to be so explicit with dialogue all the time. instead of a character saying "im so fucking mad at you right now," use "alright" your voice is clipped, flipping your hair over your shoulder you go back to your task at hand, not even sparing them another glance.

i rarely use explicit dialogue tags now like "said, spoke, cried, yell" i will still use them but ill weave into the description that follows. ex instead of "please stay!" you cried—i would write—"please stay!" your lip quivers as tears gathered on your lashes.

action:

the last subtext tip also helps with action too, alot of times its what we see that really enriches the dialogue so "show" dont "tell".

this is also a pacing tip but during high action/intense scenes using shorter sentences helps express the urgency. although it all depends as long sentences/paragraphs too can help build tension, slowing down descriptions/actions during the climax (lol non sexual) of a scene builds anxiety/thrill.

explaining emotional reactions of heart racing, sweaty palms, etc, is just as important as physical reactions (even tho these are physiological actions they still are emotion driven).

pacing:

besides the pacing tips above in the other sections i think the biggest pacing issue i think people have is adding in details, actions, etc that don't inform your story. everything action/thought you take time to elaborate on that your character does, should be relevant to their motivations, story or characterizations. if it doesnt apply to one of those then cut it out. (note: sometimes it does apply and needs to be cut out and moved another section if its making a scene go on to long)

edit your stories, i know some people post and go and thats fine. everyone has different goals. some just want to get out thoughts and go. however, pacing can be hard to effectively capture on the first go so you will need to reread at least once to ensure your fic is properly paced.

editing leads into eliminating redundancy. often i will write something where i expressed an emotion/feeling then did it again a paragraph or two down the line just in a different way. unless that feeling is evolving, its redundant. redundant doesnt mean the feeling isnt applicable in both places, it means ive already established this feeling/state of mind in my story and it isnt needed both places. this can be one of the hardest things to identify or even fix. however i think my fics are 100x better when i do.

descriptive:

i think people fall into one of these buckets, 1) having the inclination of being overly wordy descriptive or 2)not being descriptive enough. i am the former, so my issuing is editing is pulling back and giving emphasis on somethings but not others. if you arent descriptive enough you will have to decide where in your story its important to give emphasis.

use metaphors that make sense to the person speaking or narration style. you wouldnt use overly flowery language for example if you were writing how sukuna is feeling about something lol.

hope these tips were helpful!

[whiskeyapologist]

was looking through my camera roll & realized i never posted about this?? but i did a check please theme in my bullet journal back in april & i am still beyond obsessed with how it turned out!

task list & cover page

april was all about finishing my fucking thesis (i earned my mfa in stage automation in may) & i used the task list to break down each section of my thesis & make it less intimidating. i still pulled a bitty & had to marathon write most of my thesis within a like 36 hour period. i slept so good once that draft was finished!

when i started planning this theme, i flipped through the comic & decided pretty quickly i wanted the cover to be this view of faber from 4.25 "faber". i filled the outside with some of my favorite details from throughout the comic, including (clockwise from top left) the "text from chowder: i'm shouting!" from 4.2 "nonstop celly", jack's "oh" moment from 2.17 "graduation", the jack lego (?) figure from 3.1 "wag", dex & nursey's background roach & house bubbles & (i think it's) ransom's "et tu lardo?" bubble from 2.12 "post i: roadie", one of my fave senor bun appearances that didn't make it into a weekly from 1.16 "linemates", & bitty's phone (i don't think there's a specific appearance of bitty's phone that looks like this, at least not that i'm finding in the flip-throughs i've done to write this post. i think i did a lil freehand moment with it, but if anyone happens to find it in the comic, let me know!), as well as my usual little calendar & monthly focuses section

monthly calendar & habit tracker

the monthly calendar & playlist is inspired by the smh team roster hanging on the bulletin board in the haus at the beginning of year 2

the habit tracker features a few other details from 2.1 “moved in”, namely the “haus sweet haus” rug & the sock pinned to the bulletin board. the shopping list bubble is a callback to the “jizz!” speech bubble also pinned to the bulletin board next to the sock

meal & time trackers

the breakfast, lunch, & dinner headers are a callback to the hockey puck taped to the bulletin board

not much to add here, but it’s a great time to mention the “it’s tough but you’re tougher” speech bubble from 4.20 “spotlight on eric bittle” which was the quote i used to decorate my grad cap ❤️

weekly #1 is modeled after y1 & features my favorite y1 senor bun appearance (1.18 “playoffs - i”) & line (1.8 “checking clinic”)

weekly #2 is modeled after y2 & features my favorite y2 senor bun (2.10 "shinny") & line (2.4 "hazeapalooza")

weekly #3 is modeled after y3 & features my favorite y3 senor bun (3.3 "meet the falconers") & line (3.26 "cup v - post")

weekly #4 is modeled after y4 (the layout of the top panel specifically is modeled after the first panel of 4.16 "christmas in madison - iii" which shows a bunch of the christmas pics/posts from the rest of smh & tater) & features my favorite y4 senor bun (4.17 "senior thesis") & line (also 4.17 "senior thesis"). i has some extra space, so i included some excerpts from bitty's y4 tweets

camp nanowrimo tracker, before the pen. the left is just a table for tracking time spent on & words written for my thesis & the novel i've been working on forever. my camp nanowrimo goal was to write 1 hour every weekend day & 2 hours every week day, for a grand total of 50 hours, which i am proud to say i achieved! the right is a visual tracker, where each pie was equal to an hour of writing. i included 50 pies for my 50 hour goal. the bubble near the top is from 1.4 "the haus" with 2 footnotes i added; one on "kitchens" that says "word docs", & one on "pies" that says "words". clearly i think i'm very clever lol

visual tracker, filled in. i surpassed my 50 hour goal with about a week left in the month, & i wanted to include that additional progress on my tracker. once the month was done & i knew how much i needed to add, i made a tip-in (although this might just be a fold-out lol) to tape in. on one side, i included the dialogue bubbles from a panel of 3.19 "keagster"

on the other side of the tip-in/flip-out, i included jam jars for the additional 10.25 hours of writing i did, plus "it's gonna be two trips" also from 3.19 "keagster"

& that's all the spreads! spreads were done in an archer & olive b5 notebook. supplies include: mildliners in the colors vermillion, dark blue, beige, & gray; a black papermate flair, a white gellyroll pen in size 08, and stabilo pens in gray and brown. oh, & a piece of masking tape, bc i couldn't find any clear tape lol

[wholoveseggs]

Hey

How do u write so good smut

Can u share some tips...

~♡~ Smut writing tips ~♡~

Have an idea of what you want to happen during the intimate parts – positions, of course, but also:

~♡~ Foreplay ~♡~ How rough or how soft ~♡~ If your characters are talking during it or if they're not much for dirty talk ~♡~ Do they have any kinks? ~♡~ Is it their first time, or is it routine? ~♡~ Is this an actual act of love, or is it something else? ~♡~ And most importantly, what does your character want to get out of this scene?

Ask yourself what this moment means to them. Why now, why then, why with that person?

Always keep track of where everyone's body parts are and what they are doing, like hands, mouths, legs, etc. You want the scene to be very vivid and realistic, and the best way to do that is to be as descriptive as possible.

The goal is to make the reader feel as though they're right there, experiencing what's happening along with your characters. Describe the sights, sounds, scents, tastes, and sensations, as well as any actions. Make sure your dialogue isn't too cheesy or corny and try not to use clichés. On top of all that, throw in what they are feeling emotionally from time to time.

Remember to use this stuff only when it seems fitting; not everything should be overly detailed, and not everything has to be said in one single paragraph. Try to make the pacing flow naturally and have the scenes come together seamlessly. Avoid using the same phrases over and over, but also don't go crazy with the thesaurus.

My process usually starts with a single moment or idea. For example, in Je t'aime, Je t'adore, I had an idea of Elijah all wet and sexy on the beach, and then I created a whole story around it.

Know your weaknesses in your writing; I tend to ramble on a bit too much, so I make sure always to edit down my work. I have pages and pages of what I call 'scraps' – just random smut that I cut out. Sometimes, less is more.

If you're not into romance then don't force yourself to write it. Write something that makes you happy, if you like rough, kinky stuff then write it, and if you like to write something cute and sweet then go ahead, just enjoy the experience. One last thing, write what you enjoy, write the things you like to do, see, feel and read yourself. If it makes you happy, your readers will be happy too.

Here is a great smut thesaurus by @prurientpuddlejumper for finding just the right word to capture the image in your mind: Smut Thesaurus

♡♡ Thank you for listening to me and my ramblings. I hope it was of some help! ♡♡

[bethanydelleman]

Thanks for the tag @firawren & @glassslippers-n-cowboyboots

1. How many works do you have on AO3? 45

2. What's your total AO3 word count? 208,023. And that's a bit surprising because a bunch of my longer fics are only on AHA or my website.

3. What fandoms do you write for? Mostly Jane Austen, all novels, Elizabeth Gaskell (Wives & Daughters), and Anne Bronte (The Tenant of Wildfell Hall). I have also technically written Oscar Wilde and My Happy Marriage, but those were very transformative.

I also have written some fics based on Kdramas, mostly for Alchemy of Souls.

4. What are your top 5 fics by kudos?

A Ride to Netherfield - Jane breaks her leg on the way to Netherfield and must stay for a month. Short one-shot (6k) and the first Pride & Prejudice variation I wrote.

Of Every Elizabeth - short and sweet Pride & Prejudice fluff, Darcy has nicknames for the plethora of Elizabeth's he's met over the course of his life (it was a super common name at the time)

Carry Me! - three vignettes of Jang Uk and Cho Yeong from Alchemy of Souls after they are married

The Fourth Bennet Sister - long fic (30k words), Pride & Prejudice variation where Kitty Bennet becomes aware that she is in a novel. She desperately tries to protect her sisters from harm.

All's Fair in Love and War - short Pride & Prejudice variation. Mrs. Bennet has weaponized compromise, men live in constant fear of being forced to marry.

5. Do you respond to comments? Yep. Every time.

6. What is the fic you wrote with the angstiest ending? Umm.... I'm not good at writing angst. I don't like characters to suffer for too long.

7. What’s the fic you wrote with the happiest ending? All of them?

8. Do you get hate on fics? Yes, because I dared to write Mr. Darcy marrying Anne Elliot. People get more angry about that for some reason than Elizabeth Bennet marrying Captain Wentworth in the same fic. Someone even told me Darcy would rather "throw himself off of Pemberley" rather than marry anyone other than Elizabeth. (Fic is called One Week Late)

9. Do you write smut? If so, what kind? I have written smut a few times, it's pretty vanilla because I am pretty vanilla. I was reading Victorian erotica when I wrote my longest one, A Little Before Their Marriage (Jane & Bingley fic).

10. Do you write crossovers? What’s the craziest one you’ve written? I constantly write crossovers, my first published novel is a massive crossover, Prideful & Persuaded. One of my fun shorts is Fall on the Sword, where every canonically single woman in Austen's novels decides if they want to try for the recently divorced Mr. Rushworth.

11. Have you ever had a fic stolen? Not as far as I know.

12. Have you ever had a fic translated? No, though someone did translate one of my meta posts from Tumblr. That was cool.

13. Have you ever co-written a fic before? Yes, The Marriage Contest with Branch Cloudsky and two with Amelia Marie Logan, Poor Caroline and Inferior Connections. All Pride & Prejudice fics, all funny. (You need an AO3 account for that one, the other two are on my personal website)

14. What’s your all time favourite ship? Catherine Morland & Henry Tilney. They are the only Austen couple I cannot bear to break up.

15. What’s a WIP you want to finish but doubt you ever will? I am writing a queer retelling of Emma called "Different Ways of Being in Love", where Jane Fairfax and Emma were lovers as teenagers, Jane is bi, Emma is a lesbian, and Mr. Knightley is ace, but I got stuck on the middle part. Someday hopefully!

16. What are your writing strengths? I'm told I write some pretty hilarious farces. I am told I do characterization well, which is my main goal when writing fan fiction. I try to stick as close to canon as possible.

17. What are your writing weaknesses? I don't write enough filler or develop things well enough. I like writing action.

18. Thoughts on writing dialogue in another language in fic? I would possibly try my hand at French, but probably never. I also have a lot of trouble reading accented speech (looking at you Wuthering Heights), so I'd probably never write it.

19. First fandom you wrote for? I am fairly certain I started writing a fix-it fic for Nineteen Eighty-Four after I read it in high school. Not sure I would be able to locate it but it did exist. The first since I started writing again was a sequel to Pride & Prejudice.

20. Favourite fic you’ve written? Probably Unfairly Caught (my other published work) or The Fourth Bennet Sister. I NEEDED to write a Mansfield Park fic because I hate the ending, so it fixed my dissatisfied feelings. My goal is to edit The Fourth Bennet Sister and get it published sometime this year.

@wurzelbertzwerg, @kehlana-wolhamonao3 and @bad-at-names-and-faces

[f1crecs]

Fic Rec List - Football AUs

if your fic is on this list and you don’t want it to be, please let me know and I will remove it immediately, no questions asked. I have contacted most of the authors on this list, but sometimes people fall through the gaps - just pop me a message🤍

have a pairing you want me to do next? please read the faqs and then head to my inbox.

don’t forget to give the authors featured on this list some love in the form of kudos, bookmarks, and comments!

hi, anon. of course! I hope you enjoy some of these. I am British, so I took this to mean ⚽🥅🏆 ... please let me know if you meant the 🏈📣🤸‍♀️ kind.

the majority of these are Charles/Pierre. I like to try and keep my rec lists fairly evenly balanced, but the truth is that most of the football AU's in fandom feature these two. which, I won't lie, does make me giggle a little bit given Charles' um... you know... his...

enjoy, anon!

Carlos/Lando

I remember when I met you just before September by @wolfiemcwolferson | E | 16.3k Carlos meets someone who changes everything for him. This is such a gorgeous, gorgeous story, with some of my favourite Carlos characterisation ever! One thing that this author always gets right is their dialogue - it flows so beautifully, and is so fun to read. A beautiful story.

And the prettiest boy he’s ever seen in his life is wearing a pink shirt - tight across his chest, dancing against George - who is cackling, head thrown back and looser than Carlos has ever seen him look before.

Charles/Pierre

use every fibre of my being just to keep me at bay by @pinkierre | T | 2.2k Pierre and Charles are on the same course at University. This is such a sweet story! It made me giggle out loud. This author has such perfect comedic timing - it's so fun to read! I also loved the Max and Pierre friendship here, and the Max and Charles rivalry.

Pierre was not staring. However, maybe he was looking into Charles’ general direction a bit... much… Charles was on the other side of the library, in a white hoodie that seemed to be two sizes too big, a dark pair of glasses, a black bandana and a massive pair of headphones. He looked properly adorable, and Pierre might just like seeing him being so into his work.

goal of the century by @yukierres | G | 2.3k Charles joins the team, and has a big impact. This is such a sweet story! The characterisation is fantastic. Charles has this magnetism to him that Pierre just can't resist - and I think that's an experience most of us have been through before. 😁 This author's writing makes me really happy. This was fantastic.

'You can see it in his eyes though, the burning desire to get on the pitch. The intensity in which he follows the ball during play, hands gripped on his thighs, his porcelain skin getting whiter and whiter as the clock ticks. Pierre can't stop watching him in the corner of his eye as he plays. He is completely magnetic, almost hypnotic. He can't draw himself away from Charles however much he tries.'

The Light That Shines Behind Your Eyes by @saintdevote | T | 2.6k Pierre's journey through the world of professional football. This is such a gorgeous AU, that still feels very them. The angst here was hard-hitting, but beautifully done. The last few sentences gave me chills - which isn't something I often say! I really loved this!

'Pierre wishes he could find it in himself to be bitter, to lash out and tell Charles to go away. Even if he did, he’s not entirely one of his oldest friends would do such a thing. Instead, he smiles.'

all the kingdom lights shined (just for me and you) by @chaesonghwas | T | 15.8k (wip) Pierre and Charles and their journey to the World Cup. I am loving this so far! It is such a gorgeous story - so beautifully paced. You can feel the friendship and love and respect blooming between them. I am so excited to see where this goes!

'Charles finally meets Pierre on a sunny day on the pitch, the sun shining down on his golden hair and the ball at his feet. Beautiful, he thinks, and with that he seals his destiny.'

nsfw: you're in my head, you're in my blood by @singsweetmelodies & @boxboxbrioche | E | 15.8k Charles and Pierre work on a project together. Disclaimer - as a standard rule, I do not recommend my own fics! However, this was written with a close friend, who I am a very big fan of, and it seems like a disservice to her and to FootballPlayer!Pierre fans everywhere not to include this. All the best parts were written by her, anyways. ;)

Charles knows Pierre Gasly, is the thing. Well. He knows of Pierre Gasly. He knows that he plays for the university’s football team, and aside from football, obviously, what Pierre loves most in the world is sex.

Charles/Sebastian

nsfw: Pale Fire by @lyonsbutton | E | 37.2k Charles meets Sebastian in his final year of University. This story is incredible - so very bittersweet, and achingly nostalgic. If you have been to a British University, you will probably see parts of your experience reflected here. The humour is delicious. I wish I could read this one again for the first time.

'Charles is made acutely aware of the fact that he'd skipped two practices in a row. If his position in the first team weren't so heavily cemented he would've been a little more worried. That, and the fact that he's technically this year's treasurer, which means whatever. Charles can't remember the last time he opened Excel. This is why student democracy fails, he thinks, as he fails to make a beautiful pass from Lando connect into the goal.'

[littlemisspascal]

twenty questions for fic writers

Thank you so much for the tag @kteague ✨💖

1. how many works do you have on AO3? - 55 (but technically, I listed out the chapters of Death and an Angel individually as fics before combining them in one altogether so the number's a little less)

2. what's your total AO3 word count? - 399,907 (again, a bit less cuz of reason above)

3. what fandoms do you write for? - Pedro Pascal mainly. Then the one fic for Melshi from Andor.

4. top five fics by kudos -

The Infinity Cube - multi-Pedro Pascal boys/Female Reader

Establish Ties - chapter of Death and an Angel

Together - chapter of Death and an Angel

Death and an Angel - Din/Female Reader

Mailroom Crush - Javier P/Female Reader

5. do you respond to comments? - Usually yes. Though sometimes life gets hectic and it takes me a bit.

6. what is the fic you wrote with the angstiest ending? - I don't really like unhappy/angsty endings so...hmm...I guess Bitter Ends Turn Sweet in Time cuz it's kind of an open-sorta-hopeful ending?

7. what's the fic you wrote with the happiest ending? - Infinity Cube's pretty dang sappy if I do say so myself. Also Love Triangles has a really sweet ending too.

8. do you get hate on fics? - In the past I got told my fics weren't worth reading because there isn't smut in them. And a few times I've been told they didn't like the endings of certain fics, that it would've been better and more preferable to them if I'd done X, Y or Z. But lately since engagement's been down across the board, the hate's been gone too.

9. do you write smut? - If I do I write it as non-graphically as possible. I call it flowery writing, just pretty words strung together to get a vague picture across. Like in Before. When. After. or Into the Blue

10. craziest crossover: - I haven't written a crossover 🤔 but I mean, my Reader character literally travels the Pedro multiverse in Infinity Cube so maybe that's kinda sorta close?

11. have you ever had a fic stolen? - Not that I know of

12. have you ever had a fic translated? - Nope

13. have you ever co-written a fic before? - Me and @beecastle have teamed up before on a few fics. I'm a lousy writing partner tho. Very slow and picky so bless Bee for putting up with me

14. all time favorite ship? - I have so many otps. GhostSoap is very big for me at the moment tho <3

15. what's a wip you want to finish but doubt you ever will? - The Last Mandalorian comes to mind. I have notes and notes and notes for that fic, but between my brain fighting me and also, like, 1% interest from readers it just doesn't seem like a likely goal to reach.

16. what are your writing strengths? - I don't really have any noteworthy ones

17. what are your writing weaknesses? - Too many to list here

18. thoughts on dialogue in another language? - No problem with it. I do prefer though where somewhere in the fic, either in parentheses afterwards or at the notes at bottom that it says what the meaning is because I'm lazy and don't wanna google it 😅

19. first fandom you wrote in? - Mandalorian

20. favorite fic you've written? - They're all faves in different ways. But...Before. When. After is special to me--not just cuz it's my only non-Pedro fic, but I think there's lines of writing in there that are some of my personal best 😊

Non-pressure tags: @kyberblade @wheresarizona @wardenparker @mermaidgirl30 @morallyinept

[danpuff-ao3]

20 Questions for Fic Writers

Thanks for the tag @lizzy0305! 😘

1. How many works do you have on ao3?

118 altogether. Some old Marvel fics, some meta...107 of them are HP fics.

2. What fandoms do you write for?

Currently only Harry Potter, though I've got some old Marvel ones up.

3. Top five fics by kudos:

Oh hey! It's changed since I last checked...my Top 5 used to be all from the Yes, Daddy series, but a couple of others broke through! Now we have...

Daddy's Boy

Obscene

Daddy Knows Best

Breed Me, Daddy

Contempt

4. What’s your total ao3 word count?

749,120 as of now!

5. Do you respond to comments?

I do my best to! I've had a hard time keeping up with it lately, but my goal is to get to them all eventually...I want all of my commenters to know how very much I appreciate them!!

6. What is the fic you wrote with the angstiest ending?

Haha...haha...huh. Idk. I write too much angst 😭 How am I supposed to pick? I think either A Matter of Time or In My Veins (In My Blood) are probably the worst 2, maybe?

7. What’s the fic you wrote with the happiest ending?

...do I write happy endings? Jk, jk...Oh yeah! The Curse of Anteros for sure has a happy ending. A well earned one at that!

8. Do you get hate on fics?

Sometimes! Collateral Damage got some hate for a certain twist 👀 Most of my dead doves get weird comments, because I don't pull my punches. The odd weird or rude comment scattered elsewhere. I try to handle it with grace, but honestly I'm a big ole sensitive baby so...🥲

9. Do you write smut?

Oh hell yeah 😈

10. Craziest crossover?

No crossovers really, though I want to write a HP + PJO crossover one day...

11. Have you ever had a fic stolen?

Not that I know of, and may it stay that way.

12. Have you ever had a fic translated?

Yep! And I'm super honored by it!

13. Have you ever co-written a fic before?

No, not yet! But I'd like to one day.

14. All time favourite ship?

Snarry 4 life.

15. What’s a wip you want to finish but doubt you ever will?

Probably old ones from my earlier days, but anything I've posted within the past few years I fully intend on finishing. Even if smile with sweet surprise only gets 1 update a year 🤣

16. What are your writing strengths?

idk 🥲 umm...I write emotions pretty well I think. I write angst pretty well especially. I really care about the characters and portraying them as honestly as I can, and as real as I can, accepting all of their humanity, good and bad.

17. What are your writing weaknesses?

Hmm. I don't think I could write fluff to save my life...I've made some attempts but 😂 I struggle a lot with my work for various reasons, none of them easy to put a name to. I do have a hard time balancing the idea of...wanting to leave a lot to implication, but trying not to be so subtle people don't actually have a hope of catching on at all. (Thank god for beta readers.)

18. Thoughts on dialogue in another language?

I like it, but I worry about Google Translate failing me 😭

19. First fandom you wrote in?

Harry Potter!

20. Favourite fic you’ve written?

For sure it's Contempt, and its counterpart Devotion. Truly the story of my soul. All of my feelings about Snarry poured into it. 20+ years of passion and devotion to this pairing! I'm not sure I could love anything more or be prouder of anything more. (Though I do think The Curse of Anteros is my best work, but Contempt/Devotion will always have my heart!)

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[compacflt]

my apologies if this is too simple or juvenile or personal a question but HOW did you become such a proficient writer? and do you have any tips or pointers to keep in mind? i know you must do a lot of reading and a lot of writing, but your skill is just incredible to me. your prose!! your cadence!! when we get around to talking about it is genuinely one of the best things i've ever read and i'd eat it if i could!!!

this ask was so sweet thank you!! rly made my day when i needed a boost. Hope you don’t mind i took a couple days to think about it cause no one’s ever asked me for writing advice before

idk how i became a “proficient” writer bc I really don’t write that much. something about my fic gave me brainworms and i went into overdrive but that’s…not my usual MO. which is why it’s weird for me too. admittedly i am studying english/creative writing as my second major at uni, but i haven’t learned anything in any of my classes you couldn’t learn by just reading and writing on your own. honestly i should’ve stuck with my IR major instead, i find structured cw classes a complete waste of time. but here are some little tips i thought of that would’ve helped ME:

This is more a “do as I say not as I do” because I’m really bad at habits like this, but keep a diary. You can write about the big events (went to the store, did homework, got laid etc.) but that’s boring—focus on the details (watched someone at west side market throw a glass bottle of olives at a rat, broke a pen and permanently stained my dorm desk and won’t get my deposit back which pissed me off because I move out in a week, this guy’s breath smelled like lemon pledge and it made me wonder if he drank window cleaner before kissing me etc.). Real life is really interesting! How can you write about interesting real life in an interesting way? It’s a good way to practice. You don’t have to do a big reflection at the end of the day or anything. It’s okay to jot down something you saw & then immediately forget about it. It’s the act of figuring out how to translate life into words that’s important

If you type, learn how to type FAST. This is just my experience, but I think typing faster makes your cadence, clause length, dialogue, IDEAS flow better/more naturally. We think in words/sentences, not letters.

This is a super lame tip that’ll make you roll your eyes, but read poetry. Poetry is all about how words/ideas/images sound and interact with each other. Don’t get hung up on one poet—im not really recommending any for precisely this reason—read poetry you love (for me, Ada Limón, Jack Kerouac, Frank O’Hara, ghazals etc) AND read poetry you hate (for me, Rupi Kaur, Emily Dickinson, Whitman, etc)! Read all genres you can get your hands on. (I think there are like “great poetry anthologies” you can find for free online if u don’t know where to start. Also you can’t go wrong with subscribing to/reading a variety magazine like the NYer. It’s pretentious but it exposes you to all kinds of weird topics, ways of writing about them, etc.) Figure out how certain combinations of words and punctuations make you FEEL, and why, and why the writer chose (or not) to make you feel that way. Figure out which literary sounds you like and which ones you don’t. For me, i figured out that I REALLY like alliteration, comma splices, zeugmas, the rule of three, and

“he’s [verb]ing again… yeah compacflt’s characters are [verb]ing again… big shocker”

If you have an idea for a piece, figure out what it is you really want to get out of it—to say something? to experiment with a different style? to see your fav characters do something? to have fun?—and then figure out how, on a technical level, you should write to match that goal (this is where the poetry training comes in handy). If you’re just writing to have fun, don’t listen to any writing advice (incl. mine), because most of it is bullshit and over-generalized and will make you feel bad about yourself. Just take the advice that you think will work for what YOURE trying to write.

But if you’re writing to explore some political idea, then you should think about HOW to best write about that idea. What would be a convincing story/allegory/scene to engage with this idea vs. not convincing. I talk on this blog all the time about how disappointed I am that my very-adult-grown-up attempt to deal with the dynamic of “immovable internalized homophobia vs unstoppable falling in love anyway” is rendered a little childish/immature by some pretty unconvincing plot points like the characters buying a house together—I really should have considered how that plot point would interact with the characterizations I’d built already (hint: poorly). You can think of writing as kind of a military structure if that helps—you have strategy on the overarching campaign (plot/character growth/allegory/theme) level, the battle (scene that advances the above) level, and the tactical (sentence-level construction/syntax/wording) level. They all have to work together. If a scene is failing to properly engage with the idea you’re trying to convey, you’re losing a battle that will weaken the overarching campaign. Same thing if you choose a weird word in a sentence/write in a style or tone that’s weirdly out of place with your idea—it makes your engagement with the theme/idea less convincing. just try to be purposeful and consider your strategy on all levels of your work as you’re writing it!! At the very least it’ll make editing easier lol.

But then again when I read my own writing from just a couple months ago I cringe out of my skin, so like—just also accept that it’s a process and we’re all just making it up as we go along. Be proud of being embarrassed of your old work, because it means you’re growing. Own that shit. When I finished writing WWGATTAI i thought it was the best thing I’d ever written, and maybe it was. But since the day I finished working on it, it’s the worst thing I’ve written since then. That’s a great feeling. Not to be like writing grindset obviously bc it’s supposed to be fun—but if what you want is to get better at writing, the strategy is to WRITE a whole bunch of shit, and then own your embarrassment about how much you’ve grown since you started. And know you’re still always growing and learning. there should never be any “goals” where skills are concerned 👍🏽

[laurfilijames]

Do you have a favourite Charlie character to write for?

Do you get ideas and have to decide what character to write it for?

Ohhhh anon thank you for sending these lovely questions!! I appreciate it so much and it really made me think 💗

The answer to the first question is yes… though it didn't come easily.

Short answer is Pete Dunham.

Long answer to follow ⬇️

Why Pete?

I fell in love with this character the first time I watched Green Street Hooligans and have since made it my life goal to fix the ending and give Pete a wonderful life.

This character is so charismatic. Everyone loves him (take a hike Shannon). His mates are fiercely loyal to him (as is he to them), his brother-in-law Matt seemed to worship the ground he walked on quickly after meeting him, and I just know that he is the favourite teacher to all of his students.

Okay now as to why I love writing for him.

He's pure joy. He's fun and funny and doesn't take things too seriously aside from the dealings of his firm. Whenever I write for him, I very easily get sucked into that world and find it beyond enjoyable to not only write scenes between him and reader falling in love, but also between him and his mates/fellow firm members. I have never been big on dialogue in my fics and yet with my series Like My Dreams, I've written the most dialogue I ever have and it seems to come effortlessly which is a fun surprise. I can hear his voice whenever I'm working on scenes and clearly imagine his expressions and mannerisms, so I reckon this helps make it all the more enjoyable to write for him.

I also feel like he has so much depth to his character and I love further exploring the mix of the cocky Cockney Hammer who beats the piss out of people and the sweet, caring man who loves his family, mates and job. He is such an underrated character in my opinion which probably also adds to my appeal to him and wanting to do justice to the things that happened canonically in the film.

All in all, writing for Pete is fun. He's a cheeky hooligan who makes me swoon without fail 🥰

I do love writing for all of the ones I have already though, but for me Pete just feels like home.

To the second question!

I don't think I've ever had an idea where I've had to choose between characters to assign it.

My ideas usually come with the character already in mind, though many of them could easily suit some of his other characters as a lot of them have similarities where it could work as well. It's usually “I want x to happen with y character” and that's that! (the x being a specific smutty thing I want to write 🤣)

Thank you so much again for sending this ask!! I truly am grateful for it and love answering questions like these! 💗

[stepswowdsen]

【KagePro】 KuroEne AU: Art Ideas 🖤💙

Made this list of KuroEne art ideas so I wouldn't forget. I find it easier to remember my art ideas if I write them down, so here you go ^^

I wrote a summary compilation of most of my art ideas for them since April. I haven't gotten the chance to draw a lot of these yet, but I want to eventually...

I marked KuroEne AU scenarios that I wrote as apart of my KuroEne AU. The others are art ideas

HaruTaka and KonoEne are mentioned in this, but it's mainly about my KuroEne AU

(CW: Sexually suggestive mentions for a few of these)

KuroEne AU (Canon-verse)

KuroEne AU: Mary and Ene team up against Kuroha

One of my biggest KuroEne AU Routes is a Route where Kuroha/Saeru possesses Konoha's body before the others can meet him, pretends to be an Eye Ability User (because he's in possession of Awakening Eyes), and joins the Mekakushi Dan.

He pretends to be everyone's friend while working towards his goals to kill everyone at the end, and have Mary rewind the world for the sake of his own immortality.

After killing off the rest of the MekaDan members on August 15th, Mary and Ene are the only ones left at the end, and decide to team up against him and sneak into his base (underground laboratory) to have their final confrontation with him.

Ene asks Kuroha for answers on everything she's wanted to know (his true motives to make Mary rewind the world, why he's doing all of this, why he played the game with her and made her body, etc.)

Since it's the end (grand finale), Kuroha sates her curiosity and answers her questions, and tells her his motives.

I think my KuroEne AU name, "Last Dance at World's End" is fitting. They'll give into their longing/yearning and passion for each other, one last time, before the world resets, to provide some form of closure for them.

There’s SO many scenes from my KuroEne AU that I wanna draw… I wrote them down as dialogue scripts so they’re still WIPs for now. I haven't gotten the chance to post the dialogue scripts for this Route yet. Just wait until I get the chance to draw some of them 🖤💙

KuroEne AU: Kuroha spites Shintaro and Seto for trying to use Stealing Eyes on him

KuroEne AU Route where Kuroha pretends to join the Mekakushi Dan.

Shintaro gets suspicious of Kuroha and asks Seto to use Stealing Eyes to read his thoughts to find out what he's really up to.

Kuroha senses them approach him (by sniffing their scents in the air) and spites them by thinking about his intimacy with Ene instead

(Or if he's feeling nice, he can just think about making improvements to Ene's android body's battery)

KuroEne x Higanbana: Sweet Dreams 💐🖤❤️

Kuroha: Have a sweet dream.

Kuroha: I'll see you in the next Route.

クロハ：良い夢を

クロハ：次の「ルート」でまた会いしましょう

Kuroha lies next to Ene on a bed of black and red higanbana.

I imagined the art concept of Kuroha lying next to Ene in a bed of Higanbana.

This flower is also known as Cluster Amaryllis, Red Magic Lily, and also referred to as the Corpse Flower, Hell Flower, and Flower of Death.

Ene has her eyes closed and her arms folded (similar to how Ayano is posed like a corpse in the Additional Memory MV), while Kuroha has a smiling expression (^-^) on his face.

Also maybe he's covered in the blood (of the Mekakushi Dan members) and has it on his hands and face

I wanted to reference the usage of “The next” (次の, Tsugi no) in Outer Science's lyrics, and the scene where Saeru (metaphorically) stands on top of the dead bodies of all the Mekakushi Dan members from previous Routes (as a visual representation), with a snake-eye pupil above him.

“The next, next time this comes around… I’ll still sneer!”

Fade to Black

Kuroha: Do you still love me?

クロハ：まだ…俺のことを愛しているのか？

Kuroha holds Ene with a smirk while the composition is half split with Konoha's body half turning to Kuroha (Black Konoha) on one side, and the half is still Konoha's sleeves (Hasn't turned yet)

KuroEne hold higanbana 🖤❤️💐

KuroEne hold the same sets of higanbana together, while black/red auras drips over their hands.

(Similar to the Kuroha art drawn by Sidu in Kagerou Daze VII where he’s depicted with a black aura that looks similar to the shape of higanbana)

KuroEne: Flower Symbolisms 🖤💙💐

I'm in the process of writing a post on flowers I assigned to KuroEne based on their Flower Symbolisms, specifically their Hanakotoba meanings.

Black Magic Petunia and Himalayan Blue Poppy are Feila's picks for KuroEne 💙🖤

Black Veil

Kuroha drapes a translucent black bridal veil over him and Ene with a smirk. One hand is draping it over them, and the other is caressing her face gently…

Maid Kuroha and Ene 🧹

Kuroha wears a black and white maid outfit, black thigh highs, and spiked black high heels, while he has a bloody mop (maybe it's just red paint instead???) and slips a finger into Ene's thigh highs while he kisses her cheek. Ene's entire face gets all red and she just goes like "WORST MAID EVER!!!" (˶˃~˂˶)

Kuroha teases Ene using Awakening Eyes 🐍

(CW: Sexually suggestive mentions)

Kuroha teases Ene by using Awakening Eyes to have a forked snake's tongue. He presses the tip of his finger to her lips teasingly, then trails a hand up her legs while asking her where she wants it.

Kuroha: Now... Where do you want it? Here?

Kuroha: Or here?

Ene: Anywhere is fine...

クロハ：さぁ～て、どこがいいだろうなぁ～？

クロハ：ここ？それとも…ここ？

エネ：どこでもいいよ…

Kuroha/Saeru Manga Route 2 (MR2) Redesign

Something something, I feel like doing a Kuroha/Saeru MR2 (Manga Route 2) redesign with more influence from Azami's clothes as well as traditional clothes (including Vietnamese and Chinese traditional clothes)

Cuz I fuck with everything on this design EXCEPT for the crop top.

I love the black snake scales on his face, the cute little tufts of hair and black horns, the braid in the back that looks like a scorpion's tail like Judar's, red sclera and red gradient limbs, and the white sash with bloodstains on it.

Also the bottom part of the design is SO confusing to me.

I love how Sayuki draws his MR2 design...

But it looks so boring in the Kagerou Daze manga by Mahiro cuz I'm not a fan of the art style and how undynamic the art is

I really wanna see Sidu draw it since she designed that form

KuroEne as Cats 🐈‍⬛🐈🖤💙

Kuroha

Black Smoke Norwegian Forest Cat or Black Smoke Maine Coon

I imagine him to be a black cat with a gray undercoat and gold eyes.

Black smoke is the name of the coat colour. These cats have a silver undercoat

Black smoke kitties have such a pretty silver undercoat~ Looks so pretty!

Ene

Lilac Tabby Birman or a White Ragdoll

1st Pic: Lilac Tabby Birman 2nd Pic: White Ragdoll

Ene is bunny themed, but if I had to pick a cat for her with a realistic coat colour, it'd be either a Birman or a Ragdoll

I also considered cats with a blue gray fur coat, but I went with these because of the distinctive blue eyes.

But, if I wasn't going for a realistic coat colour, I'd just make her coat light blue, since you can take creative liberties in fanarts.

I made Kuroha a black smoke cat cuz I wanna differentiate my BW themed meow meow mf faves from each other. They're all black cat themed 🐈‍⬛

Basically, I wanted to differentiate him from cat Judar (Magi) lol. Kuronyan would be a black smoke kitty and Junyan would be a black cat 🐈‍⬛

I want him to have pointy ears like this to imitate his MR2 form's small black horns...

They'd look great in aesthetics~ Black and white (or blue) cat~ Kuronyan and Ene-nyan~ 🐈‍⬛🐈🖤💙

9/6 x Daze - HaruTaka, KonoEne, KuroEne

I imagined Daze themed arts of HaruTaka, KonoEne, and KuroEne with them wearing their Daze outfits and reaching out for each other, mimicking each other like a mirror

HaruTaka reaches for each other

It'd be super angsty if, even when Ene reaches for him, Konoha looks confused and doesn't understand why

And if Kuroha's the only one trying to reach for Ene (or vice versa)

Though I think what I mentioned works well for visual contrast reasons

HaruTaka: Haruka and Takane reach for each other (I want to see you 💛💙)

KonoEne: Ene reaches for Konoha (Only one of us truly yearns 💙)

KuroEne: Kuroha reaches for Ene (A selfish, twisted, obsessive love 🖤)

I would draw HaruTaka in KonoEne's silhouettes, just like in the daze MV

I don't see KonoEne as inherently unrequited, but I prefer KuroEne and HaruTaka over KonoEne, personally. They match better and work better together as ship dynamics (and are just more interesting to me)

Though for sure HaruTaka and KonoEne better fit KagePro's canon context and theme-ing. But I always go for what's more interesting to me.

Haruka can match Takane's intensity, and Kuroha can match Ene's intensity. Haruka is the perfect counter to Takane, and Kuroha is the perfect counter to Ene.

I feel like Haruka and Kuroha can actually react better and respond to Takane and Ene (respectively) well and can actually meet her level of intensity imo.

Konoha can't really match Takane and Ene's intensity (imo), at least, not as well as the other two.

I feel like Ene would be disappointed at being seen as only just a friend, and non-exclusive affection, even if he (Konoha) feels something more.

So when Saeru comes into the picture to tempt her into playing the "game" with him, he asks her, "Don't you want someone that can satisfy you better?"

Saeru can meet Ene's competitiveness and be able to make her confront her more honest feelings (since she has an avoidance tendency).

Saeru can give her anything she wants, including the affection she craves. It just comes at the ultimate cost.

KuroEne play with a Chibi version of their S/O

Kuroha plays with a chibi Ene, and Ene plays with a chibi Kuroha.

Skrunkly...

This reminds me I had an art concept in my head for my ships like "Chara plays with a Chibi-fied/baby-fied/baby-turned/skrunkly version of their S/O"

So like normal Konoha/Kuroha plays with a chibi Ene

And then the reverse would be Ene plays with a chibi Konoha/Kuroha

Chibi Saeru would still be a menace to deal with

Chaotic gremlin

"I cause problems on purpose" guy

Kuroha picks chibi Ene up by her jacket and plays with her twintails by twirling them.

This guy is an ass so he'd make teasing comments like "The big bad snake who eats the little bunny~" while jokingly putting her near his mouth as if trying to eat her. Or flicking her face with his snake tongue

Snakes like to flick their owners with their tongues!

Apparently, they do it to inspect information about their surroundings through smell. They can wrap around their owners and massage them gently and poke their tongues to taste the owner affectionately.

Konoha tries to nom Ene out of curiosity, but Kuroha does it teasingly

There's a phenomena called "Cat Aggression" where basically some peoples' reactions to seeing cute things is to try and cuddle or bite on it playfully

Which would be present in my Meow meows~

KuroEne Dancing in a Ballroom

I imagined KuroEne dancing in a ballroom in formal outfits, like KuroEne's Design Poll outfits

I also imagined KuroEne with Kuroha’s Design Poll outfit and Ene’s Seek at Mekakucity outfit

KuroEne wearing Wedding Kimono

Kuroha can wear the traditional formal men's kimono, Daiichi reiso (第一礼装)

Ene can wear iro-uchikake (色打掛, "Colourful wedding kimono"), a type of wedding kimono.

They can carry Wagasa (和傘, "Oil paper umbrellas") with them!

Link: (X)

Copy pasting from my old rambles.

Used to use it as my reblog/ramble blog, but moved over here.

Meowmeowjestie is a good name tho... I should make use of it in some way

KuroEne wearing Việt Phục

KuroEne in Vietnam wearing Việt Phục (Vietnamese traditional clothes)

Ene would wear this kind of blue Áo Tấc (Ceremonial dress)

Not the exact colours, but something like this

Link: (X)

My skrunklies going on a vacation in my home country is peak comfort~ I'd love to see them wear Việt Phục while in Vietnam's historical sights and gorgeous landscapes

Link: (X)

KuroEne wearing Hanfu

I haven't picked hanfu for them yet, but I'd imagine Kuroha would wear black hanfu (with accent colours like silver, white, gold, red)

Ene would wear blue hanfu (with accent colours like white and black)

It'd be cool if he wore pibo (披帛), translucent white hanfu scarves. It'd be reminiscient to his MR2 design.

I want it to flow around him and have an exaggerated shape language/silhouette :)

I'm planning to draw that in my Saeru MR2 redesign (cuz I don't feel like drawing the top and bottom part of the canon outfit, so I'm just gonna draw what I want)

KuroEne AU: Kuroha sings a lullaby to Ene

Kuroha sings a lullaby to Ene whispers into her headphones (ears) while lying in bed next to her and spoons her. Ene feels her heart beat skyrocket with him being so close to her.

Haruka, Konoha, and Kuroha are all voiced by Mamoru Miyano :) He has a soft soothing voice.

...

Kuroha and Ene sleep in the same bed next to each other, tucked underneath the blankets, and Ene feels her heart beat skyrocket with him being so close to her. I imagined that Kuroha spoons Ene and sings into her headphones (ears)

Kuroha, aware of her growing inner turmoil and embarrassment and conflicted feelings for him, offers to sing her a lullaby to help calm her down, with a smug, knowing grin on his face. He comments that singing a lullaby could help her relax and soothe her heart.

Kuroha tells her that since he is the embodiment of "Knowledge," and his accumulation of knowledge, he knows most of the lullabies that humans use to sing their loved ones to sleep. He knows that Ene doesn't require sleep due to the nature of her Eye Ability, Opening Eyes, but he can help calm her down.

Kuroha starts humming a lullaby into her headphones (ears), with his lips hovering right over her headphones, and Ene gets flustered at him being so close.

She thinks to herself how his voice sounds so much like Haruka/Konoha's, and how soft and gentle it sounds. His face looks so much like theirs too, because of the body he's using.

While he sings to her, Ene just feels her heart pounding in her chest and the heat rising to her cheeks even more. And then she thinks to herself, "Stupid, stupid Saeru!!! This isn't helping!!! This is just making things worse!!!"

Haruka, Konoha, and Kuroha, are all different characters but voiced by the same voice actor, Mamoru Miyano, so they have the same voice.

Kuroha/Saeru's voice is really pretty sounding~ Thank you Miyano~ Wished I could hear more of it… Miyano did a great job voicing all 3 of them. Perfect VA for them!

Shintaro reacts to KuroEne's relationship

Shintaro reacting to KuroEne's relationship would be so funny to imagine. I have more to say about this, but dude would feel like a brick dropped on him

KuroEne AU: Kuroha takes Ene to the Amusement Park

Kuroha lets Ene take him with her to all the attractions, and notices she’s having a lot of fun. He carries her on his back as they walk around. Kuroha wins prizes (plushies) for her at a dart throwing booth and hits all targets flawlessly.

...

Ene wants to go to the Amusement Park with Kuroha, so he agrees to take her and she gets excited when he says yes. While there, he lets Ene take him to all the attractions she wants to visit (mini boat ride, roller coasters), and he carries her on his back too while walking around

Ene gets flustered when she thinks about how it's just the two of them here, wondering if it's a date. Saeru can judge what she's thinking by reading her reactions.

He wins prizes for her at a throwing darts booth stand, and Ene wants him to win prizes for her. Ene gets excited when he wins them all for her, and carries home plushies for her.

He makes a teasing quip on how needy and spoiled she's acting and Ene pouts at him.

Written about in more detail here

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Kuroha wants a present from Santa Ene

Kuroha wants a present, and Ene tells him that naughty guys like him get COAL for Christmas. Kuroha leans in to kiss her on the cheek as thanks for her hard work as a Santa.

Ene: It's Christmas!!! Which means it's time for presents!!!

Kuroha: Where's my present, hm?

Ene: Put the gun away, tough guy, it's CHRISTMAS!!!

Kuroha: Oh? This one is just a toy gun, though. (<- Is he lying or telling the truth? Who knows!!!)

Ene: Bad naughty guys like you just get COAL!!! BLEH!!! NO PRESENTS FOR YOU!!! (//>~<//) (:P)

Kuroha knows how to appeal to Ene's need for praise and attention so he just "butters her up" - showers her with praise and compliments and flattery, and Ene responds like, "Yeah, yeah, yeah!!! Call me cute!!! Say I'm the cutest Santa in the whole world~ And MAYBE I'll think about giving you your present~" And pouts and crosses her arms at him in Ene's classic embarrassed tsundere fashion.

It would be cute if he kisses her (like on the cheek or the lips), and then says, "Thank you for your hard work this year, Santa~" And Ene just explodes (//O//O//) /lh

KuroEne make snow sculptures together

Kuroha makes a giant snake snow sculpture, and Kuroha helps Ene make a giant chibi version of herself

KuroEne x Vocaloid Songs

Magnet by minato 🦋

Strawberry by Kashii Moimi 🍓

Bougainvillea by Kashii Moimi 💐

Sweet Devil by Hachioji-P 💗

Cinderella by DECO*27 👠

Made a list of possible art ideas for the future. This isn't the whole list, but these are some of the main ones I was thinking of

I would love to create Tegaki (Fan-animatic) MVs for my faves in the future, but atm I'm gonna focus more on art and short comic ideas since they're much more do-able.

Kashii Moimi songs are so Love/Hate core so they work great for KuroEne. And Magnet comps would be fun too since they already wear headphones

KuroEne AUs (Fanon-verse)

Halloween AU: Vampire Kuroha and Witch Ene 🦇🪄

Ene as a witch that can turn into a cat. Heehee

He wants his fave treat...

Halloween KuroEne in a Route where Kuroha pretends to be apart of the MekaDan would be so funny

I wrote a scenario on this, but this post is getting too long so I'll leave it for now

He'd get kicks scaring the other members at the Haunted House

So just imagine MekaDan at the Amusement Park's Haunted House in MR1 but Kuroha is there

Fate AU: Master/Servant AU KuroEne 🃏👑

Ene is a Master (Magus) and Kuroha/Saeru is an Alter Ego-class Servant.

TWEWY AU: KuroEne 💀

TWEWY AU with Kuroha/Saeru as a Reaper and Ene as a Player in the Reaper's Game

I was unsure of whether to make Saeru an Officer-rank Reaper, or the Conductor (head of the Reapers)

I'll decide eventually 🤔

Pokemon AU: KuroEne & KonoEne 💧⚡🍃

Kuroha: Dark and Poison

Ene: Water and Electric

Konoha: Normal, Fighting, and Grass

I think their main types would mainly be these, but they can also have others too. I mainly picked based on aesthetics and what would fit them. Picked these off the top of my head

I was trying to choose serpent-like Pokemon 🐍

Umbreon and Shiny Rayquaza have perfect Kuroha colours tbh. Black yellow and red

Rotom is perfect for Ene. It's cheeky and mischievous, and can enter and control appliances (just like her)

Glaceon has blue twintails and blue eyes.

Konoha's name means "Leaves" so I thought Grass types would be fitting.

Bewear would be funny with Konoha's superhuman strength

KuroEne AUs (Fanon-verse)

I mainly think about my canon-verse AUs the most cuz I'm just way more interested in canon-verse KuroEne.

I favour ships that are intense and dangerous, with compelling conflict and tension

These kinds of lighthearted fanon AUs don't provide me that kind of intensity... They're still cute for me to think about on the side, though

These are more self-explanatory

Royalty AU

Royal Kuroha x Royal Ene

Imagine them ballroom dancing...

Vampire Prince Kuroha x Princess Ene

All of my meow meow mf faves are Vampires so I'm biased

Big Bad Wolf Kuroha x Little Red Riding Hood Ene

Ene in a cute hoodie... WAHOO

[jamesunderwater]

20 Qᴜᴇꜱᴛɪᴏɴꜱ ꜰᴏʀ ꜰɪᴄ ᴡʀɪᴛᴇʀꜱ

Thanks for tagging me!! @gracelesslady23 @annabtg @kay-elle-cee this was very sweet to get to do.

Ao3 Username: itsjamespotter

1. How many works do you have on A03?

31, wow! How wild, that feels like a lot.

2. What’s your total Ao3 word count?

162k!

3. What fandoms do you write for?

HP

4. What are your top five fics by kudos?

Show and Tell (3k, wolfstar smut)

Dead To Me (91k, wip lily evans angst)

Tall Dark and Glasses (3k, jily fluff)

"you have no idea how long i've been wanting to do that" (1k, prongsfoot smut)

Bring Your Kid to Work Day(s never end when your godfather is Sirius Black) (2k, good godfather sirius black fluff)

5. Do you respond to comments?

I try to, or at least have the goal to, but admittedly I'm very bad at it. (not to use it as an excuse but my adhd is fully to blame.) I plan to go back and catch up on all of them soon & have a dream of being much better about it, though. I do intentionally make sure I eventually respond to the ones for my WIPs, at least.

6. What is the fic you wrote with the angstiest ending?

well, since dead to me hasn't ended yet (kidding kidding kidding kidding!!!) lmao I really thought I was gonna have a hard time finding a fic with an unhappy ending but I evidently forgot who I am. I dunno how to choose between: 1. i don't even know where you end and i begin (500 words, canon prongsfoot....you get it) 2. Promises to Keep (1k words, dorlene with canon ending....you get it)

7. What’s the fic you wrote with the happiest ending?

Okay listen, do I technically have a fic that mentions living happily ever after in the last line? Yes. Am I choosing that fic? No. I'm choosing Happy Holidays, You Filthy Potters, because 1. smut, 2. sassy young Harry, and best of all, 3. sassy good godfather sirius black 😉

8. Do you get hate on fics?

I've gotten a couple of comments about Lily in Dead To Me but I've decided it's not my problem if people don't have critical analysis skills 💀

9. Do you write smut? If so, what kind?

I do! I write smut for a number of different ships and plan on doing others! Uhhh, what kind? the fact that I don't really know what that means probably means it's pretty vanilla 😆 there's a lot of going down on people 🤐

10. Do you write crossovers? What’s the craziest one you’ve written?

Haha, no, but if I did I'd probably do PJO/HP

11. Have you ever had a fic stolen?

Not to my knowledge. that would be so heartbreaking.

12. Have you ever had a fic translated?

No, but that's SO cool that people offer to do that for some fics!!!

13. Have you ever co-written a fic before?

I have!! @charmsandtealeaves and I co-wrote a fic for a jilychallenge last year, before we were even friends! It was my first time co-writing a fic, which was very cool and different, but also didn't feel that foreign to me -- I think because I've spent a lot more years doing para RP than I have writing fics. It was fun to kind of riff off another writer in a different way. I would definitely do it again!

14. What’s your all time favorite ship?

Okay, this is kind of tough because I only recently got into Prongsfoot, and they are the definition of soulmates... But because I ultimately see Sirius as more of an ace/aro character, Jily wins the place of favorite ship in my heart. <3

15. What’s a WIP you want to finish but doubt you ever will?

Well, I really only have two WIPs posted on AO3: Dead To Me and Just This Once, and I have all of DTM outlined and plan to finish it by fall. Just This Once might be a while, but I also have a plan for it and would like to finish it at some point... But I guess there's a chance I won't finish it -- I do have a lot of other multi-chaps I am going to be starting soon.

16. What are your writing strengths?

Hm. I like to think I'm good at getting into the minds of my characters, really thinking through their motivations and emotions and then expressing those to the reader. I also think I'm fairly good at dialogue. I really like writing banter so I hope others think I'm good at it, haha. And based on what I've been told, my smut isn't half bad 😆

17. What are your writing weaknesses?

Oh, definitely writing descriptions of any kind. I never remember to describe the scene and when I do, I think it feels clunky. I'm not great at writing in a more direct way, either; I struggle to express a character's emotions without getting a bit flowery with it. Just generally, I think my writing could be tighter, you know? I'm sure I'll realize other things I need to work on as I write more long fics, too.

18. Thoughts on writing dialogue in another language in fic?

Ah, haven't done it yet, so don't have any thoughts to share.

19. First fandom you wrote for?

HP -- Jily on the Neopets forums... never 4get <3

20. Favourite fic you’ve written?

If we're talking finished works, I'd have to say Tall Dark and Glasses, which I wrote for the masquerade event for Jilytober last year. To me, that fic has a certain je ne sais quois that is hard to replicate. But unfinished? Dead To Me, hands down, and once it's finished it will be very hard to ever top it. It's imperfect and there are a lot of edits I'd make if I were to go back through and polish it up, but it's the first multi chap fic I've ever written, and beyond just feeling immensely proud of that, the story itself and how I'm writing it is one of the most heartfelt and meaningful things I'll ever write in my life.

these were such a pleasure to respond to, thanks again for the tags! <3 I'm tagging: @goldenbi @abihastastybeans & @nodirectionhome-ao3

[heich0e]

liv…. i eat up your dialogue EVERY TIME like a crazy person.. if you post smth for someone i dont go here for, i read it just because 🤍 i 🤍 love 🤍 your 🤍 writing 🤍 but that being said……. i must know the details of the canonverse levi wip you posted. what did erwin do! what was levi and r’s relationship! how!!!!

if you're genuinely interested, i really don't mind telling u what the plot is because i will quite literally never post it. it was the first fic i ever wrote for any anime, and i hadn't even gotten very far into the actual show at the point of writing—so while some aspects are (tenuously) canon-compliant, there are also many very clear ways in which it is not.

so, to reduce that terrible levi x reader fic (it's so bad and i MEAN that!!) down to its barest bones, start to finish:

[WARNING: THERE IS AN ENTIRE FIC SUMMARIZED UNDER THIS READ MORE AND IT IS MULTIPLE THOUSANDS OF WORDS LONG. THEMES INCLUDE: DUBCON, CANON CHARACTER DEATH, VAGUELY MISOGYNISTIC TONES, AND EVERY SINGLE CRINGE-Y FANFIC CLICHE U CAN IMAGINE. BYE.]

at the point where the fic opens, reader is a young, low-ranking soldier in the survey corps on her way to mitras with levi and erwin to attend a small gala being hosted by a very wealthy family that they're petitioning (effectively wooing) to provide funding for the corps

the reason reader is asked to come along is because she comes from a very good family in mitras and is connected to the "high society" folk—though never explicitly stated, erwin very much intends to use her and her social graces as a sort of poster child and mouthpiece for the corps, in hopes that she can charm ppl and help them gain favour to accomplish their goal

all things considered, reader was very privileged growing up and had as comfortable/luxurious of a life as anyone (at least anyone in paradis) could possibly hope to have. her family is aristocracy/noble and comes from a long line of "wealth." her father is a doctor who consults with the military in a high ranking capacity—though he's never actively been a soldier, and it's largely just a cushy job where he doesn't do much actual grunt work, just gets consulted on things and sits on boards or whatever

reader graduated from school and enlisted in the military when she came of age—to the shock and horror of her family (especially her mother) and their noble peers. but she felt an impetus to do something with her life that wasn't just sit around docilely and look pretty until eventually her father handed her over to an advantageous husband and she went from daughter to wife and surely then eventually mother—while never actually having any agency or choice for herself

because reader was well-educated from childhood, she did well academically at the cadet academy, and because she grew up in a comfortable home she is physically very competent as well (though truthfully her skill as a soldier is often very OP and cringey to read back now... but it was my first fic! sue me!)

levi and reader don't interact much in the corps (as he's not her squad leader) but when they do they're constantly at odds—he thinks less of her as a result of her silver spoon upbringing, and while she doesn't dislike him, per se, she definitely resents his treatment of her

on the trip to mitras (alongside a very uncomfortable homecoming to her estranged family's home with two men who are effectively her bosses) they attend the gala/banquet and it's revealed that the family hosting it is the most wealthy in mitras (save for the royal family, though they're sort of unofficially considered the second-in-command) who reader is very familiar with—they have a son her age, and a few daughters slightly younger, who she grew up close to (i made all these characters up btw.... first fic liv was rly going wild)

the son from this family was always sort of sweet on reader growing up, and they have a vaguely romantic history in their teens (before reader enlisted.) reader very quickly surmises that she was brought along (or at the very least is able) to possibly sway the son in their favour, as the eldest and heir to this family's fortune, who would in turn convince the father to support the corps

the son (his name is adam btw. if anyone cares? lmao) is actually very sweet, and earnestly cares for her. he's just blinded by his own affluence to a lot of realities—like most extremely wealthy people are

reader is a good soldier and she's cunning, and she knows that what she's doing is ethically/morally questionable but in the interest of the greater good she goes along with some flirtation/manipulation for the cause

the story progresses and reader continues her work in the military, but the heir from this family is clearly infatuated with her and he (and his father/family by extension) begin implicating themselves more heavily with the military as an excuse to see her/spend time with her/etc though of course it's all under the guise of official business

so it's like the life she fled is bleeding into the one she built for herself, and it's stark juxtaposition becomes very clear in those instances where they overlap and she's forced to juggle them both

she just wants to be a soldier and do good. erwin is (in so many words) pressuring her to do her part and keep up the charade. levi is watching this all unfold from the wings and starts to feel some genuine sympathy for her

lots of very dramatic things happen, yadda yadda yadda. levi grows less hostile over time, and reader becomes closer to him. she's always respected him and that grows into something mutual. there's a lot of unspoken tension brewing between them

it's revealed that reader threw her cadet exam results so that she wouldn't be in the top of her class, and therefore couldn't become an MP and had to join either the garrison or the scouts. she did it intentionally (erwin knew and used this to his advantage) so that her family wouldn't be able to force her back to mitras. when levi realizes what erwin did/knew and how he used it to his own advantage it really upsets him, because he's basically pimping reader out for the betterment of the survey corps. this is the first time you really see levi get angry about the way she's being used (and you can infer in this moment that he maybe cares about her a bit)

more dramatic stuff happens!

the story culminates in the reveal that the son is planning to ask for reader's hand in marriage. her own family has already agreed. part of the financial agreement the powerful family has made with the survey corps is that reader will effectively be retired once she marries (and transferred to a clerical role with the MPs. desk work, basically. fake work, for all intents and purposes, because the position was made up just for her)

reader goes to erwin, understandably extremely distraught when she finds out, and begs him to stop it from happening. she doesn't really care about getting married, but she doesn't want to leave the scouts. he effectively (though not explicitly/in these particular words) implies that maybe if she fucks her "fiance" he'll be more open to compromise and let her stay in the corps

she does it, but unsurprisingly loverboy is not about to let the woman he's obsessed with (who he has now officially boned lmao) go back to risking her life every day in the military, and it's almost immediately revealed that her plan didn't work at all

(erwin pretty much knew the whole time it wasn't going to work. bastard.)

reader feels betrayed and helpless. she goes to levi the night before she's set to leave—who basically is like "uhhhh i told you so??" upon finding out what's happened—and they end up sleeping together anyway in a very emotionally fraught and vulnerable moment

she leaves the next day

a timeskip happens. turns out that the ENTIRETY of the wealthy family was killed in the attack in mitras (like between annie and eren's titans i think? don't remember what season that is. a lot of ppl get smooshed in a church. they were there.)

but reader had already been married into the family. she wasn't in the church and inherited the entirety of their wealth as the sole surviving family member.

she was also.... pregnant :) (of course she was! this fic hits every trope and bad fanfic cliche! maybe it's twins!)

levi is back in mitras years (??) later (listen.... i didn't know where the hell the canon storyline of this manga was going at the time so FORGIVE ME for the fact that obviously this is not canon compliant l m a o)

reader has become sort of a recluse since everything happened in mitras, but having inherited the wealth she's become a key figure politically and particularly with respect to the military because of her influence as a donor.

levi tracks her down to this surprisingly humble property on the outskirts of town.

there's a little boy playing in the yard. no more than four or five. he has dark hair and slate grey eyes. levi looks at this child and sees his mother's face.

the little boy speaks to him but levi is (understandably) very confused and disoriented. reader comes outside and is shocked to see levi there. like she's seeing a ghost.

reader tells the little boy to come to her and scoops him up in her arms, and she quietly reminds him (his name is Teddy btw... short for Theodore) that he's not supposed to talk to strangers.

and Teddy leans in real close and says "but mama... he has your wings" because Levi is wearing his survey corps uniform with the insignia on them. you've kept your own patch (a parting gift from erwin when he sold you off... how thoughtful) and treasure it.

all of which is to say that basically Levi is the kid's father, but because reader was already married when her pregnancy was discovered and the timeline still checked out—so no one ever questioned the paternity (especially because she was a WIDOW by the time she gave birth.)

teddy is now the "legitimate" heir to the entire fortune that was left by reader's husband/his family, but until he comes of age it's reader's to manage, so she can provide a safe home for him to grow up in—though notably removed from the society that she was raised in.

it's heavily implied (though not actually confessed) that reader and levi have been in love with each other for all these years, and there's a kind of optimism about what future is ahead for them now that their paths have crossed again. (present day canon-knowing liv is laughing at this part in particular.)

the end.

[theawkwardterrier]

2023 fic roundup

MCU

Year by Year

Academic Antagonism, Scholastic Strife

Working Women

Have Yourself a Scheming Little Christmas

Outlander

Unexpected Gifts**

Pure Heart, Clean Hands*

Bake On

Bad Roommates; or, Stocking on the Door*

The Envy of Care*

Better Broken Hearts Than Broken Bodies**

The Intimidation Game**

Nature and Nurture*

What We Have, What We Keep*

First Gifts**

What We Have, What We Lose**

Reflections*

On the Road (Too Far, Too Long)*

A Particular Habit*

In Care Of*

Awakenings*

Not Alone**

Four Thoughts During a Separation*

In the Act**

After the War Is Over (Will There Be Any Home Sweet Home?)

Never Leaves You**

Polyglot Pride*

Bits and Pieces**

Sword and Shield*

Make History*

Soon, the Sight of You*

Baby Proof*

S5 Series, cont.*

Slow, Someday Sisters*

No Matter How Far*

Roots and Wings

Over Matter*

Small Joys*

Future Tense*

Healing Hearts*

Enough? Enough*

Connections*

Comes Around*

All Illuminated*

Genesis*

Dialogues*

One Last Time*

Fathering*

Side by Steadfast Side*

In His Multitudes*

By Heart*

Living Up*

Beyond Keepsakes*

Are and Become*

Marching On*

Family Means*

Far and Ahead*

Forever in Peace*

As Houses*

All Tied Up**

Hope’s Smallest Seeds*

Only in Dreams*

Parenting and Partnership**

All the Ways Home

Home and Away*

Vine and Fig Tree*

Familial Peas**

In the Light and the Shadows*

Gifts*

In the Operating Room*

All the Shattered Pieces*

Moments of Thanksgiving*

Anchors in Absence*

Relation**

Let the Circle Be Unbroken*

Morning Moments**

A Reception**

A Slow-Motion Storytime*

Particular Prescriptions*

Always Been Forever*

* drabble

** Laird’s Room ‘verse

1. Looking back, did you write more fic than you thought you would this year, less, or about what you’d predicted?:

As I continue my journey to not caring about this stuff: who knows?! What I will say is that I wouldn't have necessarily predicted that I wouldn't participate in certain fandom events that I traditionally have over the years, but that my list is super lengthy because I have kept up with my weekly drabbles and I've also transitioned to doing more chapter fic than I have in the past.

2. What pairing/genre/fandom did you write that you would never have predicted in January?:

No real surprises this year, but I did do quite a variety of drabble POVs rather than sticking to my single ship, plus it might be somewhat unexpected to see that I wrote kid!Natasha + kid!Sharon Carter dual POV.

3. What’s your own favorite story of the year? Not the most popular, but the one that makes you happiest?

Muscle Memory was technically still posting in this year, and I'm super proud of a lot of that story, but I also have quite a fondness for a lot of the character work and family/feelsy moments in All the Ways Home.

4. Did you take any writing risks this year? What did you learn from them?

Posting Roots and Wings!! I think that what I learned is that I'm allowed to just post what's interesting to me and what I want without thinking about reception, but also and perhaps contradictorily that sometimes the things that I like and want to experiment with will also appeal to people.

5. Do you have any fanfic or profic goals for the New Year?

Finish and post the Great Depression fic

Keep up with my Wednesday 100 drabbles

See if it feels good to go back to some additional fandom events or to start working with some new fandoms/ships - generally use what feels positive to me as the gauge for what I should do rather than expectations or the desire for recognition in some way

6. From my past year of writing, what was…

Story Most Underappreciated by the Universe:

There are easy reasons and explanations for this (it's short and really recent and potentially a little weird) but probably Have Yourself a Scheming Little Christmas.

Most Fun:

Academic Antagonism, Scholastic Strife! I still don't know that the trope super works in the way that I played it, but I like it anyway.

Most Disappointing:

I don't know that there's one that really fits here for this year, but maybe Roots and Wings specifically because the pacing is slightly off - I couldn't find anything to sort of fill in to balance the slower beginning with a slower ending rather than montaging the second half.

Most Sexy:

Oof, maybe I'm just tired, but I don't know that I had any super great sexy scenes this year?

Hardest to Write:

Lol, all of them? My depression hit super hard midyear and made it really difficult to focus and connect enough to complete All the Ways Home.

Most Unintentionally Telling:

The fact that I'm focusing so much on parenthood, specifically fatherhood, and family moments is definitely saying...something. Do even I know what it is? No guarantee!

Choice Lines:

Haha, I have no idea this year. I love my stuff but also it would be a bit out of hand to try to quote many of them. If you have favorites, I'd love to hear them!

[doubledyke]

hey, i’ve read some of your writing and i really like it. do you have any tips?

aw dude that's really sweet. i'm really self conscious about everything i write so i appreciate hearing that. i'm still learning myself, so my advice is probably gonna be kind of obvious yet nebulous (much like my writing). oh and im not great at following my own advice, but we can ignore that.

first and foremost i'd say try to have fun. get weird with it. don't stress too much about it. it's supposed to be an enjoyable pastime, so write what YOU like, how you like. the "rules" of grammar and composition are helpful, but you're allowed to be a lot more lax with creative writing. i know i am 👀

in my humble opinion, you can never have too many details, even- or especially- oddly specific ones. personal experiences are a great way to inject some minutiae, and i enjoy the insight they provide into the author's perspective, background, thought process, etc.. there are infinite other tools at your disposal too. like the number of times i've found myself browsing ancient, niche forums just to confirm one insignificant bit of information is ridiculous.

don't be afraid to take your story as seriously or unseriously as you want. sometimes i'll be snapped out of focus with the thought of "am i really writing this rn" 😂 but i just try to remind myself that i'm (usually) having fun, i'm not hurting anyone and someone might even enjoy the final product.

for eene, try to listen to the voice acting as much as you watch the animation. and don't be afraid to step outside your comfort zone when writing a character. i'm neither comfortable, nor very good at writing for ed, but i nutted up and gave it a shot recently and yeah it's nuclear level cringe but i suppose it can't get any worse, right? RIGHT???.... i love learning new words, so when i'm writing for edd (and in general) you know i keep that thesaurus tab open. with eddy, there's always room for more irreverence. i'm also one of those people that cannot help but drop almost every g when i write eddy. and it's just as important to get their idiolects down, which can be tricky. BUT that's mostly if your goal is to stay close to the source material, which is definitely not necessary. i'm just not a very creative person 😂

if you're in a rut, skip to another section, or hell even another chapter. the fic i'm working on rn was hatched from a simple premise several months ago, so i started at the end and have been building on that. an unconventional starting point can be really helpful when you're struggling to start at all. because i'm me, it's turned into a nightmare beast that i can't seem to contain, but i still have a general idea of where we're going and we'll get there eventually lmfao. to that point, outlines, bullet points, notes, etc. are all very useful.

take breaks, let her sit for a while. i'll write a whole bunch, leave, come back to review and be like girl what the hell is this. fresh eyes make a big difference! however, don't be like me and get too caught up in the weeds. i make compulsive little tweaks of my shit up to the point and even after i hit post. more often than not, it's more stress than it's worth. i just can't help it 🥴

and then of course, read other people's stuff. i'm not much of a fiction reader but i make exceptions for the sake of my hyper-fixation. it truly does help to see different perspectives and styles of writing. everyone has a unique voice that really comes through in creative writing, which i love. i've gleaned a lot from reading other people's work as well. i frequently come across new and creative ideas for changing up sentence structure, dialogue tags and narration by reading stuff from fellow fans.

aaaaaand yeah idk what else really. like i said, i'm not the best at writing but i think as long as you're getting your ideas across in the way that you want to, you're golden. anyone who makes shitty remarks about someone else's writing can sit and spin honestly.

[soft-bellied-tannies]

Fit to Fat and the Reverse

Read here or on AO3!

This is a little different than my normal writing style, but I wanted to give it a try. It is much more narrative with less dialogue and I do like the setup. I hope you enjoy! <3

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Yoongi is a fit guy, always has been. He works out regularly after a successful basketball career in college, however, an unexpected injury brings everything to a halt. Yoongi has to break from his normal routine to recover which results in him relaxing his diet and his habits.

Jimin, his always chubby (more like fat, but Jimin thinks chubby sounds cuter) boyfriend, is supportive of everything he does, yet Yoongi is constantly telling Jimin he will go back to working out. Jimin isn’t sure after six months pass and Yoongi is fully recovered but still avoiding the gym and eating whatever he wants. 

Yoongi started the journey at a healthy 170, made of toned muscle from years of discipline. Jimin, on the other hand, had always fluctuated around 250. He’d been bigger his entire life and decides not to keep up with his weight regularly. It wasn’t truly an insecurity, especially after how much Yoongi loved him regardless of his size. 

Jimin was more than happy to share his food, offering Yoongi bites more and more often considering that his partner was actually saying yes to indulging now. He kept their pantry well-stocked since they were going through food much quicker. 

A year later, Yoongi weighs nearly the same as Jimin, gaining around 80 pounds up to that point. Jimin starts going to workout classes with his new work friends, encouraged to join rather than peer pressured or bullied into going as he had throughout high school and college. 

All of their usual food was still there, but the old habits of Yoongi’s once-disciplined diets were making an appearance in the fridge yet they were now for Jimin. That left all the sugary desserts and savory snacks to Yoongi while his partner was eating more lean meats and fruits and vegetables.

It takes time, but Yoongi realizes that Jimin is starting to slim down for the first time since he’s known him while he cannot resist his new sugar cravings. 

Yoongi first sees that he and Jimin are similar in size right before he also realizes that Jimin is starting to lose weight. They are in bed one night and Yoongi cuddles Jimin, thinking he seems a little smaller so he asks, thinking that maybe it’s a mental thing from his own insecurities. 

To Yoongi’s surprise, though, Jimin gets shy about it and confirms his question. 

“Well, I have lost a little weight, but I didn’t want to say anything because I know it’s a sensitive subject right now.”

The guilt hits Yoongi immediately for making Jimin feel like he had to hide it so he makes it a point to compliment Jimin more and be more observant. He realizes that his own insecurities were bleeding into the relationship and he was distancing himself from Jimin in ways he never wanted to happen. 

However, once he realizes it is not a phase or failed diet and Jimin is actually slimming down for real, Yoongi is torn because his partner is doing so well and looks beautiful as always, but he’s feeling more insecure each time Jimin looks smaller. 

He struggles to say to Jimin’s sweet face when he excitedly tells him about reaching another goal or when Jimin buys himself a treat, only to eat a bit and hand the rest off to him. Yoongi assumes that his partner must know that he can’t say no to him by now, not only because he is weak for Jimin’s pout but also because Yoongi is finding it harder and harder to say no to sugar.

Yoongi starts to outgrow even the largest of his own clothes after a while and he realizes that Jimin’s clothes are no longer oversized on him which is hard to process. Added to that feeling of insecurity was the fact that Jimin was now wearing some of his old stuff to the gym when he didn’t want to do laundry.

Jimin had never been able to wear Yoongi’s clothes unless it was a very oversized sweatshirt which still was snug on him in the past. He never expected his soft, chubby Jiminie to be able to wear his old compression leggings or running gear.

When he starts outgrowing Jimin’s clothes, Yoongi finally has a breakdown. 

Jimin offers comfort and calming energy plus some bigger-sized jeans he had hidden away in the closet from when he was going through particularly hard times since Jimin used to eat his feelings. (The main reason why he has always been bigger all his life.) 

But, even those jeans are snug on Yoongi and that is life-altering news for him.

Yoongi's realization that things he never noticed before, now stick out in his mind. 

He has to put in more effort to get off the couch while Jimin can get up off the floor with ease now; something he realized Jimin couldn’t do easily before. Yoongi also sits at home and eats a bowl of cereal or two while Jimin goes on morning runs with Jungkook now which used to be the opposite.

Jimin is now the one grabbing him, rubbing his belly, and sitting on his lap which has completely changed from how it used to be. Yoongi used to push close when he had to compete with Jimin's belly, but now Jimin sits close when Yoongi was bloated and his growing gut was taking up more of his lap as time goes on. 

Jimin also starts walking around the apartment shirtless which never used to happen and Yoongi realizes that he has been taking his shirt off less and less subconsciously. He thinks Jimin looks incredible, yet he can’t bring himself to do anything except internally panic whenever he sees Jimin naked now. 

Yoongi has moments of jealousy or bitterness which he immediately feels guilty for and then eats to make himself feel better which then makes him feel worse again for binging. It is a harsh realization for him when he thinks about how they have switched coping mechanisms. 

He used to be the one spending hours out running or doing intense workouts in the gym when he was frustrated while Jimin pulled every sweet food from their fridge and pantry to binge. Yet, Yoongi finds himself buried deep in a tub of ice cream while Jimin is at Pilates or running near the Han River when they are stressed. 

Yoongi gets awkward when anyone congratulates Jimin on his new body while they avoid the topic with him, especially their friends. It’s even worse when he gets the occasional relationship weight comment because Jimin never got those before - he had always been on the bigger side so his weight wasn’t a new thing. 

Jimin shuts down too much teasing from their best friends, knowing the little stuff is fine but if Yoongi is having a hard time, Jimin makes it clear that he is the only one that can comment. 

He gives out death stares at the table, even to his hyungs. Hoseok and Namjoon both start jokes that they don’t finish after seeing Jimin’s glare. Taehyung doesn’t even open his mouth after seeing Jimin’s expression. 

Since Jimin grew up fat, he was used to the light teasing from his friends, but he knew that Yoongi wasn’t used to it even if it wasn’t malicious. His partner’s headspace is Jimin’s to protect and their friends respected that. 

Jin notices first that Jimin is trying to keep a lid on the comments and starts teasing him instead, a good hyung to both of them. Jimin will get avocado toast and hot tea at brunch instead of bottomless mimosas and a massive plate of French toast which Jin used to eat off of. Jin says “God, I miss fat Jimin” every time Jimin order his food and breaks any potential tension from the Yoongi defense efforts at the table.

Jin and Jimin have always been the fat besties in the group while Jungkook and Yoongi were workout buddies. Jin loved baking with Jimin and going out for lunch while Jungkook and Yoongi were both former athletes that enjoyed going to the gym together.

But it has now become the opposite. Jungkook and Jimin are training for a half marathon together so Namjoon and Jin come over to hang out and eat breakfast on the weekend mornings. Saturday is Jungkook’s morning to cook and Jin is salty about him being out running with Jimin. 

In reality, none of them are upset about the new arrangement - happy that everyone still has a person to connect with. Jin can’t count the number of times Jimin thanks him for being supportive of Yoongi to which the reply is always the same. 

“You two are our best friends, Jimin-ah. There is nothing to thank us for.” 

However, the kindness from their best friends is not always the case with people they see in public. Yoongi has become more of a homebody which Jimin tries to stop, but the interactions they have out do not help. 

The worst reaction comes from an outing to their favorite coffee shop where Yoongi runs into someone from his old basketball team who sees Jimin first. He barely recognizes Yoongi, hyping up Jimin on his new body to then being at a loss for words when Yoongi comes over with his two pastries and sugary coffee drink.

Jimin offers him comfort in that moment as he does all the time. As much as Yoongi wants to ignore it, Jimin has been nothing but perfectly supportive and loving. He is Yoongi’s rock, his person, and while the insecurities sent him through a tailspin constantly, he knows Jimin is always there. 

His partner gives him explanations for things like random pains and stretchmarks which Yoongi does not have experience with in the slightest. He gives massages and belly rubs to help him digest and feel better. Yoongi always lays down while trying to process what Jimin has told him and ends up going mindless once his boyfriend gets his hands on him. 

“God, my lower back is killing me. Maybe it’s finally all the old injuries hitting me.”

“Uh, baby, I don’t want to upset you, but it’s kind of a thing you’ll have to deal with…”

“What do you mean?” 

“It’s because…I mean, you have more weight to carry around now. Your body will adjust, but it will become a consistent thing if you don’t walk or stretch.”

“Oh…”

“Come here, I’ll give you a massage. It will help, I promise.”

Somehow, Jimin always knows the perfect way to say things to be light and gentle without judgment. It almost makes Yoongi feel worse when he is caught up in his head, but he knows all the feelings are irrational at the end of the day. 

Yoongi will ask why his sides and inner thighs are getting so itchy and Jimin explains how stretchmarks feel when they are coming in, rubbing lotion on them to help ease the sting. Jimin keeps telling him it’s normal and they are pretty before Yoongi can even question it further. 

Jimin points out his old white ones and says “we match now” happily. However, Jimin is also one of those people that has them on his thighs and hips, but he never got them on his belly between his genetics and his progressive gain over the years. 

Yoongi is struggling to accept that he absolutely covered in them now. His stomach filled with pink and red lines, some angrier than others. Jimin simply continues to soothe him, pointing out his own every time Yoongi finds a new one.

Jimin tells him that he eats well and intuitively, that he listens to his body and is finally resting after years of putting his body through rigorous work. He tells Yoongi how proud he is and he can see that underneath the stress, Yoongi looks at ease when he eats. 

He really tries to take it in and let his partner’s words soothe his mind, but it just doesn’t seem to work. Yoongi can’t help the feelings of insecurity and frustration when he ends up stuffed on the couch at the end of the night once again. 

Sometimes, Yoongi gets worked up enough that he tells Jimin to stop giving him so much food or to stop buying all the sugary treats that are somehow always on their shelves, but Jimin just counters that they do the shopping together and he is not going to put any sort of limits on what Yoongi eats. 

That seems to hold Yoongi over long enough, knowing that the last thing he wants is a fight with Jimin. He has no one to blame but himself after all. 

Finally, Jimin has to talk about it. He feels stuck and unhelpful which is not a place mentally where he can stay for very long. Yoongi swings from overly reliant on Jimin emotionally to completely distant with no warning. All Jimin wants is a happy Yoongi.

Without being hurtful, Jimin is direct and mentions that Yoongi is bigger than him when he was at his biggest. 

That, of course, makes Yoongi have a bit of a breakdown because Jimin was always the biggest person in Yoongi’s close circle. To be bigger than him itself is a mental hit, but he also can’t see himself as being beautiful even when Jimin is the most beautiful person in his life no matter what size he was. 

Jimin says it’s a perfectly acceptable thing to have gained weight and that Jimin is happy with him no matter what. He tells Yoongi that he could be so much happier if he talked through the negative feelings and quit being so hard on himself. 

Jimin rants about loving him regardless. He tells him how he loves that Yoongi stopped pressuring himself to keep a certain image or force himself to keep hobbies that he no longer enjoyed.

Yoongi is now spiraling, confused about how Jimin could see all those things when he never said a word about it. He had never hated working out and he definitely never hated basketball, but when the injury happened, Yoongi was tired. 

He wasn’t relieved about injuring himself, but he was certainly relieved to have a break. However, in Yoongi’s mind, a break never meant gaining weight - let alone this much. He especially never meant for Jimin to see all of those things without him talking about it.

The silence carried on as Jimin waited for Yoongi to say something, not expecting his partner to just walk away from him. Not allowing the conversation to end, Jimin had to stop him and get at least some type of answer.

Jimin wasn’t angry, he never had been, but he certainly has hit an emotional wall. He wasn’t going to let something as superficial as weight drive them apart. 

“Did you love me any less when I was, you know, bigger?” 

“Of course not! You know that, Jimin.”

“Then why would I love you any less? Hmm, tell me that.”

“Because I’m fat now, Jimin!”

“So was I! That is not a good answer and you know it. You really think that I limit my love to appearances? I know you know me better than that. If you really love me the way you say you do, then I am certain you know that I would never do that.”

Yoongi is silent, at a loss on how to respond because deep down, he knows Jimin is right.

“You know what, this is going nowhere. Yoon, you know I hate fighting at all, but especially about something like this. I’m going to make dinner, you take a minute to think about what I said.” 

As Jimin walks away, Yoongi drowns in his thoughts. Sitting alone in their bedroom for fifteen minutes felt like three days went by. Jimin’s words were like a slap in the face along with the fact that Yoongi had just referred to himself as fat for the first time out loud.

He finally dragged himself to the kitchen and tried another route with the conversation. Yoongi knew Jimin better than he knew himself which is why he needed to let go and trust his partner.

“What are you making for dinner?” 

“It doesn’t matter, you’ll eat it.” 

Yoongi could see the smile on Jimin’s face. Jimin was happy with Yoongi simply leaving the bedroom and making an effort. 

He knows that all Jimin needs is for him to talk. Yoongi has to stop shutting him out, no matter how he felt about himself. Banter is their language so he knew this was a good start.

“Hey! Are you fat-shaming me?”

“Babe, I would never. Also, just because my body isn’t fat anymore, doesn’t mean my brain isn’t. I know how you think.” 

“You know, I never teased you like this when you were fat.”

“Yoongi, come on, you used to pinch my cheeks all the time.”

“They still are cute cheeks, jagi.”

“You used to call me chubs while you did it.”

“That’s cute!” 

“Oh, is it cute, chubs?” 

“Okay, you know what, actually not that cute. My bad.”

“Yeah, was eating my leftover carbonara your bad too?” 

“I do not like this side of you, Park Jimin.”

“You love me.”

“Of course, I do.” 

And with that and quite the heated make-out with Jimin on the kitchen counter, Yoongi makes it a point to talk things through with Jimin, even when it hurts.

There are many little moments where Jimin offers Yoongi tips like adjusting his clothes to get a bit more room before replacing them or how to avoid getting out of breath. He teaches him how to avoid chub rub and how to stretch out his shirts the right way, subtle breathing at the top of stairs and switching from the booth side to the chair side when they go out to eat. 

Yoongi knows that Jimin means well, but it just solidifies that he is the fat boyfriend now. 

Jimin prepares Yoongi for their first holiday after the noticeable changes in both of them. This is the moment sees the situation in a different light. Before, all of Jimin’s comments were about how to make himself feel more comfortable physically. 

They hadn’t spoken about how Jimin dealt with things emotionally as Yoongi assumed that a lifetime of having that body meant his partner felt differently than he did. He knew it was natural to have insecurities and Jimin was a good communicator throughout their relationship, but the holiday season opened his eyes.

Yoongi realizes all the shit Jimin had taken for years and puts an end to it. Hearing Jimin tell him to barely eat at dinner so no one says anything and they can get food afterward breaks Yoongi’s heart, hating the idea of how many choices Jimin had made like that in the past. 

Something clicks in his mind and Yoongi does the exact opposite. He eats as much as he wants, refilling his plate at dinner multiple times before sampling every dessert there and telling everyone to shut up when they start opening their mouths. He says he doesn’t want to hear it about himself and they will never address Jimin’s size again, good or bad. 

The amount of love in Jimin’s eyes after his heated rant made it all worth it to Yoongi even if their family was mad about his language. He especially couldn’t seem to care when he was rewarded so well back at home.

Their sex life is also different now and Yoongi has many realizations about how different the experience must have been for Jimin. Yoongi feels like he is always trying to catch his breath like he just finished a huge workout.

Yoongi decided that since he was making a better effort to talk about it, he would ask Jimin as they lay together in bed. 

“Was it always like this for you?”

“I mean, I lasted a bit longer than you did, but yeah, it’s a lot of work.”

“Rude, but yeah, you’re not wrong.”

“Guess it’s a good thing I’m smaller now, not sure what we’d do if we were both fat.”

Yoongi is too out of breath to be mad or comment, actually joining in Jimin’s little giggles. 

“What happened to my insatiable Min Yoongi?”

“I need like ten minutes and a Gatorade and I can go again.”

“Yeah, and I’m the Queen of England.”

“I’m serious, Minnie…” Yoongi pauses to breathe “...I’m good”

“Baby, I appreciate the effort, but you sound like you’re going to pass out.”

“Again, rude.”

“I don’t want you to pull a muscle, big guy.”

“Ugh, don’t call me that, it’s doing something for me that I’m not ready to deal with yet.”

Jimin paused to laugh again, tilting his head up to press small kisses along Yoongi’s soft jawline while his hand caressed Yoongi’s belly.

“Let me know when you are ready to deal with it because I have some ideas.”

Yoongi stilled and decided to keep that comment in his back pocket for later. Jimin had been dropping more and more hints lately that made Yoongi feel like Jimin’s interest in his weight was more than just support.

“Maybe the weight isn’t too bad. I don’t think I’ve ever finished that hard before.”

Yoongi couldn’t help but smirk when Jimin was the one that paused, a small noise catching in his throat before he continued his gentle motions. Jimin covered it well, but Yoongi was so in tune with his partner that he was still on to him.

“Yeah, probably because I did all the work for once.” 

“That’s it!” 

Jimin’s laugh only grew louder as Yoongi rolled on top of him, peppering his face with kisses. 

From then on, things seemed to change for the better.

It had been three years since Yoongi’s initial injury that started his considerable gain.

Jimin is now slimmed down to 165 and Yoongi is 340. Jimin has gone from fat to chubby to in shape to fit and trim while Yoongi has gone directly the opposite way. 

One day, Jimin excitedly tells Yoongi that he hit his weight loss goal of weighing 75 kg and Yoongi decides to weigh himself to see the difference considering he stopped keeping track two sizes ago. 

It didn’t go unnoticed by Yoongi that Jimin was almost more excited to see the number on the scale for his partner than himself.

Yoongi finds that he has gained 75 kg meaning two things. 

He has officially doubled his body weight and he has gained as much as Jimin currently weighs.

The most surprising thing of all is that Yoongi’s insecurities were long gone. He was feeling pretty good in his much bigger body, especially after being very well-loved by his partner for so long. 

Jimin didn’t plan on losing any more weight. He was going to maintain and train at his current weight, happy to enjoy his Pilates class and go running with Jungkook.

Yoongi, on the other hand, even if he wanted to stop gaining, it probably wasn’t happening now. With how he enjoyed feeling full, his weight had nowhere to go except up. All things considered, Yoongi was perfectly fine with it. 

And as if he hadn’t made it clear, so was Jimin. Yoongi decided that was the next conversation to tackle, but maybe he needed to do a little research first because it couldn’t be a coincidence that Jimin enjoyed feeding him more and more as the scale went higher.