#james mustapic

[olympain]

Lock it in, Eddie.

[ambersfamastersproject]

Draft Thesis Review critiques

Not going to retype all the comments, just the ones that may require action:

-Colours and formatting would help in reading of changing of tone/voice

-Get editing help for structure

-Challenge to the optimistic view of the noughties

-Make sure personal stories are more clear -Provide examples of content I am working with i.e. YouTube

-Virtual worlds paragraph needs to be re-written clearer

- Reference to work in political section

-necessary to orientate my political approach

-Does Instagram need to be explained as a mobile application in the footnotes?

-LOOK UP “REPRESSED MEMORIES” ON SPINOFF.CO.NZ (BY JAMES MUSTAPIC)

-vaporware page needs reformatting

-Is Smash Mouth two words ?

-More theory Concept?

-2D and 3D need footnotes then asked if this explanation is needed?

-noughties decade from 2000-2009 maybe etymology, nought=zero + ies = plural of y in imitation of naming other decades e.g. twenties (1920-1929)

-V.R. or VR?

-Title suggestion: “The naughty noughties and the nature of the internet syce”

-line up chapter poems for visual contrast 

-expand on the contents of the collage

-Order Chapter poems, personal then historical, same throughout

-Relate my dislike of politics to my generation gender etc. contextualise it. 

-I was a kid there is no right answer BUT now  can reflect as a informed adult

-WOrth mentioning different audiences?

-what skin I had to the colour of my skin

-pics for chapter poems?

[olympain]

Our begrudging two-time carryover champion, the seemingly undefeatable James Mustapic!

[olympain]

I hope you have a (BLEEP) Christmas.

[olympain]

And you did just as well as each other.

[olympain]

Big Jim, the West is collapsing, society is falling. Have you noticed they've changed the font on the Weetabix pack, the family pack? They've changed the font! What's going on?!