#it started as a rewrite but took a waaaay different direction afterwards

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A Cringy Old Fic (Ninjago: Gotta Be Somebody)

IF THIS IS THE FIRST THING OF MINE YOU COME ACROSS, PLEASE DONT’ JUDGE ME BASED ON IT! This is a fic I wrote when I was little, and I promised to @diamantdrache I’d share it here!

If you are interested in my actual work, check out something else from my fanfic blog, @evelinaonline-fic!

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I’ve been complimented about my writing time and time again. I’ve had people ask me how they can write like me. Heck, one of the nicest comments I’ve ever gotten said that I’ve “mastered the arts of literature”.

So today, we’ll forget all about that!

This is my first official fanfic that I made, from start to finish. I wrote it back in 2014-2015, I think?

Anyway, you may have seen a part of it in this video I made, where I took a look at my old works.

This is 100% unedited. So, without any further ado, cringe at enjoy the first chapter of my fic!

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Ninjago: Gotta Be Somebody

Chapter One - After His Death

Pixal's POV

After... Zane...died... The ninja and I are staying at our place now. A building near Borg Industries. Everything is different... The ninja are acting weird. Jay and Cole stopped fighting about Nya (ok maybe they're still fighting), Lloyd is always like nothing never happents, to make me feel better. And Kai... It is like he is the only one who cares... He always tries to make me feel better. I just... can't. Zane was the guy I felt in love and I am never going to forget him....

It was 17:00. I was at Ninjago center. At... Zane's... Tomb... I was crying.... I couldn't stop... I... I... I was talking to Zane... I was... So sad and I was talking to him... ''Zane.... Where are you? I... I love you.... Zane please.... Come back...'' I was crying so much... I miss Zane... He was the most important thing I ever had... He still is. Someone touched my shoulder. It was Kai.

''What are you doing here, Pixal'' he told me. ''Look... I just... you know..... I am here and...'' ''Pixal...'' Kai tried to calm me down. ''Zane won't come back.... Sitting here and crying won't make the things better...'' ''You have no idea how I feel, right?'' I asked him. ''Kai... I lost my true love... My... My... My Zane...'' ''Pixal calm down... Don't worry...'' ''I CAN'T!!!!'' I shouted. ''HEY!!!'' He told me angry now. ''I miss Zane too Pixal! But that's just ridiculous!! Pixal I was good with you but you're driving me crazy right now!!!'' I wanted to cry more when Kai talked me like that. ''Kai... I... I...'' ''Pixal... I didn't mean that...Come here...'' he said and hugged me. ''It's... ok...'' I said. ''Thanks for being here for me'' ''It's nothing'' he said. ''I'll always be here''

It was midnight now. How long I stayed here??? Kai took my hand ''Come on... Let's get back home''. We started walking at the moonlight. We got back home. Jay, Nya and Lloyd were at the living room. Cole was at the kitchen. He was trying to make his own cake. He couldn't done it. He still can't. Cole is an awful cook. His cook skills are really dumb. Well I didn't know why but I wanted to help Cole make this stupid cake. I walked at the kitchen as I smelled his burned cake. Oh Cole.... He really needs help.

''Hey Cole!!!'' I said. ''Hey Pixal! You know I think this time my cake is going to be perfecf!!! I didn't follow the recipe....'' ''Cole...' I cut him. ''Why don't you follow the recipe?'' ''I don't want to!!! I wanna make this cake special!!!'' ''But it'll be special. Cole you are so stupid!!!'' I said to him. ''Pixal let me do my things, ok?'' ''Let me think about it... No. You are gonna burn this cake to you know!!!'' ''I won't!!!'' he said and smoke came out of the oven. ''Really???'' I asked. ''Um... That was the previous cake!!!'' he said as he tryied to put out the smoke. ''You know... Zane tought me how to cook. Let me help you!!!'' I told him as I put out the cake... I mean the fire-cake out of the oven. ''Look. Put the flour in this bowl and then the sugar, but please God do it slowly!!!'' ''I am not a kid you know...'' ''Yeah... About that... Cole just do what you have to do... I am going to put the eggs, because you are going to make a mess'' ''Ok... Well... Now I have to mix?'' ''Yeah you have to''

We spent all of our time making this cake. I know it's 00:30 but I am having so fun!!! Well the cake is ready and the most important: It doesn't smell smoke everywhere. Oh God thanks!!! Cole and me were talking and making jokes.

''Cole you are on fire'' I said to Cole. ''Thanks!!!'' he said. What a jeurk! I took a glass of water and those little flames disappeared. He looked at me and smiled. ''Thanks again, Pixy!!!''

When he called me Pixy... I remembered him.... Zane. He always called me like that.

Flashback

"Hey Zane!!! Wanna hung out?" "Sure Pixy!!!" "Zane... I know it may be personal but... Can you rell me a few things about your father?" ''Hey it is not personal!!!'' he told me. ''But Jay said not to ask....'' ''I can tell anyhing to you''

Flashback End

''Pixal are you ok? You are crying!!!'' Cole told me. ''Hello?'' ''Those are happy tears Cole... I've got a strange feeling.... That Zane is still here...'' ''Hey!!! He'll always be here'' he pointed at my heart. 'Now lets eat this cake!!!

We got in the leaving room and ate the cake with the others.

No POV

A thousent miles away, another adroid woke up.....

End of Chapter One

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I only have one thing to say and it’s WHY DID I USE SO MANY DOTS?

I don’t know if I’m going to post the entirety of this fic, but this was an example of what my writing used to be!

If you guys would like to see more of my “epic writing(tm)”, please check out some of my other works that have nothing to do with this because I hate it, let me know if I should post the second chapter >:D

I hope you didn’t enjoy! ^w^