#it is worth noting that i find these 5 sentence fics to be EXTREMELY difficult

[hold-him-down]

"He'd had a bad day and just needed something to make him feel better."

(for the five sentence prompt thingy for belleview)

from this ask game

“He had a bad night,” one of the volunteer nurses is telling Lincoln, “and he just needed something to make him feel a little better.”

Lincoln stands with the volunteer outside the door to River’s room. The muscles in his jaw ache from how hard he bites down, but he’s careful to keep his temper in check.

“Come on, Doc,” the volunteer is saying. River’s hands cover his face, and his body, now absent the typical barely-contained aggression, shakes with every deep, even breath he draws. He finally sleeps, over forty-eight hours after Lincoln took over this site, but it’s at a cost.

Lincoln rolls his shoulders to forcibly release some of the tension he’s holding as the nurse reviews the overnight attending’s orders. This is already done, Lincoln reminds himself. And there’s a part of him, a part of him that he’s learning to despise, that thinks maybe the attending made the right call.

[foruneyti]

As much as I want to ask about 48, I’ll restrain myself and ask for 49 instead.

Haha good call, I wouldn’t have been able to answer 48 truthfully (or at all). 49. Writing advice.Of course advice is only a guideline, and it is different for everyone, but I will start with some basics that I think will help almost anyone out: 1. Read a lot, build a vocabulary. The bigger your vocabulary the more interesting and accurate scenes you can write. It doesn’t mean you should use difficult words for every small thing, of course; it just means that you won’t be stuck with words such as sad, happy, and angry. Someone who has lost a loved one isn’t just ‘sad’, after all. They are devastated, full of sorrow; their heart is shattered and they will mourn for perhaps a very long time - just ‘sad’ won’t cover the intensity of their emotions. 2. Make sure your grammar and spelling are correct; practice if necessary. Incorrect spelling and confusing grammar can often throw a reader from the scene you have put them in. You want them to forget the outside world, to forget that they are reading something instead of seeing it happen; and mistakes can pull them from the story and back into reality. Always check your writing after you’ve written it, before you upload it, and preferably twice after uploading it. It is okay if typos slip through your fingers every once in a while, things like that just happen. 

3. (And this is one I see quite often)  Do not use more than three successive periods (ellipsis). More than the standard three can greatly disrupt the flow of the story and makes it seem unprofessional, especially when done multiple times in the same chapter. Please, just use three; and even then, use them sparsely. 4. That doesn’t mean you can’t use other punctuation marks, however. Use dashes ( - ) semicolons ( ; ) and colons ( : ) to influence the length of your sentences. Know when they should/can be used and try not to use too many of the same in rapid succession, but look closely at how your writing flows and adjust it with these if necessary. 5. Make sure your reading flows like music. This is one I personally find one of the most important ones. Switch between longer and shorter sentences, don’t only use tiny ones or extremely long ones as it becomes repetitive and annoying to read. For example: I was walking through the woods. It was dark. There was no one else outside. The cold made me shiver. I pulled my cloak further around my body. My shoulders kept shaking. I hated the cold.While the scene may be well-described with observations, actions, and feelings, it isn’t very nice to read. Try to mix it up with a few longer sentences.  - Then here are a few of my personal ones. - 6. Don’t only use actions to write your scene. He did this, she did that, then that happened - sure, all that happens is clear, but it isn’t interesting. Describe the environment, or the weather, or the clothes they were wearing, or what they looked like, or /how/  they did it. And, if you’re writing from a perspective that allows for feelings, use them! Let the reader know how they were feeling, let them know their thoughts and their fears and their hopes. This of course depends on the scene itself. If it should be fast paced, keep the environmental descriptions to a minimum and focus on actions, feelings, and perhaps thoughts. 

7. In my opinion, you can use ‘said’. You can also use others like ‘sighed’ and ‘groaned’ if you want. In any case, don’t use them too often, and especially not after every spoken sentence. I personally like to avoid them all together and instead describe the look in their eyes or the badly hidden sarcasm lacing their words; how they moved a hand through their hair in exasperation or how they clenched their fists so tight their nails left crescent moons in the palm of their hands. 

8.Don’t say they are angry but describe it; describe how their eyes grew dark and their shoulders locked, how their fingers curled into fists as the urge to punch someone rose within them. Convey their emotion, try to let the reader feel the same. My personal fave is to try and make my readers cry when the main character does so as well  -   this is tricky and a bit difficult sometimes, but it gives a much more intense experience. So don’t just let the character cry, but describe the actions and feelings and maybe even use similes! 9.  Pick your words with care, especially if you need to foreshadow stuff or if you need to be secretive about things still to come. 

10. If you’re not sure about the flow of your story, read it aloud to yourself - this also helps with taking out the typos and finding weird sentences. 11. Find a place you can write without distractions. I personally like it best to write when I am completely alone and the only sound is either the rain tapping on my window or the music I have in the background. I prefer to write on a laptop, but when inspiration strikes and I haven’t got it with me I write in the notes of my phone. 12. Install a program on your phone in which you can write stuff. I write in a program simply called ‘notes’, as I mentioned above. This way you can always write when you feel like it! 13. Edit your writing until you feel like it is as good as it will get. 14. I don’t believe in Mary Sues as almost all female characters will be called a Mary Sue at least once, but there are a few things I must ask of you to avoid: 1. Talking and acting like a very, very stubborn teenager. A stubborn character can be fun, but don’t let them go against everything and everyone just because they can or because they don’t feel like complying. Even teenagers have a sense of duty sometimes, or realise it is smarter to just go along; and not all teenagers were stubborn rebels. And even stubborn rebels have feelings. 3. Worthless or not being able to do anything themselves. (underpowered?)Every person has their skills and worth. If they need another character to do everything for them, every reader will get fed up with the character. And if they truly can’t do anything, let them hate it, or let there be consquences. Don’t let them wallow in self-pity for too long, either. 2. Overpowered. And even if they are overpowered, let there be consequences. Let their powers drain their energy until they almost die, let them have vulnerabilities. Make it hard for them. They have cool and dangerous powers that can defeat any enemy? Make their family afraid of them, make no one dare to go near them. Let them struggle with keeping it under control (but avoid the wallowing in self-pity without taking action). Let them lose it all, and show how they suddenly need to adjust to a life without all that power. Let someone accept them for who they are, until they become a victim of the powers, too. I can’t stress it enough: consequences. 15. Check whether things are possible. Fifteen stabwounds to the chest? No, unless they aren’t human or overpowered or have some special gift or object that allows them to survive it. Being hit by lightning? They can definitely survive! It just adds more realism to your writing. 16. If you’re writing a multi-fic, it is really useful to have a separate document with a timeline and the trivia you need to remember. Everything that could be important: names of villagers and their professions, specific powers, titles, the amount of money a character possesses, things that happened in their past and have had a great impact; things like that. 17. Know your characters. Know everything about them. Let them grow throughout your story, too! I think I could go on for a long, long time; but this should be enough to help you out! If you have any specific questions, for example about world building or character design or character building, feel free to send an ask!