#fiftyshadesedit

[snowbairdd]

- You insist on defying me, Mrs. Grey. What should I do about that? - Learn to live with it.

Dakota Johnson as Anastasia Steele in FIFTY SHADES TRILOGY (2015 - 2018)

[maurawrites]

Eloise Mumford as Kate Kavanagh FIFTY SHADES FREED

[moremoremovies]

[karabeyazkedi]

[ericaand]

I stopped watching/reading the 50 shades stuff after we named our son Christian. Cause it was weird. But, I may have to shove my feelings aside and suck it up for this fella.

[mrbigbrother]

A Fifty Shades Of Grey Rewrite. By Jacob Pittman.

I had written another introduction but Tumblr failed to post it and erased the entire post because Tumblr is run by incompetent morons. So...here's my attempt at re-writing the ever famous ironic comedy of Fifty Shades Of Grey. The project started off with me reading the book and laughing out loud at it. Everything about it is silly. The prose isn't even that bad, it's just what El James's is describing and the strange use of First Person narrative she uses. The dialogue is pathetic. Ms Steele's inner monologue is the most idiotic use of language I have ever read.

As I read on, I couldn't help but think about how I would've written it. Saying to myself "That bit could easily be made stronger with more context." or "This bit needs to be deleted completely and that will improve the flow dramatically." So finally I just said F it, and started doing edits. And I found that this was a good way to practice my editing skills. My overall writing skills have gotten better from just working on this project. Eventually the project turned into a complete overhaul of the original. The changes I made were mainly just improving what was already there by strengthing the prose, making cuts to sharpen the pacing, and only writing new bits occasionally to keep the narrative flowing well. I also kept the First Person narration intact by just reworking the perspective. It's not so immediate and silly like original's train of thought. Now it's more like an older and wiser Ms Steele confessing to the reader about a bizarre and tragic chapter of her life. This version of the story is now less a dumb sex romp, and more of a violent sad erotic tragedy about broken people.

But yeah, If you like what I've done with it let me know and I'll rewrite more chapters. If you have any other work you'd like for me to try rewriting, tell me about it and I might try.

unfortunately i have to post it on wattpad because Tumblr is run by incompetent people.

thanks for reading. Ta Ta - Jake.

[jamiegrey]

Fifty Shades Freed (2018) dir. James Foley

[50shades]

FIFTY SHADES DARKER (2017) dir. James Foley

[gloomyfilm]

Dakota Johnson as Anastasia Steele in Fifty Shades of Grey

[gruuldark]

SPECIAL EDITION!

MY FAVORITE BOOKS(S) & FILM(S): FIFTY SHADES TRILOGY BY E.L. JAMES

There's a very fine line between pleasure and pain. They are two sides of the same coin, one not existing without the other.

[afterstan67]

Dating the best friends daughter?

How could it possibly go wrong?

[snowbairdd]

Am I a romantic? Well, I study English Lit. So, I kind of have to be.

Dakota Johnson as Anastasia Steele in FIFTY SHADES OF GREY (2015) dir. Sam Taylor-Johnson

[maurawrites]

Eloise Mumford as Kate Kavanagh FIFTY SHADES FREED

[greydornan]

Fifty Shades Freed (2018) dir. James Foley

[nickblaine]

No rules, no punishments, and no more secrets.

FIFTY SHADES DARKER (2017) dir. James Foley

[thenamelesscat]