#feysandlin?

[a-court-of-moonlight-and-ire]

Ive complained about acotar's weird plot structure before and I was gonna talk about how I would fix it as well, but then I forgot so Im talking about how I would fix it now

Just get rid of Amarantha, Rhysand's the villain now. He gets her Woman Scorned motivation of being rejected by Tamlin but hes still the high lord of the night court and instead of him ruling over all of Prythian, he basically just torments Tamlin and hes got the spring court locked down with magic so no one can come in or out for help. One idea that I like is that instead of the mask curse, everyone is cursed to just cant stand being near Tamlin, like he comes into a room that a few servants are cleaning and they immediately feel compelled to leave without another word. Idk, the idea is that Rhysands trying to break him through isolation while convincing him that hes unlovable so he'll come crawling right back to him. And then theres obviously still that caveat of 'the curse gets broken if you can find a human whos killed a fae with hate in her heart and get her to fall in love with you, but until then everything stays as is'

From then on, things mostly happen as they do in the book with Tamlin and Feyre bonding except Lucien's not there because of that curse. Or, actually you could still have him around since Feyre wouldnt be affected by the curse, just not anywhere near Tamlin. Oh, I really like the idea of Lucien very begrudgingly coming up to this human girl he dislikes so that he can be like "hey, can you please tell Tamlin that we're still friends and that I still love him even though I cant speak to him" thatd be sweet

(uhhhhhh this got way longer than anticipated, have a readmore)

I think if you still want Rhys to be like, the hot and sexy badboy alternative love interest you could have him corner Feyre whenever shes alone and try to seduce her in order make absolutely 100% sure she never breaks that curse. But its not working, she just keeps bonding with Tamlin and he notices that shes getting more and more comfortable with him and seems to be slowly falling in love with him and hes getting nervous, because Rhysand is absolutely not above just coming in and hurting her in order to torment him some more so he sends her away, again, like in the book

Then Feyre comes back and maybe she finds that the spring court is now shrowded in eternal night for 💫Atmosphere💫 and Tamlin has submitted to Rhysand. But hes still not quite satisfied because Tamlin basically begged him not to hurt Feyre because he loves her, and Rhysand just needs him to say that he doesnt love her after all. And Feyre comes in and demands that her high lord be set free and Rhysand issues the same three trials as Amarantha, I dont think he should give her the riddle because idk, i always thought it was really weird and stupid to have these trials AND a riddle, just pick one. And Im picking the trials because Rhysand is a sadistic mf. I dont think the trials should happen over the course of three months though, I think they should happen over the course of three days with one trial a day, because Rhysand is very confident that Feyre will just die and hes getting a little impatient, like he just wants to have his Tamlin already yknow

And then she completes the trials, Rhysand has to release them and thats the end of the story. I think this would work best as a standalone, but if you still wanted to make it a trilogy and you still wanted to have the Feysand bargain, maybe Feyre could completely break down during that last trial where she has to kill those innocent fae because shes bonded with them so much (in this version she would get to know more of the household than just Alis and Lucien) and she cant bring herself to do it and Rhysand is all smug like "do you give up?" but then Feyre pulls herself together and goes to stab the first one, and he realizes that she might actually do it for Tamlin's sake and that all of his plans are about to be ruined, so hes basically like "okay, you know what, Ive changed my mind, I'll lift the curse and I'll leave you and Tamlin be, but you'll have to agree to this bargain with me where you have to stay at my court for two weeks every months" the idea is basically that if he cant have Tamlin's love, hes gonna take Tamlin's beloved, and Feyre agrees

Idrk how the next book could play out from that point. I have this image in my head of like. okay so, one of my favorite obscure dark romance dynamics is ancient evil vampire/newly turned evil vampire/kind-hearted innocent human guy, bonus points if the newly turned vampire and the innocent human guy were in a perfectly normal loving relationship before the other vampire entered their life. And what Im pitching is basically the fae-version of that for Feylinsand. Im invisioning Feyre having a corruption arc and slowly falling for Rhysand but she also still loves Tamlin and Rhysand also still loves him so they entrap him in this fucked up and evil but also hot and sexy poly relationship. That might be a little self-indulgent but idk man, this whole series is built on self-indulgence and its not even interesting because sjm has the most boring sex fantasies ive ever read. which yknow, im not necessarily judging, I just dont like it. Also actually nvm I think it would be funnier if Feyre didnt fall for Rhysand, like its not a thing of her coming down to his level so she can kiss him, she turns evil for completely unrelated reasons

Another thing you could do if you wanted to make it a trilogy, but maybe one thats less focused on sex because what else are you gonna do with a hot evil polycule, is you have Rhysand take Tamlin to the night court which is like, all the way on the opposite side of Prythian. So then the first book could be everything I just described except when Feyre comes back to the spring court, she finds that Tamlin is gone and it ends right there, on a cliffhanger. The next book would be her and Lucien and maybe Alis or some other fae she befriended traveling all across Prythian to get to the night court and we see a bunch of Prythian because godddd I despise the fact that in the actual acotar series, we're just trapped in the night court for 4 books and barely get to see anything outside of the night court, nay, velaris. And then the third book would be them trying to find Velaris, which would be a secret city in the sense that no one knows where it is but like people do know the name and that it does exist somewhere, and Feyre either does the trials and frees Tamlin that way or maybe theyll get the Illyrians on board to just kill him and that breaks the curse idk

And yeah, thats it, this got way longer than I thought. I was just kinda spitballing here because again, I dont like the first book's structure at all and I think the existence of Hybern is so unecessary. Like, Prythian has seven courts with plenty of potential for interesting politics to happen between them, whyyyyyy does there need to be a kingdom full of evil people for them to unite against?? I hate it

Anyway, Ive been thinking about this idea for a little while but I had no plans for fleshing it out in any way, but now that ive written all that down Im thinking of maybe cleaning all of that up and actually making it a whole rewrite at some point. I make no promises though, I suck ass at writing longer stories. So until then, let me know what you think of this

[laequiem]

20 questions, writer's edition

Thank you for the tag @lizziebxnnet & @slightlyrebelliouswriter23 <3

How many works do you have on AO3?

15

What's your total AO3 wordcount?

60,251

How many fandoms have you written for and what are they?

The Folk of The Air (11)

Throne of Glass (2)

A Court of Thorns and Roses (2)

The Darkest Part of the Forest (1)

I completely forgot I had written for the ACOTAR fandom before checking asfhakfha

What are your top 5 fics by kudos?

She kills my Self-control (541??????)

Mal D'amour (271)

Rebirth (222)

Tales from the Mortal Realm (aka Netflix & Chill + No tricks, only treats) (214)

Kiss-Proof (212)

Do you respond to comments? Why or why not?

YES!!! They keep me going and I love reading what people like <3

What's the fic you've written with the angstiest ending?

I guess Careful Whispers since it's unresolved mutual pining

Do you write crossovers? If so, what is the craziest one you've written?

No

Have you ever received hate on a fic?

Also nope!

Do you write smut? If so, what kind?

SMUT WITH FEELINGS, BABEE.

Have you ever had a fic stolen?

Not that I know of

Have you ever had a fic translated?

Nope

Have you ever co-written a fic before?

Yes! Dedicated with @lizziebxnnet @figonas @hazelsheartsworn & @slightlyrebelliouswriter23. It's awfully underrated and you should totally read it.

What's your all-time favourite ship?

I have to go with Jurdan

What's a WIP that you want to finish but you don't think you ever will?

I have a bunch that I started early on in my writing "career" that I never finished. A kinky Helnik smut that I really want to finish. A weird ACOTAR smut with Tamlin and Feysand (... Feysandlin?). Wow I really write too much smut, huh.

What are your writing strengths?

... Characterization? Internal dialogue? askfhkalfhas idk, why do people read my stuff?

What are your writing weaknesses?

Confidence Imagery. Plot.

What are your thoughts on writing dialogue in other languages in a fic?

I would only do it for a language I'm fluent in (so, English and French). While I understand Spanish and Portuguese to a degree, I'm not confident enough to write believable dialogue. 💀

What was the first fandom you wrote for?

Throne of Glass.

What's your favourite fic you've written?

It changes. I'm really proud of finishing She kills my Self-control. I think my favourite is Rebirth. I can't believe I wrote it when I read it back.

Tagging @booksandlewks @acciomanorian @clockworkgraystairs @ironicallyanemic @jurdanhell (y'all probably already got tagged, idk. No pressure ❤)

[ickystickyfrog]

give me a tamlin redemption arc so i can get the poly feysandlin i deserve