#do u kno how long i sat on the Sojiro Thing!!!!

[hirokiyuu]

3, 9, 12

3: What’s your favorite line of narration?

hm!!! this is a tough one wwwwwww bc there’s a lot of it that im proud of of so i went thru and pulled a few lines i Really like

“On the third day after his miraculous return to life, Akechi Goro rolled over on his side and considered, for the first time since his miserable failure, getting out of bed.” one of my strongest starters imo, plays well on the expectation of goro’s second chance versus the reality of it which in turns reflects the concepts of goro’s image versus reality that comes up a lot in pef wwww

“All those stolen moments from before -- catching him at the station, sitting at the counter in Leblanc -- none of them meant anything at all. Amamiya had never once let anything slip past his mask of indifference when he looked at Goro. They hadn’t been friends. None of the conversations they’d had had been important. Nothing they’d said ever mattered. In all those months spent in orbit as Goro had put the finishing touches on his master plan, they’d never meant anything to each other, not even a little bit.” i like this bit a lot bc i think it sums up p well the entirety of p5 events from goro’s pov pre-casino in terms of both his view on events and his justifications re:ren. i think a lot of the anger in the ship comes from him Genuinely Wanting a connection but hes so convinced it was all an act on his part that it doesnt matter u kno. and thats an attitude reflected both in pef in general and in this specific section so i like it wwww also the rhythm is good WWWWWW

“The next morning Goro woke up feeling like an abject failure, which was not unusual.” another strong starter WWWWW its got a good rhythm and a good punchline and a good bit of characterization in just a few words so im proud of it

“It felt as though he’d just invited the Metaverse in to sit with them at the table, the strange thick air of it juxtaposed with the bright lights of the diner” notable for being one of hte Very First pef lines i wrote nad also one of hte ones i was desperate to put into the story proper WWWWW  

“Once, long long ago, Goro had heard that certain species of animals saw eye contact as a form of aggression. It was something he thought about, occasionally, when he and Shido came face to face.” another long-lived line. really gets the shido+goro dynamic down i think

ok this is getting long so im stopping there. wwwwwww just know that i am a narcissist who likes her own writing style v much

9: Were there any alternate versions of this fic?

LOL originally each palace was supposed to be a single chapter and it was supposed to switch povs btwn ren and goro. futaba wasnt supposed to be a big focus at all. very very early version was going back in time + meeting philemon meant he was no longer under yaldy’s protection and that exposed a palace, which was rapidly scrapped bc a) its more interesting if him killing ppl wasn’t distorted bc of the implications that has re:his psyche+worldview b) Akechi Goro Is A Fake Name And I Will Die On This Hill

12: What do you like least about this fic?

that im the one writing it and not a total stranger so i cant just enjoy the fruits of someone else’s labor

realtalk there are small errors + things that bother me from a production viewpoint but i wouldnt be writing this fic if there was anything in plot/characterization etc that i didnt think was good