#because i kept having to stop cuz i got emotional kjhvOASIFVAOSIF

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hi zak!!! congratulations on getting luke's anniv card!!! glad to see you're enjoying his anniv story!!! i have so much feelings this card and for them quq- i just wish it wasn't so rushed at the end, i hope i'm not the only person who felt this way ;u;

HEHE thank you anon!! im rlly glad i finally got time last night to read thru it ;w;

but yEAH GOD I REALLY FEEL YOU 😭😭😭

this is one of my qualms with anniv cards in general: the perplexing choice to cut its story structure from the usual 6 acts (generally good amount of wiggle room for setup, rising action, climax, etc etc) down to a STARTLINGLY MINUSCULE AMOUNT OF 3 ACTS

like i LOVED orange scent, same way i loved ssr under the milky way, and there were specific new story things i loved in this card that i wanna talk about later when my thoughts are more in order (specifically mc's STELLAR-LY honest responses to luke, luke projecting his own grief outwards, god i have a bunch i wanna pick apart) BUT man

i also wish this story had more room to breathe

act 1 and act 2 were perfect to me: the setup, the conflict, the constant backsliding of luke's brain into setting his feelings and desires aside for forever eVEN SINCE HE WAS A CHILD, how luke doing that "sacrifice" doesnt actually make mc feel happy it hurts her and makes her feel like she cant make him happy, her pleading to him to just this once think about how he feels, //CHEF'S KISS

act 3 is where it fumbled simply because it happened too fast. given that luke had been angsting off into the distance about not letting himself propose for a LONG TIME, it deffo felt rushed that it took him A Walk And Seeing A Pair Of Double Rainbows to get his head outta his ass. like, mc's response moved ME as well so i get where hes coming from but it wldve been nice to let her words like....marinate in luke's mind some more. for a day or maybe two. but that couldnt happen because anniv cards have a Lot less space for their stories.

and anniv 2 cards are at more of a disadvantage from this 3-act structure thing than anniv 1 cards, because idk imo anniv 1 cards didnt feel rushed even within their 3-act structure because all the anniv 1 cards were the Conclusion to the building narrative of.....4 ENTIRE BLOOM CHAPTER PERSONAL STORY ARCS PRIOR AJFLSSAF. so the story definitely had room to develop and breathe there

i wish SSR Orange Scent had room to breathe too. i wish it had more time to tell its story at the pace it needed to because when it Was taking its time, it was so good.