#SIGHS......... anyways episode 2 liveblog will be tomorrow be there or be square

[americankimchi]

things i'd change:

the initial fight. what the hell kind of assassin walks in and goes "FIGHT ME" in broad daylight and is expected to be taken seriously?? hello??? the motive to do it makes sense in a 'jedi don't want any collateral damage and taking hostages would kneecap their abilities due to their compassion being wielded against them like a knife' but the way that was handled was so messy??? and made me think she was an idiot 💀 literally felt my respect die an ignoble death (just like indara LMAO)

also what the hell was indara even doing there?? she wasn't even like. talking to anyone. she was just sitting in the corner with her hood up??? did i miss something here or was she literally just shoved into a cantina without explanation

if anything the show should've opened on INDARA, showing why she was there, showing what a jedi's day-to-day in a galaxy not hounded by the constant presence of the sith is like, really let us get to be invested in her and what she's doing, and then have the fight scene in the cantina. maybe indara's there because that's her habit post-whatever she's doing or maybe she's trying to speak to the locals to get intel. either way, she's there for a REASON

then [redacted] shows up, and maybe somehow manipulates indara in starting the fight? idk what abilities she has in the actual show so this is up to whatever she's got in the tank. hell maybe she just threatens to blow up the joint via explosives placed right before indara got there.

the fight still happens, except it's an actual fight this time. maybe indara's lightsaber is disabled DURING the fight because the knife somehow manages to slice through the hilt in a way that disconnects the power cell??? or maybe indara's literally unable to use more than one hand because she's injured. something that makes it so a JEDI MASTER DYING UNCEREMONIOUSLY TO A SINGLE STAB WOUND TO THE CHEST doesn't happen so embarrassingly

the stab wound occurs because indara is trying to hold up the collapsing building (they knocked a few load-bearing walls out or maybe [redacted] detonated the charges) with the force and literally cannot block the strike without risking the cantina owner + their kid's life as they escape

indara still dies, but this time not pathetically, and [redacted] escapes. indara's death would actually be shocking on some level to the viewer, who's spent the past [x] minutes forming a connection with someone they thought would be a recurring character while also emphasizing the threat-level of this unknown assassin

we cut to osha who wakes up from a bad dream on the ship whose name i didn't catch nor do i care to look up

nothing changes up until yord shows up, and this time he doesn't fucking??? threaten a civilian unprovoked??? literally what the fuck was up with that you are a jedi knight who recently took his oaths how the fuck did you forget how to conduct yourself in public already it's only been two years??? you have a padawan?????????

??????????

anyways that doesn't happen. the yord + tasi + osha conversation still happens except instead of that weird ass interrogation scene where nothing was really asked and only osha's tragic backstory was repeated as if by reading it off a teleprompter instead we ask about osha's whereabouts, ask her to prove it, ask her for witnesses who can provide alibis, ask her if she recognizes the cantina owner, ask her if she will willingly come into custody, etc.

they take her onto the same prison transport, except yord + tasi go with her. the cantina owner is there for 1 hour to give his witness testimony + identify osha before leaving the ship

the prison transport takes off. yord and osha catch up, revealing more of their prior connection to each other while tasi sits uncomfortably in the corner. they also hint to why osha left, without explicitly stating it outright, giving the viewer something interesting to chew on while the plot moves to the next scene

the prison break still happens, except yord and tasi are trapped on the other side of the ship due to falling debris. yord and tasi escape on the last pod while osha straps herself into the cockpit and hopes for the best. that random ass dude with the parasite whose only purpose in the episode was to give a character testimony in osha's favor doesn't exist because he serves no purpose to the story at large.

yord and tasi crash land on carlac and make contact with the jedi on coruscant, alerting them and by association master sol of the complications with the transport. they ping their location and ask for backup. tasi is injured, which is why yord cannot immediately start the search for osha.

master sol has a conversation with master vernestra discussing their next steps, and asks to be the one dispatched to retrieve the injured/missing parties on carlac due to his connection with osha. master vernestra agrees on the condition that he stays in constant contact + exercises mindfulness, and to not let attachment cloud his judgement of the truth. master sol thanks her for the reminder, collects jecki, and leaves.

meanwhile osha wakes up delirious, in pain, and hallucinating visions of her dead sister. she takes stock of her surroundings and condition, and tries to figure out if she can contact yord + the jedi for help, but the comms unit is busted and the temperature is starting to drop dangerously. she patches herself up as best she can, grabs what supplies she sees, and decides that her best bet is to hunker down until she has no choice but to leave.

it's as she's trying to set up a makeshift shelter from the cold that those 'visions' get worse. it goes from her sister's voice -> seeing her silhouette in the corner of her eyes -> actually seeing her move and run (this is when osha chases her) -> full blown environmental changes -> reversion to youth + coherent conversations with her

atp yord+tasi and sol+jecki link up, and discuss options. sol says to follow him because he 'has a feeling' (hooray for the force ex machina) and they eventually find osha standing in the middle of a snowy field, gazing blankly off into the distance

they snap her out of her vision, and osha half-coherently explains what she think happened to indara, and sol reassures her that he believes her

smash cut to the end scene of episode 1. no changes here.

like this makes way more sense to me than what we got while also following the same story beat for beat!! i just rearranged some pieces to make it flow smoother + not reduce the jedi to fucking. space cops who are negligent to the point of actual stupidity. i'm also deleting every conversation they've had about being emotionless + disapproving of sentimentality because genuinely what the fuck was that all about 💀💀💀

god the way i want to rewrite episode 1 so bad. the worst part about the acolyte isn't that it's clumsy and contrived it's that the story they want to tell has genuinely good and interesting beats in it that are being smothered to death by lazy writing