#Oh where do they go Janqar? They become spirits Matta. Oh is that so Janqar? Indeed Matta. Pay attention now dear Matta

[stormears]

Any fans of David Clement Davies read his latest fantasy book "Scream of the White Bear"? What the hell happened to this one?

Fire Bringer, his 1st novel, is one of my very favorite books. SWB is at least his 4th book and somehow the worst written. It has a large and embarrassing amount of typos, rambling and confusing dialogue...so much of the writing just ssSUUUUUCKCKKS

I want to bite into David Clement Davies' fucking arm every single time he makes a character say another character's name repeatedly in dialogue, or add the word "though" to his sentences like infinite sandwich toppings. STOP THAT!! I can't follow half of what your character say about their mythology, which they treat like a deep religion and Lore(tm) but is just 1 single, convoluted meandering ass story.

The characters talk about their lore endlessly like its very deep but it's just. Not. They meander on about philosophical Maybes and like. Talk about their Jesus figure and an ancient warrior class who we are supposed to sometimes like and sometimes not like. The overarching story is interesting to me but the dragging, convoluted and dumb ass writing is a slog to get through. Mostly the dialogue.

Allow me to simulate some dialogue.

"Yes" Character answered the bear though "and perhaps it came from an old lore from within the ice itself, bear. Yet perhaps it was told to change the stories themselves too, Bergo*, and it shall change darkness into light as the world dies and turns our dreams themselves dark, bear. The world goes mad though, and gods whisper much abed the shores like my father. But in the Great Story we know our peace, you and I are one abd the same though bear."

*T/N Bergo means bear. Bellarg also means bear. I think Barg also means bear.

I have to wonder if this book was written under some sort of intense time crunch or out of financial desperation? I know it was an ebook first. You'd think that would be a chance to clean up typos before printing physical copes, but NAH

And the audacity to begin each chapter with quotes or snippets from the likes of W.B. Yeats and Shakespeare, when you published this I-never-kill-my-darlings first draft??!??

"Whatever little light came would not be great" oh is that so, is that bc there's little light u just said? Good bears are getting murdered by the villain and girl bear says "Oh Uteq it's so terrible!" is that ur best dialogue when u witness murder?

"Our quest within as well just begins then," said Sorgan though---I AM HAVING A FUCKING STROKE

I try to read so many sentences and rambling, half-coherent paragraphs of this ice lore shit and I'm like David STOP!! David shut up!! David think about what you're doing! PleasE! DaVIIIIIIID!!!!

HE WROTE FIRE BRINGER AND SIGHT!! I KNOW THIS MAN CAN WRITE FANTASY EPICS AND ENGAGING, ETHEREAL PROSE, AND THE BONES ARE THERE, BUT GOD WHAT HAPPENED TO THIS ONE!

I am 276 pages in and I'm probably going to finish it.