#Commissar Arc

[patriot2525]

I need to see Commissar Arc meeting the atlas students like Neon, Coal, Ciel, and especially Penny.

Meeting the Commissar

Neon Katt

Neon: Sup, cutie. *gives a wink to the Commissar*

Commissar Arc: ... *completely speechless, as he stared at the abhumans so called uniform* What. is. this. *pointing at her attire, with a shaking finger*

Neon: like what you see, eh. *Give a catch smile, to the blonde Commissar* If you want we can go to a party and have som-ekk *grabbed by her collar with one hand of the Commissar, and first to stare right into the ever menacing Cybernetic glowing red eye of the Commissar*

Commissar Arc: YOU LISTEN HERE AND LISTEN WILL, BECAUSE I WILL NOT REPEAT MYSELF! *Brings her slightly closer to him* YOU WILL IMMEDIATELY CHANGE THIS INSULT OF A UNIFORM INTO A PROPER ONE, BEFORE I PUNISH YOU WITH 100 LASHES! *intensifying his angry glare, before lowering his voice into a whispering* Do I make myself clear, abhuman!?

Neon: *nodding furiously her head, While stuttering in fear* YES MASTER! I MEAN, YES SIR MASTER! I MEAN, YES MASTER SIR! I MEAN, YES SIR! *Shakingly trying to salute the Commissar*

Commissar Arc: Good. *Released his grip from Neon’s collar, and leds her fall to the ground*

Neon: *Hit the hard ground with her butt* OOF!

Commissar Arc: *Turns around with his back to Neon* You better have a proper uniform on yourself, when I return for a check up. *Turning his head to glance back at her with a glare* or there will be severe consequences, once I return. *starts to walk away from Neon, who staring at the walking way form of the Commissar*

Neon: ...

Neon: Is it weird that I feel turned on by this? *asking no one in particular, while having a small blush on her cheeks*

Flynt Coal

Flynt: Hey you! *points at the Commissar, while approaches him*

Commissar Arc: *Looks at Flynt* Yes?

Flynt: *narrowing his eyes* Are you that guy that threatened my teammate?

Commissar Arc: *raised an eyebrow* and if did?

Flynt: Listen buddy, I don't know what your deal is or who you are. *slightly lowering his sunglasses, to stay right in the Commissar’s eyes* But I know this, if you threaten my teammate again, I will shove my trumpet so far up your as-AEK!!! *gets interrupted by a punch from the Commissar to his stomach, Which makes him lose his breath. The Commissar then kicked to the back of his legs, causing him to fall on his back to the hard ground*

Commissar Arc: *Stomps his boot on Flynt’s chest*

Flynt: AH! *Feels the heavy boot of the Commissar on his chest, And then he heard a loud “CLICK” sound. He cautiously opened his eyes, to which he was meant with the sight the Commissar’s medicine form that was glaring down at him and the sight of barrel of the Commissar’s bolt pistol pointing at his face*

Commissar Arc: *Glare down at Flynt, while increasing the pressure of his boot on Flynt’s chest* I suggest you choose your words very wisely guardsmen.

Flynt: ... *gulps hard, unable to say anything out of both fear and nervousness*

Commissar Arc: Nothing to say? good. *Kneels down, while still maintaining the pressure on Flynt’s chest* Then I suggest you listen to me, very carefully. *increase the pressure on Flynt’s chest* I am a Commissar. My duties are to maintain order and discipline in the guardsmen regiment, that includes keeping dogs like you in check. *Pressing the barrel of his bald pistol on to Flynt’s forehead*

Flynt: *Feels his heart skips a bit, as he saw the Commissar’s finger was on the trigger*

Commissar Arc: You Should never threaten a Commissar, If you don't want to be executed as a heretic.

Flynt: *eyes widen at the mention of getting executed*

Commissar Arc: But fortunately for you, I am more merciful than the other Commissars. *Retracted his bolt pistol from pointing at Flynt’s forehead* So I suggest to you to be thankful, from my merciful forgiveness of your insolent insult. *begin straightening up, before lessing the pressure of his boot on Flynt’s chest*

Flynt: *takes a big gulp of breath, as if he finally came out of the water*

Commissar Arc: Now before you tried to threaten me, with your poor attempt at intimidation. *takes off his boot off Flynt’s chest* you wanted to know for what reason was my harsh treatment given to your abhuman companion, it's quite simple.

Flynt: *As the Commissar's boot was off his chest, he finally managed to lift himself slightly up. while still maintaining his eye contact with the Commissar, waiting to hear the answer*

Commissar Arc: The abhuman has shown disrespect to the guard and to the entire Astra Militarum by wearing that disgusting excuse of a uniform, and this kind of disrespectful behaviour is something that I will not tolerate! *looks at Flynt’s clothes* And It seems that I need to suggest the same thing, as I did to you abhuman companion. *Turns around with his back to Flynt* So I suggest that you change your uniform immediately, if you don’t wish to be punished for real this time. *begins to walk away*

Flynt: *Watching as the Commissar walked off* Man, this guy is scarier than the drill sergeant...

Ciel Soleil

Commissar Arc: *walking in the beacons hallways, About to take a right turn*

???: off *accidentally bumps into Commissar*

Commissar Arc: *slightly pushed back* Are you all right, guardswoman?

???: *immediately straightening herself up, before giving a proper salute to the Commissar* Yes Sir. My Apology for bumping into you, Sir. it is my fault for not watching where I was going, Sir. *takes a proper soldiers Stand, with her hands behind her back*

Commissar Arc: *slightly surprised at her actions, but quickly returns his serious expression* Could it be? A disciplined Guardsman for once, or at least Not like the others ones that I have the misfortune of encountering them. *slightly annoyed at the bitter memory of his two recent encounters, but quickly returns his focused at the guardswoman that was front of him* What’s your designation? Guardswoman.

Ciel: I am Huntress in training, Ciel Soleil. I am a student of Atlas Academy, and a proud member of the Atlas military.

Commissar Arc: *nods his head* Ah, finally some properly disciplined soldier Behavior. *Give a small smile* Tell me Guardswoman Soleil, where are you currently headed?

Ciel: I was headed to training class, for my routine schedule.

Commissar Arc: *raised an eyebrow* Routine schedule? Can you elaborate on that, guardswoman.

Ciel: Yes Sir. I have a schedule for every day, with each schedule filled with tasks for me to do and to improve my efficiency and study to become a huntress.

Commissar Arc: *very impressed, but not showing it*interesting, and what do you wish to achieve by doing this?

Ciel: *Makes a determined face* I wish to become one of the Atlas specialists, The Ace-Ops. The Atlas Elite soldiers, the best of the best.

Commissar Arc: *now genuinely showing his prideful Commissar smile, at Ciel’s determination to achieving her goal* By the throne, finally a true example of a warrior of mankind. If I would train her, I could mould her into a proper example of a guardsman, or perhaps even a Commissar. *Cleans his throat, returning into his commanding Commissar demeanour* Guardswoman Soleil, Do you know who I am?

Ciel: Yes, Sir. You are Commissar Jaune Arc, an officer that has a duty to maintain order and discipline amongst the soldiers. As well eliminate any corruption and traitors among the rings. This is all that we were informed by general ironwood about you, Sir.

Commissar Arc: Good, This makes things much more easier. *Puts his hand on Ciel’s shoulder* Guardswoman Soleil, You have shown remarkable disciplined and exemplary behaviour befitting of the guardsmen. Even though my first encounter with the two disappointing excuses of the Atlas’s guardsman that I have misfortune of meeting earlier. *showing bitter annoyance at the memory of them, without trying to hide it* You have proven that there is still hope for Atlas guardsman, which is why I wish to extend an offer for you.

Ciel: *Has her full attention towards the Commissar, eager to learn of the offer*

Commissar Arc: Guardswoman Soleil, I offer you to become my personal assistance. under me, you will be properly train and mould into the likes of Cadian Kasrkin. You will be trained to use various weapons, from the likes of Melee weapons like the chainsword and to the likes of long range weapons like heavy lastguns. you will be also taught how to strategise in every situation, and how to make tactical decisions that will change the course of battle into your favour. *leans closer to her, looking straight into her eyes* But I must warn you, that if you will agree to this, you’ll be subjected to most harsh and painful training that will break you physically as well as mentally, as this path will lead you not only to achieving greatness, but also filled with pain, that will make you sweat and bleed. So tell me guardsman Soleil, do you have what it takes to do this?

Ciel: *Has a fully determined look, as her eyes were shining at the opportunity to be trained by the well respected Commissar* Yes Sir. I'm fully determined to become Atlas elite soldier, it will be great honour to be trained by you, Sir.

Commissar Arc: *Smiles once again with a proud smile* Good. *Turns around and begin walking towards the training grounds* Follow me to training grounds, Guardswoman Soleil. Your training begins now.

Ciel: Yse Sir. *immediately rushing towards the Commissar to catch up with him, before stopping and begins following behind him in a slower pace*

Penny Polendina

Commissar Arc: *simply walking in the hallways, before spotting guardswoman Rose standing in the middle of the hallways* Guardsman Rose, What are you doing standing here?

Ruby: EEP *jump in startled surprise*

Commissar Arc: *simple raised an eyebrow at how easily Ruby got scared*

Ruby: JAU- I mean Commissar Arc, Please don't do that, You scared me. *puffed out her cheeks in a childish manner, while pouting like a little child*

Commissar Arc: *unfazed by Ruby’s childish behaviour, even though his is slightly annoyed by this* You still have not answered my question, Guardswoman Rose. what are you doing in the middle of hallways?

Ruby: Oh, I'm waiting for my friend to come here.

Commissar Arc: A Friend?

Ruby: Yep, She Should be here any second now. Her name is Pen-OFF *gets tackled by someone*

Commissar Arc: *This surprise attack made him instinctively to grab the heeled of his chainsword, ready to unleash the Emperors fury upon the unknown enemy*

???: SALUTATIONS FRIEND RUBY!

Ruby: *Struggling to say and move, due to an orange hair girl on top of her* Aek! Penny you too much heavy, Please get off of me, I can't- Aek! breathe.

Penny: Oh, Sorry friend Ruby. *gets off Ruby, and then help so to get up*

Commissar Arc: *Still holding his weapon, ready to attack at any moment* Guardsman Rose! I demand that you immediately explain who is this?

Ruby: Oh yeah. *Remember that the Commissar was here* Commissar Arc, This is my friend Pen-

Penny: Salutations! I am Penny Polendina and I am combat ready. it's nice to meet you Commissar Arc, general ironwood and friend Ruby told me lot about you *extends her hand for a handshake, while having a bright beaming smile*

Commissar Arc: *Looks at Penny with suspicion, before taking her hand for a handshake. slightly surprised by Penny's very hard hand grip that resembles that of the grips of the metal cybernetic hands of the Tech-Priest, As well feeling the lack of warm of her hand, as if her body was made of cold metal*

Ruby: *Looks at the time in her scroll* Oh no, Penny our Bullhead is about to take off, we need to go now.

Penny: Okay friend Ruby, goodbye Commissar Arc it was nice meeting you. *runs off with Ruby*

Ruby: Bye Jaune! *shouts out, while running with Penny*

Commissar Arc: *silently absorbing as the two Guardswoman running away from his sight, but despite this he still managed to have a glimpse of Polendina’s inner soul, which strangely resembles that of the Adeptus Mechanicus, with it's gray metallic colors of the machine spirit and the blessing of the Omnissiah* Penny Polendina, hem. I Should keep an eye on her, just in case. *begins to walk off*

A/N: and done, I finally finish this. Sorry for the long wait for new post. I can’t give any excuses as it solely my fault at being such a lazy ass. But anyway, I hope you will like it. It’s late in the night so now I’m going to bed but after this, I’m continue working on the second ask. Good night and good day for everybody.

[howlingday]

RWBY Idea:

Mortal Enemies

What if Jaune and Tyrian have a similar relationship to Commissar Yarrick and Ghazghkull Mag Uruk Thraka? Jaune lives in constant fear of Tyrian and everything he represents, while Tyrian will drop whatever he's doing, even if he's doing something for Salem, to fight Jaune.

[taryn40k]

*peeks through the door*

What delightful thing have you found here, lord inqui----*Gets side punched out of frame by the grey knight*

"I would really appreciate not having anyone unprepared exposed to our guest. And by that I mean that it is vital to restrict his exposure to anyone else on this ship, for all of our safeties."

[arc-misadventures]

Commissar Arc

Jaune Arc, finally putting an end to, Sun, and Neptune's homoerotic behavior.

[sapphim]

My Lancers! (Build a bastard picrew)

Gene "Heck" Hecklinger (callsign "Echo") is a geneticist turned hacker. People and computers are the same; it's all just code execution. She was sent out on a Union Science Bureau far-field team expedition in the dying gasps of the Second Commission and returned back to the find the utopian-minded fully automated luxury space communism Third Commission in charge some several hundred years later. (Thanks, relativity!) Subjective age she's like 90, which is like the equivalent of our 45. Smokes like a chimney. Stubbornly unwilling to give up facsimile cloning, which is a big no-no in ThirdComm. God forbid women override the subjectivity of their own bodies which they grew themselves in a vat!

Our last campaign arc ended with our unit going abruptly AWOL from our Union handlers and teaming up with a rogue AI for reasons that would involve too much explanation of the alien nature of AI in the Lancer setting, which to be honest neither Heck nor I are entirely clear on. (I was going to re-read that section, and then decided not to. For the bit.) What matters is that ANANKE has a stern demeanor and a concerningly laissez-faire approach to human experimentation, and one of our pilots is down outrageously bad. Heck has raised concerns about the ethicality of said experimentation and has numerous notes but, knowing Heck, the results will still be ethically dubious!

My new girl, Vaike, is a young local in a homebrew distant diasporan system largely cut off from blinkspace and the omninet, the vibes of which I am lead to understand are potentially articulated as Roman Empire meets Soviet Union meets northern/eastern European folklore meets 1990s-esque sci-fi magitech? There are space dragons. We kicked off the first session by killing the local commissar. Vaike has recently become aware of her ability to psychically connect to blinkspace (and thus the... internet, kind of?) with her mind, which has plagued her with weird fucking dreams. Her piece of shit old mech is always threatening to overheat and melt down spectacularly so she's constantly fighting to vent her reactor before she cores out. Into a flamethrower, mainly. :) (When the adrenaline from the last fight wears off she is going to be very upset.)

[novankenn]

To Regain Honor

/=/ 9 Months Ago /=/

Jaune sighed as he stepped through the opening elevator doors, and into Headmaster Ozpin’s office. The sigh became a growl when he saw his sister Saphron Cotta-Arc also in attendance.

“Mr Arc, or should I say Commissar Arc, thank you for your prompt arrival.”

“What is SHE doing here?”

“I am here,” Saphron cut in before the Headmaster could answer, ���To correct your mistake.”

“Mistake? What mistake would that…”

“You are being charged with dereliction of duty, dear brother, and unless you return to Ansel with me at once… you could face charges of treason.”

“Father wouldn’t!”

“The Sky Marshall, our father, can not show favoritism. You know this. You are an ARC, we must be held to a higher standard, and you have been found wanting.”

“And if I refuse?”

“Then I will be forced to physically apprehend and restrain you.”

“Headmaster you…”

“I’m afraid Mr Arc that my hands are tied in this regard.” Ozpin sighed, “These charges being levied against you are also valid here in Vale, and as such I have to allow you to be taken into custody.”

“There has…”

“There is, Jaune.” Saphron reached into the pocket of her overcoat and pulled out a small object. She moved forward and placed it on the edge of Ozpin’s desk, in perfect view of Jaune. “You know what that signifies.”

“Administrative Punishment.” Jaune answered as he reached out and picked up the hand width sized tightly rolled piece of leather.

“Surrender yourself to me, now, and submit your self to Administrative Punishment, in addition to taking a demotion to rank, and this… incident will be forgotten.”

“And if I don’t?”

“I arrest you, and you face a Tribunal.”

 “Can I think about…”

“You’ve had ten months to think about the choices you have made. Make a decision, and make it now.” was Saphron’s cold reply.

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[kaaragen]

All righty, my thoughts on Ahsoka!

I think it's okay. I enjoyed watching it, and I like being around the characters again. There are a lot of things that have 'cause for concern' but I'm going to withhold final judgement until I see how it plays out. Filoni is definitely Lucas' Padawan - in that he can't direct actors for shit, pace a scene or write dialogue that feels like something people would actually say.

Things I liked:

Chopper was great, as was his little banter with Hera. And, contrarily to seemingly everyone, I actually like Hera. Yes, she looks like the porn parody version (the flat lighting is not helping), but she does feel like the character, and also a natural evolution of that character as someone who has been both a general and a single parent.

The visuals are actually quite good - couldn't spot any ropey CGI or Volume work so that's a plus.

The story is set up nicely, Morgan works as an effective villain. Baylan and Shin are a bit one-dimensional, but we're two episodes in and I like their vibe.

I liked The Phantom Menace homages. Less enamoured with the homage to it's wooden acting and flat place.

The other galaxy - a neat way of expanding the Universe. Though now my mind is filled with the idea of it being the 40K galaxy, and thus images of Commissar Thrawn and Ordo Malleus Inquisitor Ezra XD

(...I'm going to have to write this fic now aren't I? -_-)

My minor annoyances:

Just do a proper opening crawl for God's sake!

The narrative contrivances were...a bit much. I don't mind one or two, it's Star Wars they're all over the place, but them piling up to get the plot to work was annoying. From the captain 'calling their bluff' by...doing exactly what Baylan wanted instead of, you know, keeping their highly important prisoner safe by not letting them aboard; to a third HK droid just hanging about at Sabine's house, instead of, I don't know, self-destructing and killing everyone in Lothal?

The Imperial infiltrators stuff is starting to grate. Because it could be done well - there's something to be explored in the idea that leading rebellions are different from leading governments, there are different challenges and various ways cynics can take advantage of that and corrupt ideals etc. But the way it's done just makes the New Republic look stupid.

The episode one cliffhanger was daft. We know Sabine's not going to die; and if she's going to get stabbed it should have an actual impact on the plot but bacta means that didn't happen. I can see why they decided on a two-episode premiere as that would have been a really weak ending.

Things with question marks:

Sabine. I don't mind her being a Jedi - feels a bit out of nowhere, but the idea of a non-Force sensitive (or weak Force-sensitive) training to be one, and compensating through other means, sounds fine. But I'm not sure it's something that works for her character. Wanting to learn to better defend Lothal etc. I get, but actually being a Padawan? Seems odd. Especially as we already got this story with the Darksabre arc.

The petulant teenager stuff bothered me when I watched it, but I've mellowed after a friend pointed out that Sabine has had trouble with family. She got denounced by her biological family, then her found family broke up at the end of Rebels. Makes sense that she'd be a bit lonely, cling to Ahsoka looking to recreate that and then react badly when it went wrong. So regressing feels natural, though I'm hoping that's over with now.

I'm not keen on her relationship with Ahsoka. Having them be a failed Master and Apprentice duo feels a bit like trying to force a relationship that didn't exist into being because I don't they exchanged a single word in Rebels. I would have preferred it if they didn't have much of one and their journey together explored their characters.

Ahsoka. She's about what I've come to expect from the recent series. But the Paragon Jedi stuff really doesn't suit her. I don't mind her 'I walked away from Anakin' line - I can see how survivor's guilt would lead to look back on things that way and think 'I could have saved him'. But a pin in it - it'll depend on how this is explored in the show as to whether I come to like or dislike this.

So overall, cautious but not turned off yet.

[fandomflotilla]

RWBY 40K

Tldr: RWBY characters transposed to warhammer 40K.

Sister Ruby of the Order of the Sacred Rose: As a Junior member of the Sororitas, she was charged with the safeguarding of her local chapter of the Sisters of Battle. Her first mission as the lead was to assist the 229th Valhallan Imperial Guard Regiment with the extermination of a small heretic group. However, when she and her partner returned, they found their chapter annihilated, with all her sisters slaughtered. At first mislabelled in Imperial records as dead alongside her chapter, and with nowhere else to go, she and her fellow Battle Sister, Yang, decided to attach themselves to the 229th until the Ecclesiarchy gets around to reforming their chapter, or bothers reassigning them. Fortunately, her fascination with weaponry and mechanics mean she’s been able to keep her and Yang’s battle suits in good working order.

Sister Yang of the Order of the Sacred Rose: While technically a higher ranking member of the Sororitas than Ruby, that is a distinction that mostly exists on paper. She does have more combat experience and leadership experience, but the two sisters are so close, they rarely need to pull rank on each other. They were brought into the Sororitas convent at around the same time, and due to Ruby’s skill, were often treated as equals despite the age difference. Even within the convent, they were often teased for being much closer to literal sisters than fellow Sororitas. After the convent was destroyed, along with most records of their existence, they have quietly started claiming they were half-sisters, to ensure that whatever happens, they would be kept together.

Commissar Weiss Schnee: Commissar Schnee was attached to the 229th scant weeks before the Sororitas arrived. Her first outing as Commissar…did not end well. Due to her fawning over the 229th’s commanding officer, Sergeant Nikos, and the harsh disciplinary measures she imposed on the 229th, Commissar Schnee accidentally facilitated a heretic ambush that would have destroyed much of the 229th, were it not for the timely intervention of the Sisters of Battle, Ms Belladonna, and Commissar Arc. Her family is quite highly connected on holy Terra, to the point that there are multiple inquisitors in the Schnee line, which made Weiss’s decision to become a commissar and join the front lines of the Imperial Guard…controversial. After that disastrous first impression, she has gradually warmed up to Commissar Arc, the errant Sisters, and the various soldiers in her care.

Lieutenant Blake Belladonna: A felinid subspecies of human, she had a varied career as a gang member, recruit in the Vale Planetary Defense Forces, before finally joining a Felinid rights group in the Hive City she grew up in. Over time she realized that her group was being subsumed by something…wrong. While not exactly fond of baseline Humans, she still placed some faith in the God-Emperor, and she initiated contact with a nearby chapter of the Adeptus Sororitas to ask for assistance. Unfortunately, by the time the Chapter sent aid, in the form of two heavily armed Sisters of Battle, things had already taken a turn for the worst. The 229th Valhallan regiment, sent months ago to quell what was thought to be light rebel activity in the bowels of Hive City Vale, had made landfall, and engaged the enemy without any knowledge of its true strength. Blake and the Sisters, as well as a particularly awkward commissar, rushed to assist the 229th, saving them from a deadly ambush. However, the chaos taint had already subsumed the bowels of Vale, and the 229th, much to the protestations of Blake, evacuated with whatever civilians they could fit onto their spacecraft, as Demons tore the city apart. After that action, with nowhere else to go, Blake joined the 229th as a Lieutenant, helping several of the refugees integrate into the 229th as new recruits.

[quietbluejay]

what’s a fic you want to read but not one you’d write? (Could be an idea that hasn’t been done or has been done but not in a way that satisfied you.)

ohhh boy there's a LOT of stuff I want but can't find and isn't my thing to write, i'm not going to write everything but just some examples (oops i made the idw1 list pretty long and I'm making myself stop there now haha)

okay, by fandom:

Fate Stay Night: - so some of this was done by ONE fic, but it wasn't the main thrust, I want to see post UBW Shinji and Sakura, and what happens to Sakura in that timeline. I want to see them both as adults grappling with everything (but esp Sakura) - the one where Sakura summoned Asterios instead of Medusa (since Nasu is on record for saying he was an alternate option for her)

Transformers IDW1: - please someone write some Prowl whump I am begging you. Though, okay, I wrote the Guilliman fic, I could probably give this one a shot someday maybe, of him inside his head while he's being mind controlled - time travel/Peggy Sue focused on the exrid or taao side - Pyra Magna focused plotty fic - AUs where Hunter survives! - just anything in general involving the early idw1 plots and characters - AU where Prowl (and Getaway) (and the Constructicons) hang around on Cybertron (RIP Windblade she doesn't deserve having to deal with both Starscream and Prowl) - switcheroo of the Caminus ladies - cityspeaker nautica stays on cybertron, engineer windblade either on the lost light OR in AU, heading off to earth with the exrid guys - The dark psychological AU idea I had where Starscream gets Airachnid to shadowplay Prowl (No Dawn Fades) that would have gotten a lot into doubting your own perceptions of things, gaslighting, etc that I came up with at a dark time in my life - the AU I might actually dust off someday that goes AU in the Shadowplay arc and involves Shockwave and Prowl going on the run together (while Chromedome ends up also on the run but with Optimus), it'd also have Drift as a major character (Transmission AU) (yes I did name these all after Joy Division songs to fit the Shadowplay theme) - Flamewar from IDW2 as part of the Scavengers! - Arcee peggy sue fic (blaming my friends for this one) - I have so many, bug me about this later and I'll pull up more

Transformers IDW2: - crossover between idw1 and idw2 involving characters swapping places - Jumpstream/Skywarp enemies to lovers this is like one of the only transformers ships i actually ship and it doesn't exist at all lmao

Warhammer 40k: - someone else please write my strange elaborate 11th legion AU for me - look I know it's unfair to expect people to read Ghost Warrior and most of us who did have scrubbed it from our brains but pleaseeeee someone else write Iyanna and Yvraine navigating Craftworld high society together - fix-it AU for Ashes of Prospero - to be honest, anything about Iobel, Iyanna, Malys, Andromeda-17... - more alternate heresies that don't rely on characters being OOC and having completely different backstories - the alt-heresy I might actually write in Highway which is 3 way civil war where the Space Wolf commissars manage to really mess things up especially with Guilliman - Lukas the Trickster fic - there is other stuff I want but I'm having trouble remembering it or putting it into words /o\

Warhammer Fantasy: - self-insert wayyy before canon (in like, pre-Aenarion era) where the SI fixes Morathi

[razistoricharka]

The house is unfucked now, I fixed the washing machine and fridge, we got a new fuse, I'm managing the trash since we cleared out with the skip, I would be such a good political commissar, place is livable, insanity arc is over... guys...

I have my own room now and everyone's actually putting in some effort I'm in charge... wait holy shit it didn't even dawn on me until now

[asktheraggededges]

For Alice Boone: How could an inadvertent panty shot be embarrassing wwhenyou've literally bodyswapped with Conrad multiple times? Gotta stop rolling nines, girl.

There’s different sorts of mortification out there.

I wont lie - returning to my own body to discover my hair was wet and that my body smelled of soap and therefore had been washed while the commissar had been it it was titanically embarrassing. And her incredibly flat and logical explanation somehow made it worse.

If you borrow something from somebody and you get it dirty, you wash it before you return it. It’s just good manners.

She didn’t have to put it like that!

But I mean, on some level the commissar has seen me naked or undressed a bunch of times because she lacks any real sense of sexuality or social graces. I’ve...sort of gotten used to that.

But having my own clothes fight back against me and then have the commissar think I was sick was somehow a new and terrible sort of embarrassing.

Made me feel clownish.

But hey - six months no phenomena. New record.

[patriot2525]

A thought occurs to me based on Cinder's description of what she saw when she looked closer at Commissar Arc. What do Librarians see? Which leads me to think about Black Templars intimating Librarians from other chapters into not acknowledging what they see. Exempt for Grey Knights who get to freely discuss amongst themselves that have seen the Emperor.

A few years ago at the random rebelling Imperial world

The sounds of fears fighting and loud explosions were heard all over the battlefield, The Heretics Screened in agony as they were burned alive or gunned down by the loyalists.

This Imperial world has not only rebelled against the Emperor, but has also strayed away from his holy light by worshiping Chaos, this fact alone has earned the attention of the Inquisition of the Ordo Hereticus, who coincidentally were accompanied by the Black Templar Space Marine chapter.

But they were not the only ones who have come to this world, as two other space marines chapters have come to this world as well. The Ultramarines and Salamanders chapters have answered the please of the suffering people.

So With the combined might of the 3 space marine chapters and Inquisition, as well Valhallan guards regiment that was Sent to Help the local PDF to Put down the Rebellion. This resulted in a fast and Swift victory for the Imperium and to THE GOD EMPEROR.

So The only thing that the imperials are needed to do, is to get rid of the corpses of the heretics. A very simple and easy task, that promised to be uneventful. But despite this, an event did occur during the cleanup.

An event that included a Ultramarine librarian that is curious about a particular blonde Commissar, with the librarian discovering something that he never expected to witness in his life.

location: The Destroyed Chaos Cultist trenches

At the destroy the trenches line that was once held by the cultist, guardsman and the local PDF Force were in the middle of gathering the cultist corpses into massive piles. As well as getting the necessary preparations for the burning of the corpses.

As the Guardsmans and the PDFs were doing their task, two different Space Marines were passing through them. The two Space Marines were not identical to each other, as they were from different chapters.

The first one was a Ultramarine librarian with the Ultramarine blue Space Marine armour being clad in ropes and also has a special psychic helmet that was attached to the back of his head.

While the second one was a Salamanders Sergeant, with his iconic green black Space Marine armour.

As the two Space Marines were passing through, each Guardsmans and PDF soldiers made sure to bow down before the walking Emperor's angels with the utmost respect.

But as the two Space Marines that were passing through the mortals, they didn't glancing or paying attention to the mortals. The reason for the two of the Empress angels ignoring the bowing mortals, which was not a sign of disrespect.

As the reason for this was quite simple, it was mainly because the two Space Marines were currently too busy looking for a particular someone. That particular someone caught the eye of the librarian, which was the main reason why the two of the Emperor's angels did not pay attention to the mortals.

So as the two Marines continued passing through the destroyed cultist trenches, with both of them encountering guardsmen who were busy gathering the cultist dead bodies or burning the pile of corpses. The two space marines approached a large open area in a trench that was the result of a precise hit of artillery fire.

The two Space Marines have finally stopped at their tracks, as it appears they arrived at the right place. The Salamander Sergeant turned his head to look at his librarian friend, who had his gaze completely fixated on someone else.

"Is this him?" 

The librarian silently nodded his head at the question from his salamander companion, as he continued to stare at what appears to be a blonde haired Commissar giving orders to the guardsman.

This Commissar that the librarian was watching appears to be very young, possibly in his very early 20s. but despite the Commissar youthful appearance, his face was already marked by scars of many battles. especially by his augmented right eye that hinted on it, not to mention his very stoic and cold expression on his face. Giving a clear picture that the Commissar already faced many battles, as well as many horrors that the galaxy has to give.

The salamander sergeant turned his gaze switched from the librarian to the young Commissar, looking at the young man with curiosity.

"If you don't mind me asking brother, but what so special about this young man?"

The Salamander Sergeant questioned his Ultramarine friend, who still continued staring silently at the young Commissar. The librarian didn’t say a word, instead simply closed his eyes and began remembering the event that made him so much curious about the young Commissar.

Flashback: A few days earlier

BOOM

"FOR THE EMPEROR!"

"DEATH TO THE CORPE-WOESHIPERS!"

"BURN THE HERETICS!"

"GLORY TO CHAOS!"

The loud sounds of artillery shells exploding and the shouting of the guardsman and the cultist alike were hard all over the battlefield, as the both sides were ruthlessly killing and butchering each other without showing any kind of mercy.

The entirety of the battlefield was filled with the symphony of destruction and death, as the loyalist and the heretics were mowd each other.

The librarian was observe the going battle, he held his staff tightly in his hand. Prepared for the upcoming assault, that he and his brothers will unleashed upon the heretics.

"Brother, our squad is ready for the assault. We will begin the assault on your mark."

The librarian turned his head towards his battle brothers, each of them were fully geared and ready to unleash the Emperor’s fury upon the traitors.

"then let us not waste time, my brothers. FOR THE EMPEROR!"

"FOR THE EMPEROR!"

The Ultramarines emerge from the trenches and begin charge forward towards the traitors, the heretical cultist desperately throw everything they got on the ultramarine.

But their pathetic attempts of slaying the Emperor’s angels, were nothing but a complete failure. As the Ultramarines weapons cut through the traitors so easily, that they left a massive trail of cultus corpses behind them.

The morale of the Heretics was completely decimated by the Emperor’s Angels, as the pathetic traitors begin running for their lives, as they so desperately tried to escape the Emperor’s divine judgement upon them.

"Look brother, the traitors trying to escape."

Exclaimed one of the Ultramarines, who was to guning down the retreating heretics. the librarian saw that his battle brother was correct, the traitors were trying to escape.

"then let us finish with those traitors, brothers"

The Librarian Unleashed his psychic powers upon the cultist, making a shot work of them. It what seems that their victory was close, as the Ultramarines were near trenches of the cultis.

But the Librarian still held his guard up, as there is not knowing what the archenemy is planning.

"My Lord, we came to assist you and your squad ."

The Librarian turned his head to see, that behind them were approaching a squad of guardsman and the local PDF.

"Very well guardsman, you and your man may assist us"

"Yes my lord, MAN! WITH ME."

The Ultramarines alongside the guardsmen and the PDF, has entered the cultist trenches. The combined forces immediately begin to clear out the entirety trench lines of the heretical cultist, they made sure to take no prisoners.

The Librarian alongside his brothers and the guardsman lieutenant were now standing in the cleared out trench, while the body of their enemies were laying on the ground lifelessly.

but despite what it seems to be their victory, the librarian had an unpleasant feeling, as if an imminent danger is coming for them. Before the Liberian could say anything, the ground beneath them burst open, that throws all to them to the sides.

The Librarian had landed painfully on one of the wall of the trange line, before he could have from the ground, a large beast emerge from the hole in the ground.

A Beast of nurgle, a demonic abomination created in a Gardens of the plague God. The Beast's multiple eyes landed on the librarian, The beast open it’s disgusting mouth and roared, as it spilled diseases and plagues from its mouth.

The librarian rose to his feet, collecting his stuff tightly in his hands as he concentrate his psychic powers to face the Demon beast. The nurgle beast roared and begin charging towards, librarian unleashed psychic lightning on to the beast. but the demonic beast body shrugged it off, and continued its charge.

As the beast was closer to the librarian, it used one of its paw to throw librarian to the side. librarian falls painfully down to the ground, while his armour was dented with large claw marks and the disgusting sports of the nurgle’s beast.

The Beast of nurgle roared once again, as if it was celebrating its upcoming victory over the librarian. librarian struggle to lift himself up, only managing to lift up his head to see the demonic beast was charging at him once again.

The librarian known that this might be his end, and if it means that he will be sent to the Emperor, so be it. But he will make sure to take this foul creature with him. As librarian gathered all of his psychic might to unleash upon the Demon, the beast rored once again, as it increased speed.

As both the demon and the librarian were preparing to unleash their final blow at one another,

Bang! Bang!

two bolter rounds interrupted them, as it hit the back of the Demons head. the demon turned it’s the head to the source of the shots, while the librarian gaze was also fixated on the source of the shots. Which revealed to what it seems to be a young blonde Commissar standing above the trenches, from what the librarian could made of from his space marine vision.

"FACE ME DEMON! FOR I AM YOUR DOOM"

The Commissar proclaimed before continuing shooting at the demonic beast, the beast roared angrily, as its attention was fully on the Commissar, forgetting about the injured librarian.

The nurgle beast begin it's mad charge towards the Commissar, while spewing it’s disgusting spas and corruption everywhere. the young Commissar was unfazed by the Beast, he simply close his eyes and begin whispering a prayer to the emperor.

This made the Beast even more Angry as the beast increased it speed. The Commissar's body begin to be surrounded by a bright golden aura, as it chain Barley. When the Commissar finally opened his eye, that now was shining a bright golden glow.

As the Beast was near feet form the glowing Commissar, the Commissar simply pointed his boltpistol at the Demon, before saying those sacred words.

"IN THE NAME OF THE GOD-EMPEROR! BURN!."

The Commissar pulled the trigger, And shot the creature straight to his chest. As the demon was hit it begin howling and scratching in pain, as it’s inside begin glowing a golden glow, before it exploded in a bite light of gold fire.

The Injured librarian who was still laying down on the ground, and who witness all of these events, what complete speechless. he He felt as the warp spawn was not banished toits cursed realm, but instead it was completely destroyed, all by this mortal.

The Injured librarian tried to stand up on his feet, but his injuries was too much for his body, his mind was slowly drifting to unconsciousness. The last thing he saw and heard was the Commissar talking to the guardsman who survived the attack from the Nagel beast.

"Guardsman! The lieutenant and the half of you will accompany me in the cleansing the remaining force of the headaches, while the rest of you will wait here and protect the Emperor’s angel until his squad will come and pick him up. Am I clear?"

"SIR, YES SIR"

"Good. Now Man with me, FOR THE EMPEROR!"

"FOR THE EMPEROR!"

As the Commissar and a group of Guardsmen begin searching for the heretics, the injured Liberian consciousness begin to fail him, as he felt into slumber, as his eyes became heavy, before fully closing them, as his Vision had being engulfed in darkness.

Flashback End: Back at The Destroyed Chaos Cultist trenches

The librarian opened his eyes, with his gaze upon the young Commissar. while beside him was still his salamander friend, still waiting for an answer from him.

“You shall find out soon enough, my friend”

With that said, the librarian has begin approaching the Commissar, who immediately noticed his approach. Without wasting a second, the young Commissar put his fist to his chest and his sword to the ground, before bowing down before the Emperor angels.

"My Lord!"

"At ease Commissar, I wish only to ask you question. about something that concerns me very much."

"Whatever it is my Lord, I am at your service."

The Commissar stood up straight, waiting for orders from one the emperor's angels. The librarian nodded his head at the Commissar's answer, before he raised his hand.

"Good, then let us not waste any time. I wish to enter your mind, so I asked of you to not fear."

"Yes my lord"

The Commissar took off his head from his head and then press it to his chest, while he lowered his head and closed his eyes. the librarian puts his head on top of the Commissar and begin entering his mind, as he closed his eyes.

location: The Commissar mind.

When the librarian opened his eyes he was immediately met with complete darkness at first. But he began to concentrate even more flashes of memories begin flowing around him, with each memory showing the Commissar’s past.

But the librarian did not care for them, as he continued searching in the Commissar’s mind. As he continued to concentrate, he saw a small glimpse of light.

The librarian immediately begin searching for the source of the light, with him gathering all the psychic power he can to find it.

'Where is it?'

"I AM HERE"

The librarian turned his head to the source of the Voice, before his eyes met a bright shining golden light. The librarian tried to shield his eyes from the blinding light, but his curiosity forced him to look at source of the light.

And once he did, he was complete speechless.

Before the librarian was a giant of a man in a golden shining armor, in the right hand of the golden giant was a flaming sword, while on the left hand was sharp power clause.

The librarian could not believe at what he was witnessing before his eyes, as he never dreamt or think of meeting. Before him was none other than the Emperor of mankind, the ruler of humanity.

Despite the librarian never saw or know how the Emperor looks like, but there’s no doubt in it, as the librarian was truly sure that before him was none other than the master of mankind, the Emperor of men.

'M-my Lord'

the librarian Tried to reach out to the Emperor, but before he even could took a step, Visage of the Emperor disappeared from him, as something pushed him out of the Commissar’s mind, back to reality.

'NO!'

location: reality

The librarian opened his eyes, the first thing he felt that he was laying on the ground, while feeling a sting of pain in the back of his head.

"WHAT IS THE MEANIG OF THIS!"

The librarian Look up to see his friend glaring at someone, as he turned his gaze to see at who his friend was glaring at.

To which the librarian received his answer, by three black Templars and one inquisitor. With two black Templars aiming their Boltguns at them, while The third black Templars was holding the unconscious body of young Commissar, while the inquisitor was checking him out, before turning his head and laying his gaze upon the librarian and the salamander.

"The meaning is simple, your friend tried to search something that is forbidden. So salamander this is not of your concern."

The Inquisitor then switch his gaze towards the librarian, who finally stood up on his feet.

"As for you ultramarine, I suggest you to forget whatever you saw in there, if you do not wish to see the repercussions that will happen upon your chapter."

As the inquisitor finished talking, One of the black temples stepped in.

"if you value the lives of you and your brothers, do not dare ever touched this mortal with your witchery, sorcerer!"

the black templar threatened librarian, but Inquisitive immediately put a stop to this.

"That's enough. We leaving, now!"

"YES LORD INQUISITOR!"

The Black Templars said in unison, as they begin walking away alongside Inquisitor, while one of them still held the unconscious Commissar.

The Salamanders Sergeant look at his librarian friend.

"Are you right brother?"

"Yes… Yes I am."

"What did you saw there?"

The librarian turned his gaze from his friend, to the inquisitive and the black tempers walking away with the young Commissar with them.

"I Saw... hope"

THE END

A/N: Finally, it's family finished. to be honest, it became too much longer than I planned from before, but at least I completed. And before they know New Year’s eve. Anyway, I’m sorry it took me so long to finish it, I cannot give any good excuse for my lack of working at this except for the work that I have to do, but anyway, I’m sorry it took very long to finish it. This is something they were planning to put on in the Commissar of beacon story in the future, but for now I do hope you will enjoy this. Merry Christmas, happy Hanukkah and a happy New Year for all my dear Raiders, as your support and encouragement always gave me the motivation and the energy to continue making those post and stories for you to enjoy. As usual please comment and send ask for me and if anyone wants to give me some constructive criticism, I’ll be welcome to hear them out. So now goodbye and have a great night.

[howlingday]

Would the Imperium of Man execute Ironwood for trying to run from Salem?

I'm not an expert on Warhammer, so I'm not really the best person to ask on matters of the Grimdark universe. However, I will answer this to the best of my knowledge and ability.

I tried to find an answer on Google, but I couldn't find a specific answer to this question, which was "does the imperium punish cowardice?" The most obvious answer to this is "Yes" and that's usually by the blade of bullet of the Commissar, whose entire job in the Imperium is to execute cowards as a deterrent of treason and to instill good order and discipline among the guardsmen they are tasked to guide. Kinda like a drill instructor on the battlefield who will put a bullet in you if they get a whiff of anything less than proper soldier behavior.

However, this scenario is very... unique, and complex in a way that goes beyond simple cowardice. See, General James Ironwood, whatever his intentions may have been, was trying to help Atlas by keeping himself, the city, its people, AND the relic out of Salem's reach. So, yes, while he is essentially running away from the threat of the Grimm, it can also be observed as a tactical withdrawal to prevent even worse casualties, or the fall of Remnant.

Again, I'm not an expert. The better people to ask Warhammer questions would be @the-wayward-arc or @weatherman667 , though I also asked my buddies in the Discord their thoughts on the matter, and they responded with similar answers, saying either Ironwood would have been shot OR wouldn't have due to the tactical reasoning for his retreat. One response was, "If you're throwing Ironwood into the 40K universe, he would have tried to get an Exterminatus on Salem." Take that as you will.

And because I'm still trying to figure out the difference between a laspistol and a lichtor (hint: only one of them MIGHT kill ya), I also asked my buddies IRL, who have been in this nightmare of a universe since they were kids. I described to them this scenario,

"There's this general, and his kingdom is about to be destroyed AND the only thing that could stop the Big Bad from destroying everything. Would he be executed in the 40K universe for cowardice?"

The first guy's response,

"If it's a general, he's never seeing the light of day again. The Inquistors would send a guy to torture him to death, and the Imperium would send their guard to overthrow and replace him. And since he's not only acting in cowardice, but he's also sacrificing ammunition resources to the threat, he might be be turned into a servitor as punishment."

My other buddy said,

"It's hard to say in the setting of the 41st millennium. Funny enough, there's actually a similar scenario in the Siege of Terra where a Captain is ordered to move sky plates to block orbital fire, which saved a bunch of ground forces and civilians, but at the cost of their flying fortress that Dorn needed to protect Terra as a contingency plan. An atrocity of 100% casualties may be considered a success if the objective was achieved. A cleric was given a position in the Inquistors because he made the mistake of not reporting an error, then lying that the mistake was an indication of heresy, which it was. Actions as you see them now could be condemned or praised in the future, but you won't know in the now."

The second buddy then proceeded to drop the biggest lore bomb I've ever heard from the recent finale of the Siege of Terra series. But I won't spoil it here.

Was Ironwood a coward? Would he have been punished? What WH foe is equivalent to the Grimm? I have no idea, BUT what I do know is that I appreciate you coning to me with these fascinating questions.

Until next time,

KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!

[taryn40k]

"Mornin lad, mmm... you look like its anything but good though... troubles of the personal kind or impersonal kind?"

"... I'm sorry, that came out wrong. I didn't mean for it to be threatening, it just... There's a lot happening this morning, and my nerves are a little fried right now!"

[lightdancer1]

My rule with the Azula/Hoelun relationship is that it is in its own way a mirror of how far on the grimdark scale any given AU is

The Continuation-verse, the Sins-verse, and the Dragon-verse are all pretty high on that list. So that means with the Omashu-verse and the Azula Heresy that there will be versions of the relationship that emerge in each, though each one will be a path that evolves down a line of actually evolving and getting to a point where it's earned by both. Hoelun as a child soldier recruited early on and surviving in an equivalent of the Dirlewanger Brigade in the Fire Nation does not happen in the relatively lighter and softer AUs.

The only grimdark AU she doesn't show up in is the Fire and Water and Earth and Air AU but there Azula and Toph are married, so... *shrugs*

For the lighter and softer Fire Sage AU there will be a new character Azula falls in love with there, reflecting that it's a best-case scenario and that AU Fire Nation never raises the mass of child soldiers to begin with, so Hoelun's particular arc is avoided due to her being too young for military service.

I admit to using different iterations of the relationship not least because Hoelun as a bit of a mirror to Azula and someone much more like the Comedian to her Captain America works very well as a foil to her, and it basically offers an established brand of queer visibility and centering a butch lesbian when butch characters are not that frequent in media.

Hoelun also serves as a 'lower deck' protagonist showcasing the effects of the various grimdark Fire Nations and how they affect rank and file people. I will say that in the Azula Heresy AU she gets one of the most blatant 40K shout-outs as she becomes the equivalent of a Commissar/Politruk and at least initially starts off the most directly villainous of any of her AU versions by virtue of also embodying the older iteration of 40K where she's entirely aware the God-Empress thing is a scam but it gives her power over people who hurt her and she *enjoys* it. And then she gets given the order to hunt down the arch-heretic....

In the Omashu AU Hoelun's arc is intended to be something of a surprise element when it does show up so I intend to have that one held close to the chest until that moment happens in the specific chapter there.

[gunnerpalace]

So how would you rewrite it? I think you said something about doing that?

That would be the subject of Hyperchlorate Part III. (Part II again being detailing everything that went wrong, and Part I being going over what made the story unique.)

In essence there are the four major changes I would make to Bleach:

Radically expand upon (and show, don’t tell) character relations in the story. We are repeatedly told that so and so are friends, or family, or colleagues, or whatever, and we essentially never see it (outside of Tatsuki and Orihime at the very beginning). It’s critical to caring about and interlinking the characters and seeing them grow and develop. For example, someone made a point that the Xcution arc demonstrates Ichigo’s bonds with Soul Society are stronger than with his own friends. That’s true, and you can see it in the Japanese cultural context of him using their first names (even for Toushirou!) whereas he keeps calling Uryuu and Orihime by Ishida and Inoue. There’s a definite social distance there. But it’s a subtle thing. And it really needs to not be subtle. There needs to be a lot more interactions between characters; plenty of characters literally never interact at all, and plenty of characters look fucking terrible for their apparent gross negligence that serves zero point other than to maintain the Mystery Boxes (here’s looking at you, Isshin, Ryuuken, and Kisuke).

Recontextualize everything after the Soul Society arc. I am not opposed to certain places, people, or concepts (e.g., Hueco Mundo, the Espada, Fullbring, the Soul King, etc.) but the way they were introduced and handled was, frankly, garbage. Arrancar, at least, were set up rather early on. The rest… was a bunch of ex nihilo shit. It came out of nowhere with no setup. I also don’t really enjoy the thematic inversion of Hueco Mundo seemingly purely for the sake of subverting expectations. So, I would restructure everything that happens after that point in gross detail.

Refit, standardize, and clearly and consistently implement and allude to the grand plot. If there was going to be some grand purpose to the Bleach universe, it needed to be made clear textually, not just thematically, throughout the story. It needs to be set up to the reader, if not to the characters, very early on so they “get” what everything is building toward. That absolutely was not done.

Having a real ending that actually involves our protagonists making a substantive change. I’ve definitely been over this before.

That’s all well and good, right? So what sort of things would I actually look to change?

As an example of the high-level stuff… In terms of narrative, internal consistency, and plot, the whole Substitute Shinigami thing makes no fucking sense. It makes literally zero sense that Ginjou was the first one in several thousand years, and Ichigo was only the second. It makes zero sense that a technique to transfer powers to humans exists and is taught at the academy, can be known to have a “low chance of success,” and then made a crime when it’s happened a grand total of two times, unless it was all a long con just to catch Ginjou, and in that case it’s dumb because he doesn’t matter. (We’re supposed to believe Soul Society allows Hollows to run roughshod everywhere but they’re really obsessed about catching this one dude but not enough to actually task anyone powerful to go do it? No, none of that makes sense.)

It also doesn’t make any sense that there are only a grand total of 6,000 to 7,000 Shinigami to patrol its nebulously defined area of responsibility. (Is it the whole world? Is it just Japan? If the latter, are there other Soul Societies? If the former, where are the foreigners? Sure seem to be a lot of people who look foreign, but they all have Japanese names and speak Japanese in a manga that clearly at least recognizes Mexico. Why would foreigners accept a feudal Japanese afterlife? This is another small example of what I mean by the grand plot being fucked.)

It also doesn’t make a lot of sense that the only Shinigami worth a damn are Captains, Lieutenants, and the occasional Seated Officer. (This is canonical, by the way.) Almost all of them are total trash who would lose to the most basic bitch Hollow, let alone an Arrancar. Meanwhile, your average Quincy can mop the floor with all three.

You know what would make a lot more sense, and work better with what’s on paper? Here are some ramblings from my notes on this subject:

i think it’s sorta like… you wanna mirror the structure of the Hollows; Shinigami as a whole are like Menos, although they are almost all Arrancar (there could be some very low-ranked/new Shinigami who do not have shikai, these would be the “rookies”), whereas substitute Shinigami are like masked Hollows, with some overlap into Gillians/Menos Grande

- Captains (General Officers) are at the level of the Espada (with obvious differences among them correlating to Espada generated from Vasto Lordes and Adjuchas)- Lieutenants (Staff Officers) are at the level of the Privaron Espada and some of the stronger fracciones- Seated Officers (Officers) are at  the level of most fracciones and wild Adjuchas [sometimes from the 4th Seat up are more on the level of the above, e.g., Ikkaku and Yumichika]- Unseated Officers (NCOs) are at the level of weak fracciones, or on the order of holding off a Gillian- Substitute Shinigami (Enlisted) are at the level of individual Hollows

Substitute Shinigami are basically what Soul Society sets up to deal with the Living World rather than directly intervening, because “they have better shit to do;” they’re probably set up like a secret society of beat cops, and yeah, if the Shinigami proper notice spiritually sensitive people while setting up new districts or maintaining their assigned ones, they shank'em and induct'em (usually these people attract Hollows anyway so it’s a “become one of our grunts or die” type deal; maybe if they refuse, the Shinigami kill them instead for shirking their duties?)Hollows aren’t the only spooky thing running around in the night either; they’re probably relatively rare, and other weird shit like revenants and ghosts are more common

i also have some notes here about how it’d be cool if Substitute Shinigami were like, an established thingand were expendable gruntswith actual Shinigami being rather more elite, even if they’re not seatedlike it’s XCOM with supernatural shithaving shikai should be a big fucking deal; even knowing kidou should be like, impressiveyour average Hollow should be equivalent to a Substitute Shinigamian unseated Shinigami should be like a Menos Grandea Shinigami good at kidou and a weak zanpakutou should be like a weak Arrancara seated Shinigami should be like a medium Arrancar and know shikai for surelieutenants should be like Privaron Espadaand captains should be like the Espada (or higher)

I could go on, but I think you get the idea. My first big change to Bleach would be dispensing with the concept of substitutes as being rare. They should be the main interface for the human world (and expendable, and have a high turnover rate). Rukia being there should be A Big Deal. (Have her sent there specifically to monitor things, like a Commissar? To look for Grand Fisher? Whatever.)

Ginjou, were he to exist, would then need a different backstory, but that would be real easy to build out.

As an example of additional character interaction, I’ve already detailed my idea that Kisuke and Yoruichi should be Rukia’s surrogate parents. (And solving the problem of when Rukia got the Hogyouku.)

As another example, it has never made sense to me that Rukia is the one that stays to fight Shrieker while she tells Ichigo to take Karin home. Rukia knows her powers are iffy at best, and should know better. She damn near almost dies (along with Chad) for no reason other than… ??? For dramatic tension and to reveal Chad can attack Hollows, I guess. Even Ichigo calls her out on it. It should’ve been flipped, with Karin revealing things to Rukia and learning about her, and that should be built into Karin repeatedly noticing the two of them (which was never, ever paid off in any fashion whatsoever). This is just one example of more moments of character interaction outside of fights.

As an example of reworking things, I like the ideas of turning the hunt for Aizen into something more like Apocalypse Now, that Aizen kidnaps Karin and Yuzu instead of Orihime, and that his hideout is deep in Rukongai instead of Hueco Mundo:

in one of these posts, @icchiruki was like, Aizen shouldn’t have run off to Hueco Mundohe should’ve run into Rukongaiand that’s geniusbecause it makes him more sympathetic because they have a legit reason to be aggrieved with Soul Societyand also lets us see the other side of the coinwhich, conveniently, leads toward my idea of the HM arc as being more like Heart of Darkness/Apocalypse Now, with Aizen as the equivalent of Kurtz out among the Montagnardsand also lets there be some spooky eldritch shit like whatever was going on with Ukitake and folk belief in TYBW, but less out-of-nowherebecause it’s pretty clear that whatever’s going on with the divine in Bleach is fuckin’ weird and Lovecraftianwhich can tie into that other bit of work i was doing with “where does all this come from anyway”so you stitch it all together and pull the seams snug and you get an actual expansive worldthen you keep the focus squarely on Ichigo, Rukia, and co., as they navigate through itthe further out into Rukongai you go, the weirder it should get; Shinigami should also routinely get sent to Hueco Mundo (both of these being the more important shit they gotta deal with) and recon and do stuff there; Hueco Mundo itself should be less empty wasteland, more kind of weird dark mirror of Soul Societylike a Kill Six Billion Demons type deal

These are just examples. I could go on.

tl;dr Make Bleach much longer and more personable and personally relatable, show your hand on some of the mysteries and backstories much earlier, and make it simultaneously more fuckin’ weird and more human.