nightingkail
sad, gay, cursed to love pixels
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don’t be fooled, i’m three raccoons in a trench coat, [she/her], 23, dragon age & fall out boy live in my head rent free
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nightingkail · 6 hours ago
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How to make your writing sound less stiff
Just a few suggestions. You shouldn’t have to compromise your writing style and voice with any of these, and some situations and scenes might demand some stiff or jerky writing to better convey emotion and immersion. I am not the first to come up with these, just circulating them again.
1. Vary sentence structure.
This is an example paragraph. You might see this generated from AI. I can’t help but read this in a robotic voice. It’s very flat and undynamic. No matter what the words are, it will be boring. It’s boring because you don’t think in stiff sentences. Comedians don’t tell jokes in stiff sentences. We don’t tell campfire stories in stiff sentences. These often lack flow between points, too.
So funnily enough, I had to sit through 87k words of a “romance” written just like this. It was stiff, janky, and very unpoetic. Which is fine, the author didn’t tell me it was erotica. It just felt like an old lady narrator, like Old Rose from Titanic telling the audience decades after the fact instead of living it right in the moment. It was in first person pov, too, which just made it worse. To be able to write something so explicit and yet so un-titillating was a talent. Like, beginner fanfic smut writers at least do it with enthusiasm.
2. Vary dialogue tag placement
You got three options, pre-, mid-, and post-tags.
Leader said, “this is a pre-dialogue tag.”
“This,” Lancer said, “is a mid-dialogue tag.”
“This is a post-dialogue tag,” Heart said.
Pre and Post have about the same effect but mid-tags do a lot of heavy lifting.
They help break up long paragraphs of dialogue that are jank to look at
They give you pauses for ~dramatic effect~
They prompt you to provide some other action, introspection, or scene descriptor with the tag. *don't forget that if you're continuing the sentence as if the tag wasn't there, not to capitalize the first word after the tag. Capitalize if the tag breaks up two complete sentences, not if it interrupts a single sentence.
It also looks better along the lefthand margin when you don’t start every paragraph with either the same character name, the same pronouns, or the same “ as it reads more natural and organic.
3. When the scene demands, get dynamic
General rule of thumb is that action scenes demand quick exchanges, short paragraphs, and very lean descriptors. Action scenes are where you put your juicy verbs to use and cut as many adverbs as you can. But regardless of if you’re in first person, second person, or third person limited, you can let the mood of the narrator bleed out into their narration.
Like, in horror, you can use a lot of onomatopoeia.
Drip Drip Drip
Or let the narration become jerky and unfocused and less strict in punctuation and maybe even a couple run-on sentences as your character struggles to think or catch their breath and is getting very overwhelmed.
You can toss out some grammar rules, too and get more poetic.
Warm breath tickles the back of her neck. It rattles, a quiet, soggy, rasp. She shivers. If she doesn’t look, it’s not there. If she doesn’t look, it’s not there. Sweat beads at her temple. Her heart thunders in her chest. Ba-bump-ba-bump-ba-bump-ba- It moves on, leaving a void of cold behind. She uncurls her fists, fingers achy and palms stinging from her nails. It’s gone.
4. Remember to balance dialogue, monologue, introspection, action, and descriptors.
The amount of times I have been faced with giant blocks of dialogue with zero tags, zero emotions, just speech on a page like they’re notecards to be read on a stage is higher than I expected. Don’t forget that though you may know exactly how your dialogue sounds in your head, your readers don’t. They need dialogue tags to pick up on things like tone, specifically for sarcasm and sincerity, whether a character is joking or hurt or happy.
If you’ve written a block of text (usually exposition or backstory stuff) that’s longer than 50 words, figure out a way to trim it. No matter what, break it up into multiple sections and fill in those breaks with important narrative that reflects the narrator’s feelings on what they’re saying and whoever they’re speaking to’s reaction to the words being said. Otherwise it’s meaningless.
Hope this helps anyone struggling! Now get writing.
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nightingkail · 14 hours ago
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nightingkail · 3 days ago
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too sleepy to play dragon age so take this instead
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nightingkail · 3 days ago
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didn’t want to derail the post these tags were on but yes. yes there is
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nightingkail · 4 days ago
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My housemate's cat came into my room while my dictation was on...
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nightingkail · 6 days ago
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davrin sketch 🧍‍♂️
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nightingkail · 9 days ago
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they're both doing their best and love their weird lil sons so SO much
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nightingkail · 9 days ago
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fifty questions for rook
(no spoilers!)
veilguard is finally here yall!!!!! and now a set of character building questions for rook, because i wanna know all about them! there will be more question lists as I play the game, but those will be marked with spoilers and under a readmore for the next sixty days
1. How old is Rook?
2. How did Rook get the nickname? What do they think of it?
3. What was Rook’s life before their faction?
4. Which faction did they join, and why? How long has it been?
5. What was life like for Rook before joining the Veilguard?
6. What was the reason that brought Rook to Minrathous?
7. Why does Rook agree to join the Veilguard?
8. What makes Rook a good leader?
9. What is Rook like on the battlefield?
10. Does Rook know their history? Do they know of the HoF, Hawke, the Inquisitor?
11. Does Rook keep up with current events? (How aware of the situation are they at the start of the game?)
12. Does Rook have any family? Do they keep in touch?
13. Did Rook bring any trinkets/sentimental items to The Lighthouse?
14. What does Rook see when they look in the mirror?
15. What’s the first thing people notice when Rook enters a room?
16. Got any tattoos? What’s the story behind them?
17. How’d Rook get those scars?
18. Their fondest childhood memory:
19. What is Rook’s love language? What love languages do they respond best to?
20. What’s it like to see them smile? Their laugh?
21. What does Rook’s voice sound like? One of the voice options available, or do they have a different accent/voicecast?
22. Most embarrassing memory as a teenager:
23. What does Rook wear in the off hours? Do they like dressing up?
24. Does Rook have any nightly rituals before bed?
25. How does Rook like to spend their free time?
26. Rook is in charge of the grocery list. What’s on it?
27. When was the last time they cried?
28. Does Rook have any pets/animal companions?
29. Any vices?
30. What is Rook’s class? Did they choose it?
31. What specialization does Rook pursue? What called them to it?
32. How would a desire demon tempt Rook?
33. What do fear demons look like to Rook?
34. How does Rook begin their day?
35. Ultimate comfort food meal:
36. What would Rook say are their flaws?
37. Does Rook ascribe to a faith?
38. Did Rook have any relationships before Veilguard?
39. What is their room at The Lighthouse like?
40. Describe Rook’s bed:
41. What’s on their nightstand?
42. Something Rook regrets:
43. Is Rook the type to gossip?
44. What is Rook really good at?
45. Who was Rook’s closest friend before joining the Veilguard?
46. What does it take to earn Rook’s trust?
47. What’s Rook’s temper like?
48. A color, flower, animal, and weather to describe Rook:
49. What will always make them laugh?
50. Are they a mystery, or an open book?
+1 What does Rook smell like?
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nightingkail · 10 days ago
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Hi Veilguard Friends!
I made a Veilguard Survey!
I want you to tell me how you felt about the game!
Why? Well mostly cuz I'm a curious little kitten, but also because I want to make a "Keep" DLC Script for Veilguard, and to do that I need to know how people feel and what they care about.
I do not have a ton of followers, so if you'd share/reblog this I would be much obliged! The more responses I get the better!
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If making a "Dragon Age for the Fans" DLC sounds interesting to you, and you're a fic writer, or an artist, or a lore hound, or you just have *feelings* HMU.
My working name for this is Agents of Fen'Harel. Thanks for reading and plzplzplz do my survey. TYSM in advance!
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nightingkail · 12 days ago
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We finally know which tattoo stands for which faction, thanks to @pinkyjulien's folder! Last two are vallaslin, and thus empty!
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nightingkail · 15 days ago
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Senators are going to vote on whether or not we should continue to send aid to Israel on Wednesday, November 13th. Call them, bombard their phone lines with calls. Every fucking day. We have a chance of doing something about this.
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nightingkail · 17 days ago
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Grieve AND organize.
Good article by David Hunter on how to survive the Trump presidency, both on the personal and on the political plane.
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nightingkail · 17 days ago
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gen z has to reckon with its radicalization problem. you are not a morally pure and superior generation of youth come to save the world, your men and boys are radicalized at an unprecedented level and you ignore it because it’s too hard to address but you have to. these boys are in your classes, they date your friends, you know them and you cannot continue to pretend this is an “old white guy” problem
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nightingkail · 18 days ago
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anybody paying attention saw the rise in conservatism among the youth over the last few years. the return of the r slur, modesty/ tradwife content, rampant fatphobia, misogynistic twitch streamers...the writing was on the wall
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nightingkail · 21 days ago
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Dragon Age: Origins released 15 years ago today!
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nightingkail · 22 days ago
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nightingkail · 26 days ago
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"Ah. Your distraction worked. Could have set it when we were farther away." / "Désolé. I didn't say it was a good plan."
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